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2015 年 12 月大学英语四级考试写作真题答案与详解（第 1 套）
审题思路
这是一篇四级考试中常见的议论文。要求考生就一句格言进行论述。这句格言 listening is more important than talking. “倾
听比谈论更重要。”措辞简单，意思明了，考生比较容易把握，因此写起来并不难。写作时，考生应该将重点放在第二段举
例阐释倾听比谈论更重要的原因上。联系实际分析可知，其原因主要有:倾听是交际之规则，只有善于倾听才能表达对别人
的尊重，同时倾听对听者自身也不无裨益。
写作提纲
一、阐述“倾听比谈论更重要”的内涵:倾听别人的意见比表达自己的想法重要得多（paying attention to others’ opinions is much
more important than expressing one’s own words)
二、分析原因：1、倾听可以表达对他人的尊重（listening shows your respect for others)
2、倾听还可以使听者受益（benefit yourself)
三、总结概述：l、倾听在很多场合比谈论重要得多（listening truly outweighs talking on many occasions)
2、我们需要掌握一些沟通技巧（master some communication skills)
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Listening Is More Important than Talking
①Nowadays an old saying, “Listening is more important
than talking”， comes into vogue. ② The saying tells
us the true essence of communication with others in the① 开门见山，描述现象:现在“倾听比谈论更重
society, which means paying attention to others’ opinions要 ”这一格言流行起来。
is much more important than expressing one’s own② 顺承第一句，阐释“倾听比谈论更重要”的内
words. 涵:倾听别人的意见比表达自己的想法重要得
多。
③As for me, there are two reasons accounting for
③ 使 用 As for me, there. are two reasons
the correctness of this principle. ④To start with, listening
accounting for…引出原因。
shows your respect for others. In such a competitive
④⑤使用 To start with…Furthermore…具体列
society, willingness to listen can make you gain trust and
举不同的原因，层次分明。
friendship, which is the basic rule of socialization. A
⑥用 According to what is said above … 总结
talkative person without ear is doomed to be alienated. ⑤
论述。
Furthermore, listening can really benefit yourself. There
⑦使用倒装句，强调倾听的重要性。
is no denying that you are the one to make choices in
your life. However, a variety of ideas from others will
definitely enrich your mind and present some
enlightenment to your future actions.
⑥According to what is said above, listening truly
outweighs talking on many occasions. In modem society,
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倾听比谈论更重要
如今,“倾听比谈论更重要”这一格言流行起来。.这句格言道出了在社会中与人交往的真诗:倾听别人的意见比表达自己的想
法重要得多。
就我而言，有两个原因可以解释该准则的正确性。首先，倾听可以表达对他人的尊重。在这样一个竞争激烈的社会，乐于
倾听可以为自己赢得信任和友谊，而这恰恰是我们社交的基本准则。一个夸夸其谈而不善于倾听的人注定要被孤立，此外,
倾听可以使自己受益。毋庸置疑，你是自己命运的主宰然而，他人的不同观点肯定会丰富你的头脑，并为今后的行动带来
启迪。
综上所述，在多场合，倾听确实比谈论更重要。在现代社会中，我们需要掌握一些沟通技巧。我们只有认识到倾听的重要性，才能过上更好的生活。
2015 年 12 月大学英语四级考试写作真题答案与详解（第 2
套）
这是一篇四级考试中常见的议论文。此次话题 lifelong learning(终身学习)在考生日常生活中是比较常见的，
因此写起来难度不大。考生应该将重点放在第二段阐释终身学习的重要性上。尤其可以结合当今信息时代涌
现的一些新事物、新现象，比如从近几年出现的网店、打车软件等展开讨论，从而使论证有理有据，避免空
洞说理。
一、引出话题：终身学习很重要(the importance of lifelong learning)
二、论证重要性： 在信息时代， 必须通过不断学习， 紧跟时代步伐(keep pace with the times through
ceaselessleaning)
两个例让：
l．使用打车软件(a Taxi App)的出租车司机比不用软件的司机挣得多
2．一个开网店的家庭主妇甚至比白领职员挣得多(out．e 锄 a white．collar worker)
三、深化主题、总结全文：活到老、学到老；只有不断学习，才能在迅速发展的社会中实现自身潜能(achieve
ourpotential)，生活得更好(1ive a better life)
俗话说得好：活到老，学到老。因此，学习是一种态度，无关乎年龄。只有通过不断学习，我们才能在当
今迅速发展的社会中发挥自身潜能，生活得更好。2015 年 12 月大学英语四级考试写作真题答案与详解（第 3
套）
参考范文：
Part ⅠWriting
这是一篇四级考试中常见的议论文.话题围绕“Never go out there to see what happens，go out
there to make things happen.”这句话展开，要求考生进行评论，同时在题目要求中也明确给出
了作文主题 the importance of being participants rather than mere onlookers in life.考生应该明确
这一主题，并围绕其展开论述.
一、点明主题：不做看客，要做实践者(being participants instead of onlookers in life)
二、分析原因
三、提出问题和建议
主题词汇
put…into practice 将……付诸实践 carry out 执行；实现
gain 获得 accumulate 积累
gradually 逐渐地 make a progress 取得进步
theory 理论 action 行动
would rather…than 比起……更情愿……
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Part Ⅰ Writing
审题思路
这是一篇四级考试中常见的议论文。此次通过漫画所呈现出的话题 phone (手机）是考生日常生活中熟
悉 的话题，因此写起来并不难。考生应该将重点放在第二段阐述手机与日常学习的关系上。联系实际分析可
知二 者关系为:手机为日常学习带来了便利条件，但不能完全取代校园学习。
写作提纲
一、提出观点：提出观点:手机在学习中虽然重要但并非必不可少(play an important but not indispensable role)
二、论证观点：1、学生自身应具有很好的知识储备(have a good command of)
2、我们的个人知识（personal knowledge)促进了手机的发展
三、总结观点：l、过度依赖手机弊大于利（over-dependence on phones does more harm than good)
2、要平衡好手机与知识学习的关系（balance the relationship between phones and study)
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The Role of Phones in Study ① 描述图片: 孩子认为有手机就不需要
①
去上学了。
What the drawing vividly depicts is that a pupil asks
② 示漫画隐含的信息: 很多学生过于依
his mother why he is going to school since his phone
already knows everything . ② 赖手机。
The picture illustrates that
some students are highly dependent on their phones, ③出观点： 手机在学习中虽然重要，
但 并非必不可少。
overlooking the importance of personal study . ③
However, as far as I am concerned, phones play an ④承上启下， 论证观点。
⑤⑥ 使 用 in the first place ...， in the second
important but not indispensable role in students’
learning. place...从两个方面进行论证，层次分明。
④ There is no denying that mobile phones have ⑦⑧ 针对上述论证， 总结观点， 提出
建议。
brought much convenience , but we are not supposed to
rely on them too much in the process of study . ⑤ In the
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first place , we should have a good command of
be highly dependent on… 高度依赖…
knowledge on our own to cope with various situations
without phones at hand. ⑥ In the second place, it is ouroverlook 忽视， 忽略
personal knowledge that promotes the development ofindispensable 必不可少的；
phones . Without the basic education at school , phones
be supposed to … 应该…
would not be invented.
