新教材人教版 初中英语九上 Unit 4 Our Memory|四阶 20 分钟写作训练

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九上 Unit 4 · Our Memory｜四阶 20 分钟写作训练

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💡 中考题型：记叙文（一段难忘的记忆）｜目标：80–100 词

💡 ⏱ 20 分钟 = 词 3′ + 短语 4′ + 句子 6′ + 成篇 7′

💡 语法抓手：定语从句 who / that / which

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⭐  📝 题目（中考真题式）⭐

以 An Unforgettable Memory 为题写一篇短文，内容包括：

① 这段记忆是什么（时间、地点、人物）；② 当时发生了什么；③ 为什么它让你难忘。

要求：80 词左右。

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⭐阶梯 1 · 词（3′）  ⭐  

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⭐阶梯 2 · 短语（4′）+ 要点转化  ⭐  

✏️ 要点转化：

① 何时何地何人 → ＿＿＿　② 发生了什么 → ＿＿＿　③ 为何难忘 → ＿＿＿

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⭐阶梯 3 · 句子（6′）  ⭐  

⚠️ 定语从句：

人用 who/that，物用 which/that；从句缺成分才用关系词（I still remember the day when we met）。

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⭐阶梯 4 · 成篇（7′）  ⭐  

- 开头：The memory that I will never forget is ＿＿＿. It happened ＿＿＿.

- 中间：经过—— At first, ＿★★＿. The person who ＿★★＿. At that moment, ＿＿＿.

- 结尾：From then on, ＿＿＿. It still reminds me of ＿＿＿.

✍️ 限时 7 分钟写完，不许停笔、不许擦改。

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✏️ ✅ 范文对照（写完再看）

💡 The memory that I will never forget is the day when our class won the singing competition. It happened last spring in the school hall. At first, my hands were shaking so hard that I could hardly hold the microphone. Our music teacher, who had a bad cold that day, still stood in front of us and smiled. It was the smile that she gave me at that moment which made me calm again. We sang together and finally won the first prize. From then on, I have realized that encouragement is the most valuable gift a teacher can give. This memory still reminds me that I am never alone.

✏️ ✅ 8 项自查（1 分钟）

☐ 3 个要点齐全　☐ 关系词 who/which/that 用对　☐ 从句结构完整　☐ ≥2 个定语从句☐ 过去时叙事一致　☐ 80–100 词　☐ 结尾有"为何难忘"☐ 卷面干净

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⭐  📌 参考答案（写完后再对照）⭐

✏️ 阶梯 1 · 词 ——「我的用法」参考

✏️ 阶梯 3 · 句子 ——「我的句子」参考

1. The day that I will never forget is the one when our class won the singing competition.

2. My teacher, who had a cold that day, still came to help us practise.

3. My hands were shaking so hard that I could hardly hold the microphone.

4. The smile which she gave me at that moment made me calm again.

5. From then on, I have realized that kindness is the thing I treasure most.

💡 💡 对照只看三件事：要点齐不齐、关系词用对没有、参考句比我多了哪个细节。不必写得一模一样。

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⭐  🌟 附加部分· 背诵与自测  ⭐  

✏️ 一、范文英中对照（背诵版）

💡 The memory that I will never forget is the day when our class won the singing competition. 我永远不会忘记的记忆，是我们班赢了歌唱比赛的那一天。

💡 It happened last spring in the school hall. 它发生在去年春天，地点是学校礼堂。

💡 At first, my hands were shaking so hard that I could hardly hold the microphone. 起初我的手抖得厉害，几乎拿不住话筒。

💡 Our music teacher, who had a bad cold that day, still stood in front of us and smiled. 那天我们音乐老师重感冒在身，却依然站在我们面前微笑。

💡 It was the smile that she gave me at that moment which made me calm again. 正是她那一刻给我的微笑让我重新平静下来。

💡 We sang together and finally won the first prize. 我们一起唱完，最后得了一等奖。

💡 From then on, I have realized that encouragement is the most valuable gift a teacher can give. 从那以后我懂得：鼓励是老师能给出的最珍贵的礼物。

💡 This memory still reminds me that I am never alone. 这段记忆仍然提醒我：我从来都不是孤单一人。

✏️ ✨ 重点短语 + 考点

1. the memory (that) I will never forget我永远不会忘记的记忆　→that 引导定语从句，作 forget 宾语时可省

💡 例：The memory that I will never forget is our class singing competition. 我永远不会忘记的记忆是我们班的歌唱比赛。

2. the day when ...……的那一天　→when 引导定语从句，先行词是时间名词；when 在从句中作时间状语

💡 例：I still remember the day when our class won the first prize. 我仍记得我们班得一等奖的那一天。

3. It happened on/in ...它发生在……→　具体某天用 on，年份/月份用 in

💡 例：It happened last spring in the school hall. 它发生在去年春天，学校礼堂里。

4. so + adj./adv. + that + 从句如此……以至于……→　结果状语从句；so 后是形容词/副词，such 后接名词

💡 例：My hands were shaking so hard that I could hardly hold the microphone. 我的手抖得厉害，几乎拿不住话筒。

5. who 引导非限定性定语从句……的（人）　→　有逗号隔开，非限定性从句不用 that

💡 例：Our music teacher, who had a bad cold that day, still smiled at us. 那天重感冒的音乐老师，依然对我们微笑。

6. It was ... that ...正是……（强调句）　→　本句强调 the smile；只强调一个成分，不能强调谓语

💡 例：It was the smile that she gave me which made me calm again. 正是她给我的那个微笑让我重新平静下来。

7. remind sb. of sth. / remind sb. that ...使某人想起……→remind 不是 remember，两词别混

💡 例：This photo reminds me of our first performance. 这张照片让我想起我们的第一次演出。

8. from then on从那以后　→　常配现在完成时：From then on, I have ...

