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01 建议信
(2014年，上海卷）Directions: Write an English composition in 120-150 words according to the
instructions given below in Chinese.
学校英语报正在酝酿改版，拟从现有的三个栏目（健康、娱乐、文化）中去除一个，
并从三个备选栏目（时尚、职业规划、读者反馈）中挑选一个纳入该报。假设你是该校学
生程飞，给校报编辑写一封电子邮件，表达你的观点。邮件须包括以下内容：
1. 你建议去除的栏目及去除的理由；
2. 你建议增加的栏目及增加的理由。
【答案】
Dear Editor,
I’ve learned that our English Post is being reformed and one of the three columns is to be
replaced by a new one. I’m writing this e-mail to share with you my opinions.
Needless to say, the columns will definitely be designed according to students’ interest and
have positive effects on their study and life.
Compared to the entertainment , I hold the view that the value of the columns concerning
health and culture is more important . The main factor is that it is of great significance to keep
healthy while loss of health means kissing goodbye to life. Consequently, more knowledge of how
to keep fit can improve the quality of life. In addition, the progress in acquiring cultures
contributes to broadening one’s horizons, which in turn is beneficial to one’s study and the
establishment of philosophy of life.
Furthermore, the career planning should be taken into account in the school English Post . On
the one hand, it covers one’s career development a great deal .On the other hand, it makes a great
difference to one’s career success in the future.
What has been mentioned above is my personal ideas. Here I am in the hope that my advice will
add a brilliant touch to the improved version of our school English Post.
Yours sincerely,
Cheng Fei
【解析】这篇书面表达属于提纲类范畴，这篇作文要求就校英语报改版的事情给校报编辑
写一封电子邮件，表达你的观点。邮件须包括以下内容： 1.你建议去除的栏目及去除的理由；2.你建议增加的栏目及增加的理由，根据自己的建议选定栏目的设置并以邮件方式表
达自己的观点。考生在写作过程中要确定切题且符合英语写作逻辑的篇章结构。确立邮件
文体之后，要弄清要点，围绕要点展开，条理要清晰，理由要充分，关键的是在写作的过
程中，要注意人称，时态语态和常见的语法问题，文章尽量简洁，在文章中尽可能多地使
用高大上的词汇，遵循短语优先原则在配以特殊句型和复合句的应用，让文章更上档次。
【亮点说明】所给范文语言简洁，运用了一些词组，如：share with 和…分享，Needless to
say不必说， according to 根据， have positive effects on对…有积极的影响，in turn反之，
take… into account将…考虑在内，make a great difference to对…有很大的影响，in the hope
that希望，句式上体现出多变的特点，如：Compared to the entertainment ,I hold the view that
the value of the columns concerning health and culture is more important . 这句话用了过去分词
和同位语从句，The main factor is that it is of great significance to keep healthy while loss of
health means kissing goodbye to life. 这句话用了表语从句和while表示对比的用法， the
progress in acquiring cultures contributes to broadening one’s horizons, which in turn is beneficial
to one’s study and the establishment of philosophy of life.这句话使用了非限制性定语从句，
What has been mentioned above is my personal ideas. 这句话用了主语从句，还有范文还使用
了 In addition, Furthermore, On the one hand, On the other hand,这样的关联词使文章更加连贯。
第一部分：说明写信的目的
套语：
1. I'm sorry to hear that you are having trouble fitting in your new school. Such problems are quite
normal. Perhaps the following suggestions are helpful.
很遗憾听说你在适应新学校方面有困难。这样的问题是很正常的。可能下面的建议会有一
些帮助。
2. I have received your letter saying you plan to play a visit to China for ten days next
month. Perhaps the following suggestions are helpful to you.
我已经收到了你的来信。信上说你打算下个月来参观中国十天。可能下面的建议对你是有
帮助的。
3. I'm writing to you to present what I think on the further improvement of our hotel so as to
attract more clients（顾客）.我给你写信是想说明一下我对于进一步改善我们旅馆的一些想法，以吸引更多顾客。
4. You have asked me for my advice with regard to how to learn Chinese , and I will try to make
some suggestions here.
