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考点 38 读后续写 03 动
作描写突破（解析版）
【命题解读】
读后续写的写作过程中，成功的动作描写，可以交代人物的身份、地位，可以反映人
物心理活动的进程，可以表现人物的性格特征。
相反，空洞、笼统的描写会使内容缺乏生动性，使人物形象不丰满。人物的动作或简
单，或复杂，都不是一下子就能完成的，细心观察都能捕捉到最能体现人物特征的慢镜头
因此，在描写动作时，同学们要学会细化动作，把动作过程分解成一连串细微的动作，形
成动作链，写出动作的连贯性，这样才能使描写具有画面感，使人物更立体。
【思维导图】
动作链的重要性读后续写作文中动作描写没有头绪？不知道如何下手？不如拆解动作，构造动作链，
让你的动作描写既丰富又精彩！举个例子，何为构造动作链？我们先看一句高考样题范文。
He stopped the taxi, jumped in with the suitcase and told the driver, “Go to the police
station, please.”
这句话的意思是：他拦下了车，拿着箱子跳进了车里，然后对司机说，“请到警察局
去。”
其实，这句话只是描写了“上车”的动作，然而通过拆解，细致地展现了一个
动作下的组成部分。其本质是避免简单粗暴的使用一个动词概括整个动作，而是用 2-3个
动词组合进行描述。用一个公式进行总结以上例句，如下:
上车=拦车+上车+告诉目的地
再比如2017年高考真题中的一个优秀范文句子。
She would get off the car excitedly, laughing and dancing around.
这句话的意思是：她会兴奋地下车，又笑又跳。这句讲的是一个比较粗线条的妈妈，动作
描写完整地描述了这位妈妈下车时及下车后的表现，即：
下车=下车+笑+跳
这个训练过程，需要我们仔细观察，结合一丢丢的语文功底，并进行合理联想，并多
多积累动词。同时，这也为我们提供了两种构造动作链条的句式：
1. A, B and C（连词连接动词们）
2. 使用非谓语
A, B and C 结构
我们先看一下“A, B and C结构”。下面我用三个句子来说明这个结构，每个例子我将
停顿三秒钟，正在听这个课程的你，你可以抓住这宝贵的三秒钟，快速思考，如果是自己
来写，会怎么写？如果刚开始觉得有困难，可以先想中文思路。
第一句：“男孩们跳入湖中嬉戏”
想一想：跳入湖中，这个动作前面或后面会有哪些动作？跳入湖里嬉戏 = 冲向湖边 + 脱掉衣服 + 跳入水中
The boys rushed excitedly to the lake, took off their clothes and jumped into the water.（孩子
们兴奋地冲到湖边，脱下衣服，跳进了水里。）
第二句，“她抱住儿子”（停顿三秒钟）
想一想：抱住儿子，这个动作前面或后面会有哪些动作？
抱住儿子 = 冲向前 + 蹲下 + 一把抱住
She dashed forward, knelt down and gathered her son into her arms.（她向前冲过去，跪下
来，把儿子抱在怀里。）
第三句，“这个歌手唱歌”
想一想：歌手唱歌，这个动作前面或后面会有哪些动作？
歌手唱歌 = 扫视观众 + 深吸一口气 + 开始演唱
The singer glanced at the audience, took a deep breath and began to sing.（歌手瞥了看观众，
深吸了一口气，开始唱歌。
使用非谓语
下面仍然用三种方式和三个句子来说明这种描写动作的句子结构，每个例子我仍然停顿三
秒钟。
第一种句子模式：-ing现在分词,凸显同一对象同时发生不同的动作。
第1个例句，“老人静坐”
想一想：老人静坐，这个动作前面或后面会有哪些动作？（停顿三秒钟）好！我来公布参
考答案。
老人静坐=坐在夕阳下 + 看报纸 + 听广播
The old man sat under the sunset, reading the newspaper and listening to the radio.第二种句子模式：having done 表现动作先后关系
第2个例句，“没有买到票”
想一想：“买票”这个动作前面或后面会有哪些动作？
没有买到票= 排了很久队 + 被告知票卖完了
Having queued for 3 hours, he was told that the ticket had been sold out.
