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【冲刺2024高考】高中英语应用文写作
（创新话题命题类）新题速递08
审题+框架搭建+下水文+话题表达总结+图表类应用文补充练习
2024年4月广东省深圳二模英语应用文
创新点：图表类、调查结果、建议庆祝方式
假定你是李华，你班在校英语戏剧节中获得一等奖，外教James打算为此庆
祝，并委托你调查同学们喜欢的方式。请你根据调查结果，给外教写一封邮
件，内容包括：
1.表达感谢;
2.提出个人建议；
3.说明理由。
注意：
1. 词数 80左右;
2. 请在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Dear James,
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Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
新颖之处：
1. 情景交融：命题将情景设置为实际的学校活动，这使得学生能够更好地融入
情境，激发他们的写作热情。
2. 调查数据的引入：通过提供一个具体的调查结果图表，要求学生在写作中引
用数据，这不仅考查了学生对数据的理解和分析能力，也提高了写作的逻辑性
和说服力。
3. 建议与理由结合：学生不仅要提出个人建议，还要说明理由，这要求学生在
写作中展现批判性思维和论证能力。
4. 多选项的考虑：命题提供了三种不同的庆祝方式，要求学生在考虑大多数人
意见的同时，也要展示个人判断和偏好，这种多维度的思考对写作提出了更高
的要求。
5. 互动性增强：命题模拟了一个真实的交流场景，即学生与外教之间的沟通，
这种互动性的写作任务更贴近实际生活。
6. 语言的多样性：命题要求学生使用多样的语言表达形式，包括感谢、建议、
理由说明等，这考查了学生对不同语言功能的掌握。
第一部分 审题
1. 文体：告知信+建议信（图表类）
2. 话题：校英语戏剧节、庆祝活动
3. 对象：外教James
4. 人称：第一、二人称为主
5. 时态：一般现在时为主
第二部分 框架搭建
首段 感谢+写信目的
1. Context: 感谢James的指导，并组织庆祝活动。
2. 写信目的：反馈调查结果 + 提供个人建议
寒暄 I hope this email finds you well.写信目的：表达感谢
I am writing to convey our sincere gratitude for your kind offer /your thoughtful
plan to celebrate our class's recent victory at the English Drama Festival.
主体段
1. 调查结果汇报
2. 个人建议及理由
总起句 ：说明调查结果 – 88%的学生赞同outing at weekends，59%的学生赞
成watching English movies，最后32%的学生赞同sharing food and drinks.
提出建议+说明理由
根据投票情况，建议组织周末外出活动，不仅能满足绝大部分同学们的心愿，
还能通过户外活动帮助同学们缓解学习压力/亲近大自然/增进友谊等…
简单告知结果
调查结果显示，绝大多数人(88%)更倾向于周末出游，其次是观看英语电影
(59%)，以及分享食物和饮料（32%）。
The survey results show an overwhelming preference for a weekend outing, with
88% of the votes, followed by watching English movies at 59%, and sharing food and
drinks at 32%.
提出个人建议（有具体活动细节更好）
【无细节】Based on the feedback, I'd like to propose an outing during the weekend
as our collective celebration
【有细节】Based on the feedback, I propose we celebrate collectively with a
weekend retreat to a nearby scenic spot, where the majority can enjoy outdoor
activities like hiking, team games, and a picnic.
说明理由（活动的意义/好处：无非就是放松或者增进感情）
在我看来，一次出游不仅能为我们提供一个应得的休息机会来恢复精力，
还能在轻松愉快的氛围中促进我们之间更深层次的联系，加强我们的纽带。
From my perspective, an outing will not only offer us a well-deserved break to
recharge but also serves to foster deeper connections and strengthen our bonds within
an atmosphere of relaxation and pleasure.结尾段
再次表达感谢，期待我们的庆祝活动
1. 期待庆祝活动
2. 如需帮忙，随时联系。
Thank you once again for your consideration and for making this celebration possible.
我们对于以这样有意义的方式庆祝我们的成就感到兴奋。
We are excited about the prospect of commemorating our achievement in such a
meaningful way.
第三部分 下水文&范文
下水文
Dear James,
I hope this letter finds you well. Representing our class, I would like to extend my
sincere gratitude for your encouragement, without which we would not have ranked
first in the Drama Competition.
With regard to celebration activities, outing at weekends is among the top
recommendations. Considering the balmy weather and soothing air in April, it is no
wonder that 88% of our participants expressed their preference for nature. Watching
English movies is another nice alternative, as about half of our students would like to
immerse themselves in a virtual fancy world. Roughly one third of our respondents
prefer to share food and drinks. Although enjoying cuisines is part of human nature, I
strongly suggest choosing the nutrient level of the snacks.
I would be more than delighted if you find these suggestions feasible. Looking
forward to your earliest reply.
Yours,
Li Hua
参考范文1
Dear James,
I hope this email finds you well. We are grateful for your enthusiasm incelebrating our class winning the first prize at the English Drama Festival. Your
support means a lot to us!
Based on the survey I conducted, 88% of us are enthusiastic about a weekend
outing, while 59% favor an English movie night, followed by 32% who prefer a food
party. My preference is in line with the majority, so I suggest a hiking trip along the
nearby greenway, which has lively plants and stunning views. Such an outing is
perfect for us to take a break from study routines, strengthen friendship and make our
success more memorable.
