04 如何用修辞格美化应用文写作
应用文写作中常用修辞用例析
1.simile明喻
明喻，明确的比喻 将具有某种共同特征的两种不同事物连接起来的一种修辞手法。明
喻的表达方法是：A像B. 例如：雪花象鹅毛一样飞舞.
（1）用like作喻词
The smile on her face shone like a diamond. （情感描写）
她脸上的笑容像钻石一样闪闪发光。
I feel like I am floating in an ocean of sadness.（情感描写）
我感觉自己像漂浮在悲伤的海洋中。
The scenery along the journey is just like a breath-taking landscape painting. (景物描写)
沿路的风景就像一幅美丽的山水画卷。
The icy wind started howling, cutting my face like a sharp knife.(景物描写)
寒风开始咆哮，像锋利的小刀一样刺痛了我的脸。
Clusters of stars decorated the vast sky like sparkling jewels.(景物描写)
繁星像珊珊发光的珠宝一样装饰了浩瀚的天空。
（2）用as..as作喻词
The smile on her face was as vibrant as the sun on a summer day（情感描写）
她脸上的笑容和夏天的太阳一样充满活力。
Father rushed to his son's school, only to discover the building was as flat as pancake 煎饼.(景物
描写)
父亲冲到儿子的学校后，才发现这座建筑已经变成一片废墟。
I reached out to touch her face, which was as cold as the ice. (人物描写)
我伸手去摸她的脸，发现她的脸像冰一样冰冷。
更多搭配：
as busy as a bee 忙忙碌碌
as hungry as a wolf 饥肠辘辘
as proud as a peacock 傲如孔雀
as brave as a lion 勇猛如狮
as pretty as a picture 美如画
（3）用as if作喻词Mrs Sather looked at my eyes as if (she were) seeing my inner self locked away inside. （动作描
写）
Sather老师看着我的眼睛，仿佛看到了我灵魂深处封闭的自我。
She swept her son into her arms with her eyes wet as if she wanted to squeeze the breath out of
him.（动作描写）
她眼睛湿润，把儿子拥进怀里，仿佛想把他的呼吸挤出来。
Her hair grew greyer and greyer, as if( it were )covered with snow and frost.（肖像描写）
他的头发越来越白了，简直像盖了一头皑皑的霜雪。
She felt as if her heart had been ripped from her body.（情感描写）
她感觉自己心好像从她的身体里被撕开了。
2.metaphor暗喻
Metaphor：It is a figure of speech containing an implied comparison, in which a word or
phrase ordinarily and primarily used of one thing is applied to another. Unlike simile, a word or a
phrase that compares one thing to another, using the words like or as.
暗喻是比喻修辞的一种，用一种事物比喻另一种事物，本体喻体都出现，中间常用喻
词“是”等连接，有时不用喻词。
暗喻的典型形式为：甲是乙，而不用like, as等喻词。例如，
Money sometimes is a poison.钱有时候是一种毒药。
She is a walking dictionary. 她是一本活字典。
（1）通过be动词联系
Her hair was a flowing golden river streaming down her shoulders. （肖像描写）
她的头发像是一条流淌在她肩上的金色河流。
The beautiful park was a scented carpet of color.(景物描写)
美丽的公园就是一个芬芳的彩色地毯。
Stop being such a baby. (人物描写)
别这么幼稚好不好。
Life is an unexplored river. full of twists and turns.(哲理)
生活就像一条未被涉足的河流，有各种曲折。
（2）通过动词联系
I felt a lump in my throat, tearing welling up in my eyes.（情感描写）
我如鲠在喉，泪水湿润了眼眶。He doesn't have an idea of his own. He just parrots what other people say.(人物描写)
他没有自己的观点，只会鹦鹉学舌。
A heavy silence blanketed the room.（环境描写）
整个房子沉浸在一片寂寞中。
The boy wolfed down the food.（动作描写）
小男孩狼吞虎咽。
3.personification拟人
Personification 拟人：It gives human form of feelings to animals, or le and personal
attributes(赋予) to inanimate (无生命的) objects, or to ideas and abstractions(抽象).
