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A Great Monday
Monday started out well. I woke up on time, ate breakfast and did some
last:minute studying for my first hour math test, I was confident of getting good
grades. Then I left my house. Ten minutes later, I got on school bus with my friends.
We were busy chatting about how we spent our weekend. At one stop, Fat Ryan got
on hurriedly. He tripped over someone's foot accidentally and THUMP! He fell down
onto the floor.
Every one of us on the bus looked on and laughed crazily. Ryan struggled to his
feet, dusted off his jacket and made his way to an empty seat, He tried to laugh with
us, but his face was burning with embarrassment. The rest of the morning flew by, I
did well in my math test, I read two more chapters of To Kill a Mockingbird in
English class. It wasn't long before we heard the lunch bell. I met my friends from the
cheerleading team in the dining hall, Then I couldn't help but notice Ryan a few
tables away, siting all alone. He caught me looking, 1 smiled at him quickly and
looked away.
When we had finished eating, we went out to the courtyard to practice a cheer we
would do at that night's football game. After much practice, we finally managed to do
the cheer perfectly, We decided to practice it again one last time. Again, just like the
rest of my day so far, the cheer was going great, I raised my leg for one last toe touch.
RIPPP! I felt my jeans broken, in the middle of my backside.
I froze. I had no idea what to do but stand still, Then I heard people burst out
laughing and I saw them pointing at my torn jeans, Trying to cover myself with my
hands, I tried to laugh too, but I felt tears begin to well up in my eyes.
注意:(1)续写词数应为 150 个左右;
(2)诸按如下格式在谷题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: Then I saw Ryan running towards me.
Paragraph 2: That night, after the cheer at the football game, I found Ryan.
某定制
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A Great Monday
Monday started out well. I woke up on time, ate breakfast and did some last-
minute studying( 动词短语并列) for my first hour math test. I was confident of getting
good grades. Then I left my house. Ten minutes later, I got on school bus with my
friends. We were busy chatting about how we spent our weekend. At one stop,
Fat Ryan( 重要的衔接人物)got on hurriedly( 人物状态描写). He tripped over someone's foot
accidentally and THUMP! He fell down onto the floor.
Every one of us on the bus looked on and laughed crazily. Ryan struggled to
his feet, dusted off his jacket and made his way to an empty seat(动作串). He tried
to laugh with us, but his face was burning with embarrassment. The rest of the
morning flew by(时间描写), I did well in my math test, I read two more chapters of To
Kill a Mockingbird in English class. It wasn't long before we heard the lunch bell. I
met my friends from the cheer leading team in the dining hall. Then I couldn't
help but notice Ryan a few tables away, siting all alone(现在分词做伴随动作). He caught me
looking. I smiled at him quickly and looked away(人物交互描写).
When we had finished eating, we went out to the courtyard to practice a cheer we
would do at that night's football game. After much practice, we finally managed
to do the cheer perfectly. We decided to practice it again one last time. Again, just
like the rest of my day so far, the cheer was going great. I raised my leg for one
last toe touch ( 关键冲突). RIPPP! I felt my jeans broken, in the middle of my
backside .
I f
r oze
. I had no idea what to do but stand still (人物动作描写). Then I heard people
burst out laughing and I saw them pointing at my torn jeans. Trying
to cover
myself with my hands (现在分词做伴随动作), I tried to laugh too, but I felt tears begin to well
up in my eyes.
注意:(1)续写词数应为 150 个左右;
(2)诸按如下格式在谷题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: Then I saw Ryan running towards me.
Paragraph 2: That night, after the cheer at the football game, I found Ryan.
