福建省百校高二期末考试
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短
文。
Longtime friends Alex Lewis and Matt Koch hiked into the Colorado
backcountry in December of 2016, planning to spend
four days in the wilderness
(现
在分词做伴随动作), miles away
from the nearest town
(n.短语做补语)(交代背景信息).
The first leg of the trip was a three mile ski into a cottage at base camp. The
uphill climb was a tough journey that had its reward of quietness and beauty. The
friends were making a visit of sorts to the wonder the winterscape provided. A year
earlier, Matt had been diagnosed with Hodgkin's lymphoma. He was now cancer-
free, and the trip was a celebration of life( 特殊的背景信息).“ This trip was kind of an
opportunity for me to prove to myself that I could do things that required a
physical fitness level I thought( 插入语) maybe I'd never have if I was a cancer
survivor,”Watt says.
Backcountry skiing has its challenges, and this seemed perfect for Matt and his
new life. But the physical demands began to increase. Heavy snow weighed down
every step as they made their way forward. Matt became painfully aware that his
recovery from cancer had caused more damage to his physical health than what
he had realized(伏笔). He was not in the physical shape he needed to be.
Night quickly approached. Temperatures were dropping, and the wind picked up.
The two seasoned outdoors men decided to dig into the snow and make a shelter in
the trees. They could rest for a few hours, regain some energy and push on to the
cottage in the morning(动词并列). But the wind kicked up, and the shelter collapsed.
After a cold night, the two were happy to see there wasn't much farther to go.
But there was a lot of fresh snow, “Our progress was pretty slow. And I just
remember taking this step, and, all of a sudden, hearing
this rushing water
sound( 现在分词做伴随动作),” Alex recalls. “And being knocked off my feet and starting to
slide, I realized that I had caused an avalanche right underneath me.
注意:1.续写词数应为150 左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: Matt was trapped at a higher place, surrounded by snow that was
impossible to cross.
Paragraph 2: Six hours later, the rescue team arrived.
1. 文章分类与续写思路分析
文章类型：历险遇险生存类读后续写（涉及自然灾害、友情与生命挑战）。
续写构思方向：
主题：友情、生命韧性、面对灾难的协作与勇气。
核心冲突：雪崩后的生存危机与救援。
情感基调：紧张→希望→升华（通过合作克服困难）。
布局与框架提炼：
段落
内容重点
衔接原文要素
第一段
Matt 被困的困境（动作/心理描
写）
承接雪崩、Matt 的体力不支、环
境恶劣
第二段
救援成功与情感升华（对话/主
题点明）
呼应癌症康复、友谊的力量
实施步骤：
动作描写：雪崩后Matt 的挣扎与Alex 的反应。
心理描写：Matt 回忆癌症经历，强化求生意志。
环境描写：暴风雪加剧困境，救援的渺茫感。
转折点：救援队出现（需合理铺垫，如Alex 发出信号）。
承接原文注意事项：
保持人物性格一致（Matt 坚韧但体力弱，Alex 冷静果断）。
沿用关键词（cancer-free, celebration of life, avalanche）。
时间连贯（从白天到黑夜的过渡）。
巧妙设计：
用Matt 的癌症经历对比当前危机，突出成长。
通过对话体现友谊（如Alex 鼓励Matt 坚持）。
环境描写烘托紧张感（如风声、雪埋的窒息感）。
2. 故事山模式与原文分析
故事山模式：
阶段
原文内容
续写对应
开端
朋友进山庆祝康复
略写
发展
体力不支、雪崩发生
Matt 被困
高潮
雪崩危机
求生与救援
结局
无
救援成功
衔接点与关键分析：
分析角度
内容
原文反应句
人物刻画
Matt：癌症康复者，体力
弱但意志强
"He was not in the physical shape he
needed to be."
情感层次
从庆祝生命到恐惧求生
"This trip was... a celebration of
life."
关键情节点
雪崩发生
"I realized that I had caused an
avalanche..."
语言特色
动作描写多，短句营造紧
张感
"Heavy snow weighed down every
step..."
