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专题 35 读后续写 06 对话模式突破(解析版)
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专题35 读后续写06 对话模式突破(解析版).......................................1
Part 1命题解读...............................................................1
Part 2思维导图...............................................................1
Part 3 “对话”注意事项.......................................................2
Part 4 对话标签的三个位置....................................................2
Part 5 对话"四大误区"........................................................3
Part 6 对话优化技巧:让你的对话标签不平庸四个小技巧..........................4
Part 7 翻译练习..............................................................5
Part 8 让你的对话标签不平庸四个小技巧 .......................................9
Part 9 模拟演练.............................................................10
1. (2022·重庆市育才中学一模)........................................10
2. (2022·全国·重庆南开中学模拟预测).................................13
3. (2022·湖南·一模).................................................16
4. (2022·江苏·模拟预测).............................................18
5. (2022·江苏·南京市第一中学一模)...................................21
6. (2022·广东·汕头市聿怀中学模拟预测)...............................24
7. 读后续写模拟专练01................................................27
8. 读后续写模拟专练02................................................31Part 1命题解读
“对话”何时用?如何写?写多少?写哪里?看完本节的讲解,会有一个比较明晰的答案。
Part 2思维导图
Part 3 “对话”注意事项
1)对话描写必须为推动故事情节服务,是情节发展的一个环节,每段出现一两句即可;
2)对话描写必须反映人物的心理与情感,刻画人物的性格;
3)对话描写不宜过长,侧重口语化词汇,避开生僻词汇;
4)对话描写要尽可能结合动作描写,明确对谁说,具有画面感;
5)对话描写中要学会使用几个感叹词,表示说话人的喜、怒、哀、乐等情
绪;
Part 4 对话标签的三个位置
她说,“我想和你一起去,但我还没有完成家庭作业。”这句话用英语,从句式结构的角度来看,怎么表
达呢?特别是对话标签she said的位置变化。
1. 对话标签在前
She said,“I would like to go with you, but I haven’t finished my homework.”2. 对话标签在后
“I would like to go with you, but I haven’t finished my homework.”She said.
这两句是最常见的形式,大家写出来,应该问题不大。我们来看第三种形式。
3. 对话标签在句子中间
“I would like to go with you,”she said, “but I haven’t finished my homework.”
注意:对话标签在后或者在句子中间时(第2,3种情况),如果主语是名词,则可以倒装。而代词不可以
倒装,said she是错误的。
“I would like to go with you, but I haven’t finished my homework.”said Emily(或者Emily said.)
“I would like to go with you,”said Emily/ Emily said, “but I haven’t finished my homework.”
Part 5 对话"四大误区"
1. 废话连篇,对情节发展和刻画人物性格没有帮助。
“Hey, how are you?” “I’m fine, how are you?”
“How is the weather?” “Terrific! Nice day for a walk, isn’t it?”
这样的对话在现实生活中很真实,但是小说毕竟是艺术加工,无助情节推动的,不能刻画人物性格的日常
寒暄和偏离文章主线的对话绝对不用。
2.追求花哨,过度使用对话标签
“That is fantastic news,” he said happily.
此句中完全没有必要加上一个happily来表达说的方式,因为句中的fantastic一词足以说明说话人了表情,
过度强调 会让读者的注意力集中在“说话的方式”而不是“说话的内容”。
建议改为:“That is fantastic news!” he said/screamed/exclaimed. 一个感叹号和一个fantastic已经足以让
读者想象当时的情景。适当的“艺术留白”也是需要的,这样会留给读者想象的空间。
还有一种避免过度的dialogue tags的方法是运用“动作描写”,尤其是表情上动作来取而代之。如:Her eyes reflected the candlelight as she smiled at her son. “Everyone is unique. Just follow your heart and be
yourself!”当她对儿子微笑时,她的眼睛反射着烛光。 “每个人都是独一无二的。 只要跟随你的心,做你
自己!”
3 用词不当,错误使用对话标签
"I can't believe it," Emma gasped. (gasp意思为“喘气”)
"That's funny," Henry chuckled. (chuckled.意思为“轻笑”)
评析:以上两句话也是在大量的学生习作中发现的。这里把动作描写和动作标签 混淆了,试想谁能gasp
(喘息)、chuckle(轻笑)出一句话?除非他或她有特异功能。
纠正方法如下:
"I can't believe it," Emma said with a gasp.
(对话标签Emma said+ with介词短语)
Emma gasped. "I can't believe it."
(动作描写+句号)
"I can't believe it." Emma gasped.
(对话句+动作描写,注意对话句式句号)
"That's funny!" Henry chuckled.
(感叹句结束+动作描写)
"That's funny," Henry said, chuckling.
(Question tag+ 分词做伴随状况)
请特别关注以上对话的标点符号。
4 对话标签多此一举:对话对象十分明确,仍使用对话标签
“I told you already,” I said, glaring.
