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考点 37 读后续写 02 环
境描写突破（解析版）
【命题解读】
通过对环境的描写，能够向读者交待故事的背景，衬托人物，渲染气氛，从而推动情
节发展。环境描写真的是必不可少的。此外，作者可以通过环境描写向读者间接的表达着
故事中主人公的内心情感变化。
【思维导图】
【环境描写的重要性】
首先要明确的是，把主旨想清楚，时刻不忘“写景乃为主旨服务”这句话。如果景物
与主旨无关，就是为写景而写景，就是无效的写景。
例如，大家看看我要传达出“高兴”与“悲伤”两种不同主旨时，该用下面哪种景物
描写。
A. 花儿低着头，杨柳无精打采。B. 花儿昂着头，杨柳摆动这枝条。
答案一目了然。
所以，景随主旨变。先确定主旨，然后来写景，这样才有效果。
通常情况下，传达出的情感好，则用褒义色彩的美好的、正向的词。传达出情感需要
不好，则用贬义色彩的糟糕负面的词。大家看下面三例：
The wind was blowing dreadfully(恐怖地)。
The wind was blowing softly（柔和地）。
The wind was blowing comfortably（舒服地）。
可以看出三句传达出什么样的情感吧。
“情景交融”法
【用一个公式来表达就是：写景 + 感受】
写景后，再添加一个明显的情感描写，就是指：有时在景物描写之后，加上一两句自己
的情感态度。这样做的整体效果就是：情境交融。当然，如果你想造成“留白启发思考”
的效果，那么就没有必要添加这种显性的情感态度描写了。
举个例子，大家记得2017年11月高考《健忘的妈妈》的故事续写吧。第一段可以用到
下面三句：
That night we set up our tent in a park.（那天晚上我们在公园里搭起帐篷。）
The moon was held up above the sky, shining her smooth and charming moonlight. （月
亮被高举在天空的上方，照耀着她那光滑而迷人的月光。）
Twinkling stars were blinking（眨眼）, and fragrant（芬芳的）breeze（微风） gently
blew.（闪烁的星星眨着眼，芬芳的微风轻轻地吹着。）
这个景物描写很精彩。但是如果后面在加一句：Resting beside my mother, with hands held tightly by her, I feel the world is so beautiful.
（躺在母亲身边，双手紧紧地握着母亲，我觉得这个世界是如此美丽。）
这样一加，就让“母亲”显现，就让“我与母亲关系和谐”的主旨就显现了。
再比如，下面两句景物描写：
第1句：The wind was howling dreadfully and the rain was pouring from the
heaven, whipping against the branches of lined（成排的） trees.
（风可怕地嚎叫，雨从天倾斜而来，拍打着成排的树枝。）
第2句：The world was loaded with a sea of darkness（世界承载着一片海洋般的黑暗）.
这两句的后面，如果再加一句：
I was seized with the roaring power of nature. A sense of horror creeping up on me. （我被自
然发怒的力量抓住了。一种恐惧感悄悄爬到我身上。）
这样就进一步强调了自己的情感。
总之，根据凸显“情感”的需要，我们可以决定是不是该加一句显性的“情感表达”，
来决定是不是呈现显性的“情景交融”。
比喻法
我们的环境描写还可以用比喻手法，用“like”即可，并交代、突出特点。如果总结成公式，
【那就是：写景 + 比喻 + 特点】
与大家分享的例子是一位美国作家的短篇小说 The Whistle (寒笛)中的写景片段：
原文是：
Night fell. The darkness was thin, like some sleazy dress that has been worn and worn for many
winters and always lets the cold through to the bones. Then the moon rose.译文：
夜色降临, 暮色稀薄, 犹如穿过了数个冬季的敝衣, 难以抵御刺骨的严寒。而后月
亮升起。
（sleazy 稀薄的， let.. through 让...通过,类似pass through）
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我们再来做句子分析：
这句话的核心句是：The darkness was thin，即：暮色稀薄。其他内容都是锦上添花的
作用，就是让这个核心句子显得更加完整具体。怎么做到的呢？首先是用到了比喻：这里
的 like.就起到了这个作用：“like some sleazy dress”像是一条薄薄的裙子，将darkness比
作薄薄的裙子还不够，还穿了好几个冬天(has been worn and worn for many winters),冬天里
穿裙子一定非常的寒冷。于是作者又加上了寒冷入骨(to the bones)。如此，一个寒冷的夜晚
(cold night)与一件不能御寒的敞衣相联系，内容可以如此丰富。
关于比喻，可能有些同学不是特别熟悉，再给大家一个例句：
A fire still fluttered in the grate (壁炉炉膛), ... like a bird trying to find its way out of the
room.一团火还在壁炉炉膛里舞动着，就像一只挣脱束缚的鸟。
这句话里，把壁炉里跳动的火苗比作想挣脱束缚的鸟（find its way out of the room）。使“火
苗”的描写更加生动。
我们再来上面提到的“薄雾”的例子，回忆一下公式：
写景+比喻+特点
如果说详细一点就是：
平平无奇的交代下自然现象+比喻（定语从句或非谓语修饰）+突出特点(冷
得不得了)
学习读后续写，最快的方式，就是改编，仿写。我们一起来牛刀小试一下吧：如果我
们要描写“雾”，应该怎么写呢？
The wind was blowing. The mist was getting thick, like a huge textured velvet
cloak, making what is hidden inside an unclear mystery.风正在吹。雾越来越浓，像一件巨大的有质感的天鹅绒斗篷，把一切隐藏在模糊的神秘之
中。
这句仿写的句子很好的get到了比喻的精髓，非常好的运用了“like”，textured velvet
cloak（有质感的天鹅绒斗篷），形象具体。非谓语making做状语，也着实炫了一下语法。
既简洁描绘了景色，又营造了一种神秘、紧张的氛围。
【素材积累】
1. 人物动作的画面定格
