广东省普通高中毕业班2026届第一次调研考试英语试题
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短
文。
Mia had a great start to the day. She had a good night’s sleep and stayed in bed
until seven o’clock. Her husband and her lovely son had gone skiing, so she could
enjoy her freedom. Also, the house was very quiet and peaceful. “I’ll take a nap
before I have breakfast,” thought the sleepy woman as she turned around and closed
her eyes again.
However, a few minutes later, Mia woke up to a strange noise. “What was that?”
thought Mia. The noise soon stopped, so she turned around again, thinking(现在分词短语做伴
随动作), “It was probably something in my dream.” But when she turned back to the
other side of the bed, she heard the noise again. She was sure that the sound was
coming from the window. Out of curiosity, she got out of bed and approached the
window.
When she pulled the curtain aside, Mia couldn’t believe what she saw. There
were two little squirrels in a nest, which might not be old enough to move freely.
The noise was coming from here. The curtain in the room had been drawn for the
past few weeks, so she hadn’t noticed that the lovely animals were making a nest
on the tree branch beside the window. “I have to get this on camera,” she thought
eagerly. She immediately took her camera and took pictures of the two cute squirrels.
The little squirrels were relaxed inside the nest. Mia could tell how peaceful
the little creatures felt. Unfortunately, the window wouldn’t open, or she would have
touched them and patted their heads.
“Their mother must have left them alone to look for food(伏笔),” Mia thought,
trying to get the perfect pictures from different angles (现在分词短语做伴随动作). Actually, she
wanted to take a clear picture of their cute, sleepy faces. However, she got the shock
of her life when she brought the camera closer to the squirrels. An eagle resting on
a tree opposite(现在分词短语做后置定语) threatened to attack the tiny babies(冲突).
注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: Just as the eagle spread its wings, Mia’s natural reaction took over.Paragraph 2: Mia smiled with relief as the two little squirrels slowly relaxed their
tense bodies.广东省普通高中毕业班2026届第一次调研考试英语试题
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短
文。
Mia had a great start to the day. She had a good night’s sleep and stayed in bed
until seven o’clock. Her husband and her lovely son had gone skiing, so she could
enjoy her freedom. Also, the house was very quiet and peaceful. “I’ll take a nap
before I have breakfast,” thought the sleepy woman as she turned around and closed
her eyes again.
However, a few minutes later, Mia woke up to a strange noise. “What was that?”
thought Mia. The noise soon stopped, so she turned around again, thinking, “It was
probably something in my dream.” But when she turned back to the other side of the
bed, she heard the noise again. She was sure that the sound was coming from the
window. Out of curiosity, she got out of bed and approached the window.
When she pulled the curtain aside, Mia couldn’t believe what she saw. There
were two little squirrels (松鼠) in a nest, which might not be old enough to move
freely. The noise was coming from here. The curtain in the room had been drawn for
the past few weeks, so she hadn’t noticed that the lovely animals were making a nest
on the tree branch beside the window. “I have to get this on camera,” she thought
eagerly. She immediately took her camera and took pictures of the two cute squirrels.
The little squirrels were relaxed inside the nest. Mia could tell how peaceful the
little creatures felt. Unfortunately, the window wouldn’t open, or she would have
touched them and patted their heads.
“Their mother must have left them alone to look for food,” Mia thought, trying to
get the perfect pictures from different angles. Actually, she wanted to take a clear
picture of their cute, sleepy faces. However, she got the shock of her life when she
brought the camera closer to the squirrels. An eagle resting on a tree opposite
threatened to attack the tiny babies.
注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: Just as the eagle spread its wings, Mia’s natural reaction took over.
Paragraph 2: Mia smiled with relief as the two little squirrels slowly relaxed their
tense bodies.一、文章类型及细节分析
项目 内容
读后续写
情境类叙事 + 动物救助类 + 心理情感线并行型（含悬念与温情）
类型
从“宁静生活 → 意外发现 → 危机与救助 → 情感升华”的过程，
主题特征
体现“关爱生命、自然共情”的主题。
核心冲突 小松鼠面临鹰的威胁；Mia是否能救它们？如何救？
平静（开端）→ 紧张（冲突）→ 行动（高潮）→ 安慰与感悟（结
情感线索
尾）
适用构思 “故事山（Story Mountain）”模式：起因 → 发展 → 高潮 → 下降
模型 → 结局
叙事视角 第三人称（Mia视角），注重心理与动作刻画并行
情节承接自然、心理变化细腻、结尾情感升华，呼应“宁静与生命”
续写目标
的主题。
二、续写思路构建框架（整体布局）
段落 内容功能 主要构思思路
首句为转折高点，鹰的威胁升级。
Mia的“本能反应”体现人性温情：
可能拍打窗户、扔东西、制造声响、吓
Paragraph 1:
Just as the 情节高潮 + 行动反应 + 走老鹰。
eagle spread 冲突解决线铺设 动作紧凑 + 心理紧张刻画（fear,
its wings...
