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第 2 讲 微观剖析 突破读后续写
技法一 如何利用文本特征 读出有效信息
读后续写基本以记叙文为主，记叙文是以记人、叙事、写景、状物为主，以写人物的经
历和事物发展变化为主要内容的一种文体形式。要写好续写文章，理解文本是第一步。对于
记叙文阅读，要注意以下几个方面。
1．抓住记叙文的六要素
即人物、时间、地点、事件的起因、经过和结果，读后续写所提供的文本除了结果这一要素
之外，把其余五个要素叙述得清清楚楚。因此阅读文本时要紧扣这五个要素。
2．掌握记叙文的三大线索
即时间线、情节线和感情线。阅读文本时要抓住这三条主线。必要时可以列出这些线索，以
更好地理解文章，为续写做好准备。只有对原文的脉络线索和段落结构有正确的和深刻的理
解，续写的内容才能和原文骨肉相连，契合紧密。
3．把握文章主旨及故事的发展方向
这一点至关重要。只有把握了文章的主旨意图，才能很好地完成续写。确保续写的内容和原
文要有逻辑上的一致性，并能回应原文的信息。
4．分析文章的用词特点和行文风格
以使续写的内容在语言色彩和行文风格上与所给文章保持一致。
(2022·新高考全国Ⅰ)
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
It was the day of the big cross-country run.Students from seven different primary schools in
and around the small town were warming up and walking the route(路线) through thick evergreen
forest.
I looked around and finally spotted David，who was standing by himself off to the side by a
fence.He was small for ten years old.His usual big toothy smile was absent today.I walked over and
asked him why he wasn’t with the other children.He hesitated and then said he had decided not to
run.
What was wrong? He had worked so hard for this event!
I quickly searched the crowd for the school’s coach and asked him what had happened.“I
was afraid that kids from other schools would laugh at him，” he explained uncomfortably.“I
gave him the choice to run or not，and let him decide.”
I bit back my frustration(懊恼)．I knew the coach meant well—he thought he was doing the
right thing.After making sure that David could run if he wanted，I turned to find him coming
towards me，his small body rocking from side to side as he swung his feet forward.David had a brain disease which prevented him from walking or running like other children，
but at school his classmates thought of him as a regular kid.He always participated to the best of his
ability in whatever they were doing.That was why none of the children thought it unusual that
David had decided to join the cross-country team.It just took him longer—that’s all.David had not
missed a single practice，and although he always finished his run long after the other children，he
did always finish.As a special education teacher at the school，I was familiar with the challenges
David faced and was proud of his strong determination.
注意：续写词数应为150左右。
We sat down next to each other，but David wouldn’t look at me.
I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners.
信息整合
1．抓住文本五要素
人物：David，I (a special education teacher)，the coach
时间：on the day of the big cross-country run
地点：at the starting line
起因：David had a brain disease and he was worried that students from other schools might laugh
at him.
经过：Though David practiced hard，he decided not to take part in the cross-country run.
2．理清文章三大线索
时间线：the day of the big cross-country run→finally→then→after making sure that David could
run if he wanted
情节线：选手们在起跑线前热身→David一个人站在远离跑道的篱笆前→我询问David和教
练为什么放弃比赛→我非常了解David面对的挑战并为他的坚强感到自豪。
感情线：happy→confused→frustrated→determined
3．把握文章主旨，推测故事发展方向
本文的主题语境属于“人与自我”。文章讲述了学校正在举办越野赛，参赛选手是来自七所
小学的学生。其中一名学生David患有脑部疾病，走路和跑步和其他学生不太一样。同学校
的学生们和他相处很和谐，并不觉得他有什么不一样的。因此，David很自然地报名参加了
比赛。但是，David害怕来自其他学校的学生嘲笑他，在比赛开始之前犹豫了。主人公作为
学校的特殊教育老师，清楚地知道David面对的挑战。续写部分应该是鼓励David参加比赛，
以及参赛的过程和比赛的最后结果。
4．分析用词特点和行文风格
文章侧重动作描写，运用了大量的动词(短语)，如warming up，looked around，spotted，
walked over，hesitated，bit back，faced等，句式长短结合，并有一些情感类心理描写与情
节叙述，渲染了赛场既兴奋又紧张的气氛；生动形象地描述了 David平时所做的努力，画面感强。续写时要侧重动作与心理描写。
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We sat down next to each other，but David wouldn’t
look at me.With silence hanging heavily in the air，he ducked
down his head.It seemed that he wanted to join the run from the ①语言风格与原文一致，侧重
bottom of his heart.So I patted him on the shoulder and 动作和心理描写；
said，“You want to run，right？” Upset and hesitant，he ②丰富的动作类动词(短语)：
nodded slowly.To encourage him，I whispered to him that he ducked down，patted，
would definitely do a good job since he had practiced so nodded，whispered to，wiped
hard.Hearing these words，he raised his head，with his eyes out，gazed at，crossed 等；
wet.I gave him a big thumb-up，which made him gather his ③丰富的形容词与副词：
courage and decided to run.He wiped out his tears and stood heavily，upset，hesitant，
up，straightening his small body and moving through the slowly，definitely，worried，
crowds. determined，finally等；
I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the ④高级句式：With silence
other runners.When he set his foot on the line，I was worried hanging heavily in the air是
that other children would laugh at him，since so many kids with复合结构作状语；
gazed at him with curious eyes.However，so determined was Hearing these words是现在分
David that he ignored everything around him，only watching 词短语作时间状语；so
forward.When the whistle rang，he tried his best to run as fast determined was David that...为
as possible.Though the cross-country run was tough，he made 倒装结构；It was his brave
it.To our surprise，when he crossed the finishing line，the heart and strong faith that...为强
crowds burst into applause.David gave me a bear hug， 调句结构。
revealing his usual toothy smile.It was his brave heart and
strong faith that could make something unusual happen finally.
