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心理状态等的刻画方法
心理描写概述
心理描写是在特定情境下对人物的内心活动、心理情感、情绪状态等进行的描写。心理描写渗透着现
实环境，读者能从人物的心理描写中感知角色视角下对生活的体验，从而领会人物的精神面貌、展现人物
的性格特征。“心理描写主要分为直接心理描写和间接心理描写，其中，直接心理描写包括客观心理剖析、
内心独白、梦境幻觉。
1.客观心理剖析
客观心理剖析是以第三人称的视角叙述人物心理活动，多用于小说、寓言、童话等文学体裁当中，如
《皇帝的新装》中皇帝、大臣的心理描写都采用了客观心理剖析，以“心里想”“他想”等作为标志，用
作者的口吻表现人物的心理状态。客观心理剖析以文外视角进行撰写，能够表达不同人物的不同情境下的
真实心理感受，能够使读者更加直观的理解角色心理活动。
2.内心独白
内心独白是以第一人称阐释的无声的人物内心语言，能最真实最直接的反映当前角色的内心状态和情
绪。相比较客观心理剖析，人物内心独白更偏向于理性和逻辑的思考，它可以作为一种内心的思考，比基
于特定情景下的意识心理的产生而言，更具逻辑性和哲理性。人物内心独白要置于文本大背景下考量，同
时结合事件、情感进行理性思考，挖掘其中的主题思想，在理解人物内心独白的真正认识人物。因此，在
进行人物独白的剖析时，要以理性的眼光综合人物独白出现的环境、情节，避免人物心理活动与环境的割
裂；在写作中对人物独白进行修改时，注意既要符合人物身份，又要表现人物真实情感，感悟人物心理描
写与语境的融入。
3.梦境幻觉
梦境幻觉是指通过梦境或人物在某种情绪状态下，视觉、听觉上出现虚幻的画面、声音，从而展现人
物内心世界、抒发情感的描写。
人物的心理描写是以角色视角渗透生活现实，细腻的心理描写能切实感受人物的情感变化、展现人物
内心，将读者代入把握人物行为动因，体会人物共情。心理描写是对人物内心活动的直接刻画，是将人物
的内心感触表现出来的一种重要方式。心理描写是一种叙述视角的调整，以人物的所思所感来表现作者在
文本中传达的思想，是以文本情境中的角色个人心理分析来审视历史、社会、人生的“独白”。从人物的
心理描写中，读者能直面人物的内心世界，或以人物的心理挖掘文本背后的内涵。
读者直接面对的不是赤裸裸的生活，而是被一层心理体验所浸透的生活，心理描写的边缘就是生活的边缘一一这是使读者对熟悉的生活环境产生陌生感的主要源泉。因此，分析人物的心理描写，应该将人物
置于文本情境中，以人物的角度考量心理活动产生的脉络。
心理状态刻画微观技巧
描写恐惧心理的方法
第一部分 表示恐惧
1.他心跳较快，想都没有想，他就开始跑了。His heart beat wildly and without thinking, he started to run.
2.他突然闪现一丝恐惧。 The thought of fear crossed his mind.
3.突然一阵恐惧控制了他，他吓得呆在原地。他试着移动，但是却不能，直到一个尖锐的声音唤醒了他。
A sudden rush of panic ruling him, he was frozen to the spot. He tried hard to move，but could not, until a sharp
sound awoke him.
4.Mac 心跳得很快，双手颤抖。他的脸变得惨白，眼里充满了恐惧。
Mac’s heart was beating wildly/violently /was pounding and his hands were shaking. His face turned pale and eyes
were full of horror.
5.他因恐惧而呆住，站在那儿一动不动。Frozen with fear, he stood rooted to the spot.
6.一看到凶猛的狼，我吓得僵住了，吓得一动也不敢动。
At the sight of the fierce wolf, I froze with terror, too scared to move an inch.
7.他被恐惧吓倒了，Mac 不知道要说什么？Overwhelmed by fear, Mac didn’t know what to say/do. (be
overwhelmed by 被...给压垮/吓倒/征服)
8.一种惊恐的感觉掠过他的心头。 A frightened feeling crept/ swept/ over his heart.