They stood there for a moment, side by side, waiting for the rushing holiday current and for
their place in it. Then the daughter glanced over and momentarily regarded her mother. And slowly,
almost reluctantly, she placed her arm with apparently unaccustomed affection around her mother’s
shoulders and gently guided her back into the deluge. 她们并肩站在那里，等待着节日的浪潮，
等待着她们在浪潮中的位置。 然后女儿扫了一眼，立刻注视着她的母亲。 慢慢地，几乎
是不情愿地，带着明显不习惯的爱她把胳膊放在她母亲的肩膀上，轻轻地引导她回到洪水
中。
His hard work paid off! Holding the soda tin firmly, Reuben rushed for the shop to buy the
brooch. The moment he got the beautiful brooch, he burst through the front door and placed it in
Dora’s hand. Never had Dora received such a gift. Speechless and happy, she held her son tightly
into her arms, with tears welling up in her eyes.他的努力得到了回报！鲁本紧紧地握着汽水罐，
冲向商店去买胸针。他一拿到那枚漂亮的胸针，就冲进前门，把它放在朵拉的手里。多拉
从来没有收到过这样的礼物。她高兴得说不出话来，紧紧地把儿子抱在怀里，眼泪涌了出
来。
Standing beside the empty road, they looked up into the sky, feeling the precious peace from
within.站在空旷的道路旁，他们抬头仰望天空，从内心感受到珍贵的平和。
2. 特殊寓意的写景画面
The sky was a billion pure eyes of light and the grass green underfoot, it was as if night and
day had become one beautiful moment. Dawn had come. 天空像是一亿只纯净的眼睛拼接在一
起，脚下是青草，仿佛黑夜和白昼已成为一个美丽的时刻。黎明已经来临。（黎明到来的
画面）
Dawn sent shimmering rays over the placid ocean, bestowing a golden path from the shore to the
horizon.黎明在平静的海面上放射出出闪闪发亮的光线，留下一条从海岸到地平线横亘而过
的金色道路。（黎明到来的画面）
The crystal and cerulean water was gentle as I waded through it, the sunset like orange paint on a
blue canvas.当我涉过水晶般天蓝色的轻柔的水时，日落就像蓝色画布上的橙色颜料。（美
好日落时的画面）
The lingering sunlight was obliterated by the rapidly falling night，resembling a pitch-black curtain
draped over the sky.逗留在天际的最后一缕阳光被迅速落下的夜幕擦除，就像是天空被一层
漆黑的幕布覆盖。（日落时的画面）
The moon under siege by stars seemed to lighten the night bringing forth stars that shone and
hung in the blackness. The never ending blackness consumed everything.被群星围困的月亮似乎
照亮了黑夜，带来了在黑暗中闪耀和悬挂着的群星。无尽的黑暗吞噬了一切。（描写夜空
的画面）
Looking up, I saw the sun shine brighter than I ever knew before. I saw a tree in the distance glisten
gently as it reflected the sun's rays. My consciousness ebbed away with the heat. I took a few blinks
before I landed with a thud. 抬头一看，我看到太阳比我以前所知道的还要明亮。我看见远处
有一棵树反射着太阳光，发出柔和的光辉。我的意识随着热度而衰退。我眨了眨眼，然后
摔倒在地才猛然回到现实中，恢复了知觉。（特殊寓意）Dotted with glittering stars, the sky, midnight blue, gave the scene a fairytale quality. 缀满星光
的天空，午夜的蓝色，给了这一场景一个童话般的质量。（神话般美丽的夜空画面）
The rain drummed on the window, bidding farewell to the last beam of sunlight.雨水打着窗
户，向最后一缕阳光告别。 （雨水来临的画面）
Kissed by the rain and glistening, the wet ground is cold under foot. A dense earthly sweet
smell rises from the ground, enveloping everything within its soft embrace.潮湿的地面走起来很
冷，被雨水亲吻后闪闪发光。一股浓郁的泥土般的香味从地上升起，把一切都包裹在它柔
软的怀抱里。（雨后清新的画面）
The leaves crunched beneath my feet as I strolled down the street. Occasionally, one would fall
past me, lightly swaying as the air gently carried it to the ground. 我在街上漫步时，树叶在我脚
下嘎吱作响。偶尔，有叶子会从我身边掉下来，轻轻地摇晃，缓缓落到到地面。（描写落
叶的画面）
【模拟题 1】（2022·福建漳州·一模）
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Allison stood in line with the rest of her class, waiting for the school doors to open. This was
