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体态与外貌的描写方法
肖像描写中的外貌描写
肖像描写是对人物的容貌、衣着、体型、姿态、神情等进行描写，以表现人物的体貌特征。对人物进
行恰到好处的肖像描写能够生动地反映出人物的角色身份、社会地位、性格特点、情感变化等，将人物栩
栩如生地呈现在读者面前，让读者在阅读的过程中如见其人。肖像描写在形态上进一步划分，分为静态描
写和动态描写，即外貌描写和神态描写。静态描写是指对人物外在体貌静止状态下的描写，人物的外貌描
写是静态描写的基本内容。
(一)描写视角
以描写视角为标准对肖像描写进行划分，可将人物肖像描写概括为两类:整体描写和局部描写。两种描
写分别承担不同作用，共同构成文学形象。整体描写是对人物肖像进行完全地刻画，从整体出发，通常采
用多种描写角度，多面、系统、有层次地进行描绘和刻画，将人物的外在形态完整、清晰地展现出来。通
过对人物的整体描写，从多个角度对人物进行完整构思，能综合把握人物形象，使读者对描写对象有整体、
完整的印象。
局部描写是指有重点的选择人物肖像的中某一部分，如容貌、衣着、姿态等进行刻画，在情节发展的
关键之处加以重点描绘，达到“以点带面”“以局部反映整体”的效果。相较于整体描写而言，局部描写
的视角更加聚焦、集中，通过最能表现人物性格特点的局部反映人物的精神面貌。人物肖像的局部描写为
理解人物形象、性格特点提供了有效途径，同时也要探究叙述者对于局部特点抓取的缘由，挖掘更深层次
的人物情感。
(二)描写技法
根据描写对象的轻重、详略以及用语的多少，人物的外貌描写又可分为白描式描写、漫画式描写和
详细描写三类。
所谓白描式描写，是指用简练而朴素的文字，不加渲染烘托、铺张辞藻，讲求简洁传神地描画出鲜
明生动的形象。与此同时，白描也往往会带来隐喻的效果，不过多着墨，但给读者留下深刻印象，寥寥几
笔对角色的勾画考验作者对人物形象传神写照的把握。
漫画式描写是对人物肖像上的特点加以放大，以极尽夸张、变形的形式来表现人物的形象，以此凸
显人物特点，相比较白描和细描，漫画式描写更凸显人物形象的荒诞感，通过虚与实的交融对比，使人物
形象塑造地强烈、典型。
详细描写是指对人物进行细致入微的刻画，把读者对人物的感受限制在特定时空内，由作者引导读者对人物进行感知，使人物形象清晰、完整的呈现在读者面前。
不同的描写技法对人物形象的刻画能达到不同效果，所抓取的人物外形上的特点和描写角度也有所区
别，教师在教学中要引导学生注意体会不同描写技法的艺术效果。
人物体态外貌描写技巧
描写相貌体型（Physical Appearance）常用词汇
第一部分 描述体形的形容词
1.描述身材：tall,small,short,of medium height…
2.描述体型：fat,thin, slim, big,small,of medium build, strong等.
3.描述相貌：beautiful, pretty, good-looking, charming, sweet, handsome, funny, ugly, peculiar, rough, ill-looking
4.体格（build）：fat 肥胖的; thin 瘦的; slim 苗条的; overweight 超重; slight 瘦小的; well-built身材魁梧
5.身高 （height）
medium height 中等身材;
average height 一般身材;
below average 低于平均身高;
tall 高的; short 矮的; tallish 有些高的;
middle-sized 身高中等的;
of medium height 中等身材;
1.78 meters 身高1.78米。
第二部分 五官
在用英语描写面部容貌的时候，可以从脸型、头发、五官入手。
1.脸型（face）： round 圆的; thin 瘦的; long 长的; square 方的。
例： She eats too much these days , so her face is getting round . 她最近吃得太多了，所以她的脸变圆了。
2.头发（hair）
(1) 发型（hair style）: straight 直的; curly 卷发的; pigtails 辫子; crew cut 平头; bald秃头的。
例：Her hair is brown and curly. 她有着一头棕色而卷曲的头发。
(2) 发色(hair color):
jet-black 乌黑的; fair 金色的; blonde 淡黄色的; golden 金黄色的; dyed 染色的; brunette 浅黑色的; mousey
灰褐色的; chestnut 栗色的.