9.他心中涌起了一阵恐惧。/ 恐惧席卷了他。
A flood of fear welled up in him. /Fear flooded over him.
10. 她因恐惧而窒息。She was choked with fear.
11. 时间似乎停止了，尽管他们可能只在那儿二至三分钟。
Time seemed to stand still, though they were probably there for only two or three minutes.
第二部分 应对恐惧
1.一股力量立刻取代了Jane不断增长的恐惧和焦虑。
A sense of strength immediately replaced the mounting fear and anxiety in Jane's mind.
2.他的大脑又开始快速转动，尽力想着...
His mind began to race, trying to thinking...
3.他鼓起勇气...He plucked up his courage to do ...
4.(副词)立刻/马上; 突然 = immediately/ abruptly/instantly/promptly; suddenly=all of a sudden
5.（短语）立刻马上；= without delay/ without pausing;
6.毫不犹豫/迟疑 = without any hesitation
第三部分 历险后的心情\动作描写
1. They breathed a sigh of relief.
2. (心有余悸) Though Mac was safe, he still could feel his heart beating quickly. He was even having troubling
breathing, and he felt dizzy (眩晕). For a moment（有一会）, he was afraid he would faint (晕倒)
注： 对 “ adventurous experience” 总结性的句子
1. Never would they forget such a thrilling summer holiday in their whole life.
2. What a thrilling adventure!
3. Many years have passed, till now, I still remember the thrilling trip to the Wild West.
4. The vacation with my my forgetful mother would always stand out in my memory. 和妈妈一起的旅行总是
会让我记忆犹新。
心理状态描写常用升级策略
开心（通过心理、表情、动作来表达）
普通版：He was happy.
进阶版:1. Her eyes shone/glittered/sparkled /twinkled with joy.
2. Her face lit up with pleasure.（容光焕发）
3. Her heart was pounding with excitement. （砰砰直跳）
4. Happiness/joy/pleasure/delight took hold of him.(极度开心)
5. She was overflowing with happiness/joy/pleasure/delight.(幸福洋溢)
6. He shed tears of joy.（流下开心的泪水）
例句：
1. His eyes twinkled with pleasure when he saw the news.
当他看到新闻，他的眼里闪耀着快乐。
2. He grinned with delight when he saw us.
当他看到我们，咧开嘴开心地笑了。
3. The smile on her face shone like a diamond.
她脸上的笑容像钻石一样闪耀。
4. I couldn’t restrain my joy and jumped into the house.我抑制不住内心的喜悦，蹦蹦跳跳地进了家门。
5. He cast us a look/glance,with his face wearing a broad/wide/radiant/warm smile.
她看向我们，面带灿烂/温暖的笑容。
6. When his mother kissed him on the cheek,it seemed as if the baby were on the top of the world.
当妈妈亲吻他的脸颊时，小婴儿开心极了。
伤心（心理、表情、动作）
普通版：He was sad.
进阶表达：
不同的哭：cry 哭（泛指，哭出声） sob 呜咽，啜泣 wail 嚎啕大哭 weep 小声/无声流泪
burst into tears 放声大哭 fight back tears 抑制住泪水
be close to tears / be on the verge of tears 快要哭了 be in tears 含泪
例句：
1. He sighed with disappointment.
他失望地叹了口气。
2. He struggled to fight back his tears.
他试图控制住自己的泪水。
3. His eyes brimmed with tears of sorrow.
他的眼里噙满了悲伤的泪水。
4. He stood silently, tears rolling down his cheeks.
他静静地站着，眼泪流下他的脸颊。
5. I feel like I am floating in an ocean of sadness.
我感觉自己漂浮在悲伤的海洋里。
6. I saw an old lady wailing with fist beating her chest in the street corner. 我看到一个老奶奶在街角捶胸痛哭。
7. When he embraced me with his arms open wide, I felt my throat choke with sob. 当他张开双臂拥抱我时，
我觉得自己喉头哽咽。
8. Upon hearing the bad news, she felt seized by a burst of sadness and couldn’t help crying bitterly. 一听到这个
坏消息，她就被一股悲伤之感控制，忍不住哭泣。
紧张（心理、表情、动作）
普通版：He was nervous.
