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读后续写 个人成长 课堂学案
原文好句赏析
1.我环顾四周，终于看到了大卫，他独自站在栅栏边。
I looked around and finally _______ David, who was standing by himself off to the side
by a fence.
2.我迅速在人群中寻找学校的教练，问他发生了什么事。“我担心其他学校的孩子会嘲笑
他，”他局促不安地解释道。
I quickly _____ the crowd for the school’s coach and asked him what had happened.
“I was afraid that kids from other schools would laugh at him,” he explained ______.
3.我按捺住懊恼。
I ______ my frustration.
4.在确定了大卫想跑就跑之后，我转过身来，发现他朝我走来，他的小身体一边向前摆动，
一边左右摇晃。
After making sure that David could run if he wanted, I turned to find him _______
towards me, his small body _____ from side to side as he ______ his feet forward.
续写部分
细节描写满分句
动作细节描写
1.他低下头，扭动着双手。
He ______________ and wriggled his hands. (两连动词，肢体动作）
2.大卫很受鼓励，他深吸了一口气，鼓起勇气，“我会试一试的。”
①David was inspired, so he _______________________, “I will give it a try”. (两连动词+对话）
②___________, _______________________________,“I will give it a try”. (形容词作状
语+两连动词+对话）
续写第二段 （侧重描写肢体动作并利用场景描写烘托比赛气氛）
3.赛跑的信号一响，除了大卫之外，赛跑者们像子弹一样飞奔而去。
As the signal to run ignited, ___________________________, except David. （明喻）
4.其他学校的观众的目光落在了大卫身上。
________________________________________________________________. （无灵主语
句）
5.他努力往前跑，小小的身子随着奔跑的节奏摇晃着。
①He struggled to run forward, and his small body ___________________________. (肢
体动作，并列句）
②He struggled to run forward, ____________________________________________.
（with复合结构）
6.同学们纷纷出现在赛道上，热情地为他加油, “加油！你能做到！ ”
①Classmates all appeared on the racing track, and__________________________ ，
“Come on! You can make it! ” （双连动作+副词，对话描写）
②Classmates all appeared on the racing track, _______________________________，
“Come on! You can make it! ” （分词短语作状语）
7.最后，尽管大卫是最后一个，但他在热烈的欢呼和掌声中，胜利地举起双臂冲过终点线。
①Finally, though he was the last one, David _______________________________. (肢体
动作+场景描写）
②Finally, ____________________, David ______________________________________.（省略句）
满分结尾句
8.人们被他的毅力深深打动，这是体育精神中最宝贵的东西。
People ___________ and it was the dearest thing in sportsmanship.
9.大卫露出他一贯的露齿笑容说：“谢谢你，你让我意识到，如果为我的目标而努力，我
总会成为赢家。”
David cast __________ and said," Thank you, you made me realize I'd always come out
a winner if I wanted something badly enough to work for it."
一、动作细节描写（简单句或利用/三连动词/非谓语动词构建动作链），注意肢体动作
描写
1.I ____________ _________ (按时醒来), ate breakfast and did some last minute studying for
my first hour math test.
2.At one stop, Fat Ryan ______________ (匆忙上车). He _________________ (被某人的脚
绊了一下)accidentally and THUMP! He ____________（倒下）onto the floor.
3.Every one of us on the bus looked on and ____________ (狂笑). Ryan
_____________________（挣扎着站起来）, dusted the jacket and made his way to an empty
seat.
4.I ________________（抬腿）for one last toe touch. RIIPPP!
5.______________________（我呆住了）. I had no idea what to do but stand still.
二、情感/神态细节描写（表现人物的尴尬或难过）
1.He tried to laugh with us, but ______________________________________(他窘得满脸通
红).
2.Trying to cover myself with my hands, I tried to laugh too, but I felt
_____________________________________ (泪水开始涌出).
3.He ______________________( 看 到 我 在 看 ). I smiled at him quickly and
_______________________(把目光移开).续写部分的细节描写（与原文语言特点一致）
一、动作细节描写（简单句或利用/三连动词/非谓语动词构建动作链），注意肢体动作
描写
1.他从后面走近我，迅速脱下夹克递给我，示意我把撕破的牛仔裤遮住。
He approached me from behind,____________________________ and offered it to me,
___________________________________________________________. (分词作状语)
2.我谢过他，把夹克还给了他，并告诉他啦啦舞很精彩。
I thanked him, _________________________________________________. （分词做状语）
3 我鼓起勇气，真诚地向他道歉，并再次感谢他帮助我走出了绝境。
① I gathered my courage,_______________ to him for my misconduct on the bus and ______
______________________________________________________. （动词+副词，三连动词）
②_____________________________________________________________________________
_________________________. （分词做状语）
4. 瑞安咧开嘴笑着，拍了拍我的肩膀，让我忘了这事，他开玩笑说他经常摔倒。
①Ryan,___________________________________, told me to forget about that, and joked he
felt like that a lot. （神态描写+肢体动作+语言描写）
②Ryan, _____________________________________ and told me to forget about that,
________________________________________. (分词做状语)
二、情感/神态细节描写（表现人物的尴尬或感激）
1. 我低下头，尴尬得脸都红了。
①I lowered my head, and________________________________. (动作+神态描写)
②I lowered my head, ____________________________. (独立主格结构作状语)
2. 我强忍泪水，想向他表达我的感激之情，但我没有勇气。
① I struggled against my tears, and I did want to express my gratitude to him
bu__________________. （无灵主语句）
②_______________________________________________________. （分词做状语）
