高考英语应用文专题:课程反馈与建议信

在高考应用文写作中，“课程反馈与建议信”属于交际性极强的高频题型。除了词汇和句式，想要冲刺一类文（满分档），还需要在语篇交际策略、建议角度储备和易踩扣分点这三个维度做针对性补充：

一、交际得体性：三步“防冒犯”法则

学生给教师/外教提意见时，最忌居高临下或纯挑刺。阅卷老师极其看重交际礼貌原则。建议遵循：

1. 先褒后贬

不要直接切入问题：严禁第一段写完收获，第二段直接以 However, there are many problems in your class. 开头。

高分过渡话术：

While the overall experience has been fantastic, there is always room for improvement.（尽管整体体验极佳，但仍有提升空间。）

To make this wonderful course even more appealing/effective, I would venture a few humble suggestions.（为了让这门出色的课程更具吸引力，我冒昧提出几点拙见。）

2. 多用虚指与弱化词

提建议时，避免使用肯定感过强的祈使句或 `You should / You need to`。

多嵌入轻柔修饰词：`Perhaps`、`Maybe`、`From my humble perspective`、`It might be worth doing...`。

3. 建议必须自带“理由/收益”

高分作文不会只罗列动作，每条建议后一定会附带一句“这样做为什么好”：

建议（What）： More group projects could be arranged.

理由（Why/Benefit）：...so that students can learn how to brainstorm and collaborate effectively.

二、 核心建议“维度库”（考场速配切入点）

考场上往往要求写2~3条建议，若思路受限容易无话可说。课程类建议通常围绕以下4个黄金维度展开：

1. 教学形式 | 老师讲太多、被动听课 | introduce flipped classrooms / student presentations（引入翻转课堂/学生展示）

shift from one-way lectures to interactive workshops（从单向讲授转向互动工坊） |

2.实践应用(Application) | 光讲理论、缺乏实操 | allocate time for case studies / hands-on lab work（留出案例分析/实验操作时间）

bridge classroom theories with real-world scenarios（将课堂理论与真实场景相连接） |

3.节奏与难度| 难度不均、照顾不到基础弱的 | offer tiered / personalized learning tasks（提供阶梯式/个性化学习任务）

pace the curriculum to cater to students of varying foundations（调整进度以兼顾不同基础的学生） 

4. 资源与反馈(Resources/Feedback) | 资料单一、缺少及时评价 | provide curated reading lists or digital resources（提供精选阅读清单或数字资源）

give more individualized feedback on our assignments（对作业给予更多针对性反馈） 

以下为学生作文示例

假定你是李华，你参加的由外教Tom开设的“科技赋能校园”校本选修课即将结课。课程组计划征集课程优化方案，以便下学期升级课程。请你给Tom写一封邮件，内容包括：

(1) 肯定课程收获；

(2) 提出优化建议。

注意：

(1) 写作词数应为80左右。

(2) 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

参考词汇：科技赋能校园 Technology Empowers Campus

Dear Tom,

I hope this email finds you well.

As the class of Technology empower Campus will be over soon, not only do we learn the significance of technology, but also learn how to use it properly. In your meaningful class,we realize that technology is a double-edged sword. Sometimes it will make our lives more convenient while sometimes it will cause privacy leaks.

Meanwhile，here are some aspects that can be improved. Firstly, you can make time to let students communicate with each other instead of listening to you all the time. Secondly, it is a great choice if you combine the theories with the practice. Only through this way you can create a more vivid and immersive atmosphere.

In addition, I wish my advice can be accepted and hope the next term’s lessons！

这篇文章除了语法语言的得当性需要纠正之外（不详述），比较大的问题就是忽视了交际性，语气过于强势，不符合师生关系交际实况，以下为修订版

Dear Tom,

I hope this email finds you well.

As our elective course "Technology Empowers Campus" is drawing to a close, I want to express my sincere appreciation. Through your inspiring lectures, we have not only appreciated the power of technology but also realized its potential challenges, such as privacy concerns

To make this wonderful course even more engaging next semester, I would venture a few humble suggestions. First and foremost, it would be great if more time could be allocated to group discussions, allowing for more collaborative idea-sharing. Additionally, incorporating hands-on workshops alongside theoretical concepts could further enrich our learning experience.

I genuinely hope these thoughts are helpful, and I am eagerly looking forward to the upgraded course!

Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

【操练题】

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• 题目原文：

  假定你是李华，在上周五的英语课上，外教Chris利用人工智能(AI)评价了同学们写的演讲稿，这引发了你的思考。请你给外教写一封邮件，内容包括： (1) 你的看法；(2) 你的建议。