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【冲刺2024高考】高中英语读后续写
（创新话题命题类）新题速递05
原文解读+情节构建+范文及解读+语言赏析总结
2024年4月广州二模高三英语读后续写
创新点：个人成长类、社恐女孩蜕变、艺术夏令营
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的
短文。
This Friday brought a mix of emotions— both excitement and disappointment—
all because of a flyer from school.
When I got home, Mum saw the flyer in my hand and asked, “What's this?”
“A flyer for a five-day art camp,” I explained. “But Emily can't go.”
“Would you like to attend?”Mum asked. “You've always loved art.” Her words
reminded me of what Emily had said earlier: “Tessa, you're the real artist. My brother
thought the roses I painted were rocket ships.”I sighed. Mum patted my back. She
knew I had a hard time jumping into something with no familiar faces around.
“Maybe next year.”
“Maybe,” I echoed. Then I told Mum I wanted to go outside to draw the Westons'
pine tree( 松树 ). She nodded with an encouraging smile.
As I walked into the bright sunshine, I couldn't help but think about the art camp.
I wished I felt a little bit braver. Emily could make friends with a whole bus of kids in
ten minutes, but my stomach felt like a little boat tossed in a heavy storm when I was
surrounded by strangers... By the time I started drawing, I had made up my mind to
forget about the art camp.
I began by drawing the pine tree's strong and straight trunk, and then added the
beautiful branches, making sure the upper ones lifted gently towards the sun. Lost inmy work, I jumped when I heard Mr. Weston speak up, “You’ve done a great job
showing the strength of that tree on paper.”
“Thanks,” I smiled, glancing up.
As I drew the needles to the branches, Mr. Weston told me something I never
knew about pines: If you plant the root ball too deep, the tree dies. Their roots grow
out, not down—to get enough water and grow tall.
“You have a good eye, Tessa.”With these words, Mr. Weston nodded goodbye.
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请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
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第一部分 原文解读
1. 主要人物:
I(Tessa) 热爱艺术但不善于社交，害怕处于陌生人身边
Emily 我的朋友，善于社交
Mum 支持鼓励我Mr. Weston我的邻历，对我的画作给予了表扬
2. 原文情节:
我想要参加一个美术夏令营，但是我的朋友Emily不去，而我不擅长于处在
没有熟悉的人的环境，内心失望。妈妈安慰我后，我去外面画 Weston家的松
树。在外面我想起了美术夏令营，我希望自己能再勇敢一点。Emily 善于社
交，而我害怕处于陌生人身边。我开始画画，下定决心忘掉艺术夏令营。邻居
Mr.Weston 到来，表扬了我，说我表现出了树的力量。我很开心。然后
Mr.Weston告诉了我一些我从来不知道的关于松树的知识并再次表扬了我，然后
点头道别。
3. 主题
原文的主题是关于主人公面对挑战和恐惧，通过艺术和他人的鼓励找到自信的
故事。
4. 情感
原文中主人公的情感经历了从失望、犹豫到接受鼓励、自我反思的过程。
第二部分 情节构建
第一段: His words made me pause and think.
由第一段首句内容“他的话让我思考。”可知第一段中肯定需要写到“我思考
的内容是什么，思考之后悟出了什么道理”，再根据正能量原则和第二段首句
内容“第二周星期一，我报名参加美术夏令营”可知，在第一段中“我”通过
思考，决定了要去参加美术夏令营。
①我一边看着我的画，一边思考Mr. Weston所说的话。(心理，神态)
②看到画里的树向上的树干和向外生长的根，我悟了。(动作)
③我原来的失望难过消失了，内心充满了勇气。(心理)
④这时，我下定决心要自己去参加夏令营。(心理，神态)
⑤我回到家告诉妈妈我的决定，妈妈骄傲，欣慰。(动作，神态)
第二段: The next Monday, I signed up for the camp.