一、读后续写类型分析与构思策略
分析维度
内容说明
续写类型
个人成长型叙事续写（校园生活类），带有情感转折和道德觉醒
元素。主旨为“换位思考、理解他人”。
构思思路
续写围绕“我在众人面前出丑”与“Ryan 援助我”构建角色互
换与心理成长，体现主题升华。第一段应描写Ryan 的反应与我
内心的情绪波动；第二段完成人物情感的和解与升华。
布局建议
使用“并置对比结构”——前文我嘲笑Ryan，后文Ryan 却帮助
我，构成讽刺与反思；借助人物行动、心理描写推动转变。结尾
呼应题目“A Great Monday”，突出“这天我真正学到了什
么”。
框架提炼
第一段（救场）：Ryan 跑向“我”，帮助“我”，安慰我，引
导众人不再笑；“我”感到羞愧与感激。
第二段（升华）：晚间表演后，“我”主动向Ryan 道谢，真诚
交流，彼此理解，建立友谊。
实施要点
1. 突出动作描写展现转折；
2. 加入心理描写呈现人物成长；
3. 运用高考加分语法（定语从句、非谓语、虚拟语气、倒装句
等）提升表达。
承接原文事项
1. 保留原人物关系（“我”、Ryan、朋友）；
2. 不添加新人物或新场景；
3. 延续“出丑→同情→理解”的情节逻辑；
4. 注意人物情感发展的连贯性（前羞愧、后感恩）；
5. 紧扣“A Great Monday”正向主题。
续写巧思设计
1. 巧妙用“角色互换”对比“我”和Ryan 的处境；
2. 利用动作+心理对比反映人物成长；
3. 结尾升华主题，如“这一天，我收获了比好成绩更重要的东
西”。
二、故事山模式及内容分析表
1. 故事山结构分析
阶段
内容
开端（Beginning）
我早上状态很好，对考试充满信心。
上升行动（Build-up）
Ryan 上车摔倒，被嘲笑；我没有制止还参与其中。
高潮（Climax）
我在操场上出丑，被大家笑话，角色反转。
阶段
内容
下降行动（Falling Action）Ryan 跑来帮助我，“我”感到羞愧和感激。
结局（Resolution）
晚上“我”主动道谢，两人和解并建立友谊，主题升
华。
2. 文章要素分析表
分析角度
内容
原文反应句
人物刻画
“我”：最初爱热闹、随大流；
后经历出丑、内省成长。
Ryan：羞怯但善良、宽容。
“He tried to laugh with us, but his
face was burning with
embarrassment.”
“I smiled at him quickly and looked
away.”
情感层次
信心 → 兴奋 → 嘲笑 → 尴尬
→ 羞愧 → 感激 → 成长
“I felt tears begin to well up in my
eyes.”
“I tried to laugh too”
关键情节
点
Ryan 被笑；我出丑；Ryan 救场；
我道歉致谢。
“Fat Ryan got on hurriedly... He fell.”
“RIPPP! I felt my jeans broken...”
语言特色
拟声词、短句增强节奏感；生活
化语言增强真实感。
“THUMP!” “RIPPP!” “I froze.”
关键词分
析
laugh, embarrassed, smiled, burst
out laughing, cover myself
突出“羞辱”与“共情”主题
心理描写
Ryan“burning with
embarrassment”；我“felt
tears...”，“had no idea what to do”
情绪真实，推进故事发展
动作描写
Ryan 摔倒、我跳跃撕裤子、群众
大笑、Ryan 跑来救场
细节生动，推动情节高潮
环境描写
校车、食堂、操场、晚间球赛
校园空间变化形成空间转换
隐含主题
成长、同理心、道德觉醒、换位
思考
标题“A Great Monday”暗含主题转
折
情感转折
嘲笑Ryan→自我出丑→被救场→
主动道歉
心理反思和情感升华过程明显
空间转换
车上 → 教室 → 食堂 → 操场
→ 足球比赛现场
推动情节发展、结构清晰
时间过渡
“Then I left my house.”、“It
wasn’t long before…”、“That
night...”
自然衔接，层次分明
3. 动作、心理、环境描写
动作描写
英文句子
中文翻译
He rushed over without hesitation and held out his
jacket.