评析:此句貌似豪华,其实对话中的主语“I”已经清晰地说明了说话者,完全没有必要用对话标签“I
said” 来说明说话对象。纠正方法:加上一点动作描写就可以避免这种错误,并且提升语言的生动性。
I glared at him. “I told you already.”Part 6 对话优化技巧:让你的对话标签不平庸四个小技巧
在对话标签中加入语气,嗓音,情感让你的描写更生动传神。
①第一种:加语气
“I would love to,” said Emily in a pleasant tone. “我很乐意这样做,”艾米丽用一种愉快的语气说。
这里用到了“in a pleasant tone. ”,即“用一种愉快的语气”,基本结构为:in a/an+形容词+tone
如: in a pleasant愉悦的/firm坚定的/rude粗鲁的/sad悲伤的 tone
也可以用 in a tone of +名词的搭配
如:in a tone of surprise用一种惊讶的语气
in a tone of curiosity用一种好奇的语气
in a tone of impatience用一种不耐烦的语气
in a tone of command用一种命令的语气
② 第二种:加嗓音
“I didn’t mean to,” she murmured in a low voice. “我不是故意的,”她低声说。
这里用到了“ in a low voice”,即“小声地说道”或者“用一种...声音”,基本结构是: in a/an+形容词
+voice
如: in a high /low / sweet/loud/soft /weak voice 用一个高/低/甜/响亮/软/弱的声音
③第三种:加情感
“I...I.. don’t think I’m right for the part,”I replied with embarrassment.“我...我..认为我不适合这个角色,”我尴
尬地回答。
这里用到了“ with embarrassment”,即“(伴随着)难堪”,基本结构是: with +情感名词。如with
excitement (伴随着)激动。
④加副词
“我再也不会那样做了,”我回答。如何丰富这句话里的对话标签呢?
“I will never do that again,” I answered firmly. 加上了副词firmly(坚定地)
这句话也可以这么写:可将副词提到句首。
Firmly,I answered,“I will never do that again.”Part 7 翻译练习
(第一组)
1.“想试试吗?”我说,碰了碰玛丽娜的手。“好吧,”玛丽娜用她那尖利、不确定的声音说。
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2.“你不用着急。慢慢来,”我温和地说。她的整个脸顿时变得明亮起来,肩膀也放松了。
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3. Derek补充道:“我讨厌看到他生病,我知道需要做些什么才能让他恢复健康。”
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4. 她接着说,“我紧紧地拥抱着他们,感觉到自己内心突然有了一种力量……”。
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5. “从来没有人投诉过我,”感到受辱的那名医生宣称。
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6.“诸位,这是一个钱的问题,”我郑重其事地说。
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(第二组)
1. 他自豪地回答说:“我可以带我的家人去看马戏了。”
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2.“我觉得你在抛弃我。”她痛苦地回答。
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(第三组)
1.“你还是需要好好休息一下。”我建议道。
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2.“他和斯坦夫人有个计划,” 她解释说。
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3. 妈妈提醒我:“一切都会好起来的。”
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4.“我们明年会回来的,”他承诺道。_______________________________________________________________________________
5.“暂时不要采取行动,”他警告说,“太危险。”
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(第四组)
1.“他还活着,”Bettie坚持说。“但除非他把药列在单子上,否则他活不了多久。”
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2.“我以为我们可以成为朋友,”他抱怨道。
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3.“...但当这个可怜的男孩没有被选中时,我崩溃了,”他承认。
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4.罗先生用红边的眼睛安慰他说:“我也会想你的。”
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(第五组)
1.“不,不,”我抽泣着说。泪水模糊了我的视线。“很好,真的,”我叫道,“拿去吧。”
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2.我打开窗户大声向对面喊道:“我知道我们以前见过面,但我不记得在哪里。”
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3.车上的女人跳了出来,尖叫着,“你这个白痴!你为什么不看看你要去哪里?”
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4.“起来把你的钱和珠宝给我!”那人喊道。
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5. 她叹了口气,“你打碎了我们的明花瓶。”
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6.“你真漂亮,”我低声说,我的舌头勉强配合。
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(第六组)
1. 他真诚地为他所做的事情道歉。_______________________________________________________________________________
2.突然,妈妈尖叫道:“我的钱包哪里去了?”
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3.老人躺在冰冷的地上,痛苦地呻吟着。
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4.“晚安”妈妈在Mike的耳边轻声说,轻轻地离开了房间。
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5.她扶起老人,耐心地安慰他。
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6. 他大口大口地喘着气,把这个令人激动的消息告诉了村民。
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三、翻译练习答案
(第一组)
1.“Want to try one on?” I said, touching Marina’s hand. “OK,” Marina said in her sharp, unsure voice.
2. “You don’t have to rush. Just take your time,” I said in a gentle way. Her whole face instantly brightened and her
shoulders relaxed.
3. “I hated seeing him sick and knew something needed to be done to make him healthy again.” Derek adds.
4. She continued, “I hugged them tightly, feeling a sudden strength inside me...”
5. “I had never received one single complaint against me,” claimed the humiliated doctor.
6. “It’s a question of money, folks,” I announced.
(第二组)
1.He proudly responded, “I can take my family to the circus.”
2. “I feel like you’re abandoning me,” she responded bitterly.
(第三组)1.“You still need a good rest,” I suggested.
2. “He and Mrs Stein have a plan,” she explained.
3. “Everything happens for the best,” Mom reminded me.
4. “We’ll be back next year,” he promised.
5. “Don’t do anything yet,” he warned. “Too risky.”(第四组)1.“He’s alive,” Bettie insisted. “But he won’t be much longer unless he has the medicines on that list.”
2. “I thought we could be friends,” he complained.
3. “... But when the poor boy didn’t get picked, I broken down,” he admits.
4. With red-rimmed eyes, Mr. Rowe comforted him, “I will miss you, too.”
(第五组)
1. “No-o-o,” I sobbed. My vision was blurred by tears “It’s fine, really,” I cried, “Take it.”
2. I opened my window and shouted across. “I know we’ve met before, but I can’t remember where.”
3. The woman in the car jumped out, screaming, “You idiot! Why didn’t you look where you were going?”
4. “Get up and give me your money and jewelry!” the man yelled.
5. She sighed, “You broke our Ming vase.”
6. “You are beautiful,” I whispered, my tongue barely cooperating.
(第六组)
1. He apologized sincerely for what he had done.
2. Suddenly, Mom screamed “Where’s my purse?”
3. The old man lay on the cold ground, groaning painfully.
4. “Good night” Mum whispered to Mike’s ear, leaving the room quietly.