表明主人公最终决定参加夏令营。这里可以描写主人公参加夏令营的过
程，包括与其他孩子的互动、艺术创作的挑战以及个人成长的经历。①到了夏令营开始的这一天，身边都是陌生的面孔。(动作，心理)
②我鼓起勇气与大家交流。(心理，动作）
③我为自己改变感到开心。(心理)
④这5天的美术夏令营我学到了很多绘画的技术，而且我还克服了自己的恐
惧，和大家和谐相处。
⑤主题升华。(应该提到pine tree)
第三部分 范文
参考范文1
His words made me pause and think. As I looked at the drawing of the pine tree, I
realized that I had captured its strength and beauty just as Mr. Weston had described.
It made me wonder if I could do the same with my art at the camp. I thought about
how I had always admired Emily's ability to make friends easily, but maybe it was
time for me to step out of my comfort zone and try something new. I decided to take
a chance and sign up for the art camp, even if it meant facing my fears of being
around strangers.
The next Monday, I signed up for the camp. I was nervous but excited at the same
time. As I walked into the camp on the first day, I was greeted by a group of friendly
faces who were eager to learn and create. Over the next five days, I was amazed at
how much I learned and how much my art improved. I also made some new friends
who shared my passion for art. It was a challenging but rewarding experience, and I
was grateful for Mr. Weston's encouragement that had inspired me to take this step.By
the end of the camp, I felt more confident in my abilities and excited to continue
pursuing my love for art.
参考范文2
His words made me pause and think. As I reflected on Mr. Weston's words, the
analogy of pine roots growing out, not down, struck a chord with me deeply. Perhaps I
could learn something valuable from stepping beyond my comfort zone, just like the
tree's need to spread its roots to grow tall. Surprisingly, even in the absence of my best
friend, the idea of the art camp now seemed so appealing. Fueled by this newfoundunderstanding, I eagerly shared my insights with Mum, who listened attentively as I
poured out my thoughts. With her approving nod and encouraging gaze, I felt a surge
of determination and confidence to embrace the camp as an opportunity for artistic
exploration and growth.
The next Monday, I signed up for the camp. As I handed in my registration form,
the initial disappointment I felt gradually gave way to a thrilling sense of anticipation,
fueled by the countless possibilities awaiting me. Throughout the camp, I immersed
myself in interactive workshops, eagerly absorbing new techniques and connecting
with fellow art enthusiasts like me. It turned out that the strangers I was initially afraid
of were already my friends. From this experience, I realized that embracing
unfamiliarity and conquering fears can pave the way for remarkable personal growth
and opportunities. The towering pine tree in the Westons’ yard serves as a constant
reminder that the strongest growth often springs from venturing into the unknown
world.
第四部分 语言赏析总结
主题升华
结尾主旨升华：我的成长和蜕变
1.写法一:场景复现，对比突出个人改变
After the camp ended, I returned to Mr. Weston's yard again, to visit my old
friend - the pine tree. There it stood, tall and straight, just as strong and green as ever.
But I had changed, from a timid person to a more confident and braver one. Once
again, I felt a deep resonance with the pine tree - growing out, not down, to flourish
beautifully.
2.写法二:如果不是，排比写个人蜕变
Had it not been for this experience, I would never have known that I was capable
of pursuing my artistic dream independently, integrating myself into an unfamiliar
group, and forging meaningful connections with strangers. It was nothing short of a
miracle! And of course, it was Mr. Weston's guidance, Emily's and Mom's
encouragement, and more significantly, the pine tree's illumination that brought
this miracle in my life.3.写法三，拉长时间线，回忆当初vs现在的蜕变
Many years later, my thoughts still frequently drift back to the afternoon
when I sat in Mr.Weston's yard, thoroughly observing his strong pine tree.
Now, as a professional painter, I find myself fluent and confident when
presenting my artwork and introducing myself, effortlessly forming connections
wherever I go. And it all traces back to that life-changing experience, where I
learned the power of growing out to embrace the world, not down, from the
pine tree.