与汉语拟人完全相同，就是赋予物以人的语言属性。这种拟人化的修辞手法读起来使
人感到特别形象生动，富有情趣。
（1）把自然现象当作人来描写
The wind stood up and gave a shout . (景物描写)大风凛冽，发出怒吼。
The breeze gently kissed her cheeks. (景物描写)微风轻柔地亲吻着她的脸庞。
The feathery snowflakes danced in the night air, making a beautiful picture.(景物描写)
鹅毛般的雪花在空中飞舞，像一幅美丽的图画。
The mist swallowed him up. (景物描写)薄雾把他包围起来。
The icy wind started howling, stinging my face.(景物描写)寒风开始咆哮，刺痛了我的脸。
Stars winked at me in a darkening sky.(景物描写)夜空中星星向我眨眼睛。
Immediately, an absolute darkness ruled the forest.(景物描写)顷刻间，黑暗统治了森林。
（2）把含蓄抽象的概念当作人来描写
Fear seized/swallowed him.（情感描写）恐惧把他吞噬了。
Anger choked my words.（情感描写）我气得说不出话来。
A good idea suddenly struck me.我突然想到一个好主意。
Smile took hold of him.（情感描写）他笑容满面。
Anxiety torn him into pieces.（情感描写）她焦虑不安，十分崩溃。
Courage/Confidence deserted him.（情感描写）他没信心了。
Excitement deprived me of all power of speech.（情感描写）我兴奋的啥也说不出来了。
（3）把动物当作人来描写
In the dead of night, the crickets蟋蟀 played on the terrace of the house.
寂静的夜，蟋蟀旁若无人地在房子的阳台上玩。(景物描写)Birds on the tree are singing a beatiful song.(景物描写)
树上的小鸟在树上唱着美妙的歌曲。
The frogs are giving a concert---mixed chorus.(景物描写)
青蛙在举办音乐会---混声大合唱。
Fireflies patrol the grass with small lanterns (景物描写)
萤火虫提着小灯笼在草丛中巡逻。
4.hyperbole 夸张
Hyperbole：It is the deliberate use of overstatement or understatement to achieve emphasis.
夸张是是以言过其实的说法表达强调的目的，它可以加强语拾势，增加表达效果。
（1）使用数词或量词
My heart broke in about a million pieces.（情感描写）我的心成了碎片。
She was half dead with fear.（情感描写）她吓得半死。
Thanks a million.非常感谢你。
I‘ve told you a million times.我都告诉你多少次了。
The backpack weighs a ton.背包很重。
（2）使用动词
The young girl brought the house down with her perfomance.
这位年轻姑娘的表演博得了满堂喝彩。
It made me jump out of my skin. （情感描写）吓得我魂不附体。
I almost laughed my head off.（情感描写）我都快笑死了。
My blood froze.（情感描写）我的血液都凝固了。
She cried her eyes out. （情感描写）她痛哭涕流。
It brought her heart into her mouth.（情感描写） 让她的心悬到了嗓子眼。
My heart sank when he left.（情感描写）当他离开时我心都碎了。
（3）使用形容词和副词
在日常对话中，人们常用形容词或者副词去修饰微不足道的事情，目的就是为了渲染
一种气氛，强调某种意义的事情。例如：
副词：extremely；awfully；terribly；perfectly；horribly等等
形容词：miserable; horrible; splendid等等
例如：
It's beautiful, heavenly beautiful.(景物描写)
那儿很漂亮，就像天堂那般漂亮。（4）使用介词短语
She went home in a flood of tears.（情感描写）她泪如泉涌地回家去了。
类似表达：She shed floods of tears.
When they told the news, I was over the moon/ on the top of the world.（情感描写）
当他们告诉我这个消息时，我乐不可支。
He was bent out of shape（情感描写）
他非常生气（气到变形）
英语修辞在应用文写作中使用例析
例1：
【学生原文】A real friend will always help you see your mistakes.
【学生互评】A real friend is like a mirror that can help you see the pimples on your face.
