浙江省G5联盟2024-2025学年高二上学期期中联考英语试题
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短
文。
In my childhood , I tried many activities, and most of them were chosen by
Mom. She would always say, “Join the swim team, Tara. Your sister is a good
swimmer, so you should be too.” But she didn’t know that I was really scared
of water. Even though I was afraid , I had to do this activity that made me
nervous.
Every Saturday was a struggle. I would ask Mom with all my heart not to
make me go to the swim meet . But most of the time I didn’t succeed. When
the starting gun went off with a loud sound , I would gather all my courage
and strength and jump into the cold water. I would swim as fast as I could
to the other side of the pool , but I would always see the other swimmers pass
me easily.
But I didn’t give up completely. The reason was my dad. When I finally
reached the edge of the pool , tired and defeated(过去分词做adj主语补语), he would be
there with a warm, dry towel. He would tell me that he was proud of my hard
work. His words and presence were like a life buoy, keeping me going in
this uncertain situation (现在分词短语做伴随动作).
Then, a big turning point came. Our school orchestra came to our class
and gave a performance. The drums were just annoying, and the flutes were
boring. But when I heard the violin … oh, that was different. It made the most
beautiful sound I had ever heard. My heart started to dance with its
melody.
For the first time in my life, I was very happy. And what’s more, the
orchestra director gave me a permission slip (许可单) for my parents to sign,
asking me to try out for the first seat in the community orchestra (现在分词短语做伴随
动作). This was a new start, a glimmer of hope in a journey that had been full of
challenges and uncertainties.
注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: Tightly holding the permission slip, I ran all the way home after school.
Paragraph 2: Finally came the tryout for the first seat.浙江省G5联盟2024-2025学年高二上学期期中联考英语试题
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短
文。
In my childhood, I tried many activities, and most of them were chosen by
Mom. She would always say, “Join the swim team, Tara. Your sister is a good
swimmer, so you should be too.” But she didn’t know that I was really scared
of water. Even though I was afraid, I had to do this activity that made me
nervous.
Every Saturday was a struggle. I would ask Mom with all my heart not to
make me go to the swim meet. But most of the timeI didn’t succeed. When the
starting gun went off with a loud sound, I would gather all my courage and
strength and jump into the cold water. I would swim as fast as I could to the
other side of the pool, but I would always see the other swimmers pass me
easily.
But I didn’t give up completely. The reason was my dad. When I finally
reached the edge of the pool, tired and defeated, he would be there with a
warm, dry towel. He would tell me that he was proud of my hard work. His
words and presence were like a life buoy, keeping me going in this uncertain
situation.
Then, a big turning point came. Our school orchestra (管弦乐队) came to
our class and gave a performance. The drums were just annoying, and the flutes
were boring. But when I heard the violin… oh, that was different. It made the
most beautiful sound I had ever heard. My heart started to dance with its
melody.
For the first time in my life, I was very happy. And what’s more, the
orchestra director gave me a permission slip (许可单) for my parents to sign,
asking me to try out for the first seat in the community orchestra. This was a
new start, a glimmer of hope in a journey that had been full of challenges and
uncertainties.
注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: Tightly holding the permission slip, I ran all the way home after school.
Paragraph 2: Finally came the tryout for the first seat.一、文章分类与续写思路分析
文章类型：个人成长/自我突破类读后续写
特点：以主人公的心理变化和成长经历为主线，描写克服困难、寻找兴
趣和自信的过程。
续写目标：展现主人公在音乐领域的新尝试，以及心理成长的进一步升
华。
续写思路与构建方法：
布局与框架
Paragraph 1：事件衔接与情感铺垫（拿到许可单后的激动与期
待，回家向父母展示）
Paragraph 2：高潮与自我突破（试奏的紧张、努力与收获，心理
成长的升华）
框架提炼
起：紧握许可单 → 激动、期待 → 决心尝试
承：回家与父母沟通 → 父母鼓励
转：试奏前的紧张与心理活动 → 进入试奏
合：成功或初步表现 → 对自我能力的认可与心理成长
实施策略
承接原文情节：延续主人公的成长线索和对父母关爱的描写
巧妙设计细节：心理描写、动作描写、环境渲染（如音乐教室、
试奏氛围）
保持词汇和句式自然
续写注意事项：
承接原文情绪变化（从害怕 → 激动 → 紧张 → 自信）
每段首句应与所给开头紧密相关
描写细节应体现心理与动作的结合
二、文章故事山模式与伏笔分析分析角度 内容 原文反应句
“Even though I was afraid, I had to do
this activity that made me nervous.”