你关于如何学习汉语询问我的建议，那么我就在这里给出一些建议。
5. I'm very glad to receive your letter asking for my advice on how to fit in the new school life.
Here are a few suggestions.
很高兴收到你的来信，信上询问我关于如何适应新的学校生活。下面是我的一些建议。
6. I'm very glad to have received your e-mail. Now I'm writing to give you some advice on how to
learn English well in high school.
很高兴收到你的电子邮件。现在，关于如何在高中学好英语，我写信给你一些建议。
第二部分：介绍详情、说明原因
套语：
(1) 它将于下午两点钟开始，四点钟结束，在此期间将会有十五位准备充分的参赛者发表
演讲。
It will begin at 2:00 pm and last two hours, during which time 15 well-prepared contestants will
deliver their speeches.
(2) 我们将会在上午八点出发，九点到达那里。
We will start at 8:00 am and arrive there at 9:00.
(3) 下午，我们会一起……
During the afternoon, we’ll...together.
(4) 记得带上水和午餐。
Remember to take water and lunch with you.
(5) 顺便说一下，你可以乘坐322路公交车，它会直接把你带到俱乐部。
By the way, you may take Bus No. 322 and it will take you directly to the club.
(6) 我知道你的母语是英语，还是一名英语老师。我代表我们学校真诚地邀请你来比赛现
场。
I know you are a native speaker of English and an English teacher, and I, on behalf of our
school, sincerely invite you to be part of the contest.
(7) 既然你如此渴望提高英语，这会是一个很好的机会。
Since you are so eager to improve your English, it will prove to be a great chance.
(8) 我保证你在那里会过得很愉快。I’m sure that you will enjoy yourself there.
第三部分：提出建议
套语：
我建议……
I’d like to suggest that…
May I suggest that…?
In my opinion…
I would like to make a recommendation that…
I am writing to advise…
If I were you, I would…
第四部分：希望采纳建议，并表示谢意，盼望回复
套语：
1. I hope these suggestions will be of use to you. Remember: where there is a will, there is a
way(有志者事竟成).
我希望这些建议会对你有用。记住：有志者事竟成。
2. I hope these suggestions will be of use to you. Remember: The man who has made up his mind
to win will never say “impossible”(一个决心要成功的人从来不说“不可能”).
我希望这些建议会对你有用。记住：一个决心要成功的人从来不说“不可能”。
3. Best wishes!
（给你）最美好的祝愿！
4. I hope that my suggestions are helpful for you anyway. I would be more than happy to see
improvement.
无论如何，我希望这些建议对你有所帮助。我会非常高兴看到情况改善。
5. I believe that you will take my suggestions into serious account. Whatever you decide to do,
good luck with your studies/work！
我相信你会认真考虑我的建议。无论你决定做什么，祝你学习/工作好运。
6. I sincerely hope my advice will be some help for you. If there is more I can do to help, please
let me know.
我真诚的希望我的建议对你有一些帮助。如果有更多我可以帮忙的，请告诉我。模板①
Dear________,
You have asked me for my advice with regard to________________, and I will try
to make some conducive suggestions here.
In my opinion, you would be wise to take the following actions:
________________(建议的内容).
I hope you will find these proposals useful, and I would be ready to discuss this
matter with you to further details.
Good luck with your________________(祝愿).
Yours Sincerely,
Li Hua
模板②
Dear_______,
I’m glad to receive your letter asking for my advice on how to
_________________(引出对方需要建议的主题).
Here are a few suggestion( 引 出 作 者 的 建 议 ). First , It is important to
______________. Then, it also helps to ___________. Besides, it should be a good idea
to __________. You can also ___________.
(可以根据要求用不同的句式提出建议，如下)
As to __________, I suggest _____________(需要具体到某一方面). In addition,
_________(其他的建议). I’m sure ______________(预测可能的结果， 给对方以行为的信
心和决心).
