专题 02 读后续写：环境描写（解析版）
借景抒情、寓情于景是写作中常用的手法。恰当的背景场景描写有利于推动故事情节的发展，烘托人
物的心理活动，给读者身临其境的感受。背景场景描写要有全貌有细节，有全景有特写，要点面结合，重
点突出。可以描写事件发生的时间、地点、环境等，也可以描写人看到的景象或感受到的某种情绪。
注意：环境描写只是起画龙点睛的作用，环境描写不要写太长，且环境描写一定为你的内容服务，
而不是为了看起来高大上。所以我也提醒大家写作的时候千万不要本末倒置，写一些无关紧要的套句
或者环境描写只会对情节起到反作用。那么接下来我们先看看环境描写的常见作用以及常见的环境描
写素材。
自然环境描写在读后续写中的作用
1.衬托或突出人物性格、心理等
2.暗示或推动故事情节发展
3.增添或烘托某种气氛和意境，奠定基调
4.揭示主题，深化主旨
1.气氛氛围（1）
A heavy silence blanketed the room.（描写房间的寂静）
A hush fell upon the class. （描写教室寂静）
The house smelled musty and damp, and a little sweet, as if it were haunted by the ghosts of long-dead
cookies.(描写屋内环境）
An absolute darkness ruled the forest.（描写黑暗）
It didn’t take too long for the forest to be enveloped in darkness.(描写森林变暗）
There were a deathly stillness in the house.（描写死寂）
There was a moment of sinister silence, then a multitudinous stirring of the leaves.（描写暴风雨前的死
寂）
An air of sadness settled over the group. （描写悲伤氛围）
It suddenly seemed frighteningly quiet. The air was charged with tension.（描写紧张气氛）
The silence of the forest was ripped apart by a sound like a roaring wind.（描写狂风打破寂静）
There was no view anywhere, nothing but the oppressive and silent scrub.（描写死寂的树林）2.气氛氛围（2）
the blue sky 蓝天the songs of birds 鸟鸣the thundering clouds 雷霆万钧的云the fragile flowers 娇嫩的花
the green grass 青草the fragrant roses 芬芳的玫瑰the setting / rising sun 落日 / 冉冉升起的太阳 Dark clouds
were gathering in the sky.乌云密布。
The night sky was lit up by flashes of light. 一道道灯光照亮了夜空。
The clouds had spread and nearly covered the entire sky. 云彩扩散开来，几乎遮住了整个天空。
The sun was now high in the southern sky. 太阳正高挂在南边的天空上。
The sun went in, and the breeze became cold. 云层遮住了太阳，微风有了些凉意。
The mist melted rapidly in the morning sun. 在早晨的阳光下，薄雾涣然消散了。
The mountain area is covered entirely in dense jungle. 山区完全掩映在茂密的丛林中。
We climbed up a winding track towards a mountain refuge. 我们沿着一条蜿蜒的小道爬向山上的一处避难所。
The mountain top was covered with snow. 山顶被积雪覆盖。
The region is uninhabited except for a few mountain villages. 除了几个小山村之外，这个地区杳无人烟。
Bathed in the sunshine and delighted by fantastic scenery, we headed for the destination.沐浴在阳光下，享受着
美丽的风景，我们向目的地出发。
3.江河湖海、山川峡谷、植物草地
The gurgle of the stream soothed me. （描写潺潺流水）
A clear little stream ran quite merrily along its narrow way.(描写欢快的溪流）
The fragrant flowers attracted lots of birds, lingering around them.(描写花香鸟语）
The lake mirrored the sky above, both of them blameless blue and shimmering.(描写天空映衬下的湖面）
The water was deep blue and sunlight glittered on its looking glass-clear surface.（描写波光粼粼的水
面）
Dawn sent shimmering rays over the placid ocean, bestowing a golden path from the shore to the horizon.
(描写黎明的海洋）
The expanse of blue water stretched in every direction to the horizon, frothy waves lapping at a sand
beach.(描写海水拍打沙滩)
The beach was bathed in the amber-like sunshine.（描写阳光下的沙滩）
Ripping crystal streams stretched away into the distance from the towering bluffs like the beautiful
streamers of a fairy maid.（描写瀑布）
The meadow was a glorious expanses of grass and meadow flowers, grass rustling gently in the breeze.
