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考向 42 读后续写之情感情绪细节刻画
情感细节包括人物的感受、情绪，是续写中必不可少的细节描写之一。合理的情感情绪描写与刻画，
可以凸显人物的性格、人际关系的特征、以及烘托故事高潮进而突出语篇主题等。因此，合理的情感情绪刻画
在续写中是非常必要的。以下就是读后续写过程中，刻画人物情感情绪的四个方法：
一、直接利用恰当的表情感的形容词、副词或名词、介词短语等表达人物的喜怒哀乐
例如：快乐(happy, delighted, pleased, joyful, enjoyable等)、吃惊(surprised, shocked, amazed, astonished)等形
容词或介词短语(to one's surprise, in relief, in panic)等描述人物的情绪。
二、利用环境细节“融情于景”烘托人物的情感
例如：Della finished her crying and dried her face. She stood by the window and looked out unhappily at a gray
cat walking along a gray fence in a gray back yard.(小说《麦琪的礼物》中利用3个形容词gray，体现了Della的
难受和不开心。)
三、利用恰当的动作描写反映人物的情绪
例如：下面文章片段中的句子：
With no path to follow, Jane just walked on for quite a long time. After she had climbed to a high place, she turned
around, hoping_to_see_the_lake. (动作描写，说明Jane满怀期望) To her surprise, ( 利用介词短语体现 Jane 的吃惊 )
she saw nothing but forest and, far beyond, a snow capped mountain top . (寓情于景，体现 Jane 的无望失落) She
suddenly realized that she was lost.
四、利用高级句式和修饰成分细化情感细节
例如：①“Absolutely！” replied John, excitement shinning in his eyes. (利用名词excitement和独立主格结构，
描写John的兴奋激动)
约翰答道，“一定”，他两眼兴奋地闪闪发光。
②So angry was the bear that it roared and smacked the fence violently. (so ... that倒装句型)
熊怒火中烧，开始咆哮并用爪子猛烈地拍击护栏。
③You can not imagine how frightened we were at the approach of the polar bear. (how 引导的宾语从句，介词短
语)
你无法想象北极熊向我们逼近时我们多么的恐惧。
【策略微练】
Ⅰ.按要求补全下面动作、情感和心理细节的句子
1．简又害怕又无助，靠着一棵树坐下，歇歇疼痛的双脚。
, Jane sat against a tree, . (形容词短语/非谓语动词作状语)
2．“如果我没有和汤姆吵架，我现在就不会被困在这里了，”她想，悔恨的泪水模糊了她的眼睛。
“ ，” she thought to herself
. (虚拟语气的倒装句， with复合结构)
3．她挣扎着站起来寻找那个湖。
4．她精疲力竭，她爬上一块大石头，躺了下来，很快睡着了。
(so ... that状语从句，一连串的动作)
5．简醒来时天已经亮了。
6．尽管很沮丧，她还是决定继续前进。
, she decided to continue forcing her way ahead. (让步状语从句)
, she decided to continue forcing her way ahead. (状语从句的省略句)
7．随着小溪的声音，她向水边走去。
, she walked toward the water. (非谓语动词作状语)
8．突然，她注意到远处有一个熟悉的身影向她走来。
(非谓语动词作宾补)
Ⅱ.将以上补全后的各句合并为短文，注意恰当的衔接过渡
参考答案
Ⅰ.1． Scared and helpless , Jane sat against a tree, resting her aching feet . (形容词短语/非谓语动词作状语)
2．“ Had I not quarreled with Tom , I wouldn't have been trapped here ，” she thought to herself with regretful
tears clouding her eyes . (虚拟语气的倒装句， with复合结构)
3． She struggled to her feet to search for the lake .
4． She became so exhausted that she climbed up onto a big rock, lay down and fell fast asleep . (so ... that状
语从句，一连串的动作)
5． It was daybreak when Jane woke up .
