“特写镜头”描写大法
在英语读后续写中，“特写镜头”式的细节描写能够让文章增色不少，使故事更加生动形象、富
有感染力。下面将从什么是特写镜头、使用场景、运用技巧以及实际案例等方面进行详细介绍。
一、解读特写镜头
特写镜头在故事创作中具有独特的作用，主要体现在以下几个方面：
1. 突出关键细节：聚焦故事里的关键元素，比如某个重要物品、人物的显著特征，或者情节转折
的关键节点，从而吸引读者的注意力。
2. 深化角色刻画：通过特写人物的面部表情、眼神、手势等，深入挖掘角色的内心世界，展现其
情感变化，让角色形象更加丰满立体。
3. 强化氛围与情绪渲染：在营造特定氛围或传递强烈情绪时，如恐怖、浪漫等场景，特写镜头能
够增强读者的感受，使其更深入地融入故事之中。
4. 增强情节冲击力：在故事的高潮或关键时刻运用特写，能够加大情节的张力，引发读者更强烈
的情感共鸣，使故事更具吸引力。
5. 推动情节发展：在需要细腻推进情节时，特写可以展现情节发展过程中的微妙变化，让故事的
逻辑性更强、更连贯。
6. 创造视觉效果：借助特写镜头，能让读者在脑海中构建出清晰的画面，提升文字的视觉表现
力，使故事如同一幅生动的画卷在读者眼前展开。
二、特写镜头的使用场景【FEDS】
1. F - Feelings（情感）：特写镜头可用于深入刻画和传递角色的情感细节，帮助读者
更好地理解角色的内心感受。
2. E - Events（事件）：在关键事件中，特写能够突出重要细节，让读者更清晰地把
握事件的关键之处。
3. D - Decisions/Logic（决策/逻辑）：展示角色的思考过程、决策依据或逻辑推理，
使读者更深入地了解角色行为背后的原因。
4. S - Setting/Scene（设置/场景）：用于细致描绘环境，营造特定的场景氛围，增强
故事的代入感。三、特写镜头的运用技巧【“细感情”】
1. 细节聚焦：
- 面部描写：着重关注眼神、嘴角的微笑或皱纹等面部细节，通过这些细微之处传达角色的情感
和性格特点。
- 动作描写：留意角色的手势、姿态及其他身体动作，以此展现角色的心理状态，推动故事发
展。
- 环境描写：从场景中挑选重要元素，像桌上的一束花、墙上的一幅画等，通过对这些元素的描
写营造出特定的氛围。
2. 感官体验：运用视觉、听觉、嗅觉、触觉和味觉等多种感官进行描述，让读者仿佛身临其
境，“看到”“听到”“感受到”故事中的细节。
3. 情感传达：明确表达具体的情绪，并将情绪与动作相结合，为后续的动作和行为做好铺垫，使
故事的发展更加自然流畅。
四、特写镜头案例展示
1. 表情描写案例：
- 案例一：
- 细节：眼睛瞪得很大，泪水在眼眶里打转，嘴巴微微张开。
- 感官：看到角色惊讶和痛苦的神情。
- 情感：传递出惊讶与痛苦的情绪。
- 描述：中文：他的眼睛瞪得大大的，泪水在眼眶中打转，最终无声地滑落。他的嘴巴微微张
开，露出惊讶和痛苦的神情。英文：His eyes were wide open, with tears swirling in his sockets before
silently sliding down. His mouth was slightly ajar, revealing an expression of surprise and pain.
- 案例二：
- 细节：眼神犀利、目光集中、瞳孔缩小，嘴微微张开，耳朵竖起，肌肉紧绷。
- 感受：能感受到角色处于饥饿状态。
- 情绪：紧张、激动且坚定。
- 描述：中文：这只猫的眼神犀利且集中，瞳孔紧缩成一条细线，仿佛专注地盯着猎物。它的嘴
微微张开，露出尖锐的牙齿。耳朵竖立，捕捉着周围的每一个声音。它的肌肉紧绷，像弓一样拉紧，
准备随时发力。英文：The cat had a sharp, focused gaze, with its pupils narrowed to thin slits, as if intentlywatching its prey. Its mouth was slightly open, revealing sharp teeth. Its ears stood erect, capturing every sound
around. Its muscles were taut, like a bowstring pulled tight, ready to spring into action.