他毫不犹豫地跑过来，递出他
的夹克。
I froze on the spot, unsure what to do.
我僵在原地，不知所措。
Ryan gently tapped me on the shoulder, his face
calm.
Ryan 轻轻拍了拍我的肩膀，神
情镇定。
I tried to cover the rip with my hands, my face
burning.
我试图用双手遮住裂口，脸火
辣辣的。
He stepped in front of me to block others' view.
他站到我前面挡住了别人的视
线。
I buried my face in my hands, overwhelmed by
shame.
我把脸埋进手中，羞愧难当。
He offered me his hoodie, motioning for me to tie it
around my waist.
他递来帽衫，示意我围在腰
上。
I took a deep breath and gave him a small, grateful
smile.
我深吸一口气，给了他一个感
激的微笑。
Ryan waved at the others, signaling them to stop
laughing.
Ryan 朝其他人挥手，示意他们
别再笑了。
I slowly walked off the courtyard, head down and
silent.
我低着头默默走出操场。
心理描写
英文句子
中文翻译
My heart sank as I realized everyone was
laughing at me.
当我意识到大家都在笑我时，我
心如死灰。
A wave of embarrassment swept over me.
一股尴尬席卷而来。
I wanted the ground to open up and swallow me
whole.
我真希望地上裂个缝把我吞进
去。
Shame wrapped around me like a heavy blanket. 羞耻像厚重的毛毯将我包裹。
I felt tears welling up in my eyes, but I tried to
hold them back.
我感觉眼泪涌了上来，但努力忍
住。
I regretted ever laughing at Ryan.
我后悔曾经笑过Ryan。
Gratitude bubbled up inside me.
感激之情在心中油然而生。
I felt a strange warmth replace the sting of shame. 一种奇异的温暖取代了羞耻的刺
痛。
His kindness left me speechless.
他的善意让我无言以对。
英文句子
中文翻译
I suddenly understood how he had felt that
morning.
我突然明白他早上的感受了。
环境描写
英文句子
中文翻译
The autumn sun cast long shadows across the
courtyard.
秋日的阳光在操场上投下长长的
影子。
Laughter echoed through the wide schoolyard.
笑声在宽敞的操场上回荡。
The chill in the air matched the coldness I felt
inside.
空气中的寒意和我内心的冷感相
呼应。
Leaves swirled in the breeze as we practiced.
练习时，落叶随风旋转。
The lunchroom buzzed with noise and chatter.
食堂里充满喧闹和交谈声。
Students scattered across the field, practicing or
joking.
学生们散布在操场上，练习或打
闹。
The sky turned orange as the sun began to set.
太阳开始落山，天空变成橙色。
The bus was noisy, packed with laughter and
movement.
校车上吵吵闹闹，充满笑声和动
作。
The bright stadium lights flickered on as the game
began.
比赛开始时，明亮的体育场灯光
亮起。
A gust of wind tugged at my torn jeans.
一阵风吹来，扯动我破裂的牛仔
裤。
单词升级替换词
场景
常见词
高级替换
表“笑” laugh
chuckle / giggle / burst into laughter
表“难
过”
sad
devastated / humiliated / heartbroken
表“看” see
glance / gaze / catch sight of
表“跑” run
dash / rush / dart
表“好” good
wonderful / meaningful / rewarding
4. 固定搭配、词法解析与语料积累
地道搭配与词法解析
短语
词法说明
释义
burst out laughing
短语动词
突然大笑
catch sb doing sth
动宾搭配
突然看到某人正在做某事
couldn't help but do 情态句型
忍不住做某事
feel tears welling up 情态+非谓语
感到眼泪涌上来
point at sb
动词+介词搭配指着某人
cover oneself with
动宾搭配
用……遮挡自己
stand still
状语短语
静止不动地站着
laugh with sb
动宾搭配
和某人一起笑
make one’s way to
固定搭配
朝……走去
trip over sth
短语动词
被某物绊倒
可积累的重点词汇与短语
词/短语
词性
词义
近义词
反义词
embarrassment
n.
