读后续写微讲座二：读通(情节发展)
外刊输入——悟语言之道
Growing from Travel
Sept. 27 is World Tourism Day. Of course, travel isn't a new discovery. Imagine how Italian
traveler Marco Polo must have felt when he found himself on Chinese soil, seeing a way of life
extremely different from anything he'd seen before.
And how amazing must it have been to listen to Zhang Qian, Chinese explorer, the first man to
bring back a reliable account of the lands of Central Asia to the court of China when he returned? He
was dispatched by the Han Dynasty emperor Wudi in 138 BCE to establish contact with the
Yuezhi people, a Central Asian tribal group that spoke an IndoEuropean language. Captured by the
Xiongnu, viewed as enemies of China, he was held for 10 years. Nevertheless, he managed to
reach his destination and returned to China after an absence of 13 years. His brain must have been
packed with details he'd seen and heard, leading to the founding of the Silk Road.
Travel is one of the most exciting experiences a human being can have. Nowadays, more people
are travelling than ever before, using various means of transport. By train, plane and car, people all
around the globe are visiting places that people didn't even know or only knew from books.
Some people have travelled all over the world, and travel is a unique way of life to them. They
perhaps know what to expect before they make travel arrangements. That's why the best travel is
when it's for the first time. Imagine a person who has always wanted to travel to the United States.
Of course, they've probably seen the Statue of Liberty a thousand times on the TV, the White House,
and all the other famous sights. But none of them would compare to the thrill of looking out of the
cabin window as the flight lands, watching the cities, streets and paths of the real America come
into view.
Although travel is often just for fun, it's also educational. We may not know that we are getting
an education, but we still are. We're learning every day: new words in a new language, new people,
and new ways of life. But it is in the school of the world that this powerful learning takes place,
not the classroom. The most important one is undoubtedly a moral one. As we get to know foreign
places, we come to recognise that there are many different ways to live, and that the way we live
isn't necessarily the best way. So, travel teaches toleration.
1.重点词汇再现
(1)extremely adv. 极其地
(2)amazing adj. 令人惊叹的
(3)emperor n. 皇帝(4)contact n. 联系
(5)view v. 看待
(6)destination n. 目的地
(7)detail n. 细节
(8)transport n. 交通运输
(9)unique adj. 独特的
(10)arrangement n. 安排
(11)sight n. 景色
(12)flight n. 航班
(13)path n. 小路
(14)powerful adj. 强有力的
(15)recognise v. 认出；认可
2．经典句型再现
(1)强调句型
But it is in the school of the world that this powerful learning takes place, not the classroom.
但是这种强有力的学习是在世界的学校里进行的，而不是在教室里。
(2)as引导时间状语从句
As we get to know foreign places, we come to recognise that there are many different ways to
live, and that the way we live isn't necessarily the best way.
当我们了解外国的地方时，我们逐渐认识到许多不同的生活方式，而我们的生活方式不
一定是最好的。
迷你语料库(Mini Corpus)
序号 佳句呈现 赏析
Peru is a country on the Pacific
coast of South America with ①用来描述地理位置，特别
three main areas①： narrow, 注意两个介词on和with的选
1
dry, flat land running along② 择；② running along 是非谓
the coast, the Andes Mountains, 语动词，表示“沿着”。
and the Amazon rainforest.
It is for this reason that Spanish 强调句型。要特别注意强调
2 is the main official language of 句型的构成：It is/ was＋被强
Peru. 调部分＋that＋句子的其他成分。最大的特点：如果去掉It
is/was 和 that 仍然是一个完
整的句子。
From there, you'll spend one 在 spend...(in) doing sth.中 in
day travelling by boat to your 可 以 省 略 ； 此 句 中
3
accommodation in the middle accommodation 表 示 “ 住
of the forest. 处”。
You can then spend three days
exploring the rainforest with a 描 述 旅 行 计 划 。 其 中
4 local guide and enjoying the exploring 和 enjoying 为并列
plants and animals unique to 成分。
the rainforest.
After reaching your destination,
描述抵达旅行目的地之后的
you will have a day to explore
5 总体计划和感受。可用于介
and be amazed by this ancient
绍旅行计划安排。
city.
表语前置引起全部倒装。表
Especially amazing is the Incas' 语 especially amazing 前置是
6
dry stone method of building. 为了突出和强调。可以在写
作中使用这种结构。
Inca builders cut stones to exact
sizes so that nothing was so that 引导结果状语从句，
7 needed to hold walls together 表示“因此……”；other
other than the perfect fit of the than 表示“除……以外”。
stones.
Stay in a local hotel, visit the
museums, admire the 用祈使句和动词的联动描述
8 architecture, enjoy the excellent 旅行活动。在旅行话题的写
local food, and go shopping at 作中可以使用。
the local markets.