2. 动作描写案例：
- 细节：手指在键盘上轻柔滑动，弹奏缓慢而精确，指尖轻压按键再慢慢抬起。
- 感官：能“听到”轻柔的音乐。
- 情感：让听众感受到舒缓、优美。
- 描述：中文：手指轻柔地在键盘上滑动，每一次触碰都那么缓慢而精确。指尖轻轻压下每个
键，慢慢地抬起，仿佛在空气中挥舞着一支无形的指挥棒。英文：Fingers gently glided across the
keyboard, each touch slow and precise. The tips pressed down each key softly, lifting slowly as if waving an
invisible baton in the air.
3. 环境描写案例：
- 细节：草叶上挂着露珠，露珠晶莹剔透。
- 感官：视觉上，露珠在阳光下熠熠生辉，像珍珠镶嵌在绿色绒毯上。
- 情感：传递出清新、美好的感受。
- 描述：中文：春雨刚过，每一株草叶都挂着晶莹的露珠。这些小小的水珠在柔和的阳光下熠熠
生辉，像珍珠般镶嵌在绿色的绒毯上。露珠的形状完美无瑕，透明清澈，仿佛大自然的珍宝。英文：
After the spring rain, every blade of grass was adorned with sparkling dewdrops. These tiny droplets shone
brilliantly under the gentle sunlight, like pearls embedded in a green velvet carpet. The dewdrops were
flawlessly shaped, crystal clear, resembling nature's treasures.
模拟演练
On the first day of school, I stared in awe at the huge buildings. This high school was definitely bigger
than the one I had previously attended.
This was my second year of high school, but my first year of school in St. Louis. I had decided the night
before that I would be much happier in a new school if I made friends that were so-called “popular”. Getting in
with the right group of people would make my life a whole lot better. I even bought a new outfit and had myhair styled just so the first day would be perfect.
Scared, yet anxious to begin my new life, I walked up the stairs to the front door. The halls were packed
with kids yelling and laughing and telling stories of their summer adventures. My first class was geometry, but
where was that?
I was standing in the hall looking confused, when a short, blond girl wearing glasses came up and asked,
“Are you new? You look lost. Do you need help? My name is Diane. What’s yours?” Even though she seemed a
bit strange, definitely not the kind of person I wanted to be associated with, I decided to answer her anyway. I
was, after all, lost.
After exchanging names. I followed her up the stairs and down a hallway on the right, making polite
conversation the whole way. When we reached my room she said, “Well, here you are. Welcome to JFK, and I
hope your day goes all right.”
I said thanks and waved good-bye. Once inside the classroom, I saw one big group of people huddled
around someone who seemed to be telling some sort of story. I walked over and got close enough to overhear.
All eyes were glued to the guy in the middle of the circle who was wearing a letter jacket covered with patches.
I decided that this guy was popular, so I managed to get a seat right next to him. I said, “Hi, my name is Lisa
and I’m new here.” He said, “Johnny.”
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At the end of the class, I turned to him and asked, “I’m not sure where my next class is, could you help
me?”
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Just at that time, someone came up and tapped me on the shoulder.
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1．One Possible Version:
At the end of the class, I turned to him and asked, “I’m not sure where my next class is, could you help
me?” With a frown, he looked at me and then said a quick no, turned back to his friends, and walked out of the
classroom. As they were walking out I heard him say, “Did you guys see that new girl trying to get into our
group? That outfit was too strange.” They all laughed and some of them turned around and stared at me. My
face hot with shame, I stood stock-still, not believing what had just happened.
Just at that time, someone came up and tapped me on the shoulder. It was Diane. Like a ray of sunshine,
the big smile on her face swept away my gloom. I struggled to hold my feelings back and told her what I had
encountered. A gleam of concern in her eyes, she said she was sorry and offered to find my next class. At that
moment I realized how wrong I was in wanting to only be friends with popular people. Maybe I shouldn’t
decide whether a person is worth being my friend or not by their reputation, but by who they are.