尴尬
humiliation, shame confidence
burst out
v. phr. 突然（大笑/哭等）erupt, break into
fade
make one's way
v. phr. 前往
head to, walk to
stay
struggle to one’s feet v. phr. 艰难地站起来
stagger up
collapse
freeze
v.
僵住
stiffen
move
例句1：
She froze on the spot, unsure how to respond to the laughter.
（她僵在原地，不知如何回应大家的笑声。）
例句2：
He struggled to his feet, pretending to laugh it off.
（他挣扎着站起来，假装一笑了之。）
5. Possible Versions
Version 1
Paragraph 1: Then I saw Ryan running towards me. I could hardly believe my
eyes—his face was red, and he was clutching something in his hand. It was his
jacket. "Here," he said, slightly out of breath(人物状态描写), "tie this around your waist(祈使
句)." I hesitated, shame burning my cheeks(独立主格，刻画人物状态), but his calm gaze
reassured me(人物神态描写). I took it and quickly wrapped it around me. The laughter
around us slowly died down(环境描写) as Ryan
turned to glare at
the others
. “That’s
enough,” he said firmly. For a moment, the crowd fell silent(人物环境描描写). As we
walked off the field, side by side, he said nothing, just offered a faint smile. I
remembered laughing at him that morning, and guilt pierced me(人物心理 描写). I
whispered a soft “Thank you.” He shrugged, eyes still forward(独立主格刻画人物). At that
moment, I knew I had misjudged him—not weak, but kind.(刻画人物)
Paragraph 2: That night, after the cheer at the football game, I found Ryan.
He was sitting alone on the bleachers, scanning
the
vast
football
field
(现在分词做伴随
动作). I walked over and sat beside him. "You didn’t have to do that today," I began.
He looked at me, his eyes steady(独立主格，刻画人物状态). "I know how it feels," he said
simply. Silence hung between us(无灵主语句，环境及人物状态描写), not uncomfortable but
reflective(adj 做补语). I told him I was sorry—not just for laughing at him, but for not
understanding(递进描写). He nodded slowly. "It’s easy to laugh when you’re not the one
being laughed at," he said. I offered him a high five, and he gave a small laugh.
The cheerleaders finished their final routine, and the crowd erupted again(环境任务描
写). But for us, in that quiet corner, a different kind of cheer—one of friendship—
had started.
高中语法点：
✅
非谓语动词：clutching something, walking off the field
让步状语从句：Though I hesitated...
强调句型：It was his jacket that he offered me.
过去完成时：I had misjudged him.
亮点词汇与搭配：
glare at sb （怒视）
burn one’s cheeks （羞得脸发烫）
fall silent （变得安静）
drape across （披在...上）
情绪/动作描写词汇：
Shame burning my cheeks
Clutching something tightly
A faint smile
Eyes steady
Version 2
Paragraph 1: Then I saw Ryan running towards me. His footsteps were
hurried but determined(人物神态描写). For a second, I panicked, unsure(adj 做主语补语) if he
was coming to mock me too. Instead, he stopped right in front of me, pulled off
his jacket, and handed it over(动作并列). “Here, quick,” he whispered. As I tied it
around my waist, my embarrassment eased just a bit(情绪描写). The students around
us began to quiet down, uncertain(adj 做主语补语) how to react. Ryan stood by me, arms
crossed(独立主格，人物状态描写), staring
at those
(现在分词做伴随动作)who had laughed. I noticed
something shift in their expressions—confusion, maybe even guilt(细节补充描写). We
walked away slowly, his silence saying more than words ever could(独立主格刻画人物). I
couldn’t stop thinking about how I had laughed when he tripped just that morning(衔
接原文). Now he had stood up for me(双关哦). A lump rose in my throat(人物心理描写). I had
been cruel, but he had been kind(对比描写).