第三种句子模式. -ed过去分词凸显被动
第3个例句，“孩子们哭了”
想一想：“哭”这个动作前面或后面会有哪些动作？或者因为什么原因让孩子哭
感动哭了= 被感动 + 哭了
Deeply moved by the story, the children began to cry.
【模拟题 1】（2022·广东深圳·一模）
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Last March, Margarito drove to visit his mother who lived in the countryside. When he set off
for home, Margarito’s mother looked at the dark sky and noticed the sign of a coming storm.
Worried about her son’s safety, she told him to drive as carefully as possible on his way home and
he promised to give her a call upon his arrival.
With his mother’s words in mind, Margarito approached the main road carefully. Soon, it
started to rain heavily. Eager to get home, Margarito began to drive faster. Two hours later, he
came to a bumpy mountain road that had been flooded by a creek (小溪). Margarito, driving a
four-wheel drive truck, figured that he would be OK. At that moment, he didn’t realize that such a
thought would be a big mistake.
It was halfway across the creek that an unfortunate incident took place: The rushing waters
grabbed hold of his vehicle, pushing it off the road and sending it down a rocky creek bed. The
truck finally stopped some 80 feet away. Margarito’s problems only grew from there as the waterhad somehow positioned the truck into the creek bank at a 45-degree angle, making it difficult for
him to open the driver’s side door. Injured and trapped inside with the muddy water rising quickly,
Margarito was certain he was going to die. Shaking with fear, he was at a loss about what to do.
On the road right behind Margarito were a delivery worker named Steve and his nephew
Mike, who were on the way to deliver furniture to customers in the countryside. They witnessed
the horrible incident, and when Margarito’s truck came to rest in the middle of the overflowing
creek, Steve quickly began to take action. First, he grabbed a rope from the back of his vehicle and
used it to ensure he could safely approach the truck.
注意：
1. 续写词数应为150左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Next, he turned to Mike and yelled, “Give me a rock!”
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参考答案：
Next, he turned to Mike and yelled, “Give me a rock!” With the rock, he hit the window over
and over but had little success. Steve then shouted to Margarito to move away from the window.
He balanced himself on the truck, leaned back and threw the rock at the window. Finally, the glass
broke and Steve kicked in the remaining pieces of glass. Relieved, Margarito reached out for
Steve’s hand and was rescued. The two men escaped and returned to safety.
Margarito was about to thank Steve and Mike when the mobile phone in his jacket pocket
rang. With trembling hands, Margarito took out the phone and pressed it to his ear. His mother’s
anxious voice came over the phone, “Are you home yet? Everything’s good?” Tears welled up in
his eyes at the familiar sound of concern. Margarito choked up as he explained the accident to his
mom and comforted her. Hanging up the phone, he turned to Steve and Mike and sincerelythanked both of them. Cold as the rain was, great warmth filled his heart like never before.