the last day before school closed for Christmas break. She couldn’t wait for secret gift swap (交
换) happening in class today. Alison tuned to say something to her best friend, Wendy, then froze.
She was surprised to see Wendy looking down at the ground with her books pressed tightly to her
chest.
“What’s wrong, Wendy?” Allison asked quietly.
Wendy shook her head, her eyes connecting with Allison’s. Allison could see that Wendy’s
face was as dark as a cloud, with no smile in sight.
“My parents didn’t give me anything to bring to the gift swap,” she whispered. “They saidthey didn’t have extra money for stuff like that.”
Allison looked at Wendy, confused. “But, we weren’t supposed to bring anything expensive.
Just something small that didn’t cost a lot of money.”
Allison thought back to the last time she’d been at Wendy’s house. She’d opened the
refrigerator looking for something to drink, only to find that it was mostly empty. The furniture in
Wendy’s house looked old and beaten up.
“It will be okay, Wendy,” Allison said. “We get to have all that time off for Christmas. Come
on, cheer up!”
Wendy gave her a small smile, then looked away. At that moment, a whistle blew, and the
kids started walking into the school building. The Christmas party was about to start.
One by one, the kids dropped their gifts into the bag the teacher was holding. Allison looked
over at Wendy. Most of the kids were smiling around the bag, eager to get started, but Wendy
stood off to the side, looking down at her feet. Allison hated seeing her friend so upset. She
wished there were something she could do about it.
“Come on up, Allison. It’s your turn,” the teacher said.
Soon everyone had pulled out a gift and unwrapped it.
注意：1. 续写词数应为150左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1:
Allison looked down at her gift: a little glass cat.
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Paragraph 2:
“Wendy, I want you to have this,” she said.
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参考答案：Paragraph 1:
Allison looked down at her gift: a little glass cat. It was carefully selected by her and her
mother in the store yesterday. It is a lovely little glass cat, whose eyes looked like a crescentmoon. When you looked at it, it was like smiling at you, which can make you forget the troubles
in life. She thought the gift was really perfect for Wendy. Just then, the teacher shouted again
“come on up, Allison!” Allison shook her head slightly towards the teacher and then came up to
Wendy.
Paragraph 2:
“Wendy, I want you to have this,” she said. Wendy was amazed but shook her head saying, “No, I
can’t accept your gift. I have no gift to exchange with you.” Hearing these words, Alison smiled
and replied, “Wendy, you are my best friend. I hope you can be happy. Open it and I’m sure you’ll
like it.” She insisted on putting the gift into Wendy’s hand. Wendy slowly opened the present.
When she saw the little glass cat inside, she smiled and said, “It’s so cute. Thank you, my best
friend!”Alison said, “Look at it, it will make you forget the troubles in life. Smile more.”