I hope ____________(表达愿望)。
Yours Sincerely,
Li Hua
1. 建议信写作注意事项
建议信的写作目的是提出建议或忠告，不是投诉信。观点要合情合理，注意礼貌当先。
2. 写作方法
① 首段：a. 简介自己，不要罗嗦；
b. 说明目的，注意语气。
② 主体：
a. 提出具体建议；
b. 首先肯定优点，再写改进内容，否则会变成投诉信；
c. 经常进行交流，注意对方感受，时时提到你和我，否则容易跑题写成议论文。
③尾段：总结建议，注意礼貌，使对方易于接受。
3. 写作流程图
说明写信目的
介绍详情、说明原因
提出建议
提出希望采纳建议，并表示谢意，盼望回复
假定你是李华，你校在学生中征集意见，询问学生是否赞成开设iPad课堂(iPad
classrooms)。你支持开设iPad课堂；请给校长写一封建议信，要点如下：
1.资源丰富；
2.促进交流；
3.利于环保；
4.其他理由。
注意：
1.词数100左右；
2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；
3.开头语已为你写好。
Dear Headmaster,
We have been asked about our opinions on opening iPad classrooms._________________________________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
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Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
【范文】
Dear Headmaster,
We have been asked about our opinions on opening iPad classrooms. I am in favor of this
plan for the following reasons. To begin with, everyone learns differently. Students can customize
their iPad with materials that fit their level and learning style, and thus tailor it to different needs.
Moreover, when connected to the Internet, students can interact with teachers and classmates
about what they learn more conveniently. For the sake of environmental protection, opening iPad
classrooms is a good way to save trees that we have been cutting down for paper. Most
importantly, I believe students will develop their interests in the subjects by enjoying a new way
of learning.
I hope you would take my ideas into consideration and we look forward to attending an iPad
class.
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
1. 假如你是校英文报Problem＆Advice栏目的编辑, 收到一个学生的求助信, 信中他说近期
网课学习效率低, 与父母关系很紧张, 请你回信给予建议, 内容包括：
1.表示理解和安慰；
2.给出建议：
3.表达祝愿。
注意：1.词数120左右：
2.开头结尾已给, 不计入总词数。
Dear Worried Friend,
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Loving Editor
2. 假如你是李华，你们学校英文报近期在“世界灾难日”举办如何在灾难中保护自己和逃
难的征文比赛，你被选拔代表班级参加，刚好你观看了海啸的视频，所以你决定参考以上
的视频文本给读者们写一篇建议信，内容如下：
1. 写信目的;
2. 海啸的形成和危害;
3. 就防御和逃生提建议;
4. 希望和祝福。
注意：词数120左右。
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3. 假定你是李华。新落成的书店为增加客流量，现向市民征求建议，请给书店经理Mr.
Davis写一封信，提出一些建议。
注意：1. 词数80左右；2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
Dear Mr. Davis.
_______________________________________________________________________________
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Yours,
Li Hua
4. 假定你是李华，你的英国笔友Jack来信说最近他想在周末出去打工，但又怕影响学习，
很苦恼，来信询问你的建议。请给他写一封回信，内容包括：
1. 表示理解并给予安慰；2. 提出建议并说明理由。
注意：1.词数100左右；
2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
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5. 最近有人建议缩短中小学期，增设1-2周春秋短假。假定你是李华，请用英语给美国笔
友Jack写一封邮件，了解美国有关情况，内容包括：1. 建议内容：2. 你的意见；3. 询问
美国是否有类似假期。
注意：1. 词数100左右：
2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
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参考答案
1. Dear Worried Friend,
I’m sorry to know that you have some problems taking online lessons these days. I
understand quite well that you feel terrible in terms of your relationship with your parents. So I’m
here to offer some help.
To improve your online learning efficiency, engaging yourself in class actively can help a lot.
Why? Because answering teachers’ questions and thinking positively leave little room for you tobe absent-minded. When it comes to how to strengthen the relationship with your parents, it is
advisable for you to be open with them. Promise to them that you will be responsible for your
schoolwork, so they don’t need to worry too much. When you feel down, listening to your favorite
music or playing sports can make you relaxed. Talking to friends online is also a good idea.
Hopefully, these suggestions will be of some help to you. Take good care of yourself and I
am sure you will have a pleasant online learning experience.
Loving Editor
【写作指导】这是一封建议信，要求考生以校英文报编辑的身份给一个向你求助的学生回
信。
【解析】1.词汇积累
回答：answering → responding to
涉及：when it comes to→offer to
明智的：advisable→ sensible
感到难过：feel down→ don’t feel yourself
2.句式拓展
简单句变复合句
原句：I understand quite well that you feel terrible in terms of your relationship with your
parents. So I’m here to offer some help.