have a good command of … 很好地掌握…
⑦ All in all, over-dependence on phones does more at hand 在手边
harm than good . ⑧Therefore, we should properly
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手机在学习中的作用
漫画生动地描述了一个小学生问他的母亲，既然他的手机已经无所不知，为什么还要去上学。这幅漫画揭
示了这样一个现象:一些学生高度依赖手机,而忽视了个人学习的重要性。然而，我认为，手机在学生们的学习中
虽然重要但并非必不可少。
毫无疑问，手机给我们带来了很多便利，但是在学习过程中，我们不应该过度依赖手机。首先,我们自身应
该 具有很好的知识储备以应对没有手机在手边时的各种情况。其次，正是我们的个人知识促进了手机的发展。如
果没有学校的基础教育，就没有手机的问世。
总而言之，过度依赖手机弊大于利。因此，我们应该合理地平衡手机与学习的关系。只有这样我们才能够从学习过程中获得最大的收益。
2015 年 6 月大学英语四级考试写作真题答案与详解（第 2 套）
Part Ⅰ Writing
审题思路
这是一篇四级考试中常见的议论文。此次通过漫画所呈现出的话题 computer(电脑）是考生日常生活中
耳熟能详的话题，因此写起来并不难。行文中,考生应将重点放在第二段阐述电脑与日常生活的关系上联系
实际分析可知，二者关系为：电脑为日常生活提供了便利，但不能完全占据人们的日常生活。
写作提纲
一、提出观点：电脑在日常生活中虽然重要但并非必不可少(an important but not indispensable role)
一、论证观点：1、过度沉迷于电脑对我们的健康不利（exert a negative impact on our health)
2、过度使用电脑会将我们隔离在社交圈之外（isolate us from the social circles)
三、总结观点：l、电脑确实改善了我们的生活（really promote our life)
2、不应该在电脑上花费过多的时间而舍弃享受美好的生活（should not spend too much timeon
it at the expense of savoring our good life)
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This Modern Life 1 对漫画进行描述:一天当中人们无时无刻不
① In the picture is a person using his computer al l 在使用电脑。
day, whether he is at work, at home, playing or in his 2 揭示漫画隐含的信息：电脑现在深深地渗透
sleep.② This drawing vividly depicts a common 到我们的日常生活中。
phenomenon that computers nowadays deeply penetrate 3 使用 from my perspective 提出观点：电脑
在日常生 活中虽然重要但并非必不可少。
into our daily life and we can not do without it even for a
4 承上启下，论证观点。
minute.③ However, from my perspective, computers
⑤⑥使用 to start with 和 furthermore,从两个方
play an important but not indispensable role in our
面展开论证，层次分明。
modem life .
⑦⑧使用in conclusion 和 nevertheless 总结观
④ I t i s true tha t computers make ou r lif e
点并提出建议。
convenient and provide instant assistance. But it is not a
necessity.⑤ To start with, excessive addiction to加 分亮点
computers may exert penetrate into 渗入，渗透 ；
a negative impact on our health. Instead of taking
from one’s perspective 在某人看来；
exercise in our spare time, we may be intrigued by the
indispensable 必不可少的；
various contents on it. ⑥ Furthermore, indulging in
instant assistance 及时帮助 ；
computers may isolate us from the social circles. Since
necessity 必需品；
we can chat with the virtual friends via computers, we
be intrigued by.对…着迷；
may not bother to communicate with families or Mends
around us .
⑦ In conclusion, as the product of the high
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现代生活
漫画中是一个人,一天当中他无时无刻不在使用电脑，不论是在工作时、在家时、玩游戏时，还是在睡眠中。这
幅漫画生动地描述了一种普遍现象：电脑现在深深地渗透到我们的日常生活中，我们甚至一分钟都不能没有它。
尽管如此，在我看来，电脑在现代生活中虽然重要但并非必不可少
诚然，电脑使我们的生活方便，并提供及时帮助。但它并非生活必需品。首先，过度沉迷于电脑对我们的
健康不利。我们可能着迷于电脑上五花八门的内容而忽略了在业余时间锻炼身体。此外，过度使用电脑会将我
们隔离在社交圈之外因为我们可以通过电脑与虚拟世界中时朋友交谈，所以我们可能不会费心去与身边的亲朋
好友交流。
总之，作为高科技的产物，电脑确实改善了我们的生活。但是我们不应该在电脑上花费过多的时间而舍弃
享受美好的生活。
2015 年 6 月大学英语四级考试写作真题答案与详解（第 3 套）
Part Ⅰ Writing
审题思路
这是一篇四级考试中常见的图画作文。图片中展现的是一个女孩告诉妈妈她考入了妈妈心中理想的学
校， 其寓意是揭露现如今的家长为孩子做重大决定的普遍现象。
写作提纲
一、描述图片：描述图片：女孩考人了妈妈心中的理想大学(was accepted to the college of your choice).
二、分析现象：1、家长为孩子做决定的普遍性（It is such a common thing nowadays that parents make a lot of
decisions for their children...)
2、诸多原因（a wiser choice, only child, unfulfilled dreams)
三、提出建议：l、年轻人应该自己做决定(make decisions by themselves )
2、成为自己命运的主人（to be master of their own fate)
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Being Master of Your Own Fate
① As is vividly depicted in the picture , a young girl
① ②描述图片内容:女孩实现了妈妈的理想。
is telling her mother, “Good news, I was accepted to the
通过 ironically—词指出图片的讽刺意味。
college of your choice. ” ② But ironically ， the three ③指出这一现象的普遍性，实现了从图片描
words “ of your choice ” reveal the truth that the dream述 到现象分析的转折。
which has just come true does not belong to the girl at all. ④指出有诸多原因导致这一现象。
③ It is such a common thing nowadays that parents⑤ ⑥⑦一一列举产生该现象的原因。
make a lot of decisions for their children ， even at the ⑦⑧ ⑨对全文进行总结，并向青少年提出倡
major turning points of their life, including choosing议：自己做决定，做自己命运的主人。
colleges and majors, hunting for a job or getting married.
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④ Several reasons account for this phenomenon . ⑤
First of all, parents always think that they are able to make vividly 生动地
a wiser choice than teenagers .⑥ Also ， they attach too ironically 讽刺地
much attention to their only child in the family.⑦ Whafs turning points 转折点
more, it seems to be the only way to realize their
phenomenon 现象
unfulfilled dreams by letting their children do things that
unfulfilled 未实现的
they want them to.