6． Although she was depressed , she decided to continue forcing her way ahead. (让步状语从句)
Although depressed , she decided to continue forcing her way ahead. (状语从句的省略句)
7． Following the sound of the stream , she walked toward the water. (非谓语动词作状语)
8． Suddenly she noticed a familiar figure at a distance coming towards her . (非谓语动词作宾补)
Ⅱ.参考范文
Scared and helpless, Jane sat against a tree, resting her aching feet. “Had I not quarreled with Tom, I wouldn't have
been trapped here，” she thought to herself with regretful tears clouding her eyes. She struggled to her feet to search
for the lake. However, she became so exhausted that she climbed up onto a big rock, lay down and fell fast asleep. It was
daybreak when Jane woke up.
Although depressed, she decided to continue forcing her way ahead. Following the sound of the stream, she walked
toward the water. Suddenly she noticed a familiar figure at a distance coming towards her.
【典例示例】阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150
左右。
Sam Watts was a 37yearold fisherman living and working in Canada. One day, Sam planned to head out into the
Pacific at 9 am and work straight through until 5pm the next day. Joining Sam would be his crewman, 24yearold Tom
Buck.
Although Sam had been warned that a storm was coming, there was little that would keep him from going. As he
sailed through the waves some 120 kilometers from land, Sam let out his threekilometerlong fishing line. The storm was
gaining strength on land but had yet to reach the men far offshore. That changed around 1 am. Waves rocked the small
boat, which began to turn sideways like an amusement park ride. “Get us out of here！” Tom screamed to Sam. “Let's
go back！”
With the winds and waves kicking up, the boat began to fill with water. Sam and Tom tried to pull in the fishing line
together, but the high waves filled the boat with water, forcing Sam to make a hard decision. He cut the line, losing
thousands of dollars' worth of equipment and fish in the sea. He then pointed the boat toward a port five hours away.
Sam then called his boss, William Fox, to report his position.
With dawn coming, Sam spotted the rise of the mountains on the horizon. He was figuring out a route through the
dangerous waters when suddenly the motor stopped. “I couldn't believe it，” Sam said. “We were 24 kilometers off the
coast, and the motor died.” High waves raised and dropped the boat, sending the men crashing into the sides. “William,
William！”
Sam yelled into the radio. “If you're coming to get me, come now！”
“We're coming！” William shouted back.
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Shortly after, the radio died and the wind continued to blow straight offshore, driving the men farther out
to sea.
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The next morning, Sam spotted a fishing boat in the distance.
【写作分析】文章主旨：原文叙述Sam Watts和船员 Tom Buck去海上捕鱼时，突遇风暴，在危险之际Sam Watts做出了
艰难的抉择：割断鱼线，损失了价值数千万美元的设备和鱼。虽然和老板报告了自己的位置，然而 Sam Watts
和Tom Buck船上的发动机熄火。 续写部分应叙述他们被救出的过程。
续写第一段：根据首句关键信息“the radio died”和“driving the men farther out to sea”可知该段应叙述Sam
和Tom在发动机熄火和无线电死机的情况下，被困海上面临死亡。 此时应用心理活动描写，描写他们的恐惧
以及Sam 后悔的心情， 后悔自己不顾风暴的警告固执地出海的决定。
续写第二段：根据首句关键信息“a fishing boat”结合原文中提到到海上寻找他们的William可知，该段应叙
述他们最终获救。该段的叙述可利用动作描写显示他们见到来营救他们的船只时高兴的心情。
【参考范文】
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Shortly after, the radio died and the wind continued to blow straight offshore, driving the men farther out
to sea. Fear seized Tom and he was trembling, for the water had not only wet his clothes but also ruined his hope of
surviving. Sam murmured, “I was warned that a storm was coming. Had it not been for my stubbornness, we would not
have lost our equipment and had to face such a terrible situation.” His voice gradually disappeared as waves rocked the
boat, making terrifying sounds. After what seemed to be a century, a great darkness fell. Exhausted, they fell asleep.
