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高潮的设计与表达路径
故事高潮的作用及宏观设计策略
1.故事的高潮是什么
在故事创作中，高潮一词具有双重内涵： 第一，它是作品结构的重要组成部分。只要是完整的作品
都可分为序幕、开端、发展、高潮、结局、尾声六个分部。第二，高潮也是一种艺术效果，会给予接受者
一种强烈的心理感受。能否达到后者，需要依靠前者整体 (尤其是高潮群体)的完善与丰富。在一篇故事中，
开端指矛盾冲突正式展开的第一个事件；发展指矛盾 冲突从展开到激化的演变过程；高潮指矛盾冲突充
分激化，对立双方的斗争发展到最紧张、 最尖锐的阶段；结局指矛盾冲突发展的最后阶段；序幕指作品
基本冲突展开前对故事发 生的社会条件、历史背景、主要人物及其他人物相互关系等所作的提示、说明
或交代；尾声指作者对基本情节所作的补充性交代 。
故事中的高潮(climax)是故事达到最紧张或扣人心弦的那一部分。高潮有时候是剧情中的“危机”点。
有时候，它只是达到了关键时刻或者转折点，发生了一些事情，或者主角必须做出决定，从而导致一个结
果或其他。 我们在分析叙事类故事或者小说故事的时候常常用下面的图表来表示故事情节：
2.故事高潮有哪些特征
动态性、生动性、紧张性是叙事语篇高潮一般具有的语言特点 。由语言经验和相关研究可知，叙事
语篇高潮还可能具有其他语言特点，如叙事语篇各部分在心理描写、直接引语与间接引语、句类等的使用。
心理描写也是高潮的语言特征之一。高潮是决定作品主要人物命运的关键时刻，主要人物的思想性格
和作品主题在此得以充分展现。高潮中出现相对较多的心理描写，符合高潮的语篇功能，有助于刻画人物
和表现主题。
叙事语篇通常离不开对话语境。直接引语相对较多是高潮的语言特点。高潮是人物矛盾冲突最集中的
部分，而言语活动是表现矛盾冲突的 一种重要形式。发展是矛盾冲突的酝酿阶段，人物活动已相对活跃，
直接引语的数量也不会少。开端与结局，是故事情节的始发点和终止点，人物活动不够活跃，直接引语的数量不会太多。叙事语篇各部分，陈述句均占绝对优势，疑问句、感叹句、祈使句的数量均很少。
3.故事高潮有哪些作用
高潮不一定是故事中最热闹的场面，但一定是性格冲突最激烈、思想感情交锋最深沉的地方。在高潮
中，主要人物的性格和故事的思想内涵都获得了最集中、最充分的体现。 一般来说，高潮出现在故事的
后半部，高潮之后，矛盾冲突得到解决，情节即进入结 局阶段。可见，高潮点就是指主要矛盾冲突激化
后，其内容所达到的最激烈、最紧张的顶峰，是故事中戏剧 性最强的部分。
高潮点可以是诙谐、刺激、悬念的，也可以是深刻、具有启示的，故事和戏剧化冲突是靠高潮 点来
支撑的，高潮点需要创作者严格控制其出现的时间及数量，在最合适的 地方去设置，化理论为技巧，将
其实实在在地运用到故事创作中去。因此，高潮点的设置技巧训练，对于提高叙事的美学价值、增强故事
的可读性、扩大读者的心理接纳性，具有极高的现实意义。
4.读后续写的故事高潮的构建的宏观策略有哪些
故事缺乏必要的高潮，激不起的读者的情感反应。高潮既是针对主人公的情绪经验，也是针对读者的
阅读情绪而言的。 故事创作的步骤和过程可能因人而异，创作者对待同一主题的表现形式也各不相同，
但是， 把高潮作为创作的起点已成为一种行之有效的具体途径和创作规律：由于高潮是事件体系的关键，
我们可以从高潮着手、开始设计写作。
高潮作为创作的起点，容易使作品具有情感的动人力量。因为故事的核心是创作者的情感，没有真情
实感的创作，就是无病呻吟，也打动不了别人。而高潮之处所表现的情感，通常是创作者感受最深之处，
是把自己最强烈的生活情感加以提炼，升华而成的审美情感的文字化的表现。
在故事的高潮之前，各种人物关系、事态发展铺垫，使得读者融入其中，心系情节，代入感极强，读
者的心理历程也随着故事的波动而波动。在故事的高潮处，即黄金时间段，是展示故事质量、带动读者情
绪的最佳时机，也是使读者对故事心理定性的重要时段。在这一重要时段要设置较多的高潮点，比如，对
人物命运的悲惨性揭示、对事实真相的揭露、情感世界的崩塌等。其中，一句话、一个动作、一个表情都