5. She lifted up the old man, comforting him patiently.
6. He gasped out the exciting news to the villagers.
Part 8 让你的对话标签不平庸四个小技巧
在对话标签中加入语气,嗓音,情感让你的描写更生动传神。
【 ① 第一种:加语气】
“I would love to,” said Emily in a pleasant tone. “我很乐意这样做,”艾米丽用一种愉快的语气说。
这里用到了“in a pleasant tone. ”,即“用一种愉快的语气”,基本结构为:in a/an+形容词+tone
如: in a pleasant愉悦的/firm坚定的/rude粗鲁的/sad悲伤的 tone
也可以用 in a tone of +名词的搭配如:in a tone of surprise用一种惊讶的语气
in a tone of curiosity用一种好奇的语气
in a tone of impatience用一种不耐烦的语气
in a tone of command用一种命令的语气
【 ② 第二种:加嗓音】
“I didn’t mean to,” she murmured in a low voice. “我不是故意的,”她低声说。
这里用到了“ in a low voice”,即“小声地说道”或者“用一种...声音”,基本结构是: in a/an+形容词
+voice
如: in a high /low / sweet/loud/soft /weak voice 用一个高/低/甜/响亮/软/弱的声音
【 ③ 第三种:加情感】
“I...I.. don’t think I’m right for the part,”I replied with embarrassment.“我...我..认为我不适合这个角色,”我尴
尬地回答。
这里用到了“ with embarrassment”,即“(伴随着)难堪”,基本结构是: with +情感名词。如with
excitement (伴随着)激动。
【④加副词】
“我再也不会那样做了,”我回答。如何丰富这句话里的对话标签呢?
“I will never do that again,” I answered firmly. 加上了副词firmly(坚定地)
这句话也可以这么写:可将副词提到句首。
Firmly,I answered,“I will never do that again.”
Part 9 模拟演练
1.(2022·重庆市育才中学一模)
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Chris Dykstra hadn’t expected what began as a casual walk around the neighborhood with the
family one night led to a journey of friendship.
Chris Dykstra, a traffic manager in Shorewood, Illinois had noticed a few raccoons (浣熊)
wandering around his garbage. However, he didn’t think too much of it. One night when his wifeJulie was taking their four children for a walk after dinner, they tracked the raccoons back to their
neighbor’s roof. A further investigation showed that the raccoons had chewed a hole in the
neighbor’s roof and were living in her attic (阁楼).
The couple had lived in their current home for five years. Yet they had very little contact with
the neighbor. They knew her first name was Dorene and that she liked to watch their children play in
the backyard, and that’s about it.
Concerned for their neighbor’s well-being, Julie decided to knock on the door to make their
neighbor aware of the raccoons living in the attic. Julie knocked on the door and rang the doorbell,
but no one answered. She decided to ask the local police department to do a wellness check on their
neighbor.
Two police officers and an animal control officer visited the neighbor’s home to conduct a
wellness check. This time the neighbor — Miss Dorene Shock — opened the door. Miss Shock was
surprised to see someone check in on her. The officers made her aware of the raccoons in her attic.
Having been told the whole thing, Miss Shock welcomed Julie into her house. After touring the
house, Julie learned that Miss Shock lived a poor life. Her home barely had any furniture, and she
even didn’t have a TV set. Besides, her house was in need of additional repairs and updates including
new light bulbs.
注意:1. 续写词数应为150左右;
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Chris and his wife knew this was an opportunity to help a neighbor in need.
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Several days later, Chris and his wife came across Miss Shock and had a chat with her.
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参考答案:Chris and his wife knew this was an opportunity to help a neighbor in need. They decided to do
something for the neighbor. They agreed to pay for raccoon removal and roof repairs. Julie took
notes of all the light bulbs in the home that needed replacing and purchased new ones. Chris installed
the new light bulbs on the weekend. They even purchased a television for Miss Shock, who was very
grateful.
Paragraph 2:
Several days later, Chris and his wife came across Miss Shock and had a chat with her. They
learned that Miss Shock almost had no family or friends and was very lonely. She spent nearly all of
her spare time in a spare bedroom sitting on a couch and listening to the radio. The couple thought
they could be Dorene’s friends and it was convenient for them to visit each other often since they
were neighbors. So they became regular visitors to Dorene’s house. The children brought Dorene
great joy. “It is a great thing to help someone in our community,” they said.
【解析】
【分析】
本文以人物为线索展开,讲述了Chris Dykstra和妻子散步时发现浣熊到了邻居的屋顶,随后
他们让当地警察局给他们的邻居做一次检查,后来发现Miss Shock家里很贫穷于是救济帮助
Miss Shock友爱的故事。
【详解】
1.段落续写:
①.由第一段首句内容“克里斯和他的妻子知道这是一个帮助有需要的邻居的机会。”可知,
第一段可描写克里斯主动帮助邻居。
②.由第二段首句内容“几天后,克里斯和他的妻子遇到了Shock小姐,并和她聊天。”可知,
第二段可描写Miss Shock与克里斯和他的妻子谈心。
2.续写线索:帮助——相遇——谈心——亲密——感悟
3.词汇激活
行为类
①.同意:agree/approve/consent/subscribe
②.购买:purchase/buy
情绪类
①.感谢:be grateful/thank for/show one’s appreciation/show one’s gratitude②.感到孤独的:lonely/alone/single/solitary
【点睛】
[高分句型1]. Julie took notes of all the light bulbs in the home that needed replacing and purchased
new ones.(运用了that引导的限制性定语从句)
[高分句型2]. They even purchased a television for Miss Shock, who was very grateful. (运用了
who引导的非限制性定语从句)
2.(2022·全国·重庆南开中学模拟预测)
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
It was six o’clock when Breanna heard her mother’s phone receive a text message as it’s at on
the kitchen bench. “Mum, I bet it’s Dad!” Breanna said and jumped up from the sofa, books spilling
out in front of her. She had been deciding which story her dad would read in one of his funny voices
for the night. Breanna’s mum rubbed her temples (太阳穴) and sighed softly. “Honey, would you
mind seeing if that’s Daddy? I’ve got a bad headache but I want to start cooking a lovely meal for us
to enjoy tonight.”