anxiety, determination）
结尾以老鹰飞走或危机解除为段落过
渡。
先描写松鼠安全、环境恢复宁静。
Paragraph 2:
情感回落 + 内心感悟 + Mia心理描写：从紧张到欣慰，意识
Mia smiled
主题升华 到“自然与人类的守护关系”。
with relief...
通过象征：squirrel = innocence, eagle =段落 内容功能 主要构思思路
danger, Mia = compassion。
结尾可呼应标题（a peaceful morning /
life’s gentle rhythm）。
三、承接原文点
项目 内容
1. 保持人物与场
不能新增人物；场景仍为卧室与窗外。
景一致
前文以“eagle spread its wings”起；续写应紧接“救助行
2. 动作承接自然
动”。
3. 情感线索延续 从“好奇 → 紧张 → 关切 → 平静”；不要突兀转情。
4. 语言风格统一 延续原文温和、叙述性、略带描写色彩的语气。
原文中“quiet, peaceful, sunlight, window, tree”等是情境线
5. 环境要素呼应
索，可用于首尾呼应。
6. 主题呼应 体现“关爱自然、珍视生命的宁静力量”。
四、故事山模式分析
阶段 内容功能 原文/续写对应部分
平静的清晨、安静的房
Opening（开端） “Mia had a great start to the day…”
间、自由的心情
听到奇怪的声音、发现 “However, a few minutes later… she
Build-up（发展）
松鼠 heard the noise again.”
鹰出现，威胁松鼠安全 “An eagle… threatened to attack the
Climax（高潮）
（冲突） tiny babies.”
Falling Action “Just as the eagle spread its
Mia做出反应救助松鼠
（下降） wings…”（续写段1）
Resolution（结 危机解除、心灵平静恢 “Mia smiled with relief…”（续写段
局） 复 2）五、原文分析
分析角度 内容 原文反应句
“She immediately took her
Mia——温柔、细心、富有爱心、
人物刻画 camera…”；“Her natural
行动果敢
reaction took over.”
“enjoy her freedom” → “curiosity”
宁静 → 好奇 → 紧张 → 放松
情感层次 → “shock of her life” → “smiled
→ 感悟
with relief”
1. 发现松鼠 2. 鹰威胁 3. Mia救 “An eagle… threatened to
关键情节点
助 4. 安全恢复 attack…”
句式灵动，富含心理描写；动作与“peaceful”, “couldn’t believe”,
语言特色
情感并进；用自然意象象征心境 “shock of her life”
“freedom, peaceful, curious, eagle,
关键词分析 threatened, relief” —— 构成情感波
动曲线
好奇→惊恐→焦虑→松口气→感悟“out of curiosity”, “shock of her
心理描写
生命 life”, “smiled with relief”
走向窗边、拉开窗帘、拍照、反应“approached the window”, “took
动作描写
救助 pictures”
宁静的卧室、树枝、窗外的光线、“quiet and peaceful”, “tree branch
环境描写
自然景象 beside the window”
人与自然的和谐共处、对生命的尊整体语境中的自然意象及Mia的
隐含主题
重与守护 行为
“peaceful morning → sudden tension
情感转折
→ relief & reflection”
室内（bedroom）↔窗外（tree &
空间转换
nest）
“few minutes later” → “Just as the
时间过渡
eagle spread its wings” → “after the分析角度 内容 原文反应句
danger”
续写细节点
元素 内容
“The curtain in the room had been drawn for the past few weeks.”（说明
伏笔处
长期未察觉松鼠，暗示将有‘惊喜’或‘意外’）
“An eagle… threatened to attack the tiny babies.”（外部冲突：捕食 vs
冲突点
保护）
Mia的善意与母性直觉，为后续救助埋下情感基础（“She wanted to
隐含线索
touch them…”）
解决方案 Mia通过本能行动（拍打窗户/制造声响）驱走鹰；自然恢复平静。
她在平凡的一天中感受到“守护生命的意义”，重新体悟生活之美与
升华结尾
宁静。
七、思路整理
角度 如何写？
1. 动作递进 从“小动作→紧急动作→放松动作”，体现情感变化。
2. 环境反衬 用“安静的房间”反衬“突发危机”，结尾再回归宁静形成对比。
首尾呼应“peaceful day”这一主题词，可结尾用如 “peace returned,
3. 情感呼应
but her heart was still racing with warmth.”