可能引起一个高潮点，高潮点存在于故事的高潮，故事的高潮通过高潮点表现 出来。高潮点的高频率设
置并不代表步步为营，而是要 依据剧情的转折点，在故事高潮的节奏范围内进行设置，超过了这个节奏
规范，会显得做作，不及这个节奏规范，则达不到表达程度。每一个转折或冲突都能 直观地给读者心理
刺激才是目的。这一时段的高潮点设 置，可以有效地激起读者情绪，让读者的心理随着高潮 点的频繁出
现而逐渐破碎，最终导致读者心理的决堤！ 所以，在故事高潮这个黄金时间段，应在故事高潮的发 生节
奏范围内进行适当的高密度高潮点设置。
高潮的意义并非只是表现情感这样简单，尤其是结构的高潮部分。高潮应是情感的高潮 (感情最强烈
的时刻、最紧张的时刻)、命运的高潮 (主要人物命运的关键)、主题的高潮 (点题和完成主题的地方)、性格的高潮 (性格集中体现和最后完成的地方)、动作的高潮(动作的顶点，过了这一点，紧张就松弛和消失)、
视觉与想象的高潮 (配合高潮的图景等的冲击力)。作为一个多种高潮的复合体，高潮部往往会由 若干高
潮点组成，因为动作的顶点往往不能一次性表达情 感和主题思想的全部内容，经常需要分开来叙述。当
全部冲突尚未完全爆发，这时往往采取多次进入高潮的叙述方式，可以分成主高潮、次高潮、并列高潮。
据此，对这高潮创作步骤可简单归纳如下：对高潮部分情感的确定---对主题的确定---对动作线的设置---对
结构分部的设置---回到高潮部的创作---结尾处深化和强调主题并完成写作。
故事高潮的设计与表达微观技巧
1．增加外部冲突
增加外部冲突是一种明显有效的可以达到故事高潮的方式。
(1)角色之间的冲突
【例如】On the fourth or fifth night，we had trouble finding a hotel with a vacancy.After driving in vain for
some time，Mom suddenly got a great idea：Why didn’t we find a house with a likely-looking backyard and ask if
we could set up a tent there? David and I became nervous.
【分析】开车找旅馆——徒劳无功——母亲建议在他人后院搭帐篷——David和“我”倍感紧张，心
有不悦(母子的观点不一)
(2)角色与环境之间的冲突
【例如】Then Mac heard quick and loud breathing behind him...he saw instantly that it wasn’t a dog at all，
but a wolf，quickly catching up with him.Mac’s heart jumped...he fired the spray at the wolf.A bright red cloud
enveloped the animal，and to Mac’s relief，it fell back，shaking its head.But a minute later...Then it...，tearing
open his tent bag.He fired at the wolf a second time，and again，it fell back...
【分析】Mac骑车独行，路遇恶狼，与之搏斗，险象环生。[人(角色)——狼(环境)大战]
(3)角色与时间的冲突
【例如】The car abruptly stopped in front of him.“Get into the car.” Paul shouted at Mac.Mac jumped off the
bike and slid into the car without delay as the wolf was just two steps away and was about to tear Mac into
pieces.What a narrow escape!