(描写青青草地)
Patches of weeds dotted the mountainside.（描写杂草）The meadow flowed like a sea of green over the hill, studded with the purple of thistles.(描写漫山的花
草）
The peak looked to him exactly like a giant fist, with the thumb sticking straight up.(描写山峰）
The valley seemed to grow quieter and quieter as he sat and stared at the bright delicate blueness. (描写山
谷的寂静）
4.天气（风雨雷电，阴晴冷暖，雾雪冰霜）
The wind, so soft and cold, clicked through tree branches and stirred the bushes that sprinkled the slope.
（描写柔风）
A gust of wind blew and parted the drooping branches of the weeping willow like a curtain.（描写微风拂
柳）
A light breeze blew, swaying the tree branches and making the rays of light glimmer and dance as if there
was a fairytale world hidden deep within.（描写微风）
The breeze gently kissed her cheeks. (描写微风）
The fragile little tree cracked and fell in the wild howling wind.（描写狂风）
The icy wind started howling, cutting my face like a sharp knife.(描写寒风）
It was the odour that always precedes a thunderstorm, and a nameless fear clutched at my heart. (描写暴
风雨来临前）
Wind and rain now whipped the house.（描写风雨击打窗户）
The drizzle kissed me on my cheeks gently. （描写细雨）
It has rained without ceasing for many days, with great gusts of wind.（描写刮风下雨）
The thunder was rumbling in the distance. (描写雷电）
A fierce wind was roaring while the pounding rain was beating the ground. The rumble of thunder was
heard in the distance.（描写风雨雷电）
The sharp claps of thunder pierced the quiet night.（描写雷声）
Though the rain stopped, the wind rushed by and whistled and made strange sounds.(描写雨停风来）
A glimmer of light spilled into the corridor. 一缕微光洒入走廊。（描写阳光洒进走廊）
When I was bathed in the sunlight, it felt like the amber-like sunshine was kissing every inch of my skin.
（描写阳光）
The sun dropped through and laid on his head and shoulders.The sun was at it’s highest, like a vicious unblinking yellow eye staring down at me from the cloudless
sky.(描写正午毒辣的阳光）
In this heat even the trees appear defeated.(描写天气极热）
When I drew the curtains back, the sunlight flooded in.（描写阳光洒进窗户）
The fog was beginning to clear and a full moon shone brightly. （描写雾气消散）
The mist melted rapidly in the morning sun.(描写薄雾消散）
The feathery snowflakes danced in the night air, making a beautiful picture.(描写下雪）
The wind howled, piling up snow in drifts, blinding the night with ice-white dust. (描写晚上下雪场景）
5.动物（飞禽走兽，鱼虫）
Birds were chattering/twittering somewhere.（描写鸟喳喳叫）
The clear blue sky was dotted with fluttering larks.(翩翩飞舞的云雀）
The forest is the orchestra consisted by birds, playing one enchanting symphony after another.(描写鸟的
合唱）
The birds flew through that ever developing canvas of the dawn, as if their wings were fine quills,
drawing such buoyant hues.(描写鸟在天空飞翔的美妙画面）
The howl of wolves thundered and made the hair on her neck rise.（描写狼叫）
Then, on his back, with his tail lashing and his jaws clicking, the shark plowed over the water as a speed-
boat does.(描写鲨鱼）
The shark’s jaws opened wide, revealing rows of razor-sharp teeth.(描写鲨鱼）
6.春夏秋冬
My fingers lingered almost unconsciously on the familiar leaves and blossoms which had just come forth
to greet the sweet southern spring. （描写春意盎然）
The previously denuded branches offered their wands of tight green bud to the brilliant rays of spring.(描
写枯枝发芽)
The new spring grass shot up as time itself had sped up.(描写春草）An overwhelming torrent of heat flew through the atmosphere, filled with uneasy discomfort. （描写夏天
的热）
Fallen leaves danced down in the cool mid-autumn air, bidding farewell to sweet summer and welcoming
the autumn in.(描写夏去秋来）
The leaves crunched beneath my feet as I strolled down the street.(描写秋天脚下的落叶)
The autumn breeze tousled her hair and pinked her cheeks.(描写秋风拂面）
The leaves had almost fallen off, creating a sea of fiery colors that crunched beneath our feet.(描写秋天
落叶）
Freezing winter marched into the village. (描写寒冬）
The earth seemed benumbed by his icy touch, and the very spirits of the trees had withdrawn to their
roots, and there, curled up in the dark, lay fast asleep.（描写寒冬）
The street glistened with fresh snow and the sky was a blameless blue.(描写冬天的雪)
7.天空、日出日落
White clouds flow in the blue sky like quiet fish swimming in the broad ocean.（描写蓝天白云）
White clouds flow in the blue sky like quiet fish swimming in the broad ocean.（描写白云）
The sun rises as a canopy of gold, bright amid the blue, bidding the stars to take their nightly rest.(描写日
出）
The sun dropped through and laid on his head and shoulders.(描写日落）
The garden looked so beautiful with the setting sun reflected in the windows.(描写夕阳）
The stars in the night sky sparkled like diamonds. (描写星空）
The stars that dotted the sky lit up the night.(描写星空）
Clusters of stars decorated the vast sky like sparking jewels. (描写星空）
The moon under siege by stars seemed to lighten the night bringing forth stars that shone and hung in the
blackness.(描写星空)
读后续写冲刺训练常用词块
1.a room facing south 一间朝南的房间
2.a village surrounded by mountains一个群山环绕的村庄3.a favorable location 一个优越的位置
4.a remote village一个偏远的村庄
5.downtown area闹市区
6.be situated at...位于/坐落于…….