“Sure, mum,” Breanna skipped into the kitchen to check the phone. Her dad had been away for
two whole nights working on a malfunction (故障) at his company’s warehouse that was at risk of
theft. Breanna felt sure he’d been able to act like a superhero and save the day — but did it have to
take so long? She picked up the phone and read the message, “Just leaving now — can’t wait to see
you both.” Breanna confirmed excitedly, “It’s from Daddy! He’s on his way home!”
Her mother managed a weak smile as her daughter clapped her hands with joy. It had been four
months since she’d lost her job and with only one income to support the family. Her husband had
taken on as many shifts and extra duties as he could to make ends meet. Times were tough and he
was working long hours, but it made the time Breanna spent with her daddy even more special. “Oh,
that’s wonderful news. Now let’s see what I can find to eat,” her mother rose painfully from the sofa
and added.
注意:
1. 续写词数应为150左右;
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。“Great! Mum’s got a bad headache but I’m going to help her cook dinner. See you soon!”
Breanna sent her dad a quick reply.
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Another message from her father drew Breanna’s attention.
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参考答案:
One possible version:
“Great! Mum’s got a bad headache but I’m going to help her cook dinner. See you soon!”
Breanna send her dad a quick reply. As Breanna opened the door of the refrigerator, she heard her
mother sigh again. The shelves of the refrigerator had been almost empty for too long. Her mother
said, “Oh, I think maybe we have tomatoes and carrots tonight, honey. Could you get those out for
me?” While her mother pushed two more headache tablets into her hand, Breanna started cutting the
carrots, just the way her mother had shown her.
Another message from her father drew Breanna’s attention. She stared at the new message:
Red, round and sweet, Seed of love and what I love to eat. Her dad loved entertaining her with
riddles and rhymes! Was this about dinner? Breanna went through all the fruits she could think of
that were red. Suddenly, Breanna remembered a story her father told her about a fruit regarded as a
vegetable. It used to be called a love apple and now it is called tomato. Breanna felt very delighted
that she got her father’s real message.
【解析】
【分析】本文以人物为线索展开,讲述了Breanna的爸爸外出加班赚钱,她的妈妈在家准备晚餐,而
她又开始头疼了,Breanna的爸爸发来了短信说很快会回来,她很开心,妈妈痛苦地从沙发上
站起来准备做晚餐。
【详解】
1.段落续写:
①由第一段首句内容““太好了!妈妈头痛得厉害,但我要帮她做饭。再见!”布里安娜很
快给她爸爸回了信。”可知,第一段可描写Breanna帮妈妈准备做晚饭的食材。
②由第二段首句内容“她父亲的另一条信息引起了布里安娜的注意。”可知,第二段可描写
Breanna的爸爸发来的是谜题,Breanna猜谜题。
2.续写线索:打开冰箱——切胡萝卜——看到谜题——猜中谜题
3.词汇激活
行为类
①打开:open/unfold
②切:cut/chop
③盯着:stare at/gaze at
④得到:get/receive
情绪类
①叹气:sigh/suspire
②高兴的:delighted/happy
【点睛】
[高分句型1]While her mother pushed two more headache tablets into her hand, Breanna started
cutting the carrots, just the way her mother had shown her.(由连接词while引导的时间状语从句
和that引导的定语从句,省略了引导词that)
[高分句型2]Breanna went through all the fruits she could think of that were red.(由关系代词that
引导的定语从句)
3.(2022·湖南·一模)
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的
词数应为150左右。When a tornado hit a small town nearby, many families were left homeless. Afterward, all the
local newspapers carried stories of the families who suffered the hardest to appeal to people’s
attention and assistance.
One Sunday, a particular picture especially touched me. A young woman stood in front of a
mobile home, a depressed expression on her face. A young boy, seven or eight years old. stood at her
side, eyes downcast. Hiding behind her skirt was a tiny girl who stared into the camera, wide eyes
with confusion and fear. The article below gave clothing sizes closely matched ours. This would be a
good opportunity to teach my seven-year-old twins. Brad and Brett, and three-year-old Meghan to
help those less fortunate than themselves.
“We have so much. And these poor people now have nothing” I said. “We’ll share what we have
with them,” I brought three large boxes down from the room upstairs and placed them in the living
room. Meghan watched seriously, as the boys and I filled one of the boxes with canned goods and
foods. While I sorted through our clothes, I encouraged the boys to go through their toys and donate
some of their less favorite things. The boys were pleased to join. Brad rose and went to his room fast.
He came back bringing his action figures that he played with not so frequently. Brett also jumped up
and ran to fetch some of his Matchbox cars and airplane models. Meghan watched quietly as the
boys piled up abandoned toys.
The boys placed the objects they had chosen to donate into one of the boxes while I filled the
third box with clothes. Meghan walked up with Lucy, her worn, faded, best-loved rag doll hugged
tightly to her chest. “I’ll help you find something for the little girl, too.” I said to the little Meghan.
Para. 1:
“Mommy, I will give Lucy to them,” Meghan turned to me.