关键词分析
cancer-free, avalanche,
celebration of life
直接体现主题
心理描写
Matt 对体力的担忧
"his recovery... caused more damage
than he realized"
分析角度
内容
原文反应句
动作描写
滑雪、雪崩、摔倒
"knocked off my feet and starting to
slide"
环境描写
暴风雪、低温
"Temperatures were dropping, and
the wind picked up."
隐含主题
生命脆弱与坚韧
癌症康复与自然挑战的双重隐喻
情感转折
从喜悦到危机
开头庆祝→雪崩突发
空间转换
树林庇护所→雪崩地点
"dig into the snow and make a
shelter"
时间过渡
白天→黑夜→救援
"Night quickly approached."
伏笔与冲突点：
伏笔：Matt 体力不支、暴风雪暗示危险。
冲突点：自然（雪崩）vs. 人类（求生意志）。
隐含线索：癌症康复→体力不足→需依赖合作。
解决方案：Alex 冷静求救，Matt 坚持等待救援。
续写段落示例（框架）
Paragraph 1:动作：Matt 被雪掩埋半身，试图呼救但声音被风声淹没。
心理：想起癌症治疗时的绝望，决心不放弃。
环境：暴风雪中能见度为零，Alex 在远处呼喊。
衔接句："Matt! Hold on!" Alex's voice was barely audible.
Paragraph 2:
转折：Alex 用哨声引救援队，直升机声音由远及近。
对话：救援人员问Matt 情况，他虚弱但微笑："I’ve beaten worse."
主题升华：The cancer survivor had faced death twice—and won.
3. 英文例句与高级替换词
动作描写（Action Descriptions）
He struggled to free himself from the suffocating snow.
（他挣扎着从令人窒息的雪中挣脱出来。）
Alex frantically dug through the snow with his bare hands.
（Alex 疯狂地用双手在雪中挖掘。）
Matt’s muscles screamed in protest as he forced himself to move.
（Matt 强迫自己移动时，肌肉因疼痛而抗议。）
The avalanche roared down the slope, swallowing everything in its path.
（雪崩咆哮着冲下山坡，吞噬了沿途的一切。）
He clawed at the icy surface, desperate for a grip.
（他在冰面上拼命抓挠，绝望地寻找支撑点。）
Alex’s breath came in ragged gasps as he fought against the wind.
（Alex 的呼吸变得急促，他在狂风中奋力前行。）
Matt’s legs buckled under the weight of exhaustion.
（Matt 的双腿因疲惫而发软。）
The snow collapsed around them, burying their supplies.
（雪在他们周围崩塌，掩埋了他们的物资。）
He staggered forward, his vision blurred by the stinging snow.
（他踉跄着向前走，视线因刺骨的雪而模糊。）
A sharp gust nearly knocked them off their feet.
（一阵猛烈的风几乎把他们吹倒。）
心理描写（Psychological Descriptions）
Fear gnawed at his mind, but he refused to surrender.
（恐惧啃噬着他的理智，但他拒绝屈服。）
Memories of his cancer battle flashed through his mind.
（他与癌症抗争的记忆在他脑海中闪过。）
A surge of determination pushed him forward.
（一股决心推动着他前进。）
Doubt crept in—had they made a fatal mistake?
（怀疑悄然滋生——他们是否犯了一个致命的错误？）
The silence was deafening, amplifying his growing panic.
（寂静震耳欲聋，加剧了他不断增长的恐慌。）
He clenched his fists, willing himself to stay calm.
（他紧握拳头，强迫自己保持冷静。）
A strange sense of peace washed over him despite the danger.
（尽管危险重重，一种奇怪的平静感席卷了他。）
His heart pounded so loudly he could hear nothing else.
（他的心跳声如此之大，以至于他听不到其他声音。）
The thought of giving up never crossed his mind.
（放弃的念头从未在他脑海中闪过。）
Hope flickered weakly, but it was enough to keep him going.
（希望微弱地闪烁，但足以让他坚持下去。）
环境描写（Environmental Descriptions）
The wind howled like a wounded beast.