⑧ For teenagers, there is a long way to go in their
life. They will finally make decisions by themselves. ⑨
To be master of their own fate is a great step in their
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做自己命运的主人
正如图片中生动描绘的那样，一个女孩正在告诉她的妈妈：“好消息，我被你选择的大学录取了。”但
讽刺的是，“你选择的”这几个字揭露了一个事实，那就是这个刚刚被实现的梦想并不属于这个女孩。
现如今的一个普遍现象是父母为孩子做很多决定，甚至在他们人生的重大转折点，包括选择大学和专
业、找工作或是结婚。很多原因可以解释这一现象。首先，父母总是认为他们可以比孩子做出更明智的决
定。而且，对于家里的独生子女，父母给予了太多的关注。此外，父母让孩子做他们想让孩子做的事情，
好像这是实现他们自己未实现的梦想的唯一途径。
对青少年来说，人生道路很漫长。他们最终要自己做决定。而成为自己命运的主人是成长过程中的一大步。2014 年 12 月大学英语四级考试写作真题答案与详解（第 1
套）
Part Ⅰ Writing
审题思路
本篇题目一改过去常写的议论文，要求写对自己影响最大的大学同学。根据题目要求，写作重点应当
是描述，而不是议论。考生首先应直接或间接地引出主题，然后通过具体事例阐释该同学对“我”产生重大
影响的原因,最后发表议论，照应前文，升华主题。由此可知，题目要求写一篇夹叙夹议，以叙述为主的作
文。
写作提纲
一、提出观点：同学“Tom”改变了“我”（be subject to being pessimistic，strive to encourage, appreciate)
二、阐释主题：1、在他的帮助下，我发现英语没那么难(be confused about，make progress)
2、他教我如何面对挫折(live through setbacks)
三、升华主题：l、“Tom”让我认识到了自信和乐观的重要性(the significance of self-confidence and
optimism) 2、这种态度使人受益终身(benefit people all his life)
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① ② 通过描述那个曾经缺乏自信而且悲观的
A Classmate Who Has Influenced Me Most in College
“ 我” 渐渐地有所改变引出文章主题—— 对
① Once upon a time, I was not so confident about
“我”影响最大的大学同学，他竭尽全力鼓励
my study and was subject to being pessimistic when
“我”。
confronted with frustrations. ② However, I found
③承接上句，表达对他的感激之情。
myself gradually changing as Tom, one of my classmates
④ 列举具体事例:在英语学习方面对“ 我”的
in college, strived to encourage me. ③ I really
帮助。
appreciate his help.
⑤使用 in addition 衔接，不仅使语义连贯，
④ I used not to be good at English ； however,
而且层次分明。
whenever I was confused about the teacher’s explanation,
⑥⑦列举具体事例:演讲比 失败后他对“我”
he always interpreted it to me in- an explicit way.的 鼓励。
Gradually, I found English not so difficult and made
⑧说明他对“我”的影响:在他的鼓励下，“我”
progress day by day. ⑤ In addition, it was Tom who kept
重拾了信心，认识到乐观的重要性。
guiding me how to live through all kinds of setbacks in
⑨升华主题:他使“我”认识到自信和乐观的重
life. ⑥ I’ll never forget the very day when I failed my
要性。这种态度使人终身受益
speech contest and I was overwhelmed and ashamed.⑦
Tom told me that nobody can defeat a person if he is加 分亮点
determined to stand up to every failure. ⑧With his be subject to 有… 倾向
encouragement, I regained confidence, realizing that appreciate 感激
optimism was always the key to success. interpret 解释
⑨ Thank s t o Tom , I eventually learned the
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对我影响最大的大学同学
我曾经对自己的学习并不那么自信，而且遇到挫折时就容易悲观。然而，当我的一个大学同学汤姆竭尽全
力鼓励我的时候，我发现自己渐渐地有所改变。我非常感激他对我的帮助。
以前我的英语不好，然而每当我对老师的讲解感到迷惑不解时，汤姆总是用清晰明了的方式给我解释。渐
渐地，我发现英语并没那么难，并一天天地取得进步。不仅如此，汤姆还一直引导我如何应对生活中各种各样
的挫折。 我永远也忘不了我演讲比 失败那一天，我当时不知所措，觉得很羞愧。汤姆告诉我，没有谁能打败一个在每一次失败面前都坚定地站起来的人。在他的鼓励下，我重拾了信心，认识到乐观常常是成功的关键
政
多亏汤姆，我最终认识到了自信和乐观的重要性。它们不仅是人们必备的品格，而且还将使人终身受益。
2014 年 12 月大学英语四级考试写作真题答案与详解（第 2
套）
Part Ⅰ Writing
审题思路
这是一篇叙议结合式作文。 a course that has impressed you most in college(大学中令你印象最深刻的
一门课程)是考生非常熟悉的一个话题，因此写起来并不难。写作时，重点应放在第二段阐释这门课程令你
印象最深刻的原因上。例如，授课教师的知识水平和个人魅力、课程内容本身以及课程设置的前景展望等。
考生可联系自身学习情况进行阐述。
写作提纲
一、描述现象：大学课程丰富（a variety of courses, broaden their knowledge)
二、分析原因：1、印象最深刻的一门课程(the course that has impressed me most)
2、原因：授课教授因素（the scholarly image of the professor, unusual but interesting teaching
method);开阔视野（my vision has been broadened);激发了学好英语的热情（arouse the enthusiasm for
studying English well)
三、归纳点题：l、对学校提供的多种多样的课程感到满足(I am satisfied with the broad range of courses)
2、很高兴选择了英国文学课程(I am glad to have chosen the course of British iterature)
范文点评
高分范文 精彩点评
A Course That Has Impressed Me Most in
College
① 开篇总起，描述现象:大学课程丰富。
① There are a variety of courses in college which
②③说明该现象对学生的影响:学生们因丰
provide students with multiple options to broaden their
富的课程而大受裨益。
knowledge. ② They can choose different courses ④指出自身从中受益匪浅。
according to their own preferences. ③ It goes without
⑤点题:指出“我”印象最深刻的一门课程。
saying that students really benefit from it in many
⑥⑦⑧用 in the first place …in the second
respects.
place... last but not least 列举该课程使“我”
④ As far as I am concerned , I do harvest a lot from
印象深刻的不同原因，层次分明。
the courses I choose. ⑤Last semester, as a junior student,
⑨⑩归纳总结，进一步突出主题
I chose the course of British Literature which has
impressed me most. ⑥ In the first place, I was deeply加 分亮点
charmed by the scholarly image of the professor for this a variety of...多种多样的
course—his broad range of knowledge and unusual but
it goes without saying that 不言而喻
interesting teaching method. ⑦ In the second place, my
harvest 收获
vision has been definitely broadened by this course. Apart
semester 学期
from the basic knowledge in our textbook, I have also
a broad range of...范围广泛的
learnt something practical and got an in-depth
have a great effect on 对…有重大影响
understanding of Britain. ⑧ Last but not least , this course
has aroused my enthusiasm for studying English well.
