读后续写微讲座三：读通(感情发展)
外刊输入——悟语言之道
Working out in a New Way
The most popular PE class at Waukegan High School in Illinois, US, takes place in the stadium.
It is the school's version of CrossFit, the difficult workout that has exploded in popularity over
the last 16 years at thousands of gyms. It has more than one million devotees and a professional
competition shown on ESPN.
Schools around the Chicago area have adopted CrossFit to interest students at a time of a rising
weight problem among young people, and most say it really works compared with traditional gym
classes.
“I think it's a great way to teach kids lifelong fitness, especially those kids who aren't
interested in hockey, soccer or basketball，” said teacher Tracy Haraf of Illinois' Stony Creek
Elementary.“They think it's tough, but they mentioned their performance has improved.”
But some doctors and researchers advise caution, saying workouts that involve lifting weights
can lead to injuries, particularly when performed by inexperienced people. Doctor Craig Finlayson
at Lurie Children's Hospital of Chicago said he was worried that while strength training has a
positive effect on kids, heavy weights could be trouble for teenagers who might hurt themselves by
trying to do too much or using poor form.
CrossFit Inc., the company that certifies (发证书) trainers and licenses gyms, disagrees that its
program is more dangerous compared with other fitness routines, like jogging. The company
even sued (控告) over a research article that found 16 percent of a CrossFit group had stopped
participating because of overuse or injury, saying the statistic presenting CrossFit as unsafe was not
scientific.
Gym teachers like Waukegan's Greg Moisio, also say the risk of injury can be reduced with
proper teaching and CrossFit's flexibility. Moisio referred to a workout called “Death by Burpees”，
where every one minute and 20 seconds, students run a lap and perform an increasing number of
burpees—a movement involving a squat (蹲下), a pushup and a jump with hands held above the
head. The challenge is to keep going as long as you can.
“That's the great thing, because something like running the mile, the worst kid is always
last，” Moisio said.“Everybody knows who's last; the sense of failure will make them lose
heart. That's a terrible feeling for a kid. Now, no one knows who dropped out in round three
because they're too worried about trying to get their own butt around the track.”
1.重点词汇再现(1)work out 锻炼
(2)stadium n. 体育场
(3)competition n. 竞争，竞赛
(4)compare...with 与……比较
(5)gym n. 体操训练
(6)fitness n. 健康
(7)soccer n. 足球
(8)injury n. 伤害；损伤
(9)strength n. 力量；体力
(10)positive adj. 积极的
(11)jog n. 慢跑
(12)pushup n. 俯卧撑
(13)failure n. 失败
(14)lose heart 丧失信心；泄气
(15)track n. 跑道
2．经典句型再现：名词短语作同位语
(1)It is the school's version of CrossFit, the difficult workout that has exploded in popularity
over the last 16 years at thousands of gyms.
这是学校版的交叉健身法，这项高难度的运动在过去16年里在数千家健身房大受欢迎。
(2)CrossFit Inc.
the company that certifies (发证书) trainers and licenses gyms, disagrees that its program is
more dangerous compared with other fitness routines.
CrossFit公司，一家认证、颁发教练和健身房执照的公司，不认同这个项目比其他健身项
目更危险。
Ⅱ 迷你语料库(Mini Corpus)
序号 佳句呈现 赏析
As a player, Lang Ping brought 描写运动员的句子。特别注
1 honour and glory to her 意honour 和glory，表示
country. “荣耀”。
As a person, Lang Ping is loved 描写人物受欢迎。at home
2
by fans at home and abroad. and abroad意为“国内外”。
3 The team that Lang Ping had ①定语从句，修饰先行词theteam。
built was① falling apart②. ②fall apart意为“破裂；破
碎；崩溃”。
Losing two important players 描述在困难面前，不灰心丧
4 was a big challenge, but Lang 气。动名词作主语，谓语动
Ping did not lose heart. 词要用单数形式。
Then in 2016, Lang Ping led 描述人物具有领导力。lead
5 her volleyball team to Olympic sb. to Olympic gold意为“带
gold in Brazil. 领……获得奥运会金牌”。
描述“飞人”乔丹，运用了
When Michael Jordan's feet left
夸张的写作手法。time
6 the ground, time seemed to
seemed to stand still意为“时
stand still.