Enjoy the beautiful countryside
①as 引导时间状语从句；
as you spend a day driving
9
②v.-ing形式作后置定语，修
along the new highway①
饰 名 词 短 语 the new
connecting② Cusco to LakeTiticaca. highway。
续 表
序号 佳句呈现 赏析
描述迫不及待的心情。can't
I've heard that it is an amazing
10 wait to do＝can hardly wait to
sight, and I can't wait to go.
do。
It's amazing that there are more it为形式主语，真正的主语为
11
than 8，000 statues. 后面that 引导的从句。
Come and see the Terracotta
Army: more than 8 ， 000 描述中国古代文明的代表
statues were made in the third — — 兵 马 俑 。 其 中 “ to
12
century BCE to guard the tomb guard...Qinshihuang”作目的状
of the Chinese Emperor 语。
Qinshihuang！
描述兵马俑的迷人之处。其
Each statue has a different face,
中 “ leading
leading researchers to believe
13 researchers...soldier” 是 v.-ing
that each one is a copy of a real
形式作结果状语，表示“自
soldier.
然而然的结果”。
读后续写起始篇：读通——情节发展(Plot development)
1．了解叙事模式
故事的发展往往遵循一定的叙述模式，即
开端(Beginning) 介绍故事发生的背景和人物
发展(Rising Action) 引出文章最大的冲突(conflict)
高潮(Climax) 故事冲突最猛烈的地方，即故事发展的顶点
尾声(Falling Action) 故事逐渐收拢，清扫故事发展遗留的问题
结局(Ending) 最大的冲突得以解决，故事结束
一般情况下，在读后续写提供的语篇中，已经出现了三部分：开端(Beginning)；发展
(Rising Action)；高潮(Climax)。需要续写的两段分别对应尾声(Falling Action)和结局
(Ending)。
2．情节山(Plot mountain)
一般情况下，可以采用绘制plot mountain“情节山”的方式整理文章脉络，阐释文章的情
节发展。如下图：通过绘制情节山，可以梳理文章脉络，为下一步的续写做好准备和铺垫。
【典题精析】
阅读下面的材料， 完成以下任务。
Mr. Taylor checked again: water, food, bandage, medicines, a compass, and a map wrapped in
plastic...Bingo! He put all that he prepared for the coming hiking into his backpack.
Mr. Taylor was fond of hiking, this time in particular, for it was the first time for him to hike
with his two sons, Harry and Joel. Joel liked reading books about explorers and Harry joined the
hiking club in his school this term. “It will be an unforgettable experience, definitely.” he whispered
to himself, unconsciously a smile spreading over his face.
Harry and Joel, however, argued for the first three miles of their hiking trip. Harry accused Joel
of wearing smelly old shoes. Joel blamed Harry for using all of the bug spray (喷雾防虫剂). Harry
told Joel he smelled terrible, and Joel called Harry a coward (懦夫)．
“Will the two of you just quiet down and enjoy our hike together？” their father said.
“You're missing all of the beautiful scenery！”
It was true. Neither Joel nor Harry had taken notice of the bear their father had spied at the start
of their trip. They hadn't looked up at the eagle he pointed out overhead. Worst of all, they hadn't
paid any attention to the turns and twists along the way while they continued their argument.
“Joel threw a stick at me！” Harry screamed.
“That's not true！” Joel shouted back.
Mr. Taylor could no longer contain his anger. “And both of you need to stop arguing！” he
erupted. As he turned to face them, his left foot caught on a root. He slipped backward and down
muddy bank, falling into the river that ran alongside the path.
The two kids, now in a panic, became silent and seemed at a loss what to do next. Mr. Taylor
sighed and began to give them instructions. Harry was arranged to spread the wet clothes on a nearby
stone and let it dry while Joel was helping Mr. Taylor wrap the wound. Before Mr. Taylor uttered a
word, Joel yelled, “If only you had stopped arguing earlier with me! There would be no
problem！” “It's not my fault！” Harry retorted, glaring at him with burning anger.
“Just calm down.”Mr. Taylor shouted. The boys lowered their heads, ashamed. They turned to
Mr. Taylor for guidance. Fortunately, it was not long before they learned the basics. So they set offagain. On the way, they gradually learned to cooperate with each other. Eventually, the hiking turned
out to be a delightful experience. Looking at their bright smiles, Mr. Taylor felt all the difficulties
were worth it.
1．叙事模式分析
开端 Paragraphs 1 － 2 ：
(Beginning) Mr . Taylor went hiking with his two sons, Harry and Joel.
