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考向 41 读后续写之外貌、性格与环境描写
在读写续写过程中，在沿用原文语言特点的情况下，围绕原文主旨，续写部分可利用恰当的词语描述人物
的外貌、性格和周围的环境，丰富续写情节，从而进一步提升续写语篇的可读性。
第一部分 外貌性格描写
一、外貌性格描写的3个原则
①进行外貌描写时，可写对一个人的总体印象，也可以抓住人物重要的外貌特征或性格特点进行描述。如
攻略3例题原文中第一段对妈妈性格的描写，采用了loving, sweet, absentminded和forgetful等形容词，使一个可
爱又健忘的妈妈的形象跃然纸上。
②可以具体描述人物的五官、着装，甚至可以配上动作描述。
③在描写人物片段时，可写你对人物印象最深的一两点，再加上一两句人物评价。
二、外貌与性格描写的高分素材
（一）外貌描写
(1) 她圆圆的脸上有一双蓝色的眼睛，还有两个可爱的酒窝。
①On her round face are a pair of blue eyes and lovely dimples. (倒装句型)
②She is a girl with a pair of blue eyes and lovely dimples on her round face. (with 引导的介宾结构作后置定语，
补充说明人物信息)
(2)李老师三十多岁，身材适中，常梳着马尾辫。
①Miss Li is in her thirties with a medium build and has her hair in a ponytail. (由and连接的并列句；with短语用
作状语，表示伴随状态)
②Miss Li is a mediumsized woman in her thirties who often wears/ties her hair in a ponytail. (定语从句补充介绍
人物特征)
③Miss Li, in her thirties, is of medium size, and often has her hair tied in a ponytail. (“be of ＋ adj. ＋ n．”结
构表示人或物具有某种特征。常用的名词有：size, height, weight, build, age, shape等)
（二）性格描写
①Such is Ms. Han, an easygoing, kind and warmhearted woman.
韩老师是一个随和善良又热心肠的女人。
②Though he comes from a poor family, he is a person of great determination and courage.
他虽出身贫寒，但拥有坚强的意志和勇气。
第二部分 环境描写
一、环境描写的4个原则
①选择与主题和情节设置一致的环境要素，以营造故事发生的特定环境。
②细致深入。所选的景物一定要运用所学的词汇和句法进行细致深入的描写。
③添加附加信息，如天气变化和周边的景物等，如昏暗的路灯、摇曳的树影等。
④环境细节描写一定要与动作和心理活动等相结合，才能更好地完成续写任务。
例如：攻略3第一段续写中可适当描写一下在帐篷中过夜时周围的环境，突出作者内心的祥和、快乐。
二、环境描写的高分素材
①It was beginning to snow, and snowflakes were blinding my eyes.天开始下雪了，雪花让我看不清了。
②The sun was breaking through the blanket of mist.
太阳穿过薄雾。
③Summer sees the mountains turn bright green with growing rice. During autumn, these same mountains are flash
gold, and in winter they are covered in sheets of white frost.
夏天，水稻生长群山绿意盎然。秋天漫山铺金，冬天银装素裹。
④A little way off was a little brook, rushing and sparkling along between green banks.
不远处有一条小溪，在绿色的两岸之间奔流不息，波光粼粼。
【典例示例】(2017·浙江高考11月卷改编)
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150
左右。
A Vacation with My Mother
I had an interesting childhood: It was filled with surprise and amusements, all because of my mother—， ， and
yet and . One strange family trip we took when I was eleven tells a lot about her.
My two sets of grandparents lived in Colorado and North Dakota, and my parents decided to spend a few weeks
driving to those states and seeing all along the way. As the first day of our trip approached, David, my eightyearold
brother, and I unwillingly said goodbye to all of our friends. Who knew if we'd ever see them again? Finally, the moment
of our departure arrived, and we loaded suitcases, books, games, camping equipment, and a tent into the car and bravely
drove off. We bravely drove off again two hours later after we'd returned home to get the purse and traveler's checks
Mom had forgotten.
David and I were always a little nervous when using gas station bathrooms if Mom was driving while Dad slept.
“You stand outside the door and play lookout while I go, and I'll stand outside the door and play lookout while you go.” I
had terrible pictures in my mind: “Honey, where are the kids？” “What？！ Oh, Gosh ... I thought they were being
awfully quiet.” We were never actually left behind in a strange city, but we weren't about to take any chances.