（风像受伤的野兽一样嚎叫。）
Snowflakes stung their faces like tiny needles.
（雪花像小针一样刺痛他们的脸。）
The trees groaned under the weight of the snow.
（树木在积雪的重压下呻吟。）
Darkness swallowed the landscape as night fell.
（夜幕降临，黑暗吞噬了风景。）
The cold seeped into their bones, relentless and unforgiving.
（寒冷渗入他们的骨头，无情而残酷。）
The avalanche’s aftermath left an eerie silence.
（雪崩过后，留下了一种诡异的寂静。）
Frost coated their eyelashes, making every blink painful.
（冰霜覆盖了他们的睫毛，每一次眨眼都疼痛难忍。）
The blizzard reduced visibility to mere inches.
（暴风雪使能见度降至仅几英寸。）
The snow-covered peaks loomed ominously in the distance.
（白雪覆盖的山峰在远处阴森地耸立着。）
The air was so thin that each breath felt like a struggle.
（空气如此稀薄，每一次呼吸都像是一场挣扎。）
固定搭配、词法解析与可积累语料
常见固定搭配（Collocations）
Dig into the snow（挖雪）
例句: They dug into the snow to create a shelter.
Kick up (wind/snow)（风/雪突然增强）
例句: The wind kicked up, making it impossible to see.
Knock off one’s feet（击倒）
例句: The avalanche knocked him off his feet.
Regain energy（恢复体力）
例句: They rested briefly to regain some energy.
Make one’s way forward（艰难前行）
例句: They slowly made their way forward despite the storm.
高级替换词（Advanced Synonyms）
普通词汇
高级替换
适用场景
Cold
Biting / Frigid
极寒天气
Tired
Exhausted / Drained
体力耗尽
Scared
Petrified / Terrified
极度恐惧
普通词汇
高级替换
适用场景
Run
Stagger / Trudge
艰难行走
Help
Rescue / Aid
救援场景
可积累的生词短语
Backcountry (n.) - 偏远地区
近义词: Wilderness
反义词: Urban area
例句: They ventured deep into the backcountry.
Avalanche (n.) - 雪崩
近义词: Snowslide
反义词: Stability
1.
例句: The avalanche buried everything in its path.
Lymphoma (n.) - 淋巴瘤
近义词: Cancer
反义词: Health
例句: Matt had battled Hodgkin’s lymphoma.
Shelter (n./v.) - 庇护所 / 躲避
近义词: Refuge
反义词: Exposure
例句: They built a shelter to survive the storm.
Collapse (v.) - 倒塌
近义词: Crumble
反义词: Stand
例句: The snow shelter collapsed under the wind.
总结
动作描写：多用动态动词（dig, claw, stagger）增强画面感。
心理描写：结合比喻（fear gnawed, hope flickered）深化情感。
环境描写：拟人化（wind howled, trees groaned）增强氛围。
高级替换：避免重复，提升语言丰富度（如用frigid 代替cold）。
固定搭配：掌握自然表达（kick up, knock off）使续写更地道。
5. Possible Versions(4)
Version 1
Paragraph 1:
Matt was trapped at a higher place, surrounded by snow that was impossible to
cross. Alex quickly assessed the slope and realized that any attempt to reach
Matt would risk triggering another avalanche. The snow beneath him was already
unstable, and each step felt like it could be the last. Shouting
through the wind
(现在分
词做伴随动作), he tried to keep Matt calm. “Just hang on! Don’t move. Help is coming!” he
called, forcing steadiness into his voice(独立主格刻画人物) despite the anxiety rising in his
chest.(现在分词短语做后置定语) Matt gave a faint nod, his figure barely visible through the
swirling snow(独立主格刻画人物状态). Alex knew he had to act fast — but smart. After
planting a marker stick near Matt’s location, he turned and began making his way
back down toward a safer area where he could activate the emergency beacon.
Every step away felt like betrayal, but staying would have meant risking both their
lives. As he moved through the snow, he kept glancing back, whispering(现在分词做伴随动
作), “Hold on, buddy… just a little longer.”