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The next morning, Sam spotted a fishing boat in the distance. He excitedly woke Tom up. Tom rubbed his eyes
and stared. Once he caught sight of the boat, he was also lit up. The chance of surviving made them regain strength and
they began to shout loudly. The boat saw them and they went aboard. On the boat they met William and other crew
members. Although they had lost thousands of dollars, they came to understand the value of hope.
【检测训练】
1. 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Toby the cat was in a small cardboard box marked “free kittens” when Daisy met him and took him home. And
from that moment on, he loved boxes.
He slept in hatboxes, gift boxes and takeout food boxes. He slept in Daisy’s sock drawer, if she left it open. When
he was a kitten, the size of a small loaf of bread, he had slept in shoeboxes. But he grew and grew, and now he was a lot
bigger than a loaf of bread. When he tried to sleep in a shoebox, his furry stomach hung over the sides.
Toby didn’t just sit in boxes, though. Sometimes he sat in flowerpots, or laundry baskets.
Daisy had a beautiful dollhouse for her birthday, a dark green three-story house with lots of furniture. Daisy loved
it. So did Toby. He liked to push the furniture out of all the rooms and sit in the bedroom on the second floor.
One day Daisy came home from school, and she couldn’t find Toby. He wasn’t in the dollhouse, or her sock drawer,
even though she’d forgotten to close it.
“Mom, Dad!” Daisy wailed. “Toby is gone!”
Daisy’s mom looked in the attic. There were boxes and dust bunnies, and even a mouse that had escaped Toby’s
notice, but no Toby.Daisy’s dad looked in the kitchen cabinets. There were pots and pans, and cans of soup, but no Toby.
Suddenly—“I found him!” Daisy cried.
The big cat was inside her mom’s new glass vase, and he didn’t look happy at all. Daisy tipped the vase over gently
and tried to pull him out, but Toby just howled.
“We’ll have to break the vase to get him out!” Daisy cried.
Now her mom didn’t look happy. It was a beautiful vase.
“No,” said her dad. “If we break it, the glass pieces might hurt Toby. Maybe we can put butter on the inside of the
vase and slide him out, like the time you got that ring stuck on your finger.”
注意：
1. 续写词数应为150左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
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Immediately, Daisy fetched some butter.
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Soon they were at the vet's office.
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【参考范文】
Immediately, Daisy fetched some butter. Her mom buttered as much of the inside of the vase as she could reach, and
her dad tried to pull the unhappy cat out. To their disappointment, Toby put his paws against the sides of the vase in
protest. Now they had an angry, buttery cat stuck in a vase. They were almost desperate when suddenly Daisy's dad hit
upon an idea. “We could call the vet,” he suggested.
Soon they were at the vet's office. Seeing an annoyed, frightened, buttery cat in a vase, the vet almost laughed out
loud but she managed to clear her throat instead. “Possibly one of the stranger things I've seen,” she admitted. She hadDaisy and her parents stay in the waiting room while she gave Toby a shot to make him sleepy. An hour later, a very
sleepy and washed Toby was brought out to his anxious family. Not only Toby, but the vase, still in one piece!
【写作分析】本文以故事为线索展开，讲述了小猫Toby被主人Daisy收养后，它喜欢待在各种盒子里，有时还
会坐在花盆、平底锅或洗衣篮里，妈妈建议给小猫建一个自己的猫舍，可是 Daisy没有在意，有一天Daisy发现
Toby不见了，原来它蜷缩在花瓶里面，肥胖的身体几乎卡住了。
【写作步骤】
1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“Daisy立刻拿来一些黄油。”可知，第一段可描写Daisy一家人为救出小猫所遇到的困难
和做出的努力，最终决定向兽医求助。
②由第二段首句内容“很快他们就到了兽医办公室。”可知，第二段可描写在兽医的帮助下，Toby得救了，花
瓶也完好无损。
2.续写线索：把猫拉出来——猫不出来——向兽医求助——等待——猫出来了
3.词汇激活
行为类
①突然想出：hit upon /came up with
②建议：suggested /advised
③给……注射：give…a shot / give…an injection
情绪类
①生气的：angry / annoyed
②绝望的：desperate / in despair
【写作步亮点】
[高分句型1]. Seeing an annoyed, frightened, buttery cat in a vase, the vet almost laughed out loud but she managed to
clear her throat instead.（现在分词短语作状语）
[高分句型2]. “Possibly one of the stranger things I've seen,” she admitted.（省略关系代词that的限制性定语从句）
2. 阅读下面材料，根据所给内容进行续写,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
It was deep into the night many years ago. The rain just came pouring down outside. An elderly man and his wife
entered the lobby (大厅)of a small hotel in Philadelphia, USA.