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“Mommy, I will give Lucy to them,” Meghan turned to me. “Oh, honey,” I said. “You don't have
to give Lucy. You love her so much.” Meghan nodded seriously, eyes glistening with tears. “Lucy
makes me happy, Mommy. Maybe she'll make that little girl happy, too.” She paused in front of the
box that held the toys, pressed her round little face into Lucy's flat face, gave her a final kiss, and
then laid her gently on top of the other toys. The boys watched, open-mouthed, as their baby sister
placed her favorite doll in the box.
Recognizing what little Meghan's gesture meant, I removed my old jacket from the box of
clothes. I replaced it with the new hunter green jacket that I had bought on sale last week. I believed
the young woman in the picture would like it and fit it as much as I did. The boys had also been
inspired by our behavior and carried their beloved things. We all wished the family could pass the
difficult period as soon as possible and that they would love the things we gave them with all our
heart.
【解析】
【分析】
本文以为受难者捐赠衣物和食物为线索展开,文章主要讲述龙卷风发生后,作者看到一张无
家可归的一家人的照片,作者想让她的孩子们为受难者捐赠衣服、食物和玩具。女儿Meghan
决定捐赠她最喜欢的娃娃,这个行动影响了作者,于是作者也将旧衣服换成新衣服捐给受难
者。希望通过捐赠的物品使受难者感受到他们的一片心意。
【详解】
1.段落续写:①由第一段首句内容“Meghan转向我,对我说:妈妈,我要把Lucy捐给他
们。”可知,第一段可描写Meghan捐赠娃娃Lucy的过程。
②由第二段首句内容“意识到小Meghan行为的意义,我把旧夹克衫从衣服箱子里拿了出
来。”可知,第二段可描写作者行为的变化和感受。2.续写线索:Meghan捐Lucy——Meghan的想法——作者拿出旧夹克衫——捐新衣服——感
受
3.词汇激活
行为类
①看:watch/stare
②放:place/pile up
③捐:donate/give
情绪类
喜爱的:favorite/beloved/best-loved
【点睛】
[高分句型1] I replaced it with the new hunter green jacket that I had bought on sale last week.(运
用了that引导的定语从句)
[高分句型2] The boys had also been inspired by our behavior and carried their beloved things.(运
用了被动语态)
4.(2022·江苏·模拟预测)
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
For weeks, the troop had been busy preparing for its Parents’ Night program. Everything was in
order. The walls were filled with displays, the scouts (童子军) were all enthusiastic. The tables were
covered with good things to eat.
Now it was time for Jimmie Davis to give his speech. This was the moment he had been looking
forward to for several weeks. As he arose, he caught a glimpse of his mother’s bright face and his
father's calm, confident expression. Jimmie held his head high as he started his speech, his words
bursting with pride and enthusiasm. He made sure the speech was lively and moving, conscious that
his listeners were showing high praise to him by their careful attention.
Then something happened. The world seemed to move slowly from side to side before him. He
felt his mind went blank and forgot what to say next. He slowed down, faltered (结巴), and finally
stopped. His face turned red, and his hands sought each other wildly. In desperation, he looked
toward his scout leader, begging for his help.Having heard that boyish but great speech practiced again and again, the boy’s scout leader
supplied the missing words that allowed Jimmie to continue. But somehow it was different now. The
wonderful speech had been messed up.
Jimmie paused again, and once again the scout leader helped him. For the remaining two
minutes, the speech seemed more like the scout leader’s than Jimmie’s.
After what seemed like ages, the speech was finally over. In the heart of Jimmie, who sat down
knowing that he had failed, there was a great weight pressing down on him. Disappointment was
clearly written on the face of his mother. A twitch (抽搐) of the father's face showed how painful he
felt.
The audience applauded in a perfunctory (敷衍的) way, feeling sorry for the boy who they
thought had failed.
But the scout leader was on his feet. His eyes twinkled. All the audience listened carefully.
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The calm, sure voice of the scout leader echoed (回响) around the hall.
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Jimmie began to speak in a trembling but firm voice.
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The calm, sure voice of the scout leader echoed (回响) around the hall. “You have seen a boy make a
glorious victory out of what might have been a miserable failure. Jimmie had his chance to quit. Tohave quit would have been easy, but he didn’t. He did deserve our true respect.” Hearing the
inspiring words and looking into his leader’s encouraging eyes, Jimmie felt that he had to do
something. Gathering up all his courage, he finally felt himself, arose again and walked onto the
stage slowly and firmly.
Jimmie began to speak in a trembling but firm voice. “To be honest, I couldn’t have made it
without my leader. I thought about giving up, but it was his encouragement that reminded me of the
spirit of our troop, that is, to play the game even under difficulties!” Jimmie looked toward his leader
with his eyes glittering with tears. The leader went up to him and threw his arms around him. At this
moment, his parents overwhelmingly proud of their son, the entire hall thundered their applause at
the little boy.
【解析】
【分析】
本文本文是记叙文,讲述了吉米·戴维斯在Parents’ Night上搞砸了自己的演讲,让观众和他和
父母感到十分失望,就在他万分懊悔的时候,童子军队长站出给他以认可与鼓励,让他重新
找回自信的故事。
【详解】
1.段落续写:
①由第一段首句内容“童子军队长平静而坚定的声音在大厅里回荡。”可知,第一段可描写
童子军队长对在场的所有人说的话。
②由第二段首句内容“吉米开始用颤抖但坚定的声音说。”可知,第二段可描写吉米受到队
长鼓励后找回自信,勇敢地面对自己的失误,并当众发言。
2.续写线索:队长鼓励——勇敢站出来——感谢队长——感悟——得到认可
3.词汇激
行为类
①.放弃:quit /give up
②.发光:glitter /shine/flash
情绪类
①.激励:inspiring /encouraging
②.坚定:sure /firm/certain
【点睛】[高分句型1]. You have seen a boy make a glorious victory out of what might have been a miserable
failure. (what引导的宾语从句)
[高分句型2]. Hearing the inspiring words and looking into his leader’s encouraging eyes, Jimmie
felt that he had to do something.(现在分词短语作时间状语)
[高分句型3]. To be honest, I couldn’t have made it without my leader.(虚拟语气)
5.(2022·江苏·南京市第一中学一模)
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Henry got on his bike and began to deliver copies of the March 8,1970,issue of The Gazette.