【分析】汽车突停面前——急喊上车——Mac上车避险——恶狼近在咫尺(此情此景，刻不容缓)
2．放大内心冲突
放大内心冲突(文中角色的内心斗争)也有助于建立一个高度紧张和不确定的时刻。现在我们再来看高
考读后续写中的内心冲突是如何体现的。
【例如】(原文见2016·浙江10月)But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again.Jane was so
tired，hungry，and extremely frightened.She thought to herself，“If only I had not quarrelled with Tom.Where
is Tom? He must have made the emergency call.What I need is enough courage.If I continue my spirits tomorrow，
I will be likely to guide the helicopter.” Lying beside the stream，she fell asleep very soon.Suddenly，she heard
the shouts of tigers，which made her scared to death.After she held her breath for a few minutes，everything was
quiet again.In the terrible darkness，she slept again.【分析】夫妇争吵——妻子独自行走——荒野走散，夜色渐黑——独处森林——阴森恐怖——后悔莫
及(内心冲突的刻画)——内心独白(往昔对比＋虚拟语气的使用＋旁白描写是常见技巧之一)
【拓展训练】
1．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Most people think that procrastination (拖延症) is a negative habit. But people like me who routinely put off
doing assignments, are likely to defend our “slower” approach to getting tasks done.
I'm the only procrastination in my family. My parents and sister were all born with the “do it right now” gift.
They are always in a rush, as if closely rushed by an invisible deadline. Personally, I prefer a more relaxed pace.
When my parents voiced their concern about my tendencies, saying “Don’t put off until tomorrow what you can do
today,” “No way!” I responded, confidently presenting my research as a defense. It said people procrastinated when
they need to solve a problem or commit to a topic or project. In these cases, delaying a decision can be beneficial.
This was because our minds continue to reflect on problems even when we were not actively thinking about them,
which could lead to more creative solutions. My findings filled me with satisfaction and pride. My method of
getting things done was just as good as my sister’s…or so I thought.
At school we’d been talking about architecture and design. As part of the final assessment my teacher Mr.
Smith announced an exciting project that each student would have a month to complete. We were expected to
choose our materials, construct a small building and make use of things we had learned in class. Not only would the
winners receive extra credit, but the winning constructions would be proudly displayed in the cafeteria. “I have no
clue how I could get it done,” my friend Nate sighed in despair. I didn’t say anything. Not because I shared his
anxiety-but because I was not nervous at all. I loved hands-on projects! Picturing my brilliant work exhibited in the
cafeteria, I was fully convinced that I would definitely produce something that could impress everyone. So relaxed
was I that I didn’t give it a second thought for weeks.
注意：
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2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Before I knew it, I had only one day left for the project.
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That taught me a great lesson.
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2．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Beavis was a rescue cat who came to our family from a broken home. At the time, I remember thinking that
his attitude just might have been responsible for the break. His first three days in our house were spent under a bed
hissing (发出威胁的嘶嘶声) and spitting at anyone brave enough to approach him. Even the non-threatening offer
of food or water provoked an aggressive response.
Eventually, after a number of weeks and a lot of patience, Beavis deigned (屈尊) to be in the same room as
other family members, as long as he was given his space and wasn't approached directly.
His first visit to the vet was a nightmare. The poor man had to wear a thick leather apron and industrial-grade
gloves before giving Beavis a routine examination. After the visit, the vet wrote in his notes that Beavis was a “very
difficult” animal to deal with. At least he didn't ask us to change vets.
It was my bright idea to get him some companionship. Drawing on my “vast experience” as a cat person, I
thought the cure for his antisocial behaviour would be some cat company. The second mistake I made was in
encouraging my daughter and her friend to be the ones to choose a barn kitten from a local farmer. As it turned out,
they couldn't decide which one to pick, so they compromised by choosing two kittens.
It turned out that Beavis didn't need cat company, but rather came into his own as a kitten bully. The little
guys were threatened at every turn. We had gone from a one-catastrophe family to three. Beavis was unable to share
food or even toilet facilities with the kittens. We spent more time keeping them apart than watching them interact. It
looked as though we were destined to suffer long-term cat problems.
One day, Beavis was strutting (趾高气扬地走) his stuff through a particularly well-fitting door in our
basement.
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He was not quite through when the door closed sharply on his tail.
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From then on, I lost a fierce cat and gained “a soft ball of fur”.
