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考向 41 读后续写之外貌、性格与环境描写
在读写续写过程中，在沿用原文语言特点的情况下，围绕原文主旨，续写部分可利用恰当的词语描述人物
的外貌、性格和周围的环境，丰富续写情节，从而进一步提升续写语篇的可读性。
第一部分 外貌性格描写
一、外貌性格描写的3个原则
①进行外貌描写时，可写对一个人的总体印象，也可以抓住人物重要的外貌特征或性格特点进行描述。如
攻略3例题原文中第一段对妈妈性格的描写，采用了loving, sweet, absentminded和forgetful等形容词，使一个可
爱又健忘的妈妈的形象跃然纸上。
②可以具体描述人物的五官、着装，甚至可以配上动作描述。
③在描写人物片段时，可写你对人物印象最深的一两点，再加上一两句人物评价。
二、外貌与性格描写的高分素材
（一）外貌描写
(1) 她圆圆的脸上有一双蓝色的眼睛，还有两个可爱的酒窝。
①On her round face are a pair of blue eyes and lovely dimples. (倒装句型)
②She is a girl with a pair of blue eyes and lovely dimples on her round face. (with 引导的介宾结构作后置定语，
补充说明人物信息)
(2)李老师三十多岁，身材适中，常梳着马尾辫。
①Miss Li is in her thirties with a medium build and has her hair in a ponytail. (由and连接的并列句；with短语用
作状语，表示伴随状态)
②Miss Li is a mediumsized woman in her thirties who often wears/ties her hair in a ponytail. (定语从句补充介绍
人物特征)
③Miss Li, in her thirties, is of medium size, and often has her hair tied in a ponytail. (“be of ＋ adj. ＋ n．”结
构表示人或物具有某种特征。常用的名词有：size, height, weight, build, age, shape等)
（二）性格描写
①Such is Ms. Han, an easygoing, kind and warmhearted woman.
韩老师是一个随和善良又热心肠的女人。
②Though he comes from a poor family, he is a person of great determination and courage.
他虽出身贫寒，但拥有坚强的意志和勇气。
第二部分 环境描写
一、环境描写的4个原则
①选择与主题和情节设置一致的环境要素，以营造故事发生的特定环境。
②细致深入。所选的景物一定要运用所学的词汇和句法进行细致深入的描写。
③添加附加信息，如天气变化和周边的景物等，如昏暗的路灯、摇曳的树影等。
④环境细节描写一定要与动作和心理活动等相结合，才能更好地完成续写任务。
例如：攻略3第一段续写中可适当描写一下在帐篷中过夜时周围的环境，突出作者内心的祥和、快乐。
二、环境描写的高分素材
①It was beginning to snow, and snowflakes were blinding my eyes.天开始下雪了，雪花让我看不清了。
②The sun was breaking through the blanket of mist.
太阳穿过薄雾。
③Summer sees the mountains turn bright green with growing rice. During autumn, these same mountains are flash
gold, and in winter they are covered in sheets of white frost.
夏天，水稻生长群山绿意盎然。秋天漫山铺金，冬天银装素裹。
④A little way off was a little brook, rushing and sparkling along between green banks.
不远处有一条小溪，在绿色的两岸之间奔流不息，波光粼粼。
【典例示例】(2017·浙江高考11月卷改编)
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150
左右。
A Vacation with My Mother
I had an interesting childhood: It was filled with surprise and amusements, all because of my mother—， ， and
yet and . One strange family trip we took when I was eleven tells a lot about her.
My two sets of grandparents lived in Colorado and North Dakota, and my parents decided to spend a few weeks
driving to those states and seeing all along the way. As the first day of our trip approached, David, my eightyearold
brother, and I unwillingly said goodbye to all of our friends. Who knew if we'd ever see them again? Finally, the moment
of our departure arrived, and we loaded suitcases, books, games, camping equipment, and a tent into the car and bravely
drove off. We bravely drove off again two hours later after we'd returned home to get the purse and traveler's checks
Mom had forgotten.