间似乎都凝固了”。
The player who became known
①who引导的定语从句修饰
as “Air Jordan” changed
7 先行词the player。
basketball① with his graceful
②“with＋名词”作状语。
moves and jumps②.
Jordan's skills were impressive,
描述人物，特别注意两个形
8 but the mental strength that he
容词impressive和unique。
showed made him unique.
Jordan says that the secret to the secret to his success is
9 his success is learning from his doing sth.意为“他成功的秘
failures. 诀是做某事”。
续 表
序号 佳句呈现 赏析
I can accept failure; everyone 本句是乔丹的名言，说明遇
10 fails at something. But I can't 到失败时，不气馁，坚持尝
accept not trying. 试。
Losing games taught him to
本句适用于描述失败之后勇
11 practise harder and never give
敢的状态。
up.
12 I almost went bananas, too. 谚语，表示“我几乎发疯了”。
have no idea后接同位语从
I had no idea a letter could
13 句；make a difference意为
make such a difference！
“有影响的；起作用”。
Once I started thinking about
①once引导时间状语从句。
14 fitness rather than weight①，
②概括描述情况的变化。
things began to change②.
①rather than表示“而不
Rather than cutting out the 是”，作状语，前置放句
15 foods I enjoyed①， I added 首，表示强调。②add...to...
healthy foods to② my meals. 意为“把……添加
到……”。
Finally, I stopped comparing
myself with actresses and 描述自我接纳。comparing 和
16 models and looking for things looking for 并列作stop的宾
that were wrong with my face 语。
or body.
Instead, I made a list of the 描述自我接纳。make a list of
17
things I liked about myself. 意为“列清单”。
By being positive about myself
描述通过努力，增加信心，
18 and my body, I became both
并接受自我。
happier and healthier.
Ⅲ 读后续写起始篇：读通——感情发展(Feeling development)
故事类记叙文有两条线索，一是情节(plot)发展线索，二是感情(feeling)发展线索。通常情
况下，随着情节的发展，文章的主角感情会随之发生变化。所以，对文章的整体把握就离不
开对角色感情发展的分析。
对于感情发展线索的梳理有两个要点。
第一，按照情节发展的顺序，逐步获取表示感情的词汇、句型及表达，进而获取感情的
发展。
第二，要特别关注感情最大的变化。这是记叙文的核心，往往也是最大冲突的爆发点和
续写的基础。
【典题精析】
阅读下面的材料， 完成以下任务。
Maria was practicing with her soccer mates in a tiny school yard. They were all from River EdgeRockers, a soccer team of their community. Suddenly, the ball flew into a deep hole at the edge of the
yard. It was the third time that they had lost their ball this month. Without the ball, Maria had to
wave goodbye to her mates and went home, depressed. “If only there were a regulation soccer
field！” she thought.
That evening, seeing her low spirits, her father asked, “What was the matter, dear？”
“I was just thinking about playing in a brandnew soccer field！” Maria answered.
Her father smiled and said，“Tomorrow, a Town Council meeting is to be held to discuss about
the use of that vacant (空着的) lot next to the pet store, Home for Pets. Why not take this opportunity
to convince them we need a better field？”
The next day, with the company of her father, Maria and her teammates went to the meeting hall.
On their arrival, they saw Councilwoman Jill and some citizens already there. They took their seats.
After Jill announced the start of the discussion, Maria stood up and spoke first. “Up till now there is
no soccer field in our community, which certainly affects our physical health. Our team currently
have to practice in a tiny school yard, and only when it's not already booked.”