7.a violent/fierce storm 狂风暴雨
8.in the warm spring sunshine 在春天温暖的阳光里
9.be arranged in good order 井井有条
10. in the pouring rain 在瓢泼大雨中
11.clear up(天气）放晴
12.continuous/constant snow 连续不断的大雪
13.be bathed in the sunshine 沐浴在阳光中
14.a dark,rainy night 漆黑的雨夜
15.in a mess一片混乱
读后续写冲刺训练常用语句
1.They found the farm green with vegetables,the little house livable and homey.
他们发现农场上长着绿油油的蔬菜，小屋布置得舒适温馨。
2.The breeze suddenly swung around to their backs and began to gather strength.
微风突然转向，朝他们身后吹来，而且越吹越强。
3. The course headed north for five miles, wandered west for a hilly mile, then
turned south again along a winding road.
跑道的路线先是北上五英里，然后向西折上一英里的山道，然后再重新往南转入一段蜿蜒曲折的道路。
4.It was raining lightly as he walked down the steps.
他走下台阶时，天正下着小雨。
5.The storm stopped and the sun came out.
暴雨停了，太阳出来了。
6. All was quite and there was only moonlight.
只有月光，周围一片寂静。
7.They were bumping over a sandy track to the weed-choked 120-acre field.
他们颠簸在一条沙路上，朝一块面积120公顷，杂草丛生的田地开去。
8.It was a typical summer evening in June.The air was delicate and there was acomplete,absolute silence.这是六月一个典型的夏日傍晚。空气柔和清新，四周静悄悄的，没有一丝声响。
9.The air was rich with spring;the sun was warm and yellowed on the asphalt.
空气中洋溢着春天的气息；太阳暖洋洋的，柏油马路上铺着一层黄色的光。
10.On that day the mountain was full of flowers,and the trees had new greenleaves.
那天山上开满了花，树上也长出了新的绿叶。
场景描写训练句式
As ______________________________________, （天空越来越黑，光线越来越暗）he quickened his
steps.
2. __________________(微风) stroked his head , as if comforting all his tiredness.
3. From the distance, he saw _______________(昏暗的灯光) in the village.
4. She had no choice but to stop for another night. _________________(一股冷风吹来) and she started to miss the
warmth of Tom’ s hug.
5. Silence between dad and me made me more nervous and scared. At that moment, it was completely dark
_____________________(除了微弱的光) given out by a few stars in the sky.
6. The dark, rainy evening, the wind, the thundering clouds_____________________(完全把我镇住了).
7. I closed my eyes in the speeding car. ___________________________________________(蜿蜒的小溪，高耸
的山，深深的山谷)and sunny beaches held me entirely in their fascination.
8. ______________________(泥土熟悉的芬芳)rose up to greet her. Wandering in the woods, Ally slowed her
pace to find the little guy in the mixed air.
9. The sun looked at her with a glowing smile and the flowers____________________(快乐地朝着她点点头).
10. The breeze patted her on the face, warm and comfortable. However, it seemed that Ally couldn’t catch sight of
the wood warbler（莺） after a long time wait.__________________(太阳落山), Ally was about to leave.
参考答案
1. the sky gradually darkened and the light dimmed
2. The gentle breeze
3. some dim light
4. A gust of cold wind blew
5. except the faint light6. held me entirely in their power
7. Winding rivers, lofty mountains, deep valleys
8. Familiar smells of the earth
9. nodded merrily towards her
10. With the sun setting
模拟训练01
读后续写 阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
John Blanchard stood up, straightened his army uniform(制服), and studied the crowd making their
way through the station. He looked for the girl whose heart he knew, but whose face he had never seen,
the girl with a rose.
