【试题研究】让读后续写不止是续写

昨天指导学生完成了一篇遭遇自然灾害的读后续写，让我印象深刻的不是续写的情节有多么曲折，也不是升华有多么精彩，而是在阅读原文时就已经被优美的语句深深吸引，于是我在早读时布置了任务，让学生认真朗读续写的原文而不是续写范文，还说上课时我要对原文里的表达进行检测，并提取句型让学生进行仿写训练。

【续写原文】

Luka was a 12-year-old boy who loved spending summer weekends at his uncle's seaside cottage(小屋). ①The cottage lay quietly beside peaceful blue bay, surrounded by dense pine trees.②The fresh sea wind, soft sand and singing birds alway made Luka feel relaxed and joyful. Every time he came here, he would walk along the shore, pick up colorful shells and watch the waves gently beat the coast.

This summer was no different. On a bright Saturday morning, Luka arrived the cottage alone. Uncle Tom told him that the weather forecast was fine and there was no needto worry about storms. Feeling excited, Luka took his small bucket and headed for the quiet beach to collect shells. He ran freely on the soft sand, enjoying the beautiful scenery.

③However, the weather changed unexpectedly in the afternoon. Dark gray clouds gathered quickly in the sky. The gentle wind turned strong, blowing wildly across the sea. The originally calm seawater became restless. Huge waves began to roll towards the shore one after another.

④Realizing the coming danger, Luka became frightened. He knew a sea storm was on the way. He tried to run back to the cottage, but the the strong wind almost blew him down. The tide(潮水) rose rapidly, covering the path he had walked just now. ⑤He was trapped on a small sandy bank not far from the shore. The seawater kept rushing forward, washing away his bucket and shells. Luka felt helpless and nervous.

Just as he didn't know what to do, Uncle Tom rushed towards him against the strong wind.

【原文笔记】

1.dense forest=thick forest 茂密的森林

2.weather forecast 天气预报

3.head for/to... 朝...去

4.unexpectedly 没有预料到地

5.originally 最初的，原始的

6.restless 不安的

7.be on the way 即将到来

一句多译：一次重要的考试即将到来。

An important exam is coming/approaching.

An important exam is on the way.

An important exam is around the corner.

An important exam is drawing near.

8.be trapped in...=be stuck/caught in... 被困于/陷入...

9.against the strong wind 顶着大风

【课堂检测及句型仿写】

【续写首句】

Para1: Uncle Tom held Luka's hand tightly and guided him to move step by step.

Para2: After the storm finally passed, the whole beach became quiet again.

学生的习作中往往存在着忽略首句提示，情节跳脱的问题，比如这次的续写首段，我问学生首段提示句里哪个词最重要，他们有的说held，有的说move, 但其实guide这个词才提示了我们第一段要写的内容。既然是叔叔guide我，说明我的心情是害怕担心，没有勇气冒着暴风雨前行，甚至还有可能想要放弃，而叔叔一定是耐心的安慰和鼓励我，并且紧紧拉着我brave the storm，最终安全到达小屋，这些情节便是续写第一段要描写的场景。可是有的同学一句话“Finally, they arrived at the cottage.” 就结束了这个本该非常精彩的画面。

关于衔接，第二段的续写很有代表性。暴风雨过后海岸恢复平静，接着写什么？学生说他们俩的所思所想，没错，但是在这之前是不是应该先描述一下他们站在屋内看到外面暴风雨过后的一片狼藉？这里我问学生，课文The night the earth didn't sleep里是怎样描述地震之后的满目疮痍？大部分同学都开始翻书，只有极少数边想边说：“Everywhere survivors looked, there was nothing but ruins." （幸存者目光所及之处全是废墟）我趁机追问，我们能不能把这句话借鉴过来用于第二段的衔接？当然可以！“他和叔叔目光所及之处全是一片狼藉”→Everywhere Luka and his uncle looked, there was nothing but messes.

课文截图（首句）

我想用这样的例子告诉学生，课文里有许多值得借鉴的句子，拿过来加工一下立刻就变成你考试中”趁手的武器“，但前提是要好好诵读课文，尝试复述，而不是整个早读的时间都用在背单词表上。单词积累固然重要，但单词表上的单词是”死“的，就像脱离土壤的花朵，认得模样，却不知道它该在何时何处怎样绽放；而被放进语境里的单词，就像栽回到沃土的鲜花，你看懂它生长的场景，明白它绽放的姿态，知道什么时候可以采摘使用。

【续写范文欣赏】

【反思】

1.回归读后续写底层逻辑：读是写的前提。

2.在主题语境中积累地道表达，告别孤立的背单词和短语。

3.输入有温度，利用填空、仿写等方式降低写作畏难情绪。

4.对接高考命题趋势，做好教考衔接。

总之，“读”不是手段，其本身就是重要的学习内容；原文不仅是续写的引子，更是宝贵的语言学习范本，我们要好好利用它。