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09-2023年上海市初三英语一模真题专项训练之写作
Writing（作文）（本大题共1题，共20分）
2023虹口一模
64. Write at least 60 words according to the given situation（根据以下情境写一篇不
少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格）
下列是学校征集的模范学生的其中四条标准，你最认同哪一条？为什么？
请举例说明。
注意：1. 文中不得出现姓名、校名等个人信息，否则不予评分。
2. 照抄阅读语篇不得分。
3. 请选择一条填在横线上作为标题。
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【答案】例文
Be honest
As we know, honesty is very important. It is one of people’s good qualities.
People need honesty and I hope everyone is honest and trusting. Last term, my best
friend wanted to copy my homework because he played computer games untilmidnight and had no time to do his homework. But I thought it was against honesty,
so I told him not to copy my homework and I would help him next time.
Honesty is quite an important quality to a person. So I think as a model student,
he must be honest.
【解析】
【详解】[总体分析]
①题材：本文是一篇话题作文；
②时态：时态为“一般现在时”和“一般过去时”；
③提示：本文首先要选择其中一条标准，并通过举例说明，可适当增加细节，
突出写作重点。
[写作步骤]
第一步，引出话题，表示诚实是很重要的，并讲述为什么诚实很重要；
第二步，通过举例说明诚实的重要性；
第三步，书写结语。
[亮点词汇]
①one of……之一
②play computer games玩电脑游戏
[高分句型]
①People need honesty and I hope everyone is honest and trusting.（and连接的并列
句）
②Last term, my best friend wanted to copy my homework because he played
computer games until midnight and had no time to do his homework.（because引导
原因状语从句）
2023普陀一模
64. Read the beginning of the story and write a passage of at least 60 words to
complete it.（根据短文情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。字数不少于
60词。）
Frank and his wife had just parked the car around the corner from their home.Frank got a call from one of his daughters, “The kitchen next door is on fire!” Frank
then saw the black smoke coming out of the windows of his neighbour’s home...
以下问题仅供参考：（短文中不得出现考生的姓名、校名及其他相关信息，否
则不予评分。）
How did Frank feel after he saw the smoke?
What did Frank and his wife do?
What happened at last?
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【答案】例文
Frank and his wife had just parked the car around the corner from their home.
Frank got a call from one of his daughters, “The kitchen next door is on fire!” Frank
then saw the black smoke coming out of the windows of his neighbour’s home. As
soon as Frank saw the smoke, he knew it was not good. If the fire was not put out in
time, there would be a larger fire. They got off quickly. Frank’s wife called the police.
Frank ran and called for help. At the same time, he soaked himself with water and
rushed into the house. There was only one child in the room. He quickly picked up the
child. At the same time, the neighbors also used buckets to carry water to put out the
fire, and they promptly controlled the fire. In a moment, the fire truck came and the
fire was put out.
【解析】
【详解】[总体分析]
①题材：本文是一篇材料作文续写；
②时态：时态为“一般现在时”和“一般过去时”；③提示：文章的中心主题已给出，顺着文章的主题续写时，要注意意思连贯。
[写作步骤]
第一步，根据开头的情节介绍弗兰克看到烟雾后的感受；
第二步，介绍弗兰克和妻子做了什么；
第三步，介绍最终结果。
[亮点词汇]
①As soon as一……就……
②got off下车
③at the same time同时
④put out扑灭
⑤in a moment一会儿
[高分句型]
As soon as Frank saw the smoke, he knew it was not good.（时间状语从句）
2023杨浦一模
80. Last Friday, Mary went to the night market. Look at the pictures and write a
story in at least 80 words on the topic Lucky Mary（上周五，Mary 去了夜市。请
根据图片提示，以《幸运的玛丽》为题，写一篇不少于80个单词的短文）
写作提示及要求：
①下列词汇你在写作的过程中可能会使用到：dart n.飞镖，teddy bear n.玩具熊，
game stand游戏摊位。
②关注图片传递的信息与图片之间的关联，适当增加对话或内心独白。
③写作内容中不得出现真实姓名和校名。
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【答案】例文：
Lucky Mary
Last Friday, Mary went to the night market. While she was walking aimlessly, she
saw a game stand playing darts. The prize was a teddy bear. Mary liked this teddy
bear very much. She spent ten yuan playing with darts. Playing this game was not too
difficult for her. In the end, all three of her darts were hit. The game stand owner was
surprised. Mary won the teddy bear. She went home with the teddy bear happily. How
lucky she was!