4. 用象征强
松鼠象征纯真与生命力，鹰象征威胁，自然形成象征对比。
化主题
5. 语言层次 注意动作+心理+环境描写交织，形成画面感。
6. 首句过渡
直接承接句首动词“spread its wings”展开，不要另起无关场景。
自然
3. 动作、环境、心理描写动作描写
Without a second thought, she slammed her palm against the cold
windowpane. (她不假思索地用手掌猛拍冰冷的窗玻璃。)
She grabbed a vase and rattled it vigorously against the window frame. (她抓起
一个花瓶，对着窗框剧烈地摇晃。)
Her hands fumbled for anything to make noise, finally seizing a heavy book. (她
的手胡乱地摸索着任何能发出响声的东西，最后抓住了一本厚重的书。)
She waved her arms frantically, a silent scream trapped in her throat. (她疯狂地
挥舞着手臂，一声无声的尖叫卡在喉咙里。)
With a deep breath, she mustered all her strength and let out a piercing
shout. (她深吸一口气，凝聚全身力气，发出了一声尖利的叫喊。)
The eagle, startled by the sudden movement, recoiled mid-air. (鹰被这突如其来
的动作吓了一跳，在空中向后一缩。)
It circled once, twice, its sharp eyes still locked on the nest. (它盘旋了一圈，两
圈，锐利的眼睛仍紧盯着鸟巢。)
Mia let out a breath she didn't realize she was holding. (Mia呼出了一口她都没
意识到自己屏住的气。)
She gently tapped on the glass, as if to reassure the trembling creatures. (她轻轻
地敲了敲玻璃，仿佛在安抚那些颤抖的小生命。)
Her knees felt weak as she slowly sank to the floor, the adrenaline fading. (当她
慢慢瘫坐在地板上时，膝盖发软，肾上腺素的作用正在消退。)
心理描写
A jolt of pure adrenaline shot through her veins. (一阵纯粹的肾上腺素冲击着她
的血管。)
Her mind raced, discarding one futile idea after another. (她的思绪飞速转动，
否决了一个又一个无用的想法。)
A primal urge to protect the helpless young overwhelmed all other thoughts. (一
种保护无助幼崽的本能冲动压倒了她所有其他的想法。)For a heart-stopping moment, she thought she was too late. (在一个令人心跳停
止的瞬间，她以为自己来不及了。)
A wave of relief so profound it left her trembling washed over her. (一阵如此深
刻的宽慰感席卷了她，让她不禁颤抖起来。)
Her heart hammered against her ribs like a trapped bird. (她的心像一只被困住
的小鸟一样猛烈地敲打着她的肋骨。)
The peaceful morning had shattered into a thousand shards of fear. (宁静的早晨
已破碎成无数恐惧的碎片。)
She prayed that her makeshift defense would be enough. (她祈祷自己临时的防
御措施能起作用。)
Watching the eagle retreat, a sense of fierce triumph bloomed in her chest. (看着
鹰撤退，一种强烈的胜利感在她胸中绽放。)
The fragility and resilience of life struck her with newfound clarity. (生命的脆弱
与坚韧以一种前所未有的清晰感触动了她。)
环境描写
The once peaceful morning air now crackled with tension. (曾经宁静的晨空此刻
充满了紧张的张力。)
A sharp shadow fell across the nest as the eagle spread its formidable wings. (当
鹰展开它巨大的翅膀时，一道尖锐的阴影笼罩了鸟巢。)
The silence was broken by the frantic thumping against the window. (寂静被
frantic 敲打窗户的声音打破了。)
Sunlight glinted off the eagle's menacing talons. (阳光在鹰险恶的爪子上闪烁。)
The two little squirrels froze, their tiny bodies tense with instinctive fear. (两只小
松鼠僵住了，它们小小的身体因本能的恐惧而紧绷。)
The tree branch swayed gently, a stark contrast to the life-and-death drama
unfolding upon it. (树枝轻轻摇曳，与正在其上上演的生死 drama 形成鲜明对