Paragraph 2: That night, after the cheer at the football game, I found Ryan.
He was leaning against the vending machine, sipping
a soda
(现在分词做伴随动作), alone(adj
做主语补语). I approached, heart pounding(独立主格刻画人物状态). “Ryan,” I began, “thanks… for
earlier.” He looked at me, then offered half a grin. “Didn’t want you to go through
what I did.” His voice was calm, but I could sense the weight behind his words.
We stood in silence before I asked, “Are we… cool(很好很口语的表达)?” He nodded,
raising his can in a silent toast(现在分词短语做伴随动作). “We’re good.” I smiled back, warmth
spreading through my chest(独立主格刻画人物). In the loudness of
the post-game crowd
,
our quiet founded friendship meant everything. From strangers to teammates,
from awkwardness to mutual respect(并列递进)—this great and special day had
changed both of us.
高中语法点：
✅
非谓语动词：sipping a soda, leaning against
强调句型：It was Ryan who had made the difference.
状语从句：Before I asked...
虚拟语气：I wish I hadn’t laughed.
亮点搭配：half a grin（半笑）
raise one’s can in a toast（举起饮料致意）
warmth spreading through my chest（心里涌起温暖）
情绪/动作描写词汇：
Panic
Embarrassment eased
Heart pounding
Calm voice with weight
Version 3
Paragraph 1: Then I saw Ryan running towards me. My heart sank(心理描写). I
was already humiliated—was he coming to laugh too? But as he
neared
, he took
off his jacket and offered it with no words. Just a look—firm, understanding(adj 做补
语). My hands trembled(人物神态描写) as I accepted it, tying
it quickly around my
waist(现在分词做伴随动作). The laughter b
ehind me faded
(环境描写) as Ryan turned around and
said, "You all done?" His voice wasn’t loud, but it cut through the noise(人物状态描写).
A few students looked away, others shuffl
ing
their feet
(独立主格刻画人物). We walked away
together. I remembered how he’d tripped and dropped his books, how I’d
giggled without thinking. But he hadn’t held it against me. That single act
spoke volumes(无灵主语句). A strange mix of guilt and gratitude settled in me(人物心理描写).
Ryan was more than I thought(表从)—braver, kinder.
Paragraph 2: That night, after the cheer at the football game, I found Ryan.
He was behind the bleachers, watching
the sky
(现在分词做伴随动作). I walked up quietly,
jacket still tied around my waist(独立主格刻画人物状态). “I guess I owe you,” I said. He
chuckled, not turning around(现在分词做伴随动作). “You don’t. Just pass it on next time.” I
nodded, understanding(现在分词做伴随动作)more in that moment than I had all day. We
talked for a while, mostly small things—classes, teachers, even the food(名词并列). But
there was a new tone—familiar, forgiving(adj 做补语). When we finally
parted
, I looked
back and smiled. That Monday had started rough, but Ryan had changed
everything—not with a grand speech, but with a quiet act of kindness(递进升华).
高中语法点：
✅
非谓语结构：watching the sky, trembling as I accepted
省略句：Just a look—firm, understanding.
亮点搭配：a look—firm, understanding（坚定理解的眼神）
cut through the noise（打破喧嚣）
pass it on（传递善意）
情绪/动作描写词汇：
Heart sank
Hands trembled
Guilt and gratitude
Chuckled, not turning around
通用语料积累与词汇替换
词义常用词
高阶替换
同义联想词
笑
laugh
chuckle / grin / smirk
beam, giggle
看
look
glance / gaze / peer
stare, glimpse
生气angry
furious / annoyed / frustrated irritated, offended
感谢thank
appreciate / be grateful to
acknowledge, recognize
安静quiet
silent / still / hushed
mute, calm
例句积累：
His voice cut through the noise like a blade.
I felt a wave of guilt wash over me.
She offered a faint smile, eyes still wet.
We sat in silence, but the air was warm with understanding.