Trying to get out of the rain, the couple approached the front desk hoping to get a room to stay in for the night.
“Could you possibly give us a room here?” the husband asked.
The clerk, a friendly young man with a winning smile, looked at the couple and explained that there were three
conferences in the town. "All of our rooms are taken," the clerk said. “But I can’t send a nice couple like you out into therain at one o'clock at night. Would you perhaps be willing to sleep in my room? It's not exactly a suite, but it will be good
enough to make you comfortable for the night.”
When the couple declined, the young man pressed on. "Don't worry about me. I'll make out just fine," the clerk told
them. So the couple agreed.
As he paid his bill the next morning, the elderly man said to the clerk, “You are the kind of manager who should be
the boss of the best hotel. Maybe someday I'll build one for you.”
The clerk looked at them and smiled. The three of them had a good laugh. As they drove away, the elderly couple
agreed that the helpful clerk was indeed exceptional, as finding people who are both friendly and helpful isn't easy.
Three years passed. The clerk had almost forgotten the thing when he received a letter from the elderly man. It
recalled that stormy night, when he offered his kind help to the elderly couple. In the envelope, there was a round-trip
ticket to New York, and a letter asking the young man to pay them a visit. The young man decided to set out
immediately.
注意:
1 .续写词数应为150左右；
2 .续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好。
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“Do you still remember my promise years ago?” the elderly man said to the young man.
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“You must be joking,” the young man said.
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“Do you still remember my promise years ago?” the elderly man said to the young man. The young man was
puzzled and remembered nothing of what the elderly man had said years before. He just looked at the elderly man in
surprise, shaking his head. “Well,” the elderly man went on. “I promised to build a hotel for you when I left your hotel.
You are so kind and so helpful. I'm sure you will turn out to be a good boss in the future. I have firm trust in you.
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“You must be joking,” the young man said. “I'm serious,” said the elderly man with a smile around his mouth. He
then pointed to a great new building there. “That,” said the elderly man, “is the hotel I have just built for you. I hope you
can take charge of it.” Thus, the young clerk became the first manager of the hotel. But he had never expected the turn of
events that would lead him to become the manager of one of the world's most famous hotels.
【写作分析】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了一个倾盆大雨的夜晚，一对老夫妇进入一家小旅馆想要住宿，但
所有客房已经订满。一位年轻的员工将自己的房间让给了他们。多年后，这位老先生兑现当年的承诺，为这个
年轻人建造了一座酒店，并邀请他出任经理的感人故事。
【写作步骤】
1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“这位老人询问这个年轻人是否还记得他几年前的诺言。”可知，第一段可描写这位老者
重提多年前的承诺。打算要为年轻人建造一家酒店，让他做老板。
②由第二段首句内容“这个年轻人对老人的话难以置信。”可知，第二段可描写年轻人对老人的提议深感惊讶，
但在老人诚恳的邀请下，承担起管理酒店的职责。
2.续写线索：重提诺言——惊讶——解释——难以置信——诚恳邀请——成功
3.词汇激活
行为类
①.管理：take charge of /take over/hold the reins of
②.继续说道：go on/add/move on
③.信任：have trust in sb/have faith in sb/have belief in sb
情绪类
①.惊讶地：in surprise/in astonishment
②.迷惑不解的：puzzled/confused/bewildered
【写作步亮点】
[高分句型1]. But he had never expected the turn of events that would lead him to become the manager of one of theworld's most famous hotels.（由连接词that引导的定语从句）
[高分句型2]. The young man was puzzled and remembered nothing of what the elderly man had said years before.（由
连接代词what引导的宾语从句）
[高分句型3]. He just looked at the elderly man in surprise, shaking his head.（现在分词短语作状语）
3. 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Mr. Taylor checked again: water, food, bandage, medicines, a compass, and a map wrapped in plastic... Bingo! He
put all that he prepared for the coming hiking into his backpack.