(一个真朋友就像一面能帮你看清脸上粉刺的镜子)
【教师点评】A real friend is like a mirror that can help you see your mistakes clearly.(一个
真朋友就像一面能帮你看清你自己错误和缺陷的镜子)
学生互评时能想到用比喻辞格来修改原文想法很好，因为比喻能使深奥的哲理变得浅
显易懂，但使用的前提是要搞清楚事物的用途。唐太宗李世民曾说：“以人为镜，可以明
得失”，一位真朋友能帮助我们看清自己的缺点和错误。我们在使用比喻时应注意本体和
喻体之间的合理性，不然就会使比喻显得突兀，让人摸不着头脑。
例2：
【学生原文】With exams, students can have a better understanding of themselves.
【学生互评】Exams are death sentences to students.(考试对于学生来说就像接受死刑一
样。)
【教师点评】Exams are touchstones of students.(考试是学生的试金石。)
考试并不是用来折磨学生的，而是帮助学生了解自己的学习情况，也给老师以反馈，
同学互评时使用的喻体有误，原文的意思也改变了。
例3：
【学生原文】We should not waste our time. Instead, we should study for our future.
【学生互评】We should not build castles in the air. Instead, we should lay a firm
foundation for our future career.(我们现在不应建造空中楼阁，而应该为自己未来的职业发展
打下坚实基础。)【教师点评】学生互评改动的很好，原文中用于比喻的英语成语也不需改动，因为英
语成语中的喻体和汉语成语中的喻体(空中楼阁)成基本对应关系。
例4：
【学生原文】We've made wrong use of nature.
【学生互评】We' ve made wrong use of nature and killed the hen that lays the golden ergs.
(我们没有善待大自然，反而杀鸡取卵。)
【教师点评】w'e've made wrong use of nature and killed the goose that lays the golden
eggs.
原文中的英语成语的喻体“goose”与汉语成语中的“母鸡”词性相同，都属于家禽，
汉英成语结构也基本一致，应该属于喻体部分对应关系，但要注意英
语与汉语中喻体所用词的不同，因为在英语中鸡不会下金蛋，只有鹅才会。
例5：
【学生原文】I was born in the year of the pig in Chinese lunar year.
【学生互评】I was born in the year of the boar in Chinese lunar year.
【教师点评】在一篇向美国笔友作自我介绍的文章中，有同学介绍自己出生在中国农
历猪年，由于“pig”一词的词汇内涵更没有很好掌握，才会闹出这样的笑话。+pig”在英语
中所给人的传统联想是“肮脏、懒惰、愚蠢、贪婪”，如果用它向英语国家的读者来介绍
中国农历猪年，岂不是自找嘲讽吗?而“boar(公猪)”代替一词相对偏中性，没有“pig”所含
有的明显贬义，可作为一种委婉的说法+pig;。通过查找“plg”的同义词，自己的词汇，掌
握了新的词汇学习策略，学生发现了改进原文的方法，丰富了可谓一举多得。
例6：
【学生原文】If we don' t save water, we will die because of lack of water one day.
【学生互评】Saving resources is saving ourselves. If we don' t, our tears will flood the
earth.
【教师点评】Saving resources is saving ourselves. If we don' t, the last drop of water may
be the tear of human beings.
学生在学生互评中能想到用修辞格令人欣喜，但同样是夸张，学生互评后的夸张没有
到达应有的效果，还让人感觉有些可笑，觉得有点言过其实。而经改进后的夸张既基于实
际，又超越实际，形成了想象的飞跃和情感的共鸣，使我们对于浪费自然资源特别是水资
源的严重后果印象深刻，也感同身受。
例7：【学生原文】I am sorry you' re leaving.
【学生互评】It's a pity that you are leaving us behind.
【教师点评】It' s by no means, not a pity, however, that you are leaving us behind.
这是一封同学写给外教的表示离别时不舍的信，原文虽然没有语言错误，但过于口语
化。学生互评时使用了“It' s a pity that…”的结构，显得得体了许多。但如能像教师点评所
写得那样，利用低调陈述来重话轻说，形式上迂回曲折，虽不同于夸张那样夸大其辞，却
起到与众不同的润饰语言的目的，体现了师生惜别之情，增强了语言表达效果。
例8：
【学生原文】We can improve our English by reading and writing;we can improve our
English by communicating;we can improve our English by going abroad.