David and I were always a little nervous when using gas station bathrooms if Mom was driving while Dad slept.
“You stand outside the door and play lookout while I go, and I'll stand outside the door and play lookout while you go.” I
had terrible pictures in my mind: “Honey, where are the kids？” “What？！ Oh, Gosh ... I thought they were being
awfully quiet.” We were never actually left behind in a strange city, but we weren't about to take any chances.
On the fourth or fifth night, we had trouble finding a hotel with a vacancy. After driving in vain for some time,
Mom suddenly got a great idea: Why didn't we find a house with a likelylooking backyard and ask if we could set up the
tent there? David and I became nervous. To our great relief, Dad turned down the idea. Mom never could understand our
objections. If a strange family showed up on her front doorsteps, Mom would have been delighted. She thinks everyone
in the world as nice as she is. We finally found a vacancy in the next town.
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The next day we remembered the brandnew tent we had brought with us.
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We drove through several states and saw lots of great sights along the way.【描写刻画】
1．细读原文，明确叙述意图
原文基调轻松、温暖。通过介绍一次出游经历，描述妈妈健忘、心不在焉、善良、爱孩子的性格特征。第
一段概括妈妈的性格特征；第二段以妈妈遗落钱包的事情来说明妈妈健忘；由第三段担心妈妈遗忘孩子的事，
说明妈妈心不在焉，同时侧面反映孩子的靠谱、沉稳； 由最后一段倒数第二和第三句可看出妈妈很善良。
根据人物性格特征，结合续写第二段首句可推测，续写时应设计一件有趣的事来体现“快乐、母爱、温情、
亲情”。
2．根据段落开头语，确定续写方向
※根据续写第一段首句中的关键词“we remembered the brandnew tent”可知，该段应着重描写围绕帐篷发生
的有趣的。
※根据续写第二段首句中的关键词“along the way”可推断第二段可描述一路上妈妈对孩子的关爱。结合首
句中关键词“great sights”，可简单进行环境描写与原文呼应。
3．围绕原文主旨，进行人物性格和环境描写
①在描写母亲时，以原文对母亲性格的描写为依据，描述一件小事突出母亲的健忘和心不在焉；也利用一
些描述性的词语，如read、sing、warmth、comfortable、safe、laughter等描写旅途中母亲所表现出的母爱。这些
描写能使母亲的形象更加丰满、高大，“母爱”溢于言表。
②根据原文标题中的关键词vacation，和原文第二段中的“all her sights along the way”，可推断出续写部分
可适当进行环境描写，体现和母亲共度假期的快乐，一家人的亲情。
【参考范文】
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The next day we remembered the brandnew tent we had brought with us. Mom insisted that we should make
full use of it since we had brought it. David and I looked at Dad, hoping he could refuse her crazy idea again, but to our
great disappointment, he agreed with Mom's idea. So we set up the tent at the foot of the mountain by a river. “Oh, I
forgot the pillows！” Mom screamed out before we slept. Finally, we had to collect some grass as our pillows. Despite
the ache of my neck, I enjoyed the nice night with fresh air and millions of stars.
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We drove through several states and saw lots of great sights along the way. The tent became a close friend
then. Every time we camped, Mom read a book or sang a soft song. The warmth of her arms let us feel comfortable and
safe. Though she was forgetful and absentminded, laughter accompanied us along the way. Finally we met our two sets
of grandparents and enjoyed family happiness. This trip made me experience my mother's and family's love.
【检测训练】
1. 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。My name is Manan, and I am in the sixth grade. Of all the festivals, Diwal is a Hindu festival that is celebrated in
autumn, is my favorite because I can set off fireworks and eat delicious foods during the festival.
One day, I went shopping for fireworks with my grandfather. I was looking at the brightly colored fireworks when
suddenly I bumped into a little boy. All my fireworks scattered out of the bag.