3.五官
(1) 眼睛（eye）：deep-set 深陷的; sunken 凹陷的; bulging/protruding 凸出的; eyelashes 睫毛; eyebrows 眉毛.
例： His eyes are deep-set because he has worked till midnight for a long time. 他的眼睛深陷，因为他这段时
间经常工作到深夜。
He had the most beautiful blue eyes I had ever seen. 她有一双我从未见过的漂亮蓝眼睛。
(2) 鼻子(nose)：long 长的; straight 挺直的; big 大的; small 小的; flat 扁平的; hooked 钩状的.
例：He was born a hooked nose. 他天生是鹰钩鼻。
His nose is very big, so he doesn't like it. 他的鼻子很大，所以他不喜欢它。
(3) 嘴部(mouth)：tooth 牙齿; even 整齐的; uneven 不整齐的; chin下巴。
例：When he laughs, we see his even teeth. 当他笑的时候，我们看见他有一口整齐的牙齿。
She has a double chin. 她有双下巴。
第三部分 服饰神情
1.服饰（dress）：smart 潇洒的; scruffy 邋遢的； well-dressed 衣着华丽的; casual 随便的; conservative 不
显眼的; elegant 优雅的; fashionable 时髦的; suave 文雅的; untidy 不整洁的.
例： He looks casual just wearing a tweed suit. 他穿了一件花格子衬衫，看上去很随便。
2.笑容（smile）： bright 欢快的; broad 无所顾忌的; charming 可爱的; cunning 狡猾的; faint 不明显的;
happy 高兴的; pleasant令人愉快的; sad 伤心的; sweet 甜蜜的; pleased 满意的; grinning 露齿而笑的;
smirking 傻笑的; friendly 友好的; warm 温暖的，热情的; cold 不热情的.
例： Because of his high scores, he smiles brightly. 因为他得了高分，所以笑得很灿烂。
A friendly smile will help you to win others heart. 友好的笑容能帮助你赢得别人的心。
She is charming when she smiles. 她笑起来的时候很可爱。
第四部分 描写男性
1.He was wonderfully good-looking,with his brown hair,his clear-cut face,and his grey eyes.he was popular with
the men as he was with women.
他长得很帅，棕色的眼睛和头发，轮廓清晰的脸庞，灰色的眼睛，男人和女人都喜欢他。
2.He was a strange,rough fellow,with a freckled face and red,rough bear
他长得又怪又粗糙，一脸的雀斑，一个蓬乱的红胡子。
3.英语描写乞丐
He was standing on a raised platform in a corner of the room.he was a wizened old man with wrinkled face and a
sad expression.over his shoulder was thrown a rough brown coat,all torn and full of holes,his thick boots were old
and patched ;and with one hand he leaned on a rough stick,while with the other he held out his battered hat for
money.他站在屋子角落一个支高的台子上，他是一个老人，满脸的皱纹和悲伤的表情。他的肩膀上搭着一件粗糙，
破烂的棕色外套，他的厚靴子上也打了补丁，他用一个手倚着一根拐杖，另一只手拿他的破帽子讨钱。
4.He was the man with the gun.he was a heavy man,bald,with scarred and brutal face. he had been in a hundred
fights,and they'd left their marks on him.
他是拿枪的人。他是一个很壮的男人，秃顶的，脸上有伤疤，一副凶相。他和人打过上百次，身上到处是
伤。
5.They were a pack of bearded ,ragged,half-naked animals,and i probably looked as bad as they.
他们是一群胡子拉查，衣衫褴褛的野兽，而我的样子恐怕和他们差不多。
6.Robert is 21 years old. He is about 5 feet ,9 inches tall . His face is long and narrow . His eyes are green. His hair
is light brown. He doesn't look very Italian. He smiles a little and usually has a friendly look on his face . He isn't
fat and he isn't thin. His build is average.