This will help perfect my knowledge system.全文翻译
大学里给我印象最深刻的一门课程
多种多样的大学课程为学生提供了扩充知识面的多种选择。学生们可以根据自己的喜好选择不同课程。毫
无疑问，学生们在许多方面确实受益匪浅。就我而言，我确实从自己选择的课程里获益颇丰。上个学期，作为
一名大三学生，我选择了《英国文学》，这门课程给我留下了最深刻的印象。首先，我被这门课程授课教授的
学者风范所深深吸引，他知识面广，教课方法不同寻常且趣味盎然。其次，这门课程确实开拓了我的视野。除
了课本上的基础知识，我还学到了一些比较实际的东西，加深了我对英国的理解。最后但同样重要的是，这门
课程激起了我学好英语的热情。这将有助于完善我的知识体系。
总之，我对大学提供的丰富课程很满意。很高兴我选择了《英国文学》这门课。它确实对我有很大的影响。2014 年 12 月大学英语四级考试写作真题答案与详解（第 3
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Part Ⅰ Writing
审题思路
本作文话题为大学校阿中令你受益最多的一项活动，非常贴近大学生的生活。因此，在构思时可以用
自己的亲身经历作为材料，着重阐述活动的有益之处。考生首先应该指明是什么校园活动让你受益最多;
接着应对该活动进行描述，说明它让你受益之处，最后总结全文、升华主题。
写作提纲
一、指出大学校园中最让“我”受益的活动(benefited me most)
二、阐述该活动让“我”受益之处：1、描述活动（a debate competition)
2、活动所得(what I have leamt from it)
三、升华主题：指出“我”从活动中得到了对未来而言最珍贵的礼物(the most precious gift for future)
范文点评
高分范文 精彩点评
The Most Beneficial Activity on Campus ① 指出校园活动多种多样。。
① Every university offers numerous kinds of ②指出“我”从这些活动中学到很多。
activities to enrich students’ extracurricular life ② As one ③指出使“我” 受益最多的活动—— 辩论
of the young college students, I have leamt a lot from all of 。
these well- organized activities. ③ But the one that has ④介绍辩论 的基本信息。
benefited me most is the debate competition I took part in ⑤指出“我”觉得最重要的不是比 的结
last year. 果，而是从中学到的东西。
④ That was a debate competition between different ⑥⑦指出此项活动使“我”认识到团队合作
majors and the topic was about theoretical knowledge versus 的重要性。
practice. ⑤ What matters most is not the result of the ⑧总结全文:“我”从辩论 中得到了对未来
debate, but what I have leamt froth it. ⑥ That is, no 而目最珍贵的礼物。
individual could accomplish a challenging task all by herself
or himself. ⑦ Joint efforts are of great importance in
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winning any competition.
⑧It was really lucky for me to take part in the debate numerous 无数的的
competition, from which I got the most precious gift for benefit 有益于
future: cherishing team spirit and joint efforts, which will joint efforts 共同努力
help me sweep away every block falling in my way to team spirit 团队精神
success. sweep away 扫除
全文翻译
最有益处的大学活动
每个大学都为学生提供多种多样的校园活动以丰富他们的课外生活。作为一个年轻的大学生，我从这些精
心组织的活动中学到了很多。但是让我受益最多的是去年参加的那场辩论 。
那是一次有不同专业学生参与的辩论 ，辩题是理论知识与实践。最重要的不是辩论的结果，而是我从中
学 到了什么。那就是，没有哪个人能够单凭自己就可以完成一项极具挑战性的任务。要赢得任何一项竞 ，
共同努 力都极为重要。
我很幸运参加了那场辩论 ，从中我收获了对未来而言最珍贵的礼物：珍惜团队精神和共同努力，这将帮
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Part Ⅰ Writing
审题思路
本次作文一改往年常考的三段式议论文、图表作文和名言评述作文题型,设定虚拟情景，要求考生描述
某处景点，考生应该把重点放在说明选取这一景点的原因上，也就是说明其独特性上。仔细分析可知,本
文依旧可以分三部分展开。考生首先应回答“what”的问题,即去什么地方游玩;其次，考生应回答“Why”的问
题，即推荐该地点的缘由;最后, 考生需要做简要的总结。
写作提纲
一、回答“what”，说明去某地游玩(take vacation, on the top of my list)
二、回答“why”，描述某地的独特之处：1、以泰山为例(Mount Tai)
2、泰山的独特之处(spectacularity, sacredness, hope and
auspiciousness)
三、简要总结：1、探访泰山很有意义（engagement in ancient culture and contemporaiy prosperity)
2、表达愿望(wonderful experience)
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A Tour to Mount Tai
① ② 引出并点明主题:外国朋友要来家乡游
① I am delighted to learn that my foreign Mend,
玩，泰山是首选之地。
Bill, is going to take vacation in my hometown. For the
③④古今对比:古今名人都对泰山有着特殊的
sake of his hospitality I enjoyed in England, I will show
感情。
him around the landscape, ② among which Mount TaL is
⑤泰山的独特之处:泰山不仅仅是一座山，她
unquestionably on the top of my list .
还象征着希望和祥瑞，体现了深厚的文化。
③ Centuries ago, at the summit of the mountain, ⑥泰山的独特之处:泰山是神圣之地,历代帝王
Con- fucius exclaimed that the world was small; ④ in 奉泰山如神灵，到泰山祈求国泰民安。
modem times, everyone is bound to appreciate its ⑦总结到访泰山的意义。
spectacularity and sacredness.⑤ Mount Tai is more ⑧表达愿望。
than a mountain; it is a place which symbolizes hope and
auspiciousness, embodying profound culture.⑥
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Furthermore, Mount Tai is considered to be sacred to the
point where almost every ancient Chinese emperor came unquestionably 毫无疑问地
here to make offerings to Heaven and Earth, praying for a be bound to... 一定会…
prosperous country and a peaceful living environment. spectacularity 壮丽
⑦Visiting Mount Tai is more than a mountain sacredness 神圣
climbing excursion, but a hands-on engagement in to the point where …到了…程度
ancient culture and contemporary prosperity. Thus, ⑧ I hands-on 亲身实践的
assure you that you will like this wonderful experience.全文翻译
泰山之旅
欣闻我的外国朋友比尔要来我的家乡度假。由于我在英国曾受到比尔的热情款待，我将带他四处看看
家乡的风景。在所有风景中，泰山无疑是首选之地。
几个世纪前，孔子登上泰山之巅，发出登泰山而小天下之感叹;在现代，每个人必定会去欣赏泰山的壮
丽和神圣。泰山不仅仅是一座山，她还象征着希望与祥瑞，体现了深厚的文化。此外，泰山被看作是如此
神圣，以至于几乎每位古代帝王都会到这里祭祀天地,祈求国家昌盛、国泰民安。
登泰山不仅是一次登山远足，还是一次亲身体验古代文化和现代繁荣的旅行。因此，我向你保证你一
定会喜欢这次美妙的旅行的。
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Part Ⅰ Writing
审题思路
这是一篇描述性作文，主要是向外国朋友推荐一个校园里最有趣的地方（the most interesting place)。考
生应将重点放在第二段阐释推荐的理由上。
写作提纲
一、对朋友来访表示欢迎并概述要推荐的地方:文化广场(Culture Square)
二、具体阐述推荐的理由：1、活动丰富多彩(colorful activities)
2、可以与其他学生交流和互动（communicate and interact with other students)
3、可以借此更好地了解校园文化（an opportunity to know better the campus
culture)
三、总结推荐的理由并表达对朋友来访的期待：1、它是一个充满生机与活力的世界（a world full of vigor
and vitality)
2、它是了解校园文化的一个窗口（a window through which
you can get a big picture of the campus)
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Culture Square
① I am excited to .hear that you are coming to visit ① 开门见山，点明文章主题:对朋友来访表示
my cam- pus and cannot wait to express my welcome.欢 迎并向朋友推荐文化广场。
Hereby I’d like to recommend the Culture Square on ②概括文化广场的亮点：非常有趣、充满乐
趣。
the campus to you , ② which is of great interest and
③说明推荐文化广场的第一个原因：活动丰
enjoyment to give it a try .