进阶版：
1. Standing in the classroom, I became increasingly nervous and could feel my heart beating wildly. 站在教室里，我越来越紧张，我能听见自己心跳加速的声音。
2. Her face turned pale, feeling like sitting on pins and needles.
她的脸刷白，感觉如坐针毡。
3. Before the competition, his palms were sweaty and knees were soft.
比赛前，他手心出汗，膝盖发软。
4. At the sight of the fierce wolf, I felt so scared that my throat tightened and my knees felt weak. 看到恶狼，我
喉咙发紧，膝盖发软。
5. At the sight of the fierce wolf, I froze with terror, too scared to move an inch. 看到恶狼，我被吓呆到一动不
动。
6. At the sight of the fierce wolf, I was seized by a strong sense of horror and my palms were sweating. 看到恶
狼，我被一股强烈的恐惧感攫住了，掌心流汗。
尴尬/羞愧（心理、表情、动作）
普通版： He was embarrassed/ashamed.
进阶版：
1. His face flushed(通红)/burned(燃烧)with embarrassment/shame.
他因尴尬而满脸通红。/他窘得脸都红了。
2. He hung/dropped/lowered his head in shame.
他羞愧地低下了头。
3. She felt so ashamed that she could feel her face burning.
她感到羞愧难当，脸上滚烫。
4. So ashamed was she that she could feel the blood rush to her face.
她感到羞愧极了，血液涌上脸颊。
5. So ashamed did she feel that she was close to tears.
她羞愧到快哭了。
愤怒（心理、表情、动作）
普通版： He was angry.
进阶表达：fly off the handle 勃然大怒 lose one’s temper发脾气
例句：
1. His voice trembled with anger/rage(愤怒).
他气得声音发抖。
2. He glared at me with burning eyes.他盯着我，眼里充满怒火。
3. Filled with anger/fury(狂怒)，Tom was unable to utter a single word.
Tom气得一句话也说不出。
4. Boiling with rage，Tom shook his fist at me.
Tom怒火中烧，对我挥舞拳头。
绝望（心理、表情、动作）
普通版：He felt hopeless/desperate.
进阶版：
1. Upon hearing the bad news, he was suddenly thrown into a world of darkness and sank into hopelessness.
听到这个坏消息，他突然被投入黑暗世界，陷入绝望。
2. He felt left out and was getting desperate with loneliness.
他感觉被遗弃了，孤独使他感到绝望。
3. His beliefs in looking forward and seeing the positive in everything deserted him.（被信念抛弃）
他那种向前看、看到一切事物积极一面的信念抛弃了他。
感谢（心理、表情、动作）
普通版：I thanked my father.
进阶版：
1. I ran over to my father, reached out my hands and hugged/embraced him tightly/firmly.
我跑向父亲，伸出手，紧紧抱住他。
2. With grateful tears hanging in his eyes, he kept extending（表达）his gratitude(感激）， “Thank you so
much!”
他眼中满是感激的泪水，不停地说：“非常感谢！”
鼓励（心理、表情、动作）
普通版： He felt encouraged.
进阶版：
1. Taking a deep breath, I managed to calm myself down and walked up to the platform confidently.
深吸一口气，我成功地让自己镇定，然后自信地走上了讲台。
2. I walked over to him, and patted him on the shoulder, encouraging: “Come on!”
我走向他，拍拍他的肩膀，鼓励道：“加油！”
震惊（心理、表情、动作）
普通版： He was surprised/shocked.进阶版：
1. His eyes grew wide/widened with surprise/astonishment(震惊)when he heard the news.
听到这个消息后，他惊讶地睁大了眼睛。
2. It ’ s hard to believe . He didn’t accept the job that he was long for.
真难以置信，他竟然没有接受那份期待已久的工作。
3. Grandfather’s death was really a bolt from the blue for me.
祖父去世的消息对我来说简直是晴天霹雳。
疑惑/迷茫（心理、表情、动作）
普通版： He felt confused.