【解析】
【详解】[总体分析]
①题材：本文是一篇图画作文；
②时态：时态为“一般过去时”；
③提示：考生要根据三幅图片中传递的信息介绍玛利的经历。
[写作步骤]
第一步，介绍玛利去玩飞镖游戏的过程；
第二步，感慨玛利很幸运。
[亮点词汇]
①very much 非常
②spend money doing sth. 花钱做某事
[高分句型]
①While she was walking aimlessly, she saw a game stand playing darts.（while引导
的时间状语从句）
②Playing this game was not too difficult for her.（动名词作主语）
③How lucky she was!（感叹句）2023松江一模
64. Write at least 60 words according to the given situation.（根据以下情境写一
篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格）
你校网站新增了一个专栏“夸夸我的小伙伴”，希望学生能够发现身边的
正能量并将其广泛传播。学校目前正在发动学生参与投稿。假设你是李华，请
给网站投稿，夸夸你的小伙伴张文。
注意：
1.文中不得出现姓名、校名等个人信息，否则不予评分。
2.照抄阅读语篇不得分。
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【答案】例文：
Zhang Wen is my friend. She is a friendly and outgoing girl. She studies very
hard and always gets good grades. She is understanding, so she is ready to help others
when they are in trouble. She always takes part in all kinds of activities on weekends.
Sometimes, she teaches people how to sort garbage in the community and helps clean
up parks and streets. She also founded a DIY studio at school. Here, she teaches her
classmates to make old clothes into handbags.
I think Zhang Wen is such an excellent girl that we should learn from her.
【解析】
【详解】[总体分析]
①题材：本文是一篇记叙文，为话题作文；②时态：时态为“一般现在时”；
③提示：根据题干可知，要介绍一位自己的小伙伴，注意语言表达准确，语法
使用正确。
[写作步骤]
第一步，介绍朋友张文的性格特征、优秀品质；
第二步，介绍张文经常参加各种各样的活动，如垃圾分类、清扫公园及街道、
旧衣回收改造等；
第三步，表示要向她学习。
[亮点词汇]
①get good grades取得好成绩
②be ready to do sth.准备好做某事
③be in trouble处于困境之中
④takes part in参加
[高分句型]
①She is understanding, so she is ready to help others when they are in trouble.
（when引导时间状语从句）
②I think Zhang Wen is such an excellent girl that we should learn from her.
（such...that引导结果状语从句）
2023宝山一模
64. Write at least 60 words according to the situation given.（请根据所给情境，写
一篇不少于60个词的短文。标点符号不占格，信件格式已给）
近日，你校举办了“我为母校建言献策”的征集活动，请毕业年级的学生为学
校未来发展提出自己宝贵的建议。假如你是李华，请你给教导处王老师写一份
信。内容包括：
1. 请结合实际情况，在学校课程设计（course design）、校园环境（school
environment ） 、 午 餐 质 量 （ quality of lunch ） 、 作 业 负 担 （ burden of
homework）、校园活动（school activities）中选择1-2个方面，谈谈你的真实感
受；2. 针对你认为有待提高的地方，提出合理建议并简要说明理由；
3.表达你对母校的感激，献上你对母校未来发展的美好祝福。
（注意：1. 文中不得出现任何真实人名、校名及其它相关信息，否则不予评分。
2. 照抄阅读语篇内容不得分。）
The following is for reference only.（以下内容仅供参考）
☺I’d like to suggest…
☺…needs to be improved
☺I hope…
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【答案】例文
Our campus is very beautiful, and I am very happy to study here every day. I have
deep memories here. But I think there are some areas that need improvement.
First of all, can we solicit the opinions of our students for lunch? The school
restaurant can make some lunches that students really enjoy. Secondly, I suggest that
our school activities should be more diversified. For example, we can hold some
basketball games, dance competitions, and so on. I hope our school can get better and
better.