富多彩。
The Culture Square is the heaven for students where
④⑤使用 besides..，moreover...说明第二、三
③ you can see colorful activities organized to add extra
点原因，层次分明。
pleasure to students’ monotonous routine.④ Besides,
⑥对文章进行总结。
you are always free to engage yourself in any of these
⑦⑧ 利用同位语结构总结推荐文化广场的原
activities that fascinate you. I am quite confident that
因。
you’ll find it beneficial to communicate and interact with
⑨表达对朋友来访的期待。
other students. ⑤ Moreover, as a major part of the
campus culture, the Culture Square offers whoever wants加 分亮点
to get an insight into the campus an opportimity to know give it a try 试一试
better the campus culture. monotonous 单调的
⑥ In a word , the Culture Square, ⑦ a world fall spectacularity 壮丽
of vigor and vitality, ⑧ a window through which you get an insight into 洞悉
can get a big picture of the campus , is definitely a place vigor and vitality 生机与活力
worth visiting. I’m sure you’ll have fun. ⑨ Look forward
to seeing you soon in the Culture Square.
全文翻译
文化广场
得知你即将来访我的校园，我真是十分兴奋，迫不及待地向你表示欢迎。在此，我想向你推荐我们学
校的文化广场——个非常有趣、充满乐趣的地方，值得一试。
文化广场是学生的天堂，在这里你可以看到丰富多彩的活动，为学生单调的生活增添额外的乐趣。另外，
你还可以自由地参与到你喜欢的任何活动中。我确信你会发现和其他学生交流和互动受益良多。此外，文化广场
作为校园文化的一个重要组成部分，可以为那些想要洞悉校园的人提供一个更好地了解校园文化的机会。
总而言之，文化广场是一个充满生机与活力的世界，一个可以窥见整个校园景象的窗口，一定值得一
游。我相信你会玩得很开心。期待早日在文化广场见到你。
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Part Ⅰ Writing
审题思路
本次作文通过设置虚拟情景，要求考生描述具有特色的名胜古迹、文化圣地或者山水名地等，写作形
式和内容不拘一格，与往年常考的议论文、图表作文和名言评述作文题型区别较大。仔细审查题目要求，
考生首先应回答“what”，即去什么地方；其次，考生应回答“why”，即推荐该地点的原因；最后，考生需要
作简要的总结。
写作提纲
一、回答“what”，说明去何处（accompany you to the National Center for the Performing Arts)
二、回答“why”,叙述原因 ：1、现场体验国粹（enjoy the authentic performance，celebrated actors, essence
and miniature of Chinese culture)
2、欣赏其他艺术表演（feast your eyes on the other forms of arts)
三、简要总结：1、探访国家大剧院的意义(have a further understanding of Chinese arts，enrich your artistic
accomplishment)
2、朋友的感受(a wonderful and unforgettable experience)
范文点评
高分范文 精彩点评
National Center for the Performing Arts
① I know you are fascinated by Chinese arts , ① 引出话题。
Beijing Opera in particular.② Since you will come to ②由因到果:朋友喜欢京剧，因而带他去国家
China, I am willing to accompany you to the National大 剧院现场感受京剧的魅力。
Center for the Performing Arts to appreciate the splendid ③说明带朋友去国家大剧院的一个原因：观
performance. 看京剧名家现场表演。
③ There , you can enjoy the authentic
④⑤说明京剧的独特之处:是我国的国粹,
是中国文化的缩影,融合了地方戏和民歌的优
performance of Beijing Opera by celebrated actors.④ As
点，深受中外人士的欢迎。
the essence and miniature of Chinese culture, Beijing
⑥说明带朋友去国家大剧院的另一个原因：
Opera incorporates the advantages of local opera and folk
可以欣赏其他艺术表演。
melody, prevailing in every comer of China.⑤ With its
⑦⑧说明去国家大剧院的意义和感受。
exposure to the Western world, many foreigners begin to
fall in love with it. ⑥ Besides, you can also have the
opportunity to feast your eyes on the other forms of arts,
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which might also arouse your interest.
be fascinated by 对…着迷
⑦ By enjoying the authentic performance of
authentic performance 现场表演
Beijing Opera,you are bound to have a farther
incorporate 包含，吸收
understanding of Chinese arts, which will enrich your
feast one’s eyes on 大饱眼福
artistic accomplishment. ⑧ I am sure that it must be a
wonderful and unforgettable experience for you.
全文翻译 我知道你对中国艺术十分着迷，尤其是京剧。既然你要来中国，我愿意效劳，陪你去国家大剧院体
验精彩的表演。
在那里，你能够欣赏到京剧名家名角的现场表演。作为我国的国粹和中国文化的缩影，京剧融合了地
方戏和民歌的优点，风靡全国。随着京剧传到西方世界，许多外国人开始爱上它。此外，你还有机会一饱
眼福其他艺术表演，这可能也会引起你的兴趣。
通过欣赏京剧的现场表演，你一定会对中国艺术有更加深入的理解，这将会增强你的艺术修养。我确
信，这对你来说必将是一次美妙而令人难忘的经历。
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参考范文：
【作文(一)】
The Impact of the Mobile Phone in People’s Life
The thought-provoking drawing mirrors a common phenomenon in contemporary society that there is the
negative influence of mobile phone. As is subtly shown in the picture，so many people are too much addicted to
cell phones that they use walking sticks to see the road. What a meaningful cartoon!
It is to me that indulging in mobile phones produces native influences on body and mind. First and foremost,
overusing mobile phones is detrimental to physical health for watching mobiles for a long stretch definitely
impairs one’s eyesight. Suppose that a man is addicted in cell phones in whatever situation, it will be very
disadvantageous for him to concentrate on his work, learning, or daily life and is very likely to hurt him.
Furthermore, overusing cell phones adversely affects state of mind. An addict may stay inside his bubble instead
of pursuing other endeavors, which eventually prevents the growth of think skills.
It is high time that we took effective measures to curb this trend. I cherish a belief that cell phones themselves
are not good or bad and we can benefit a lot from it as long as we take a good control over them.
【作文(二)】
The Impact of the Internet on the Way People Communicate
网络对人们沟通产生的影响
Internet does exert such a profound effect on our life that it revolutionizes the way of people’s living and
thinking. As is subtly revealed in the portrayal，there are two parents sitting in the front of computer，who are
chatting with their child on the internet. What a meaningful picture!
From my perspective, the electronic contact cannot replace face to face communication owing to the
following factors. To begin with, over-reliance on electronic contact will damage the interpersonal relationship,
for the cold machine never replaces a warm-hearted greeting face to face. For example, the aged parents would
like their only son who works far away home to come back home more often rather than to talk with him on the
internet occasionally. What’s more, face to face communication is preferable because it is beneficial to build a
harmonious society, for it attaches more importance on human affection and feelings instead of convenience and
speed.
