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读后续写之动作描写
简单有效的六个微技能
基础技能：1. 运用具体动词替代笼统动词
2. 运用恰当短语替代普通动词
中阶技能：3. 增加修饰成分
4. 构造动作链
高阶技能：5. 多角度描述肢体动作
6. 构造动作面
如何使动作描写更饱满？
感知:结合语境,如何优化表达？
1. Because of his lies, she looked at him.
Because of his lies, she at him.
2 With only twenty seconds left, I ran to the line.
With only twenty seconds left, I to the line.
3. With only two minutes left, he ate his meal.
With only two minutes left. He up his meal.
4. She heard her mother say quietly as she walked down the hall, "Don't wake your dad up."
She heard her mother as she down the hall, "Don't wake your dad up. "
Skill 1：Choose Accurate Verbs用精准动词代替笼统动词
general words（笼统词） concrete words(具体词）
walk
run
look
say/talk
cryeat
Skill 2：Choose proper phrases 用恰当短语代替普通动词
start/begin
decide
cry
remember
tired
see
attract
Skill3. 加介词短语/副词修饰动作
The fierce wolf stared at Mac with its _____________________teeth.
______________________________(adv), he jumped off the bicycle and dashed into the car.
As the hungry wolf was almost reaching him, Mac’s eyes were wide open __________________________.
(in/with+名词)
Skill 4：
分解动作，形成动作链 Action chains
把动作过程分解成一连串的动作，构造动作链，让你的动作描写既丰富又生动！
拥抱 hug. → __________>____________>______________
_________________________________________________________________
1. 连续的动作，直接用并列谓语表达:___________________________
动作链 More examples
思考：跳入湖前有哪些动作=
. ____________+____________+_____________
孩子们跳入湖中嬉戏
思考：匆忙上学前有哪些动作
=
. ______________+____________+_____________
我早上匆忙去上学
动作链 句型1 Practice
1.我在台上开始唱歌→________________>________________>___________________
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妻子拥抱躺在病床上的丈夫 ________________>________________>___________________
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动作链 句型2 Doing/ Having done,句子
看到戒指后，妻子感到很震惊 _______________________________________________
2. 同时发生的动作，可以用现在分词作状语表达。
我父亲拍拍我的肩膀，鼓励我永远不要放弃我的梦想_________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
句式总结. 如何分解动作链
1.受惊吓的Mac冲到车的后座，在狼袭击到他之前把门关上了。
1.
______________________________________________________________________→
2. 麦克毫不犹豫跳下自行车，冲向车的后门，猛然地关上车门。
2.
______________________________________________________________________→
3. 想到狼血淋淋的嘴，麦克吓得要死，踹不上气。
______________________________________________________________________→ 3.4. The manager sat quietly in the office and his eyes were closed.
→___________________________________________________________________→
The boy stood there and his face was rigid（僵硬的） with anger 4.
→____________________________________________________________________→
Skill 5：describe body actions from multi-perspectives 从头部手部腿部呼吸心跳等多
角度描写肢体动作
紧紧相拥；投入 sb.怀抱；挥舞手臂；举手；拍肩膀；摔门；手抖
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最常用的4大动词：大哭；抽泣； 看到；盯着；
耳语；责骂；吹 露出灿烂的笑容；
擦去泪水；抑制 怒视；扫视；眨眼；
口哨；尖叫；喊叫； 脸上焕发出了光彩；
泪水；泪水流下
好奇地问；安慰； 目不转睛；直视;
喜悦洋溢在脸上；
脸颊；泪水模糊
继续说；打断说；
苦笑； 了视线；眼含泪
咆哮
欢乐涌上眼眶； 水
whisper;
flash a bright smile; burst out crying/burst
scold; whistle; catch sight of
face light into tears; sob; wipe the
stare at; glare at;
scream; up/brighten; tears; hold back one’s
glance at; blink;
shout/yell; ask joy spread one’s tears; with tears
can’t take one’s eyes
with curiosity; face; streaming down the face;
off…;look into one’s
comfort; add; smile bitterly; tears blur one’s vision;
eyes;
interrupt; howl joy well up inside tears well up inside one’s
one’s eyes eyes
Skill 6：构造动作面 Creating a whole picture
把动作和面部表情，心理，语言等结合，形成动作面。
句型 : ___________________________________________________
①Encouraged by the teacher's words, Li Hua
raised his hand high, saying , “ I volunteer.”
②Encouraged by the teacher's words, Tom hesitated to raise
his hand , whispering , “ ignore me.”
动作面 句型1:________________________________
练习：
_______________________________________________________________________________________动作面 句型2. ___________________________________________________
__________________________________________________________
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practice 练习