I quickly bent down to pick them up. Then I noticed the boy’s face was full of wonder and amazement as he stared
at my fireworks. It appeared as though he had never seen any this closely. When he bent down to pick them up, I
snatched them from him and quickly put them back in my bag. As I stood there looking at him, I realized there was
something different about this boy. His clothes were old and torn; he looked as though he had not eaten for a few days.
On reaching home, I finished my dinner quickly and ran out to set off the fireworks. I was fascinated by the variety
of colors that burst open from the fireworks and lit up the sky, but my wonder was short-lived. I noticed that my
grandfather had gone inside the house coughing. Wondering why, I looked around and noticed all the smoke that may
have been irritating his throat. Feeling bad for only a second, I continued lighting the fireworks one after another. But,
inside me, it felt different—I felt guilty about taking pleasure from bursting the fireworks.
I could feel my conscience pricking me, “Manan! How can you do this? It just takes a few minutes for all the
money to disappear in smoke, but the boy you met today looked like he did not even have the basic necessities of life.
The children in orphanages also need love and help. Didn’t you see how your fireworks have affected Grandpa too? Can
you still ignore these things and indulge in this kind of fun?” Realizing the worthlessness of this temporary pleasure, I
really wanted to use the money in a more rewarding way. I started thinking about my own way to celebrate Diwali.
注意：
1. 续写词数应为150左右；
2. 请按如下格式在相应位置作答。
I went up to my grandfather and told him about my plan.
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Soon enough, the orphanage was filled with laughter joy and celebration.
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2. 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Sometimes things may seem beyond our efforts, but keep on and you will find beautiful views in front of you.
I was on my second outdoor experience trip that every student had to go on. That year, we had a choice of what
difficulty level we wanted: one through five. My friends and I had agreed that one would make us seem lazy and that
challenging ourselves would make for a good story. In choosing level two, we believed that it would still be a fun
experience.
We were quickly proven wrong.
The further we drove into the White Mountains, the higher the walls on either side of the winding highway grew. I
was still in awe of the mountains I had seen so many times before, but I couldn’t help feeling my heart shaking with
anxiety. Soon I would have to leave the school bus that brought 50 students out into the wilderness like every year
before.
My group consisted of my friends, Riley and Ann, and six extremely athletic boys. We arrived at base camp lodge
(木屋) first. After putting things aside and rearranging our bags, we made our way out into the wilderness.
The three of us girls were questioning if this was really a level two. The path was unbelievably steep (陡峭) and
rocky toward the top of the mountain where the first hut was located. We were practically jogging in an attempt to keep
up with the boys ahead of us. Before the trip, we were told to take breaks as often as we needed to drink water, but that
wasn’t helping our pounding hearts and heavy breathing as much as it should have.
Then, 30 minutes into the most difficult hike the three of us had ever done, Riley slipped and landed on her knee.
After a few moments, we turned back down the mountain as it was decided that Riley could not make the trip with us.
We sat on the grass outside the lodge where we had started while Riley was brought inside to join the level one group.
Ann and I exchanged breathless glances, our cheeks red and wet with sweat.
注意: 1. 续写词数应为150左右;
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
“Do you think we should ask if we could join the level one group too?” I asked Ann.
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The next days, although extremely tired, we kept on.
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3. 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
“At the beginning of the COVID-19, I went through some painful personal stuff and would often go out at night for
long walks because no one was around and I couldn't sleep any-way,” Kelly wrote on Twitter.
“One night I was walking down my street and noticed that someone had set up a few little objects in a tree planter
and upon closer inspection, I realized it was a fairy garden with a little note about the 4-year-old girl, Eliana, who felt
lonely in quarantine (隔离期) and wanted to spread some cheer.”