Paragraph 2:
Six hours later, the rescue team arrived. The air was filled with the thrum of
helicopter blades and urgent voices. Guided
by the marker
(过去分词做方式状语) Alex had
left, the rescuers quickly located Matt. One team ascended with ropes, moving
with trained precision(现在分词做伴随动作). Though exhausted and half-frozen, Alex refused
to rest until he saw Matt being carefully lowered by the rescuers. Matt’s face was
pale, but he was conscious. “You came through,” he said hoarsely as their eyes met.
A flood of relief washed over Alex, who finally allowed himself to sit, emotions
breaking through the cold(独立主格). The mountain had challenged them both —
physically and emotionally — but the bond they shared, and Alex’s quick
judgment, had turned a potential tragedy into a story of endurance and
brotherhood.
Version 2
Paragraph 1:
Matt was trapped at a higher place, surrounded by snow that was impossible to
cross. Alex’s heart sank. The path between them was steep and unstable, the snow
ready to slide at the slightest movement(独立主格描写状态). Climbing up was not an
option — one wrong step could send a second avalanche roaring down. “Don’t
move, Matt!” Alex shouted, his voice sharp but trembling(独立主格). “Stay still,
conserve your energy!” Matt didn’t respond but gave a slight wave, signaling(现在分词做伴
随动作) he was still conscious. Realizing(现在分词做伴随动作) that time was against them, Alex
began moving carefully downhill to a safer spot where he could reached any
help. His legs trembled, not just from cold but from fear of leaving his friend
behind.
Paragraph 2:
Six hours later, the rescue team arrived. Snowmobiles rumbled through the
silence, followed
by figures
(过去分词做后置定语) in bright red jackets moving swiftly and
surely(现在分词做后置定语). One team began climbing toward Matt while another
confirmed
Alex’s identity and situation. Though exhausted, Alex immediately pointed out
Matt’s position and briefed them on his last signals. Soon, Matt was secured and
gently lowered. His lips were blue, hands stiff(独立主格), but he was alive — blinking,
whispering, smiling weakly(现在分词短语做伴随动作). Alex watched from below, barely able to
breathe(adj 短语做补语) until Matt was placed on the stretcher
, finally letting
go of the
weight(现在分词短语做伴随动作) he had been carrying alone. The rescue team nodded
approvingly, one saying(独立主格), “You did everything right.” In that moment, Alex
knew this wasn’t just a survival story — it was a testament to trust, instinct, and
unshakable friendship(名词并列).
Version 3
Paragraph 1:
Matt was trapped at a higher place, surrounded by snow that was impossible to
cross. Panic rose in Alex’s chest as he looked up and
saw Matt waving weakly from
above
. Knowing(现在分词短语做伴随动作)that trying to climb up would risk triggering
another avalanche, Alex fought back the urge to rush forward. Instead, he shouted
words of encouragement, his voice trembling but steady enough to be heard(独立主格).
He remembered Matt’s words from the beginning: “This trip was kind of an
opportunity to prove to myself.” And now, it was Alex's turn to prove his courage
— not by rushing blindly, but by making smart decisions. Wrapping himself
tighter in his jacket(现在分词短语做伴随动作), Alex dug a shallow trench for shelter and turned
on his emergency beacon. The cold wind howled around him, but he kept his eyes on
Matt, gesturing
for him to stay awake and hold on
(现在分词做伴随动作). Minutes stretched
like hours, but Alex never let fear control him.
Paragraph 2:
Six hours later, the rescue team arrived. Red jackets flashed in the snow as the
team moved swiftly into position. One of the rescuers shouted for Matt to remain still
while they used ropes to reach him. Alex, numb with cold but alert(adj 做主语补语),
quickly briefed them on the situation. When Matt was finally pulled to safety, his
lips were blue but he managed a faint smile. “Told you I could still do hard
things which needs physical fitness and resilience,” he whispered. Alex
laughed, relief washing over him like sunlight breaking through storm clouds(独立主
格). As they sat in the snow, wrapped
in thick blankets
(过去分词做后置定语), Alex realized
the trip had taken on a deeper meaning — it wasn’t just a celebration of
survival, but of friendship, trust, and resilience(名词并列). The mountain hadn’t
defeated them. It had revealed who they truly were.