进阶版：
1. With a confused look on his face, he had no idea what to do.
他露出困惑的表情，不知道该做什么。
2. He scratched his head, having on idea what to do.
他挠了挠头，不知道该做什么。
3. He scratched his head, not understanding a word.
他挠了挠头，一个字也听不懂。
拓展训练
1．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
At an early age, Bob was repeatedly told by his mother Markita, “Believe in yourself no matter what
happens.” When Bob was 12, his mother traveled with him in a car. Slowly night fell. Bob was asleep in the front
seat of the car. As Markita drove carefully down the winding dirt road, she turned onto a narrow bridge. As she did,
the car hit a rock and ran off the road, and the right front wheel got stuck. Fearing the car would tip over, she
attempted to drive it back onto the road by pressing hard on the gas pedal (油门) and turning the steering wheel (方
向盘) to the left. But Bob’s foot got caught between his mother’s leg and the steering wheel and she lost control of
the car.
The car rolled over and hit a deep valley. Bob could hardly get his breath back. “What happened, Mama?” he
asked. “Our wheels are pointing toward the sky.”
Markita was blinded by blood. She was too painful to move and cry for help. “I’ll get you out, Mama,” said
Bob, who had luckily escaped injury. He managed to get out of the car through the open window and tried to pull
his mother out. But she couldn’t move. “Just let me sleep,” replied Markita, who seemed to be out of consciousness
(意识). “No, Mama,” Bob continued. “You can’t sleep.”Bob reached her mother and tried to pull her out of the car, but failed. He then told her he'd climb up to the
road and stop a car to get help. Fearing that no one would be able to see her little boy in the dark, Markita refused
to let him go alone. Instead, Markita did her best to open the door. She moved inches at a time. The pain was so
great that Markita wanted to give up, but Bob wouldn’t let her.
注意： 1.续写词数应为 150个左右；
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
To keep his mother moving, Bob repeated the words his mother told him.
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About an hour later, Bob and his mother finally reached the road._
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2．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Lilly paused, her plans — going climbing momentarily forgotten, as she watched the older woman’s wheels
stuck in the railroad tracks. The woman, with a mixture of frustration and determination across her face, pushed
against the stubborn wheels, trying to free herself.
Without hesitation, Lilly approached her. “Do you need some help?” she asked, her voice gentle yet clear.
The woman looked up, surprised and slightly embarrassed. “Oh, dear, I thought I could manage, but these
tracks are more of a challenge than I expected,” she admitted.
Lilly smiled. “Let me help you,” she offered, placing her bag on the ground before grasping the handles of
the wheelchair. With a joint effort, they managed to get the wheelchair back on solid ground.
“Thank you, young lady. I’m Martha,” the woman introduced herself.“I’m Lilly. It’s nice to meet you. Martha. Are you heading somewhere nearby?” Lilly asked, curious about
the woman’s journey.
“Yes, just across the street to the park. My granddaughter is playing in the school band there. It’s their first
public performance, and I wouldn’t miss it for the world,” Martha explained, her voice filled with pride.
Lilly glanced at her watch, realizing her own plans could wait. “Would you like me to walk with you to the
park? It’s no trouble.” she offered.
Martha’s face lit up with a grateful smile. “I would appreciate that very much. Lilly.”
As they made their way to the park, Lilly learned that Martha had been a music teacher for most of her life,
instilling(灌输) a love of music in countless children, including her own granddaughter. Lilly found herself
absorbed in Martha’s stories of past concerts, and the joy that music brought to her life.
Upon reaching the park, they found a spot where Martha could have a clear view of the stage. The air was
filled with the excitement of parents, friends, and locals, who gathered to support the young musicians.
注意：1. 续写词数应为 150个左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
“Would you like to stay and listen to the performance?” Martha asked Lily.
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As the concert drew to a close, Martha opened her eyes and turned to Lilly.
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3．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
In my childhood, under the influence of my el der brother and my peers in the neighborhood, I tried a
number of outdoor activities. Of course, I was not so taken by all of them. whether I was doing them for the first
time or continuously. However, fate had its own plans in store. You never know when an outdoor activity willchange my life.
The name of this activity is “fishing”. About ten years ago, I didn't really like the idea of sitting on the bank
of a lake or river, spending long hours under the sun's ultraviolet rays, which can cause sunburns and skin damage,
and anxiously anticipating some fish to be kind to take my bait(诱饵). In fact, I used to think of this outdoor
activity as some kind of “hide-and-seek-game” that is popular with most young kids, except that it was much harder
because I could see my “prey (猎物)” only after catching it.