罗伯特21岁了，他身高大约5.9英尺，脸瘦瘦长长的，绿眼睛。浅棕色的头发，看起来不大像意大利人。
他总是面带微笑，非常友好。他不胖也不瘦，中等身材。
7.He used to be middle-sized, but when he is getting old , he is becoming short.
他原本是中等身材，但随着年龄的增长，他变矮了。
8.His eyes are deep-set because he has worked till midnight for a long time.
他的眼睛深陷，因为他这段时间经常工作到深夜。
9.He was born a hooked nose. 他天生是鹰钩鼻。
10.His nose is very big, so he doesn';t like it. 他的鼻子很大，所以他不喜欢它。
11.When he laughs, we see his even teeth. 当他笑的时候，我们看见他有一口整齐的牙齿。
12.He looks casual just wearing a tweed suit. 他穿了一件花格子衬衫，看上去很随便。
13.Because of his high scores, he smiles brightly. 因为他得了高分，所以笑得很灿烂。
14.He was small at first , but he came on quickly. He was a beautiful child, with dark gold curly hair, and dark-blue
eyes which changed gradually to a clear grey. 最初他个子矮小瘦弱，但他长得很快。他是个漂亮的孩子，有
一头棕色的卷发，和一双深蓝浅灰相间的眼睛。
15.The middle-aged man already has double chins and receding hairline.
这个中年人已有了双下巴，头发也日渐稀少。
16.He looked even smaller than he really was because he wore dirty clothes.
他看上去比他本来年龄更小，因为他穿着脏衣服。
17.Harry had a thin face, black hair , and bright green eyes. 哈瑞很瘦，有一头黑色的头发和明亮的绿色眼睛。
18.He is a warm-hearted man, so we all like him. 他是一个热心的人，所以我们都很喜欢他。19.He is stupid and careless. 他既愚蠢又粗心。
20.Don't trust him, because he is dishonest. 不要相信他，因为他不老实。
21.He is very happy and sweet. 他又高兴又甜蜜。
22.They didn’t know what to do with themselves for joy. 他们高兴得不知道怎们办好。
23.He looks so sad. 他看起来很悲伤。
24.He easily loses his temper. 他很容易发脾气。
25.He beamed on his visitors. 他对着客人们微笑。
第五部分 描写女性
1.she was young,with a fair,calm face that showed a certain strength.
她是一个年轻人，满脸的恬静，表现出一种与众不同的力量
2. a girl with long straight hair 留着长长直发的女孩
3. curl 卷发 The girls had blond curls. 小姑娘长着金色卷发。
4. She is a slim girl, while her boyfriend is well-built. 她很苗条，她的男朋友很魁梧。
5. She is a little overweight, so she decided to lose weight. 她有一点超重，所以她打算减肥。
5. She eats too much these days , so her face is getting round .
她最近吃得太多了，所以她的脸变圆了。
6. Her hair is brown and curly. 她有着一头棕色而卷曲的头发。
7. She is a beautiful girl with fair hair. 她是一个金发美女。
8. He had the most beautiful blue eyes I had ever seen. 她有一双我从未见过的漂亮蓝眼睛。
9. She has a double chin. 她有双下巴。
10. She is charming when she smiles. 她笑起来的时候很可爱。
11. She has a very pleasant smile and she always has a twinkle in her eye.
她时常灿烂地微笑，闪烁着她的大眼睛。
She always dress very elegant and tidy. 她总是穿着优雅整洁。
Because of her fair skin and kindness, we all like her very much. 由于她皮肤白很善良，我们都很喜欢她。
12. The young woman was tall, with a figure of perfect elegance. 这个年轻的女人很高，体态优美。
13. When she smiled, she showed her white even teeth. 她微微一笑，露出了洁白整齐的牙齿。
14. The girl is very lovely and interesting. 这个女孩子非常可爱有趣。
15. She is a greedy woman. 她是一个贪婪的女人。
16. Her face brightened up. 她喜形于色。
17. There is always a smile of contentment on her face. 她脸上总是挂着心满意足的微笑。18. She belongs to those who are very difficult to satisfy. 她属于那种极难讨好的人。
19. She looked at me in amazement. 她惊奇的看着我。
20. Her appearance fairly took my breath away. 她的美貌令我神魂颠倒。
21. She was burning with anger. 她怒火中烧。
22. She was red with anger. 她因为发怒脸涨得通红。
23. She started to cry when she heard the sad news. 当她听到这个悲痛的消息时，她开始哭了。
体态外貌描写范文
1.女性外貌描写（1）
Alice is 20 years old. She is a little overweight. But she is tall and fair-skinned, so she looks healthy. Her hair
is jet-blacked and straight. She has a very pleasant smile and she always has a twinkle in her eye. When smiling,
Alice';s dimples will appear who receive them feel very special. When she works, she always put on her glasses.