【解析】
【详解】[总体分析]
①题材：本文是一篇说明文，为材料作文；
②时态：时态为“一般现在时”；
③提示：写作要点已给出，考生应注意不要遗漏，适当增加细节完整表述内容。[写作步骤]
第一步，介绍自己对校园满意之处；
第二步，提出自己的建议。
[亮点词汇]
①first of all首先
②for example例如
③get better and better变得越来越好
[高分句型]
①But I think there are some areas that need improvement.（that引导定语从句）
2023静安一模
69. Write at least 60 words about the topic “I am very active in ________
classes”（请以“我在________课上十分活跃”为题，写一篇不少于60个词的
短文，标点符号不占格。）
在你的日常学习中，你总会对某一门学科情有独钟，在它的课堂上参与学
习活动尤其活跃。请你明确一门学科，并填写在空格内；陈述你活跃的理由
（要求所列原因不少于两个），简单介绍你的收获。
（注意：不得出现任何姓名、校名以及其它相关信息，否则不予评分。）
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【答案】例文
I am very active in English classes
I am Lily, I am a 14-year-old girl in Grade 9. I love English, so I am alwaysactive in English class.
I fell in love with English when I was a little girl. At that time, my English
teacher was a very beautiful girl. She always spoke fluent English with a smile on her
face. She was so attractive that I was deeply influenced by her. From then on, I have
always listened to English classes very carefully. What’s more, I think English is very
useful because I want to go abroad when I finish high school. I will learn all of my
subjects in English, so I decide to learn English well.
All in all, I am always active in English classes, and I also hope my English will
be better and better.
【解析】
【详解】[总体分析]
①题材：本文是一篇记叙文；
②时态：时态主要为“一般现在时”和“一般过去时”；
③提示：首先根据自己情况，把题目补充完整再进行写作。
[写作步骤]
第一步，第一段指出自己最活跃的课堂是什么课堂，起到开篇点题并引入下文
的作用；
第二步，写出自己喜欢这个科目的原因，至少两条；
第三步，最后进行简单的总结及对未来的期待。
[亮点词汇]
①fall in love with...爱上了……
②be influenced by被……影响
③decide to do sth决定做某事
④attractive有吸引力的
[高分句型]
①She was so attractive that I was deeply influenced by her.（用so...that...引导结果
状语从句）
②She always spoke fluent English with a smile on her face.（with...介词短语作伴随
状语）2023崇明一模
64. Write at least 60 words on the topic“Things I harvested in 2022”（以“2022
年的收获”为题写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格。）
在刚过去的2022年中，你一定在很多方面收获颇多，请结合具体事例，谈
谈你的收获有哪些，你是怎样取得的。
（注意：短文中不得出现任何校名、人名及其他相关信息，否则不予评分）。
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【答案】例文
Things I harvested in 2022
2020 is a different year. Because of COVID-19, we had to stay at home and studies
online. At first, I didn’t use to have lessons online. Because I couldn’t communicate
with teachers and students face to face. Also, I couldn’t hand in my homework on
time. My mother noticed my changes and talked to me patiently. I realized I must
change myself. I made a study plan and listened to teachers carefully. After class, I
reviewed the notes. Gradually, I got used to having lessons online.
From this, I understand no matter what happens, we should face the situation
instead of complaining. When we are in trouble, we can talk to our parents or
teachers.
【解析】
【详解】[总体分析]
①题材：本文是一篇记叙文，为话题作文；
②时态：时态为“一般现在时”和“一般过去时”；③提示：写作要点已给出，考生应注意不要遗漏，适当增加细节完整表述内容。
[写作步骤]
第一步，介绍2022年发生的一件深刻的事情；
第二步，介绍自己的收获和感悟。
[亮点词汇]
①because of因为
②used to do sth过去常常做某事
③communicate with与……沟通
④on time按时
⑤be in trouble处于困境中
[高分句型]
①I got used to having lessons online.（动名词作宾语）
②I understand no matter what happens, we should face the situation instead of
complaining.（no matter what引导让步状语从句）
2023奉贤一模
64. Write at least 60 words according to the given situation（根据以下情境写一篇不
少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格。）
The Magic Power of ______
生活中总有一些不经意的小举动，在我们/他们失落、失望的时候，带给我
们/他们出乎意料的力量和感动，一抹浅浅的微笑、一个暖暖的拥抱、一封短短
的邮件……请分享一个你经历过的带有神奇魔力的举动。
注意：1）写作中不得出现姓名、校名等个人信息，否则不予评分。2）照抄阅
读语篇不得分。
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【答案】例文：
The Magic Power of Encouragement
Everyone has a magic moment in our lives. Life is like a journey with many
fantastic stops. There are so many interesting things and wonderful people in my life.