比。)
The room, once a haven of tranquility, had become a command post in a
blink. (这个房间，曾是宁静的避风港，转眼间变成了指挥中心。)A gentle breeze rustled the leaves, oblivious to the crisis. (一阵微风吹拂树叶，对
这场危机毫不知情。)
The retreating eagle became a dark speck against the vast, indifferent blue
sky. (撤退的鹰在广阔而冷漠的蓝天下变成了一个小黑点。)
The soft chirping of distant birds gradually returned, restoring the soundtrack of
the morning. (远处鸟儿柔和的 chirping 声逐渐回归，恢复了早晨的背景音。)
常见单词高级替换词（分类场景）
"高兴"场景:
常见词: happy
高级替换: elated (兴高采烈的), overjoyed (欣喜若狂的), content (心满意足的), ju
bilant (欢呼雀跃的), ecstatic (欣喜若狂的)。
"害怕/紧张"场景:
常见词: scared, nervous
高级替换: terrified (吓坏了的), petrified (吓呆了的), apprehensive (忧虑的), on
edge (紧张不安的), panic-stricken (惊慌失措的)。
"悲伤"场景:
常见词: sad
高级替换: heartbroken (心碎的), grief-stricken (悲痛欲绝的), melancholy (忧郁
的), despondent (沮丧的), devastated (崩溃的)。
"突然/快速"场景:
常见词: suddenly, quickly
高级替换: abruptly (突然地), instantaneously (瞬间地), promptly (迅速地), in a
flash (一瞬间), with lightning speed (以闪电般的速度)。
"看"场景:
常见词: look at
高级替换: gaze (凝视), glance (瞥一眼), peer (仔细看), glimpse (瞥见), observe
(观察)。4. 搭配、词法与语料积累
地道搭配与词法解析
got the shock of her life: 固定搭配，意为"她生平最大的惊吓"，比 "was very
shocked" 生动得多。
natural reaction took over: "take over" 这里形象地表示"本能反应接管/控制了身
体"，强调不由自主。
spread its wings: "展开翅膀"，描述鸟类准备起飞或示威的经典搭配。
threatened to attack: "threaten to do sth" 表示"预示/有...的威胁"，比 "was going
to attack" 更能营造悬疑氛围。
out of curiosity: 固定短语，"出于好奇"。
couldn't believe what she saw: 常用表达，表示"无法相信眼前所见"，强调震
惊。
must have left them alone: "must have done" 表示对过去情况的肯定推
测。"leave sb/sth alone" 表示"把...单独留下"。
enjoy her freedom: "享受她的自由"，地道动宾搭配。
peaceful and quiet: 经常连用，描述环境的宁静。
took pictures of: "给...拍照"，比 "take photos for" 更地道。
可积累的语料（生词短语）
1. Formidable (adj.) 强大的；令人敬畏的；可怕的
词意: inspiring fear or respect through being impressively large, powerful, intense, or
capable.
近义词: intimidating, daunting, impressive, awesome.
反义词: weak, feeble, unimpressive, harmless.
例句:
The eagle was a formidable predator, its talons looking razor-sharp. (这只鹰是一个
令人生畏的捕食者，它的爪子看起来像剃刀一样锋利。)She faced the formidable challenge of protecting the squirrels through the glass. (她
面临着隔着玻璃保护松鼠这个艰巨的挑战。)
2. Frantic (adj.) 狂乱的；疯狂的
词意: wild or distraught with fear, anxiety, or other emotion.
近义词: desperate, frenzied, hectic, wild.
反义词: calm, composed, relaxed, leisurely.
例句:
Mia made frantic gestures to scare the eagle away. (Mia做出了疯狂的手势来吓跑
老鹰。)
The mother squirrel returned, her search for food now becoming frantic as she sensed
danger. (松鼠妈妈回来了，它感觉到危险，寻找食物变得疯狂起来。)
3. Resilience (n.) 恢复力；韧性；弹性
词意: the capacity to recover quickly from difficulties; toughness.