Kelly wrote a note to Eliana pretending to be a fairy named Sapphire that had come to live in the tree. “I said I
would gift her a magical fairy dice (骰子) if she did 3 things for me,” Kelly said. Kelly put the note in a small bottle
filled with glitter and placed it in the garden, unsure if she would get a response.
The next day, she found a handwritten letter from Eliana explaining she had completed all of Sapphire's tasks. Kelly
said she immediately burst into tears. “So I left a bunch of my dice that had small imperfections and left her another note
and also a little extra note for her parents with my name and phone number so they could contact me and know I wasn't
some bad person leaving notes for their small child,” Kelly said.
“Doing this every night gave me purpose in a horribly painful and lonely time,” Kelly said. “I looked forward to my
days again and started ordering art supplies and little toys to leave her.”
“We wrote back and forth throughout the last 9 months, helping each other feel less lone-ly and I got to chat with
her mom via text to make sure my gifts were a little more personal.”
注意:
1. 续写的词数应为150左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
The girl's mother told Kelly that they were moving to another city.
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The girl's mother preferred Kelly to act as a fairy to say goodbye to her daughter.
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4. 阅读下面材料, 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段, 使之构成一篇完整的短文。
I was born and grew up in the north of Scotland, which was not far from the sea. When I was little, I enjoyed the
seaside scenery very much. I often sat on the rock by the sea and watched the view of the sea. I was fond of playing with
the sand on the beach and chased the waves with my old sister, Alastair.
Across the beach there was a tidal(潮汐)island, which means that when the tide goes out, you can walk to it, but
when the tide comes in again, you can’t get to it. Mum and Dad never let us go there. They told us that it was dangerous.
However, the tidal island was full of mystery to me. I said to myself, “There must be some fascinating scenery worth
exploring. How I wish I had a chance to land on it!”
On a little cold day in October, while my parents were away for a friend’s wedding, my sister was determined to
take me to the beach near our house, where we would have a good time. I wanted to build sand castles.
When we arrived at the beach, the tide was out. We ran on the beach back and forth and enjoyed ourselves very
much. With the help of my sister, I made several sand castles of different shapes. Feeling a little tired, I sat on the beach
for a break. I saw the tidal island opposite, which looked very nice in the autumn sunshine.
“Let’s go to explore the tidal island, Alastair,” I said to my sister.
“That’s a good idea. But Mum and Dad said we couldn’t. Maybe we won’t return safely!” Alastair said.
“Don’t worry! We’ll try to return before the tide comes in again.” I begged Alastair.
Finally she agreed. We returned home and brought some peanut butter sandwiches and a bottle of milk with us.
注意:
1. 续写词数应为150左右;
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Then we set off for the tidal island.
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The tide came in and covered the beach and the water was too deep and cold for me.
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5. 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Finally, the bell rang. “Don’t forget to practice your class presentation at home!” Miss Bella cried as everyone
started talking and packing their school bags. Jessy felt sick. She hated having to read aloud in class. She was sure
everyone got really bored listening to her. Once, when Jessy was reading out her holiday diary, Lee was even looking at
his watch, a silver and blue one which seemed just magical.
Jessy watched Lee walk ahead of her as they left school. He seemed so clever, and he had a certain sort of shining
confidence. He was just one of those people who were good at everything. Jessy sighed. As she turned the corner, she
saw Lee’s watch lying right in the middle of the path.
Jessy knew she should just pick it up and return it to him, but she didn’t want to run after him. Jessy bent down
quickly, picked up the watch and ran home. On arriving home, Jessy put it on almost without thinking. She was surprised
it fitted so well. She walked to the mirror and started practicing her speech. Words just flooded out of her. “I’m going to
talk about swimming. I have been lucky. I’ve won lots of competitions. But when I’m in a race, I’m not really thinking
about winning. I’m just loving the feeling of being in the water…” Jessy laughed with excitement. She walked across the
room. She suddenly seemed to have a certain sort of confidence. Turning back to the mirror, Jessy saw a flash of light
from the watch in the glass. The flashes of silver seemed almost magical. So maybe Lee’s watch really DID have
something magic about it.