【解析】
【分析】
本文以时间为线索展开，讲述了在圣诞节交换礼物时，艾莉森的好朋友温迪，因为父母没
有能力为她准备用来交换的礼物，而感到难过。艾莉森决定为好友做些什么，并最终把自
己的礼物送给了温迪的故事。
【详解】
1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“艾莉森低头看着她的礼物：一只小玻璃猫。”可知，第一段可描写
这个精心挑选的礼物以及艾莉森的决定。
②由第二段首句内容“温迪，我想要你拿着这个”可知，第二段可描写艾莉森把礼物送给
了温迪，两个人一起享受快乐的圣诞节。
2.续写线索：精心挑选的礼物——礼物的特别——决定送给温迪——温迪拒绝——劝说
——接受
3.词汇激活
行为类
1.挑选：select/choose
2.回答：reply/answer
3.打开：open/unwrap
情绪类
1 开心的：happy/ delighted2.吃惊的：amazed/ surprised
【点睛】
[高分句型1]. It is a lovely little glass cat, whose eyes looked like a crescent moon.（运用了
whose引导的定语从句）
[高分句型2] When she saw the little glass cat inside, she smiled and said, “it’s so cute. Thank
you, my best friend!”（运用了when引导的时间状语从句）
【模拟题 2】（2022·重庆·西南大学附中一模）
阅读下面短文， 根据所给情节进行续写， 使之构成一个完整的故事。
Ken Scott kicked off the covers and leapt out of bed at his home in the Rocky Mountain town
of Mullan, Idaho. He’d just heard on the radio that the nearby Silver Mountain Resort had been
blessed with nearly a foot and a half of new snow. As an experienced ski addict, he didn’t want to
miss this big golden opportunity. These conditions are what skiers live for.
When Scott reached Silver Mountain’s locker room, he came across his friend Paul, a former
ski instructor who had also been a regular on these slopes for more than two decades. Both of
them were exhilarated. Before setting off, it was Paul’s routine to check his phone tightly fixed
inside his parka (风 雪外套). For the next hour the pair skied on various runs under a lightly dull
sky, making fresh tracks. They were both in a playful mood, laughing as they tackled the steep
runs.
Almost immediately, the snow beneath their feet gave way. In a millisecond, Paul realized
what was happening. “Avalanche! (雪崩)” he yelled to Scott, who was not far behind. Scott
responded. The sudden snow slide caused fear in his voice. “This is happening!” Instantly, both
were hit by a mass of snow that would hit and carry them some 500 feet down the mountain. Scott
felt it surrounding and enclosing him, moving quickly up his back and over his shoulders, then
heavy against his neck. Snow filled the space in front of him and piled up around the whole of
him. Paul, too, was swept downhill.
They remembered the avalanche survival lessons they had learned. Keep your head up. Try to
swim. Stay on top of the snow. But the snow was too powerful and they felt themselves rolling
like a load of clothes in a washing machine. When Scott finally came to rest, he was lying on his
left side and completely buried, skis and poles still attached.
注意：1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1:
Paul was luckier, ending up partially buried and probably surviving.
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Paragraph 2:
Recalling the terrible experience, Scott thanked his friend and the rescue team.
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参考答案：
Para1
Paul was luckier, ending up partially buried and probably surviving. So fortunate was he that
most of the snow had gone over his body and continued down the hill. In such a shallow burial, he
began to shake off the snow, scooped snow away with bare hands, and managed to pull himself
out. Looking around the world of snow, he desperately shouted Scott’s name but received no trace
of responses. Paul unzipped his parka and pulled out the phone to make the emergency call.
Shortly afterwards, the rescue team arrived. With great efforts, Paul and the team located Scott and
found him alive in an enclosed space, which ended the unthinkable accident with an incredible
survival.
Para2
Recalling the terrible experience, Scott thanked his friend and the rescue team. When buried
under snow in the enclosed space, Scott drifted between terror and panic, hoping that his friend
Paul was not buried so deep. He held on to that faint possibility like a rope which could pull him
to safety. He painstakingly took only tiny breaths, fighting to stay positive by focusing on this
breathing. Time ticked away slowly. Just as he was feeling himself fading away, the rescue team
arrived. In that one-in-a-million chance, they made it. With the dull sky clearing up, both Paul and
Scott breathed in the fresh air with abandon, feeling the rebirth of life.
