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读后续写奇遇篇+肢体动作2 课堂学案
精读原文然后补全以下细节描写的好句式,并背诵
一、动作细节描写(构建动作链,双连动词或利用非谓语动词)
1. 查理走进那家商店,把那枚湿漉漉的五十便士硬币放到柜台上。
Charlie entered the shop and _______ the damp fifty pence on the counter.
2. 查理抓住巧克力三两下撕去包装纸,狠狠咬了一大口。然后又是一口……再一口……啊,往嘴里赛
进大块大块香甜而硬实的东西那滋味真是美极了!
Charlie ________ it and quickly _________ the wrapper and bite_____________. Then he took
another... and another... and oh, the joy of being able to cram large pieces of something sweet
and solid into one’s mouth!
3.查理点点头,他的嘴里塞满了巧克力。
Charlie _________ , his mouth bulging with chocolate.
4.查理仍热狼吞虎咽地吃着那块巧克力。他根本停不下来。不到半分钟,整块巧克力就进了肚。
Charlie ______________. He couldn’t stop. And in less than half a minute, the whole thing
____________ down his throat.
5.他伸手去取找头,却又停住了。他眼睛的高度刚好超过柜台,他睁大眼睛看着放在柜台上的银币。
He ____________ to take the change. Then he paused. His eyes were just above the level of the
counter. They were ___________the silver coins lying there.
6.查理把它拿起来,撕开包糖纸……忽然之间……从包糖纸里……闪出一道耀眼的金光。
Charlie _________________ the wrapper...and suddenly...from underneath the wrapper.. .there
came a brilliant flash of gold.
7.查理的心停止了跳动。
___________________________.
二、胖店主的动作描写
1.”当然罗!“肥胖的店老板说,又从身后架子上拿出了一块高级惠普尔奶油巧克力软糖,把它放
在柜台上。
“Why not?” the fat shopkeeper said, ________ him again and taking another Whipple-
Scrumptious Fudgemallow Delight from the shelf.
2.店老板腾空跳了几乎一尺高,大叫着,“是一张金奖券!”
“It’s a Golden Ticket!” screamed the shopkeeper, __________________.
三、人群活动场景描写
不到几秒钟,二十几个人就围住了查理, 还有更多的人从街上挤进来。
In a few seconds, there was a crowd of about twenty people _________________ Charlie, and
many more ________________________________.
四、人物外貌描写
柜台后的男人十分肥壮。他脖子上面的肥肉肥都堆在了领口,就象套了个橡皮圈。
The man behind the counter looked fat. The fat around his neck bulged out all around the top of his
collar __________________.
续写部分的细节描写(与原文语言特点一致)
一、查理的动作、情感细节描写
1.查理站在那里一动不动地,手指摸着那张金奖券。① Charlie was fixed to the ground,and fingers stroked the golden ticket. (腿部+手部
动作)
② Charlie was fixed to the ground,________________________________. (独立
主格结构)
2.想到他贫困的家庭使他想卖掉票换钱。
______________________________________urged him to sell the ticket for money.
(无灵主语句)
3.他有一种奇怪的飘飘然的感觉,好像自己是个气球在空中飘来飘去。
There was a strange floating feeling coming over him as though
_________________________________________. (明喻)
4.他点点头,像鹿一样飞奔回家,急切地想分享这个令人难以置信的奇妙的消息。
①He nodded and darted home like a deer, and he was eager to share the incredibly
miraculous news. (双连动词)
②_____________________________________________________________________
____________________________________________________________________( 形
容词短语做状语)
二、胖店老板的动作、语言细节描写
1.他领着查理走到街上,看着查理的眼睛,低声说:“听着,孩子。不要卖掉它。没有什么
比快乐更珍贵。”
①He ______ Charlie out to the street, looked into Charlie’s eyes, and ________
,“Listen, kid. Don’t sell it. _______________. ” (三连动词)
② ________________, he looked into Charlie’s eyes, _________________,“Listen,
kid. Don’t sell it. ______________________________. ” (非谓语做哦状语)
2.“别打扰这孩子,好不好!”让让路!让他出去!”他把查理领到门口时,低声对他说:“别让任
何人得到它! 赶快拿着它直接回家吧!”
"Leave the kid alone , will you! Make way there! Let him out!” And to Charlie, as he led
him to the door, he _______ ,"Don't let anybody have it! Take it straight home quickly!”
人群活动场景描写
1.兴奋的人们伸出胳膊去抢他的票或拍他的肩膀,“卖给我吧!”我会给你很多钱!”
①Excited people reached/held out their arms to grab the ticket or pat on his shoulder,
“Sell it to me! I will give you a lot!” (手臂动作描写+语言描写)
②_____________________________________________________________________
________, “Sell it to me! I will give you a lot!” (被动句)
2.人群在他周围推着、喊着,他听见心在嗓子眼砰砰跳着。
①The crowd pushed and shouted around him, and he could hear his heart
thumping away loudly somewhere in his throat. (肢体动作+无灵主语句)
②______________________________________, he could hear his heart thumping
away loudly somewhere in his throat. (独立主格结构)
三、满分结尾句
① 呼应标题式+场景描写式
那天晚上,查理紧紧地抓着票,进入了梦乡。香甜的巧克力奇迹般从机器里流出,工厂里满是甜甜的味道。
That night, ______________________, Charlie slipped into a dream, where the river of
sweet chocolate streamed out of machines like a miracle,
____________________________. (非谓语做状语+定语从句+独立主格)
② 感悟升华式
晚上,查理躺在床上,脸上带着甜蜜的微笑。我们永远不知道生命中下一块巧克力的味道,但
充满期待的巧克力总是最美味。
At night, Charlie laid on the bed with a sweet smile. Never would we know the taste
of next chocolate in our life, but
_________________________________________________________.
答案
精读原文然后补全以下细节描写的好句式,并背诵
一、动作细节描写(构建动作链,双连动词或利用非谓语动词)
1. laid 2. grabbed;tore off ;took an enormous bite 3.nodded
4. went on wolfing the chocolate; had disappeared
5.reached out a hand; staring at 6.picked it up and tore off7.Charlie’s heart stood still
二、胖店主的动作描写
1.reaching behind 2. leaping about a foot in the air
三、
gathering around ;were pushing their way in from the street
四、人物外貌描写
like a rubber ring
一、查理的动作、情感细节描写
1. fingers stroking the golden ticket
2.The thought of his needy family 3. he were floating up in the air like a balloon
4.He nodded and darted home like a deer, eager to share the incredibly miraculous
news.
二、胖店老板的动作、语言细节描写
1.① led; whispered; Nothing is more precious than joy.
②Leading Charlie out to the street; whispering;Nothing is more precious than joy.
”
2.whispered
三、人群活动场景描写
1.Arms of excited people were reached/held out to grab the ticket or pat on his shoulder
2.The crowd pushing and shouting around him
三、满分结尾句
① holding the ticket tightly;the sweet smell filling the big factory
② the chocolate full of expectation always tastes best