Mr. Taylor was fond of hiking, this time in particular, for it was the first time for him to hike with his two sons,
Harry and Joel. Joel liked reading books about explorers and Harry joined the hiking club in his school this term. It will
be an unforgettable experience, definitely, he whispered to himself unconsciously a smile spreading over his face.
Harry and Joel, however, argued for the first three miles of their hiking trip. Harry accused Joel of wearing smelly
old shoes. Joel blamed Harry for using all of the bug spray（喷雾防虫剂）.Harry told Joel he smelled terrible. Joel
called Harry a coward（懦夫）.
“Will the two of you just quiet down and enjoy our hike together?” their father said. "You’re missing all of the
beautiful scenery!"
It was true. Neither Joel nor Harry had taken notice of the bear their father had spied at the start of their trip. They
hadn’t looked up at the eagle he pointed out overhead. Worst of all, they hadn’t paid any attention to the turns and twists
along the way while they continued their argument.
“Joel threw a stick at me!” Harry screamed. "That’s not true!” Joel shouted back.
Mr. Taylor could no longer contain his anger. "And both of you need to stop arguing!" he erupted. As he turned to
face them, his left foot caught on a root. He slipped backward and down muddy bank, falling into the river that ran
alongside the path,
Harry and Joel raced to their father’s assistance. They helped him up out of the water, and then dragged his wet
backpack up onto land.
Fortunately, their wet-through father found himself just slightly injured.
注意：
1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在相应位置作答。
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But his glasses came off when he fell in the water.
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“Just calm down." Mr. Taylor shouted, "Without my glasses, we need to work together to find our way. "
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【参考范文】
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But his glasses came off when he fell in the water. Harry and Joel waded back into the river. Twigs and leaves
swirled around their ankles before floating away on the current. No glasses! Hairy thought they might have been swept
downstream, without which Mr. Taylor couldn’t see. Everything was a blur to him now. How could they get home? “Oh
great! Now we’re lost,” groaned Joel,"and it might be days before someone finds us.” "No thanks to you.” Harry blamed.
Para 2
"Just calm down." Mr. Taylor shouted, "Without my glasses, we need to work together to find our way." Mr. Taylor
fumbled in his backpack and pulled the map and the compass out. Luckily, Joel learned how to read a map from his
books, and Harry knew how to use a compass from his hiking club. They stopped arguing, looked down at the map, so
that they searched for the river and used the compass to find the direction. In relief, Mr. Taylor beamed proudly, "You
two will save the day. You’re pretty good hiking partners!”
【写作分析】本文以人物为线索展开。主要讲的是Taylor先生第一次和两个儿子Harry和Joel一起徒步旅行。
然而，Harry和Joel为徒步旅行的前三英里而争吵。结果后来惹得Taylor先生生气了，他的左脚被树根缠住了，在泥泞的河岸上滑来滑去，掉进了路旁的河里。两个儿子前去帮助父亲，还好浑身湿透的父亲发现自己只是受
了点轻伤。
【写作步骤】
1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“但他掉进水里的时候眼镜掉了。”可知，第一段可描写两个孩子一起帮助 Taylor先生在
水里找眼镜，在找寻无结果的情况下，两个孩子又相互埋怨。
②由第二段首句内容““冷静点。”Taylor先生喊道，“没有我的眼镜，我们需要一起找到出路””可知，第
二段可描写Taylor先生在背包里找到了地图和指南针，两个孩子利用他们之前学过的使用知识，利用地图和指
南针找到了出路。
2.续写线索：
掉进水里——寻找眼镜——埋怨——让孩子们冷静——找到指南针和地图——使用地图和指南针——找到出路
——赞扬
3.词汇激活
行为类
①寻找：search for/look for
②抱怨：complain/grumble/murmur at
③摸索：grope/feel about/try to find out
④使用：make use of/apply
⑤赞扬：praise/compliment/speak highly of
情绪类
①生气的：annoyed/angry
②高兴的：pleased/delighted
【写作步亮点】
[高分句型1]
Harry thought they might have been swept downstream, without which Mr. Taylor couldn’t see. （运用“介词+关系代
词”引导非限制性定语从句。）
[高分句型2]
They stopped arguing and looked down at the map, so that they could search for the river and used the compass to find
the direction. （运用so that引导目的状语从句。）
4. 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Jesse Dufton was born with a genetic condition, retinitis pigmentosa (色素性视网膜炎), and over the years, his
eyesight gradually worsened. By the time he got to university in Bath to study Chemistry it had got to the point where hecouldn’t really see images at all, only the difference between light and dark. And a few years later, he was almost 100%
blind.