【学生互评】We can improve our English by reading more, by practicing communicating
with others, or by going abroad for further study.
【教师点评】原文意思有重复，而且使用了汉语中常见的排比句式来突出句意，而英
语中除了非常正式的场合演讲，一般不用排比句。如果上下文句子主语与谓
语动词一致，往往会避免重复主语和谓语，而采用平行结构来写作，这是我们学生在写作
中值得注意的地方。通过修辞格教学，有相当一批学生已能将其灵活运用，这也将为学生
进一步平行对照打下基础。
例9：
【学生原文】In a word, Internet is both good and bad.
【学生互评】In a word, the Internet has both its advantages and disadvantages.
【教师点评】In a word, the Internet is a good servant but a bad master.
在一篇关于学生上网的议论文平时写作练习中，有同学在结尾谈到了网络在我们同学
日常生活中的双重作用，通过改平铺直叙为平行对照，可以使我们对于互联网这把双刃剑
有较为清醒的认识，使人一目了然。
例10：
【学生原文】The white hair should be respected since everyone will be old one day.
【学生互评】The gray hair should be respected since everyone will be old one day.
【教师点评】在一篇关于给老年人让座的看图作文中，有同学想使用“white hair”这
个短语来借代老年人，学生互评时注意到了原文中这个我们常见的 Chinese English的毛病，
这也提醒我们学习外语有时还要注意母语的干扰。
例11：【学生原文】If you are free at night, you can go shopping or have a cup of drink because
there are lots of shopping centers and clubs in Shanghai.
【学生互评】Shanghai boasts of lots of places where you can go shopping or go clubbing
at night.
【教师点评】Shanghai never sleeps.
该文章要求同学介绍自己的家乡上海。有同学想要介绍上海作为一座国际化的大都市，
它的夜生活也是丰富多彩的。原文本身没有语言错误，但显得较为拖沓。学生互评时注意
到了使用定语从句和平行结构，面貌大有改观。但如果使用了拟人手法加以改进，可显得
简练而又意味深长。
例12：
【学生原文】Cheating is quite common in our school life because some students
don't work hard.
【学生互评】Cheating is not rarely seen in our school life because some students
want to get good marks without working hard.
【教师点评】Cheating is not rarely seen in our school life because some students
think it a good way to get good marks.
这是同学在讨论考试作弊现象及其对策时所写的句子，原文显得平铺直叙，而且原因
没有给完整。学生互评后文章出现了点低调陈述的味道，比起原文来有一定改观。而如果
采用反语的手法，通过语言性反差的反语手法，产生了点黑色幽默的效果，告诫我们作弊
其实是害人害己。
例13：
【学生原文】From what is mentioned above, we can clearly see that the reason why the
problem is still there is that we are paying too much attention to making money.
【学生互评】As discussed above, the motivation of this painful practice is the pursuit of
money deeply rooted in people' s misunderstanding of the definition of happiness.
【教师点评】As discussed above, the motivation of this pathetic practice is the pursuit of
money deeply rooted in people' s misunderstanding of the definition of happiness.
这是一篇谈论关于环保重要性的文章，作者谈到了环保问题的根源在于人们对于幸福
的错误理解。人们根深蒂固地认为金钱是幸福之源，因此才采用了这种令人悲哀做法。原
文略显哆嗦，学生互评后用词显得更为正式，句子也更为流畅，还想到了使用押头韵。如
果要锦上添花的话，可以把学生互评中的“painful practice”改为“pathetic practice"。一来是“painful"意为“痛苦的”，而“pathetic”解释为“可悲的”，两者意思有较大差别，
用"pathetic”更符合学生互评后的句意，二来是“pathetic”与学生互评后文章较为正式的用
词风格像一致，读起来朗朗上口，更显说服力。
例14：
【学生原文】Some students may succeed in cheating in the exam. However they will regret
it sooner or later.