She always dress very elegant and tidy. Because of her fair skin and kindness, we all like her very much.
译文：
艾丽丝20岁了，她有一点胖，但是由于她很高而且皮肤白皙，所以看上去很健康。她有一头乌黑的直发。
她时常灿烂地微笑，两只大眼睛闪闪发光。露出两个特别的酒窝。她工作的时候，总是戴上眼镜。她的穿
着优雅而整洁。由于她很善良，我们都很喜欢她。
2.女性外貌描写（2）
While her physical beauty was astounding, it was her invisible beauty that I shall always remember. She really
cared about other people and was an extremely talented listener. Her sense of humour could brighten you entire day
and her wise words were always exactly what you needed to hear. She was not only admired but also genuinely
respected by members of both sexes.
译文：
尽管她美得惊人，但我更对她的内在美记忆犹新。她总是很关心身边的人，并且擅长倾听。她的幽默
感总是可以使你整天都感到非常开心，而她智慧的话语更是能道破天机。无论男人或是女人，不仅羡慕她，
而且打心里尊重她。
3.描写母亲
I love my mother very much. Like many other Chinese women, my mother is diligent. She works in a primary
school. In order to teach well, she prepares her lectures very carefully and often works so late at night.
My mother is very kind and sincere. She gets along with her neighbors and colleagues. When they have
difficulties, she is always ready to lend them a helpful hand. Therefore she is loved and respected in ourneighborhood.
Mother often tells me to be honest and upright. She expects me to be useful to the people in the future. Up to
now, I still remember her saying: Do as much as you can and you will succeed.
译文：
我非常爱我的母亲。我的母亲跟其他中国妇女一样，很勤劳。她在一所小学工作。为了教好书，她备课
很仔细，常常工作到深夜。
我的母亲待人非常和蔼而且真诚。邻居和同事都与她相处得很好。当他们有困难的时候，母亲总是乐意
帮助他们。因此在我们社区里，她深受大家的尊敬和爱戴。
母亲经常教导我要诚实正直。她希望我将来做一个对人民有用的人。直到现在，我仍然记得她说的话：
尽你最大的可能去做事，你就会成功。
注：描写人时可以用单词来形容一个人：
diligent 勤劳的; carefully 仔细地; kind 和蔼的; sincere 真诚的; get along with 与…相处融洽; respected 受
人尊敬的; honest 诚实的; upright 正直的; have a sense of humor 有幽默感; outward expression of joy 快乐写
在脸上; serious 严肃的; hard working type 努力工作型; goof off 懒惰。
拓展训练
1．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
My writing journey began when I was a little girl of four. I wrote a story about a native American girl named
White Lily as she and her family prepared to travel to their winter camping grounds. From that one-page short
story, I continued writing as I grew older, filling notebook after notebook with tales of fantastic kingdoms, thrilling
journeys to the stars, and tales of noble heroes who faced deadly groups of enemies. But sometimes, inspiration
would fail me—I’d find myself staring at an empty page, and the words wouldn’t come no matter how hard I tried.
Being home educated, my awesome teacher was my mom. She gave me the freedom to explore different
forms of writing and practice my skills. And when I hit a brick wall one day, I asked her how on earth to overcome
the terrible curse (诅咒) of writer’s block.
She had a unique way. “You just need to write a stump (树桩) story!” she declared. “That’s what to do when
you get stumped.”
“What should it be about?” I asked her, my eyes wide.