On the fourth or fifth night, we had trouble finding a hotel with a vacancy. After driving in vain for some time,
Mom suddenly got a great idea: Why didn't we find a house with a likelylooking backyard and ask if we could set up the
tent there? David and I became nervous. To our great relief, Dad turned down the idea. Mom never could understand our
objections. If a strange family showed up on her front doorsteps, Mom would have been delighted. She thinks everyone
in the world as nice as she is. We finally found a vacancy in the next town.
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The next day we remembered the brandnew tent we had brought with us.
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We drove through several states and saw lots of great sights along the way.【描写刻画】
1．细读原文，明确叙述意图
原文基调轻松、温暖。通过介绍一次出游经历，描述妈妈健忘、心不在焉、善良、爱孩子的性格特征。第
一段概括妈妈的性格特征；第二段以妈妈遗落钱包的事情来说明妈妈健忘；由第三段担心妈妈遗忘孩子的事，
说明妈妈心不在焉，同时侧面反映孩子的靠谱、沉稳； 由最后一段倒数第二和第三句可看出妈妈很善良。
根据人物性格特征，结合续写第二段首句可推测，续写时应设计一件有趣的事来体现“快乐、母爱、温情、
亲情”。
2．根据段落开头语，确定续写方向
※根据续写第一段首句中的关键词“we remembered the brandnew tent”可知，该段应着重描写围绕帐篷发生
的有趣的。
※根据续写第二段首句中的关键词“along the way”可推断第二段可描述一路上妈妈对孩子的关爱。结合首
句中关键词“great sights”，可简单进行环境描写与原文呼应。
3．围绕原文主旨，进行人物性格和环境描写
①在描写母亲时，以原文对母亲性格的描写为依据，描述一件小事突出母亲的健忘和心不在焉；也利用一
些描述性的词语，如read、sing、warmth、comfortable、safe、laughter等描写旅途中母亲所表现出的母爱。这些
描写能使母亲的形象更加丰满、高大，“母爱”溢于言表。
②根据原文标题中的关键词vacation，和原文第二段中的“all her sights along the way”，可推断出续写部分
可适当进行环境描写，体现和母亲共度假期的快乐，一家人的亲情。
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The next day we remembered the brandnew tent we had brought with us. Mom insisted that we should make
full use of it since we had brought it. David and I looked at Dad, hoping he could refuse her crazy idea again, but to our
great disappointment, he agreed with Mom's idea. So we set up the tent at the foot of the mountain by a river. “Oh, I
forgot the pillows！” Mom screamed out before we slept. Finally, we had to collect some grass as our pillows. Despite
the ache of my neck, I enjoyed the nice night with fresh air and millions of stars.
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We drove through several states and saw lots of great sights along the way. The tent became a close friend
then. Every time we camped, Mom read a book or sang a soft song. The warmth of her arms let us feel comfortable and
safe. Though she was forgetful and absentminded, laughter accompanied us along the way. Finally we met our two sets
of grandparents and enjoyed family happiness. This trip made me experience my mother's and family's love.
【检测训练】
1. 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。My name is Manan, and I am in the sixth grade. Of all the festivals, Diwal is a Hindu festival that is celebrated in
autumn, is my favorite because I can set off fireworks and eat delicious foods during the festival.
One day, I went shopping for fireworks with my grandfather. I was looking at the brightly colored fireworks when
suddenly I bumped into a little boy. All my fireworks scattered out of the bag.
I quickly bent down to pick them up. Then I noticed the boy’s face was full of wonder and amazement as he stared
at my fireworks. It appeared as though he had never seen any this closely. When he bent down to pick them up, I
snatched them from him and quickly put them back in my bag. As I stood there looking at him, I realized there was
something different about this boy. His clothes were old and torn; he looked as though he had not eaten for a few days.
On reaching home, I finished my dinner quickly and ran out to set off the fireworks. I was fascinated by the variety
of colors that burst open from the fireworks and lit up the sky, but my wonder was short-lived. I noticed that my
grandfather had gone inside the house coughing. Wondering why, I looked around and noticed all the smoke that may
have been irritating his throat. Feeling bad for only a second, I continued lighting the fireworks one after another. But,
inside me, it felt different—I felt guilty about taking pleasure from bursting the fireworks.
I could feel my conscience pricking me, “Manan! How can you do this? It just takes a few minutes for all the
money to disappear in smoke, but the boy you met today looked like he did not even have the basic necessities of life.
The children in orphanages also need love and help. Didn’t you see how your fireworks have affected Grandpa too? Can
you still ignore these things and indulge in this kind of fun?” Realizing the worthlessness of this temporary pleasure, I
really wanted to use the money in a more rewarding way. I started thinking about my own way to celebrate Diwali.