However, all that changed when I paid a visit to my aunt in the countryside during a summer holiday. I was
finally convinced by one of my cousins to accompany him to a nearby lake in order to do some fishing practice
with him. In fact, he even assured me that fish would eat my baits. So I agreed and went to the lake expecting to
catch some fish. Before throwing my fishing line into the water, my cousin did some tricks attaching some sort of
food to my fishing pole.
Learning to fish in a river or lake can be challenging for the beginners like me. The act of dropping a line is
easy, but being a successful fisher is hard. That's why they call it fishing but not catching But with practice and
patience, it can become easier over time. Patience is essential in lake fishing. It may take some time to find the right
spot or lure (鱼饵) that will attract fish.
注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
My cousin had to repeatedly remind me to keep patient.
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When we finally left the lake, I had caught three fish!
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4．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Crab Lessons
My son Geordi was a rather spirited boy. Very little held his attention for long. He spent most of his spare
time thinking up new ways to scare me half to death. Like the time he decided to “surf” on a tiny plastic table that
was meant to hold a few drinks rather than a six-year-old boy. Geordi had just begun learning about the ocean in
school and was surprisingly fascinated by it. We lived in Delaware, so any discussion about the ocean usually
included horseshoe crabs, which crowded our coasts to mate in the late spring.
As part of the lesson, Geordi’s teacher brought horseshoe crab shells (壳) to school for the children to touch
and examine. Hearing that horseshoe crabs had been around for over 300 million years, even before the dinosaurs,
Geordi thought that was officially the coolest thing he had ever heard. He could not stop talking about it for days,
and I decided it was time for us to take a drive to the Delaware Bay.
As we stepped out from the car, strong wind nearly blew my poor forty-five-pound child to the ground.
Being a six-year-old mischievous (调皮的) boy, Geordi saw this as an opportunity to showcase his amazing talents,
which included falling down, getting up, falling down and, yes, getting up again. This, of course, was always
complete with giggles (咯咯笑). The drama came to a sudden stop as Geordi spied the dozens of army-truck-
looking creatures in the sand. The next sound effect was “Wow!” as his body froze and his eyes widened with
wonder.
Geordi ran around excitedly, not knowing which one to check out first. He settled on a horseshoe crab that
was on its back, legs waving wildly in the air, desperate for water. “Mom, look at this one!” he screamed. “He’s
cool!” I pointed out the different body parts of the crab for him, and he listened quietly and absorbed the
information. He said, “I really liked him. I think I will name him Spike because he had all those really cool, spiky
(尖的) things on his back.” Then I picked up the crab, turned it over to its proper position and placed it at the edge
of the water.
注意：
1.续写词数应为150 左右;
2.请按如下格式作答。
Geordi asked what I was doing.
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Geordi spotted many more horseshoe crabs on their backs.
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参考答案
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To keep his mother moving, Bob repeated the words his mother told him. “Believe in yourself. I know you
can”. Bob kept talking to his mother. With time passing by, their effort paid off. When they were trying to step out
of the valley, the sky was so bright and starry. Bob was able to see his mother’s face clearly. He broke into tears.
Above the valley, there came the light and the sound of cars on the road. They held each other, walking slowly to
the main road.
About an hour later, Bob and his mother finally reached the road. There was a sign on the side of the road.
They got to the sign and had a good rest. Meanwhile, Bob took off his clothes and waved his hands in the air.
“Stop! Please stop!” the boy kept shouting. “We need help. Get my mama to a hospital.” Luckily, a driver saw him
from the window and pulled up. He rushed them to the nearby hospital. Now, Markita has recovered from injuries.
She said, “If it hadn’t been for Bob, I’d have died.”