Hence, it is necessary for us to use Internet in a reasonable way. After all, Internet is invented to connect you
and me, and to bring conveniences to our life rather than set a barrier to keep people beyond reach. If we want to
keep our interpersonal relationship more effectively, we should spend more time with them face to face in real life.
Only in this way can we not only make full use of the communication tool on the net but also make our
relationship tighter.
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写作导航: On the Overuse of the Mobile Phone
第 1 段：描述图片，概述生活中出 现过度使用手机的现象
Having a cell phone in hand and at the ready, growing increasing dependent on their mobile phones
第 2 段：详细介绍过度使用手机 产生的不良后果
trigger many health problems
an Immediate threat to their Iife, health and pro property less chance of face-to-face interactions
第 3 段：进行总结，并提出建议
use them appropriately and rationally
参考范文
On the Overuse of the Mobile Phone 【1】As is shown in the picture, having a mobile phone in hand and at
the ready is the default mode while walking on the streets. 【2】What this cartoon symbolically reveals is that
people nowadays, especially young people, are growing increasingly dependent on their mobile phones.
【3】It is true that the mobile phone has brought great convenience to people's life. However, just as is
illustrated in the picture, the overuse of it may lead to several bad consequences. 【4】To begin with, there is
evidence that long-term exposure to electromagnetic radiation may trigger many health problems, such as
insomnia, headaches and even cancers【. 5】In addition, when people immerse themselves in the mobile phone,
they
tend to pay less attention to their surroundings, posing an immediate threat to their life, health and property.【6】
Last but not least, excessive use of mobile phones means much less chance of face-to-face interactions with the
people who populate their real lives.
【7】In conclusion, while mobile phones have contributed a lot to making our life more convenient, we
should use them appropriately and rationally.
【1】开门见山,对图片进行简单描述。
【2】点明图片揭示的现象,
【3】点出手机对人们生活的积极影响。
【4】【5】【6】分三点阐明过度使用手机 对人们生活的消极影响。
【7】总结全文:使用手机要适度。
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Part I Writing
【作文审题】这是一篇图画类命题作文。首先，抓住图画下方文字的主题词 computer 和 seeing you again，
其中 computer 对应题目要求中的 Internet ， seeing you again 是题目中的
communication 和 face-to-face contact 的同义转述，避免跑题。接着，借助图画内容（父母正 在给楼上的
儿子写电子邮件）和图画下边的邮件内容，图画与文字相结合，可提炼出主题： 网络对人们的日常交流产
生的影响。 然后， 弄清文章题目与图画的关系： 主题与描述之间的 关系。最后，确定行文思路：描述图
画 +提出观点 +分析原因 +总结全文；总结时，注意要观 点明确，贴合所给主题，切勿模棱两可。 写
作思路 : 第一段：以“总——分——总”的形式描述图画内容，指出图画寓意。 第二段：指出网络交流不
能取代面对面的交流，并分析其原因。 第三段：总结全文，重申自己的观点，呼应主题。
【精彩范文】
The Impact of the Internet on the Way People Communicate
[1] The ironic picture is about a father and a mother [2] writing a letter to their son who is upstairs. The father and
mother greet the son, Andy, and tell him they are fine and miss him and look forward to seeing him again when his
computer crashes and he comes downstairs to eat. [3] The child is overusing the Internet. [4] From the ironic
picture we can see the impact of Internet on the way people communicate.
Can electronic communication replace face-to-face contact? [5] The answer is “No” . [6] For
one thing, electronic communication makes people feel strange although it does help people communicate,
especially for those who are far away or inconvenient to talk, [7] where as face-to-face contact makes people feel
psychologically [8] intimate and affectionate. [6] For another, people cannot express themselves fully through the
Internet. Thus, misunderstandings may be aroused.
[9] In my opinion, I do not object to electronic communication, but it cannot replace
face-to-face communication.
【名师点评】
[1] 总述图画内容
[2] 现在分词短语作后置定语，表达更简洁
[3] 指出现象：过度使用网络
[4] 点明寓意：网络对人们的日常交流方式产生了影响
[5] 用设问句提出观点：电子通讯不能取代面对面的交流
[6] 阐述两点原因：一方面，电子通讯疏远人们的关系；另一方面，电子通讯使表达不充分， 容易造成误
解。
[7]“反之”，对比说明面对面交流的好处
[8] 采用尾韵，表达更有力
[9] 总结自己的观点，呼应主题
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Part I Writing
【写作提示】
1. 审题：此次作文题目是阅读文学作品的重要性，仍然是议论文题材，不过与往年不同的是，此
次作文没有文字提示，而是以图片的形式来展现，这就需要考生看懂图片，先描述图片，然后
阐述自己的观点。
2. 提纲：
第一段：描述图片，指出现象（当今学生喜欢快餐文化，不再热衷于文学作品，老师不得
已劝说学生：read it as a long text-message）
第二段：阐述阅读文学作品的重要性（broaden one’s horizon; enhance one’s aesthetic taste;
benefit one’s mental health）
第三段：总结观点（reading literature is extremely important for people）
3. 语言：力求准确性与多样性，逻辑性与连贯性，过渡自然，行文流畅
【范文精析】
The Importance of Reading Literature
As is portrayed in the picture, a teacher is giving a
第一 段描 述图 portray: 描绘
literary work to a student, trying to encourage him to
片，并指出现象： reluctant: 不 情
当今学生喜欢快 read it as if it is a long text-message, since the student 愿
餐文化，不再热 seems so unhappy and reluctant. Obviously, the picture be keen on: 喜
衷于文学作品。
欢
reveals the phenomenon that nowadays, more and
more students are keen on fast food culture rather than
classic literary works.
As a matter of fact, it is of great significance for us
用 as a matter of
to appreciate literary works. Firstly, reading literature
fact 引出作者的 broaden one’s
can help broaden our horizon, let us gain more life
观点：阅读文学 horizon: 开拓视野
作品很重要。 experience and learn more about history. The more enhance one’s
experience you gain, the more knowledgeable you are. aesthetic taste: 提
用 firstly, Secondly, with condensed beauty of arts, the literary 高审美能力
secondly, thirdly
works can also enhance our aesthetic taste, enabling us
从三方面阐述阅
to have a better understanding of beauty. Lastly, reading
读文学作品的重
literature is an effective way for relaxation. The beautiful
要性，层次分明
and moving scenes shown in the literature are beneficial
for one’s mental health.
Therefore, we should learn to appreciate the essence: 精
用 therefore 总结
华
观点，结束全文。 treasuries our ancestors left and absorb the essence of
them.