【解析】
【导语】
本文以玛格丽托开车去看望住在乡下的母亲为线索展开，讲述了去年3月，玛格丽托去看
望住在乡下的母亲，返程途中遭遇到了暴风雨，他的车被卡在山路上的一条小溪中间，他
受伤了并被困在里面，这时，送货员史蒂夫和他的侄子迈克目睹了这可怕的一幕，他们把
玛格丽托从车里救了出来。玛格丽托对两位营救他的恩人非常感激。
【详解】
1.段落续写
①由第一段首句内容“接着，他转向迈克喊道：“给我一块石头！”。”可知，第一段可
描写送货员史蒂夫看到玛格丽托被困在车里，立刻想到了必须马上用石头砸破车窗户，把
玛格丽托营救出来，详细叙述他营救玛格丽托的过程。
②由第二段首句内容“玛格丽托正要感谢史蒂夫和迈克，这时他夹克口袋里的手机响
了。”可知，第二段可描写玛格丽托被救后接到了他母亲的电话，电话中他向母亲讲述了
刚才自己经历的惊险一幕，挂断电话后，玛格丽托向史蒂夫和迈克表达的真诚的感谢之情。
2.续写线索：史蒂夫砸车窗——玛格丽托获救——玛格丽托接到母亲电话——玛格丽托表
达感谢
3.词汇激活
行为类
①喊叫：shout / yell out
②营救，得救：rescue /save
③解释：explain /interpret/illustrate
情绪类
①焦急的：anxious / worried
②真诚地：sincerely /honestly
【点睛】
【高分句型1】
Margarito choked up as he explained the accident to his mom and comforted her.(运用了as引导
的时间状语从句)
【高分句型2】
Cold as the rain was, great warmth filled his heart like never before. (运用了形容词+as +主语+系动词倒装句型)
【模拟题 2】（2022·山东临沂·一模）
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
As a nurse at the cancer care center where I’ve worked for seven years, I’ll do almost
anything to make a patient feel better. But when I met Patty at the center, in 2011, she didn’t want
my help.
She was a tiny 44-year-old single mom battling an aggressive head and neck cancer. Unlike
many of our other patients, Patty was alone during her treatment, but no matter what I did. I
couldn't get her to open up. She just buried herself in book or pulled a blanket over her head to
fend off conversation.
Eventually I hit on a reliable way to make Patty smile: mentioning her nine-year-old son,
Stephen. She'd tell me how well he did in school, how he'd been selected to read a poem he wrote
at a local bookstore. She desperately wanted to live for him. With three kids myself, I totally
understood how she felt.
After a year and a half of treatment, in August 2012, Patty was told her cancer had spread,
and I learned she wouldn't live much longer. My first thought was, “What's going to happen to
Stephen?”
Nurses at the center shared stories at their meetings about how bright and unusual the boy
was. but no one seemed to know how to resolve the issue of what would happen to him when his
mom died. My husband, Michael, who too works at the center, started hearing about Patty and
Stephen.
One morning in October, Patty quietly slipped away. Michael and I picked Stephen up after
school, drove him to a nearby park, and sat on a bench by a pond. I finally managed to say,
“Stephen, we're sorry to have to tell you this, but your mom came to an end this morning.” The
sound that came out of his mouth was like nothing I'd ever heard before. This skinny little guy sat
between the two of us and just wailed (哀号) and wailed. It was as if his whole world was just
destroyed.
注意：
1.续写词数应为150左右；
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Something inside me was telling me what to do.
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Finally, we took him home with us.
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参考答案：
Something inside me was telling me what to do. I wanted to help the poor boy. Although I had
three children of my own and a modest family income, I decided to adopt the boy. I told my
husband what I thought, and he immediately agreed, saying, "That's exactly what I wanted to tell
you." I told the boy we would give him a home and take care of him for his mother. The boy
nodded, crying.
Finally, we took him home with us. We introduced Stephen to our three children and told them
that he would live with us in the future. My children happily accepted and warmly took Steven to
visit his new home and discussed making room for Steven. I was glad that my children were so
kind and willing to share everything with other children. Stephen soon integrated into our family
and lived a happy life with us.
【解析】
【导语】
本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者在癌症护理中心作护士，Patty是一位患有脑癌的病人，
她去世后留下了她的儿子Stephen，Stephen知道自己的妈妈去世后哭得很厉害。
【详解】
1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“我内心的某种东西在告诉我该怎么做。”可知，第一段可描写作者
具体的打算，也就是要收养这个男孩。
②由第二段首句内容“最后，我们带他和我们一起回家”可知，第二段可描写作者带
Stephen回家后所发生的事情。
2.续写线索：决定收养——告诉丈夫——Stephen同意——孩子们接受
3.词汇激活行为类
①决定：decide/determine
②告诉：tell/inform
③点头：nod/give the nod
④接受：accept/take
情绪类
①高兴地：happily/delightedly
②热情地：warmly/fervidly
【点睛】
[高分句型1]Although I had three children of my own and a modest family income, I decided to
adopt the boy.（由although引导的让步状语从句）
[高分句型2]I told my husband what I thought, and he immediately agreed, saying, "That's exactly
what I wanted to tell you."（由what引导的宾语从句，现在分词作状语，what引导的表语从
句）
【模拟题 3】（2022·江苏南通·一模）
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Thank you, Ma’am
Just an act of kindness changed a boy’s life forever.