【导语】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者高中第二年是在圣路易斯的第一年，作者在学校认
识了Diane，Diane给作者指路。结果作者因为穿着被班上的同学嘲笑，Diane也对作者表示了关心，作
者也感悟到不应该只和受欢迎的人交朋友。
【详解】1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“下课的时候，我转向他问：‘我不知道下节课在哪里，你能帮我吗？’”
可知，第一段可描写对方的反应以及作者被嘲笑的经过。
②由第二段首句内容“就在那时，有人走过来拍了拍我的肩膀”可知，第二段可描写Diane帮助作
者以及作者的感悟。
2．续写线索：询问——拒绝——嘲笑——帮助——感悟
3．词汇激活
行为类
①走出：walk out of/step out of
②融入：get into/fit into
③抑制：hold back/restrain
情绪类①奇怪的：strange /odd
②担心：concern /worry
【点睛】[高分句型1] My face hot with shame, I stood stock-still, not believing what had just happened.
(运用了what引导的宾语从句)
[高分句型 2] Maybe I shouldn’t decide whether a person is worth being my friend or not by their
reputation, but by who they are. (运用了whether引导宾语从句)
模拟演练
阅读下面材料, 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段, 使之构成一篇完整的短文。
I had been acting in school for a few years. When I got a rough role in a play, I, only a junior in my high
school, was excited that my inspiring drama teacher and director had trusted me with the part.
We had little time to prepare and I would never forget reading the lines for the first time. At first the
dialogue was lively, but then it became quite long and boring. To my surprise, my character had one
disrespectful line that complained about his bad luck. I had never said something like that on stage before.
Uncomfortable as I felt about it, I had never thought of making myself heard to make a change. I was weak,
went silent, and accepted the line as it was.
At our first rehearsal (彩排), I whispered, the line and hoped with so many distractions on stage that the
director wouldn’t notice. Luckily, she didn’t. Over three wild weeks of rehearsals, I convinced myself that I
could keep faking it. Then, when the curtain finally rose with an audience, maybe I would feel fine about saying
the line just once as loudly as I could.
On the night of the open dress rehearsal, I was nervous to see an old couple, the Ehlers, seated in the hall.
They were close friends of our family and I had no idea they would be there. When the big moment arrived,
with nervousness racing through my body, I went for it. I remember the moment quite clearly. Where I stood.
How it sounded. How I felt.
After the show, the Ehlers met me with cheers, a warm hug, and some brief dialogue of their own. While
talking with them, I was overwhelmed by mixed feelings of regret and shame.
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I said goodbye to the couple and waited in the drama room until our director appeared.
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“Jason, that was quite some language. You surprised us,” Mrs. Ehlers looked at me. I told Mrs. Ehlers
frankly that I had been unwilling to say it. Mrs. Ehlers patted me on the shoulder consolingly, suggesting that I
should have told the director to change it. I nodded my head, but still doubted whether the director would let
me. Mrs. Ehlers seemed to have read my mind and said with a soft smile, “Whatever you get is a gain. We have
to stand up and give it a try sometimes, don't we?”
I said goodbye to the couple and waited in the drama room until our director appeared. With my heart
racing, I stood near her desk and casually asked if I might possibly change the disrespectful line in the play to a
more decent one. She sank into silence for a moment and replied, “Your replacement is indeed more
appropriate. Thank you!” Agreeably surprised by her response, I left with a mixture of gratitude, humility,
respect and shame. From that moment on, I felt increasingly confident and proud to share my views with others.
【导语】本文以故事的发展线索展开，讲述了作者在中学时，老师和导演给了他一个角色让他出
演，在第一次读台词时发现里面有一句不礼貌的台词。尽管作者自己读到的时候感觉不舒服，但还是
在一次一次的排练时用了那句台词，在公开彩排的时候，作者家的好朋友也来了，听到了作者使用的
那句台词后，与作者进行了交流。
【详解】1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容““Jason，你说的话真太厉害了。你让我们大吃一惊，” Rhlers太太看着
我。”可知，第一段可描写作者与Rhlers太太交流了那句台词的事情，给作者提出什么建议。
②由第二段首句内容“我告别了这对夫妇，在戏剧室里等着，直到我们的导演出现。”可知，第
二段可描写作者与导演交流了些什么，问题有没有得到解决。2．续写线索：Ehlers太太的问候——作者坦白心情——Ehlers太太提出建议——等到导演——说
出台词问题——解决问题——感想
3．词汇激活
行为类
①.拍肩膀：patsb. on the shoulder/tab sb on the shoulder
②.理解某人：read one’s mind/understand/grasp/catch sb.
