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专题 36 读后续写
备考 2023 年高考英语二轮复习讲练测--讲练
命题解读
读后续写的命题形式为：提供一段350词左右的与语言材料，据该材料内容、所给两段段落开头语进行续
写（150词左右），将其发展成一篇与给定材料有逻辑衔接、情节合理、完整的短文。该题型具有一定的开放
性，考生需用自己的语言对故事情节进行内容创造；按照可合理的方向续写，使文章结构完整，结构条理清晰；
细节描写生动，具有矛盾冲突、心理描写等都让故事更加立体饱满。
写作步骤
1. 读懂文章
2. 审清题目
3. 谋篇布局
4. 初步草稿
5. 定稿时间安排
1. 原文阅读（建议时长3-5min）
2. 信息梳理（建议时长3-5min）
3. 潜心构思（建议时长3-5min）
4. 初稿勾勒（建议时长10-15min）
5. 润色提升（建议时长5-8min）
6. 定稿誊写（建议时长5-7min）
典例分析
真题典例
1. (2022年全国高考新高考I卷读后续写)
It was the day of the big cross-country run. Students from seven different primary schools in and around the small
town were warming up and walking the route（路线）through thick evergreen forest.
I looked around and finally spotted David, who was standing by himself off to the side by a fence. He was small
for ten years old. His usual big toothy smile was absent today. I walked over and asked him why he wasn't with the
other children. He hesitated and then said he had decided not to run.
What was wrong? He had worked so hard for this event!
I quickly searched the crowd for the school's coach and asked him what had happened. "I was afraid that kids from
other schools would laugh at him," he explained uncomfortably. "I gave him the choice to run or not, and let him
decide."
I bit back my frustration（懊恼）. I knew the coach meant well — he thought he was doing the right thing. After
making sure that David could run if he wanted, I turned to find him coming towards me, his small body rocking from
side to side as he swung his feet forward.
David had a brain disease which prevented him from walking or running like other children, but at school his
classmates thought of him as a regular kid. He always participated to the best of his ability in whatever they were
doing. That was why none of the children thought it unusual that David had decided to join the cross-country team. It
just took him longer — that’s all. David had not missed a single practice, and although he always finished his run long
after the other children, he did always finish. As a special education teacher at the school, I was familiar with the
challenges David faced and was proud of his strong determination.
注意：
1. 续写词数应为150左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答.
We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn't look at me.I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners.
【故事分析】
1. 2022年新高考读后续写短文以越野赛跑为线索展开。语篇材料中的“我”（who）是一名特殊教育学校
（where）的教师，在大型越野赛跑那天（when），发现患有大脑疾病的David（who）独自站在一旁。“我”
问他原因，他说准备放弃比赛（what）。“我”从教练口中得知，因为担心同学们会嘲笑 David（why），所
以教练想让David自己决定是否参加比赛。“我”让David追寻自己的内心，不要理会别人的看法，David最
终参赛，尽管遇到困难，但他战胜了自己，这已经无关名次，他的勇敢和坚定让这一切成为可能（how）。
2.情感线索：根据材料第一段首句中的“David wouldn’t look at me”可知，David内心有自卑感，参赛的动
力不足，因而“我”需要通过一定的方式鼓励 David，帮助他重建参赛的信心。根据第二段首句中的
“watched”与“moved up to”可以推测出，David已经走出心理阴影，“我”作为教师也倍感欣慰并被
David的坚持所打动。David最终克服重重困难，跑完了比赛，赢得了他人的尊敬。
3.主题意义：通过通读文章，了解特殊学生David遇到困难时的心理变化和行为表现，学习David勇于面对困
难的精神与勇气并体会教师对学生的鼓励与爱。（不同考生的深度理解会有不同，故读后续写的评分标准有一
条：故事情节合理即可。）
【范文赏析】
We sat down together on some steps, but David wouldn’t look at me.
I turned him around and looked him in the eye sincerely. I quietly said, “David, if you’re not running because you’re
afraid someone is going to laugh, that’s not a good enough reason. Are you going to let them get in your way? If you
really want to run, David, run!” I held my breath as David took this in. Then he looked at the field and said with a fierce
but quiet determination, “I’m gonna run.”
I watched as David moved up to the starting line.
The starter’s gun sounded. But he had only gone a few metres before he tripped and fell flat on the ground. My heart
sank. As I started to shout encouragement, other voices around me took up the call. “Come on David, you can do it!”
David picked himself up and started again until he crossed the finish line to wild cheers and applause.
最后几句结尾有三种：
第一种：（首选结尾）That day, David got a special award for his courage. He also got respect of all students. To him, that was worth a whole
lot more than an award. (169 words)
第二种：（原文结尾）
Then, when David’s coach slapped him on the back and said proudly, “Good job, David!” he caught my eye, flashed me
a toothy grin and said, “That was easy!” （169 words）
第三种：
That day, David got a special award for his courage. He was shining on the winner’s podium. David, with so many birth
problems, was a hero to all of us and most importantly, to himself! (175 words)
真题练一练
1.（2021年新高考I卷读后续写）
A MOTHER’S DAY SURPRISE
The twins were filled with excitement as they thought of the surprise they were planning for Mother’s Day. How
pleased and proud Mother would be when they brought her breakfast in bed. They planned to make French toast and
chicken porridge. They had watched their mother in the kitchen. There was nothing to it. Jenna and Jeff knew exactly
what to do.