Jesse’s mum was a teacher and his dad ran a charity, and they’ve always encouraged and supported him in
everything.
Jesse started climbing when he was young. His dad took him up his first rock route when he was two. All his early
climbing was outdoor traditional climbing. His dad had been in the Mountain Rescue and was part of a mountaineering
club, so they would go for weekends away climbing throughout the UK.
Jesse’s father taught him everything and guided his first route outside when he was 11. At this time he had about
30% blurry (模糊不清的) central vision. He could just see well enough to place rock equipment, but not well enough to
pick out the routes from the ground.
At university he joined the Mountaineering Club and was able to climb much more frequently. They had regular
trips to indoor walls and weekends away outdoors. He developed a great circle of climbing friends and went on multiple
trips to Europe. On these he started Alpine climbing and ice climbing too.
But when his sight dropped to a level where he could no longer read, it started to be difficult to place equipment as
he couldn’t see whether it was properly seated. He also stopped being able to pick out the holds at indoor walls.
Jesse thought he might have to give up climbing as his eyesight got worse. But his parents never give up hopes for
him. They planned a climbing for the family and encouraged Jesse to have a try again. Jesse smiled because he knew his
parents would always be his best guide.
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It was route like milestone (里程碑) and it was not easy.
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It was route like milestone and it was not easy. Jesse’s vision was tough problem and he himself wasn’t confident
enough. That time he felt harder to complete his climbing. He told himself that he must climb on, not only for himself,
but also for his beloved parents, who carefully watched his steps and patiently reminded him of possible danger. As you
expect, Jesse succeeded climbing up to the top of the mountain, safe and sound.
Some people asked Jesse why he chose to try climbing. He answered that he did that because it was difficult and
challenging and he wanted the satisfaction of success. There are many different challenges in climbing. But the feeling of
accomplishment is incredible He couldn’t see the view but he could feel the power of love from his parents. It is the
ultimate test of our brain and our body.
【写作分析】本文以人物为线索展开，文章主要讲述了男主角Jesse有先天性的眼部疾病——色素性视网膜炎，
视力逐渐下降，进入大学的时候几乎接近失明。但是他的父母自始至终没有放弃他，鼓励他走上家庭攀岩之旅。
【写作步骤】
1.段落续写：
由第一段首句内容“这条路线就像里程碑式的路线，但这并不容易。”可知，第一段可描写 Jesse克服困难的心
理过程以及最终成功攀岩。
由第二段首句内容“有些人问杰西为什么选择尝试攀登的原因。”可知，第二段可描写 Jesse解释他努力攀岩的
原因以及通过攀岩他获得的好处。
2.续写线索：遭遇的困难——克服困难——成功攀岩——选择攀岩的理由——攀岩的好处—感到父母的爱
3.词汇激活
行为类
①.提醒某人：remind sb of/help sb remember
②.完成攀爬：complete climbing/finish climbing
③.想要成功的满足感：want the satisfaction of success/achieve a sense of accomplishment
情绪类
①.自信：be confident/ feel sure about②.不可思议的：incredible/believable
【写作步亮点】
[高分句型1]. He told himself that he must climb on, not only for himself, but also for his beloved parents, who carefully
watched his steps and patiently reminded him of possible danger. （连接词that引导的宾语从句，who引导定语从
句）
[高分句型2]. As you expect, Jesse succeeded climbing up to the top of the mountain, safe and sound.（由关系代词as
引导非限制性定语从句）
5. 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
“Meet one more and I’ll definitely ask a favour.” Gina thought, looking up at the street lights, everything immersed
(沉浸在) in the dark night. “Alas! This unlucky stuffi” She said to herself, helpless.