拓展句：Understanding quite well that you feel terrible in terms of your relationship with your
parents, I’m here to offer some help.
【亮点表达】【高分句型1】To improve your online learning efficiency, engaging yourself in
class actively can help a lot.（动词不定式做目的状语和动名词作主语）
【高分句型2】When it comes to how to strengthen the relationship with your parents, it is
advisable for you to be open with them.（使用了时间状语从句和不定式作主语）
2. Dear readers,
I’m writing to tell you something about tsunamis and give you some advice on how to protect
us when tsunamis break out.
Tsunamis are usually caused by strong earthquakes that happen in oceans. Great sea waves
will be pushed towards shores with great speed. If tsunamis happen, people living near the shores
will be in danger. The buildings will also be destroyed.
To protect ourselves from the natural disaster, here are some suggestions for you. First, whenwe are playing or living near the shore, it’s vital for us to be aware of the warning system so that
we can be prepared for disasters. Second, if tsunamis happen, we must run towards high land as
fast as possible. Holding tight to branches or driftwood, we can also save our lives.
I hope my advice will be helpful. I wish all of us can protect ourselves from dangers and live
a happy life.
Yours,
Li Hua
【写作指导】本篇书面表达属于应用文。要求学生写一封建议性。内容包括海啸的形成和
危害，以及对如何防御和逃生给予建议。
【解析】1.词汇积累
建议：advice→suggestions
爆发：happen→break out
意识到：realize→be aware of
重要的：vital→essential
2.句式拓展
原句：Holding tight to branches or driftwood can also save our lives.
拓展句：If we hold tight to branches or driftwood, we can also save our lives.
【亮点表达】【高分句型1】 If tsunamis happen, people living near the shores will be in
danger.(运用了现在分词做后置定语修饰名词)
【高分句型2】First, when we are playing or living near the shore, it’s vital for us to be aware of
the warning system so that we can be well-prepared for disasters.(运用了it作形式主语，to do
不定式做真正的主语以及so that引导的目的状语从句)
3. Dear Mr. Bowie,
I know that new-built Foreign Language Bookstores are now seeking advice from the public
to increase the number of visitors. As a book fan, I would like to offer some advice.
First, the book store should have enough space to provide good reading experience for our
readers. Second, public lectures should be included in the activities to raise the readers’ interest.
Third, the book store can donate some books to the poor students so as to attract them to the book
store.
Hopefully, the book store will be the one where we can enrich our knowledge and relax.
Yours，Li Hua
【分析】本篇考查书信的写作，要求考生给书店经理Mr. Davis写信，说说自己增加客流量
的建议。
【解析】体裁：应用文
时态：根据提示，时态应以一般现在时为主
结构：总分总
要求：
1. 写信目的
2. 建议（举行读书活动；为孩子捐赠书籍等）
第二步：列提纲（重点词组）
the number of/ be glad to do sth./ offer sb. sth./donate sth. to sb./ draw one’s attention
第三步：连词成句
I know that new-built Foreign Language Bookstores are now seeking advice from the public to
increase the number of visitors.
As a book fan, I would like to offer some advice.
The book store should provide enough space for readers to have good reading experience.
Public lectures should be included in the activities to raise the readers' interest.
The book store can donate some books to the poor students so as to attract them to the book
store.
The book store will be a place where we can enrich our knowledge as well as relax.
Through the activity we can not only have a better understanding of environmental protection but
also help others.
Looking forward to your reply.
第四步：连句成篇（加入衔接词或从句）
表示并列的连词：and/but/or/so…
状语从句连词：because/ if/ though/ although…
定语从句连词：which/ that/ when/ where…
第五步：修改润色（加入高级词汇或短语）
【高级句型1】
Through the activity not only can we have a better understanding of environmental protection but
also help others.通过这项活动，我们不仅对环保了一个更好的认识，也可以帮助他人。句中
使用了not only置于句首的部分倒装。【高级句型2】
Being a book fan, I am willing to offer my advice.作为一个书迷，我很乐意提供建议。句中使
用了现在分词作状语。
4. Dear Jack，
I'm sorry to know you're unhappy at the moment.It's difficult for teenagers like us to keep a
balance between a parttime job and our study, so you don't have to worry too much.Here are my
suggestions.