起：害怕水 → 执行父母安排
“When I finally reached the edge of the
承：父亲鼓励 → 不放弃 pool, tired and defeated, he would be
故事山
转折：发现对小提琴的兴趣 → there with a warm, dry towel.”
模式
“My heart started to dance with its
新希望
melody.”
合：获得许可单 → 准备尝试
“The orchestra director gave me a
permission slip…”
Paragraph 1：许可单 → 激动
“Tightly holding the permission slip, I
衔接原文的回家 ran all the way home after school.”
点 Paragraph 2：试奏 → 心理成 “Finally came the tryout for the first
seat.”
长
“Even though I was afraid…”
紧张、害怕、期待、兴奋、激
心情描写 “My heart started to dance with its
动
melody.”
“I would gather all my courage and
游泳动作、跑回家、练习乐 strength and jump into the cold water.”
动作描写
器、试奏 “Tightly holding the permission slip, I
ran all the way home…”
“My heart started to dance with its
melody.”
关键转折点发现音乐兴趣 → 获得许可单
“The orchestra director gave me a
permission slip…”
“His words and presence were like a life
伏笔/隐含 对父母鼓励的依赖 → 内心自
buoy, keeping me going in this
线索 我认同的萌芽
uncertain situation.”
“I was really scared of water.”
害怕游泳 → 想尝试但怕失
冲突点 “The drums were just annoying, and the
败；新乐器挑战
flutes were boring.”
解决方案 父亲鼓励 → 尝试小提琴 → “He would tell me that he was proud of分析角度 内容 原文反应句
my hard work.”
参加试奏 “The orchestra director gave me a
permission slip…”
“Even though I was afraid…”
害怕、焦虑 → 激动 → 紧张
心理描写 “My heart started to dance with its
→ 自信
melody.”
“Jump into the cold water.”
环境描写 游泳池的冷水、乐团表演氛围 “Our school orchestra came to our class
and gave a performance.”
“But I didn’t give up completely. The
从恐惧/焦虑 → 被鼓励 → 兴 reason was my dad.”
情感转折
趣萌发 → 自信尝试 “For the first time in my life, I was very
happy.”
“I ran all the way home after school.”
游泳池 → 家 → 音乐教室/试
空间转换 “Finally came the tryout for the first
奏场所
seat.”
周末游泳 → 乐团表演 → 拿 “Every Saturday was a struggle.”
时间过渡
到许可单 → 试奏 “Then, a big turning point came.”
三、续写策略
承接原文
紧握许可单 → 回家 → 父母鼓励
从发现兴趣到实际尝试 → 内心变化的自然过渡
设计技巧
心理描写与动作描写结合：如紧张的手指、快速心跳、深呼吸
场景渲染：音乐教室的氛围、同学与老师的反应
情感线：父母鼓励 → 自信 → 对未来的期待
伏笔与呼应
原文父亲鼓励 → 后续自信尝试
原文对小提琴的兴趣 → 试奏表现 → 心理成长3. 动作、心理、环境描写
A. 动作描写
I clenched my fists tightly, determined not to give up.
→ 我紧握双拳，决心不放弃。
I tiptoed into the music room, careful not to make a sound.
→ 我踮起脚走进音乐教室，小心不发出声音。
My hands trembled slightly as I held the violin.
→ 当我拿起小提琴时，手微微颤抖。
I sprinted down the corridor, eager to show my parents the permission slip.