注意：
1. 续写词数应为150左右；
2. 请按如下格式在相应位置作答。
I went up to my grandfather and told him about my plan.
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I went up to my grandfather and told him about my plan. He said it was a good idea for me to go to an orphanage
and celebrate the festival with kids there. Later that day, we discussed the idea with my parents and they applauded it.
After some research, my whole family decided to visit “Happy Home”. Finally, on Diwali we arrived there with cake,
clothes, sweets, games, and gifts for everyone.
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Soon enough, the orphanage was filled with laughter, joy and celebration. We sang songs, danced, told jokes, and
played games. And we even set off fireworks together! Just then, a boy walked up to me and said, “Thank you so much!
We’ve never had so much fun before. “Feeling satisfied from within, I looked at my grandfather who was telling stories
to them. Even before we realized, it was already time for us to leave. We said goodbye to them, promising to come back
again soon. I felt very happy because this Diwali was celebrated in such a rewarding way. This was indeed the best
Diwali I’ve celebrated so far!
【写作分析】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者在买节日烟花时，遇到了一个衣服又旧又破，看上去好像几
天没吃东西的男孩，男孩看到烟花很惊讶。作者放完烟花后发现爷爷因为烟花的刺激不断咳嗽，意识到这种暂
时的快乐毫无价值，应该把钱用在更有意义的地方。于是作者和一家人去孤儿院看望了孤儿甚至一起放烟花，
作者感觉这是是自己迄今为止庆祝过的最好的排灯节。
【写作步骤】
1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“我走到爷爷面前，把我的计划告诉了他。”可知，第一段可描写爷爷计划去孤儿院和孩
子们庆祝节日，描述他们全家去孤儿院的经过。
②由第二段首句内容“很快，孤儿院就充满了笑声、欢乐和庆祝。”可知，第二段可描写作者他们一家在孤儿
院和孩子们庆祝节日的过程以及作者的感受。
2.续写线索：告诉爷爷计划——全家去孤儿院——和孤儿院孩子庆祝节日——作者感到满足——作者感悟
3.词汇激活
行为类
前往：go to/ head for
决定：decide to/ determine to
充满：be filled with / be full of情绪类
欢乐：joy / happy/ happiness
有益的：rewarding / beneficial
【写作亮点】
[高分句型1] I felt very happy because this Diwali was celebrated in such a rewarding way. (运用了because引导原因
状语从句)
[高分句型2] Feeling satisfied from within, I looked at my grandfather who was telling stories to them. (运用了who引
导定语从句)
2. 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Sometimes things may seem beyond our efforts, but keep on and you will find beautiful views in front of you.
I was on my second outdoor experience trip that every student had to go on. That year, we had a choice of what
difficulty level we wanted: one through five. My friends and I had agreed that one would make us seem lazy and that
challenging ourselves would make for a good story. In choosing level two, we believed that it would still be a fun
experience.
We were quickly proven wrong.
The further we drove into the White Mountains, the higher the walls on either side of the winding highway grew. I
was still in awe of the mountains I had seen so many times before, but I couldn’t help feeling my heart shaking with
anxiety. Soon I would have to leave the school bus that brought 50 students out into the wilderness like every year
before.
My group consisted of my friends, Riley and Ann, and six extremely athletic boys. We arrived at base camp lodge
(木屋) first. After putting things aside and rearranging our bags, we made our way out into the wilderness.
The three of us girls were questioning if this was really a level two. The path was unbelievably steep (陡峭) and
rocky toward the top of the mountain where the first hut was located. We were practically jogging in an attempt to keep
up with the boys ahead of us. Before the trip, we were told to take breaks as often as we needed to drink water, but that
wasn’t helping our pounding hearts and heavy breathing as much as it should have.
Then, 30 minutes into the most difficult hike the three of us had ever done, Riley slipped and landed on her knee.
After a few moments, we turned back down the mountain as it was decided that Riley could not make the trip with us.
We sat on the grass outside the lodge where we had started while Riley was brought inside to join the level one group.
Ann and I exchanged breathless glances, our cheeks red and wet with sweat.
注意: 1. 续写词数应为150左右;
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。“Do you think we should ask if we could join the level one group too?” I asked Ann.
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The next days, although extremely tired, we kept on.
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“Do you think we should ask if we could join the level one group too?” I asked Ann. “I know you won’t,” she
breathed out. “I won’t!” I said to myself, looking at the awesome mountains in the distance. Then we started up the steep
and rocky path again, attempting to keep up with the boys. Our bags felt heavier; legs burned; backs hurt; tears
threatened to spill over our sweat-covered eyes. I wanted nothing more than to turn back and leave right then and there.
