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Write Up Vol.7: 初中英语写作之介绍成功人士









Preface
2024外研版八上英语教材 Unit 1 的写作任务是:Write about a successful person。教材给出的写作框架很清晰:
面对的困难:What challenges did the person face (doubts or fears)?
如何克服困难:What did the person do to overcome the challenges?
具体成果:What did the person achieve?
你的评价:What are your comments about this person?
这个话题本身并不难,因为无论日常生活还是新闻媒体,“成功人士”随处可见。真正的难点集中在上面提到的第1点和第2点——如何叙述困难与克服困难。受初中语文记叙文写作的影响,不少学生习惯把故事讲得一波三折、细节满满。但到了英语写作里,这种“细节化叙事”往往就成了灾难现场:词汇不够、句法跟不上,最后只能写出满篇的语法错误。所以,小编再次搬出老办法:模仿。把课文里的框架、句式,甚至部分措辞拿来,填入新的人物素材,一篇像样的作文就出来了。
那么,就让我们一起来看看 Unit 1 的课文能给我们提供什么吧。
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课文剖析
这个单元的核心主题是“人与自我”,通过三个人物(普通学生、文学虚构角色、体育明星)来探讨自爱自强的意义。



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A Red, Red Rose
第一篇课文《A Red, Red Rose》(P5)讲述了女生 Sally 因为脸上的胎记而自卑的故事。最终,新同学 Maddie 用“红玫瑰”的妙喻,让她与自己、与胎记和解,变得积极向上。
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The Wonderful Wizard of Oz
“Developing Ideas”板块的听力材料(P10-11)介绍了童话大师 L. Frank Baum 的名作《奥兹国历险记》(The Wonderful Wizard of Oz),主角团在历险中发现自我。这位大师的短篇小说在“Line Grammar”第10期亦有介绍,感兴趣的读者可前往阅读。
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Impossible → I'm Possible
第二篇课文《Impossible → I'm Possible》(P12-13)讲述了体育明星苏炳添的职业生涯,按时间顺序记录了他如何一步步克服困难、最终成为“苏神”(Su-perman)的过程。
题外话:小编当年学初中英语时,课文里的体育明星还是刘翔。时间过得真快啊。
前两个材料更偏向“自我探索”的主题,与“成功人士”写作任务的关联度并不高。而第三篇课文,堪称这次写作的“标准答案”——它提供了清晰的时间线叙事框架,以及大量可直接套用的表达。
课文《Impossible → I'm Possible》以四个关键时间点(2006年、2011年、2015年、2021年)串联起苏炳添的运动生涯,用一次次具体的进步,最终塑造出一个“成功人士”的形象。在实际写作中,受篇幅和素材限制,学生不必完整复制这种“多段式时间线”叙述,但需要抓住最关键的一两个节点,把“困难 → 行动 → 成果”讲清楚即可。
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参考范文
下面,小编模仿《Impossible → I'm Possible》的结构和表达,展示如何介绍三个不同领域的成功人士。前两篇范文均改写自《二十一世纪学生英文报》,范文中加粗的部分均模仿自课文。
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李泽洋(与苏炳添情况最相似)
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Li Zeyang: A Successful Young Runner
Li Zeyang is a 25-year-old runner from the Hubei team. At the 15th National Games of China (全运会) in 2025, he won the gold medal in the 100-meter race with a time of 10.11 seconds. This made history.
When he was young, Li Zeyang also had doubts and fears. In 2015, his father took him to watch the IAAF World Championships (世锦赛) in Beijing. He felt very excited and dreamed of becoming a runner. But at first, he was not fast enough. Sometimes he failed in training and felt sad.
However, Li Zeyang did not give up. He trained hard every day. In 2019, he joined the national team and got the chance to train in the US. There, he met many difficulties. However, he always told himself, "Have a try and try harder." He fought his fears and kept running. After years of hard work, he finally made history. He stayed calm and said, "I will keep working hard to bring honour to China."
I think Li Zeyang is a real hero. His story teaches me a lesson: nothing is impossible as long as you try and stick to it. Everyone can write their own story.

Li Zeyang

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张韶涵(娱乐明星)
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Angela Zhang: Always Looking for Light
Angela Zhang is a famous singer. She had a very successful world tour (世界巡演) in 2024. The main idea of the tour is "looking for light (光明)". She has put all her love from 24 years of singing into this show.
However, her road to success was not easy. She started her singing life very early, but for many years she was not very popular (受欢迎的). Doubts and fears often held her back. She also faced health problems. At times (有时), she felt sad and wanted to stop singing.
But Angela Zhang did not give up. She fought her fears and kept singing. She practised hard every day and improved (提升) her voice (嗓音). She also joined singing shows like "Singer" and impressed (给……留下深刻印象) many people with her touching voice. She told herself to have a try and try harder. Slowly, she won more and more fans (粉丝). In 2024, her world tour was a big success. Her music has helped people feel brave and find their own light, even in dark times.
I admire Angela Zhang very much. Her story gives me an important lesson: nothing is impossible as long as you try and stick to it. Everyone can write their own story, just like Angela Zhang.


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曹操(历史人物)
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Cao Cao: A Successful Leader in Ancient China
Cao Cao was a great leader (领导者) in Chinese history. He lived at the end (末期) of the Han Dynasty. At that time, China fell into great trouble. Cao Cao wanted to bring peace to the country.
However, his road to success was not easy. He faced many problems and strong enemies (敌人). One of the most dangerous men was Lü Bu. People called Lü Bu the strongest man of the age (时代). In the Battle of Puyang (濮阳之战), Lü Bu almost killed (杀死) Cao Cao. Cao Cao had to run for his life. This failure filled Cao Cao with fear and doubt. But he did not give up.
What did Cao Cao do to overcome these challenges? He used clever ideas, not just strength. To fight Lü Bu, he then worked with Liu Bei. They trapped (围困) Lü Bu in Xiapi. In the end, Cao Cao caught Lü Bu and killed him. After this, Cao Cao learned from his mistake and became calmer and stronger.
Through years of hard work, Cao Cao took control of (掌控) northern China. He also built a strong government (政府) and helped the people farm. He became one of the most powerful men of his time. His son later started the kingdom of Wei (魏国).
I admire Cao Cao because he fought his fears and never gave up. His story tells us: nothing is impossible as long as you use your brain (大脑) and stick to it. Everyone can make their own history.




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总结
在阅读上面的三篇范文后,你可能会发现,李泽洋、张韶涵和曹操,明明是三个完全不同领域的人,写出来的文章却长得像“三胞胎”。没错,这就是模仿的力量:骨架相同,血肉各异。课文里那句“nothing is impossible as long as you try and stick to it”放到运动员身上成立,放到歌手身上成立,放到一千八百年前的乱世枭雄身上,居然也毫不违和。可见,好句式是“万能钥匙”,关键看你会不会用。
小编还想再啰嗦一句:初中英语写作,最忌讳的就是“心里千言万语,笔下一片狼藉”。与其硬编一个复杂故事,不如老老实实把教材里的表达先吃透。等你把课文里的句子用熟了,自然会慢慢生长出属于自己的写作风格。那时候,你写的就不再是“模仿”,而是“创作”了。


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