(2021·新高考全国Ⅰ)
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
A MOTHER’S DAY SURPRISE
The twins were filled with excitement as they thought of the surprise they were planning for
Mother’s Day.How pleased and proud Mother would be when they brought her breakfast in
bed.They planned to make French toast and chicken porridge.They had watched their mother in the
kitchen.There was nothing to it.Jenna and Jeff knew exactly what to do.
The big day came at last.The alarm rang at 6 a．m.The pair went down the stairs quietly to the
kitchen.They decided to boil the porridge first.They put some rice into a pot of water and left it to
boil while they made the French toast.Jeff broke two eggs into a plate and added in somemilk.Jenna found the bread and put two slices into the egg mixture.Next，Jeff turned on the second
stove burner to heat up the frying pan.Everything was going smoothly until Jeff started frying the
bread.The pan was too hot and the bread turned black within seconds.Jenna threw the burnt piece
into the sink and put in the other slice of bread.This time，she turned down the fire so it cooked
nicely.
Then Jeff noticed steam shooting out of the pot and the lid starting to shake.The next minute，
the porridge boiled over and put out the fire.Jenna panicked.Thankfully，Jeff stayed calm and
turned off the gas quickly.But the stove was a mess now.Jenna told Jeff to clean it up so they could
continue to cook the rest of the porridge.But Jeff’s hand touched the hot burner and he gave a cry
of pain.Jenna made him put his hand in cold water.Then she caught the smell of burning.Oh dear!
The piece of bread in the pan had turned black as well.
注意：续写词数应为150左右。
As the twins looked around them in disappointment，their father appeared.
The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.
信息整合
1．抓住文本五要素
人物：
时间：
地点：
起因：
经过：
2．理清文章三大线索
时间线：before Mother’s Day→ →first→ →then→
情节线：母亲节前双胞胎姐弟计划给妈妈做顿早饭当做母亲节的礼物 →
→一开始做汤的时候还很顺利→
→这时汤溢出来了，把炉火浇灭了→ →弟弟不小心手碰
到了锅，烫着了→
感情线：excited→ →calm→
3．把握文章主旨，推测故事发展方向
本文的主题语境属于“人与自我”。文章讲述了 。
4．分析用词特点和行文风格
文 章 侧 重 动 作 描 写 ， 运 用 了 大 量 的 动 词 ( 短 语 ) ， 如
等，句式长短结合，生动形象地描述了两人做饭的过程，画面感强。并有一些情感类心理描
写与情节叙述，渲染了既快乐又紧张的气氛。续写时要侧重动作与心理描写。范文赏读
As the twins looked around them in disappointment，their
father appeared.Seeing the mess in the kitchen，he immediately ①语言风格与原文一致，侧
understood what had happened，but he wasn’t upset.Instead， 重 描写；
he applied some medicine to Jeff’s hand，and then set out to ②丰富的动作类动词(短
help them clean up the mess，throwing away the burnt 语)：
toast.Next，they began to make breakfast，and by now the twins _____________________
looked cheerful.Before long，the porridge was ready.Their father 等；
instructed them to fry the rest of the bread.Soon，the breakfast ③丰富的形容词与副词：
was ready，too. ____________________等；
The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their ④高级句式：Seeing the mess
mother up.Opening her eyes，she couldn’t believe what she in the kitchen是 作
had seen.Before she could ask any question，their father turned 时间状语；she couldn’t
up and told his wife about how the twins had made preparations believe what she had seen是
to give her the surprise breakfast，and what trouble they had 含有 的复合句；
gone through when making the porridge and toast.Disbelief gave ⑤ 修辞手法：Disbelief
way to excitement and pride.Hugging them in her arms，she gave way to excitement and
said，“Thank you，children.It’s such an unforgettable pride.
Mother’s Day for me.”
技法二 如何利用所给信息 推测后续情节
做读后续写时，对所给文本后面的故事情节及故事结尾的推断是写好读后续写的前提。
高考所给的读后续写形式是半开放性的，这种形式既可以让考生充分发挥想象力，又能让考
生有章可循。考生在推测后续情节时一般根据两个方面：第一是所给文章的情节，特别是伏
笔之处；第二是所给每段的首句。
1．根据文章的情节和伏笔进行预测。读后续写所给文章的情节一般较为曲折，因此要把握
故事情节，尤其注意所给文章结尾处的伏笔，能帮助我们预测续写第一段的内容。
2．利用所给每段的首句进行预测。所给第一段的首句既能承接上文，也是本段的起始句，
通过对与这句话衔接内容的预测，可知第一段要写的内容是什么。由第二段的首句既可以推
测第一段的结尾内容，还可以预测第二段的内容，尤其注意结尾一定是圆满的、皆大欢喜的
内容或者正能量的结局。
(2022·浙江1月改编)
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
When Dr.Henderson was assigning(指定) project mates for his psychology class，I secretly
hoped that he would pair me with my best friend or at least a classmate I could have some funwith.Above all，I hoped he wouldn’t assign me to work with the fiercely competitive and
extremely serious fellow who always wore dark clothes and apparently had a personality to
match.As fate(命运) would have it，Dr.Henderson very deliberately matched everyone in class and
announced that I would be working with the one person in class I wanted to avoid.