His interest in her began thirteen months ago in a library. Taking a book off the shelf, he found
himself fascinated, not with the words of the book, but with the notes penciled in the margin (页边的空
白). The soft handwriting showed a thoughtful soul and brilliant mind. In the front of the book, he
discovered the owner's name, Miss Hollis Maynell. With time and effort he found her address. She lived
in New York City. He wrote her a letter introducing himself and inviting her to correspond (通信). The
next day he was shipped overseas for military service.
During the next year and one month, the two begun to know each other by mail. Each letter was a
seed falling on both hearts. A romance was budding. Blanchard asked for a photograph, but she refused.
She felt that if he really cared, it wouldn't matter what she looked like.
When the day finally came for him to return from Europe, they scheduled their first meeting — 7 pm
at the Grand Central Station in New York. “You'll recognize me，” she wrote. “By the red rose I'll wear
my dress.” So at 7：00 he was in the station looking for a girl whose heart he loved, but whose face he'd
never seen.
A young lady was coming toward him. Her figure was long and slim; her blonde hair lay back from
her ears; her eyes were blue as flowers; her lips and chin had a gentle firmness, and in her pale green
suit she was like springtime coming alive. He went toward her, entirely forgetting to notice that she was
not wearing a rose. As he moved, a middle aged woman whispered, “Going my way, Sir？”
注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2．至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3．续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4．续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph 1：
Almost uncontrollably he made his way to the woman,
and then he noticed that she was wearing a red rose.
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Paragraph 2：
The woman's face broadened into a big smile.
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翻译小练习：
1. 约翰·布兰查德看到这个40多岁的女人很失望。
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2. 没错，她就是他等的那个女孩。
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3. 尽管他想跟着那位年轻的女士，他还是停下来，朝那位女士走去，向她打招呼，并拿出他在图书馆
里找到的那本书。
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4. “我是约翰·布兰查德，你一定是霍利斯·梅内尔小姐。我非常高兴你能见到我，我可以请你吃饭
吗？”
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5. “我不知道这是怎么回事，”她回答说，“但是刚才路过的那个穿着淡绿色西装的年轻女士求我把
红玫瑰戴在我的外套上。
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6. 她说如果你要请我吃饭，我应该告诉你她在街对面的餐厅等你。她说这是个考验！”
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参考答案：
1.约翰·布兰查德看到这个40多岁的女人很失望。
John Blanchard was disappointed to see the woman, who was over 40 years old.
2. 没错，她就是他等的那个女孩。
Exactly, She was the girl he was waiting for.
3. 尽管他想跟着那位年轻的女士，他还是停下来，朝那位女士走去，向她打招呼，并拿出他在图书馆
里找到的那本书。
Though he would like to follow the young lady, he stopped and walked toward the woman, greeted her
and held out the book he found in the library.
4. “我是约翰·布兰查德，你一定是霍利斯·梅内尔小姐。我非常高兴你能见到我，我可以请你吃饭
吗？”
“I'm John Blanchard, and you must be Miss Hollis Maynell. I am more than glad you could meet me; may
I take you to dinner？”
5. “我不知道这是怎么回事，”她回答说，“但是刚才路过的那个穿着淡绿色西装的年轻女士求我把
红玫瑰戴在我的外套上。
“I don't know what this is about，”she answered, “but the young lady in her pale green suit who just
went by begged me to wear the red rose on my coat.
6. 她说如果你要请我吃饭，我应该告诉你她在街对面的餐厅等你。她说这是个考验！”
And she said if you were going to invite me to dinner, I should tell you that she is waiting for you in the
restaurant across the street. She said it was a test！”
参考范文：
Paragraph 1：
Almost uncontrollably he made his way to the woman,
and then he noticed that she was wearing a red rose. John Blanchard was disappointed to see the woman,who was over 40 years old. Exactly, She was the girl he was waiting for. Though he would like to follow
the young lady, he stopped and walked toward the woman, greeted her and held out the book he found in
the library. “I'm John Blanchard, and you must be Miss Hollis Maynell. I am more than glad you could
meet me; may I take you to dinner？”
Paragraph 2：
The woman's face broadened into a big smile. “I don't know what this is about，”she answered,
“but the young lady in her pale green suit who just went by begged me to wear the red rose on my coat.
And she said if you were going to invite me to dinner, I should tell you that she is waiting for you in the
restaurant across the street. She said it was a test！”