She was a large woman with a large purse that had everything in it but a hammer and nails. It
had a long strap, and she carried it across her shoulder. It was about eleven o’clock at night, dark
and she was walking along, when a boy ran up behind her and tried to seize her purse.
But the boy’s weight and the weight of the purse combined caused him to lose his balance.
He fell on his back on the sidewalk and his legs flew up. The large woman simply turned around,
reached down, picked the boy up by his shirt front, and shook him until his teeth rattled（发出格
格声）.
After that the woman said, “Pick up my pocketbook, boy, and give it here.” She still held him
tightly. But she bent down enough to permit him to pick up her purse. Then she said, “Now ain’t
you ashamed of yourself?”
By that time two or three people passed, stopped, turned to look, and some stood watching.
She did not release him. “Lady, I’m sorry,” whispered the boy.“Um-hum! Your face is dirty. Ain’t you got anybody home to tell you to wash your face?”
“No’m” said the boy.
“Then it will get washed this evening,” said the large woman, starting up the street, dragging
the frightened boy behind her.
He looked as if he were fourteen or fifteen in tennis shoes and blue jeans.
The woman said, “You ought to be my son. I would teach you right from wrong. Least I can
do right now is to wash your face. Are you hungry?”
“No’m,” said the being-dragged boy. “I just want you to turn me loose.”
But the woman continued to drag him up the street. When she got to her door, she dragged
the boy inside.
注意：1. 续写词数应为150左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
“Go to that sink and wash your face,” said the women.
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When they had finished eating, she got up and took out ten dollars from the purse.
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参考答案：
“Go to that sink and wash your face,” said the woman. The water dripping from his face, the boy
looked at her. There was a long pause. After he had dried his face, the boy turned around,
wondering what next. Without saying anything, the woman left and walked to the kitchen. She
heated some beans and ham, and set the table. The woman did not ask the boy anything about
where he lived, or anything else that would embarrass him. Instead, as they ate, she told him a lot
about her job.
When they had finished eating, she got up and took out ten dollars from the purse. “Now
here, take this. From now on, I hope you will behave yourself.” She led him to the door and
opened it. She looked out into the street as he went down the steps. The boy wanted to say
something other than, “Thank you, ma’am,” , but before the boy moved his lips, the large womanshut the door. With tearful eyes, the boy bowed to the door and skipped away.
【解析】
【导语】
本文以人物为线索，主要讲了一个善良的女士将一个要偷她手提包的男孩带回家并且照顾
他的故事。
【详解】
1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“‘去那个水槽里洗脸吧。’女士说。”可知，第一段可描写男孩洗
脸，女士准备食物，两个相处的经过。
②由第二段首句内容“他们吃完饭后，她站起来，从钱包里掏出了10美元。”可知，第二
段可描写女士帮助男孩，男孩感谢女士的经过。
2.续写线索：男孩洗脸——男孩好奇——女士给男孩准备食物——交谈——女士帮助男孩
——男孩感谢
3.词汇激活
行为类
①.转身：turn around/face about/turn about
②.走向厨房：walk to the kitchen/go to the kitchen
③.关门：shut the door/close the door
情绪类
①.好奇：wonder/ to be very surprised
②.感谢：thank you/showing his appreciation/show his gratitude/be grateful
【点睛】
[高分句型1]. The water dripping from his face, the boy looked at her.. （运用了独立主格结
构）
[高分句型2]. So he climbed up the levee towards John slowly, who was ready to help.（运用了
who引导的非限制性定语从句）
【模拟题 4】（2022·广东光明·二模）
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
The Nunes’s family lived in a friendly community near the woods. It was a normal
Wednesday afternoon Mom Araceli Nunes returned home from selling food and drinks along the
roadside in Plantersville, Texas. Her business had been fairly profitable and she was happy to seeher husband preparing dinner in the kitchen and her 3-year-old son, Christopher Ramirez, playing
in the yard. However, when she turned to unload her car, she didn’t notice the kid followed a
neighbor’s dog into the woods.