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范文与译文
范文 泽文
The drawing above vividly shows that the need to learn 图片生动地展示了这样一个画面：
basic skills such as the multiplication table is questioned．In 学生对学习乘法表这样的基本技能提
reality．there is also concern．about whether basic skills 出了质疑。在现实中，人们也担忧，基本
技能是否会过时或无益于大学毕业生。
might become out-dated and of no help to college graduates．
在我看来，大学生所学的基本技能
As I see it．the basic skills college students learn will
不会过时。相反，这些技能将一如既往
not turn old．fashioned．Instead，they will remain as．important
地发挥重要作用。首先，尽管基本技能
as they will ever be．To begin with，though basic skills is
常被归类为不切实际的学科，不能直接
often classified as impractical subjects that cannot be applied
应用到将来的工作中，但正是这些基础
directly to one’s future career，it is these basic subjects that lay a solid
学科为学习更高级的技能打下坚实的
foundation for more advanced skills，preparing US
基础，为深造作准备。此外，大部分的基
for further studies．Furthermore，most basic skills，like calculating and 本技能，如算术和读写能力；在各种职
literacy，are always necessary．in a variety of 业中都是必需的。很明显，没有哪个雇
occupations．It is obvious that no employer is willing to hire 主愿意聘用连书面合同都不能完全看
a graduate who can’t even fully understand a written con。 懂的毕业生。因此，缺乏这些技能可能
tract．For this reason a lack of these skills may result in 会造成将来职场上的失败。
future career failure． 总的来说，尽管学习基本技能看似
To sum up，insignificant and boring as learning basic 无关紧要并且枯燥，但它实则极其重
skills may seem，it is actually of great importance and 要，因而不应被忽视。
should not be neglected．
2013 年 6 月大学英语四级考试写作真题答案与详解（第 3 套）
参考范文：
The picture shows us a dialogue between a father and a son. The son told his father, “Dad, I’m a bit
worried about disposing of nuclear waste”. While his father told him, “If you can empty the dustbin
here you can do anything”. It reveals the importance of doing small things well before undertaking
something big. There is also an old Chinese saying to go with this that a person can’t sweep the
world before he can sweep his own room.
Unquestionably, doing small things is the first step of success and will layroot for doing
something big. By doing something small, we are enabled to accumulate experience, master skills
and train ourselves to be more patient. In other word, we can be well prepared for further challenges
in the course of fulfilling small things. By contrast, those who set out to do something big will be
constantly haunted by disappointment, frustrations or even failures. As when opportunity
“something big” appears, they can hardly seize them because of the lack of experience and
confidence stems from doing small things.Taking the picture presented above as a case in point,
how can the little boy succeed in disposing of nuclear weapons if he even doesn’t know how to
empty the dustbin?
From my perspective, under no circumstances should we undervalue the power of doing small
things. Instead, we should regard small things as the source of experience, skills and the prerequisite
of success. “Great achievement only belongs to those who can do small things perfectly.” Aristotle
once said.
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参考范文：
Education Pay
What is shown in the chart above is that those people with high degree earn more than those
with lower. For example, staff with master’s degree receive a better payment than those with
bachelor’s degree, according to a survey of the payment to the employee. These survey indicates
that education degree does have a relationship with earnings, contrary to the recent theory of useless
education.
Recently, there is a heated discussion about the significance of the education. Some people hold a
view that higher education is useless since college education cannot mesh with the social needs.
Some think that higher education is indispensable if you want to go far in both your studies and life.
Now that survey has proved which part is wiser.
As for me, I definitely support the view that education is necessary for people’s life. Reading
can not only make me survive well in this society with fierce competition but also help me make
sense of life. I pursue for it for my whole life.
2012 年 6 月大学英语四级考试写作真题答案与详解
On Excessive Packaging
Nowadays the phenomena of excessive packaging of goods are prevailing in our society:
clothes swathed in tissue paper, placed in cardboard box and finally wrapped in well-designed
plastic bags, imported bottles of grape wine packed in wooden boxes, fruits put in hand-woven
baskets, to name but a few。
There are several causes of excessive packaging. The first reason is that a large number of
companies believe that they can attract customers’ attention and stimulate their purchasing desire by
over-packaging their goods, thus gaining more profits. On the other hand, quite a number of
consumers mistakenly hold that the more delicate the package is, the better the quality will be, thus
encouraging excessive packaging。
In my point of view, excessive packaging has disastrous consequences, including the loss of
precious resources, excessive consumption of water and energy, and unnecessary extraction of
scarce land for landfill。
To solve the problem, it’s necessary to take the following measures. First, laws and regulations
must be made to restrict excessive packaging of companies. In addition, we need to raise
consumer’s awareness that excessive packaging doesn’t equal to high quality and advocate
packaging recycling.
【解析】
本次作文的话题是“过度包装”，话题不断新，考生应该都比较熟悉。写好本篇作文的关
键在于紧跟题目所列提纲：现象——原因——看法和建议，确定相应的写作结构。重点分析
产生此现象的原因有哪些，把最重要的两三点罗列下来。最后，根据分析出的原因提供相应
的建议。
范文首段开门见山，首先一句话总结如今社会上过度包装现象盛行，而后举出一些实例
补充说明。
第二段重点从公司和消费者两方面论述产生过度包装的原因。公司方面是为了吸引顾客，
刺激消费，赢取更多的利润；消费者方面是认为包装越精美，质量越好这种错误的消费意识。
接下来作者表明自己的看法，认为过度包装会导致很多问题：稀缺资源的流失；水，能
源的过度消耗以及产生不必要的垃圾场等。
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的过度包装行为。第二方面，必须让消费者认识到过度包装不等同于高质量，并提倡包装物
的回收利用。
本文条理清晰，论述充分，语言使用规范得当，如：to name but a few，the first reason is
that…，on the other hand，in my point of view，to solve the problem，first，in addition 等。
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Part I Writing
【标准版】Nothing Succeeds Without a Strong Will
Nothing runs smoothly in our life. To achieve things successfully, a strong will is essential. Life
is like a Marathon. Many people can’t get to the terminal. This is not because they are lack of
vitality but because their will of success is not strong enough.
To take quitting smoking as an example, some regard it as a piece of cake. They make up their
minds to quit it in the morning, but in the evening they feel that the smell of cigarettes is tempting.
Their throats are sore, their mouths are thirsty, and their hands are shaking. After the painful mental
struggle, they tell themselves that “One cigarette is enough. Just take one, and the next day I will
quit it.” By doing this, they surrender to their weak will. In the end, they have quitted smoking “a
hundred times”, but in no time they succeed.
Just like quitting smoking, nothing succeeds without a strong will. To be successful in one’s life,
a strong will means that you know where you go and you will persist on the road you choose.
Undoubtedly success belongs to those who overcome their weak will and who hang in there until
the last minute.
【文章点评】
本文属于话题类作文，只看题目“Nothing Succeeds without a strong will”考生会觉得比较
抽象，难以下手。细看题目说明中给出了提示，要求考生结合戒烟屡次不成功的幽默引语对
该话题进行分析阐述。
总体来说，这是一篇“中等偏上”的考生作文。本文先点题指出“坚强意志”的重要性；第二
段从反面举例阐述——具体描写了意志不坚定者的心理活动，阐述为什么会戒烟失败；最后
从戒烟延伸到生活中的其他事情，并复述坚强意志的内涵，点题收尾。
总体上来看，文章思路清晰，采用了生动的比喻和形象的心理描写，语言流畅，用语地道。但
一些重复表达（如第二段和第三段中的weak will）显得单调，可用shaky ones, weak-willed
persons，the strong-willed等灵活表达。在备考中，多积累不同表达，相信会写出更生动的文
章。
在论述上，叙述略显罗嗦。第二段心理描写过多，虽然流畅生动，但却使这篇考场作文超
过了规定字数，反而成为失分点，这一点要引以为戒。
【高分版】Nothing Succeeds Without a Strong Will
As we have read from above, quitting-smoking seems easy, but in reality it is rarely achieved.
