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读后续写之动作描写
简单有效的六个微技能
基础技能：1. 运用具体动词替代笼统动词
2. 运用恰当短语替代普通动词
中阶技能：3. 增加修饰成分
4. 构造动作链
高阶技能：5. 多角度描述肢体动作
6. 构造动作面
如何使动作描写更饱满？
感知:结合语境,如何优化表达？
1. Because of his lies, she looked at him.
Because of his lies, she glared at him.
2 With only twenty seconds left, I ran to the line.
With only twenty seconds left, I rush/dashed to the line.
3. With only two minutes left, he ate his meal.
With only two minutes left. He swallowed up his meal.
4. She heard her mother say quietly as she walked down the hall, "Don't wake your dad up."
She heard her mother whispered as she tiptoed down the hall, "Don't wake your dad up. "
Skill 1：Choose Accurate Verbs用精准动词代替笼统动词
general words（笼统词） concrete words(具体词）
walk tiptoe(蹑手蹑脚地走)
run dash/rush (猛冲)
look glance (瞥见) glare (怒视) stare (凝视)
say/talk chat (闲聊) whisper (耳语)
cry weep/ sob （啜泣)eat bite (咬) chew（咀嚼) swallow (吞下)
Skill 2：Choose proper phrases 用恰当短语代替普通动词
start/begin get down to doing
decide make up one's mind
cry burst into tears
remember keep in mind
tired worn out
see catch sight of
attract appeal to
Skill3. 加介词短语/副词修饰动作
The fierce wolf stared at Mac with its __ sharp/bloody/frightening/scary/terribl e _ _____teeth.
_______ _ __Immediately/Instantly/ Hurriedly/Breathlessly ______(adv), he jumped off the bicycle and dashed into
the car.
As the hungry wolf was almost reaching him, Mac’ s eyes were wide open ___ _ in
fear/panic/horror/shock_. (in/with+名词)
Skill 4：
分解动作，形成动作链 Action chains
把动作过程分解成一连串的动作，构造动作链，让你的动作描写既丰富又生动！
拥抱 hug. → __冲向前__>__跳起来_>_ ___ 一把抱住
__she dashed forward,jumped up and hugged the boy tightly.
连续的动作，直接用并列谓语表达: __ Sb. 谓语 A, 谓语 B and 谓语 C
动作链 More examples
思考：跳入湖前有哪些动作=
rushed to the lake+ took off their clothes+ jumped into the water
冲向 湖边_+ _脱掉衣服_+__跳入水中
孩子们跳入湖中嬉戏 思考：匆忙上学前有哪些动作
The boys rushed excitedly to the lake, took off their clothes and jumped into the water.
孩子们兴奋地冲到湖边，脱下衣服，跳进了水里。
I put on my coat hurriedly, grabbed my bag and rushed to school this morning.
=
put on my coat + grabbed my bag+ rushed to school
. ___穿外套__+_抓起书包_+_冲去学校
我早上匆忙去上学
动作链 句型1 Practice
1.我在台上开始唱歌→____扫视观众 _>_____深吸一口气___>______开始演唱__
____I anxiously glanced at the audience, took a deep breath and began to sing.
2.妻子拥抱躺在病床上的丈夫 _____走上前__>____弯下腰_>___紧紧抱住
___Wife walked forward,bent down and hugged the husband tightly._____
动作链 句型2 Doing/ Having done,句子
看到戒指后，妻子感到很震惊 ______Seeing the ring, she felt shocked.
2. 同时发生的动作，可以用现在分词作状语表达。
我父亲拍拍我的肩膀，鼓励我永远不要放弃我的梦想__My father patted me on the shoulder, encouraging me never
to give up my dreams.