Version 2
Paragraph 1:
Matt was trapped at a higher place, surrounded by snow that was impossible to
cross. Alex froze for a split second, eyes locking on Matt’s
figure
(独立主格) half-
buried in snow(过去分词做后置定语). The path upward was steep and unstable, and every
movement risked more snow sliding down. Still, Alex edged closer, testing
each
step with his pole(现在分词做伴随动作). “Hold on, I’m figuring this out,” he shouted, forcing
calm into his voice(现在分词短语做伴随动作). Matt nodded, too exhausted to reply(adj 做主语补语).
They had been through so much already — the cancer, the recovery, the storm(名词并列)
— this couldn’t be the end. Alex backed away slowly and activated the satellite
emergency call device Matt insisted they carry. As the sun began to sink behind the
ridge, Alex used his body to shield the tiny blinking light, praying it would connect.
He couldn’t dig Matt out alone — but he could buy them time. Every second, he kept
talking to Matt, grounding him in hope.
Paragraph 2:
Six hours later, the rescue team arrived.
Their arrival felt like a miracle. A voice over the radio confirmed Matt’s location, and
within minutes, rescuers were working methodically, ropes swinging and snow
shovels digging. Alex stepped back, giving them space but never taking his eyes off
Matt. When Matt was lifted from the snow, trembling but conscious, Alex finally
allowed himself to collapse, tears stinging his cheeks. He wasn’t just relieved — he
was proud. Matt had endured the storm once again. On their way down the mountain,
wrapped in thermal blankets, Alex squeezed Matt’s shoulder and said, “You proved it
— not just to yourself, but to me, too.” Matt’s laugh was hoarse but full of life. Some
journeys, Alex realized, were never about the destination, but about the people who
walk them with you.
【范文三】
✅
Paragraph 1:
Matt was trapped at a higher place, surrounded by snow that was impossible to
cross.
The white world seemed to blur as Alex stared up at his friend, who was motionless
except for the occasional nod. The slope between them was steep and treacherous.
Fighting panic, Alex scanned their surroundings and remembered a training video
about snow rescues. Drawing from that memory, he carefully marked the area to
avoid stepping into unstable patches. He waved to Matt, signaling “stay still,” then
retreated to flat ground. He pulled out the emergency flare and the GPS beacon Matt
had insisted they pack, silently grateful for his friend’s foresight. As darkness crept
over the mountains, Alex whispered words to himself — a mix of fear and hope. He
built a small snow wall for wind protection and refused to sleep, eyes fixed on the
place where Matt lay. “You’ve come too far,” he thought. “I won’t let you fall now.”
Paragraph 2:
Six hours later, the rescue team arrived.
A distant buzzing grew louder, until a rescue helicopter hovered above. Alex jumped
and waved the flare with frozen fingers. Within minutes, Matt was being airlifted into
safety. Alex watched, a mix of pride and exhaustion etched on his face. He wasn’t the
strongest or the fastest, but he’d made the right calls. That, he realized, was what true
strength meant. As he climbed aboard the helicopter, Matt managed to grab Alex’s
hand. “Thanks, man,” he whispered, voice cracked but eyes alive. The trip, once
meant as a celebration, had turned into a trial — but they had passed. Not through
muscle, but through memory, trust, and heart. Alex looked out over the mountain as
they flew away. “This,” he thought, “is what it means to come back stronger.”