But, I couldn’t; I didn’t want to be someone who gave up easily.
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The next days, although extremely tired, we kept on. Ann and I still found ourselves lagging behind the boys.
Instead of embarrassment, I felt as though I was gaining more out of the trip than anyone else. As the boys ran, Ann and I
hung back and took breaks, drinking water and admiring the deep green valleys from high above. Level two was fun, too.
And eventually we made it to the destination. Facing the beautiful views in front of us, I exchanged a glance with Ann,
both of us beaming.
【写作分析】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者和朋友参加远足活动。为了挑战自己，他们选择了二级小组，
途中遇到了很多困难，一度想要放弃。但是作者和朋友互相鼓励，不愿意放弃，最终虽然筋疲力尽，但是到达
了目的地。
【写作步骤】1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“我问安：“你认为我们应该问一下我们是否也可以加入一级小组吗？””可知，第一段
可描写作者和朋友相互鼓励，不愿意放弃。
②由第二段首句内容“接下来的几天，虽然筋疲力尽，我们还是继续。”可知，第二段可描写作者和朋友继续
前行直至目的地。
2.续写线索：选择二级小组——遇到困难——想要退缩——咬牙坚持——到达目的地
3.词汇激活
行为类
①加入：join/become a member of/be a part of
②继续：keep on/go on/continue
③成功：make it/succeed/ be victorious
情绪类
①欣赏：admire/appreciate/enjoy
②开心：beam/smile/ be delighted
【写作亮点】
[高分句型1]“I won’t!” I said to myself, looking at the awesome mountains in the distance.（现在分词作伴随状语）
[高分句型2] I didn’t want to be someone who gave up easily. （由关系代词who引导的定语从句）
[高分句型3] As the boys ran, Ann and I hung back and took breaks, drinking water and admiring the deep green valleys
from high above.（as引导的时间状语从句）
3. 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
“At the beginning of the COVID-19, I went through some painful personal stuff and would often go out at night for
long walks because no one was around and I couldn't sleep any-way,” Kelly wrote on Twitter.
“One night I was walking down my street and noticed that someone had set up a few little objects in a tree planter
and upon closer inspection, I realized it was a fairy garden with a little note about the 4-year-old girl, Eliana, who felt
lonely in quarantine (隔离期) and wanted to spread some cheer.”
Kelly wrote a note to Eliana pretending to be a fairy named Sapphire that had come to live in the tree. “I said I
would gift her a magical fairy dice (骰子) if she did 3 things for me,” Kelly said. Kelly put the note in a small bottle
filled with glitter and placed it in the garden, unsure if she would get a response.
The next day, she found a handwritten letter from Eliana explaining she had completed all of Sapphire's tasks. Kelly
said she immediately burst into tears. “So I left a bunch of my dice that had small imperfections and left her another note
and also a little extra note for her parents with my name and phone number so they could contact me and know I wasn'tsome bad person leaving notes for their small child,” Kelly said.
“Doing this every night gave me purpose in a horribly painful and lonely time,” Kelly said. “I looked forward to my
days again and started ordering art supplies and little toys to leave her.”
“We wrote back and forth throughout the last 9 months, helping each other feel less lone-ly and I got to chat with
her mom via text to make sure my gifts were a little more personal.”
注意:
1. 续写的词数应为150左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
The girl's mother told Kelly that they were moving to another city.
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The girl's mother preferred Kelly to act as a fairy to say goodbye to her daughter.
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The girl's mother told Kelly that they were moving to another city. After that they could no longer run the fairy
garden. She had reached an agreement with the community that planned to turn it into a park for local resi-dents to relax
in. But her daughter did not want to leave the garden, and she had cried several times. She was even more unwilling to
leave her dear fairy. Her mother wanted Kelly to meet her daughter personally. But she wasn't sure how to make her
daughter happy.
The girl's mother preferred Kelly to act as a fairy to say goodbye to her daughter. Kelly accepted the girl's mother's
request. Then they agreed on a time and a place to meet. On the day of the meeting, Kelly ap-peared in front of the girl
dressed like a fairy. The little girl was surprised and delighted to see her. They joined hands and started dancing. Shechatted excitedly with Kelly for a long time. Kelly gave her many gifts that she liked. The girl made Kelly promise that
Kelly would visit her often.