【解析】
【分析】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了经验丰富的滑雪爱好者肯·斯科特和好友保罗结伴滑雪，突
遇雪崩后死里逃生的故事。
【详解】
1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“保罗比较幸运，部分被埋葬，很可能还活着。”可知，第一段可描
写保罗如何脱险，以及脱险后寻找好友和寻求救援。
②由第二段首句内容“回忆起那次可怕的经历，斯科特感谢了他的朋友和救援队伍。”可
知，第二段可描写当被埋在封闭空间的积雪下时，斯科特的心理活动及获救后的感激之情。
2.续写线索：结伴滑雪——突遇雪崩——寻求援助——获救——感激
3.词汇激活
行为类
1.到达：arrive in/reach
2.遇见：come across/meet
3.集中:focus on/concentrate on
情绪类
1.高兴的：exhilarated /pleased
2.惊恐：terror /panic
【点睛】
[高分句型1].Just as he was feeling himself fading away, the rescue team arrived. （as引导的时
间状语从句）
[高分句型2] With great efforts, Paul and the team located Scott and found him alive in an
enclosed space, which ended the unthinkable accident with an incredible survival.（由关系代词
which引导非限制性定语从句）
【模拟题 3】（2022·湖南邵阳·一模）
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
It was Christmas 1961. I was teaching in a small town where my twenty-seven third graders
eagerly expected the great day of gift-giving.
Each day the children made some new wonders-strings of popcorn, hand-made decorations,
and German bells made from wallpaper samples, which we hung from the ceiling. Through it all
she stayed indifferent, watching from a distance, seemingly miles away. I wondered what wouldhappen to this quiet child, once so happy, now so suddenly unsociable. I hoped the celebrations
would light her up. But nothing did. We made cards and gifts for mothers and dads, for sisters and
brothers, for grandparents, and for each other. At home the students made the fried marbles（油炸
玻璃弹子） and competed with one another to bring in the prettiest ones. As my gift to them, I
made each of my students a little bag for carrying their fried marbles. And I knew they had each
made something special for me.
The day of gift giving finally came. We oohed and aahed over our handwork as the presents
were exchanged. But she sat quietly watching. I had made a special bag for her, red and green with
white lace, hoping very much to see her smile. She opened it so slowly and carefully. I waited but
she turned away. I had not passed through the wall of isolation she had built around herself.
After school the children left in little groups, but she hesitated, watching them go out of the
door. I sat down in a child-sized chair to catch my breath, hardly knowing what was happening
when she came to me reaching out her hands, holding a small white box unwrapped and slightly
soiled, as though it had been held many times by unwashed, childish hands. She said nothing.
注意:1. 续写词数应为150左右。
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
“For me?” I asked with a weak smile.
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I carefully held out the chain.
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“For me?” I asked with a weak smile. She said nothing, nodding her head. I took the box and
carefully opened it. There inside, lay a golden chain. An idea suddenly occurred to me—she had
made it for her mother, who would never again hold her or brush her hair or share a funny story.
We couldn’t see any smile on her face after her mother passed away three weeks before. I stood
there, not knowing how to comfort her well.I carefully held out the chain. She took it, putting it on at the back of my neck. She stepped
back as if to see whether all was well. I looked down at the golden chain, then back at her, “Maria,
it is so beautiful. She would have loved it.” Neither of us could stop the tears. She threw herself
into my arms, her eyes filled with tears. At that moment I became her mother, for she had given
me the greatest gift of all: herself.
【解析】
【分析】
本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了1961年的圣诞节，作者在一个小镇上教三年级。班上27
个学生都在热切地准备着这个互赠礼物的好日子。其中一个女孩在整个过程中，都无动于
衷，只是远远地看着。我想知道这个安静的孩子发生了什么事，我为她做了一个特别的包
希望能看到她的笑容，但是却没有什么用。在赠送礼物的日子，她向我走来，手里拿着一
个白色的盒子，什么也没说。
【详解】
1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“给我的？我微微一笑。” 可知，第一段可描写作者在接受女孩赠送
的“金色链子”礼物之后，接下来女孩的行为举动。。
②由第二段首句内容“我小心地把链子递给他。” 可知，第二段可描写作者把金链子再次
还给女孩后，女孩接下来的行为举动。。
2.续写线索：接受礼物——打开看到礼物——女孩的行为——再次返还礼物——女孩的行
为——作者的感悟
3.词汇激活
行为类
突然意识到：occur to sb./ suddenly realize
伸出：held out/reach out/stretch out
充满着：filled with/full of
情绪类
①.喜欢：loved it/be fond of/like
②.安慰，缓解：comfort/relieve
【点睛】
[高分句型1]. she had made it for her mother, who would never again hold her or brush her hair or
share a funny story.（运用了who引导的非限制性定语从句，her mother在从句中作主语。）[高分句型2]. She took it, putting it on at the back of my neck.（运用了非谓语动词中现在分词
作伴随状语。）
[高分句型3].At that moment I became her mother, for she had given me the greatest gift of all:
herself.（运用了for引导的原因状语从句。）
【模拟题 4】（2022·江苏省苏州实验中学模拟预测）
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
“Mommy, don’t go,” my threeyearold son screamed as I walked to the door. My fifteenyear-
old leaned against the kitchen counter with his arms folded across his chest, not screaming, but
glaring at me as I pulled his little brother off my legs.