【学生互评】Though those who cheat may not be caught in the exam, they will regret it
sooner or later.
【教师点评】Though you may not be caught cheating on the spot, the 1ie will always lie in
your heart and you will bear the cross for a lifelong time.
这是高三写作练习，让学生谈论对于考试作弊的看法。通过学生互评之后，句子结构
更加紧凑。如能用好“lie”一词的双关词义，即利用同形异义词，更可以紧扣主题，给人以
深刻警醒和反思。
例15：
【学生原文】Nowadays, more and more people have gone crazy in the modern world, so
it's important for us to he healthy in our mind.
【学生互评】Nowadays, more and more people have got psychological problems in the
modern society. There are various causes of the problems and I think it's important for us to
maintain mental health.
【教师点评】Nowadays, more and more people have got psychological problems in the
modern society. There are various causes leading to the problems, such as stress, losing a job,
divorce or death of a family member. I think it's important for us to maintain mental health.
这是一篇关于讨论如何保持心理健康的作文，作为全文的引入，学生原文的开头略显
单薄，语言也有待改进。学生互评后提到了一下有许多原因会导致现代人心理健康问题，
过渡更加自然，语言面貌也有很大改观。如能巧妙使用层进法，按严重程度由低到高罗列
了一下会导致心理健康问题的成因，可以使读者更容易意识到心理健康问题成因的多样性
和心理健康问题的普遍性，更容易引起大家的警觉和同感，也为下文的要提到的解决方法
作好了铺垫。
例16：
【学生原文】Faced with choices of either test paper or term paper, I don' t know which oneto choose. On second thought, I decide I would like to choose a term paper. The reasons are as
follows.
【学生互评】Test ,paper or term paper, it' s a problem. Answering a test paper right now,
I can't but wonder what a superb moment it would be if I were writing a term paper.
【教师点评】Test paper or term paper, that's the question. Answering a test paper right
now, I can' t but wonder what a superb moment it would be if I were writing a term paper.
在前面提到过的关于选择两种不同考试方式的作文中，不少同学在文章开头表现出了
选择的两难，为下文解释选择原因做了很好的铺垫。在学生互评中，有同学使用了仿化自
Hamlet中的经典对白“To be,or not to be, that' s the question.”的句式来改写原文的开头，
还使用了虚拟语气，增强了文章的可读性。这样的作文开头很容易一下子就吸引读者的注
意，
因为它形象地反映了作者心中对于到底该选择何种考试方式的纠结。但学生在使用仿化的
修辞手法时应注意，由于平时写作时间较紧，考试时更是如此，没有时间也没有条件去查
原文，容易把原文记错，影响修辞效果，甚至于造成理解困难。从平时学习角度来说，学
生应及时查阅工具书或互联网，以巩固所学，以求创新。从应试的角度来说，应本着宁缺
勿滥的原则，避免在考试中出现错误的仿化手法。
例17：
【学生原文】She likes watching horror movies in her spare time.(她喜欢在闲暇时看恐怖
片。)
【学生互评】She likes enjoying the fright of horror movies.