【写作分析】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了主人公Kelly在新冠疫情期间非常苦闷和孤独，有一天她发现了
一个童话花园，里面有一张关于4岁女孩Eliana的小纸条，她在隔离中感到孤独想传播一些欢乐。于是Kelly假
装是一个住在树上的名叫Sapphire的仙女，给Eliana留纸条说如果Eliana为她做三件事，就会给她一个神奇的
仙女骰子。Eliana为她做了这三件事，于是Kelly就送给了她骰子。她们之间的互动就这样继续下去，互相温暖
了彼此。后来小女孩一家要搬去另一个城市，Kelly以仙女的模样出现向小女孩告别。
【写作步骤】
1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“女孩的母亲告诉Kelly他们要搬到另一个城市去。”可知，第一段可描写小女孩不愿意
离开童话花园和她亲爱的仙女，于是小女孩的妈妈希望Kelly能见一见她。
②由第二段首句内容“女孩的母亲更喜欢Kelly扮演仙女，向女儿道别。”可知，第二段可描写Kelly接受了女
孩的妈妈的要求，扮成仙女出现在女孩面前，小女孩非常兴奋和开心。
2.续写线索：改造花园——伤心不舍——请求见面——出现——愉快相处——送礼物——承诺
3.词汇激活
行为类
①打算：plan/intend
②改造：turn into/transform into
③出现：appear/arise
情绪类
①不情愿的：unwilling/reluctant
②高兴的：happy/delighted
【写作亮点】
[高分句型1] She had reached an agreement with the community that planned to turn it into a park for local residents to
relax in. (运用了that引导的定语从句)
[高分句型2] On the day of the meeting, Kelly appeared in front of the girl dressed like a fairy. (运用了过去分词作状
语)
4. 阅读下面材料, 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段, 使之构成一篇完整的短文。
I was born and grew up in the north of Scotland, which was not far from the sea. When I was little, I enjoyed the
seaside scenery very much. I often sat on the rock by the sea and watched the view of the sea. I was fond of playing with
the sand on the beach and chased the waves with my old sister, Alastair.
Across the beach there was a tidal(潮汐)island, which means that when the tide goes out, you can walk to it, butwhen the tide comes in again, you can’t get to it. Mum and Dad never let us go there. They told us that it was dangerous.
However, the tidal island was full of mystery to me. I said to myself, “There must be some fascinating scenery worth
exploring. How I wish I had a chance to land on it!”
On a little cold day in October, while my parents were away for a friend’s wedding, my sister was determined to
take me to the beach near our house, where we would have a good time. I wanted to build sand castles.
When we arrived at the beach, the tide was out. We ran on the beach back and forth and enjoyed ourselves very
much. With the help of my sister, I made several sand castles of different shapes. Feeling a little tired, I sat on the beach
for a break. I saw the tidal island opposite, which looked very nice in the autumn sunshine.
“Let’s go to explore the tidal island, Alastair,” I said to my sister.
“That’s a good idea. But Mum and Dad said we couldn’t. Maybe we won’t return safely!” Alastair said.
“Don’t worry! We’ll try to return before the tide comes in again.” I begged Alastair.
Finally she agreed. We returned home and brought some peanut butter sandwiches and a bottle of milk with us.
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Then we set off for the tidal island.
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Then we set off for the tidal island. We walked over the sand to the island and started to explore. There was an old
ruined church and a few abandoned buildings full of mysteries. Seagulls were flying in the sky, wild flowers blooming
by the roadside. On the other side of the island we enjoyed milk and sandwiches, throwing stones into the sea. After a
bit, dark clouds covered the sun and it got windy. I said, “I’m cold and I want to go home.” We walked back over the
island to the beach. But we couldn’t find it! It wasn’t there any more!
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The tide came in and covered the beach and the water was too deep and cold for me. We were in a dangerous
situation. Frightened, I couldn’t help crying. “Calm down,” shouted Alastair. “Quick! We have to return before it’s too
late! Climb on my back quickly.” The water was up to her lap, but Alastair was very strong and struggled through thewaves with me on her back. We managed to return to the land safely. Later, our parents learned what had happened to us.
They were scared and criticized us. We promised not to risk ourselves again.