语言亮点归纳分析（适用于所有三篇）
📘
1. 搭配与短语积累
原句搭配
同义替换 / 拓展表达
fight back the urge
resist the temptation / hold oneself back
stay awake and hold on remain conscious and strong / keep going
keep his eyes on
stay focused on / watch closely
relief washing over sb. be overwhelmed with relief / breathe a sigh of relief
2. 情绪 / 动作描写亮词亮句
情绪表达
动作表达
panic rose in his chest
froze for a split second
forced calm into his voice tested each step with his pole
relief washing over him
activated the emergency beacon
whispering words of hope built a snow wall for protection
3. 高中加分语法使用点
加分语法
示例
非谓语结构“Knowing that trying to climb up would risk...”
强调句
“It was Alex who made the call to wait.”
虚拟语气
“If he had rushed forward, the snow might have buried him too.”
倒装结构
“Only then did he realize the depth of danger.”
4. 升级词汇与替换建议
基础词
升级词
例句
tired
exhausted / worn out
Matt was exhausted, barely holding on.
look
gaze / glance / stare
He gazed upward, searching for signs of Matt.
cold
freezing / bitter / bone-chilling The freezing wind bit at his face.
scared terrified / panicked / uneasy
Alex felt a wave of panic as he heard no reply.
5. 例句积累（用于模仿）
1.
He fought the rising panic and focused on what had to be done.
2.
3.
The mountain hadn’t beaten them — it had tested, and revealed, their
strength.
4.
5.
Wrapped in silence and snow, they waited for hope to arrive.
6.
7.
Some journeys are measured not in miles, but in moments of courage.
8.
福建省百校高二期末考试
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短
文。
Longtime friends Alex Lewis and Matt Koch hiked into the Colorado
backcountry in December of 2016, planning to spend four days in the wilderness,
miles away from the nearest town.
The first leg of the trip was a three mile ski into a cottage at base camp. The
uphill climb was a tough journey that had its reward of quietness and beauty. The
friends were making a visit of sorts to the wonder the winterscape provided, A year
earlier, Matt had been diagnosed with Hodgkin's lymphoma. He was now cancer-free,
and the trip was a celebration of life.“ This trip was kind of an opportunity for me to
prove to myself that I could do things that required a physical fitness level I thought
maybe I'd never have if I was a cancer survivor,Watt says.
Backcountry skiing has its challenges, and this seemed perfect for Matt and his
new life.But the physical demands began to increase. Heavy snow weighed down
every step as they made their way forward., Matt became painfully aware that his
recovery from cancer had caused more damage to his physical health than what he
had realized. He was not in the physical shape he needed to be.
Night quickly approached. Temperatures were dropping, and the wind picked up.
The two seasoned outdoors men decided to dig into the snow and make a shelter in
the trees. They could rest for a few hours, regain some energy and push on to the
cottage in the morning. But the wind kicked up, and the shelter collapsed.
After a cold night, the two were happy to see there wasn't much farther to go. But
there was a lot of fresh snow, “Our progress was pretty slow. And I just remember
taking this step, and, all of a sudden, hearing this rushing water sound,” Alex recalls.
“And being knocked off my feet and starting to slide, I realized that I had caused an
avalanche(雪崩) right underneath me.
注意:1.续写词数应为150 左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: Matt was trapped at a higher place, surrounded by snow that was
impossible to cross.
Paragraph 2: Six hours later, the rescue team arrived.
官方：
Matt was trapped at a higher place, surrounded by snow that was impossible to
cross. The young man(这是什么鬼，有点不好了啊！) who had courageously fought cancer was
exhausted from his struggle to overcome the elements. He didn't have the strength to
go up or down. He made the difficult decision to stay and send Alex for help. It was
extremely hard for Alex to leave, but he knew it was the only chance to save his
friend. He skied the dangerous valley toward the road until he could get mobile
phone signal and called the police.
Six hours later , the rescue team arrived. They got to the place where Martt(老
师，你出卷辛苦了，Matt！)was trapped, managed to dig a passage and pulled Mar（t）t out(动
作串并列). Matt was so cold that he lost consciousness. After coming down the
mountain, Matt was immediately sent to the hospital. He stayed in the hospital for
several weeks before recovering. Although Alex had done everything within his
power, the accident left him feel guilty. But Matt was very grateful for Alex's help,
and the two later became even closer friends.