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3．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为
150 左右。
One very cold day, not long ago, in Edinburgh, I was standing at the door of a hotel. A little boy with a thin
blue face, his feet bare and red with the cold, and with nothing to cover him but a bundle of rags, came to them and
said, “Please, sir, buy some matches.” “No, I don’t want any.” answered one of the gentlemen. “But they are only a
penny a box.” pleaded the poor little fellow. “Yes, but, you see, I don’t want a box.” I said again. “Then I will give
you two boxes for a penny.” the boy said.
At last, I decided to buy a box to get rid of him. Then, finding I had no change, I said to him, “I will buy a
box tomorrow.” “Oh, please buy them tonight.” the boy pleaded again, “ I will run and get you the change, for I am
very hungry.” So I gave him the shilling, and he started away. I waited for him, but no boy came. I thought I had
lost my shilling. still, there was something in the boy’s face I trusted, and I did not like to think bad of him.
Late in the evening I was told that a little boy wanted to see me. I found, when he was brought in, it was a
smaller brother of the boy who took my shilling. He stood for a moment, diving into his rags as if he were seeking
something, and then said, “Are you the gentleman who bought the matches from Sandy.” “Yes.” “Well, then, hereare four pence out of your shilling. Sandy cannot come. He’s very sick. A cart ran over him and knocked him down.
He lost his cap and matches and seven pence of your money. Both his legs were broken, and the doctor says he’ll
die. My brother and I lived almost alone, for our father and mother were dead”
注意：
1.续写词数应为 150 左右；
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
I fed the little fellow, and then went with him to see Sandy.
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Then I took him by the hand, and said, “I would always take care of your little brother.”
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4．阅读下面材料, 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段, 使之构成一篇完整的短文。
This…was turning out to be a strange meeting. Though the one in black doesn’t know it, the one white is
beginning to share the darker girl’s lack of enthusiasm. Like a fire in a sudden chill wind, her hope flickers and
wanes. Now she grows uncomfortable, anxious, and wary. A slight but unshakable atmosphere drifts between them,
one that feels unmistakably off. To her, it seems as though their very meeting is something the world finds to be
simply…“wrong”. The ever-present glass, now scattered unevenly throughout and above the broken grounds,
reflects that strange feeling.
Ordinarily, these shards would flock to them without their bidding：“happiness”to the girl in white,
“tragedies” to the girl in black. Right now, every piece of glass in the air stands still. Perhaps half a hundred mirrors
are quietly
suspended around the girls, half-catching images of the empty place that surrounds them. When the girl in
white tries to call out to them, they will not even waver. It unsettles her：happiness placed beside horror, equallyglinting and equally motionless. The only piece that will follow her is the one she can hold—the one that set her
free.
She stares hard at the shadow girl.“If we’re in this together, ”she begins, leaning forward, “then what do you
think about staying together?We…We could help each other, and maybe…”
She stops. The other girl is staring into the empty, canvas-like sky with a blank and uninformative
expression. She doesn’t seem to be listening, but in truth she has followed every word.
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“Maybe…”the dark girl echoes.
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And the remnant of the girl she used to be, the Tairitsu who had first woken up in this world, rebelled against
the prospect of “the end”—against the idea of giving up.
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参考答案
1．
Para.1 Before I knew it. I had only one day left for the project. In a panic I hastily and quickly gluing together what
I pulled out from our recycle bin, my hands shaking with the weight of each hasty decision. The finished result
looked miserable. Several of my classmates, including Nate, had created amazingly detailed constructions. Theyused materials like clay, wood and so on and were highly praised by Mr. Smith. When I saw their models, I felt
even more embarrassed about mine. It was obvious that they had put a lot more time into the assignment than I had.
Para.2 That taught me a great lesson. I learnt from that day the importance of deciding on my priorities and
budgeting my time. From then on, I tackled things a lot earlier instead of putting things off until tomorrow. As a
result, not only did I finish my tasks on time, but also I felt better because I didn’t have to panic at the last minute.
At the end of the semester, my work was chosen by Mr Smith on another occasion. Seeing my change, my parents
and my sister were so proud of me. It dawned on me that getting things done on time instead of being a
procrastinator really counted.