Paragraphs： 3 － 7 ：
发展 Harry and Joel argued for the first three miles of their hiking
(Rising Action) trip．
文章最大的冲突： 哈利和乔尔一直在吵架。
Paragraphs： 8 － 10
Mr. Taylor could no longer contain his anger.
He slipped backward and down muddy bank, falling into the
高潮(Climax)
river that ran alongside the path.
高潮：泰勒先生落水了。幸运的是，虽然全身湿透了，
泰勒先生只受了轻伤。
尾声 Harry and Joel took care of Mr. Taylor, stopped
(Falling Action) quarrelling, and cooperated to finish the hiking.
结局(Ending) They finished hiking successfully.
2.绘制情节山(Draw plot mountain)
答案：①Mr. Taylor went hiking with his two sons, Harry and Joel.
②Harry and Joel argued for the first three miles of their hiking trip.
③Mr. Taylor fell into the river.
④Harry and Joel took care of Mr. Taylor, stopped quarrelling and cooperated to finish the
hiking.⑤They finished hiking successfully.
名校模拟演练：
1, （2022·福建·厦门外国语学校高三阶段练习）读后续写
Lightning flashed through the darkness over Sibson’s bedroom skylight(天窗). Sibson was shaken by a clap of
thunder before he knew what was happening. The storm had moved directly through his two-story wooden
house. Then he heard the smoke alarm beeping.
Sibson rushed down the stairs barefoot to check. He opened the door to the basement, and flames exploded
out. Sibson ran back upstairs to call 911 from his bedroom. “I felt glad because the room had a separate outdoor
stairway,” he explained to the media later.
But the phone didn’t work, and when he tried to go down the outdoor stairway, he was stopped by a wall of
flames. Sibson realized he was trapped. Suddenly, a piece of wood fell from the roof. Sharp pain raced through his
body as he looked down and found his leg bleeding.
Sibson’s house was three kilometers off the main road and was so well hidden by trees that he knew calling
for help would be fruitless.
Up a hill nearby lived Sibson’s neighbor, Huggons. He was lying in bed when something like a smoke alarm
struck his ears. He jumped out of bed, took his phone and flashlight, and headed down the hillside toward the
noise. That was when he saw the rolling heavy smoke.
Huggons dialed 911, and the operator warned him not to enter the house. But Huggons said, “There is no
way I am going to listen to Sibson scream and die in that fire.”
“Anyone there?” Huggons called out. Then he heard “Help! I’m trapped!” coming from the second floor
balcony. He entered the house, but soon had to run back to catch his breath.
After one more attempt to get inside the house, Huggons gave up and circled around back. The wind parted
the smoke just enough for him to catch sight of Sibson. But there was no way to get to him.
With the wind fueling the fire, there was no time to waste and the second floor seemed to be falling down in
the next minute.
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“Go! Leave me alone!” shouted Sibson with desperate tears in his eyes, “It will kill you, too.”
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2, （2022·贵州省龙里中学高二阶段练习）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之
构成一篇完整的短文。续写词数应为150左右。
In 1994 an 8.2 earthquake hit America, killing over 30,000 people in less than four minutes. As soon as the
earthquake was over, a father left his wife safely at home and rushed to the school where his son was supposed to
be, only to discover that the building was as flat as a pancake.
After the unforgettably initial shock, he remembered the promise he had made to his son: “No matter what
happens, I’ll always be there for you!” And tears began to fill his eyes. As he looked at the pile of ruins that once
was the school, it looked hopeless, but he kept remembering his promise to his son.
He began to draw his attention towards where he walked his son to class at school each morning.
Remembering his son’s classroom would be in the back right corner of the building, he rushed there and started
digging through the ruins.
As he was digging, other helpless parents arrived, with a broken heart, shouting: “My son!” “My daughter!”
Other well meaning parents tried to pull him off what was left of the school, saying: “It’s too late! They’re all dead!
You can’t help! Go home! Come on, face reality, there’s nothing you can do!”
To each parent he responded with one line: “Are you going to help me now?” And then he continued to dig
for his son, stone by stone. The firefighters showed up and tried to pull him off the school’s ruins, saying, “Fires are
breaking out, explosions are happening everywhere. You’re in danger. We’ll take care of it. Go home.” However,
the father asked, “Are you going to help me now?” The police came and said, “You’re anxious and it’s over. You’re
endangering others. Go home. We’ll handle it!” Again, he replied, “Are you going to help me now?” No one
helped.
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【答案】
1, With the wind fueling the fire, there was no time to waste and the second floor seemed to be falling down in
the next minute. Sibson was in great pain in the fire, and Huggons struggled to find a solution. He looked around,
got a fire extinguisher, and tried to rush onto the balcony again to save Sibson, but the fire was too intense for him
to get near. Huggons was anxious as the second floor of the house was about to collapse.