I went up to my new teammate and introduced myself.He looked at me as though I weren’t
there.I felt he treated me as though I would hold him back and probably make him fail to get an A
in the course.He wasn’t mean or abusive; he just gave me the impression that he could do
whatever project we dreamed up better if he did it alone.
Needless to say，I didn’t look forward to an entire term of being brushed off，but I tried to
make the best of it and didn’t say anything for fear that I would make things worse.
The project required each team to develop a hypothesis(假说)，set up an experiment to test
the hypothesis，do the statistical analysis and present the findings.Whatever grade the team
received would be shared by both students.
When my teammate and I met to discuss our project，I was uneasy.Here was this challenging
student who had a reputation for single-mindedness and good grades—the exact opposite of me.I
actually wanted to drop the class at one point，but stopped short because I didn’t want to give
him the satisfaction of my chickening out.I decided to stick to it no matter what.
After long discussions we somehow agreed to do a study on the psychological well-being of
teenagers.I wasn’t sure what it meant exactly，but at least we had a topic.
注意：续写词数应为150左右。
We started to meet regularly to draw up our plans.
One day I got word that he was admitted to hospital for a serious disease.
读文预测
1．根据文章情节找伏笔，预测续写内容
本文以故事发展为线索，讲述了作者的心理学老师为学生安排了研究项目，并指定了合作伙
伴，最后的项目得分两人平分。作者希望老师给自己指派一位关系好的同学合作，但恰恰相
反，老师给作者安排了他最不愿意与其合作的那个人一组。两个人没有共同语言，对方很强
势。但是不管怎样，两人最终确定了研究的项目和议题。
在所给的文本信息里，已经为下文续写内容埋下了伏笔，就是文章的最后一段“After long
discussions we somehow agreed to do a study on the psychological well-being of teenagers.I
wasn’t sure what it meant exactly，but at least we had a topic.”由此可以推测续写内容应该是
两个人如何进行项目研究以及最后的结果。
2．根据所给首句，大胆设问，进行预测
由第一段首句内容“我们开始定期见面，制定我们的(研究项目)计划。”可知，这一段可以
写“我们”是如何制定计划的，又是如何商量的，两人合作是否愉快，项目推进是否顺利。我们可以大胆设问：
(1)Did we share our ideas with each other?
(2)Would that boy like to accept my opinions?
(3)What should I do when he ignored my advice?
(4)How would I feel when he ignored my advice?
根据这四个问题，第一段就有内容可写了。
由第二段首句内容“一天我得到消息说他得了重病住进了医院。”可知，这一段可以写
“我”去医院看望他，他很感动，因此愿意与“我”合作并听取“我”的意见，“我们”的
项目进展很顺利，如期完成并取得了满意的结果。我们可以大胆设问：
(1)How would I feel when I got the news that he was admitted to hospital for a serious disease?
(2)Did I go to the hospital to see him?
(3)How would he feel when he saw me in his ward?
(4)How did we do the project from then on?
(5)Was the project completed on time?
(6)Was the teacher satisfied with our project?
(7)What did we learn from the project?
这样，根据设问，整理答案，适当扩充，再运用恰当的动作描写、心理描写和一些高级句式、
高级表达，用上适当的过渡词语，就组成一篇完整的文章了。
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We started to meet regularly to draw up our plans.Though I wanted to share my ideas with him
fully，I failed to do so for fear that I would hold him back.I just kept nodding when he asked me
whether it’s OK to do this way or that way.I thought it was impossible to persuade him into
accepting my views，so I didn’t want to waste our time to discuss.I started to wait to leave
immediately we arrived at the place，and so did he.I just hoped that the presentation day could
come earlier.
One day I got word that he was admitted to hospital for a serious disease.I felt so sorry to hear
that and I thought I should visit him in any case.He was a little surprised to see me when I stepped
into his ward with some flowers and fruits.I offered to do the rest work of our project and he invited
me to share my ideas to perfect it.We began to work as a fine team and finally finished our project
on time.Our hard work paid off and Dr.Henderson was very satisfied with our wonderful
findings.From this project，we also learned the significance of teammates.Just as the saying
goes，one person can go far，but a group of persons can travel farther.
(2022·河北张家口一模)
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“Be sure to hang the decorations high，” said Polly，my stepmom.“Jake might mistake
the colorful glass balls for his toys and try to bite them.” Jake was new to our family thatChristmas.He was a beautiful brown-and-white dog.And，of course，he was loaded with the
curiosity that made everything a toy.
Two weeks before Christmas，we brought out the boxes of decorations，many of which had
been in Polly’s family for ages.Among them was a special box that held an entire gingerbread
family(姜饼人)．They were real cookies，hung with red ribbons(丝带) and made many years
earlier.
Every now and then，I or one of my little sisters—Ruth and Sue—would pretend we were
going to eat one，knowing that Polly would say，“You’ll break a tooth! They’re so old that
they’re rock-hard.” We didn’t really want to eat them，but we enjoyed making fun of Polly.
Since we didn’t know how Jake would react to the decorations or the Christmas tree，we
were careful to put the decorations up high.Jake sniffed(嗅) the tree a lot.Those first couple of
days，Polly caught him starting to lift a leg on the tree twice.But he learned quickly and settled for
sniffing from a distance.
The weekend before Christmas ， Dad and Polly took us to watch the new holiday
movie.Excited，we jumped into the car with bags of home-made popcorn，and off we went for a
great evening.