Behind her came the jingling of bicycle bells. Hardly had Gina let out “ah” when a cycling young man swept past.
“Why, the cyclist was back?” Gina whispered to herself. The young man suddenly returned and was already in front
of Gina before she knew it. Gina’s heart was pounding under high tension. “What will he do on such a dark night?”
“Called me just now?” The young man got off his bike. Gina shook her head repeatedly but gently. A strong sense of
self-defense overcame her and she refused to say yes.
“Something wrong with your bike?”A pair of smiling eyes met hers. Gina became somewhat calm. “The front tire
has gone flat.” she responded, head down, a ray of hope arising. “Well, I can’t help it with no tools.” The young man
managed a smile. Gina’s heart sank again. “Do you live far?” the young man searched her face for an answer. “Me?” she
asked, keeping pushing her bike forward. “Well, on the left side of the street end is a repair shop. Wish you luck!” With
these words, the young man rode away. Gina almost burst into tears. “It’s almost midnight. Where can I find a repair
shop? A liar.” She started to hate the young man.
Almost at the end ofthe street, Gina couldn’t help but look up. Near the sidewalk, there was really a shop with the
light still on.
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She paused hesitantly, and out of the shop came a girl in her twenties.
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She paused hesitantly, and out of the shop came a girl in her twenties. “Hi, there! Come over here. ”the girl waved
to Gina. Gina suddenly lit up, fear entirely gone. A young man came out. Gina became shocked, recognizing it was the
young man she had iust come across. “My brother came back from work. He told me to wait for you here. ”The girl
spoke happily. Gina smiled gratefully and thanked them sincerely“Nothing, my brother was afraid you didn’t dare to
come and iust let me up here to greet you. ”The girl replied.
With the help of the young man and the girl, the tire was soon repaired. “How much do I owe you?” Gina asked.
“Money?” The young man smiled with a big dirty hand stretching out. “Fifty dollars.”“Fifty?” Feeling so shocked. Gina
had to search her purse. “Brother…”. cried the girl in a loud voice. “Stop kidding!” She went close to Gina, “Don’t
worry, he was just kidding. We don’t run a repair business. In fact, we were just here waiting to repair your bike. ”
【写作分析】所给文章讲述Gina夜晚独自一人在路上很无助，因为她的自行车轮胎坏掉了。这时过来一位年轻
人问她是否需要帮助，Gina由于害怕没有接受。年轻人只告诉她马路左边尽头处有一家修理铺，便离开了。
Gina认为他在说谎，但还是忍不住朝那个方向看了看，好像真的有一家店铺还亮着灯。
【写作步骤】
1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“她迟疑了一下，一个二十多岁的姑娘从商店里走了出来。”可知，第一段可描写Gina鼓
足勇气走到店里寻求帮助的经过。
②由第二段首句内容“在年轻人和女孩的帮助下，轮胎很快就修好了。”可知，第二段可描写 Gina得到帮助后
表示感谢并且对年轻人为他人着想的品质所感动。
2.续写线索：走进店里——帮助修理——说出真相——感谢
3.词汇激活
行为类
①遇见：come across/encounter②回来：come back/return
③寻找：search/look for
情绪类
①开心起来：light up/cheer up
②震惊：shocked/astounded
【写作步亮点】
[高分句型1]. Gina became shocked, recognizing it was the young man she had just come across.（现在分词作状语；
省略that的宾语从句；省略关系代词的定语从句）
[高分句型2]. Nothing, my brother was afraid you didn’t dare to come and just let me up here to greet you.（省略that
的宾语从句）
6. 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
On a beautiful Thursday of this April, Amy and Alan Green took their daughter Abbey out for a walk in the
neighborhood. On their way back, Amy picked up a kite for Abbey from the Dollar Tree, blue with rainbows—there are a
lot of rainbows decorating homes around the region these days, which helps make life less dull during the coronavirus
pandemic.