【教师点评】通过学生互评后，同学们不仅了解了老师课堂讲解的关于矛盾修辞法的
常见结构，更加以创新，使用了“动词十名词”这种课堂上没有讲解过的关于矛盾修辞法
的修辞结构，生动形象地刻画了我们在日常生活中对于恐怖片这类电影既爱又怕的心态，
可谓入木三分。
策略应用实践练习
1．假定你是李华，你所在的城市将举办一场中国画（Chinese painting）展览会。Michael
是你的留学生朋友，你决定给他写封邮件，告知该展览会的有关信息。内容包括：
1.展览会的时间和地点；
2.展览会的多种活动；
3.建议他去参观这个展览会。注意:
1.写作词数应为80左右；
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
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2．假定你是某国际学校的学生会主席李华，学生会将举办以“弘扬中华传统文化”为主题
的校园艺术展，鼓励学生积极参加。请用英语写一则书面通知，内容包括：
(1) 举办时间、地点；
(2) 展览内容；
(3) 鼓励参加。
注意：
(1) 写作词数应为 80 左右；
(2) 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Notice
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Students’ Union
3．为丰富学生的校园生活，你校即将举办一场民族舞蹈演出。请你代表学生会用英文写一
则通知，内容包括：
1.演出时间和地点；
2.观看须知；
3.演出意义。
注意：1.词数100左右；
2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
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4．假如你是李华，你校于2022年9月30日下午举行了高三学生个人才艺大赛。请你给学
校英文官网写一篇广播稿，要点包括：
1. 活动时间和地点；
2. 简要介绍比赛的基本情况；
3. 同学们的感受。
注意：1. 词数80左右；
2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
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5．你校5月4日举办了“成人礼”活动。请你给《21世纪英文报》“校园生活”栏目投稿,
介绍这次活动。内容包括：
1、参与人员；
2、活动过程；
3、你的感悟。
注意: 1、词数 100 左右；
2、可以适当增加细节, 以使行文连贯;
3、题目已经写好，不记入总词数。
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参考答案
1．
Dear Michael,
I have good news for you. An exhibition of Chinese painting opens next week at the City
Exhibition Center, where you can not only appreciate varieties of Chinese paintings, but also
attend lectures on Chinese painting. Furthermore, there is a Chinese painting class in which you
can learn painting skills if you want to try your hand at Chinese painting.
So why don’t you go to the exhibition? It’s really a good opportunity for you, since you are
so interested in Chinese painting. I’m sure you will enjoy the unique beauty of it.
I’m looking forward to your reply.
Yours,
Li Hua
【写作分析】本篇书面表达属于应用文。要求考生对于你所在的城市将举办一场中国画
（Chinese painting）展览会这一情况，Michael是你的留学生朋友，给他写封邮件，告知该
展览会的有关信息。
【解析】1.词汇积累
各种各样的：varieties of→ all kinds of
此外：Furthermore→ What’s more
机会：opportunity→ chance
对……感兴趣：be interested in→ be keen on
2.句式拓展
合并简单句
原句：I have good news for you. An exhibition of Chinese painting opens next week at the CityExhibition Center.
拓展句：I have good news for you that an exhibition of Chinese painting opens next week at the
City Exhibition Center.
【写作点评】【高分句型1】An exhibition of Chinese painting opens next week at the City
Exhibition Center, where you can not only appreciate varieties of Chinese paintings, but also
attend lectures on Chinese painting.（运用了关系副词where引导的定语从句以及not only…
but also…的固定句型。）
【高分句型2】It’s really a good opportunity for you, since you are so interested in Chinese
painting.（运用了连词since引导的原因状语从句。）
2．
Notice
To enrich our school life, the Students’ Union is to hold an art exhibition on the theme of
promoting traditional Chinese culture. Contents range from calligraphy, painting to paper cutting.
The exhibition is scheduled on June 3rd 2023 at the assembly hall. Not only can it arouse the
interest in traditional Chinese art but also enrich our school life.
Hopefully, you will benefit a lot and be immersed in the fascinating art world. Your active
participation will surely make a difference.
The Students' Union
【写作分析】本篇书面表达属于应用文。假定你是某国际学校的学生会主席李华，学生会
将举办以“弘扬中华传统文化”为主题的校园艺术展，鼓励学生积极参加。请用英语写一
则书面通知。
【解析】1.词汇积累
主题：theme→topic
举行：hold→host
传统的：traditional→conventional
沉浸在：be immersed in→be absorbed in
2.句式拓展
合并简单句
原句：To enrich our school life, the Students’ Union is to hold an art exhibition on the theme of
promoting traditional Chinese culture. Contents range from calligraphy, painting to paper cutting.
拓展句：To enrich our school life, the Students’ Union is to hold an art exhibition on the theme ofpromoting traditional Chinese culture, contents of which ranges from calligraphy, painting to
paper cutting.