I had a very unforgettable moment. Last summer holiday, I wanted to learn to
swim. I went to the swimming pool with my father. He taught me how to swim. At
first, I was afraid of diving in the water. And I felt uncomfortable in the water. But my
father always encouraged me. He said he would protect me. When I began to swim,
but I couldn’t swim forward at all, which made me upset. Then my father told me how
to move and how to stretch out my arms and legs. Slowly, I could move a little. It
took me two hours to learn to swim. I felt so proud at that moment.
【解析】
【详解】[总体分析]
①题材：本文是一篇话题作文，为记叙文；
②时态：主要是一般过去时；
③提示：须先补全题目，注意大写，并表达与题目相关的一次经历；经历部分
强调“鼓励”的神奇魔力；全文会有出现一般现在时与一般过去时。
[写作步骤]
第一步，简单表达生活中会出现许多有趣精彩的人和事；
第二步，具体描述自己一次难忘经历，即：在学习游泳过程中父亲如何鼓励自
己；
第三步，简单表达自己的感受。
[亮点词汇]
①be afraid of doing 害怕做某事
②can’t swim forward at all 根本不能向前游
③tell me how to... 告诉我如何……
[高分句型]①When I began to swim, but I couldn’t swim forward at all, which made me upset.
（which引导的非限制性定语从句）
②It took me two hours to learn to swim.（it固定句型，it作形式主语，动词不定
式作真正主语）
2023嘉定一模
64. Write at least 60 words according to the given situation（根据以下情境写一篇不
少于 60 个词的短 文，标点符号不占格）
假如你是李华，学校要组织学生参加“生活技能体验”和“博物馆探索”
的项目活动，每位学生可以报名参加一个项目。你会报名参加哪个项目？请写
一封邮件给班主任张老师，告诉他你的决定，并说明理由。
Training of living skills
Exploration of museums
•last week of June
•first Saturday every month from March to
•stay on a farm for a week June
•live with team members and local •visit different museums in the city
people
•guided by professional researchers
•cook meals by yourself, feed
•explore history, science,..
animals...
（注意：邮件中不得出现任何人名、校名及其他相关信息，否则不予评分。照
抄语篇不得分）
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【答案】例文Dear Mr. Zhang,
Thanks for offering such meaningful activities. I prefer training of living skills in
the last week of June because all the living skills I will get during the process will be
of great value to my later life.
I’m so excited that I can stay on a farm for a week. There, I will be able to live
with team members and local people who will help me learn more about their customs
and lifestyles. Moreover, what makes me interested is that I can cook by myself and
also take part in activities on the farm such as feeding animals and picking fruit.
I hope I will enjoy myself on the farm. I believe it must be an unforgettable
experience.
Yours,
Li Hua
【解析】
【详解】[总体分析]
① 题材：本文是一篇应用文，为邮件；
② 时态：一般现在时态和一般将来时；
③ 提示：项目内容已给出，考生注意不要遗漏，适当增加细节，并突出重点，
注意邮件格式。
[写作步骤]
第一步，表明写作意图。开门见山，表明自己要参加“生活技能体验”；
第二步，具体阐述写作内容。具体说明项目内容和选择的原因；
第三步，书写结语。表达“希望自己玩得开心”的愿望，并肯定本次活动的意
义。
[亮点词汇]
① thanks for doing 感谢做……
② be of great value 非常有价值
[高分句型]
① I prefer training of living skills in the last week of June because all the living skills
I will get during the process will be of great value to my later life.（原因状语从句和定语从句）
② I believe it must be an unforgettable experience.（宾语从句）
2023闵行一模
64. Write a letter of at least 60 words according to the given situation（根据
以下情境写一封不少于60个词的信，标点符号不占格。信的开头和署名已给，
不计入总字数。）
“汉语桥“中文能力大赛的成功举办说明越来越多的外国学生对中华优秀
文化很感兴趣。假设你是李华，你的外国网友Peter对中华文化很感兴趣，想了
解并学习。请从以下中华文化的六种表现中，选择你最喜欢的一种推荐给他，
并说明理由。
中华武术（Chinese martial arts）京剧（Peking Opera）中华书法（Chinese
calligraphy）
中文歌曲（Chinese songs）中华美食（Chinese food）中华剪纸（Chinese
paper-cutting）
（注意：1. 信中不得出现考生姓名、校名等个人信息，否则不予评分。2. 照抄
阅读语篇不得分。）
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Dear Peter,I know you are interested in Chinese culture. Now let me introduce one of the most
important culture—Chinese paper-cutting.