→ 我飞奔在走廊上，迫不及待想把许可单给父母看。
I took a deep breath and lifted the bow to play the first note.
→ 我深吸一口气，举起弓准备拉响第一音符。
I swallowed nervously, trying to calm my racing heart.
→ 我紧张地咽了口口水，努力让心跳平复。
I balanced carefully on the edge of the pool, hesitating before jumping in.
→ 我小心地站在泳池边缘，犹豫是否跳下去。
I fidgeted with the sheet music, adjusting it until it was just right.
→ 我摆弄着乐谱，一遍遍调整到合适的位置。
I tiptoed past my sister’s room, not wanting to wake her.
→ 我踮着脚经过妹妹的房间，不想吵醒她。
I clutched the towel my father handed me, feeling comforted.
→ 我紧握父亲递给我的毛巾，感到安慰。
B. 心理描写
I felt a surge of excitement running through my body.
→ 我全身涌起一股激动。
Anxiety gnawed at me as I approached the stage.
→ 当我走向舞台时，焦虑感在心里蔓延。
Relief washed over me when I finally finished the swim.
→ 当我终于游完时，一股轻松感涌上心头。I was filled with anticipation for what was about to happen.
→ 我充满了对即将发生的事情的期待。
Pride swelled in my chest at my small achievement.
→ 我为自己的小小成就感到自豪。
My heart sank when I realized I had made a mistake.
→ 当我意识到自己犯错时，心都沉了下去。
Nervousness prickled my skin as I prepared to perform.
→ 当我准备表演时，紧张感像针刺般蔓延全身。
A glimmer of hope sparked inside me.
→ 内心闪现出一丝希望的光芒。
I felt utterly defeated, yet determined to try again.
→ 我感到彻底失败，但仍决心再试一次。
Excitement and fear mingled as I stepped onto the stage.
→ 当我踏上舞台时，激动与害怕交织在一起。
C. 环境描写
The music room was filled with a warm, golden light.
→ 音乐教室里充满温暖的金色光线。
The pool water shimmered under the bright sunlight.
→ 游泳池的水在明亮的阳光下闪闪发光。
The auditorium echoed with the sound of the orchestra.
→ 礼堂里回荡着管弦乐队的声音。
The hallway was silent except for the echo of my footsteps.
→ 走廊里除了我脚步声的回响，静悄悄的。
Raindrops tapped lightly on the window as I practiced indoors.
→ 当我在室内练习时，雨滴轻轻敲打窗户。
The stage lights cast long shadows across the wooden floor.
→ 舞台灯光在木地板上投下长长的影子。
The classroom smelled faintly of polished wood and music sheets.
→ 教室里弥漫着一丝擦过的木头和乐谱的味道。The pool deck was slippery and cold under my feet.
→ 泳池边甲板湿滑而冰冷。
Sunlight streamed through the tall windows, illuminating the room.
→ 阳光透过高高的窗户，照亮整个房间。
The quiet murmur of the audience filled the concert hall.
→ 音乐厅里充满观众低声的窃窃私语。
D. 常见单词高级替换词（5个场景分类）
场景 常用词 高级替换词
心情/心理 happy delighted, overjoyed, elated, thrilled, ecstatic
心情/心理 sad devastated, heartbroken, despondent, melancholic, gloomy
动作 run sprint, dash, race, bolt, hurry
形容事物 beautiful exquisite, stunning, enchanting, magnificent, splendid
努力/尝试 try attempt, endeavor, strive, venture, undertake
4. 搭配现象、固定搭配与语料积累
A. 常见搭配
clutch/tightly clutch something → 紧握某物
swim across the pool → 游过泳池
filled with + emotion → 充满……情绪
proud of + someone/something → 为……感到自豪
a surge of + emotion → 一股……的情感涌上心头
step onto + place → 走上……（舞台、场地）
tiptoe into + room → 踮脚走进……
nervous about + doing something → 因……感到紧张
wash over + someone → （情感）涌上心头
spark inside someone → 激起内心某种感受
B. 可积累生词短语单词/短语词性 词意 近义词 反义词 例句
1. I will endeavor to finish my
尝试， attempt, strive, give up, homework before dinner.
endeavor n./v.