“Why, a STUMP, of course!”
I was puzzled. Why on earth would writing a story about an actual stump help me work out which heroic
adventure I should write about next? I stormed out of the room, and grabbed my notebook. Pencil in hand, I wasangry as I stared at that teasing, empty page. Rolling my eyes, I eventually gave in. “At least this is easier than
writing a long and complex ad venture story,” I thought to myself. And I wrote a very short story about an actual
stump in the forest.
After writing that boring but inspiring story, I felt better. I had a much clearer idea of what to write. So I
began to write a story about a brave prince and his little sister who got into trouble more often than not.
注意：1. 写作词数应为150个左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
I kept writing on the wonderful afternoon.
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This experience has taught me a valuable lesson.
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2．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
“Look!” I said to my husband, Roger, pointing to the branches. “The doves (鸽子) have built a nest.
On a chilly April day, we watched with horror as a hawk dived down and took one of the doves. By the next
morning the other parent was gone too. Roger climbed up a ladder to take a look into the nest. Was it possible the
hawk had spared the young? Yes, there sat a newly hatched baby dove! We brought him inside and set up the
nesting box with the heat lamps we had used for raising chickens. Then we rushed to the pet shop to buy the
formula (配方奶) which needed to look like the mother’s milk. But even with our care and prayers, we knew that
the dove’s chances were slim. We were especially worried that our little bird, whom we’d named Hawkeye, hardly
cooed (咕咕地叫) at all. That had to be a bad sign.
But to our surprise, Hawkeye not only survived but also thrived. Within a month, he was able to stand on the
edge of a bowl and eat out of a baby spoon. And before we knew it, he was eating the seeds we gave him. Havingthe opportunity to nurture this new life brought me a greater measure of peace with each passing day.
As Hawkeye grew, we noticed that unlike all the other doves in our yard, he had a double breast with a line
dividing it. When I did some research on the doves, I found out that females don’t often coo.
“We got it all wrong,” I told Roger. “Hawkeye is a girl!”
We realized that we’d have to teach her to fly. First, we urged her to fly from a finger to the bottom rung (梯
子的横档) of a six-foot ladder, and in no time she was moving quickly to the top. She lit out (逃走，溜掉) for the
kitchen whenever she heard the click of the spoon on her bowl. By mid-June she’d gained full confidence in her
wings.
注意：
1.续写词数应为150左右；
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: At that time, we knew it was time to set our Hawkeye free.
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Paragraph 2: But one May morning, Hawkeye and the other dove landed on the rooftop.
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3．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
At 7:30 a. m. on Christmas Eve 2022, Yvonne White got a call from an unknown number. It was Sha’ Kyra
Aughtry, a Buffalo resident who had rescued her brother, Joey White, from a deadly winter storm.
Joey, then 64, was mentally disabled. Yvonne had called him just before the storm hit, strictly instructing him
not to leave the group home where he lives. He had promised her he would stay put. But as Buffalo’s worst snow
storm in almost 50 years struck the city, Joey went outside. It’s unclear what time Joey left home or for what
purpose, but Yvonne suspected he walked about 9 miles to North Park Theatre, a single-screen cinema where hehad worked as a doorkeeper since 1980．She believed he got scared and eventually decided to walk back home.
At around 6:30 a. m. on Dec.24, Joey ended up in a snowbank directly outside Aughtry’s home. He was
wailing and crying out in severe pain. Aughtry went outside and found a stranger, screaming and confused. She
went into the storm with her husband, and they carried Joey into their home. Joey had visible signs of severe
frostbite: His hands were severely swollen and covered in multicolored blisters and sores. Aughtry used a hair dryer
to peel off his clothing, which clung tightly to his shaking body. She also cut off his frozen socks and removed the
remnants of a grocery store bag that were stuck to Joey’s hands. After about an hour of trying to warm him up,
Aughtry, a mother of three boys, then ages 5, 6 and 13, called up Yvonne. Joey had memorized his sister’s phone
number. The women stayed in constant communication from then on.