【写作分析】本文以潮汐岛为线索展开，作者从小生活在海边，常和姐姐Alastair去海边玩耍，海边有一个潮汐
岛，父母不允许她们去那里，告诫她们那里很危险，但十月的某一天姐妹二人还是决定上岛探索。
【写作步骤】
1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“然后我们动身前往潮汐岛”可知，联系第二段首句内容，第一段可描写两人上岛的所见
所闻，但没来得及在涨潮前赶回，遭遇了危险。
②由第二段首句内容“潮水涌过来，漫过了海滩，对我来说水太深太冷了”可知，第二段可描写作者和姐姐设
法脱险，最终平安归来。
2.续写线索：岛上见闻——晚归涨潮——遭遇危险——设法脱险——平安回家
3.词汇激活
行为类
①出发：set out/set off/depart
②.回家：go back home/return home
③.探索：explore/discover/seek
情绪类
①.惊慌失措：scared/lose one’s head/panicked
②.惬意：cozy/agreeable
【写作亮点】
[高分句型1]. Later, our parents learned what had happened to us.（由连接词what引导的宾语从句作learned的宾
语）
[高分句型2]. Frightened, I couldn’t help crying.（使用了形容词Frightened作状语）
5. 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Finally, the bell rang. “Don’t forget to practice your class presentation at home!” Miss Bella cried as everyone
started talking and packing their school bags. Jessy felt sick. She hated having to read aloud in class. She was sure
everyone got really bored listening to her. Once, when Jessy was reading out her holiday diary, Lee was even looking at
his watch, a silver and blue one which seemed just magical.
Jessy watched Lee walk ahead of her as they left school. He seemed so clever, and he had a certain sort of shining
confidence. He was just one of those people who were good at everything. Jessy sighed. As she turned the corner, she
saw Lee’s watch lying right in the middle of the path.Jessy knew she should just pick it up and return it to him, but she didn’t want to run after him. Jessy bent down
quickly, picked up the watch and ran home. On arriving home, Jessy put it on almost without thinking. She was surprised
it fitted so well. She walked to the mirror and started practicing her speech. Words just flooded out of her. “I’m going to
talk about swimming. I have been lucky. I’ve won lots of competitions. But when I’m in a race, I’m not really thinking
about winning. I’m just loving the feeling of being in the water…” Jessy laughed with excitement. She walked across the
room. She suddenly seemed to have a certain sort of confidence. Turning back to the mirror, Jessy saw a flash of light
from the watch in the glass. The flashes of silver seemed almost magical. So maybe Lee’s watch really DID have
something magic about it.
The next day, as the lesson began, Miss Bella asked who was going to be brave and go first. Nobody moved. Jessy
slowly raised her arm. Before Miss Bella could say anything, there was a shout from behind. “She’s stolen my watch!”
Lee said angrily, “It went missing at school yesterday.”
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Everybody was fixing their eyes on Jessy, waiting for an explanation.
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Everybody was fixing their eyes on Jessy, waiting for an explanation. A flush of embarrassment came to her cheeks,
making Jessy biting her lips. Dead silence suddenly fell. Then came Miss Bella’s voice, “Why is Lee’s watch on your
wrist?” Jessy hesitated for a while and decided to tell the truth. However, on second thoughts of the well-prepared speechand the magic of the watch, she changed her mind. “Miss Bella, could I give the speech first and then explain?” She
made a request in a tone of begging.
Miss Bella smiled and asked the class to listen to Jessy’s speech first. Jessy put away her fright, took a deep breath,
and made for the platform. Casting a glance at the sea of faces watching her, Jessy cleared her throat and began her
speech. “I’m going to talk about swimming…” Word began to flood out of her. “What a terrific a speech.” Whispers
went around the classroom, and even Miss Bella nodded with approval. Immediately Jessy finished her speech, a storm
of applause erupted from the class. Relieved, Jessy told everyone the truth, and especially the magic of the watch. She
returned the watch to Lee as she eventually realized the real source of confidence.