A few hours later，we returned home，only to find...a terrible mess.It wasn’t the Christmas
tree.In fact，we weren’t sure what it was.We stood just inside the door staring at the mess.As it
turned out，it was Jake’s bed，which he’d destroyed.Left alone for the first time，he must
have gotten bored，attacked it and left it for dead.We didn’t know that the bed was not the only
victim.
注意：续写词数应为150左右。
The next morning，we girls were playing in the living room when Ruth let out a sudden cry.
“It wasn’t me，” I said，in case anybody thought I’d had a midnight snack of rock-
hard decorations.
读文预测
1．根据文章情节找伏笔，预测续写内容
本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者家在圣诞节期间的有趣故事。刚来到家里的小狗 Jake
对一切都充满好奇。尽管在装饰圣诞树的时候，一家人把装饰品挂得很高，以防被 Jake破
坏，但是在一家人外出的时候，小狗自己在家还是搞了破坏。表面上只是把他自己的床铺弄
乱了，但是文章最后一段最后一句话“We didn’t know that the bed was not the only victim.”
为下文内容埋下了伏笔：小狗破坏的不仅仅是他的床，还有其他的东西。上文提及了妈妈带
来的作为装饰的姜饼饼干，小狗多次从远处嗅闻它，这也为后面的续写埋下了伏笔。所以我们可以预测续写内容应该为：
2．根据所给首句，大胆设问，进行预测
由第一段首句内容“第二天早上，我们几个女孩在客厅里玩耍，Ruth突然叫了一声。”可
知，第一段可描写Jake造成的其他破坏，特别是毁掉了姜饼装饰品。可以进行如下设问：
(1)
(2)
(3)
由第二段首句内容“‘不是我，’我说，以防有人以为我吃了一些坚硬的装饰品。”可知，
第二段可描写作者和姐妹都否认是自己做的这些事情，最后真相大白，这些都是 Jake毁掉
的。可以进行如下设问：
(4)
(5)
(6)
(7)
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The next morning，we girls were playing in the living room when Ruth let out a sudden
cry.“Hey，who broke Gingerbread Baby？” Ruth asked.That brought Polly to the living room
fast.“Where? Show me！” Ruth pointed at the former baby cookie，which was now just a
head，still tied to the tree by its red ribbon.“Here’s another broken one，” said Sue.It’s
Gingerbread Grandpa.Or it was.Now it’s just his head and hat.That caused some inspection，and
soon it was clear that all the gingerbread men were now just gingerbread heads.
“It wasn’t me，” I said，in case anybody thought I’d had a midnight snack of rock-
hard decorations.Quickly，my sisters made denials of their own.Then we girls and Polly all looked
at Jake.Until that moment，Jake had been sitting by Dad，looking happy as ever.Suddenly，his
posture changed.Guilt spread over his face.With his head bowed a little，he tried not to meet
Polly’s eyes，but it was clear what had happened.It was as if he were wearing a sign that
said，“I killed an entire gingerbread family.”
技法三 如何打造续写的龙头和凤尾
高分开头5招
如何写好读后续写，在高考中博取阅卷老师的眼球，获得梦寐以求的高分？如何让学生
的作品在高考中脱颖而出？这是很多老师和学生一直不懈努力的课题。一个好的故事开头就
好比是一个香味十足的诱饵，诱使读者上钩并且饶有趣味地读完。 而一个拙劣的故事开头
一定会让读者大倒胃口，恹恹欲睡。“Well begun is half done！”可见写一个好的故事开头
是多么的重要。下面教你五招高分开头的方式。招式1 巧用形容词/副词(短语)
①Happily and excitedly，they went to the supermarket for what they needed.
②Worn out，David reached the finishing line and all the students cheered up for him.
(2022·新高考全国Ⅰ)
③Curious to know what was inside，he tiptoed into the dark cave.
④A few minutes later，the bear headed back to our camp.The bear roared at us，our frightened
mouths wide open.(2020·浙江7月)
招式2 巧用分词(短语)
①Seeing the mess in the kitchen，he immediately understood what had happened，but he
wasn’t upset.(2021·新高考全国Ⅰ)
②With everything ready，Bernard started out on his new business.Feeling shy，Bernard didn’t
dare to peddle(叫卖) his popcorn.(2020·新高考全国Ⅰ)
③Thinking it was impossible to persuade him into accepting my views，I didn’t want to waste
our time to discuss.(2022·浙江1月)
④Sitting on the roadside with his head down，David kept silent.(2022·新高考全国Ⅰ)
⑤Hearing my words，David beamed a big smile，stood up and moved towards the starting line.
(2022·新高考全国Ⅰ)
⑥Looking at his determined face，I was touched by his courage.(2022·新高考全国Ⅰ)
招式3 巧用高级句式
①I was stuck for five or six minutes though it felt much longer.My brother came up with an idea
that he could cut the pumpkin with a knife.(同位语从句)(2021·浙江1月)
②When Mrs Meredith heard of John’s idea，she thought it was a good one，too.So they took
immediate action as John had proposed.(时间状语从句)(2020·新高考全国Ⅰ)
③At the very moment，the helicopter arrived.It hovered over the camp，causing strong wind
that blew the bear unsteady on his feet.(非谓语动词＋定语从句) (2020·浙江7月)
④Ignore what the players from other teams would say and I believe you could make it.(宾语从
句)(2022·新高考全国Ⅰ)
⑤I gave him a big thumb-up，which made him gather his courage and decided to run.(非限制
性定语从句)(2022·新高考全国Ⅰ)
招式4 巧用倒装结构
①Dad opened the box and a sweet little dog appeared.Hardly had the little dog come out when
Poppy came over to lick it as if it were a long-lost friend.(2020·浙江1月)
②However，so determined was David that he ignored everything around him，only watching
forward.(2022·新高考全国Ⅰ)
③Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse.I got a fright，so did my horse.(2018·浙江6月)
招式5 巧用强调句结构
①That video was posted the day before Halloween.It was my brother who did that for
amusement.(2021·浙江1月)
②A few minutes later，the bear came back.It was with great strength that the bear shook and
tore the fence.(2020·浙江7月)
③It was his brave heart and strong faith that could make something unusual happen finally.