Firstly, think about the purpose of your finding a parttime job.I think it's more important to
learn some life skills instead of only making some extra money at present.Secondly, try to find a
job that can combine your hobbies with your job, which will make your work less boring.Last but
not least, make sure you set aside enough time for your study.I hope you will soon feel happy and
carry on as usual.
Yours，
Li Hua
【分析】本篇书面表达属于应用文，要求考生发一封邮件回信给Jack一个建议。
【解析】第一步：审题
体裁：应用文
时态：根据提示，时态应为一般现在时和一般将来时。
结构：总分法
总分法指把主题句作为总说，把支持句作为分说，并以这种方式安排所写内容。
要求：
1. 表示理解并给予安慰；
2. 提出建议并说明理由。
第二步:列提纲 （重点词组）
at the moment；between…and；
第三步：连词成句
1. I'm sorry to know you're unhappy at the moment.
2. It's difficult for teenagers like us to keep a balance between a parttime job and our study, so
you don't have to worry too much.
3. Here are my suggestions.
4. Firstly, think about the purpose of your finding a parttime job.5. Secondly, try to find a job that can combine your hobbies with your job, which will make
your work less boring.
根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。
第四步：连句成篇（衔接词）
1.表文章结构顺序：First of all, Firstly/First, Secondly/Second… And then, Finally, In the end,
At last
2.表并列补充关系：What is more, Besides, Moreover, Furthermore, In addition As well as, not
only…but (also), including,
3.表转折对比关系：However, On the contrary, but, Although+clause(从句), In spite
of+n/doing,On the one hand…,On the other hand… Some…,while others…,as for, so…that…
4.表因果关系：Because, As, So, Thus, Therefore, As a result
连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰，
第五步：润色修改
【亮点表达】范文内容完整，要点全面，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当，上下文意思连
贯，符合逻辑关系。作者在范文中使用了定语从句，如：“Secondly, try to find a job that
can combine your hobbies with your job, which will make your work less boring.”which后引导
的非限定性定语从句修饰前面整个句子。全文中没有中国式英语的句式，显示了很高的驾
驭英语的能力。另外，文章思路清晰、层次分明，上下句转换自然，为文章增色添彩。
5. Dear Jack，
How is everything going with you？Recently some people have suggested we should shorten
the summer holiday so that we can have a one or two weeks' break in the middle of each term. It
has become the topic of every school.
I think this is a fantastic idea. The traditional two-month summer holiday lasts too long，thus
becoming somewhat boring. After about ten weeks' study a break can refresh us for the coming
schoolwork. What's more，we have more chances to have a family tour to strengthen parent-child
relationship. Also，we can make the best of the free time to study something we really like or
review what we have learned before.
Do you have such breaks in the United States？Hoping to share your idea.
Best wishes！
Yours sincerely，
Li Hua【解析】第1步：根据提示可知，本篇为一封邮件；最近有人建议缩短中小学期，增设1-2
周春秋短假。假定你是李华，请用英语给美国笔友Jack写一封邮件，了解美国有关情况，
内容包括：1. 建议内容：2. 你的意见；3. 询问美国是否有类似假期。
第2步：根据写作要求，确定关键词（组），如：shorten（缩短），in the middle of each
term（期中），last（持续），strengthen parent-child relationship（加强亲子关系）；make
the best of（充分利用）等。
第3步：根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。
第4步：连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清
晰，保持整洁美观的卷面是非常重要的。
【亮点表达】范文内容完整，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当。作者在范文中使用了较多
高级表达方式，如Recently some people have suggested we should shorten the summer holiday
so that we can have a one or two weeks' break in the middle of each term.运用了虚拟语气；
Also，we can make the best of the free time to study something we really like or review what we
have learned before.运用了宾语从句。全文中没有中国式英语的句式，显示了很高的驾驭英
语的能力。另外，文章思路清晰、层次分明，上下句转换自然，为文章增色添彩。