【写作分析】本文以人物为线索，讲述女孩Jessy因为曾经课前演讲不愉快的经历，所以提到课前演讲她就很气
馁。想到曾经演讲时，班里一个优秀的全能男孩 Lee一直看着自己的手表，以为那个手表有魔力。恰巧 ，在路
上Jessy捡到了Lee的手表，Jessy知道她应该还回去，但是她并没有。回家以后她毫不犹豫地戴上，发现 Lee
的手表似乎真的有魔力，让她自信，她的演讲也更加流畅了。第二天课上，Jessy难得的举手想做课前演讲，结
果她带着的手表被Lee发现，被质疑偷窃Lee的手表。Jessy请求先演讲再做解释，Jessy的演讲惊艳到了大家。
之后，她告诉大家事实以及这个手表的神奇并把手表还给了Lee。但最终，她意识到真正有魔力的是她的自信。
【写作步骤】
1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“大家都盯着Jessy，等待她的解释。”可知，第一段可描写Jessy在被发现带Lee丢失后
的处境和原因，以及同学们对此的反应。
②由第二段首句内容“Miss Bella微笑着让全班同学先听杰西的演讲。”可知，第二段可描写 Jessy的精彩演讲
以及同学们对Jessy这一精彩表现的反应，最后，以根本原因是Jessy的自信点睛。
2.续写线索：缺乏自信，讨厌课前演讲——捡到手表——带上手表，练习演讲——主动演讲，因手表受到质疑
——演讲惊艳，解释手表疑惑——感悟一切源于自信
3.词汇激活
行为类
①.叹息：sign/groan/let out a groan/heave a sign
②.盯着：fix one’s eyes on/stare at/gaze at
③.瞥一眼：cast a glance at/glance at
情绪类
①.尴尬：A flush of embarrassment came to her cheeks/ feel one’s face reddening with embarrassment
②.缓解紧张： put away one’s fright/take a deep breath/ clear one’s throat
【写作亮点】[高分句型1]. Everybody was fixing their eyes on Jessy, waiting for an explanation. (waiting for an explanation现在分
词做伴随状语)
[高分句型2]. A flush of embarrassment came to her cheeks, making Jessy biting her lips. (making Jessy biting her lips
现在分词做结果状语)
6. 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
It was the swim season, but Elizabeth didn’t like swim meets. She got horribly nervous but not because she wanted
to win. Her nerves came from the possibility that she would do something horribly wrong and let everyone down. The
day of a meet, she would be scared all day.
Recently, Elizabeth’s team announced a special swim night: Members 11 and older would swim a timed 50 meters
in all four strokes and then have pizza. It wasn’t exactly a meet, because it would involve only team members. Elizabeth
countered that it absolutely was a meet because there would be races and timers and so on. But her mother really wanted
her to go. She fought back furiously but finally agreed.
When the day of the special swim night arrived, Elizabeth was nervous. When she got to the pool with her parents,
she became even more nervous.
Her first race was the 50-meter freestyle. She swam her backstroke and breaststroke without incident. It wasn’t fun
for Elizabeth. Her butterflies just kept flapping.
Then it was time for the T-shirt relay, which works like this: One person from each relay team puts on a T-shirt, a
pair of socks, and a swim cap; swims 50 meters; and gets out of the pool. She takes off the clothes and puts them on the
next person, who then swims 50 meters. This continues until everyone on the team has completed a lap.
For some unknown reason, Elizabeth’s relay team chose her to swim the anchor leg（最后一棒）. The team
dressed her in socks and a T-shirt. And then she was off. She seemed to swim faster in the T-shirt and socks than she did
when she wasn’t wearing them.
Approaching the halfway mark, she was still in the lead. Then somebody noticed that one of Elizabeth’s socks had
fallen off and was floating in the pool. “She has to get that sock on before the end of the race,” a swimming official told
Elizabeth’s team, “or you will be disqualified.”
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Everybody on her team started screaming, “Elizabeth! Elizabeth! Stop! Get the sock!”
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Everybody on her team started screaming, “Elizabeth! Elizabeth! Stop! Get the sock!” But she couldn’t hear them.
One of her teammates jumped in the water, grabbed the sock, and threw it at Elizabeth. She still didn’t notice.
Meanwhile, a girl in lane two was gaining on Elizabeth. At this crucial moment, a girl on Elizabeth’s team jumped in the
pool, grabbed the sock, and swam after Elizabeth. She grabbed Elizabeth’s foot. “You have to put the sock on,” the girl
screamed. Elizabeth treaded water while her teammate put on the sock.
By now, the girl in lane two was about to pass Elizabeth. With the sock finally on, Elizabeth swam her heart out for
the last 15 meters. It was close. But finally Elizabeth beat the other girl to the wall for the victory. Wild cheers and loud
applause erupted from the audience. Then came much celebration and joy for the members on Elizabeth’s team. They
hugged and laughed together as if they had won an Olympic event. And, for a few minutes, Elizabeth was the hero.