In the afternoon, Abbey took the kite out for its first flight. At first, the wind was perfect. It took the kite high in the
sky. However, suddenly, the wind became much stronger and whipped the kite out of Abbey's hands in a moment. It
sailed farther and farther and finally got stuck on the power lines next to a big tree, wrapping itself over and over again
around the wires. Since the kite was too high for them to reach, the Greens could do nothing about it. Worried less about
the kite than the potential danger it might present to the lines, Amy called National Grid to report the incident.
About one hour later, Mike, a worker from the power company arrived. He carefully unwound the kite line from the
wires. After about 10 minutes' effort, he successfully freed it. But unfortunately, as the kite was wrapped so tightly, there
was some unpreventable damage. Still, he presented it at the door to Alan Green. As he left, he noticed Abbey took the
kite to the backyard. Out of curiosity, he stood there for a while to see how the girl would deal with it. Surprisingly, she
dug a hole and buried the kite in a shoebox! Even though he could not see the girl's face clearly, he knew exactly how
sad Abbey could be. He really felt bad for her. And it was at that moment that he decided to do something.
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The next day, Alan went out to get the mail as usual.
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Para 1:
The next day, Alan went out to get the mail as usual. To his surprise, there was a new kite—a cute robin with
beautiful feathers-in the box along with a note written on the National Grid's notepaper. “I felt bad for your daughter, so I
hope this new kite could make her smile,” it read. “Stay safe and healthy!” The note was unsigned.
Para 2:
Deeply moved by this act of kindness, Alan posted the whole story on the Internet. Soon, word got back to National
Grid, which quickly identified Mike, the worker who had carefully saved the kite from the wires. He told that as he saw
Abbey burying the kite, he thought of his own little sister and knew it well that the girl must be extremely sad. So after
he left the Greens' house for more service calls that afternoon, he stopped by a shop to buy the new kite and sent it to the
family. He didn't expect to be recognized, but Alan's post led to his identity being revealed, which resulted in the story
being shared and liked by millions of people throughout the Internet.
【写作分析】本文以风筝为线索展开，讲述了Amy给女儿Abbey买了漂亮的风筝，结果放风筝时，风筝挂在了
高高的电线上，他们担心会给线路带来隐患，打电话求助于国家电网电工Mike为Abbey摘下风筝，可惜由于缠
绕造成的损伤，风筝已经不能放飞了。Mike注意到了Abbey的伤心，为她网购了一个风筝。这是一个令人感动
的善举故事。
【写作步骤】
1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“第二天，Alan像往常一样出去取邮件。”可知，第一段可描写Alan取回邮件，发现了一
只漂亮的风筝，惊喜感动的心情。
②由第二段首句内容“被这一善举深深地感动了，Alan把整个故事都贴到了网上。”可知，第二段可描写Alan发帖后，故事的传播和人们对Mike善举的赞美。
2.续写线索：发现——惊喜——感动——传播——感谢——赞美
3.词汇激活
行为类
买：buy/ purchase
导致：result in/ contribute to
顺便访问：stop by/ stop in
情绪类
惊讶：to one's surprise/ to one's astonishment
悲伤：sad/ heartbroken
【写作步亮点】
[高分句型1]. Soon, word got back to National Grid, which quickly identified Mike, the worker who had carefully saved
the kite from the wires.(运用了who引导定语从句)
[高分句型2]. He told that as he saw Abbey burying the kite, he thought of his own little sister and knew it well that the
girl must be extremely sad.( 运用了that引导宾语从句)