When they couldn’t find Christopher, the panicky family called for help, and within a few
hours, 48 different agencies arrived to comb through the area around their home. Their entire
community started to help find Christopher. Some walked into the forest and others drove farther
away.
After days with no sign of the kid, rescuers feared the worst, but Araceli never stopped
hoping for her son’s safe return. At long last, after four long days and nights, the sheriff received a
phone call from a man named Tim Halfin.
Tim Halfin’s house was about three miles away. He had heard of the missing boy when he
returned home from a business trip. He didn't think a three-year-old could walk that far to where
he lived. However, as all the previous searching efforts were in vain, he decided to try his luck
around his own house.
Not long after he went out into the woods, he was surprised by what came into his sight.
There was Christopher! Aside from being dehydrated and very hungry, the kid was completely
unharmed. He was found outside the range where authorities were looking for him, so it’s pretty
amazing that Tim discovered him.
注意：
1.续写的词数应为150左右；
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
When Tim picked him up, the kid was still conscious.
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Christopher spent two days recovering at Texas Children’s Hospital before he was taken
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参考答案：Para. 1:
When Tim picked him up, the kid was still conscious. He wasn’t shaking, neither was he
nervous. Tim wrapped the kid with his own jacket and took him home. Not knowing the phone
number of the kid’s home, he called the sheriff, who informed Araceli in no time. On getting the
exciting news, Christopher’s family immediately rushed to Tim’s house. Araceli couldn’t wait to
wrap her little one up in her arms and hug him tightly! Tears of happiness rolled down her cheeks.
Para. 2:
Christopher spent two days recovering at Teras Children’s Hospital before he was taken
home. Seeing Christopher running around the house, the family was extremely grateful to all the
agencies and volunteers, who had sacrificed their time to look for Christopher and shared their
panic and worries. They were especially thankful to Tim who didn’t give up hope when chances
seemed to be slim. They knew it well that they couldn’t repay those kind people for what they had
done but they decided to pay it forward by lending a helping hand to whoever might be in need of
it.
【解析】
【导语】
本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了妈妈Araceli Nunes在德克萨斯州的Plantersville的路边卖完
食物和饮料回到家发现三岁的儿子Christopher Ramirez不见了，这一家人惊慌失措地打电
话求助，几个小时后，48家不同的机构赶到现场，对他们家周围的区域进行了彻底的搜查。
最后是Tim Halfin找到了孩子。
【详解】
1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“Tim把他抱起来的时候，孩子还清醒着。”可知，第一段可描写
Tim发现孩子之后的事情，他报了警，警察通知了孩子的家人。
②由第二段首句内容“Christopher在泰拉斯儿童医院休养了两天才被带回家。”可知，第
二段可描写Christopher获救后的事情，以及家人对Tim的感谢。
2.续写线索：Tim找到Christopher——报警——家人赶到Tim家——Christopher住院——
Christopher家人感谢志愿者——感谢Tim
3.词汇激活
①行为类
赶到：rush to/hurry to决定：decide /determine
寻找：look for / search for
②情绪类
感谢：be grateful/be thankful/show gratitude to
快乐：happiness / joy
【点睛】
[高分句型1] They knew it well that they couldn’t repay those kind people for what they had done
but they decided to pay it forward by lending a helping hand to whoever might be in need of it.
