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【冲刺2024高考】高中英语读后续写
（创新话题命题类）新题速递08
原文解读+情节构建+下水文&范文及解读+语言赏析总结
2024年3月广东一模高三英语读后续写
创新点：人与动物类、学企鹅取暖
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的
短文。
When Mary entered the South Pole Penguin Research Lab, she saw her friend
Tom gently stroking(轻抚) a penguin in his arms. As children of the lab scientists,
Mary and Tom often observed the emperor penguins that were studied to understand
how they adapted to extreme temperatures—insights that could aid human survival.
“ We’re thirteen, Tom. It’s time to grow up and stop playing with the lab
penguins,” said Mary as she started cleaning. “They’re research animals, not pets.”
“But the birds listen to me!” insisted Tom, his breath forming a cloud in the
freezing air. “You’re just trying to be a penguin whisperer again,” Mary replied,
shaking her head with a gentle smile. The penguins seemed playful as they walked,
dove, swam and chased their live fish for sport before eating.
Suddenly, an alarm rang out and red lights flashed, signaling a problem. The kids
rushed over to look into it. “It’s colder than before—there’s ice forming on the water,”
noted Tom. Though always cold, Mary had never seen ice here before. She checked
the habitat monitor and found that the temperature had gone down a lot. “The heater
must be broken!”
Mary quickly sent a message to their parents’ research team, who were
conducting outdoor studies. With the adults away, the kids would have to deal with
the freezing conditions until help arrived.
Time dragged as Mary and Tom anxiously waited. The increasing cold caused
them to shake. “I wonder what emperor penguins do in extreme cold, since they stay
in the Pole all winter instead of going somewhere warmer,” asked Mary. “Theyhuddle (挤作一团),” Tom answered. “They huddle together tightly so that the birds in
the middle will be warm enough.” “What about the ones on the edge?” Mary asked.
“They push their way towards the center, and then move back out to the edge, and
struggle back again. Scientists in the early 21st century recorded it.” He replied as he
stared at the large crowd of the penguins in the lab.
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“I have an idea to stay warm!” Tom shouted excitedly.
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第一部分 原文解读
1.主要人物:
① Mary & Tom: children of the lab scientists, observed the emperor penguins
that were studied to understand how they adapted to extreme temperatures
② the parents:
2.视角：第三人称
3.主题：人与自然，人与自我4.原文故事梗概:
Mary和Tom南极企鹅实验室科学家的孩子。他们俩经常在实验室观察企鹅
是如何适应极端温度的。有一天，他们的父母外出考察，他们俩就留在实验室
照顾企鹅。突然，实验室内的加热器出现了故障，实验室内温度急剧下降。企
鹅们挤成一团取暖。他们俩也将不得不应对突如其来的大幅度降温。他们该怎
么办呢？
第二部分 情节构建
第一段: “I have an idea to stay warm!” Tom shouted excitedly.
①（与前一句衔接）到底是什么idea
学企鹅抱团取暖；Tom的动语皆可：示意Mary使用此办法
②（过渡）Mary又是怎么想的
Mary的反应：困惑怀疑 + 企鹅会鸟我们么？
③（承上启下）Tom的想法和做法能起作用吗
Tom的反应：顾不上决定一试 or 很自信的回应+朝企鹅团去【回应原文】
与企鹅互动：令他们超级惊讶的是，企鹅没有排斥他们跟他们抱作一团。
第二段: Two and a half hours later, the parents returned with help.
①（与前一句衔接）父母回来后的反应
parents：急切冲进实验室 + 发现孩子和企鹅抱成一团
parents反应：松一口气 + 然后修理heater
heater修完 温度正常 水面的冰逐渐融化【回应原文+冰融化-解决问题】
②（过渡）父母亲怎样评价他们俩?
Mary to Tom：感谢夸奖 you are really a penguin whisperer
③（收尾）他们从中学会了什么?
第三部分 范文
下水文
“I have an idea to stay warm!” Tom shouted excitedly. With those words, Tom
went slowly straight to the penguins, stretching his arms. Puzzled, Mary hesitated buthad to follow Tom to deal with the freezing condition. “What’s your idea?” Mary
asked, shaking, because of the sharp down of the temperature. On arrival of the
penguin huddle, Tom fondled the penguins at the edge. Some of them stepped back a
little first and then leaned against Tom as if they were old friends. Mary joined him in
the huddle and just as the penguins did, they felt good though it was turning colder.
Two and a half hours later, the parents returned with help. What surprised them
was that nothing was wrong with the two kids! Instead, they were absorbed in the
“game” with the penguins, pushing themselves to the center and then moving out. So
amazing! When asked why they did so, Tom answered proudly, “I once read a story
by the scientists saying the emperor penguins would carry out such efficient actions to
stay warm.” Their parents and other scientists praised Tom and Mary for their wide
range of knowledge and applying it in time. To the brother and sister, it was a valuable
lesson, learning to survive in life.