“Are you mad at me too?”
“You spend all your time taking care of other people’s kids, but what about us?” Dylan left
angrily.
I was shocked and a little hurt. How could my own child not understand that the work I was doing
was saving lives? Then the answer hit me. He didn’t know, because he had never seen what
Healing the Children actually did. Dylan had heard the stories of sick children, but had never once
looked into the eyes of a child and understood the hard truth—that without our help, the children
would likely die.
“Get dressed. You are going with me,” I said.
I spent the drive explaining the case of Hector to my son, who pretended to ignore me the entire
time. “He’s seven, only weighs thirty pounds and is very sick. He has a heart condition called
Tetralogy of Fallot, which could kill him. It is a miracle (奇迹) that he is still alive.”
I went on to explain that it took a team of volunteer medical staff to get Hector to the hospital
from his remote village and care for him while he was there. Still, Dylan seemed unimpressed.
We stopped at a convenience store for water and snacks. Dylan had one large and one small
Slurpee (思乐冰饮料). He said the small one was for Hector. I doubted whether the little guy
would be able to drink it, but remained silent. This was the first interest Dylan had shown in being
there. I wasn’t about to ruin it.
I stopped at the nurses’ station to check on Hector’s progress while Dylan went to his room.
Our patient was recovering physically, but the nurse was concerned that Hector was struggling
emotionally. She said, “Kids usually bounce back fast, but he hardly speaks and never smiles.”注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；
2．请按如下格式作答。
Imagine my surprise when I heard laughter from Hector’s room
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Para. 1:
Imagine my surprise when I heard laughter from Hector’s room. I entered and found Dylan
sitting on the edge of Hector’s bed wiping pieces of frozen drink from Hector’s mouth. Both boys
were giggling and Hector was apparently enjoying the company. I spent the rest of the day
speaking to doctors and watching my son playing with the special little boy. It was truly amazing
to watch them interact, as if it were the most natural thing in the world. Perhaps to the two of them
it was.
Para. 2:
On the way home that night, Dylan asked me several times whether Hector would be okay. I
told him this boy would get well but he had a hard road ahead of him. My son seemed to be lost in
thought for a while. Then he declared his decision to join Healing the Children as a volunteer to
help Hector and other children. I never thought that a moody teenager would take up the voluntary
work and never again complain about his mother’s crazy work schedule.
【解析】
【分析】
本文以一位志愿者将要离家去医院照顾患儿为线索展开，讲述了这名志愿者将离开家去照
顾病患儿童时，却遭到了自己孩子的不满和抱怨。作为母亲，她很难过和受伤，为了让孩
子了解自己工作的意义是为了拯救生命，她决定带儿子迪伦去医院亲自体验。没有想到，
迪伦很有爱心地照顾患儿赫克托，他们玩的很愉快。最后，经过思考，迪伦了解了母亲工
作的意义，为了帮助更过的病患儿，他也宣布加入“治愈儿童”组织，和妈妈一样成为一名志愿者。
【详解】
1.段落续写
①.由第一段首句内容“想象一下，当我听到赫克托房间里传来笑声时，我有多么惊讶”可
知，第一段可描写儿子迪伦耐心陪伴照顾患儿赫克托的情景，看着他们的热情互动，我很
有感触。
②由第二段首句内容“那天晚上在回家的路上，迪伦好几次问我赫克托会不会没事。”可
知，第二段可描写儿子担心赫克托的病情，经过思考，他了解了母亲工作的意义，想尽自
己的力量去照顾赫克托和更多的病患儿。因此，也宣布加入“治愈儿童”组织，成为一名
志愿者。
2.续写线索：儿子迪伦生气抱怨——带迪伦去医院——迪伦陪伴照顾患儿赫克托——迪伦
担心赫克托——迪伦思考——迪伦宣布成为志愿者
3.词汇激活行为类
①.进入：enter/come in
②.笑：giggle /smile
③.宣布：declare/announce
情绪类
①.惊讶：surprise /shock
②.情绪化的：moody/ temperamental
【点睛】
[高分句型1]It was truly amazing to watch them interact, as if it were the most natural thing in the
world. (运用了 as if引导的方式状语从句)
[高分句型2] I never thought that a moody teenager would take up the voluntary work and never
again complain about his mother’s crazy work schedule. (运用了连接词that引导的宾语从句)
【模拟题 5】（2022·湖南·长郡中学二模）
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Having struggled with financial difficulties for six months and failing to find a way out, I had
to close my technology writing business. Fortunately, I found a new job as a salesperson and soon
got a client. At the time, I wondered if it was too good to be true.