近义词: toughness, hardiness, endurance, flexibility.
反义词: fragility, weakness, vulnerability.
例句:
The resilience of the tiny squirrels in the face of danger moved Mia deeply. (小松鼠
面对危险时的韧性深深地打动了Mia。)
Human resilience often shines through in moments of crisis. (人类的韧性常常在危
机时刻闪耀。)
4. Adrenaline (n.) 肾上腺素
词意: a hormone secreted in situations of stress, increasing heart rate, muscle
strength, and reaction speed.
近义词: epinephrine (technical term).
反义词: (无直接反义词，但可描述其效果消退) calm, relaxation.
例句:A surge of adrenaline coursed through her body, giving her the courage to act. (一股
肾上腺素涌遍全身，给了她行动的勇气。)
After the eagle left, the adrenaline faded, and she felt exhausted. (鹰离开后，肾上
腺素的作用消退，她感到筋疲力尽。)
5. Oblivious (adj.) 未察觉的；不注意的
词意: not aware of or not concerned about what is happening around one.
近义词: unaware, unconscious, ignorant, unmindful.
反义词: aware, conscious, mindful, attentive.
例句:
The two baby squirrels were initially oblivious to the looming danger. (两只小松鼠
起初并未察觉到迫在眉睫的危险。)
The world outside went on, oblivious to the small drama at Mia's window. (外面的世
界继续运转，对Mia窗前上演的小戏剧毫不知情。)
6. Stark contrast (n. phrase) 鲜明的对比
词意: an obvious and very great difference between two things.
近义词: sharp difference, clear distinction, striking disparity.
反义词: similarity, resemblance, parity.
例句:
The innocence of the squirrels stood in stark contrast to the eagle's menacing
presence. (松鼠的天真无邪与鹰的威胁形成了鲜明的对比。)
The peaceful morning presented a stark contrast to the chaos that followed. (宁静的
早晨与随之而来的混乱形成了鲜明的对比。)5. Possible Versions(5)
Version 1
Paragraph 1: Just as the eagle spread its wings, Mia’s natural reaction took
over. Her heart pounded wildly as she noticed the two little squirrels curling up
tightly, their tiny bodies trembling in fear . In a split second, she grabbed her
(独立主格)
camera, her fingers shaking slightly . Without a second thought, she pressed
(独立主格)
the shutter button, and a flash of bright light cut through the air . The
(无灵主语句)
eagle froze mid-flight, startled by the sudden glare . It gave a harsh cry
(过去分词做主语补语)
and flapped its powerful wings before disappearing into the pale morning sky .
Watching the danger fade away , Mia let out a long breath, her
(现在分词短语做伴随动作)
shoulders finally relaxing . Yet her eyes remained fixed on the nest , making
(独立主格)
sure the fragile lives were truly safe .
(现在分词短语做伴随动作)
Paragraph 2: Mia smiled with relief as the two little squirrels slowly relaxed
their tense bodies. The tiny creatures blinked in confusion, curling against each
other for comfort . A few minutes later, a shadow glided across the
(现在分词短语做伴随动作)
window—the mother squirrel had returned. Mia’s heart melted at the reunion
scene. The family huddled together in the nest, safe and sound . As morning
(adj做补语)
sunlight poured through the window, Mia quietly pressed her camera shutter again.
The morning was peaceful again, but in her heart, a soft warmth remained—she
had protected not only two little lives but also the beauty of her tranquil world.
亮点词汇与短语积累
类别 表达 同义/升级词组
情绪 heart pounded / trembling in fear / let out a 心跳加速 → heart thumped /
描写 long breath / heart melted eyes filled with warmth
动作 grabbed her camera / pressed the shutter /
seize / clutch / dart / gather
描写 flapped its wings / huddled together
环境 pale morning sky / sunlight poured through / serene / dawn light / quiet
表达 tranquil world surroundings
分词结构：Without a second thought, she pressed the shutter button, startling
the eagle.强调句式：It was the flash of light that frightened the eagle away.
同义替换与例句
词汇 同义/近义 例句
tremble shiver / quiver The little squirrel trembled at the sight of the eagle.
flash glare / beam The sudden flash scared the bird away.
comfort / ease / She felt an enormous sense of relief after the danger
relief
reassurance passed.
protect guard / shield / defend Mia tried to shield the tiny creatures from harm.