努力 undertake neglect 2. Scientists endeavor to find
a cure for the disease.
1. A gleam of hope appeared
闪光， shine, glimmer, in her eyes.
gleam n./v. dim, fade
微光 sparkle 2. The sun gleamed on the
water surface.
1. My hands trembled as I
shake, quiver, opened the envelope.
tremble v. 颤抖 steady, calm
shiver 2. He trembled with fear
before the test.
1. His encouragement buoyed
浮标； sink, me up during difficult times.
buoy n. support, uplift
v. 支持 depress 2. The boat was buoyed by
the waves.
1. She clenched her teeth in
release, anger.
clench v. 紧握 grasp, grip
loosen 2. I clenched my fists tightly
before the competition.
1. A surge of excitement ran
汹涌；
surge n./v. rush, wave, swellrecede, ebb through the crowd.
涌起
2. Anger surged inside him.
1. A glimmer of hope
微光， gleam, flicker, darkness, appeared.
glimmer n./v.
闪烁 sparkle fade 2. Stars glimmered in the
night sky.
1. I tiptoed into the room
stomp, quietly.
tiptoe v. 踮脚走 sneak, creep
march 2. She tiptoed past the
sleeping baby.
daunting adj. 令人畏 intimidating, easy, simple 1. Climbing the mountain单词/短语词性 词意 近义词 反义词 例句
seemed daunting.
惧的 formidable 2. The task ahead was
daunting but exciting.
1. She was elated at receiving
兴高采 thrilled, depressed, the award.
elated adj.
烈的 overjoyed sad 2. I felt elated when I solved
the problem.四、 Possible Version(4)
Version 1
Paragraph 1:
Tightly holding the permission slip, I ran all the way home after school. My
heart pounded not from the running, but from a mixture of wild excitement and
gnawing anxiety . Bursting through the door , I handed her the
(心理人物状态描写) (现在分词短语做伴随动作)
crumpled slip. Her eyebrows furrowed "The orchestra? Tara, we've invested so
much time in swimming. This is... unexpected." Just then, Dad walked in, sensing
the tension . He picked up the slip and his eyes lit up. "First seat tryout?
(现在分词短语做)
That's fantastic!" he exclaimed. Mom looked at my pleading eyes, then at Dad's
supportive smile, and finally, her stern expression softened into a thoughtful one
(无
. She signed the slip with a sigh. That evening, I began my new journey
灵主语句)
with my passion.
Paragraph 2:
Finally came the tryout for the first seat. Backstage, my hands were clammy
and the violin felt foreign. I closed my eyes, remember ing Dad's reassuring
smile . Taking a deep breath , I walked onto the stage.
(现在分词短语做伴随动作) (现在分词短语做伴随动作)
Under the bright lights, I lifted the violin to my chin. As the bow touched the
strings , the beautiful melody that had once captured my soul flowed out
(无灵主语句)
freely . When the last note faded, the silence was broken by warm applause.
(无灵主语句)
I didn't need to hear the result right then. In that moment, I had already won the most
important battle—the one against my own doubts. I had finally found a stage where I
didn't have to struggle to keep afloat, but could truly soar.
Version 2
Paragraph 1:
Tightly holding the permission slip, I ran all the way home after school. This
piece of paper felt like a life buoy, not just keeping me afloat in uncertainty,
but offering a direction to a new shore. I burst into the room and couldn’t wait
to tell my my mom. "Another activity?" Mom said, her tone laced with
skepticism . "Tara, Quitting swimming now would be a waste." Then I looked at
(独立主格)
Dad with pleading eyes . He gave me an reassuring nod, his silent way of tellingme to fight my own battle . "Mom," I said, my voice trembling but clear
(独立主格) (独立主
, "in the pool, I swim out of fear of disappointing you. But when I play the violin, it
格)
feels like... Please, just give me this one chance to prove myself." The kitchen was
silent. Slowly, she reached for the pen, signing her name .From that day
(现在分词做伴随动作)
on, I threw myself into practicing the violin, fueled by passion and for the
tryout .