(运用了what引导宾语从句)
[高分句型2] Seeing Christopher running around the house, the family was extremely grateful to
all the agencies and volunteers, who had sacrificed their time to look for Christopher and shared
their panic and worries. (运用了who引导非限制性定语从句)
【模拟题 5】（2022·福建漳州·二模）
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Teen Becomes A Local Hero
When Sydney Raley headed into her weekend shift on Saturday, December 18, she likely
expected to do more of the same: Stand at the drive-through window, take orders over the headset,
and hand each customer their meal with a smile.
In fact. that’s exactly how it started. Sydney Raley has been working at MC Donald’s for
about seven months and so far, it’s been her typical after-school job. The day had been mostly
normal -making coffee, making drinks, and going into the lunch rush.
But a few hours into her shift. things took a dramatic turn. After handing a customer some of
their food, Sydney let them know that more would be coming as soon as it was ready. But just
seconds later, she noticed a terrible look of panic spread across the woman’s face. Then came the
coughing. She was coughing like crazy and was speechless. Her daughter was in the passenger
seat and looked extremely confused and frightened.
Sydney immediately knew she was choking. The first aid training Sydney received more than
four years ago hit her. Most 15-year-olds might panic at the sight of this. But not Sydney. Instead,
the teen remained calm and quickly shouted to both her manager and the woman’s daughter to dial
911. Then, she dove through the drive-through window and came to the rescue.The teen pushed the driver’s side door forcefully open and got the choking woman to her
feet. Then she dug down deep into her memory bank to recall everything she learned from her Red
Cross babysitter class-which she’d taken four years earlier. All that training of how to use the
Heimlich maneuver(哈姆立克急教法)immediately kicked in. Still, she had never actually had to
use the life-saving technique before, and after a few tries, it wasn’t quite working. Luckily, another
customer was just a few feet away in the parking lot.
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1.续写词数应为150左右；
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
She shouted to that man for assistance.
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The story has made headlines throughout the country.
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参考答案：
She shouted to that man for assistance. The man heard Sydney’s cry and rushed over. Sydney
briefed him on the situation, and the man did not hesitate to help the woman. He used the same
Heimlich maneuver, but harder than Sydney. And happily, it worked this time, after which the
woman threw up the food stuck in her throat and began gasping for air, and she was saved. The
woman and her daughter thanked Sydney and the man. Sydney was thrilled to have saved the lady.
The story has made headlines throughout the country. All the media praised Sydney and
the man for their bravery, and how calmly she performed the Heimlich maneuver in an emergency.
From this story, people realized that everyone should master the Heimlich maneuver in case
someone around them choke, so the media called for schools to train students to master skills of
the Heimlich maneuver. Some schools have invited doctors and nurses from the emergency
department of the hospital to explain the operation of the Heimlich maneuver to students, which
has been well received by parents and the community.【解析】
【导语】
本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了Sydney Raley在汽车餐厅上周末班时遇到一位女士被食物
噎住了，她第一时间用哈姆立克急教法对女士施救，但是她以前从未在真实情况下用过这
种施救法，所以效果并不好，幸运的是，另一位顾客就在几英尺外的停车场里。
【详解】
1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“她向那个人大声呼救。”可知，第一段可描写Sydney和那位男士一
起救那位女士。
②由第二段首句内容“这个故事成了全国各地的头条新闻。”可知，第二段可描写Sydney
的故事所引起的社会反响。
2.续写线索：男人施救——得救——感激——赞赏——呼吁
3.词汇激活
行为类
①运用：use/apply
②救：save/rescue
③赞扬：praise/compliment
④呼吁：call for/appeal to
情绪类
①高兴地：happily/delightedly
②兴奋的：thrilled/excited
【点睛】
[高分句型1]And happily, it worked this time, after which the woman threw up the food stuck in
her throat and began gasping for air, and she was saved.(由“介词+关系代词which”引导的非限
制性定语从句)
[高分句型2]Some schools have invited doctors and nurses from the emergency department of the
hospital to explain the operation of the Heimlich maneuver to students, which has been well
received by parents and the community.(由关系代词which引导的非限制性定语从句)
【模拟题 6】（2022·广东·执信中学模拟预测）
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。I love to play the piano and I greatly enjoy performing my songs, so when the annual winter
recital was canceled, I was disappointed. I had looked forward to it for a long time and had already
prepared two of my best songs.