It has a history of more than 5,000 years. It is easily made. You only need some
paper and a pair of scissors. You can change the paper into some different shapes,
such as animals, flowers and so on. When Spring Festival comes, you can see people
stick them on the windows and walls. It is a symbol of good luck. You can learn how
to make Chinese paper-cutting by watching videos.
We also have other traditional culture. If you want to learn more, please tell me.
Looking forward to your reply.
Yours,
Peter
【解析】
【详解】[总体分析]
①题材：本文是一篇应用文，为书信作文；
②时态：时态为“一般现在时”；
③提示：写作要点已给出，考生应注意不要遗漏，适当增加细节完整表述内容。
[写作步骤]
第一步，介绍剪纸是中国传统文化之一；
第二步，介绍剪纸的相关情况，包括它的历史，制作以及代表的意义。
[亮点词汇]
①more than多于
②change into把……变成……
③a symbol of……的象征
[高分句型]
①Now let me introduce one of the most important culture—Chinese paper-cutting
（“one of the+形容词最高级”的结构）
②When Spring Festival comes, you can see people stick them on the windows and
walls.（when引导的时间状语从句）2023浦东一模
64. Write at least 60 words according to the given situation。（根据以下情境写一篇
不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格）
D篇阅读中，作者Tessa从松树身上受到了启发。在中国文化中松树还可寓
意“坚毅”和“正直”的品质。请选择其中的一个品质，结合自己或他人的经
历，谈谈你对该品质的理解。
（strong-willed adj. 坚毅的 upright adj. 正直的）
（注意：1、短文中不得出现姓名、校名等个人信息，否则不予评分。
2、照抄阅读语篇不得分。）
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【64题详解】
[总体分析]
① 题材：本文是一篇话题作文；
② 时态：一般现在时为主，描写经历时用一般过去式；
③ 提示：注意结合自己或他人经历，适当增加细节，突出重点。
[写作步骤]
第一步，引出话题。用“有志者，事竟成”引出坚毅的品质；
第二步，具体阐述写作内容。用个人经历谈对坚毅品质的理解；
第三步，总结全文。总结理解，提出感悟“天助自助者”。
[亮点词汇]
① where there is a will, there is a way 有志者，事竟成
② make sth possible 让某事成为可能③ in short 简言之
[高分句型]
① A well-known proverb goes that where there is a will, there is a way, which means
that one can find a way to success as long as he or she has a strong will.（定语从
句）
② In short, a strong will is essential if we want to make achievements in our studies
or work, or indeed in any other aspect of our lives.（if条件状语从句）
2023徐汇一模
80. Write at least 60 words according to the given situation（根据以下情境写一
篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格）。
假设你是 Joe，你校校报正在通过邮件评选最受欢迎的一个栏目
（section）。
备选栏目如下：
·School sports
·Word games and crossword puzzles
·School clubs
·Book or Film reviews
·Poems by students
请给校报写封邮件，谈谈你的选择，并简要说明理由。
注意：
1. 信中不得出现姓名、校名等个人信息，否则不予评分。
2. 照抄阅读语篇不得分。
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【答案】例文
Dear Editor,
I’m glad to hear that you are selecting the most popular section. From the point of
my view, my favorite one is the School sports. There are several reasons which can
account for my opinion as below. First of all, every teenager has his own sports idol.
In this column, we can get the latest sports information in time. Secondly, in this
column, we can often get some sports suggestions, which will help students to arrange
sports reasonably during school.