【写作点评】[高分句型1] To enrich our school life, the Students’ Union is to hold an art
exhibition on the theme of promoting traditional Chinese culture. (运用了不定式作目的状语)
[高分句型2] Not only can it arouse the interest in traditional Chinese art but also enrich our
school life. (运用了部分倒装)
3．
Notice
In order to enrich the campus life of international students, a Chinese folk dance performance
will be given in our school.
As scheduled, the performance will start at 4: 00 pm on April 22nd in the school hall, lasting
one and a half hours. During the performance, it is demanded that all of you keep quiet and watch
the performance carefully. Through the performance, you could not only enjoy an audio-visual
feast but also have a better understanding of Chinese culture. In addition, many beautiful gifts
with Chinese characteristics are prepared for those present. All the international students are
welcome to participate on time.
Students’ Union
【写作分析】这是一篇应用文。要求考生就学校即将举办一场民族舞蹈演出，代表学生会
用英文写一则通知。
【解析】1. 词汇积累
丰富，改善：enrich → improve
开始：start → begin
要求：demand → require
安静的：quiet → silent
2. 句式拓展
简单句变复合句
原句：In addition, many beautiful gifts with Chinese characteristics are prepared for those
present.
拓展句：In addition, many beautiful gifts, which are full of Chinese characteristics, are prepared
for those present.
【写作点评】【高分句型1】During the performance, it is demanded that all of you keep quiet and watch the performance
carefully.（运用了it作形式主语）
【高分句型2】
Through the performance, you could not only enjoy an audio-visual feast but also have a better
understanding of Chinese culture.（运用了not only...but also...连接并列谓语）
4．
A talent show
A talent show was held in the multi-functional hall yesterday afternoon, giving students in
Grade Three a chance to show their gifts.
The moment those two hosts announced the start of the activity, our feast began. All the
participants did a great job, making themselves nothing but impressive. It was the judges who
were faced with a dilemma when it came to who should stand out for the championship. Every
student involved agrees that the show is of great significance and enriches their campus life.
【写作分析】本篇书面表达属于应用文。要求考生给学校英文官网写一篇广播稿，报道学
校组织的高三学生个人才艺大赛。
【解析】1.词汇积累
机会：chance→opportunity
展示：show→display
举行：hold→conduct
意义重大：be of great significance→be very significant
2.句式拓展
简单句变复合句
原句：A talent show was held in the multi-functional hall yesterday afternoon, giving students in
Grade Three a chance to show their gifts.
拓展句：A talent show was held in the multi-functional hall yesterday afternoon, which gave
students in Grade Three a chance to show their gifts.
【写作点评】【高分句型1】It was the judges who were faced with a dilemma when it came to
who should stand out for the championship.（运用了强调句型、固定句型when it came to和第
二个who引导的宾语从句）
【高分句型2】Every student involved agrees that the show is of great significance and enriches
their campus life.（运用了that引导的宾语从句）5．
The Coming-of-Age Ceremony—an Unforgettable Experience
On May 4th, all the senior Grade 3 students, their parents and teachers took part in the
coming-of-age ceremony, which was held in our school.
Dressed in Hanfu, the traditional Chinese costume, we gathered together in the Art Center of
our school for the ceremony. The ceremony started with a speech delivered by our headmaster. He
congratulated us and encouraged us to pursue our dreams bravely. After that, a student
representative expressed our gratitude to our beloved parents and teachers. Then parents gave us a
gift with their best wishes. Finally, we took photos together.
As it was really a memorable moment, I made up my mind to be independent from then on!
【写作分析】这是一篇投稿短文。要求考生给学校英文报写一篇短文，介绍五月四号举办
的“成人礼”活动。
【解析】1.词汇积累
参加：take part in→participate in
追求：pursue→follow
勇敢的：bravely→courageously
感激：gratitude→thanksfulness
2.句式拓展
简单句变复合句
原句：The ceremony started with a speech delivered by our headmaster.
拓展句：The ceremony started with a speech, which was delivered by our headmaster.
【写作点评】[高分句型1] On May 4th, all the senior Grade 3 students, their parents and teachers
took part in the coming-of-age ceremony, which was held in our school. (运用了which引导的非
限制性定语从句)