The big day came at last. The alarm rang at 6 a.m. The pair went down the stairs quietly to the kitchen. They
decided to boil the porridge first. They put some rice into a pot of water and left it to boil while they made the French
toast. Jeff broke two eggs into a plate and added in some milk. Jenna found the bread and put two slices into the egg
mixture. Next, Jeff turned on the second stove burner to heat up the frying pan. Everything was going smoothly until
Jeff started frying the bread. The pan was too hot and the bread turned black within seconds. Jenna threw the burnt
piece into the sink and put in the other slice of bread. This time, she turned down the fire so it cooked nicely.
Then Jeff noticed steam shooting out of the pot and the lid starting to shake. The next minute, the porridge boiled
over and put out the fire. Jenna panicked. Thankfully, Jeff stayed calm and turned off the gas quickly. But the stove was
a mess now. Jenna told Jeff to clean it up so they could continue to cook the rest of the porridge. But Jeff’s hand
touched the hot burner and he gave a cry of pain. Jenna made him put his hand in cold water. Then she caught the smell
of burning. Oh dear! The piece of bread in the pan had turned black as well.
注意：1.续写词数应为150左右。
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared.
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The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.
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【范文赏析】
As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared. Father’s appearing was like a savior to
the two children. Under the guidance of their father, they took positive actions and started all over again. They made the
bread and then went on cooking porridge. Father helped them adjust the fire, which was the key to success. It was all
right this time. Delicious breakfast was ready. How happy they were!
The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up. When their mother saw the delicious and
perfect breakfast in front of her, she was very surprised. It was not only the gift, but the love of the children for her that
moved her very much. The two children could finish cooking a breakfast, which she didn’t expect. The children said
loudly, “Happy Mother’s Day!” Mother hugged them tightly and kissed them again and again.
2.（2021年1月浙江卷读后续写）
My dad, George, only had an eighth grade education. A quiet man, he didn't understand my world of school
activities. From age 14, he worked. And his dad, Albert, took the money my dad earned and used it to pay family
expenses.
I didn't really understand his world either: He was a livestock trucker, and I thought that I would surpass (超过)
anything he had accomplished by the time I walked across the stage at high school graduation.
Summers in the mid-70s were spent at home shooting baskets, hitting a baseball, or throwing a football, preparing
for my future as a quarterback on a football team. In poor weather, I read about sports or practiced my trombone (长
号).
The summer before my eighth grade I was one of a group of boys that a neighboring farmer hired to work in his
field. He explained our basic task, the tractor fired up and we were off, riding down the field looking for weeds to spray
with chemicals. After a short way, the farmer stopped and pointed at a weed which we missed. Then we began again.
This happened over and over, but we soon learned to identify different grasses like cockle burs, lamb's-quarters, fox
tails, and the king of weeds, the pretty purple thistle. It was tiring work, but I looked forward to the pay, even though I
wasn't sure how much it would amount to.At home, my dad said, "A job's a big step to growing up. I'm glad you will be contributing to the household." My
dad's words made me realize that my earnings might not be mine to do with as I wished.
My labors lasted about two weeks, and the farmer said there might be more work, but I wasn't interested. I decided
it was not fair that I had to contribute my money.
注意：
1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
.
Paragraph 1：The pay arrived at last
Paragraph 2：I understood immediately what my parents were worried about.
【范文赏析】
The pay arrived at last. Although the job was very tiring, I was very happy in my heart for I got something from my
work. The toil of labor was forgotten for the time being. I thought I should have my own money and planned how to
spend it. “How much money have you earned?” Dad asked. I was surprised, reluctant to say my income. The next
morning, my dad’s livestock truck started running. I saw my father’s hard-working figure and thought of his words “A
job’s a big step to growing up”.
I understood immediately what my parents were worried about. They were worried that I was too selfish to give.
I realized that my labor was very hard, but my growth and our whole family had been depending on the hard work
of my parents! Dad never complained about unfairness! He even seemed to think that was fair. I thought, “I’ve only
worked for two weeks, but how many years my father has worked!” In the evening, Dad came back. I proudly took
out my own money and handed it to Dad.