(2022·新高考全国Ⅰ)
漂亮结尾5法
续写不能虎头蛇尾，结尾也要用心设计。由于文章的故事性、情节性强，所以续写的结
尾可以是自然的升华议论，亦可以是其他方式结尾。常见的结尾方式有五种，即画面定格、
对话收尾、主题升华、结尾留白和首尾呼应。
1．画面定格法
(1)人物动作的画面定格
①Slowly，almost reluctantly，she placed her arm with apparently unaccustomed affection around
her mother’s shoulders and gently guided her back into the crowd.慢慢地，几乎是不情愿地，
她的胳膊搂住母亲的肩膀，明显带着生疏，轻轻地引导她回到人群中。
②Never had Dora received such a gift.Speechless and happy，she held her son tightly into her
arms，with tears welling up in her eyes.
朵拉从来没有收到过这样的礼物。她高兴得说不出话来，把儿子紧紧地抱在怀里，泪水夺眶
而出。
③Then the butterfly would stay together with her lover forever.On the top of the mountain，she
seemed to enjoy the sunrise and the sunset happily with them.
然后蝴蝶就会和她的爱人永远待在一起。在山顶上，她似乎和他们一起愉快地享受着日出和
日落。
(2)特殊寓意的写景画面
①The sky was a billion pure eyes of light and the grass green underfoot，it was as if night and day
had become one beautiful moment.Dawn had come.
天空像是十亿只纯净的眼睛拼接在一起，脚下是青草，仿佛黑夜和白昼已成为一个美丽的时
刻。黎明已经来临。(黎明到来的画面)
②The crystal and cerulean water was gentle as I waded through it，the sunset like orange paint on
a blue canvas.
当我涉水而过的时候，清澈湛蓝的海水变得温柔起来，日落就像蓝色画布上的橙色颜料。
(日落时的美好画面)
③The moon under siege by stars seemed to lighten the night，bringing forth stars that shone and
hung in the blackness.The never ending blackness consumed everything.
被群星围困的月亮似乎照亮了黑夜，带来了在黑暗中闪耀和悬挂着的群星。无尽的黑暗吞噬了一切。(描写夜空的画面)
④Looking up，I saw the sun shine brighter than I ever knew before.
抬头一看，我看到太阳比我以前所知道的还要明亮。(特殊寓意)
⑤A dense earthly sweet smell rises from the ground，enveloping everything within its soft
embrace.
一股浓郁的泥土般的芬芳从地上升起，把一切都包裹在它柔软的怀抱里。(雨后清新的画面)
2．对话收尾法
(1)When asked how the reunion with his father will change his life，Chester said，“I got family
everywhere，so it might lead to many more trips now.”
当被问及与父亲团聚将如何改变他的生活时，切斯特说：“我的家人无处不在，所以现在可
能会引出更多的旅行。”
(2)“Even now，I can hardly believe this dog traveled such a long distance to find us，” said
Nina，“I would never give this kind of friend away again.I never grow tired of repeating this—
animals are the most devoted and loving creatures.They need our love and care.”
“即使是现在，我也简直不敢相信这只狗走了这么远的距离寻找我们，”尼娜说，“我再也
不会放弃这种朋友了。我从来没有厌倦过重复这句话——动物是最忠诚和最可爱的生物。他
们需要我们的爱和关心。”
(3)They hung all the things back to the wall.Jack asked Paisley，“Are you really willing to lead a
tough life with me？” She patted away the ashes on hands and looked at the walls with loads of
stuff on them satisfactorily，saying，“Yes! For me，it is not a suffering to live.”他们把所有的
东西都挂在墙上。杰克问佩斯利：“你真的愿意和我一起过艰难的生活吗？”她拍了拍手上
的灰，满意地看着挂满东西的墙，说：“是的！对我来说，这样的生活并不是一种痛苦。”
3．主题升华法
(1)Someday，when I am older and have children of my own，I hope I can be just as great a parent
as my mom.
有一天，当我长大了，有了自己的孩子，我希望我能成为和我妈妈一样伟大的母亲。(母爱
的深远影响)
(2)In my opinion，money can’t take the place of everything，such as your life，your time and
your happiness.
在我看来，金钱不能取代一切，比如你的生活、时间和幸福。(表达自己的价值观)
(3)As a proverb says，“Every coin has two sides.” Making full use of your strength is your
achievement.Please remember that in no case will you give up especially in trouble.
正如谚语所说，“事物都有两面性。”充分利用你的力量就是你的成就。请记住，无论如何
你都不要放弃，尤其是在困境中。(借用名言警句来升华主题)
4．结尾留白法
(1)“Would you be interested in joining me in a bite to eat？” I asked.“I’d love to，” she
replied，her eyes sparkling like diamonds.And，this was the beginning of the end to my months ofheartbreak following Betsy’s death.