(过去分词做原因状语)
Paragraph 2:
Finally came the tryout for the first seat. The auditorium was intimidating. As I
waited for my turn, I saw the other candidates, their confidence seeming to dwarf
my own . When my name was called, I walked to the center stage. I imagined
(独立主格)
Dad in the audience, with his warm, dry towel and proud smile. I began to play.
The music started softly, a hesitant whisper, then grew in strength and passion,
telling a story of struggle and then passion . I poured every bit of my
(现在分词做伴随动作)
journey into the music. As I played the final note, I opened my eyes, not to see if I
had won, but to acknowledge that I had, for the first time, truly expressed who I
was and who I wanted to be.
Version 3
Paragraph 1
Tightly holding the permission slip, I ran all the way home after school . As
soon as I burst through the door , my heart pounding with excitement , I
(独立主格刻画人物)
waved the paper in front of Mom and Dad. “Can I try out for the school orchestra?”
I asked breathlessly. For a moment, Mom looked surprised. She had always
imagined me in the swimming pool, not on a stage. Dad smiled gently and nodded,
saying , “If that’s what you truly love, go for it.” That night, I sat by my
(现在分词做伴随动作)
bedroom window, tracing the lines of the permission slip again and again
(现在分词短语做
. The memory of cold pool water faded, replaced by the soft echo of violin
伴随动作)
practice days and nights . I promised myself that this time, I would
(过去分词短语做结果状语)
play not to win—but to express who I was.
Paragraph 2
Finally came the tryout for the first seat. My palms were sweating as I walked
into the hall, filled with nervous whispers and shining instruments .
(过去分词短语做伴随动作)
Taking a deep breath , I lifted the bow, letting the music flow
(现在分词短语做伴随动作)
through me. The notes weren’t perfect, but they were honest and
(现在分词短语做伴随动作)alive. As the last sound faded, silence filled the room—then came gentle
applause . The director smiled approvingly. In that moment, I realized I had
(倒装句)
found something far more valuable than a medal: confidence. When I stepped out
of the hall, sunlight warmed my face. For the first time, I felt proud—not because
I had followed others, but because I had followed my heart.
逻辑分析与衔接说明
段落逻辑 内容概要 衔接关系
兴奋回家，展示许可单，父
第一段 从“跑回家”→“情感确认与决定”
母支持，内心转折
试奏现场，紧张—释放—自 与第一段结尾的“play not to win”逻辑承
第二段
信 接，体现心理成长
亮点表达与语法点
非谓语结构：Tightly holding the permission slip…
倒装结构：Not to win—but to express who I was.
地道搭配与短语：
burst through the door（冲进门）
trace the lines of the permission slip（反复描摹许可单）
let the music flow through me（让音乐流淌于心）
find something far more valuable than a medal（找到比奖牌更珍贵
的东西）
情绪描写亮点：
heart pounding with excitement（激动得心跳加速）
palms were sweating（手心冒汗）
sunlight warmed my face（阳光温暖脸庞）
高分语料积累与替换
词/短语 高级替换 同义词/联想词 例句
thrilled / elated / She was thrilled to be part of
excited delighted, ecstatic
overjoyed the team.词/短语 高级替换 同义词/联想词 例句
apprehensive, He felt uneasy before his
nervous anxious / uneasy / tense
jittery performance.
content / fulfilled / She felt fulfilled after years of
proud satisfied, pleased
gratified effort.
encourage / back up / My parents always stand by
support assist, favor
stand by me.
audition / compete for / She auditioned for the school
try out attempt, enter
apply for orchestra.
Version 4
Paragraph 1
Tightly holding the permission slip, I ran all the way home after school . Along
the way, I barely noticed the wind brushing past my face. I shouted “Mom, Dad!