句式总结. 如何分解动作链
1.受惊吓的Mac冲到车的后座，在狼袭击到他之前把门关上了。
1.状从（while, when, as,
__The frightened Mac dashed into the back seat of the car and slammed the door
before, after）
before the wolf struck him. →
2. 麦克毫不犹豫跳下自行车，冲向车的后门，猛然地关上车门。 2.并列谓语动词
__Mac jumped off the bicycle without any hesitation, dashed to the back door （sb did sth1, did sth2
and did sth3 ）
and slammed the door heavily. →
3. 想到狼血淋淋的嘴，麦克吓得要死，踹不上气。
3.非谓语doing
___Thinking of the wolf’s bloody mouth, breathless, Mac was nearly scared to death. → (sb did sth1, doing sth2或
者
doing sth1，sb did sth2）4. The manager sat quietly in the office and his eyes were closed.
→__ The manager sat quietly in the office, (his ) eyes closed. → 4.独立主格结构
The boy stood there and his face was rigid（僵硬的） with anger (n./pron.+ doing/
→ ________The boy stood there, his face rigid with anger. → done/adj./prep. phrases…)
扭头往后看狼有多远
紧握把手；用力关车门
跳下自行车；冲进车里；腿抖
心吓得狂跳
Skill 5：describe body actions from multi-perspectives 从头部手部腿部呼吸心跳等多
角度描写肢体动作
紧紧相拥；投入 sb.怀抱；挥舞手臂；举手；拍肩膀；摔门；手抖 hug
tightly; throw oneself into one’s arms; wave one’s arms; raise one’s
hand; pat sb on the shoulder; slam the door; one’s hands tremble
___________________________________________________________________
紧紧相拥；投入sb.怀抱；挥舞手臂；举手；拍肩膀；摔门；手抖
lower/bend/ raise/ nod/shake one’s head; turn one’s head around; be
lost in thought; scratch one’s head
低头；抬头；点头；摇头；转头；陷入沉思；挠头
dash into; flee away; slip into; drag one’s legs; quicken one’s pace;
struggle to one’s feet; kneel down; run with all one’s strength
心情低落；心融化了；心跳的很快；激动得直跳；心痛
one’s heart sink/melt; beat fast; pound with excitement; one’s heart
ache
最常用的4大动词：大哭；抽泣； 看到；盯着；
耳语；责骂；吹 露出灿烂的笑容；
擦去泪水；抑制 怒视；扫视；眨眼；
口哨；尖叫；喊叫； 脸上焕发出了光彩；
泪水；泪水流下
好奇地问；安慰； 目不转睛；直视;
喜悦洋溢在脸上；
脸颊；泪水模糊
继续说；打断说；
苦笑； 了视线；眼含泪
咆哮
欢乐涌上眼眶； 水
whisper;
flash a bright smile; burst out crying/burst
scold; whistle; catch sight of
face light into tears; sob; wipe the
stare at; glare at;
scream; up/brighten; tears; hold back one’s
glance at; blink;
shout/yell; ask joy spread one’s tears; with tears
can’t take one’s eyes
with curiosity; face; streaming down the face;
off…;look into one’s
comfort; add; smile bitterly; tears blur one’s vision;
eyes;
interrupt; howl joy well up inside tears well up inside one’s
one’s eyes eyes
Skill 6：构造动作面 Creating a whole picture
把动作和面部表情，心理，语言等结合，形成动作面。
句型 : __Done/Doing, 句子主干 , doing
句子主干, doing +doing
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①Encouraged by the teacher's words, Li Hua
raised his hand high, saying , “ I volunteer.”
②Encouraged by the teacher's words, Tom hesitated to raise
his hand , whispering , “ ignore me.”
动作面 句型1: ____ 句型 1: doing + 句子主干 + doing
练习：
___Standing beside the empty road, they looked up to the sky,feeling the precious peace.动作面 句型 2: with + 逻辑主语 + 非谓 .
With his head dropped,Beibei sat beside the
pool,thinking whether he was white or black.
practice 练习
He stopped the taxi, jumped in with the suitcase and told the driver, “Go to the police station, please.”.
Misunderstood by her mother, she ran back to her room, crying sadly.
Deeply moved by her kindness , I decided to pass on the selfless love, helping more people in the future.
Seeing a car approaching, he waved violently, hoping to get a ride.