Mrs Lorries, owner of the pet store, commented, “I couldn't agree more. Kids do need such a
field.” The Rockers applauded excitedly and the other citizens all agreed it would be a way out.
“A soccer field would be a good use for that lot with overgrown weeds and some large rocks, but
to build such one would need a small sum of money and maybe you even need to do all the work on
your own.” Councilwoman Jill smiled, “Can you manage it？”
Thinking for a while, Maria nodded with a determined look on her face, “The Rockers can do it!
We will turn it into a soccer field.” The teammates all cheered.
1．情节与感情发展(Plot development and feeling development)
结构 情节发展 感情发展
(Structure) (Plot development) (Feeling development)
Paragraph 1
If only there were a
Maria and her soccer mates
regulation soccer field!
开端 wanted
用感叹句表示玛丽亚对现
(Beginning) a__regulation__soccer__fi
在球场的 不满 / 失望 和对
eld．
新球场的渴望。
发展 Paragraphs 2－7 ...seeing her low spirits...
(Rising Maria's father suggested 说明玛丽亚对旧球场的不满 / 失望 。
using__the__vacant__lot__
Her father smiled and
next__to__the__pet__store
said...
．
说明爸爸对玛丽亚的支持
The next day, Council -
和疼爱。
woman Jill, Mrs Lorries,
I couldn't agree more.
owner__of__the__pet__sto
此处应用了“否定词＋比
re and other citizens
较级”表示最高级含义，
agreed on the meeting.
表明洛瑞女士对玛丽亚的
But to build a regulation
支持。
soccer field would need
Action) Kids do need such a field.
a__small__sum__of__mon
此处应用了“do＋动词原
ey and even need
形”表示对谓语动词的强
to__do__all__the__work__
调，表明洛瑞女士对玛丽
by__Maria__and__her__te
亚的支持。
ammates．
The Rockers applauded
文章最大的冲突：宠物店
excitedly...
旁边的空地可以用作新球
表明了队员们的兴奋之
场，但是必须由玛丽亚和
情。
她的队员们自己筹钱并且
Jill smiled...表明了吉尔对
自己动手改造。
玛丽亚的支持。
Paragraph 8 Maria nodded with a
Maria and her teammates determined look on her
were__willing__to accept face...
高潮 the challenge to transform 表明了玛丽亚下定决心、
(Climax) the__vacant__lot into a 坚定的心情。
regulation soccer field. The teammates all cheered.
高潮：玛丽亚和队员们乐 表明玛丽亚的队友们同样
意接受挑战。 下定决心、坚定的心情。
Maria and her teammates
尾声 (做出合理预测)
managed to raise enough
(Falling
虽然很辛苦和疲惫，但是
money and tried their best
Action)
他们乐意付出努力和劳
to overcome all thedifficulties.
They succeeded
transforming the lot with
结局 动，充满了欢乐。
overgrown weeds and
(Ending)
some large__rocks into a
regulation soccer field.
2.情节山体现感情发展(Feeling development on plot mountain)
Maria & her teammates' →→→
答案：①Maria and her soccer mates wanted a regulation soccer field.
②But to build a regulation soccer field would need a small sum of money and even need to do
all the work by Maria and her teammates.
③Maria and her teammates were willing to accept the challenge.
④Maria and her teammates managed to raise enough money and tried their best to overcome all
the difficulties.
⑤They succeeded transforming the lot with overgrown weeds and some large rocks into a
regulation soccer field.
名校模拟演练：
1, （2022·辽宁·朝阳市第一高级中学高三阶段练习）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两
段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
As I walked along the sidewalk in front of Surplus Unlimited, a car that was about to change my life had just
turned onto Route 82 from the CVS parking lot. I looked up and noticed the elderly couple in the car heading
toward me. As the car rolled past, the driver suddenly collapsed against the steering wheel (方向盘) right in front
of my eyes. His wife stared blankly out of the passenger side window. She was unaware that her car was nowrolling—without a conscious driver—down the center of a busy road.