Yours,
Joe
【解析】
【详解】[总体分析]
①题材：本文是一篇应用文，为电子邮件；
②时态：时态为“一般现在时”；
③提示：要求根据题目要求谈谈你喜欢的栏目及原因。不要遗漏题目中的要点，
适当添加细节，写作时保持主谓一致，注意字数要求。
[写作步骤]
第一步，首先介绍校报正在通过邮件评选最受欢迎的一个栏目的消息；
第二步，谈谈你最喜欢哪个栏目；
第三步，谈谈你选择这个栏目的理由。
[亮点词汇]
①From the point of my view在我看来
②First of all首先
③help sb to do sth帮助某人做某事
[高分句型]
①I’m glad to hear that you are selecting the most popular section.（宾语从句）
②There are several reasons which can account for my opinion as below.（定语从
句）2023长宁一模
64. Write at least 60 words about the topic “My suggestions for the new
schoolmates”（请根据下面的提示，以“给新同学的建议”为题，写一篇不少于
60个词的短文，标点符号不占格。）
度过了几年的初中学习生活，你终将面临毕业，而马上又会有新的同学即
将进入你上过的初中。请根据你的亲身体验写封短信给这些新同学，给他们提
一些学习生活方面的建议，如：学习方法、参与活动、业余生活、师生关系、
课后作业等等。短信的开头2句已提供。
（注意：文中不得出现任何姓名、校名以及其他标志性的具体信息，否则不予
评分。）
My suggestions for the new schoolmates
Dear fellow schoolmates,
Welcome to our school. As I’m leaving here for a senior high school, I’d like to
write a few lines of suggestions for you…
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Yours,
Li Hua
【答案】例文
Dear fellow schoolmates,
Welcome to our school. As I’m leaving here for a senior high school, I’d like to
write a few lines of suggestions for you.In your school life, you should prepare well for each lesson. In class, you must
listen to the teacher carefully. And you should always be friendly to your classmates
and teachers. Besides, it’s important for you to do your homework on your own. In
your daily life, you ought to keep a healthy diet. Also, it’s necessary for you to
exercise a lot. You can take active part in all kinds of activities. And you should learn
to make good use of your time.
I hope you will have a wonderful school life.
Yours,
Li Hua
【解析】
【详解】[总体分析]
①题材：本文是一篇材料作文；
②时态：时态为“一般现在时”；
③提示：写作要点已给出，考生应注意不要遗漏，适当增加细节完整表述内容。
[写作步骤]
第一步，介绍对新同学各方面的建议；
第二步，结尾总结。
[亮点词汇]
①be friendly to对……友好
②all kinds of各种各样的
③prepare well for准备好
[高分句型]
Also, it’s necessary for you to exercise a lot.（It固定句型）
2023金山一模
64. Write at least 60 words on the topic“The success in my eyes”（以“我眼里
的成功”为题，写一篇至少60个单词的短文。标点符号不占格）
在你的生活中，你总是不断在成长，不断收获着属于自己的成功。成功可
以是令人瞩目的，也可以是籍籍无名的；有的成功可以改变世界，有的成功可以只是自己的一个小进步、小改变，……请你说说你眼里的成功是怎样的，并
结合自身生活上或者学习上的经历进行说明。
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【答案】
The success in my eyes
Success is a goal that everyone wants to achieve, but not everyone can succeed.
Once I participated in a 100-meter race at a sports meeting. Although I practiced
hard, I still haven’t achieved good results. Although I failed, I experienced the joy of
exercise.
So failure is the mother of success, which means that in order to succeed, people
need to make every effort. If we want to do anything without effort, we should try our
best to do it. Where there is a will, there is a way.