💡 例：From then on, I have never stopped singing. 从那以后，我再也没停止唱歌。

9. be deeply moved被深深打动　→moved 前可用 deeply / deeply 修饰过去分词

💡 例：I was deeply moved by her kind words. 她温暖的话语让我深受感动。

10. win the first prize得一等奖　→first prize 前不加 the；win 的过去 won

💡 例：We sang together and finally won the first prize. 我们一起唱，最后得了一等奖。

11. the most valuable gift (that) ...最珍贵的礼物　→　最高级 + that 定语从句

💡 例：Encouragement is the most valuable gift that a teacher can give. 鼓励是老师能给出的最珍贵的礼物。

12. at that moment在那一刻　→at that time 亦可

💡 例：At that moment, I felt calm again. 在那一刻，我重新平静下来。

13. I still remember doing sth.我记得做过某事　→remember doing = 记得已做；remember to do = 记得去做（还没做）

💡 例：I still remember singing with my classmates on that day. 我仍记得那天和同学们一起唱歌。

14. encouragement is the most valuable thing鼓励是最珍贵的（东西）　→encourage (v.) → encouragement (n.) → encouraging (adj.)

💡 例：I have realized that encouragement is the most valuable thing in my memory. 我懂得鼓励是我记忆中最珍贵的东西。

✏️ 二、句子英汉对照（阶梯 3 升级句）

1. The day that I will never forget is the one when our class won the singing competition.　我永远不会忘记的那天，是我们班赢了歌唱比赛的那天。

2. My teacher, who had a cold that day, still came to help us practise.　那天带病在身的我老师，还是来帮我们练习。

3. My hands were shaking so hard that I could hardly hold the microphone.　我的手抖得厉害，几乎拿不住话筒。

4. The smile which she gave me at that moment made me calm again.　她那一刻给我的微笑让我重新平静。

5. From then on, I have realized that kindness is the thing I treasure most.　从那以后我懂得：善良是我最珍视的东西。

✏️ 三、英汉互译练习

Task1 · 英译汉（1 分钟，写出中文即可）

1. The day that I will never forget is the one when our class won the singing competition.

2. My teacher, who had a cold that day, still came to help us practise.

3. My hands were shaking so hard that I could hardly hold the microphone.

4. The smile which she gave me at that moment made me calm again.

5. From then on, I have realized that kindness is the thing I treasure most.

Task2 · 汉译英（1 分钟，对照上面 Task1 回写英文）

1. 我永远不会忘记的那天，是我们班赢了歌唱比赛的那天。

2. 那天带病在身的我老师，还是来帮我们练习。

3. 我的手抖得厉害，几乎拿不住话筒。

4. 她那一刻给我的微笑让我重新平静。

5. 从那以后我懂得：善良是我最珍视的东西。

Task3 · 单句语法填空（答案在 5 个句子里找依据）

💡 提示：括号内为词原形，根据语境填适当形式；注意时态、语态、非谓语、固定搭配。

1. The memory that I will never forget ____________ (be) the day when our class won the singing competition.

2. Our music teacher, who ____________ (have) a bad cold that day, still stood in front of us.

3. My hands were shaking so hard that I could hardly ____________ (hold　提示：could 后接动词原形) the microphone.

4. From then on, I ____________ (realize) that encouragement is the most valuable thing.

5. This memory still ____________ (remind) me that I am never alone.

Task4 · 选词填空（答案在范文里）

（memory, spring, hard, who, moment, prize, From, realized, reminds, alone）

The 1.____________ that I will never forget is the day when our class won the singing competition. It happened last 2.____________ in the school hall. At first, my hands were shaking so 3.____________ that I could hardly hold the microphone. Our music teacher, 4.____________ had a bad cold that day, still stood in front of us and smiled. It was the smile that she gave me at that 5.____________ which made me calm again. We sang together and finally won the first 6.____________. 7.____________ then on, I have 8.____________ that encouragement is the most valuable gift a teacher can give. This memory still 9.____________ me that I am never 10.____________.

✏️ 📎 参考答案（做完再看）

- Task3：1. is2. had3. hold4. have realized5. reminds

- Task4：1. memory2. spring3. hard4. who5. moment6. prize7. From8. realized9. reminds10. alone

💡 💡 对照只看三件事：要点齐不齐、这句的语法点用对没有、参考句比我多了哪个细节。不必写得一模一样。

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