Still, despite all Aughtry had done to treat his wounds, Joey urgently needed medical attention. Getting help
seemed impossible, though, with the roads covered with heavy ice and snow. “We called 911 easily 100 times,”
Yvonne says. “We tried everything. We were flipping out and crying. It was just getting worse and worse.”
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Above all, though, thanks to the timely medical care, Joey is alive.
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4．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
It was a Saturday morning as I prepared to take my eight-year-old son, David, to the aquarium. His eyes
were widened with excitement, and he chattered non-stop about the sea creatures we would see, the sharks, thedolphins... We boarded the bus, and after a few stops, we made ourselves comfortably seated. David gazed out the
window, watching the world go by with wonder.
The bus continued its route, and with each stop, it became increasingly crowded. Passengers of varying ages
and backgrounds filled the seats. David and I were engaged in a light-hearted conversation about marine life, our
anticipation and joy building with each passing minute.
As we approached a mid-route bus stop, an elderly lady boarded, her movements labored and her legs visibly
unsteady. The bus was full, and for a moment, there was an obvious hesitation among the passengers, each perhaps
weighing the social morals against their own comfort. The elderly lady seized her walking aid, swaying slightly
with each lurch of the vehicle.
Noticing the elderly lady’s struggle, David made a decision. Without a moment’s hesitation, he rose from his
seat. His small hand gestured towards the elderly lady. “You can sit here, ma'am,” he said, his voice clear and
sincere. The elderly lady’s face transformed with a mixture of surprise and gratitude. “Oh, thank you, boy,” she
said, her voice filling up with emotion. David then took her hand gently, helping her navigate through the crowd to
the seat he had left for her. With the help of David, the lady eased herself into the seat, her relief evident. I felt pride
welling up within me as I watched what David had done. Looking at David, who was standing now, I saw not just
the playful child he was known to be, but the empathetic and considerate young man he was growing into.
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1.续写词数应为150个左右；
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
As the bus rolled on, it was filled with renewed warmth among the passengers.
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参考答案
1．
I kept writing on the wonderful afternoon. I finished my story when the sunlight was turning golden and
streamed through my windows. I got up and showed my “stump story” as well as the prince story to Mom and
forcedly admitted that it had helped a lot. Mom explained that sometimes all that I needed to do was something
boring but inspiring. I agreed with her because it helped me see that writing about my hero is a lot more fun than
writing about that dumb old stump!
This experience has taught me a valuable lesson. Writing doesn’t always have to start with a grand idea or a
burst of inspiration. Sometimes, it’s about showing up at the blank page and believing that the act of putting pen to
paper will guide you to where you need to go. From that day forward, whenever writer’s block threatens to stall my
creative flow, I’ll remember the stump story. It has become a reminder that inspiration isn’t always waiting to strike
like lightning. Sometimes, it’s cultivated through the simple act of persisting, even if that means writing about
something as ordinary as a tree stump in the woods. And in those moments of perseverance some of the most
extraordinary stories are born.
【写作分析】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者的写作之旅。作者从四岁的时候便开始写故事，随着年
龄的增长，她写了各种奇幻故事、星际旅行和高贵英雄的冒险。但她有时会遇到灵感枯竭的问题，无法写
出新的故事。而作者在家接受教育，她的母亲鼓励她探索不同的写作形式。当她遇到写作障碍时，她的母
亲建议她写一个关于树桩的故事。尽管起初困惑，但她最终写了一个简单的树桩故事，这帮助她恢复了灵
感，并继续写了一个关于勇敢王子和他妹妹的故事。
【要点解析】1. 段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“在这个美好的下午，我一直在写作”可知，第一段可描写作者和母亲交流自己这次
的写作经历，意识到母亲给出的建议是正确的。
②由第二段首句内容“这次经历给我上了宝贵的一课”可知，第二段可描写作者从这次写作经历中得出的
有关写作灵感的启发，并将这次的启发用于以后的写作中。
2. 续写线索：一直在写作——和母亲交流想法——得到宝贵的一课——写作启发
3. 词汇激活
行为类
①完成：finish/complete/accomplish
②展示：show/display③承认：admit/acknowledge
④出现：show up/appear
情绪类
①无聊的：boring/dull/tedious
②鼓舞人心的：inspiring/encouraging/stirring
[高分句型1] Mom explained that sometimes all that I needed to do was something boring but inspiring. (第一个
that引导宾语从句、第二个that引导限制性定语从句)
[高分句型2] Sometimes, it’s about showing up at the blank page and believing that the act of putting pen to paper
will guide you to where you need to go. (that引导宾语从句、where引导宾语从句)
[高分句型3] It has become a reminder that inspiration isn’t always waiting to strike like lightning. (that引导同位
语从句)
2．One possible version:
At that time, we knew it was time to set our Hawkeye free. We took her outside, but she only flew about the
yard, even when we left her and went back inside. My heart broke as she watched us through the window. Finally,
after several minutes, she flew to the tree and then took off into the sky. I often stared out the back window, hoping
to catch just a glimpse of her. “If I could only see her one more time,” I told Roger, “I’d know everything would be
okay.” I had nearly given up hope.