【写作分析】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了有拖延症的作者在面对老师布置的项目时，拖延到最后一天
慌忙潦草地完成，结果很糟糕，作者从中吸取了教训，不再拖延的故事。家人对作者的拖延而担忧，作者
在无理地辩护。一次，大学老师提前一个月布置了期末任务，作者拖延到最后一天才匆忙潦草地完成，看
到别人因付出了很多时间而受到表扬的优秀作品，作者感到从中吸取了教训，不再做一个拖延者。
【要点解析】1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“不知不觉中，我只剩下一天的时间来完成这个项目了。”可知，第一段可描写作者
因为拖延到最后一天完成作业，手忙脚乱地匆忙完成，结果很糟糕。其他人的优秀作品受到了表扬，作者
感到尴尬。
②由第二段首句内容“那件事给了我很大的教训。”可知，第二段可描写作者为做到不拖延而做的努力和
成功，更早地处理事情，不再是一个拖延者。
2.续写线索：作者拖延症严重——家人为其担忧——作者无理辩护——老师布置期末任务——拖延到最后
潦草完成——结果糟糕——感到尴尬——吸取教训——不再拖延
3.词汇激活
行为类
①.颤抖：shaking/ trembling/quivering
②.处理：tackled/dealt with/handled
③.完成：finish/accomplish/complete
情绪类
①. 高度赞扬：highly praised/speak highly of/highly acclaimed
②. 尴尬的：embarrassed/awkward/abashed
[高分句型1]. In a panic I hastily and quickly glued together what I pulled out from our recycle bin, my hands
shaking with the weight of each hasty decision.（运用了what引导的宾语从句和独立主格结构）[高分句型2]. As a result, not only did I finish my tasks on time, but also I felt better because I didn’t have to panic
at the last minute.（运用了部分倒装和because引导的原因状语从句）
2．
He was not quite through when the door closed sharply on his tail. He let out a bone-chilling cry and took off
to the farthest part of the house. We managed to corner him and rushed him off to the vet. The vet performed
emergency surgery on him. Every day, I visited, feeding Beavis nutritious food and treats, hoping he would regain
strength. Under my meticulous care, Beavis recovered faster than expected and was allowed to go home. When I
picked him up, Beavis was no longer aggressive. He walked straight over to me, nuzzling and licking my hand in
gratitude.
From then on, I lost a fierce cat and gained “a soft ball of fur”. His nature changed completely. Now he
interacted well with all the family. He was a reformed cat. Whenever I watched television, he would sit at my feet
and purr loudly. I will never be sure whether it was the shock of the tail incident or my meticulous care that
changed his attitude. Happily, with his new outlook, he was with us for many years.
【写作分析】本文以一只被救助的猫 Beavis 为线索展开，讲述了它来到作者家后的一系列表现，包括
最初的敌对、看兽医时的困难以及有了同伴后的欺负行为等。
【要点解析】1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“当门猛地夹住他的尾巴时，他还没有完全通过。”可知，可描写 Beavis 受伤后的
情况以及作者对它的照顾。
②由第二段首句内容“从那时起，我失去了一只凶猛的猫，得到了“一个柔软的毛球”。”可知，可描写
Beavis 性格的转变以及和作者一家相处的变化。
2.续写线索：尾巴被夹——送医——照顾——康复——性格转变——和谐相处
3.词汇激活
行为类
①冲向：rush to/dash to
②照顾：care for/tend to
③转变：change/transform
情绪类
①细致的：meticulous/careful
②高兴地：happily/cheerfully
[高分句型1].Every day, I visited, feeding Beavis nutritious food and treats, hoping he would regain strength.（使用现在分词作伴随状语）
[高分句型2]. I will never be sure whether it was the shock of the tail incident or my meticulous care that changed
his attitude.（使用了连接代词whether连接的宾语从句、强调句结构，被强调部分为主语“the shock of the
tail incident or my meticulous care”）
3．
I fed the little fellow, and then went with him to see Sandy. Poor Sandy was lying on a bundle of shavings.
The moment I went into the poor house, he recognized me. Weak as he was, he still struggled to sit up. Seeing this,
I rushed to him and patted him on the shoulder. He looked up at me with tears in his eyes. With difficulty he
murmured, “ I’m sure I’m dying, and who will take care of my little brother?” Sad tears streamed down the cheeks.
