济南中考英语作文真题拆解|2023 调查图表类:三步铁律

摘要：图表类作文三步：先描述，再评价，后表态。三步走完，25 分拿 18 分以上。

先记住这九个字：先描述，再评价，后表态。

这三步是图表类作文的全部。2023 年济南这道题，25 分，三步走完就能拿 18 分以上。

我下面把每一步该写什么、能抄哪句话，都标出来了。

先看题目。

2023年济南中考英语书面表达：新时代英语课堂的语言实践活动丰富多彩。学校英语社团开展了以 Students' Favorite English Class Activities 为主题的调查，请使用图表中的调查结果写一篇英语短文向学校英文报投稿。

内容包括：1. 描述并评价调查结果；2. 陈述你的选择并说明理由。

注意：词数 100 左右，开头已给出，不计入总词数；可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；不得出现真实的人名、校名等相关信息。

图表数据：展示表演 presentation 约 31%，创意写作 creative writing 27%，讨论 discussion 25%，辩论 debate 17%。

题目里有两个词，一个都不能漏。

“描述”和“评价”是两个动作，不是一个。只描述不评价，要点直接丢一半——这一条我见过太多学生踩。

还有一个很多人忽略的：题干说“陈述你的选择并说明理由”。所以文章里必须出现一个“我”，不能全是转述调查结果。

第一步：描述。写数据，但不能照抄数字。

照抄数字是这类作文最常见的失分点。四个数据摊在那儿，读者看到的是一张表，不是一篇文章。

要做的动作是“转述”——把数字变成句子。

这几句可以直接抄：

关于“三分之一”：about one third of the students say ... is their favorite

关于“四分之一”：a quarter / 25% of the students

关于“占比”：taking up ...%

关于“数量几乎相同”：the number of students who choose A and B is almost the same

关于“只有”：Only 17% of the students consider ...

最后那句 Only 17% 后面一定要跟原因。as they think it is challenging ——用 as 引导原因，比 because 更书面，这是加分点。

第二步：评价。这一步大部分人漏掉了。

评价就是“你觉得这个结果说明什么”。哪怕只写一句，也比不写强。

可以用的角度：

从“多数人”看：Most of the students prefer ...

从“差距”看：The number of students who ... is almost the same, while ...

从“原因”看：..., as they think it is challenging

从“倾向”看：It is obvious that ... is the most popular

第三步：表态 + 理由。这一步是拿高分的地方。

表态句抄这句：

As far as I am concerned, ... is the most useful.

理由用两边论证，结构最稳：

On the one hand, ... On the other hand, ...

收尾给建议：

we had better make full use of them to make English learning more interesting and colorful

had better 是建议里最自然的说法，比 we should 温和一点。

三步走完，长这样。

There are many practical learning activities in English class. Recently, our school club has made a survey on students' favorite English class activities. Here are the results.

Of the four activities mentioned, about one third of the students say presentation is their favorite. The number of students who choose discussion and creative writing is almost the same, taking up 25% and 27% each. Only 17% of the students consider debate their favorite as they think it is challenging.

As far as I am concerned, presentation is the most useful. On the one hand, I am able to learn a lot while preparing for it. On the other hand, it helps to improve my English speaking ability as well as communication skills.

English class activities are important, so we had better make full use of them to make English learning more interesting and colorful.

三档范文对照，看差在哪。

降档版只描述不评价：There are many activities in English class. Many students like presentation. Some students like discussion and writing. Few students like debate.

——这段的问题是：题目两个要点只写了一个，而且通篇四句一样长，没有“总—分—对比”的层次。

再降一档：There are many practical learning activities in English class. Our school made a survey. The results are as follows. About one third of the students like presentation best.

——这段数据有了，但四个数据用同一种说法（... like ...），重复四次。改法是换成 consider their favorite / is almost the same / taking up ... 三种说法轮换。

今天晚上能做的三件事。

第一，把上面“能抄的话”那六句抄在一个本子上。明天早读念三遍。这是这类作文的全部弹药。

第二，把三档范文抄一遍，只抄英文不抄中文。抄完盖住满分版，只看降档版，问自己：我能说出它少了哪一步吗？

第三，找出你上次月考写的那篇，如果图表题（或者有数据的题），标一遍有没有“评价”。没有的话，下次补上。

图表类不是靠模板，是靠三步。这三步练熟了，25 分能拿 18 分以上。

你家孩子最近在练什么题？留言告诉我，我挑几个回。

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