By the second month, something didn’t seem right, and I developed a bad feeling about theclient and the work. When the third month’s check didn’t arrive on time, I sent the client an e-mail
to find out what was going on. But there was no reply. Then I sent another e-mail, and another.
The check never arrived, and I never heard from the client again. With no hope in sight, I hit rock
bottom. Panic replaced cautious optimism along with my last self-confidence.
I hid myself from friends and locked myself in my room. One night, the phone rang. The call
was from Eric, a friend of mine from high school. When he was in high school, he told me many
times about his parents’ divorce and his loss of confidence in the college entrance examination.
During the difficult time, I gave him much comfort and encouragement. Later, he went to college
and was always grateful for what I had done.
After the greetings, I told my problems and challenges, hoping my friend would say
something comforting. What I didn’t expect was a string of sharp words. “What is wrong with
you? You can do anything you want to do,” he said. “You are a writer, so start writing. Write for
magazine.” “Write for magazine? Are you out of your mind? I don’t know the first thing about
writing for magazine, let alone write things that anyone would want to read. And I have to know
where I can send an application form-to what magazine and to what editor,” I shouted at him.
注意：1. 续写词数应为150左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Surprisingly, I felt a little better after the shouting.
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Surprisingly, I felt a little better after the shouting. After a short silence, Eric replied in a firm
voice. “I always remember what you said when I was in trouble. You said ‘No one can get you out
of trouble but yourself. ’ ” Hearing that, I was speechless and struck by the fact that it was easier
to convince others than to convince myself. Inspired by Eric’s words, I started searching formagazines the next day and finally found one that accepted online contributions with various
topics. Then I began to prepare my application form.
On finishing the application form I sent it to the editor. Luckily, two days later I received a
positive response and an invitation to write. At first, I only wrote articles I was expert in.
Gradually, I began trying new types. One day, much to my amazement, one of my articles
appeared on the first page of the magazine! Since then, I have been on my way to becoming an
excellent writer. That definitely should be credited to Eric. It was he who enlightened me and
helped me regain confidence to face challenges in my life.
【解析】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者由于经济困难结束了自己的技术写作业务，
找到一份新的销售工作，很快找到第一个客户，但后来客户杳无音信，在作者对生活感到
绝望时，高中时期的一个朋友Eric打电话来，高中时期作者在Eric困难时作者曾给过他很
多鼓励，Eric建议作者开始为杂志写作，作者从没有为杂志写过文章，认为Eric一定是疯
了。
1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“出乎意料的是，我在喊了一声之后感觉好多了。”可知，第一段可
描写Eric鼓励作者，作者受到启发开始联系杂志社。
②由第二段首句内容“填完申请表后，我就把它寄给了编辑。”可知，第二段可描写作者
收到杂志社的积极回复后开始写作并逐渐取得成功。
2.续写线索：
Eric鼓励——受到启发，开始行动——收到杂志邀请——逐渐成为优秀作家——自信面对
挑战
3.词汇激活
行为类
①回答：reply/answer
②鼓舞：inspire/encourage
③帮助某人做某事：help sb. do sth./assist sb. to do sth.
情绪类
①惊讶：amazement/astonishment
②自信：confidence/faith
[高分句型1]. I always remember what you said when I was in trouble. (由连接代词what引导的
宾语从句)[高分句型2]. Hearing that, I was speechless and struck by the fact that it was easier to convince
others than to convince myself. (由从属连词that引导同位语从句)
[高分句型3]. It was he who enlightened me and helped me regain confidence to face challenges
in my life. (强调句型)
【模拟题 6】（2022·湖南·周南中学模拟预测）
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一个完整的短文。
Almost all the possessions had been sold to buy food and clothing for the family. At last,
nothing was left but the pet lamb, Daisy. At the thought of parting with the little creature, Mrs.