【写作分析】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了在鲍勃很小的时候，他的母亲玛基塔就反复告诉他:“无论发
生什么，都要相信自己。在鲍勃12岁时，他和妈妈玛基塔发生了车祸，车子掉到了一个深谷里。鲍勃没有
受伤，但是他的妈妈痛得动弹不得，大声呼救。鲍勃决定爬上马路去寻求救援，由于担心没有人能在黑暗
中看到她的小男孩，玛基塔拒绝让他一个人去。相反，玛基塔尽力打开了车门。她每次移动几英寸。太痛
苦了，玛基塔想放弃，但鲍勃不让她放弃。
【要点解析】1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“为了让妈妈继续移动，鲍勃重复了妈妈告诉他的话。”可知，第一段可描写鲍勃和
妈妈一起努力走出了山谷。在山谷上方，路上传来了灯光和汽车的声音。他们互相扶着，慢慢地向大路走
去
②由第二段首句内容“大约一个小时后，鲍勃和他的妈妈终于到了公路上”可知，第二段可描写鲍勃向司
机求救，获救以及被送往医院。现在母亲康复以及对鲍勃的感激。2.续写线索：努力走出了山谷——慢慢地向大路走去——求救——获救——送往医院——玛基塔现在康复
了——感激
3.词汇激活
行为类
从……走出来：step out of /come out of
恢复：recover/pick up
死：die /pass away
搀扶：hold/ support sb. with one’s hand
情绪类
相信：trust/believe in/be confident of
[高分句型1] If it hadn’t been for Bob, I’d have died. (运用了if引导的虚拟条件句)
[高分句型2] They held each other, walking slowly to the main road. (运用了现在分词作状语)
2．One possible version:
“Would you like to stay and listen to the performance?” Martha asked Lily. Lilly hesitated for a moment but
quickly nodded. She realized this unexpected incident could possibly bring her more joy than that any planned
outing could have brought. As the first notes of the band’s tune filled the air, Martha pointed out her granddaughter,
who looked as determined as her grandmother. A sweet melody filling the air, Martha closed her eyes, lost in the
sound. Lilly watched, feeling a warmth in her heart as she witnessed Martha’s love for her granddaughter and her
passion for music.
As the concert drew to a close, Martha opened her eyes and turned to Lilly. “Thank you for today, Lilly.
You’ve made an old lady very happy,” she said, her voice soft yet filled with sincerity. Lily responded, “It was my
pleasure, Martha. Today was a wonderful surprise for me too.” They exchanged smiles. Lily’s original plans were
missed, but in return, she felt a sense of fulfillment, gaining something far more valuable—a reminder of the beauty
of kindness, the power of music, and the unexpected friendships that can arise in the most ordinary circumstances.
【写作分析】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了莉莉原计划去登山，在路途中却遇到了一个坐着轮椅，车轮
卡在轨道上的女人玛莎，莉莉帮助了她，并送她去公园，在交谈中，莉莉知道玛莎原来是一名音乐老师，
她的孙女正在公园里表演。玛莎邀请莉莉一起观看了演出，虽然莉莉未能实现原本的计划，但是她却获得
了更有价值的东西。
【要点解析】1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“‘你愿意留下来听演出吗？”玛莎问莉莉’可知，第一段可描写玛莎邀请莉莉观看孙女表演，玛莎沉浸其中及莉莉的感受。
②由第二段首句内容“音乐会快结束时，玛莎睁开眼睛，转向莉莉”可知，第二段可描写玛莎感谢莉莉的
陪伴和观看以及莉莉在这件事中的感受。
2.续写线索：莉莉同意观看演出——玛莎沉浸在演出中——莉莉的观看感受——向莉莉表示感谢——莉莉
对于这次经历的感受和收获
3.词汇激活
行为类
①意识到：realize/be aware that
②观察：watch/observe
③回应：respond/reply
情绪类
①有决心的，坚定的：determined/resolved
②开心：happy/pleased/cheerful
[高分句型1] As the first notes of the band’s tune filled the air, Martha pointed out her granddaughter, who looked
as determined as her grandmother. (运用了由as引导的状语从句和who引导的非限制性定语从句)
[高分句型2] A sweet melody filling the air, Martha closed her eyes, lost in the sound. (运用了独立主格结构和过
去分词短语作状语)
3．One possible version:
My cousin had to repeatedly remind me to keep patient. He taught me how to adjust my pole based on the
movements of the fish and how to determine the best time to lift the pole when a fish was on the hook. Under his
guidance, I calmed down gradually, staying focused to wait patiently. Then suddenly, I felt a jerk of my pole. A
surge of thrill sweeping over me, I pulled the fishing pole out of water and I caught my first fish! So excited was I
that I even gave a jump in the air. It was a small one, but it was a milestone for me!