③.陷入：sink into/be lost in
情绪类
①使.惊讶：surprise/amaze/astonish
②.有信心的：confident /secure
【点睛】[高分句型1]. Ehlers patted me on the shoulder consolingly, suggesting that I should have told
the director to change it. （运用了现在分词做状语以及that引导的宾语从句）
[高分句型2]. With my heart racing, I stood near her desk and casually asked if I might possibly change
the disrespectful line in the play to a more decent one. （运用了with复合结构和if引导的宾语从句）
[高分句型3]. Agreeably surprised by her response, I left with a mixture of gratitude, humility, respect and
shame. （运用了过去分词作状语）
模拟演练
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Our car ran over the sand and rocks, leaving a cloud of dust. It was a beautiful spring day. The sun was
bright and the sky was clear—perfect conditions for off-roading(越野). Back then, in 1984, my wife Sue and I
were living in southeastern California. The views were wonderful, but with dangers. The temperatures could
rise above 50℃, and it was no place for tourists to go off-roading without enough preparation.
Sue and I always took a bag with us, packed with snacks, water, and a first aid kit. We also had a car
specially changed for driving in the desert. With it, we could go anywhere a jeep could go.
That day, we drove about 20 miles into the park. Around midday,we stopped to have a rest. As usual, we
could see the desert before us. When the spirit of adventure moved us, we went back into the car. But when I
turned the key nothing happened. I tried again and again. Nothing happened. I could see Sue was thinking the
same thing—the engine wouldn’t start.Our car had one strange problem. About once a year, it would refuse to start. If left overnight, the engine
would run just fine the next morning. But no one could find anything wrong with our car. Because it happened
so rarely, we’d just learned to live with it. But it had never happened suddenly.
“What should we do?” I felt a little anxious. I hadn’t seen a person on our drive out here, and we had no
way to call for help.“We could walk back to town,”Sue said. Eager not to waste any more daylight,we quickly
packed our things. We were about to set off when Sue called my name.“Look!” she cried. Sure enough, there
was something, getting closer.
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It wasn’t long before I could make out what it was—a jeep!
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He checked the engine and said, “I know what’s wrong.”
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It wasn’t long before I could make out what it was—a jeep! And it was heading straight for the place we
stayed! There was a man in the driver’s seat. Not a local. Our community was small, and I didn’t recognize him
at all. “You need help?” he asked. “Can you give us a ride back into town?” I asked cautiously.”Our car won’t
start again until it sits overnight.“He thought for a while and asked to take a look at our car. I knew it was
hopeless, but I didn’t want to be rude to a stranger trying to help.
He checked the engine and said, “I know what’s wrong.” The man continued to say, “Lucky for you. I have
that tool with me.” He went to fetch the tool and got to repair our strange car, and after several minutes, theengine began to work again. I felt so surprised, and he told us not to stop again until we got the car home. We
had no words to express our gratitude and Sue wanted to pay him some money, but he shook his head and
climbed into his jeep, continuing his way. Sue and I believed he was an angel who happened to be passing by.