“你有兴趣和我一起吃点东西吗？”我问道。“我很乐意去，”她回答，眼睛像钻石一样闪
闪发光。这是贝特西死后我几个月的心碎终于慢慢愈合的开始。(故事结尾留白，给予读者
想象空间)
(2)He unwrapped the white tissue paper，but to his surprise，there was no hard rock candy
inside.Instead，into his fingers fell a shiny white pearl worth thousands of dollars.
他打开包装纸，但令他惊讶的是，里面没有硬糖果。相反，一颗价值数千美元的闪闪发亮的
白色珍珠落进了他的手指里。
5．首尾呼应法
(1)开头：I had an interesting childhood.It was filled with surprises and amusements，all because
of my mother—loving，sweet，yet absent-minded and forgetful.One strange family trip we took
when I was eleven tells a lot about her.
结尾：Despite mom’s being absent-minded and forgetful，she was still a kind and nice mom.
(2)开头：It was summer，and my dad wanted to treat me to a vacation like never before.He
decided to take me on a trip to the Wild West.
结尾：Never had I had such a thrilling yet dangerous vacation before.The special trip to the Wild
West was deeply engraved in my mind.
(3)开头：A funny thing happened to Arthur when he was on the way to work one day.
结尾：What a funny day！Arthur couldn’t stop laughing whenever he looked back on this funny
experience.
完成下列句子
1．回答不出老师的问题，所有学生们都保持沉默。(形容词短语作状语)
，all the
students kept silent.
2．但当他向旁边看时，他立刻发现那根本不是一只狗，而是一只狼，很快就赶上了他。(时
间状语从句和副词)
But ，he saw that it wasn’t a dog at all，but a
wolf， catching up with him.
3．一团鲜红的乌云笼罩着这只动物，让马克松了一口气的是，它向后一退，摇着头。(分词
作状语)
A bright red cloud enveloped the animal ， and to Mac’ s relief ， it fell back ，
.
4．爸爸建议我们沿着这条河走，它可能会把我们带到农舍，似乎没有什么比这更好的了。
(宾语从句和定语从句)
Dad proposed andnothing seemed better than that.
5．Poppy如此兴奋，她想靠得更近，结果不小心撞倒了盒子。(倒装结构)
that she accidentally knocked over the box in an attempt to get closer.
6．果然，仅仅过了一会儿，这个毛球就从盒子里抬起头来，偷看它的新家和新朋友。(强调
句)
Sure enough， the
ball of fur lifted its head out of the box to peek at its new home and its new friend.
技法四 如何创造续写故事的高潮
故事中的高潮(climax)是指故事达到最紧张或扣人心弦的那一部分。高潮有时候是剧情
中的“危机点”。有时候，它只是达到了关键时刻或者转折点，发生了一些事情，或者主角
必须做出决定，从而导致一个结果或其他。 我们在分析叙事类故事或者小说故事的时候常
常用下面的图表来表示故事情节。
1．增加外部冲突
增加外部冲突是一种明显有效的可以达到故事高潮的方式。
(1)角色之间的冲突
典例 On the fourth or fifth night，we had trouble finding a hotel with a vacancy.After driving in
vain for some time，Mom suddenly got a great idea：Why didn’t we find a house with a likely-
looking backyard and ask if we could set up a tent there? David and I became nervous.
分析 开车找旅馆——徒劳无功——母亲建议在他人后院搭帐篷——David和“我”倍感紧
张，心有不悦(母子的观点不一)
(2)角色与环境之间的冲突
典例 Then Mac heard quick and loud breathing behind him...he saw instantly that it wasn’t adog at all，but a wolf，quickly catching up with him.Mac’s heart jumped...he fired the spray at
the wolf.A bright red cloud enveloped the animal，and to Mac’s relief，it fell back，shaking its
head.But a minute later...Then it...tearing open his tent bag.He fired at the wolf a second time，and
again，it fell back...
分析 Mac骑车独行——路遇恶狼——与之搏斗——险象环生。[人(角色)——狼(环境)大战]
(3)角色与时间的冲突
典例 The car abruptly stopped in front of him.“Get into the car.” Paul shouted at Mac.Mac
jumped off the bike and slid into the car without delay as the wolf was just two steps away and was
about to tear Mac into pieces.What a narrow escape!
分析 汽车突然停在面前——急喊上车——Mac上车避险——恶狼近在咫尺(此情此景，刻
不容缓)
2．放大内心冲突
放大内心冲突(文中角色的内心斗争)也有助于建立一个高度紧张和不确定的时刻。现在我们
再来看高考读后续写中的内心冲突是如何体现的。
典例 (原文见2016·浙江10月)But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again.Jane
was so tired，hungry，and extremely frightened.She thought to herself，“If only I had not
quarrelled with Tom.Where is Tom? He must have made the emergency call.What I need is enough
courage.If I continue my spirits tomorrow，I will be likely to guide the helicopter.” Lying beside
the stream，she fell asleep very soon.Suddenly，she heard the shouts of tigers，which made her
scared to death.After she held her breath for a few minutes，everything was quiet again.In the
terrible darkness，she slept again.
