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读后续写 个人成长 课堂学案
原文好句赏析
1.我环顾四周,终于看到了大卫,他独自站在栅栏边。
I looked around and finally _______ David, who was standing by himself off to the side
by a fence.
2.我迅速在人群中寻找学校的教练,问他发生了什么事。“我担心其他学校的孩子会嘲笑
他,”他局促不安地解释道。
I quickly _____ the crowd for the school’s coach and asked him what had happened.
“I was afraid that kids from other schools would laugh at him,” he explained ______.
3.我按捺住懊恼。
I ______ my frustration.
4.在确定了大卫想跑就跑之后,我转过身来,发现他朝我走来,他的小身体一边向前摆动,
一边左右摇晃。
After making sure that David could run if he wanted, I turned to find him _______
towards me, his small body _____ from side to side as he ______ his feet forward.
续写部分
细节描写满分句
动作细节描写
1.他低下头,扭动着双手。
He ______________ and wriggled his hands. (两连动词,肢体动作)
2.大卫很受鼓励,他深吸了一口气,鼓起勇气,“我会试一试的。”
①David was inspired, so he _______________________, “I will give it a try”. (两连动词+对话)
②___________, _______________________________,“I will give it a try”. (形容词作状
语+两连动词+对话)
续写第二段 (侧重描写肢体动作并利用场景描写烘托比赛气氛)
3.赛跑的信号一响,除了大卫之外,赛跑者们像子弹一样飞奔而去。
As the signal to run ignited, ___________________________, except David. (明喻)
4.其他学校的观众的目光落在了大卫身上。
________________________________________________________________. (无灵主语
句)
5.他努力往前跑,小小的身子随着奔跑的节奏摇晃着。
①He struggled to run forward, and his small body ___________________________. (肢
体动作,并列句)
②He struggled to run forward, ____________________________________________.
(with复合结构)
6.同学们纷纷出现在赛道上,热情地为他加油, “加油!你能做到! ”
①Classmates all appeared on the racing track, and__________________________ ,
“Come on! You can make it! ” (双连动作+副词,对话描写)
②Classmates all appeared on the racing track, _______________________________,
“Come on! You can make it! ” (分词短语作状语)
7.最后,尽管大卫是最后一个,但他在热烈的欢呼和掌声中,胜利地举起双臂冲过终点线。
①Finally, though he was the last one, David _______________________________. (肢体
动作+场景描写)
②Finally, ____________________, David ______________________________________.(省略句)
满分结尾句
8.人们被他的毅力深深打动,这是体育精神中最宝贵的东西。
People ___________ and it was the dearest thing in sportsmanship.
9.大卫露出他一贯的露齿笑容说:“谢谢你,你让我意识到,如果为我的目标而努力,我
总会成为赢家。”
David cast __________ and said," Thank you, you made me realize I'd always come out
a winner if I wanted something badly enough to work for it."
一、动作细节描写(简单句或利用/三连动词/非谓语动词构建动作链),注意肢体动作
描写
1.I ____________ _________ (按时醒来), ate breakfast and did some last minute studying for
my first hour math test.
2.At one stop, Fat Ryan ______________ (匆忙上车). He _________________ (被某人的脚
绊了一下)accidentally and THUMP! He ____________(倒下)onto the floor.
3.Every one of us on the bus looked on and ____________ (狂笑). Ryan
_____________________(挣扎着站起来), dusted the jacket and made his way to an empty
seat.
4.I ________________(抬腿)for one last toe touch. RIIPPP!
5.______________________(我呆住了). I had no idea what to do but stand still.
二、情感/神态细节描写(表现人物的尴尬或难过)
1.He tried to laugh with us, but ______________________________________(他窘得满脸通
红).
2.Trying to cover myself with my hands, I tried to laugh too, but I felt
_____________________________________ (泪水开始涌出).
3.He ______________________( 看 到 我 在 看 ). I smiled at him quickly and
_______________________(把目光移开).续写部分的细节描写(与原文语言特点一致)
一、动作细节描写(简单句或利用/三连动词/非谓语动词构建动作链),注意肢体动作
描写
1.他从后面走近我,迅速脱下夹克递给我,示意我把撕破的牛仔裤遮住。
He approached me from behind,____________________________ and offered it to me,
___________________________________________________________. (分词作状语)
2.我谢过他,把夹克还给了他,并告诉他啦啦舞很精彩。
I thanked him, _________________________________________________. (分词做状语)
3 我鼓起勇气,真诚地向他道歉,并再次感谢他帮助我走出了绝境。
① I gathered my courage,_______________ to him for my misconduct on the bus and ______
______________________________________________________. (动词+副词,三连动词)
②_____________________________________________________________________________
_________________________. (分词做状语)
4. 瑞安咧开嘴笑着,拍了拍我的肩膀,让我忘了这事,他开玩笑说他经常摔倒。
①Ryan,___________________________________, told me to forget about that, and joked he
felt like that a lot. (神态描写+肢体动作+语言描写)
②Ryan, _____________________________________ and told me to forget about that,
________________________________________. (分词做状语)
二、情感/神态细节描写(表现人物的尴尬或感激)
1. 我低下头,尴尬得脸都红了。
①I lowered my head, and________________________________. (动作+神态描写)
②I lowered my head, ____________________________. (独立主格结构作状语)
2. 我强忍泪水,想向他表达我的感激之情,但我没有勇气。
① I struggled against my tears, and I did want to express my gratitude to him
bu__________________. (无灵主语句)
②_______________________________________________________. (分词做状语)