参考范文
Possible version 1:
“I have an idea to stay warm!” Tom shouted excitedly. Spreading his
arms, he suggested joining the penguin huddles. Worried that the penguins
wouldn’ t let them, Mary hesitated but was soon persuaded by Tom’ s
assuring grin. He slowly approached the crowded penguins, crouching down.
Gently stroking them with care, he whispered softly. Though startled at first,
the penguins recognized Tom and let him into their group. Mary quickly
followed. The children squeezed into the huddle’s edge with the penguins.
Just as the birds did, they moved toward the middle and back out as the
group shifted.
Two and a half hours later, the parents returned with help. Rushing in
calling for the kids, they were surprised. The children were safely surrounded
by Emperors in a large bundle. When asked how they stayed warm, the kids
looked at each other proudly. “We used what the Emperor Penguins do,”
they told their parents. Mary patted Tom’s shoulder with admiration, calling
him a penguin whisperer. With a big smile, Tom gave credit to the penguinswho taught them a lot. Their teamwork had seen them through the difficult
cold with the penguins’ aid.
Possible version 2:
“I have an idea to stay warm!” Tom shouted excitedly. Tom suggested
joining the penguins with their huddles to get warm. Mary hesitated with
concern that the birds wouldn’t accept them. Tom grinned with confidence
while approaching the birds which had already crowded together due to the
temperature. Slowly and gently, he crouched down to get close to the
penguins, reached out his hands and stroke them with great affection,
whispering to them soothingly. Though alarmed at first, the penguins
recognized him and allowed him into their huddle with intimacy. Mary quickly
followed his lead. The two kids squeezed their way from the edge of the
crowd to the center and returned to the edge with the flow just as the birds
did.
Two and a half hours later, the parents returned with help. When the
parents rushed in screaming out the kids’ names, they were amazed to see
the kids were tightly surrounded by a huge group of Emperors, safe and
sound. When asked how they managed to brave this terrible cold, the two kids
exchanged a glance and proudly told them it was the secret of the Emperor
Penguins that help them keep warm. Patting Tom on his shoulder, Mary said
with sincere admiration, “You are a true penguin whisperer!” With a beam
lighting up his face, Tom praised the penguins for what they taught him.
第四部分 语言赏析总结
微技能
1. 三连动句式
他举起手来，指着旁边的企鹅群，建议和他们一起取暖。
He raised his hand, pointed to the penguin cuddle nearby and suggested joining it
to keep warm.2. with复合结构
“我想我们可以和他们一起取暖，”汤姆建议到，他的目光落在了附近的
企鹅群身上。
“I think we can join them to keep warm, " suggested Tom, with his eyes falling
on the penguin cuddle nearby.
3. 情绪描写+心理描写
她脸上露出惊讶的表情。在这种情况下，这似乎是唯一可行的解决办法。
然而，她想知道，企鹅群会接受这两个外来者吗?
A look of surprise spread over her face. It appeared to be the only practical
solution given the circumstances.Yet, she wondered, would the penguin cuddle
embrace the two outsiders?
4. 形容词作状语
玛丽既惊讶又好奇，她琢磨着他们是否有可能融入企鹅群中。
Surprised and curious, Mary pondered the possibility of them blending into the
penguin cuddle.
5. 分词作状语
看到玛丽眼中犹豫的神情，汤姆让她跟他走。他蹲下来，慢慢地、轻轻地
走着，把自己无缝地融入企鹅群中，他的手不时地抚摸着它们的手臂。
Seeing the hesitation in Mary's eyes, Tom asked her to follow him. He crouched
down and proceeded slowly and gently, seamlessly integrating himself among the
penguins, his hand stroking their arms from time to time.
6. 拟人
很快，一股暖流传遍了他们的身体。它赶走了刺骨的寒冷，并逐渐在这两
个动物和两个孩子之间建立了一种神奇的纽带。
Soon a steam of warmness spread through their bodies. It drove the freezing cold
away and gradually created a magic bond between the creatures and the two children.
7. only to do
他们冲了进去，却看到了如此和谐的一幕，他们的孩子和企鹅紧紧地挤在
一起。
They rushed in, only to be greeted with such a harmonious scene that theirchildren were huddling tightly with the penguins.
8. not only... but also
帝企鹅不仅救了玛丽和汤姆的命，而且丰富了他们对人类如何受到动物智
慧启发的理解。
The emperor penguins not only saved Mary and Tom's lives but also enriched
their understanding of how humans can be inspired by animal intelligence.