分析 夫妇争吵——妻子独自行走——荒野走散，夜色渐黑——独处森林——阴森恐怖——
后悔莫及(内心冲突的刻画)——内心独白(往昔对比＋虚拟语气的使用＋旁白描写是常见技巧
之一)
请根据所给微语境以及下面的汉语提示，按要求续写。
1．Having got off at the wrong stop，I found myself left alone at the foot of the mountain at a
noon of July.(增加外部冲突：角色与环境之间的冲突)
炎炎夏日当空，好像要烤焦我。那把金属椅子感觉像个热锅。站在它旁边，我能感觉到它正
在散发热量。我可以清楚地理解一条没有水的鱼会经历什么。更糟糕的是，下一班巴士直到
下午3点才来。我渴望得到水！
2．Looking around，I saw nothing but a small hut.(放大内心冲突)“也许我能在小屋里乘乘凉，”我心想。然后，另一个声音不停地告诉我：“别去那儿，姑
娘。如果那里住着一个坏人怎么办？”然而，我开始向它走去。向前走了两步，向后退了一
步。
3．The door opened before I knocked at it.There stood a middle-aged man with thick beard.(增加
外部冲突：角色之间的冲突)
他是我最不想见到的一类人。我向后跳了起来，准备逃跑。他似乎知道我在想什么，于是转
身说：“玛丽，去给姐姐取点水吧。”
4．I was about to board the plane when it occurred to me that I might have left my passport at the
reception desk when I checked out.(角色与时间的冲突)
酒店大约30英里远，在这个城市没有朋友或亲戚给我送护照来。更糟糕的是，飞机将在20
分钟内起飞。我非常焦虑，以至于我的大脑一时变得一片空白。
技法五 如何润色美化续写内容
“读后续写”作为一种高考英语题型，对语言综合运用能力的考查要求更高，要增添
“读后续写”的表达效果，不仅要有词汇量的积累，还要注意避免使用泛泛而谈的词汇，应
该多使用具体的词汇使表达更加准确到位。 只有准确、连续的动作和夸张丰富的表情及活
跃的心理活动的描写，才能让人物栩栩如生地站起来！
一、善用连续的动作描写，形成动作链
读后续写的写作过程中，成功的动作描写，可以交代人物的身份、地位，可以反映人物
心理活动的进程，还可以表现人物的性格特征。人物的动作或简单，或复杂，都不是一下子
就能完成的，细心观察才能捕捉到最能体现人物特征的慢镜头。因此，在描写动作时，同学
们要学会细化动作，把动作过程分解成一连串细微的动作，形成动作链，写出动作的连贯性，
这样才能使描写具有画面感，使人物更立体。
1．什么是动作链？
典例1 He stopped the taxi，jumped in with the suitcase and told the driver，“Go to the police
station，please.”
分析 这句话的意思是：他拦下了车，拿着箱子跳进了车里，然后对司机说，“请到警察局去。”
其实，这句话只是描写了“上车”的动作，然而通过拆解，细致地展现了一个动作的组成部
分。其本质是避免简单粗暴地使用一个动词概括整个动作，而是用2－3个动词组合进行描
述。用一个公式进行总结以上例句，即：上车＝拦车＋上车＋告诉目的地。
典例2 She would get off the car excitedly，laughing and dancing around.
分析 这句话的意思是：她会兴奋地下车，又笑又跳。这句话讲的是一个比较粗线条的妈
妈，动作描写完整地描述了这位妈妈下车时及下车后的表现，即：下车＝下车＋笑＋跳。
2．续写常用的动作链形式
(1)“A，B and C”结构
“A，B and C”结构，就是多个连续的动作用在一个句子中。我们用几个例句来形象地
解读一下这类动作链是如何形成的。
典例1 男孩们跳入湖中嬉戏。
分析 跳入湖中，这个动作前面或后面会有哪些动作？
动作链 跳入湖中嬉戏＝冲向湖边＋脱掉衣服＋跳入水中。
The boys rushed excitedly to the lake，took off their clothes and jumped into the water.
典例2 她抱住儿子。
分析 抱住儿子，这个动作前面或后面会有哪些动作？
动作链 抱住儿子＝冲向前＋蹲下＋一把抱住。
She dashed forward，knelt down and gathered her son into her arms.
典例3 这个歌手唱歌。
分析 歌手唱歌，这个动作前面或后面会有哪些动作？
动作链 歌手唱歌＝扫视观众＋深吸一口气＋开始演唱。
The singer glanced at the audience，took a deep breath and began to sing.
通过阅读以上三个动作链的例子，我们会感觉眼前展现出一幅生动形象的画面，虽然没
有情感词汇在里面，但是已经把情感都丰富地体现出来了。
(2)“句子＋非谓语动词”结构
下面用三个句子来说明这种描写动作的句子结构。
模式1：句子＋-ing
典例1 老人静坐。
分析 老人静坐，这个动作前面或后面会有哪些动作？
动作链 老人静坐＝坐在夕阳下＋看报纸＋听广播
The old man sat under the sunset，reading the newspaper and listening to the radio.
模式2：句子＋having done
典例2 没有买到票。分析 买票，这个动作前面或后面会有哪些动作？
动作链 买票＝排队很久了＋被告知票卖完了
Having queued for 3 hours，he was told that the ticket had been sold out.
模式3：句子＋-ed
典例3 孩子们哭了。
分析 哭，这个动作前面或后面会有哪些动作？或者因为什么原因孩子哭了。
动作链 哭＝被感动＋哭了。
Deeply moved by the story，the children began to cry.