Half an hour later,he threw the last newspaper onto the porch(门廊)at 35 Oak Street and cycled to
The Gazette offices. There must be something important for the editor in chief to meet with an 11-
year-old paperboy.
"No good way to deliver bad news,"Mr. Trotta greeted him when Henry stepped in.Henry's
smile faded.
"We're closing shop,Henry. Advertising is down.Television is how people get their news today.
Local papers are the first to close."Mr.Trotta shrugged.
Henry couldn’t believe his ears, frozen to the spot.He thought of all hose people he had met on
his route. They wouldn't get their neighborhood news anymore!
You were great,Henry—always dependable"Mr. Trotta said.Henry forced his head up to say
good-bye.
As he rode past the houses he knew so well he saw Mr.Grady on his porch,holding a broom(扫
帚). Henry led him to a chair and cleaned the porch.They sat for a while as Mr.Grady recalled how
happy he'd been moving his family to 10 Oak. He sounded lonely.
A week after his last deliveries, Henry wondered if his customers missed The Gazette as much
as he did. He thought of a way to find out. He started out on his old route with a notebook
Henry stopped at Mrs.Burke's. She opened the door, holding the two babies.She asked him if he
knew any neighbors with experience of looking after children.
Mr. Simon was next door, carrying his violin out."Hey, Henry. My band is having à concert in
the park this Friday. Tell all your friends."As Henry made more notes, an idea started forming in his head. Maybe he could create a newsy
page(小报)for the neighbors.
注意∶
1. 续写词数应为 150 左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Neighbors cheered Henry's idea,ready to offer information.
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Neighbors cheered Henry's idea, ready to offer information. Besides Mrs. Burke who longed for a
baby sitter and Mr. Simon who desired a large audience for his concert. Henry also collected six
other neighbors' appealing and needs, including Mr. Grady who yearned for his children's coming
back for a short reunion. Information in hand, Henry knocked at Mr. Trotta's door and pleaded for his
support in publishing his first Oak Street News, who approved almost immediately. Soon, Henry's
tabloid was in circulation, which he cheerfully delivered from door to door as before.
Henry's first Oak Street News then produced desired effects. Neighbors applauded the idea of
sharing their needs in a communal newspaper, which really addressed their immediate concern in a
practical and efficient way. As Mrs. Burke successfully found an ideal baby sitter, Mr. Simon
secured a large following for his concert and Mr. Grady who happily reunited with his kids, Henry
realized, from his deep heart, that The Gazette was far from gone in this TV era, but transformed into
Oak Street News that connected, bonded and tied the Oak neighbors in a cozy fabric.
【解析】
【分析】本文以人物为线索展开,讲述了因为科技的发展,Henry送的报纸《公报》不再营业,想到
了那些等待着报纸看新闻的人,Henry决定自己办一份小报给邻居的故事。
【详解】
1.段落续写:
由第一段首句内容“邻居们为亨利的想法欢呼起来,准备提供信息。”可知,第一段可描写
邻居们都给小报提供信息,小报出版了。
由第二段首句内容“亨利的第一个橡树街新闻随后产生了预期的效果。”可知,第二段可描
写小报给邻居们带来了益处,将邻居们联系在一起。
2.续写线索:邻居提供信息——出版报纸——报纸达到了预期后果——报纸给邻居们带来好
处——邻居更团结
3.词汇激活(一个词汇要写出相近的表达)
行为类
①收集:collect/ gather/accumulate
②.支持:approve/accept
③.改变:transform/change
情绪类
①.舒适的:cozy/comfortable.
高兴:happily/ gladly/merrily
【点睛】
[高分句型1]. Besides Mrs. Burke who longed for a baby sitter and Mr. Simon who desired a large
audience for his concert.(使用了who引导的定语从句)
[高分句型2]. Soon, Henry's tabloid was in circulation, which he cheerfully delivered from door to
door as before.(使用了which引导的定语从句)
[高分句型3]. . Neighbors applauded the idea of sharing their needs in a communal newspaper,
which really addressed their immediate concern in a practical and efficient way.(使用了which引
导非限制性定语从句)
6.(2022·广东·汕头市聿怀中学模拟预测)
阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。On a bright, warm July afternoon, Mac Hollan, a primary school teacher, was cycling from his
home to Alaska with his friends. One of his friends had stopped to make a bicycle repair, but they
had encouraged Mac to carry on, and they would catch up with him soon. As Mac pedaled (骑行)
along alone, he thought fondly of his wife and two young daughters at home. He hoped to show them
this beautiful place someday.
Then Mac heard quick and loud breathing behind him. “Man, that's a big dog!” he thought. But
when he looked to the side, he saw instantly that it wasn’t a dog at all, but a wolf, quickly catching
up with him.
Mac’s heart jumped. He found out his can of hear spray. With one hand on the bars, he fired the
spray at the wolf. A bright red cloud enveloped the animal, and to Mac's relief, it fell back, shaking
its head. But a minute later, it was by his side again. Then it attacked the back of Mac's bike, tearing
open his tent bag. He fired at the wolf a second time, and again, it fell back only to quickly restart the
chase (追赶).
Mac was pedaling hard now. He waved and yelled at passing cars but was careful not to slow
down. He saw a steep uphill climb before him. He knew that once he hit the hill, he’d be easy caught
up and the wolf’s teeth would be tearing into his flesh.