“Go! Leave me alone!” shouted Sibson with desperate tears in his eyes, “It will kill you, too.” Huggons was
fightened but did not want to leave him alone. He shone the flashlight into the woods and noticed a ladder. He
took it over to the balcony and pulled Sibson down just as the second floor of the house fell off. Sibson is still 40
when he tells the story. “I was alone that night,” he says. “Then I heard the most beautiful sound in my life. It was
Huggons.”
【导语】本文是一篇读后续写，以人物为主要线索展开，一天暴风雨袭击了Sibson的小木屋，导致地下室
大火弥漫，Sibson从户外楼梯准备逃离时，发现火势凶猛，又不幸被掉落的屋顶砸中腿部，因此被困在了
阳台，千钧一发之际，邻居Huggons过来想尽各种办法，最终救下了他。
【详解】1.段落续写：①由第一段首句内容“风助长了火势，没有时间再浪费了，二楼似乎马上就要塌下来了。”可知，当时的
火势十分凶猛，情况十分危急，Sibson随时都有生命危险，所以接下来可重点描写Huggons是如何不顾一
切，想办法去施救的。
②由第二段首句内容“去！别管我！布森眼里含着绝望的泪水喊道，“它也会杀死你的。””可知，情况
已经到了危急时刻，可接着描写Huggons是如何将Sibson救出火场的，以及Sibson的人物情绪。
2.续写线索：二楼即将要坍塌——Huggons尝试各种途径扑救——火势太大，以失败告终——危机时分，
Huggons发现了一个梯子——用梯子将Sibson从阳台上接了下来——Sibson非常感激Huggons的救命之恩。
3.词汇激活
行为类
①.环顾四周：look around / go around
②.冲：rush/ dash
③.倒下：fall down/ collapse /come down
情绪类
①.焦急的：anxious/ worried
②.害怕的：frightened/ scared/ terrified
【点睛】[高分句型1]. Huggons was anxious as the second floor of the house was about to collapse.（运用了as
引导的原因状语从句）
[高分句型2]. He took it over to the balcony and pulled Sibson down just as the second floor of the house fell off.
（运用了as引导的时间状语从句）
2, 【答案】Paragraph 1:
The father went on alone because he needed to know for himself: “Is my boy alive or is he dead?” He dug for
eight hours...12 hours...24 hours...36 hours...Then, in the 38th hour, he pulled back a large stone and heard his
son’s voice. After screaming his son’s name, “ARMAND!” he heard back, “Dad?! It’s me, Dad!” The faint but
familiar voice brought tears of relief to his eyes. “What’s going on in there? How is it?” the father asked anxiously,
digging more forcefully with his bare hands. “I’m fine. There are 13 other kids down here, Dad,” Daniel replied.
“We’re scared, hungry, and thirsty. When the building collapsed, it made a triangle and saved us.” The father
realized that this was a tricky situation. He couldn’t risk causing another collapse down there. Fortunately, the
firefighters were just nearby. The father shouted to the fire chief and signalled to them to come over.
Paragraph 2:
Everyone began to help him pull the kids out of the ruins. Then, the father helped the firefighters cautiouslyremove the rocks and pulled out the kids one by one. When everyone was safe and sound, Daniel threw himself
into his father’s arms: “You did it, Dad! No matter what, I know you’ll be there for me!”
【导语】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了一座城市发生了8.2级的地震，地震几乎把这座城市夷为平地。
在一片混乱中，一位父亲冲去学校救自己的儿子，因为他曾向儿子承诺“无论发生什么，他都会永远在儿
子身边”。学校已经成为一片废墟，但他仍然不停地在废墟中寻找，好心的家长和消防队员试图劝他停止
寻找，但他仍不放弃。
【详解】1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“他勇敢地独自面对，因为他自己需要知道：‘我的孩子是活着还是死了？’”可知，
第一段可描写这位父亲寻找儿子的过程及他是否找到了儿子。
②由第二段首句内容“每个人都开始帮助他把孩子们从废墟中拉出来。”可知，第二段可描写儿子获救及
获救后父子二人的互动。
2.续写线索：继续寻找——听到儿子的声音——询问儿子的处境——还有13个孩子——儿子获救——父子
互动
3.词汇激活
行为类
①.昏倒：pass out/fall down in a faint
②.倒塌：collapse/topple down
③.导致：cause/lead to
情绪类
①.焦急地：anxiously/nervously
②.害怕的：scared/frightened
【点睛】[高分句型1]. When everyone was safe and sound, Daniel threw himself into his father’s arms: “You did
it, Dad! No matter what, I know you’ll be there for me!”（由when引导的时间状语从句）
[高分句型2]. The father realized that this was a tricky situation.（由that引导的宾语从句）