二、善用丰富生动的描写来体现情感和渲染气氛
(一)人物情感描写
人物情感描写是对人物在特定环境下产生的想法、感触、联想等心理活动的描写，旨在
深刻地揭示人物的精神世界。在读后续写中，描写人物的情感是常用的描写方法，恰当的情
感描写能够表现文中人物的性格，推动事件的发展。
1．常用词汇
(1)cheerful adj.快乐的
(2)excited adj.兴奋的
(3)joyful adj.欢乐的
(4)pleased adj.欣喜的，高兴的；满意的
(5)tear n．[常用复数]眼泪，泪珠
(6)sorrow n．悲痛；忧伤
(7)sadness n．悲伤，忧愁
(8)pain n．痛苦
(9)grief n．悲痛
(10)glare v．对……怒目而视
(11)annoyed adj.恼怒的，气恼的
(12)shame n．羞愧；耻辱
(13)hopeless adj.没有希望的，绝望的
(14)anxiety n．焦虑
(15)be wild with delight欣喜若狂
(16)be in high spirits情绪高涨
(17)be seized with panic惊慌失措
(18)a strong sense of loss强烈的失落感
(19)make one’s heart bleed使人心碎
(20)be down in spirits情绪低落
(21)lose one’s spirit垂头丧气(22)get mad/cross at sb.对某人勃然大怒
(23)ignore a complaint对抱怨不予理会
(24)stamp one’s foot in anger愤怒地跺脚
(25)feel discouraged感到泄气的
2．常用语句
(1)The surface of the calm lake stirred the waves，and my mood was as cheerful as a wave.
平静的湖面激起了浪花，我的心情也像浪花一样欢快。
(2)I couldn’t restrain my joy and jumped into the house.
我抑制不住内心的喜悦，蹦蹦跳跳地进了家门。
(3)We were very pleased to hear this encouraging news.
听到这个令人鼓舞的消息，我们十分高兴。
(4)He was delighted to receive recognition for his achievements.
他的成就获得了认可，他很开心。
(5)He stood silently，tears rolling down his cheeks.
他静静地站着，眼泪顺着面颊流了下来。
(6)I feel like I am floating in an ocean of sadness.
我感觉自己正漂浮在悲伤的海洋里。
(7)As he looked at Katherine，great sorrow clouded his eyes.
他看着凯瑟琳，满眼忧伤。
(8)He was tongue-tied with anger.His hands trembled and he shouted for half a day.
他气得张口结舌，双手直颤抖，大喊大叫了半天。
(9)Ellen felt both despair and anger at her mother.
埃伦对她的母亲感到既绝望又生气。
(10)Andy’s face paled with disappointment，perhaps with anger as well.
安迪的脸色由于失望而变得苍白，也许还掺杂着气愤。
(11)He is just mad at me because I don’t want to go.
因为我不想去，他就对我火冒三丈。
(12)She was too frightened to tell her family what had happened.
她太害怕了，不敢告诉家人发生了什么事。
(13)His heart was pounding，as if he were frightened.
他的心怦怦跳，似乎被吓坏了。
(14)My brain is blank.I just want to leave this horrible place.
我的大脑一片空白，只想离开这个恐怖的地方。
(15)We were all astonished at the unexpected news.
听了这个突如其来的消息，我们都十分惊讶。
(16)All those present to listen to her sad story were moved to tears.
所有在场听到她悲伤故事的人都感动得流下了眼泪。
(二)场所环境描写环境描写是指对人物所处的具体的社会环境和自然环境的描写。其中，社会环境是指能
反映社会、时代特征的建筑、场所、陈设等景物以及民俗民风等。自然环境是指自然界的景
物，如季节变化、风霜雨雪、山川湖海、森林原野等。在进行读后续写时，要着重事件发生
的地理位置和天气变化等。
1．常用词汇
(1)beach n．海滩
(2)situate vt.使(某物)位于
(3)northern adj.北方的，北部的
(4)rural adj.农村的
(5)beneath prep.在……下方
(6)rock n．岩石
(7)mountain n．山；山岳
(8)a favorably situated city位置优越的城市
(9)a small village off the map一个偏僻的小村子
(10)the thinly populated rural area人烟稀少的农村地区
(11)the blue sky蓝天
(12)the songs of birds鸟鸣
(13)the fragile flowers娇嫩的花
(14)the green grass青草
(15)the fragrant roses芬芳的玫瑰
(16)the setting/rising sun落日/冉冉升起的太阳
2．常用语句
(1)There is a small village midway between these two towns.
在这两个镇的中间有个小村子。
(2)The bookstore is within a stone’s throw of the school.
那个书店就在学校的附近。
(3)Dark clouds were gathering in the sky.
乌云密布。
(4)The night sky is lit up by flashes of light.
一道道光照亮了夜空。
(5)The sun was now high in the southern sky.
太阳正高挂在南边的天空。
(6)The sun went in，and the breeze became cold.
云层遮住了太阳，微风有了些凉意。
(7)The mist melted rapidly in the morning sun.
在早晨的阳光下，薄雾很快就消散了。
(8)The mountain area is covered entirely in dense jungle.山区完全掩映在茂密的丛林中。
(9)The mountain top was covered with snow.
山顶被积雪覆盖。
(10)The region is uninhabited except for a few mountain villages.
除了几个山村之外，这个地区杳无人烟。
(11)Bathed in the sunshine and delighted by fantastic scenery，we headed for the destination.
沐浴在阳光下，享受着美丽的风景，我们向目的地出发。
完成下列句子
1．她向她道谢，转身向门口走去，这时有东西碰到了她的腿。
2．他不情愿地上了车，犹豫了一下，然后跑下车去拥抱罗先生。
3．听了这话，她妈妈微笑着轻轻地拍着她的背。
4．身后跟着几个学生，老师手里拿着几本书走进了办公室。
5．令人难忘的是，她的眼睛像钻石一样闪闪发光，嘴角保持着平稳的微笑。
6．听到这个消息，他失望地借酒浇愁。
7．我走进她的办公室时，紧张得心都提到了喉咙。
8．湖位于山脉最东端。