【解析】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者高中毕业后，参加农场工作，辛辛苦苦挣到的钱，不情愿贡献给
家庭，后来在看到父亲的辛劳之后，理解了父母担心的是自己太过自私而不知奉献，终于想通，并自豪地将自
己劳动所得交给父亲的故事。
【详解】1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“工资终于到了。”可知，第一段可描写作者的工资到手后，高兴地计划自己用这笔钱，
不愿意交给父亲，然后看到父亲的辛劳。
②由第二段首句内容“我立刻明白了父母的担心。”可知，第二段可描写作者明白了父母担心自己不懂得奉献，
想通了，然后自豪地把钱交给了父亲。
2. 续写线索：高兴——计划——不情愿——发现——奉献——自豪3.词汇激活
行为类
①计划：programme/plan
②.奉献：give/devote
③发现：see/find
情绪类
①.不情愿的：unwilling/reluctant
②.自豪地：proudly/with pride
【点睛】[高分句型1]. I thought I should have my own money and planned how to spend it. (运用了疑问词加动词不
定式作宾语)
[高分句型2]. I realized that my labor was very hard, but my growth and our whole family had (that引导的宾语从句
以及过去完成进行时)
3.（2020年1月浙江卷读后续写）
One fall, my wife Elli and I had a single goal: to photograph polar bears. We were staying at a research camp
outside “the polar bear capital of the world”-the town of Churchill in Manitoba, Canada.
Taking pictures of polar bears is amazing but also dangerous. Polar bears-like all wild animals should be
photographed from a safe distance. When I'm face to face with a polar bear, I like it to be through a camera with a
telephoto lens. But sometimes，that is easier said than done. This was one of those times.
As Elli and I cooked dinner, a young male polar bear who was playing in a nearby lake sniffed, and smelled our
garlic bread.
The hungry bear followed his nose to our camp, which was surrounded by a high wire fence. He pulled and bit the
wire. He stood on his back legs and pushed at the wooden fence posts.
Terrified, Elli and I tried all the bear defense actions we knew. We yelled at the bear, hit pots hard，and fired blank
shotgun shells into the air. Sometimes loud noises like these will scare bears off. Not this polar bear though-he just
kept trying to tear down the fence with his massive paws(爪子).
I radioed the camp manager for help. He told me a helicopter was on its way, but it would be 30 minutes before it
arrived. Making the best of this close encounter(相遇), I took some pictures of the bear.
Elli and I feared the fence wouldn’t last through 30 more minutes of the bear's punishment. The camp manager
suggested I use pepper spray. The spray burns the bears’ eyes, but doesn't hurt them. So I approached our uninvited
guest slowly and，through the fence, sprayed him in the face. With an angry roar(吼叫), the bear ran to the lake to
wash his eyes.注意:1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph1:A few minutes later, the bear headed back to our
camp.___________________________________________________________________________________________
_____________
Paragraph2:At that very moment, the helicopter
arrived._________________________________________________________________________________________
______________
【范文赏析】
A few minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp, then we realized the spray had only angered him even more, for
he seemed much fiercer this time and violently pushed the fence like mad. My heart raced wildly, not knowing what to
do. At this critical moment, Elli grabbed several pieces of garlic bread and threw them over the fence. It worked! The
bear stopped the attack and ran to the bread. But it wasn’t long before he eat up all the bread and came back again.
At that very moment, the helicopter arrived. “Thank goodness we are saved!” Elli cried out. Once the helicopter
landed, we got onto it in no time, excited and relieved. When we were safe on the helicopter up in the air, I was
amazed to the spot that the bear had finally tore down the fence and ran towards the food we left behind. I quickly
took out the camera and photographed the rare scene- we were robbed by a polar bear.
【解析】本文以事件为线索展开，讲述了作者和妻子前往被称为“北极熊之都”的加拿大丘吉尔镇拍摄北极熊。
夫妻二人做饭之时，一头饥饿的雄性幼熊跟着面包的蒜香味，靠近了营地，猛烈撞击营地边上的铁丝围栏。作
者和妻子使出浑身解数，想吓退这头熊，不料它“不破篱笆誓不归”。无奈之下，作者求助营地管理员，被告
知救援直升机要30分钟后才能赶到，只得先尝试用胡椒喷雾喷洒北极熊的眼睛，不料这使熊变得更加暴躁，
在千钧一发之际直升机及时赶到，他们得救了的故事。
【详解】1.段落续写：
由第一段首句内容“几分钟后，熊返回了我们的营地。”可知，第一段可描写作者夫妻二人如何再次对付熊及
两人在此过程中的紧张害怕。
由第二段首句内容“就在那时，直升机赶到了。”可知，第二段可描写作者夫妻二人获救时的心情。
2.续写线索：熊返回营地——紧张害怕——用面包攻击——直升机赶到——快速登上飞机——熊把篱笆推到
——拍下熊“打劫”的画面
3.词汇激活行为类
①激怒：anger/provoke / enrage
②抓起：grab/snatch up
③拿出：take out/fetch out
情绪类
①疯狂的：mad/crazy
②兴奋的：excited/thrilled
【点睛】
[高分句型1] then we realized the spray had only angered him even more, for he seemed much fiercer this time and
violently pushed the fence like mad. My heart raced wildly.（for引导的原因状语从句）
[高分句型2] My heart raced wildly, not knowing what to do. （现在分词作状语）
[高分句型3] Once the helicopter landed, we got onto it in no time, excited and relieved. (once引导时间状语从句和
形容词作状语)。