I began to jog alongside the moving car. My mind assessed the situation. Somebody needed to stop that car!
I reached forward, but there was nothing to grab. I pounded on her window. She looked confused. “Roll down
the window!” I yelled, gesturing wildly. With the window down, I was able to grab the doorframe. I pulled hard
against the force of the moving vehicle. On the far side of the car, the traffic streamed by in the opposite direction.
Cars passed one after another. Nobody slowed down. Nobody seemed to notice.
Thankfully, the driver’s foot must have slipped off the gas pedal (踏板) when he lost consciousness. I kept
pulling, and the car began to slow.
Just then, a woman appeared from behind me. She ran alongside the driver side door. She opened the door
and as the car was slowing, she managed to shift it out of “Drive”. A joyful “We did it!” feeling swept over me.
But the car was now stopped in the center lane (车道) with traffic still moving in both directions around us
and we need to help this man. Quickly! The woman called 911 while I checked his vital signs. He was not
breathing. He had no pulse. He had about five minutes until he was dead. CPR was needed in to time.
注意：
1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Thoughts started running through my mind.
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In an instant, the man from the black SUV was standing beside me and said, “I am a doctor.”
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_______________________________________________________________________________________2, （2022·浙江·高三阶段练习）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完
整的短文。
We had just completed a unit on community heroes, and I had given my kindergarten class an assignment to
write or draw about their favorite hero. Each child was busy creating colorful masterpieces decorated with fire
helmets and shiny police badges. Several students had chosen to draw large-than-life brothers and sisters or
moms and dads.
However, one little boy was having difficulty with the assignment. Cameron had touched my heart early in the
school year. He was on the autism spectrum (自闭症), but that didn’t matter to me or his classmates. We all loved
him just the way he was. He was full of wonderful stories and brought a special feeling to our classroom. He often
snorted when he laughed, and the rest of the class would laugh along with him.
I sat and watched as Austin, a little boy with freckles (雀斑), worked with Cameron. Austin had a wonderful
way of interacting with Cameron, and he helped him find his hero. Within a few minutes, Cameron quickly began
drawing blue lines and curves on his paper.
Finally, it was time for everybody to share their hero pictures. I listened as each student proudly stood in
front of the class, picture held high, and described his or her hero. Maddie’s daddy was a policeman. She shared
how her daddy and his dog helped catch bad guys. Cory’s dad was a football coach, and he helped kids get big and
strong and win lots of games. Even Mark, who was very shy, held up a larger-than-life picture of his mom and
spoke just above a whisper as he shared how she was his hero because she always took care of him.
Then it was Cameron’s turn to share his hero. Cameron stood up and anxiously placed his large blue stick-
figured drawing in front of his face. He then quickly blurted out it was a picture of me. He added that I helped him
learn things and then quickly sat back down. Tears began to form in the corner of my eyes, but nothing could have
prepared me for what happened next.
注意：
1. 续写词数应为150左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
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Finally, Austin walked to the front to share his hero.
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Paragraph 2:
The tears were now making their way down my cheeks, but were suddenly cut off in mid-stream.
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【答案】：
1，Thoughts started running through my mind. I needed to start CPR. But I couldn’t do CPR on a person who was
sitting in a car. Did I remember how to do CPR? There was no way for us two women to lift this guy and carry him
through this traffic to the side of the road. By the time an ambulance arrived, he would be dead. Just then, over
my shoulder, I noticed a black SUV had pulled up behind us.
In an instant, the man from the black SUV was standing beside me and said. “I am a doctor” I stepped back.
He confirmed that the man indeed had no pulse. He quickly carried the unconscious driver to the sidewalk with
the help of the woman. I walked around to the passenger window to check on the elderly lady. Her hands were
shaking wildly, tears in her eyes. She could only manage to whisper, “Will he be OK?” “I hope so,” I told her softly,
as the doctor began CPR. And his breath recovered!