Look what I got!” , waving the slip . Mom frowned slightly, her
(现在分词短语做伴随动作)
voice uncertain . “Music? Are you sure, Tara?” I hesitated, but Dad’s
(独立主格刻画人物)
warm gaze gave me courage. “She’s found her tune,” he said softly. That night, as I
practiced with a borrowed violin, the rough strings left marks on my fingers. Yet
the sound—fragile but real—filled me with a quiet joy. I realized that every note
carried my story, my courage, and my longing to be myself.
Paragraph 2
Finally came the tryout for the first seat. The hall was filled with tension and
whispers. My fingers trembled as I held the bow, recalling my father’s words
(现在分词
. I closed my eyes and began to play. The first few notes wavered, then grew
做伴随动作)
stronger, steadier—like my heartbeat . When I finished, the director nodded
(无灵主语句)
approvingly, and I caught sight of my parents smiling in the back row. At that
moment, tears blurred my vision. The water that once terrified me had taught me
endurance; the music now taught me courage. I knew, at last, I was not swimming
away from fear—I was swimming toward my dream.
第一段结尾与第二段首句衔接自然：
“every note carried my story” → “began to play” → 体现音乐线与心理线的
承接。暗线呼应：游泳经历（fear）— 音乐（courage）—成长（self-identity）
亮点词汇与短语
barely noticing the wind brushing past my face（风掠过脸庞，渲染速度与
情绪）
rough strings left marks on my fingers（象征坚持）
filled with a quiet joy（内敛的幸福）
tension and whispers（紧张氛围）
tears blurred my vision（泪水模糊了视线）
语料与替换积累
原词 高级替换 同义/联想 例句
solid, Her voice grew firm as she
strong powerful / firm / steady
forceful spoke.
unease,
fear anxiety / dread / terror She conquered her fear of failure.
panic
bravery / determination / It took great bravery to face the
courage spirit, valor
boldness crowd.
A tranquil smile appeared on her
quiet gentle / tranquil / subdued soft, calm
face.
Music became her lifelong
dream aspiration / pursuit / ambition goal, ideal
pursuit.
高考读后续写语料
✅ 心理描写句型
A wave of emotion swept through me.
My heart raced as I took the first step.
A mixture of excitement and fear filled me.
I could hardly believe my eyes.
For a moment, I stood frozen, unsure of what to do.
✅ 动作描写句型
She clenched her fists, refusing to back down.
He took a deep breath and faced the challenge.I lifted my head, forcing a smile.
My fingers trembled slightly as I touched the instrument.
I dashed forward, driven by pure instinct.
✅ 环境描写句型
The hall was filled with golden light and quiet murmurs.
The air smelled faintly of wood and polish.
A gentle breeze brushed past, carrying distant laughter.
The sound of applause echoed through the room.
The setting sun painted the sky in shades of orange and pink.官方：
Tightly holding the permission slip, I ran all the way home after school . I
burst through the door, eager to share my discovery with my mom (adj做主语补语). I
explained how the violin’s sound had captivated me, and to my surprise, she
sensed the genuine passion in my words. With a gentle smile , she signed the
slip, giving me her silent blessing to pursue this new path (现在分词短语做伴随动作). That
evening, I immersed myself in the violin’s world, my fingers exploring its
contours, learning its structure (独立主格). As I practiced , each scale and note
became a step in my transformation(无灵主语句), from a hesitant swimmer to a
budding musician .
Finally came the tryout for the first seat. I stood before the mirror, the
violin secure under my chin (独立主格), feeling the strings resonate with my
touch (现在分词短语做伴随动作). The notes I played were echoes of my dedication,
reflections of the hours I’d spent honing my skills. Stepping into the
audition room (现在分词短语做伴随动作), I felt the outside world melt away, leaving
only the music and my connection to it. (现在分词短语短语做伴随动作) The judges’ gazes
were upon me. The violin was no longer just an instrument; it was a part
of who I was becoming, and as the last note faded , I knew I had found not
just a voice, but a new identity. This audition marked my emergence from
the challenges of the past into a future filled with potential . (过去分词短语做后置定语)