【解析】
【详解】[总体分析]
①题材：本文是一篇话题作文；
②时态：时态为“一般现在时”；
③提示：本文需要能够根据提示并且围绕主题，清楚连贯地表达自己的想法，
注意语法、词汇和句型的使用。
[写作步骤]
第一步，先总写自己对于成功的看法；
第二步，通过描写自己的经历来证明自己的观点；
第三步，总结失败是成功之母，想要成功就要努力。
[亮点词汇]①joy of exercise运动的乐趣
②in order to为了
③once曾经
[高分句型]
①Although I failed, I experienced the joy of exercise.（although引导的让步状语从
句）
②Where there is a will, there is a way.（引用谚语来总结自己的观点）
2023青浦一模
64. Write at least 60 words about the topic “Make the right move”（请以“明智
之举”为题写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格。）
在学习与生活中，我们会遇到需要做出选择的关键时刻，只有经过慎重考
虑，才能采取正确的行动。请以“Make the right move（明智之举）”为题，结
合你的经历或见闻，谈谈你的感受。
注意：
● 文中不得出现姓名、校名等个人信息，否则不予评分。
● 照抄试卷中内容不得分。
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【答案】例文
Make the right move
When the pandemic hit, I bravely chose to volunteer, which I think was the right
move I made.I gave out facial masks to those in need in many communities. I went to the
supermarket to remind people to keep a social distance between each other. In my
school, I also made a speech about how to fight against the epidemic.
It is meaningful for me to take part in the voluntary work. To begin with, it lets
people know the importance of wearing masks. In addition, it helps raise the citizens’
awareness of protecting themselves. Most importantly, people’s spirits have been
inspired so that we can get through this hard time positively.
The experience as a volunteer made me feel tired but proud of myself. I believe
that only when we work together can we build up a world full of harmony and beauty.
【解析】
【详解】[总体分析]
①题材：本文是一篇说明文，为话题作文；
②时态：时态以“一般过去时”为主；
③提示：要求以“Make the right move（明智之举）”为题，结合自己的经历或
见闻，谈谈感受。适当添加细节，并突出写作重点。
[写作步骤]
第一步，介绍自己疫情期间选择做志愿者是明智之举；
第二步，介绍自己的经历；
第三步，表达自己做志愿者的感受。
[亮点词汇]
①those in need那些需要帮助的人
②fight against the epidemic抗击疫情
③take part in参加
④raise the citizens’ awareness of提高市民的意识
[高分句型]
①When the pandemic hit, I bravely chose to volunteer, which I think was the right
move I made.（when引导的时间状语从句和which引导的非限制性定语从句）
②I believe that only when we work together can we build up a world full of harmony
and beauty.（that引导的宾语从句和倒装句）2023黄浦一模
64. Write at least 60 words according to the given situation.（根据以下情境写一篇
不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格。）
你和你的家人刚搬到了上海郊区的一个城镇，你打算给你的朋友 Jane 寄一张
小镇风景的明信片。
About Greenland Town
Location About 15 km south of the Shanghai City
Metro（Underground. Line 9）
Transport
Bus 87, 91, 92
Area 2 square kilometers
In your postcard to your friend, you should
● introduce the town briefly
● explain why you have moved
● say what you like and dislike about living there.
注意：1.短文中不得出现考生的姓名、校名等个人信息，否则不予评分 2. 照抄
阅读语篇不得分
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【答案】例文
Dear Jane,
How’s everything going? I’m in a new town called Greenland Town now. It’s
about 15 km south of the Shanghai City. It covers an area of 2 square kilometers. The
traffic is convenient here. I can take Metro Line9 or take the No.87, 91, 92 bus.
I had an offer from a big company and it was a good opportunity for me, so I
decided to move here. It’s near the company where I am working.
It’s a good place because the people here are friendly and helpful. And there are
lots of historical places which are interesting. However, I don’t like the weather here.
It often rains and it is wet everywhere.
【解析】
【详解】[总体分析]
①题材：本文是一篇应用文；
②时态：时态为“一般现在时”和“一般过去时”；
③提示：写作要点已给出，考生注意不要遗漏“要点”中解释为什么要搬到这
里，注意要点要齐全。
[写作步骤]
第一步，问候并简单介绍这个小镇；
第二步，解释搬到这个城镇的原因；
第三步，阐述对于该城镇喜欢和不喜欢的地方。
[亮点词汇]
①take Metro Line...坐地铁……号线
②decide to do决定做某事
③lots of许多，大量
[高分句型]
①It’s near the company where I am working.（where引导的定语从句）
②It’s a good place because the people here are friendly and helpful.（because引导的
原因状语从句）
③And there are lots of historical places which are interesting.（There be 句型；which引导的定语从句）