The next day, as the lesson began, Miss Bella asked who was going to be brave and go first. Nobody moved. Jessy
slowly raised her arm. Before Miss Bella could say anything, there was a shout from behind. “She’s stolen my watch!”
Lee said angrily, “It went missing at school yesterday.”
注意：1. 续写词数应为150左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Everybody was fixing their eyes on Jessy, waiting for an explanation.
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Miss Bella smiled and asked the class to listen to Jessy’s speech first.
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6. 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
It was the swim season, but Elizabeth didn’t like swim meets. She got horribly nervous but not because she wanted
to win. Her nerves came from the possibility that she would do something horribly wrong and let everyone down. The
day of a meet, she would be scared all day.
Recently, Elizabeth’s team announced a special swim night: Members 11 and older would swim a timed 50 meters
in all four strokes and then have pizza. It wasn’t exactly a meet, because it would involve only team members. Elizabeth
countered that it absolutely was a meet because there would be races and timers and so on. But her mother really wanted
her to go. She fought back furiously but finally agreed.
When the day of the special swim night arrived, Elizabeth was nervous. When she got to the pool with her parents,
she became even more nervous.
Her first race was the 50-meter freestyle. She swam her backstroke and breaststroke without incident. It wasn’t fun
for Elizabeth. Her butterflies just kept flapping.
Then it was time for the T-shirt relay, which works like this: One person from each relay team puts on a T-shirt, a
pair of socks, and a swim cap; swims 50 meters; and gets out of the pool. She takes off the clothes and puts them on the
next person, who then swims 50 meters. This continues until everyone on the team has completed a lap.
For some unknown reason, Elizabeth’s relay team chose her to swim the anchor leg（最后一棒）. The team
dressed her in socks and a T-shirt. And then she was off. She seemed to swim faster in the T-shirt and socks than she did
when she wasn’t wearing them.
Approaching the halfway mark, she was still in the lead. Then somebody noticed that one of Elizabeth’s socks had
fallen off and was floating in the pool. “She has to get that sock on before the end of the race,” a swimming official told
Elizabeth’s team, “or you will be disqualified.”注意：
1. 续写词数应为150左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Everybody on her team started screaming, “Elizabeth! Elizabeth! Stop! Get the sock!”
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By now; the girl in lane two was about to pass Elizabeth.
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7. 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
When I was a baby,my parents always gave me anything I waned. Then my dad died when l was three, and I got
even more stuff as my mom, fiends and family tried to make me feel better. Mom continued to treat me to whatever I
wanted until I was seven and my world changed.
My mom had thought buying houses was a good way to invest her money.But the real estate (房地产) market
crashed. I went from the kid who got an iPod when his tooth fell out and who had the coolest house to hang out in, to
literally haying nowhere to stay. Mom's best fiend Auntie Loren, took us in until Mom could figure out what to do.
After the real estate crash, when I asked fora new toy, or bike, or even to see a movie Mom would say "maybe for
your birthday" or "I'm sorry honey, but we can't really afford that now." I didn't know it then, but Mom had grown up in a
family where money was never a problem, so this change was as big for her as it was for me. My constant requests for
toys and video games were not helping my mom, who was already a widow, deal with her feelings about our new crisis-
our financial situation. But I wasn't used to hearing "no”. So for a year or two I kept asking.
Then something happened that would change my way of thinking forever. My mom had been working hard all year,
just to pay for the necessities, like our water and power bills. When she asked me what I wanted for my birthday, I said Iwanted a new video gaming system . I didn't know it was expensive. All knew was that my friends had them and that I
wanted one, too.
注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；
2.请在答题卡的相应位置作答。
On my birthday believing that I would get what I wanted, I opened the gift.
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From then on, I did't expect to get everything that I asked for.
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