【导语】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者和妻子驱车20英里离开城市去公园欣赏沙漠的美景，
可中午休息后，发现车发动机无法启动了。当他们正准备步行回城时突然看到有东西朝他们越来越近。
【详解】1.段落续写：
①由续写第一段首句“没过多久，我就弄清楚它是什么——一辆吉普车！”可以预测续写第一段
主要内容：吉普车朝作者开过来，作者要求车主搭载他们回城，吉普车主主动提出帮他们看下车的问
题。
②由第二段首句“他检查了发动机，说：‘我知道出了什么问题。’”可以预测续写第二段主要
内容：吉普车主发现车的问题并修好，作者准备支付钱作为报答，吉普车主拒绝了，这让作者感到自
己遇到天使一般。
2．续写线索：作者发现吉普车开过来——请求车主搭载他们回城——吉普车主要求帮他们检查下
车——吉普车主发现车的问题并修好——作者提出现金报答——吉普车主拒绝任何报酬
3．词汇激活
行为类
①.检查：examine/check /inspect/look closely at
②.修理：mend/fix/repair
③.表达我们的感谢：show our thanks / express our gratitude/express our appreciation
情绪类
①.谨慎地： cautiously /prudently/carefully
②.绝望的： hopeless/desperate/in despair
③.惊讶的：surprised/ astonished/ amazed/in surprise
【点睛】[高分句型 1]. We had no words to express our gratitude and Sue wanted to pay him some
money, but he shook his head and climbed into his jeep, continuing his way. （运用了现在分词作状语）
[高分句型2].Sue and I believed he was an angel who happened to be passing by.（运用了who引导的定
语从句）
模拟演练阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
“What a crabby-looking lady (怨妇),” the cashier at my local convenience store whispered to her
coworker. I was grabbing something off the shelf. I had a half dozen kids waiting for me outside in the van, and
here’s the thing: they were all my own children. No time for polite. No casual conversation with the checkout
lady, no nod of approval toward the stock boy, no breathing. Just get the toilet paper, two gallons of milk and
some Frosted Flakes and get back to my children!
But my interest was aroused by the crabby-looking lady. Which one was she? Taking a family pack of
toilet paper under my arm, I scanned the tiny store for the crabby lady. Let’s see, there’s a middle-aged guy
checking on pork, an older gentleman at the checkout purchasing an egg salad sandwich and a coffee, and... just
then I saw her, the crabby-looking lady.
Her eyes were small; her brown hair was pulled back in a ponytail so tight that it looked like her forehead
would drop. Her mouth was shut serious. This lady looked like she had smelled something really bad. Then, I
turned away from my own reflection in the convex security mirror (安全反射镜) at the back of the store. The
crabby-looking lady... was me!
That night, I cried. I was the crabby-looking lady! Me! The girl once voted nicest smile by her high school
class! Things must get changed! Right then and there I resolved to do one thing over the next year. One simple
resolution: to smile. I didn’t need to wait for January 1st — I would start right now.
I resolved to smile at anyone and anything, even though they would let me down. And I also resolved to
make a conscious effort to smile, at least ten times a day.
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2． 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
The first day of “Mission Smile” I practiced smiling as planned.
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After practicing a month, unexpectedly, something different happened.
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One possible version:
The first day of “Mission Smile” I practiced smiling as planned. I smiled at a strange dog who peed on my
daughter’s new school shoes while she was in them, the salesman to the door, three of my six children, a
librarian who asked me if I was aware of the global overpopulation problem, and my bathtub. I even smiled at
my husband over the phone when he called to say he’d be late from work. And I smiled at myself in the mirror
twice, just to remind myself what a smile looked like.
After practicing a month, unexpectedly, something different happened. I didn’t even try to find things to
smile at and I’d still notice smile take over my face. When my daughter loaded the dishwasher with her socks, I
smiled. When we were really late for church, I smiled. One day I was meeting a couple of friends at a local
coffee shop. I overheard the cashier remark to her co-worker, “What a happy-looking lady!" And I didn’t even
have to look around to know who she was talking about. It was me!
【导语】本文以人物线索展开，讲述了作者在超市匆忙买东西时无意间听到收银员们评论一位女
士脾气暴躁，作者想知道这名女士到底是谁，结果从安全镜中发现竟然是自己，晚上作者伤心地哭了，
当下决定要做一件事情：学会微笑。
【详解】1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“‘使命微笑’的第一天，我按计划练习微笑。”可知，第一段可描写作者
在具体不同的场景下开始练习微笑。
②由第二段首句内容“练习了一个月后，出乎意料的是，不同的事情发生了。”可知，本段应该
写练习微笑一个月给作者带来的影响和变化。
2．续写线索：计划练习微笑——在不同场景下学会微笑——练习微笑一个月后的变化——收银员
对作者的新评价
3．词汇激活
行为类
①练习：practice/train
②穿：be in/wear/put on
③意识到：be aware of/be conscious of
情绪类
①出乎意料地：unexpectedly/ surprisingly
【点睛】[高分句型1]. I smiled at a strange dog who peed on my daughter’s new school shoes while she
was in them, the salesman to the door, three of my six children, a librarian who asked me if I was aware of theglobal overpopulation problem, and my bathtub. （运用了who引导的限制性定语从句、while引导的时间
状语从句和if引导的宾语从句）
[高分句型2]. And I smiled at myself in the mirror twice, just to remind myself what a smile looked like.