When we finally left the lake, I had caught three fish! Thrilled and fulfilled, I skipped all the way home with
my cousin, telling him it was a pity that I had been missing out on so much by avoiding this simple outdoor activity
before. Since then, I have become a passionate fisherman and love spending time outdoors, appreciating the simple
pleasure of life. Fishing has taught me to be patient and persistent and most importantly, it has also taught me a
lesson that we should not miss out on these opportunities just because they are simple or just we do not know how
to do them well.
【写作分析】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者童年，在哥哥和邻居的影响下，我尝试了一些户外活动。在某一次尝试了钓鱼之后，作者喜爱上了这项活动，变成了一个充满激情的渔夫，喜欢花时间在户外，欣
赏生活的简单乐趣。
【要点解析】1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“我表姐不得不一再提醒我要有耐心”可知，第一段可描写作者钓上鱼的经过。
②由第二段首句内容“当我们最后离开湖时，我已经钓到了三条鱼！”可知，第二段可描写作者喜爱钓鱼
以及对钓鱼的感悟。
2.续写线索：提醒有耐心——指导作者——鱼上钩——喜爱钓鱼——对钓鱼感悟
3.词汇激活
行为类
①确定：determine/confirm
②告诉：tell/inform
③捕捉：catch/capture
情绪类
①专注：focused/concentrated
②激动：excited/thrilled
③满足：fulfilled/content
[高分句型1] So excited was I that I even gave a jump in the air. (运用了倒装句)
[高分句型2] Fishing has taught me to be patient and persistent and most importantly, it has also taught me a lesson
that we should not miss out on these opportunities just because they are simple or just we do not know how to do
them well. (运用了that引导同位语从句和疑问词+不定式作宾语)
4．
Geordi asked what I was doing. I explained to him that if the crab got stuck on its back and could not get
back to the water soon, it would die. Horseshoe crabs, I told him, are very important in many ways. Their eggs are a
great food source for birds, and their shells and blood have special medical properties that can help many people.
Besides, it didn’t seem right to let a species that had survived so long just dry up in the sun. Geordi listened intently,
his eyes sparkling with concern. He then bent down and cautiously touched Spike’s shell with his finger,
murmuring, “Go home, Spike.” We watched the horseshoe crab slowly make his way back into the ocean.
Geordi spotted many more horseshoe crabs on their backs. He decided that we should help them all. Without
fear or hesitation, he began picking up stuck horseshoe crabs and turning them over, and helped me carry them to
the water. He was extra careful and gentle, worried that he may hurt one. His sincere concern for the horseshoecrabs touched my heart. When the job was done and it was time to leave, Geordi asked, “Do you think we will ever
see Spike again?” “Maybe,” I said, “but now that we have helped him, we know he will be okay even if we don’t
see him again.”
【写作分析】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者和儿子乔迪去海边观察马蹄蟹，作者教导了儿子关于马
蹄蟹的知识以后，儿子决定帮助海滩上被困的马蹄蟹，作者也被儿子的行动感动。
【要点解析】1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“乔迪问我在做什么”可知，第一段可描写作者教导了儿子关于马蹄蟹的知识。
②由第二段首句内容“乔迪在他们的背上发现了更多的马蹄蟹”可知，第二段可描写儿子采取行动帮助马
蹄蟹以及作者的感悟。
2.续写线索：好奇询问——作者解释——儿子认真倾听——帮助马蹄蟹——作者被触动——作者感悟
3.词汇激活
行为类
①完成：do/finish/accomplish
②看到：see/spot/notice
③伤害：hurt /injure
情绪类
①小心：cautiously/carefully
②真诚：sincere/heartfelt
[高分句型1] He decided that we should help them all. (运用了that引导宾语从句)
[高分句型2] “Maybe,” I said, “but now that we have helped him, we know he will be okay even if we don’t see
him again.”(运用了even if引导宾语从句和now that引导原因状语从句)