My mom had a wonderful idea, however, to turn this disappointing letdown into something
worthwhile. “You can perform your songs at Carriage House Senior Living,” my mom suggested
brightly. “I’m sure the seniors there who do not have families visit them that often, would really
appreciate the music and you could play more than just two songs.”
I immediately thought this was a great idea. One of the things I did not like about the recitals
was that I was limited to playing just a couple of songs. Playing the piano at Carriage House
seemed like a win-win situation because not only would I get to play more songs, but I would also
have the chance to cheer up the residents there with some lively tunes.
My mom called Carriage House and made arrangements for me to perform. In the coming
days, I worked especially hard to polish up fifteen pieces that I thought the crowd would enjoy,
including many old classics.
When the much-anticipated day finally arrived, my family and I drove to Carriage House.
Walking through the enormous double doors, we stepped into an entryway that overlooked the
spacious grand dining room. Right at the entrance to the dining room stood the piano as if it were
just waiting to make some music to liven the place up a bit. At nearly every table several gray-
haired women or men were seated enjoying their dinner and the company that the crowded room
provided. Despite the conversations going on at various tables though, isolation hung like a dark
cloud in the room.
Almost immediately, we were greeted by an old woman with a walker who introduced herself
as Phyllis in charge of Carriage House. She welcomed me and led me to the stage.
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1. 续写词数应为150左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
As I sat down on the bench, I pressed a key on the piano and was surprised to hear no sound.
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参考答案：
As I sat down on the bench, I pressed a key on the piano and was surprised to hear no sound.
Feeling as if the whole world was watching me, I was struck dead with embarrassment. How
could I perform the song without the piano? I was on pins and needles when Phyllis slowly made
her way to the front of the crowd of dinners and announced in a comforting tone, “This girl has
come to sing for us but the piano seems to be a little nervous.” Almost immediately, there was
scattered applause and several people stepped forward to help me plug in the piano and set the
microphone. With everything ready, I took a deep breath and commenced my performance.
Nervousness melted away and I started to enjoy the performance with the old. One woman
got up and began to animatedly dance about the room. Some of the people swayed in their chairs
to the beat of the music while others tapped theirs toes. The performance ended up with a storm of
applause from the crowd. I realized that it was far better than a piano recital because almost
everyone seemed to truly appreciate my music and I’ m proud that I have the power to spread
kindness to them. It ended up being a blessing in disguise that the recital was canceled, leading to
me sharing the gift of music with those who needed it most.
【解析】
【导语】
本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者喜欢弹钢琴，也非常喜欢表演自己的歌曲，所以当年
度冬季独奏会被取消时，作者很失望。然而，妈妈提议去 Carriage House为老年人表演时，
作者欣然同意并为之积极的做准备。
【详解】
1.段落续写：
由第一段首句内容“当我坐在长凳上时，我按下了钢琴的一个键，奇怪的是没有听到任何
声音。”可知，第一段可描写作者表演时发现钢琴没有声音的内心的紧张以及问题解决后
大家对作者的鼓励。
由第二段首句内容“紧张的情绪消失了，我开始喜欢上了和老人一起的表演。”可知，第二段可描写作者的演奏给老人带来的快乐和作者的感受。
2.续写线索：演出时钢琴出问题——紧张不已——老人鼓励——紧张消失——融入音乐
——感悟
3.词汇激活
行为类
①表演：perform /show
②.宣布：announce /declare
情绪类
①.尴尬：embarrassment /awkward
②.紧张的：nervous /intense/ be on pins and needles
【点睛】
[高分句型1]. I was on pins and needles when Phyllis slowly made her way to the front of the
crowd of dinners and announced in a comforting tone（运用了when引导的时间状语从句）
[高分句型2] I realized that it was far better than a piano recital because almost everyone seemed
to truly appreciate my music. （运用了由关系代词that引导的宾语从句）