Thanks again for your thoughtful gesture. Looking forward to our exciting
celebration!(122w)
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
参考范文2
Dear James,
Thank you for trusting me to survey our classmates’ preferred activities for
celebrating our success at the English Drama Festival. Here are the results and my
personal opinion.
From the survey, outings on weekends and English movie nights are favored by
88% and 59% of us respectively, with 32% keen on sharing food and drinks. To meet
the varied interests, I would recommend we organize an outdoor gathering at the city
park, where we can bring along various foods and drinks to share. I believe this plan
would ideally satisfy those seeking an adventure and those who wish to relax and
enjoy good company.
Thank you once again for your support and for considering my suggestion!
(116w)
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
第四部分 话题表达总结图表描述：
1. 收集了一些关于…的见解：gather some insights into …/that help us …
2. 根据我所进行的调查：according to the survey I conducted, …
3. 支持/选择了…：favor sth. as sth.
(1) Based on the survey I conducted, 88% of us are enthusiastic about a weekend
outing, while 59% favour an English movie night, followed by 32% who prefer a food
party.
(2) The ‘outing at weekends’ was the top choice for celebration, favored by a
significant majority with 88% of the votes. Sharing food and drinks came in second,
preferred by 32%, while watching English movies attracted the least interest at 59%.
(3) The survey reveals that 88% of students are keen on celebrating with a weekend
outing. Sharing food and drinks also found favor, accounting for 59%. On the other
hand, watching English movies fell behind, with only 32% of the votes.
(4) From the survey, outings on weekends and English movie nights are favored by
88% and 59% of us respectively, with 32% keen on sharing food and drinks.
总结、建议及理由：
1. 考虑到这些偏好，我建议…：Given these preferences, I suggest that sb. should
do sth.
2. 为了满足不同的兴趣，我建议…：To meet the varied interest, I would
recommend …
(1) My suggestion is in line with the desire of many to engage in a more active and
outdoor activity, which would serve as a refreshing break from our academic routine.
Moreover, an outing allows us to relax and celebrate our success in a way that is both
healthy and inclusive, accommodating a variety of interests and preferences.
(2) I would opt for the "outing at weekends" as the celebration method due to its
overwhelming popularity and the opportunity it presents for fostering camaraderie and
creating lasting memories among students. Additionally, it offers a chance for
relaxation and personal interaction, which can be both refreshing and educational.
(3) My preference agrees with the majority, so I suggest a hiking trip along the
nearby greenway, which has lively plants and stunning views. Such an outing isperfect for us to take a break from study routines, strengthen friendship and make our
success more memorable.
表示感谢
(1) I am writing to express our heartfelt gratitude for your intention to celebrate our
class’s first prize win at the school’s English Drama Festival. It is a moment of pride
for all of us, and your support means a lot.
(2) Thank you for trusting me with the task of surveying our classmates’ preferred
activities to celebrate our success at the English Drama Festival. Here are the survey
findings along with my personal opinion.
(3) It’s my honor to extend our heartfelt thanks for your generous offer to celebrate
our success. Your support and enthusiasm are truly inspiring.
礼貌回扣
(1) I eagerly await your thoughts on this suggestion and look forward to celebrating
our victory together.
(2) Thanks again for your thoughtful gesture. Looking forward to our exciting
celebration!
(3) I’ll appreciate it if you can take my suggestion into account.
(4) I am confident that an outing will not only be a delightful experience but also a
meaningful way to celebrate our success. I look forward to hearing your thoughts on
this proposal.
第五部分 图表类应用文补充练习
（2022·全国乙卷）学校英文报正在开展以 Learning English Beyond the
Classroom为题的讨论。请使用图表中的调查结果写一篇短文投稿，内容包括：
1. 学习活动状况描述；
2. 简单评论；
3. 你的建议。
注意：
1. 词数100左右；
2. 短文的题目和首句已为你写好。【答案】Learning English Beyond the Classroom
Nowadays, with the growing popularity of smartphones and computers, an
increasing number of students are choosing to learn English beyond the classroom in
various ways.
It can easily be seen that the percentage of students who choose listening to
English songs and watching English movies is respectively 65% and 50%. However,
those choosing reading English books and visiting English learning websites only
account for 18% and 12%.
As far as I’m concerned, it is a disturbing trend. For students, what benefits most
to their study is reading English books. Because of their lack of self-discipline,
they’re more easily addicted to chatting online or playing games. It’s urgent for
students themselves to improve their self-discipline, and it’s also urgent for parents
and teachers to strengthen the guidance.
【导语】本篇书面表达属于议论文，要求考生使用图表中的调查结果写一篇短
文投稿，对学生的英语学习活动状况进行描述并作简单的评论，提出建议。
【详解】1.词汇积累
缺乏：lack→shortage
加强：strengthen→enhance
各种各样的：various→all kinds of
就我而言：as far as I’m concerned→from my perspective
2.句式拓展
简单句变复合句
原句：However, those choosing reading English books and visiting English learning
websites only account for 18% and 12%.
拓展句：However, those who choose reading English books and visiting English
learning websites only account for 18% and 12%.
【点睛】【高分句型 1】It can easily be seen that the percentage of students who
choose listening to English songs and watching English movies is respectively 65%
and 50%. (运用了it作形式主语，that引导主语从句以及who引导的定语从句)
【高分句型 2】For students, what benefits most to their study is reading Englishbooks.(运用了what引导的主语从句)