（运用了不定式短语作目的状语和what引导的宾语从句）
[高分句型3]. And I didn’t even have to look around to know who she was talking about.（运用了who引
导的宾语从句）
模拟演练
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
When Christmas rolled around, I always got the tree up. And Christmas Eve found me placing an envelope
on the tree.
It was just a small, white envelope with a note of what I had done, stuck among the branches of our
Christmas tree. It all began because my husband Mike hated Christmas. Oh, not the true meaning of Christmas,
but the commercial aspects of it, overspending, the gifts given in desperation because you couldn’t think of
anything else.
Knowing he felt this way, I decided one year to bypass (避开) the usual shirts, sweaters, ties and so on. I
tried to find a special present just for Mike. The inspiration came in an unusual way.
Our son, Kevin, who was 12 that year, was wrestling at the junior level at the school he attended, and
shortly before Christmas, there was a non-league match against a team Sponsored by an inner-city church.
These youngsters, dressed in sneakers so ragged (褴褛的) that shoes seemed to be the only thing holding
them together, presented a sharp contrast to our boys in the spiffy blue and gold uniforms and sparkling new
wrestling hoes. As the match began I was alarmed to see that the other team was wrestling without headgear, a
kind of light helmet designed to protect a wrestler’s cars. It was a luxury the ragged team obviously could not
afford. Well, we ended up defeating them. We took every weight class.
Mike, seated beside me, shook his head sadly, “I wish one of them could have won,” he said. They have a
lot of potential, but losing like this could take the heart right out of them.”Mike loved kids, all kids, and he
knew them, having coached little league football, baseball and lacrosse.
注意:
1．续写词数应为150左右;2．请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
That was when the idea of his Christmas present came.
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Feeling their dad’s happiness, my children joined me.
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That’s when the idea for his present came. That afternoon, I went to a local sporting goods store and
bought an assortment of wrestling headgear and shoes and sent them anonymously to the inner-city church. On
Christmas Eve, I placed the envelope on the tree, the note inside telling Mike what I had done and that this was
his gift from me. His smile was the brightest thing about Christmas that year and in succeeding years.
Feeling their dad’s happiness, my children joined me. Each of our children, unbeknownst to the others, had
placed an envelope on the tree for their dad. The tradition has grown and someday will expand even further
with our grandchildren standing around the tree with wide-eyed anticipation watching as their fathers take
down the envelope. Mike’s spirit, like the Christmas spirit, will always be with us.
【导语】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者的丈夫并不喜欢圣诞节，于是作者想到了给她丈夫
送一份特殊的圣诞礼物，一个信封，里面讲述了作者所做的一切，为了使他的丈夫在圣诞感到快乐。
【详解】1.段落续写
①由第一段首句内容“就在这时，想到了给他送什么圣诞礼物。”可知，第一段主要写送了什么
圣诞礼物给Mike，并使他感到高兴。
②由第二段首句内容“感受到父亲的幸福，我的孩子们也加入了我的行列。”可知，第二段可写，
我的孩子们也趁大家不注意的时候，在圣诞树上放了一封写给爸爸的信。并且把这个传统延续下去。
2． 续写线索：mike不喜欢圣诞——想到礼物——mike看到礼物感到高兴——孩子们加入进来
——传统延续。
3． 词汇激活
行为类
①购买：buy/purchase
②放置：place/put/lay up
③扩大：expand/enlarge/develop
情绪类
①幸福：happiness/gladness/contentment②预期：anticipation/expectation
【点睛】[高分句型1.] On Christmas Eve, I placed the envelope on the tree, the note inside telling Mike
what I had done and that this was his gift from me.(what和that引导的宾语从句)
[高分句型 2.]The tradition has grown and someday will expand even further with our grandchildren
standing around the tree with wide-eyed anticipation watching as their fathers take down the envelope.(as 引导
的时间状语从句)