At this moment, Paul and Becky were driving their car on their way to Alaska. They didn’t think
much of it when they saw two cyclists repairing their bike on the side of the road. A bit later, they
spotted what they, too, assumed was a dog running alongside a man on a bike. As they got closer,
they realized that the dog was a wolf. Mac heard a large vehicle behind him. He pulled in front of it
as the wolf was catching up fast, just a dozen yards away now.
注意:
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右;
2. 续写部分分为两段,每段的开头已为你写好;
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The car abruptly stopped in front of him.
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The car abruptly stopped in front of him. Seeing Paul wave at him kindly and open the car door
for him, Mac jumped off his bicycle and rushed into the car without any hesitation. No sooner had
the poor man got in than Paul closed the door instantly. The wolf walked around the car and howled
furiously at them, but just in vain. Realizing it couldn’t catch Mac any more, the wolf ultimately
gave up and walked away gloomily. On spotting the wolf swallowed by the road, Mac, bathed in
perspiration, sighed with relief and sank down to the back seat. Paul handed a bottle of water to Mac,
who managed a weak smile, murmuring something like “Thank you”.
A few minutes later, the other two cyclists arrived. Knowing that Mac had been chased by a
wolf, they were stumped for words and paralyzed with fear. The two friends extended their earnest
gratitude to Paul for rescuing Mac and then took Mac back home. After such a terrible experience,
the splendid landscape of Alaska seemed no longer to be a temptation to them. On the way back
home, feeling the light breeze through his hair, Mac felt what happened just now was just a
nightmare, but a warm glow flooded into his inner heart as he thought of Paul’s unselfish assistance.
The most precious part of humans is their care for each other.
【解析】
【分析】
本文以人物为线索展开,讲述了小学教师麦克·霍兰和朋友们从家里骑车去阿拉斯加。途中他
的一个朋友停下来修理自行车,麦克继续骑行,结果突遇一只狼,在最后,被正开车去阿拉
斯加保罗和贝基救下的故事。
【详解】1.段落续写:
①由第一段首句内容“汽车突然停在他面前。”可知,第一段可描写保罗救了麦克。
②由第二段首句内容“几分钟后,另外两个骑自行车的人来了。”可知,第二段可描写朋友
感谢保罗。
2.续写线索:骑行——遇狼——恰逢——援救——感谢
3.词汇激活
行为类
①说不出话:stump for words/words fail sb/be speechless
②回家:go back home/return home
情绪类
①感谢:thank sb for/show one’s appreciation/gratitude/be grateful
②吓呆了:paralyze with fear/be overcome with fright
【点睛】
[高分句型1]:No sooner had the poor man got in than Paul closed the door instantly.这句话运用了
no sooner…than的部分倒装结构。
[高分句型2]:Realizing it couldn’t catch Mac any more, the wolf ultimately gave up and walked
away gloomily.这句话运用了现在分词作状语的结构。
[高分句型3]:Paul handed a bottle of water to Mac, who managed a weak smile, murmuring
something like “Thank you”.这句话运用了who引导的非限制性定语从句。
7.读后续写模拟专练01
读后续写 阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。
One Sunday last year, eight of us hiked for a couple of hours through the desert near San Diego to
reach Thunder Canyon Cave . We had to abseil(沿绳滑下)through an icy waterfall to get inside, so we put
on our wetsuits and lowered ourselves 30 feet down. By 11:00 a.m. we were inside. After
we climbed further, we reached a nine-inch crack. Having moved for four hours, I was tired and wet.
The group leader, Luca , was guiding three cavers. One of them, Steve got stuck in the crack. There
was 10 minutes of pulling and pushing until Steve was free. He was tired and needed to leave. Luca,
assuming I’d been through the crack before, guided Steve through the cave for another 15 minutes to anexit. I was second from last to go through. I didn’t realize that Luca wasn’t there — if I’d known, I
wouldn’t have attempted the crack, as I needed an experienced guide.
The challenge is to put your feet first down the length of the crack, and then move your body
sideways to swing along, before dropping five feet to the floor of the next space. On my first attempt, I
knew I wouldn’t make it through, but the group encouraged me to try again. I didn’t want to
inconvenience anyone by having to make the long trip back through the cave, so I backed out and took off
my wetsuit. In just my T-shirt, I tried to slide through again but my hips(屁股)were trapped . My feet were
hanging on the other side and my left arm supported my body. My hand rested on a wooden board that
had been left covering boulders(大圆石) to protect cavers from slipping. Luca returned and the team tried
everything to shift me as I mentally focused on escape.
After two hours my arm weakened, so I slid further into the crack, where the gap was only 8.5 inches
wide. My body weight was on my left hand, my back and chest touching the cold stone walls. The guy
behind me, Jim , tried unsuccessfully to pull me back. Of course, I was blocking his escape, too.
注意:
1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右;
2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;
3.续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;
4.续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
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With the risk of the low body temperature, the group supplied me with their own jackets.
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1. 然而,它们毫无用处。我又惊又累,在梦幻般的状态中忽进忽出。
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4. 注意到这一点,卢卡决定求助于救援队。
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5. 他们一到,队伍就开始检查现场。
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6. 他们试图抬高我手旁边的木板把我拉出来,但没有成功。
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7. 卢卡不停地鼓励我,而救援队则用特殊的工具钻孔,甚至摩擦岩石的一部分来使我的臀部自由。
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8. 在他们的帮助下,我设法移动了脚步,爬出了缝隙。
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9. 当我被送到最近的医院时,我激动得差点忘了感谢所有的人。
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参考答案:
1. 然而,它们毫无用处。我又惊又累,在梦幻般的状态中忽进忽出。
However, they served no purpose. Frightened and exhausted, I was drifted in and out of a dreamlike
state.