Version 2
Paragraph 1: Just as the eagle spread its wings, Mia’s natural reaction took
over. Startled yet determined , she grabbed a pillow and waved it fiercely
(过去分词做adj)
toward the window, hoping to scare the eagle away . Her heart
(现在分词短语做伴随动作)
pounded wildly as the huge bird fixed its sharp eyes on the nest . For a second, she
froze, fearing it might break through the glass. But the motherly
(现在分词做伴随动作)
instinct inside her urged her to act faster. She rushed to the balcony, shouting
and clapping loudly . The noise startled the eagle, which hesitated in
(现在分词做伴随动作)
mid-air and finally soared away into the distance. Breathless but relieved ,
(adj做主语补语)
Mia leaned against the wall, her trembling hands still holding the pillow tightly
(独立
, as if she were protecting the little lives herself. Watching the frightened
主格)
squirrels curl up together , she whispered softly, “You’re safe now.”
(现在分词短语做伴随动作)
Paragraph 2: Mia smiled with relief as the two little squirrels slowly relaxed
their tense bodies. They blinked their sleepy eyes and rubbed against each other for
warmth, as if to thank her. The peaceful scene touched Mia deeply. Sunlight
streamed through the window, reflecting in her eyes , now filled
(现在分词短语做伴随动作)
with tenderness . She realized that sometimes, even small creatures
(过去分词做后置定语)
could remind her of the power of love and care. Taking one last photo of the nest
and two tiny creatures , she quietly drew the curtain halfway,
(现在分词短语做伴随动作)
promising not to disturb them again . Life returned to its calm rhythm,
(现在分词做伴随动作)
yet her heart was gently stirred by the brief adventure. Nature, she thought, was
full of surprises—and responsibilities.
分词结构：Startled yet determined…现在分词伴随状语：shouting and clapping loudly
倒装：Only when the eagle left did she breathe out in relief.（可用于改写强
化）
定语从句：the little creatures which had just faced danger
【地道搭配】
原词 高阶替换 示例
scared startled / terrified / alarmed She was startled by the noise.
fly away soar / glide / take off swiftly The eagle soared away into the sky.
look at fix one’s eyes on / gaze at / stare at The eagle fixed its eyes on the nest.
情绪词：startled, trembling, relieved, touched, tender
动作词：wave, clap, rush, lean, curl up
主题 表达 同义/升级词
害怕 feel one’s heart in one’s throat panic / be seized with fear
安慰 breathe a sigh of relief feel reassured / relax at last
触动 be deeply moved by sth. be struck by / be warmed by
Version 3
Paragraph 1: Just as the eagle spread its wings, Mia’s natural reaction took
over. Her mind raced. Opening the window might frighten the squirrels , but
doing nothing would mean disaster. Thinking quickly , she grabbed a
(现在分词做伴随动作)
mirror from the dressing table and angled it toward the sunlight. A sudden
flash of light struck the eagle’s eyes. Startled , the big bird screamed
(过去分词做adj)
and rose higher, beating its wings in confusion . Mia held the mirror
(现在分词短语做伴随动作)
steady until the big bird gave up and disappeared into the blue sky . A wave of relief
swept through her, yet her legs went weak as the tension drained away. She smiled
faintly at the little creatures, whispering , “You’re safe now, tiny
(现在分词短语做伴随动作)
ones.”Paragraph 2: Mia smiled with relief as the two little squirrels slowly relaxed
their tense bodies. They nestled close, the soft breeze ruffling their fur . Mia
(独立主格)
watched quietly, feeling her earlier fear melt into gentle joy . The
(现在分词短语做伴随动作)
morning calm returned, but everything seemed different—more alive, more
meaningful . She realized that courage didn’t always roar; sometimes, it came in
(补语)
small, thoughtful acts. Picking up her camera again , she captured
(现在分词短语做伴随动作)
the moment—the symbol of protection and peace. Closing the curtain lightly
(现在
, she promised herself to look after this secret corner of life with the
分词短语做伴随动作)
same care she gave her family.
现在分词结构：Opening the window might frighten…
独立主格结构：The sunlight reflected, the eagle screamed in surprise.
虚拟语气：Had she acted slower, the baby squirrels might have been gone.