But one May morning, Hawkeye and the other dove landed on the rooftop. The smaller one bore Hawkeye’s
distinctive chest markings. She had not only returned, but she’d also brought her mate with her! They built a nest
on the very same branch where Hawkeye had been born. Several weeks later we watched Hawkeye feed her own
two babies. And every time she flew into the sky, I felt my own heart fly with her—light and filled with grace.
【写作分析】本文以作者喂养幼鸽成长为线索展开，讲述了作者在四月一个寒冷的日子里，发现一只鸽子
的父母被鹰抓走，在作者与丈夫细心的照料下，幼鸽子健康成长，还给它起了一个名字叫Hawkeye，随着
Hawkeye的慢慢长大，作者开始教它飞行，到了六月，幼鸽Hawkeye已经开始对自己的翅膀有了充分的信
心的故事。
【要点解析】1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“那时，我们知道是时候释放我们的Hawkeye了。”可知，第一段可描写作者放飞鸽
子Hawkeye的过程以及鸽子飞走后作者的心情。
②由第二段首句内容“但是五月的一个早晨，Hawkeye和另一只鸽子降落在屋顶上。”可知，第二段可描
写Hawkeye带着伴侣回来后的发展情况。2.续写线索：带到屋外——Hawkeye不舍——飞走后作者的感受——Hawkeye带着伴侣回归——筑巢生活
——作者的心情
3.词汇激活
行为类
①凝视：stared/gaze fixedly
②放弃：given up/abandon
③饲养/喂养：feed/raise/keep
情绪类
①悲伤：one’s heart broke/fall into sorrow
[高分句型1]. I often stared out the back window, hoping to catch just a glimpse of her.（运用了现在分词短语作
状语）
[高分句型2]. She had not only returned, but she’d also brought her mate with her! （运用了“not only…but
also…”连接并列句）
[高分句型3]. And every time she flew into the sky, I felt my own heart fly with her—light and filled with grace.
（运用了every time引导时间状语从句）
3．
Paragraph 1:
In a desperate cry for help, Aughtry posted a live video on a local Facebook group. In the video, she described
Joey’s critical condition and pleaded for anyone who could help. The post quickly went viral, and the community
responded. Neighbors began sharing the post, and some even ventured out in the storm to try and help.