2. 吉姆想开玩笑让我睡不着觉。
Jim tried to crack jokes to keep me awake.3. 随着时间的流逝,我能让它活下来的信念逐渐消失。
As time went by, the faith that I could make it alive faded gradually.
4. 注意到这一点,卢卡决定求助于救援队。
Noticing it, Luca decided to turn to a rescue team for help.
5. 他们一到,队伍就开始检查现场。
On their arrival, the team began to examine the spot.
6. 他们试图抬高我手旁边的木板把我拉出来,但没有成功。
They attempted to jack the board near my hand to drag me out, but in vain.
7. 卢卡不停地鼓励我,而救援队则用特殊的工具钻孔,甚至摩擦岩石的一部分来使我的臀部自由。
Luca kept on encouraging me while the rescue team used specific tools to drill and even rub part of the
rock to free my hips.
8. 在他们的帮助下,我设法移动了脚步,爬出了缝隙。
With their help, I managed to move my feet and climb out of the gap .
9. 当我被送到最近的医院时,我激动得差点忘了感谢所有的人。
I was so thrilled that I nearly forgot to thank all the fellows when I was sent to the nearest hospital.
参考范文:
With the risk of the low body temperature, the group supplied me with their own jackets. However,
they served no purpose. Frightened and exhausted, I was drifted in and out of a dreamlike state. Jim tried
to crack jokes to keep me awake. As time went by, the faith that I could make it alive faded gradually.
Noticing it, Luca decided to turn to a rescue team for help.After eight hours, Luca found the rescue team. On their arrival, the team began to examine the
spot. They attempted to jack the board near my hand to drag me out, but in vain. Luca kept
on encouraging me while the rescue team used specific tools to drill and even rub part of the rock to free
my hips. With their help, I managed to move my feet and climb out of the gap . I was so thrilled that I
nearly forgot to thank all the fellows when I was sent to the nearest hospital.
8.读后续写模拟专练02
读后续写 阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。
Many years ago, when I was fresh out of school and working in Denver, I was driving to my parents' home in
Missouri for Christmas. I stopped at a gas station(加油站)about 50 miles from Oklahoma City, where I was
planning to stop and visit a friend. While I was standing in line at the cash register(收款台), I said hello to an older
couple who were also paying for gas.
I took off, but had gone only a few miles when black smoke poured from the back of my car. I stopped and
wondered what I should do. A car pulled up behind me. It was the couple I had spoken to at the gas station. They
said they would take me to my friend's .We chatted on the way into the city, and when I got out of the car, the
husband gave me his business card.
I wrote him and his wife a thank-you note for helping me. Soon afterward, I received a Christmas present from
them. Their note that came with it said that helping me had made their holidays meaningful.
Years later, I drove to a meeting in a nearby town in the morning. In late afternoon I returned to my car and
found that I'd left the lights on all day, and the battery(电池)was dead. Then I noticed that the Friendly Ford
dealership - a shop selling cars - was right next door. I walked over and found two salesmen in the showroom.
注意:
1.所续写的短文词数应为150左右;
2.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语;
3.续写部分分为二段,每段的开头语已经为你写好;
4续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph 1
I entered the shop, and one of the salesman came to me.
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After a while, they quickly drove a pickup truck to my car and started it.
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翻译小练习:
1. 我立刻认出了他。这两个推销员是老两口,他们是Friendly Ford经销商的老板。
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2. “嘿,是你!你帮过我,记得吗?“我激动地对他们说。
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3. “是的,我们有!“老人笑了,我们经营商店是为了帮助更多的人。
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4. 你知道吗,这让我们的生活如此有意义!”
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5. 他们再一次解决了我的麻烦,但当我付钱时,他们不接受我的钱。
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6. 他们告诉我,刚开始经营这家店的时候,从来没有人抽时间给他们写信说声谢谢,但现在他们收到的感
谢信越来越多,他们真的很高兴。
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参考答案:
1. 我立刻认出了他。这两个推销员是老两口,他们是Friendly Ford经销商的老板。
I recognized him at once. The two salesmen were the older couple, and they were the owners of the Friendly Ford
dealership.2. “嘿,是你!你帮过我,记得吗?“我激动地对他们说。
“Hey, it’s you! You ever helped me, remember?” I said to them excitedly.
3. “是的,我们有!“老人笑了,我们经营商店是为了帮助更多的人。
“Yeah, we do!” the old man laughed, we run the shop to help more people.
4. 你知道吗,这让我们的生活如此有意义!”
You know, it makes our life so meaningful!”
5. 他们再一次解决了我的麻烦,但当我付钱时,他们不接受我的钱。
They solved my trouble once again, but when I paid for it, they would not accept my money.
6. 他们告诉我,刚开始经营这家店的时候,从来没有人抽时间给他们写信说声谢谢,但现在他们收到的感
谢信越来越多,他们真的很高兴。
They told me that when they ran the shop at first, no one had ever taken the time to write them and say thank you,
but now they received more and more thank-you notes from people, which they were really happy about.
参考范文:
Paragraph 1
I entered the shop, and one of the salesman came to me. I recognized him at once. The two salesmen were the
older couple, and they were the owners of the Friendly Ford dealership. “Hey, it’s you! You ever helped me,
remember?” I said to them excitedly. Yeah, we do!” the old man laughed, we run the shop to help more people.
You know, it makes our life so meaningful!”
Paragraph 2
After a while, they quickly drove a pickup truck to my car and started it. They solved my trouble once again,
but when I paid for it, they would not accept my money. They told me that when they ran the shop at first, no one
had ever taken the time to write them and say thank you, but now they received more and more thank-you notes
from people, which they were really happy about.--- End ---