【导语】本文由人物线索展开，讲述了作者注意到一辆朝他驶来的小汽车，司机已经失去了意识，情况十
分危急，后来，他与路人齐心协力把车子停了下来，可是车主没有呼吸脉搏，情况危急之时，一辆黑色越
野车停了下来，出来了一位医生，最终救下了这位老人。
【详解】1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“各种想法开始在我脑海里闪过。”可知，接下来要描述作者关于如何救这位司机的
各种各样的想法，以及对于下文黑色越野车的提及。②由第二段首句内容“刹那间，黑色越野车里的人站在我身边说。“我是医生。””可知，接下来可描写
这位医生是如何操作，并最终救下这位司机的，以及众人的反应和情绪。
2.续写线索：我脑海中想到各种方法——无力实施救援——注意到了一辆黑色越野车——下来一位医生
——司机的老婆焦急的情绪——最终救下了司机。
3.词汇激活
行为类
①.举起：lift / raise / hold up
②.退后：step back / keep back/ draw back
③.检查：check / examine/ inspect
情绪类
①.悲伤：tears in her eyes/ sad/ sorrowful
②.柔和：softly/ gently
【点睛】[高分句型1]. He confirmed that the man indeed had no pulse.（运用了that引导的宾语从句）
[高分句型2]. I walked around to the passenger window to check on the elderly lady. （运用了不定式作目的状
语）
2, Finally, Austin walked to the front to share his hero. I was certain it would be a policeman.
However, he surprised me when he proudly held up a picture of his friend Cameron. He shared that
Cameron was his hero because he had this sickness that made it really hard to learn, but he was like
Superman and was really smart. He had drawn a red cape on his cartoon-like picture of Cameron and
decorated the costume with a large red “C” on Cameron’s chest.
The tears were now making their way down my cheeks, but were suddenly cut off in mid-stream.
Cameron suddenly stood up, and put his arms up in the air as if he were going to take off and fly. He
joyfully shouted out, “I’m Superman!” The entire class stood up and began striking Superman
gestures, too. Within minutes, we were all laughing as though we had each truly discovered the secret
of becoming superheroes. Teachers are tasked with a very important job, leading their children in
discovering their own amazing qualities and helping them find their inner superhero.
【导语】文章以人物为线索展开，描写作者给班级学生布置一个任务，写或画他们最喜欢的
英雄，班级中得了自闭症的同学Cameron画的是作者，因为作者帮助了他学习，这让作者很
感动；而另一个同学Austin画的是Cameron，并解释说Cameron虽然得了自闭症，但是像超
人一样，非常聪明。作者从中感悟到老师肩负着一项非常重要的工作，引导孩子们发现自己惊人的品质，帮助他们找到自己内心的超级英雄。
【详解】1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“最后，Austin走到前面分享他的英雄。”可知，第一段可描述Austin
分享的超级英雄是Cameron并说明原因。
②由第二段首句内容“泪水顺着我的脸颊流下，但突然在中途被切断。” 可知，第二段可描
写Cameron突然模仿起超级英雄，大家都非常开心，作者对此做出感悟。
2.续写线索：Austin分享图画——作者感到惊讶——Cameron模仿超人——同学一起模仿超人
——大家开心的笑了——作者感悟
3.词汇激活
行为类
①走向：walk to/step towards
②站起来：stand up/rise to one’s feet
③发现：discover/find
情绪类
①令某人惊讶：surprise sb./make sb. surprised
②高兴地：joyfully/happily
【点睛】[高分句型1] He shared that Cameron was his hero because he had this sickness that made
it really hard to learn, but he was like Superman and was really smart. (由连接词that引导的宾语从
句，because引导的原因状语从句和that引导的定语从句)
[高分句型2] Cameron suddenly stood up, and put his arms up in the air as if he were going to take
off and fly. (由as if引导的方式状语从句)