Miraculously, a local doctor saw the post and recognized the severity of the situation. He immediately contacted
Aughtry and offered to come to her home to assess Joey’s condition. With the doctor’s guidance, Aughtry and her
husband were able to stabilize Joey until an ambulance could arrive.Paragraph 2:
Above all, though, thanks to the timely medical care, Joey is alive. The ambulance finally made its way
through the snow-covered roads, and Joey was rushed to the hospital. Doctors worked tirelessly to treat his severe
frostbite and the underlying health issues caused by exposure to the extreme cold. Yvonne, who had been keeping a
vigil by the phone, breathed a sigh of relief when she heard the good news. Joey’s recovery was slow but steady,
and he soon began to show signs of improvement. Yvonne and Aughtry formed a strong bond over this ordeal,
grateful that their combined efforts and the kindness of strangers had saved Joey’s life. This Christmas Eve will
forever be remembered as a testament to the power of community and the resilience of the human spirit.【写作分析】本文以人物Joey White的遭遇为线索展开，讲述了这位64岁且患有精神障碍的老人在一场近
50年来最严重的暴风雪中失踪的事件。尽管他的姐姐Yvonne事先叮嘱他不要外出，Joey还是离开了家。
幸运的是，他被热心的居民Sha’ Kyra Aughtry发现并救助。Aughtry和她的丈夫将Joey带回家，并处理了
他因严寒而导致的严重冻伤。在努力为Joey取暖后，Aughtry通过他记住的电话号码联系上了他的姐姐。
然而，尽管Aughtry尽力处理了伤口，Joey仍急需专业医疗照顾。由于冰雪覆盖了道路，寻求救助变得异
常困难，让Yvonne和Aughtry倍感焦虑和无助。
【要点解析】1. 段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“在绝望的求救声中，Aughtry在当地的Facebook群组上发布了一段直播视频。”可
知，第一段可描写Aughtry在Facebook求助后，人们纷纷为她提供帮助的情景。
②由第二段首句内容“最重要的是，多亏了及时的医疗护理，Joey活了下来。”可知，第二段可描写医生
救助Joey的过程，以及Yvonne对Aughtry一家的感谢。
2. 续写线索：求助——纷纷提供帮助——救护车赶来——获得救助——开始好转——感谢。
3. 词汇激活
行为类
①恳求：plead/appeal
②联系：contact/connect
③显示：show/display
情绪类
①绝望的：desperate/hopeless
②感谢地：grateful/appreciative
[高分句型1]In the video, she described Joey’s critical condition and pleaded for anyone who could help.(who引导
的定语从句)
[高分句型2]Doctors worked tirelessly to treat his severe frostbite and the underlying health issues caused by
exposure to the extreme cold. Yvonne, who had been keeping a vigil by the phone,(who引导的非限制性定语从
句)
4．参考范文：
As the bus rolled on, it was filled with renewed warmth among the passengers. David, who was standing by
the window now, caught other passengers’ attention due to his kindness towards the old lady. The passengers, who
had been sitting quietly around David and absorbed in their own world, began to express words of compliment and
smiles of encouragement to David. It was as if a single act had broken the ice, sparking a chain reaction ofgoodwill. Upon reaching the aquarium, David and I waved goodbye to the passengers, making our way to explore
the marine world.
That evening, as we returned home, I couldn't help but reflect on the true treasure of the day. It wasn’t the
sharks or the dolphins that left me the deepest impression, but the character of my son, which shone as brightly as
any sea creature we had seen. David’s act of kindness on the bus had not only made the elderly lady’s journey more
comfortable but had also reminded us that the future is in good hands with next generation like him leading the
way. It was a day when my son, David, showed the world the true meaning of kindness, which made me really
happy.
【写作分析】本文以人物为线索展开。讲述了作者和儿子大卫在乘公交车去水族馆的途中，儿子主动给一
位老妇人让座的故事，儿子的举动感动了车厢上的众人，也让作者为儿子的成长感到自豪。
【要点解析】1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“随着公共汽车的继续行驶，乘客们又重新充满了热情。”可知，第一段可描写大卫
的举动对乘客们的影响。
②由第二段首句内容“那天晚上，当我们回到家时，我不禁想起了这一天真正值得珍惜的事情。”可知，
第二段可描写作者从儿子善意的举动中获得的感悟。
2.续写线索：乘公交去水族馆——老妇人上车——主动让座——表达感谢——影响众人——作者感悟
3.词汇激活
行为类
①吸引注意力：catch one’s attention/draw one’sattention/grab one’s attention
②激起：spark/stir/arouse
③到达：reach/get to/arrive at
情绪类
①赞扬：compliment/praise
②开心：happy/delgihted
[高分句型1]David, who was standing by the window now, caught other passengers’ attention due to his kindness
towards the old lady. （运用了由关系代词who引导的非限制性定语从句）
[高分句型2]It wasn’t the sharks or the dolphins that left me the deepest impression, but the character of my son,
which shone as brightly as any sea creature we had seen. （运用了强调句及which引导的非限制性定语从句）