There is something provoking and interesting in this paradox, just because sword does not wear the
stone as dripping water does.
The ability to do something over and over again in a short time may imply its easiness, but in a
long run, a lifetime maybe, things turn out to be quite the opposite. Also, as is often the case, one
may have obtained all the tools and opportunities to achieve something, but in the end they still fail
due to the will shortage.
So how could we avoid the dilemma? Here is the prime condition of success: will and
perseverance. Concentrate you energy, thought and mind exclusively on the business in which you
are engaged, hang on in there and be patient, for, as Emerson put it, no one can cheat you out of
your ultimate success but yourself.
【文章点评】
本次四级作文探讨的话题是成功与毅力之间的关系，话题不算新，一般考生对此都比较熟
悉，所以对考生来说难度不大。写好这篇作文，需要抓住两点，一是紧跟题目要求，即对上
述幽默性的话语做出评论，二是在评论的基础上要亮出自己的观点。
范文开头第一句即一针见血地对上述幽默性话语做出总结性概括，即戒烟看似简单实则很
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句也是本文的一个亮点，体现作者在西方俗语方面丰富的知识储备。
第二段作者则进一步深入分析该话语，指出做某事在短期看来很容易，长期来看，恰恰相
反，人们做事的结果也因此总是失败，原因则在最后一句点出：缺乏毅力。
第三段作者进一步给出了自己的观点，告诉大家如何避免陷入这种两难境地：首要条件即
需要坚强的意志和长期的坚持。最后再以艾默生的一句名言“没人能够骗你远离你最终的成
功，除非你自己承认失败”来总结全文，切中主题，铿锵有力。
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Part I Writing
标准版
Doing Shopping Online
With the development of the Internet, shopping is no longer a tiring thing. Just click your mouse to choose
the articles you like, and the purchase is done. You don't even have to step out of the room. It seems all easy and
quick.
However, people's opinions vary on this trend. Some believe that on line shopping is time and money saving.
With plentiful selection options, they can buy whatever they like at any time convenient. Still others insist that
mis-purchasing alone is annoying enough, not to mention the credibility of the sellers and the safety of their
accounts.
In my opinion, the convenience and excitement of on line shopping is beyond all doubts. In the meantime, we
must always bear in mind that certain traps do exist, so we'd better make sure the sellers are trustworthy before
buying. In addition, we should also guard ourselves from the potential hackers who might steal our account
information.
文章点评：
这是一篇“中等偏上”的学生作文。 本文先对网购热潮进行简介，引出全篇；接着对网络购物的正反两
方面进行对比；最后提出自己的看法结束全篇。整体看思路清晰，逻辑严密，行文流畅，用语较为地道。
下面说一下这篇文章的有待提高之处：
1. 文章结构上，能看得出该同学试图采用议论文的“三段式”（提出问题、分析问题、解决问题）。 但
是，以“With the development of the Internet”为开首语，有些落入俗套，有硬套模板的嫌疑。稍加注意，应
该能写出更好的句子。
2. 微观语言点方面，有些语句稍显啰嗦，比如 With plentiful selection options… 简化成 With plentiful
selections… 更好，意思没有丝毫减损，表达力反而增强许多。
高分版
With the help of the ever rapid development of internet technology, online shopping is coming into fashion in
most of cities.
Online shopping is welcomed by most people due to various reasons. From the perspective of consumer, it
can save some time for people who don't have much spare time. Just click the mouse, they can get whatever they
want while staying at home. For the retailers, it can cut some costs for those who don't have much circulating
funds. They don't have to rent a house and spend money on employees compared with the traditional trade mode.
However, there are still some defects in online shopping. First, lace of face to face deal makes online shopping
less reliable and trustworthy. Second, people will lose the fun of bargain.
It is undeniable that shopping on the internet has become an irresistible trend in modern society. It's of great
urgency that we need to regulate the relative laws accordance with the rapid growth of online shopping. Only in
this way can we enjoy the pleasure and convenience of online shopping without the concern of being treated.
点评：
本次四级作文探讨的是最近的热点话题之一——互联网网购。目前网购的风靡程度是众所周知，因此，
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阐述该话题，而不是简单陈述自己的意见。所以，考生应当审清楚题，在写作时不仅仅要列出网购的优点，
还必须给出相应的缺点。
按照四级作文的要求，考生在第一段时应该总述现象并引出话题；
第二段考生应当从正反两方面来论述网购，分别铺陈其优缺点；关于优点，网购的优点很多，考生可
择其最突出显著的方面来阐述，比如说网购可以节省很多时间；网购可以节省很多成本开支等；其次，缺
点方面考生可以把重心放在诚信方面；为了不至于跟优点相比，缺点方面太轻，考生可以考虑稍微提一下
其他缺点，比如说与传统购物相比，网购少去了很多砍价的乐趣；
第三点要求考生对于第二段列出的缺点给出自己的建议。此处我们可以根据第二段列出的缺点方面给
出相应的防范应对措施。
整篇作文话题比较好展开，难度不大，只要考生审好题，列出相应点，相信作文不会他是难题。
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参考范文：
Help Children to Be Independent
Thanks to the “family plan” policy, today in China many families have one child. Loving and
caring for children is an old Chinese tradition that has remained for thousands of years. But the
children are spoilt so much that they have less independence. They rely on their parents in
everything. That is bad for a child's growing. Therefore, parents should develop the children's
independence instead of doing everything for them.
There are some ways to help children to be independent. First of all, you should believe your
children can do the things well. Second, give them more chances to practice , when they don't know
how to do it, just tell them the way. Third, don't be afraid to see them fail. In the beginning, they
may do something bad. But don't worry, just let them try again. They can do the work as well as you
if given more time.
To be independent is good for the children. A child who is independent will succeed easily in the
future.
2010 年 6 月大学英语四级考试写作真题答案与详解
参考范文：
Nowadays, students attach less importance to the spelling of words in the process of English study. This
phenomenon greatly influences students’ writing and brings on worries among teachers.
There are possibly three reasons contributing to this phenomenon. First, exam-oriented education makes the
students pay less attention to spelling. Second, some teachers should also be responsible for it because they don’t
emphasize the importance of spelling during teaching. Last but not least, some students are too lazy to recite
words.
Since spelling is one of the most important factors in English study, due attention should be given to it. As for
me, I think, first, exams should be modified to add some factors into it, which would help students pay more
attention to spelling. Then, schools should also set effective mechanisms to help teachers as well as the students to
realize the importance. Finally, for students themselves, they can, through other ways, make them be interested in
word spelling. Only by these can we surly realize the importance of spelling and make improvement.
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