Grant’s felt sad because the children loved it very much. Having struggled hard, she had to make
up her mind to sell the lamb. But she could not ask any child to go for the butcher. Finally, she
went herself with a heavy heart, dragging her leaden feet, and bargained with the butcher for the
sale of Daisy.
While the children were all playing with the lamb, the butcher and his boy came to the door. “
You see I am here for the lamb, ” said the butcher in a loud voice. Hearing this, one child ran to
her mother’s side, and asked what was happening in alarm. Mrs. Grant gently pushed the child
aside, bent down and was about to tell the truth.
“That’s my lamb now, Charlie! ” said the butcher’s boy in a playful tone, going up to Daisy
with a rope in his hand.
“No, it is not your lamb. It is ours! ” said Charlie, placing himself in front of it.
But the boy, pushing him aside, threw a rope round Daisy’s neck, and began to drag the little
creature away. The poor lamb bleated (咩咩叫) very sadly. The cry of grief which fell upon the
mother’s ears was too much for her, and her heart sank within her. In a moment, begging with
tearful eyes, the children were all around their mother with voices choking with sobs for their little
pet.
“Please tell your boy to stop a moment, ” she said in husky tones to the butcher. The boy, at a
word from the butcher, stopped dragging the lamb, and the little creature stopped its bleating.
In a trembling voice, Mrs. Grant explained to them how badly off they were after their father
died. She also added that the kind butcher had given the money for Daisy. With this money, she
could buy her children bread to eat.
注意：1.续写词数应为150词左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Para1:
But the more she explained, the stronger her children begged for Daisy.
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The butcher, who had been watching all, was touched in his heart.
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Paragraph 1:
But the more she explained, the stronger her children begged for Daisy. “ No!-No!-No! ” they
dashed to Daisy and threw their arms around her, begging, “ Please, mother! We would rather go
hungry than lose her! ” Hearing this, Mrs. Grant was in great sorrow, her heart bleeding. After all,
she clearly knew that the children had devoted so much love to Daisy and that Daisy was more
than a pet lamb to them; she was, in their eyes, a family member! Having struggled hard, she
turned to the butcher and decided that she would not sell Daisy and would return the money.
Paragraph 2:
The Butcher, who had been watching all, was touched in his heart. When Mrs. Grant took out
the money and gave it back, he just waved his hand and announced, “ I will not rob the children of
their pet! ” He approached the children, patted them on the shoulders gently and promised that he
would buy Daisy from their mother and then gave it back to them as a gift. The word left the
children standing stunned. Then, looking up at him, one asked seriously, “Sir, do you really mean
that?” The butcher just replied seriously, “ I mean every word of it. She is OUR Daisy. My boy
and I will come to see her occasionally. ” Hearing this, all the children gathered round and stroked
the pet, their little hearts filled with joy.
【解析】本文以宠物羊Daisy为线索展开，讲述了贫穷的Grant太太在家里缺衣少食的情况
下，决定卖掉孩子们的宠物羊Daisy。但当屠夫要带走Daisy时，孩子们非常难过，苦苦哀求，希望能留下宠物羊。屠夫见此情景，不忍心带走宠物羊，把它作为礼物送给孩子们的
故事。
1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“但她解释得越多，她的孩子们就越强烈地要求黛西。”可知，第一
段可描写孩子们的苦苦哀求以及Grant太太的伤心。
②由第二段首句内容“屠夫一直在注视着这一切，他的心被触动了。”可知，第二段可描
写屠夫不忍心带走宠物羊Daisy，把它作为礼物送给孩子们，孩子们很高兴。
2.续写线索：伤心——祈求——归还——赠与——高兴
3.词汇激活
行为类
①.祈求：beg/ask/pray for
②.归还：give back/return
情绪类
①.伤心：in great sorrow/very sad
②.高兴地：with joy/gladly/happily
[高分句型1]. Hearing this, Mrs. Grant was in great sorrow, her heart bleeding. (非谓语动词现在
分词作状语以及独立主格结构)
[高分句型2]. Having struggled hard, she turned to the butcher and decided that she would not sell
Daisy and would return the money. (非谓语动词现在分词的完成式作状语)