【地道搭配】
常规 升级表达
think quickly → act on instinct / react promptly
scared away → drove off / forced away
calm down → regain composure / settle down
【情绪/动作亮点】
动作词：grab, angle, flash, rise, disappear
心理变化：panic → focus → calm → satisfaction
【积累语料】
表达 同义词 示例
sense of release / flood of A wave of relief swept through
a wave of relief
comfort her.
act boldly / act with
act with courage She acted with quiet courage.
determination
meaningful life purposeful / fulfilling It made her day more meaningful.
Version 4Paragraph 1: Just as the eagle spread its wings, Mia’s natural reaction took
over. Her breath caught. Instinctively, she tapped on the window repeatedly, the
sound echoing sharply through the morning air . The eagle paused, wings
(独立主格)
still spread wide . Mia’s heart thumped painfully as she waved her hands to
(独立主格)
make herself visible. For a tense moment, predator and protector faced each
other across the glass. Then, with a shrill cry, the eagle turned and disappeared
into the dazzling sunlight. Silence returned, broken only by the faint rustle of
the leaves . Mia pressed her forehead against the window, tears welling
(过去分词做后置定语)
in her eyes —half from fear, half from relief.
(独立主格)
Paragraph 2: Mia smiled with relief as the two little squirrels slowly relaxed
their tense bodies. They seemed to sense her presence and chirped softly, their tiny
tails flicking . The warmth of the morning sunlight covered everything—the
(独立主格)
nest, the window, and Mia’s face. For the first time, she noticed how fragile and
beautiful life could be. Taking one last look , she whispered a silent
(现在分词短语做伴随动作)
prayer for the tiny lives beyond the glass. As she drew the curtain , the quiet
house seemed warmer , filled with the rhythm of life . The day
(环境描写) (过去分词做主语补语)
that began with peace had ended with love and care.
【语法亮点】
独立主格结构：Her breath caught, her heart racing with fear.
现在分词作结果状语：Tears welling in her eyes, she pressed her forehead…
拟人化手法：The morning sunlight covered everything with warmth.
【地道搭配】
原词 高阶表达 示例
look
gaze / peer / glance anxiously She gazed at the window.
carefully
cry loudly scream / shriek / let out a cry The eagle let out a shrill cry.
terrified / frozen with fear / breathless with She was breathless with
scared
tension tension.
【情绪/动作亮点】
情绪词：tense, breathless, fearful, relieved, reflective
动作词：tap, wave, press, draw, flick
【积累语料】高分主题表
替换短语 示例
达
生命的脆弱 the fragility of life She realized the fragility of life.
The warmth of nature filled the
自然的温情 the warmth of nature
room.
gain insight into life / understand life’s She gained a deeper insight into
感悟生活
rhythm life.
总结性技巧与使用建议
写作要点 操作建议
段首逻辑衔 第一段最后一句必须为“危机解除+情感转折”，与第二段首句
接 “relief”自然对接。
心理变化主
curiosity → panic → action → calm → reflection
线
语法加分点 现在分词、独立主格、虚拟语气、倒装、强调句
语言风格 叙述+心理描写+自然意象（形成情感象征）
主题呼应 Peace / Nature / Life’s fragility / Human compassion官方：
Just as the eagle spread its wings, Mia’s natural reaction took over. Without a
second thought , Mia hit the window hard with her hand and yelled, “Leave them
alone!” The sudden noise and vibration startled the large bird away. It stopped
its attack and cast a sharp glance toward Mia behind the glass. Though the tiny
squirrels also froze in fear , Mia had to keep making loud sounds and flash her
camera light. Thankfully, the continuous noise and the unexpected bright light
finally forced the eagle to push off from the branch and fly away.
Mia smiled with relief as the two little squirrels slowly relaxed their tense
bodies. Soon, the mother squirrel returned with some food in her mouth. The tiny
squirrels moved excitedly and rubbed against their mother for food. A profound
sense of warmth and fulfillment washed over Mia as she witnessed this intimate
reunion. The mother squirrel stopped for a moment on the windowsill, looking at
Mia(现在分词短语做伴随动作)as if to quietly say thanks, before caring for her babies. Mia’s
heart swelled with joy, knowing(现在分词短语做伴随动作) she not only had captured wonderful
photos but had also become a silent guardian of a squirrel family.
