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学生英语作文范文+AI工具=有用的写作话题词块
学生英语作文范文+AI工具=有用的写作话题词块
每次批改完学生英语作文后，我都希望把学生作文中出现的好词好句整理出来，鼓励写得好的同学，也供其他同学参考学习，但是每次一想到，手动筛选输入这些句子的工作量巨大，耗时漫长，就一直没有实践这个想法。 这两天看到雅思老师Viola的视频，她在“从夯到拉的口语练习方法”视频中，提到背答案的练习是“拉”的方法，因为这不是在练习口语，而是在锻炼记忆力和背诵能力。她认为背短语句式是“人上人”方法，有了短语句式这种building blocks，学生就可以根据主题来自己组装句子。 这让我很有启发，写作和口语同为输出活动，我也可以使用短语句式来给学生搭建话题材料。 班级最近的一次作文练习是以校书法社负责人李华的身份，向英国朋友写信分享书法社举办的社员书法展的准备过程和自我感受，全文题目如下： 
我在批改学生时，发现学生对第一个要点“展览的准备过程”内容写得不够完善，也有个别学生审题不清，把李华当做书法展的参赛者而不是其组织者来写。 班级里也有一些同学内容切题、语言得体，于是我打算把这些优质作文用手机“扫描全能王”扫描，课堂上整篇给学生展示学习。由于受到Viola的启发，我想再把学生作文里面的词块总结出来，精细化到与写作题干要点对应的词块内容。 为了节省时间，减轻工作量，我试图利用AI来完成词块的筛选和总结过程。我将题干和范文输入到AI工具“豆包”中，让它请根据题干 1. 展览的准备过程； 2. 你的感受 两个点，分别提取范文中相关的优秀切题表达。豆包很快给我提取了相关表达。 
AI对官方范文的词块提取任务回复：
so that viewers could truly appreciate the stories and emotions reflected in the works 以便参观者能够真正体会作品中蕴含的故事与情感 I truly hope you can come to China one day and experience it in person! 我真心希望有一天你能来中国亲身体验一番！
发现豆包能够完成我的指令、输出我想要的内容后，我又输入了学生的作文，让豆包识别文字，并重复以上提取词块的指令（请根据题干 1. 展览的准备过程； 2. 你的感受 两个点，分别提取范文中相关的优秀切题表达），我得到了以下的豆包回复：
- "I first thought about the quality of the works. Then I gave out the calligraphy works to my team, and they selected the suitable works."（把作品分给团队筛选） - "I felt thankful and happy." - "To my surprise, my teacher not only agreed but also supported me." - "This exhibition can help our students know Chinese culture well and show the beauty of calligraphy." > 提示：以上为修正后的表达，语法与拼写已规范，可直接用于写作。
我觉得这样的词块提取既能够给学生有用的话题语料，能够让学生表达围绕题干展开，避免偏题，又不会限制学生的整体自我表达，是非常有效的学习材料。 此外，我还发现，如果给学生范文署名，并且在输入提取指令时，要求豆包把相关表达的同学名字附上，豆包可以在这些词块句式后面加上对应的同学名字，这样子的“词块句式+出处”形式更能起到激励作用。 #英语写作 #高中教学 #AI使用#高中英语写作范文
一、展览的准备过程（对应要点 1）
动词 / 动词短语
organized a Chinese calligraphy exhibition 举办中国书法展 began with choosing a theme 以选定主题作为开端 devoted long hours to improving our skills 花费大量时间打磨技艺 produced draft after draft 一遍又一遍创作稿件 striving for perfection in every stroke 力求每一笔都尽善尽美 put together the display boards 布置展示展板 wrote explanatory notes for each piece 为每幅作品撰写解说词
目的句式
二、你的感受（对应要点 2）
情绪描写
felt both nervous and proud 既紧张又自豪 admiring our works with genuine curiosity 怀着真切的好奇欣赏我们的作品 made all the hard work worthwhile 让所有的辛苦付出都值得
个人期许结尾
一、展览的准备过程
1. 找场地
"First, I should find a suitable place, such as the playground or the art classroom." "I made an application to the headmaster to get permission to use the place."（申请使用场地）
2. 寻求老师/伙伴帮助
"A good partner is most important, so I asked our art teacher to help me. With her help, I completed these tasks quickly!" "I shared my idea about it with my teacher. To my surprise, my teacher not only agreed but also supported me." "I made a plan for the exhibition quickly with my teacher's help."（制定展览计划）
3. 征集作品
"To get more great works to show, I asked our teachers to tell their students to bring some calligraphy works if they wanted to." "We finally got a lot of works and we put them on the wall."（布置作品上墙）
4. 筛选作品
5. 丰富展览、布置细节
"We also made some small paintings to make the exhibition more colorful." "I laid out other things."（布置其他事项）
6. 筹备整体表述
"I had a busy week because we held a calligraphy exhibition last week and I had to prepare for it." "Let me share the process of preparation and my feelings."
## 二、你的感受
1. 感激与快乐
2. 惊讶与受支持
3. 成功感与自信提升
"The exhibition was so successful that I became famous in school, even though there were a few small problems in the details." "Thanks to this, my confidence grew and I was proud of myself."
4. 对传统文化的深层理解与责任感
"After the exhibition, I had a deeper understanding of Chinese traditional culture." "They are really valuable treasures, which have a long history of over 5,000 years. As a Chinese, it is my duty to pass down Chinese culture and combine it with modern culture."
5. 自我突破与尽力而为
"At first, I thought I could not complete it, but I spared no effort in doing it." "In conclusion, this activity made me a better person."（活动让自己更完善）