Then I took him by the hand, and said, “ I would always take care of your little brother.” On hearing of my
words, he was so surprised that he froze with his mouth wide open. He tried to look up to me as if to thank me.
Suddenly, the light went out of his blue eyes. How poor the little Sandy was! He was dead. Such is Sandy, a little
boy who kept his word and set a good example for me. I will never forget his promise and love his little brother to
the end.
【写作分析】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者不久前在爱丁堡一家旅馆门口遇见一个卖火柴的小男孩，
小男孩光着脚满脸通红，裹着一个破布，恳请作者买他的火柴，一开始作者拒绝了，经小男孩再三恳求，
作者给了小男孩一先令，小男孩拿着钱走开了，小男孩再没有来，直到晚上很晚，小男孩的弟弟找了作者，
是来给作者送零钱的，作者得知小男孩被车撞了，快要死去了。
【要点解析】1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“我给了小家伙食物，然后和他一起去看桑迪。”可知，第一段可描写作者见到了桑
迪，虽然他很虚弱，却还想着如果自己死去就没人照顾弟弟了的经过。
②由第二段首句内容“然后我拉着他的手说：“我会永远照顾你的小弟弟。”可知，第二段可描写作者答
应桑迪照顾弟弟，桑迪死去，作者也以小男孩为榜样信守诺言，一直照顾他的弟弟。
2.续写线索：见到桑迪——桑迪担心弟弟——作者答应照顾弟弟——桑迪死去——作者信守承诺——一直
照顾弟弟
3.词汇激活
行为类
①进入：go into/enter into
②认出：recognize/identify
③照顾：take care of /look after情绪类
①感谢：thank sb./show one’s gratitude/be grateful
②惊讶的：surprised /amazed
[高分句型1]. Weak as he was, he still struggled to sit up. （由连接词as引导的让步状语从句）
[高分句型2]. On hearing of my words, he was so surprised that he froze with his mouth wide open. （由so…
that…连接的结果状语从句）
[高分句型3]. Such is Sandy, a little boy who kept his word and set a good example for me.（who引导的限制性
定语从句）
4．Paragraph 1:
“Maybe…” the dark girl echoes. Her voice trailing off into the silent void between them. She turns her gaze
from the empty sky, her eyes meeting the girl in white’s with a mix of curiosity and wariness. “Maybe we could
find a way out of this,” she says slowly, her tone more thoughtful than her initial disinterested stance. “There’s
something strange about this place, about these shards of glass that seem to reflect our emotions. Maybe if we
understand them better, we can use them to our advantage.” The dark girl pauses, as if searching for the right
words. “I don’t know…I just feel like we’re missing something.”
Paragraph 2:
And the remnant of the girl she used to be, the Tairitsu who had first woken up in this world, rebelled against
the prospect of “the end” – against the idea of giving up. She had always been a fighter, a seeker of knowledge and
truth, and this strange encounter was no exception. “I don’t want to just accept this fate,” she said, her voice firm.
“There’s always a way, always a choice. Let’s explore this place, these shards of glass, and see what secrets they
hold. Maybe we can find a way to escape this strange world, together.” The girl in white nodded, her face
brightening with a spark of determination. Together, they stepped forward, ready to face whatever challenges lay
ahead.
【写作分析】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了两个女孩在一个满是玻璃的地方寻找出去的方法，两人互相
帮助，一起找解决办法，迎接挑战。
【要点解析】1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“‘也许……’黑衣女孩附和道”可知，第一段可描写两人商量出去的办法。
②由第二段首句内容“她曾经是那个女孩的残余，那个在这个世界上第一次醒来的Tairitsu，反抗“末日”
的前景——反抗放弃的想法”可知，第二段可描写两人找到出去的办法并成功应对挑战。
2.续写线索：商议办法——找到方案——坚定内心——应对挑战——感悟3.词汇激活
行为类
①有利：to our advantage/benefit
②接受：accept /embrace
③寻找：search for/look for
情绪类
①准备好：ready/prepared
②体贴的：thoughtful /considerate
[高分句型1] Maybe if we understand them better, we can use them to our advantage. (运用了if引导条件状语从
句)
[高分句型2] Together, they stepped forward, ready to face whatever challenges lay ahead. (运用了whatever引导
宾语从句)