【写作分析】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了在游泳接力赛中，游最后一棒的伊丽莎白的泳袜意外脱落，她却
由于紧张而浑然不知，如果不在比赛结束前穿上将没有成绩，可是任凭队友怎么呼喊她都没有听见，就在即将
被赶超之时，一位队友跳入泳池跟着伊丽莎白一起游，给她穿上了泳袜，最后她们赢得了比赛，大家都很高兴。
【写作步骤】
1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“她队里的每个队员都开始尖叫，“伊丽莎白！伊丽莎白！停下！去拿泳袜！””可知，
第一段可描写任凭队友怎么呼喊她都没有听见，关键时刻，一位队友跳入泳池跟着伊丽莎白一起游，给她穿泳
袜。
②由第二段首句内容“这时，第二泳道里的那个女孩正要超过伊丽莎白”可知，第二段可描写就在即将被赶超
之时，伊丽莎白的泳袜终于穿上了，她奋力游最后 15米，最后终于赢得了比赛，队员们都很高兴，伊丽莎白成了英雄。
2.续写线索：队友呼喊——浑然不知——队友跳入泳池——即将被赶超——终于穿上泳袜——奋力冲刺——赢
得比赛——高兴——成为英雄
3.词汇激活
行为类
①.抓起：grab /catch hold of
②.呼喊：scream /shout
③.打败：beat sb to the wall/defeat
情绪类
①.高兴：joy / delight
②.喝彩：cheer / applause
【写作亮点】
[高分句型1]. With the sock finally on, Elizabeth swam her heart out for the last 15 meters.（运用了with的复合结
构）
[高分句型2]. They hugged and laughed together as if they had won an Olympic event.（运用了虚拟语气）
7. 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
When I was a baby,my parents always gave me anything I waned. Then my dad died when l was three, and I got
even more stuff as my mom, fiends and family tried to make me feel better. Mom continued to treat me to whatever I
wanted until I was seven and my world changed.
My mom had thought buying houses was a good way to invest her money.But the real estate (房地产) market
crashed. I went from the kid who got an iPod when his tooth fell out and who had the coolest house to hang out in, to
literally haying nowhere to stay. Mom's best fiend Auntie Loren, took us in until Mom could figure out what to do.
After the real estate crash, when I asked fora new toy, or bike, or even to see a movie Mom would say "maybe for
your birthday" or "I'm sorry honey, but we can't really afford that now." I didn't know it then, but Mom had grown up in a
family where money was never a problem, so this change was as big for her as it was for me. My constant requests for
toys and video games were not helping my mom, who was already a widow, deal with her feelings about our new crisis-
our financial situation. But I wasn't used to hearing "no”. So for a year or two I kept asking.
Then something happened that would change my way of thinking forever. My mom had been working hard all year,
just to pay for the necessities, like our water and power bills. When she asked me what I wanted for my birthday, I said I
wanted a new video gaming system . I didn't know it was expensive. All knew was that my friends had them and that I
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On my birthday believing that I would get what I wanted, I opened the gift.
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On my birthday, believing that I would get what I wanted, I opened the gift. I found a piggy bank and a birthday
card. When Mom asked me what I thought, I said I loved them, but she could tell how disappointed I was and she started
crying. I hugged her tighter than I had ever hugged anyone before. I realized how hard she was working and that she
couldn’t afford to give me anything I wished for as most of the money she made went to covering daily expenses.
From then on, I didn’t expect to get everything that I asked for. I learned to treasure the toys and games I had at
hand and to take good care of them. I learned the difference between what I wanted and what I needed. I even got a part-
time job to earn my pocket money and sometimes helped with our living costs. The special birthday gift not only
changed my way of thinking, but also changed my way of life: I grew up to be a responsible person.
【写作分析】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者很小的时候父亲过世，妈妈投资房地产失败导致无家可归，
妈妈的朋友收留了他们，因为妈妈投资失败，作者每次想要买新玩具，自行车或者看电影时，妈妈总是说等他
过生日的时候或者说我们现在买不起。妈妈一直很努力的工作来支付家用。当妈妈问作者过生日想要什么时，
作者说他想要一个新的电子游戏系统。
【写作步骤】
1.段落续写：①由第一段首句内容“在我生日那天，我认为我会得到我想要的，于是我打开了礼物。”可知，第一段可描写
作者打开礼物后看到不是自己想要的礼物时的难过和失望，以及作者对妈妈的理解。
②由第二段首句内容“从那时起，我再也不期望会得到我想要的一切。”可知，第二段可描写作者通过这件事
情后开始珍惜自己所拥有的一切，并开始努力帮助妈妈补贴家用，以及作者的感悟。
2.续写线索：拆礼物——失望——理解——珍惜——成长——感悟
3.词汇激活
行为类
①哭泣：started crying/burst out crying/burst into tears
②.拥抱：hug /embrace/hold sb. in arms
③.意识到：realize/recognize
情绪类
①.失望：disappointed/upset
【写作亮点】
[高分句型1]. When Mom asked me what I thought, I said I loved them, but she could tell how disappointed I was and
she started crying.（由when引导的时间状语从句，what引导的宾语从句，how引导的宾语从句）
[高分句型2]. I realized how hard she was working and that she couldn’t afford to give me anything I wished for as most
of the money she made went to covering daily expenses. （由how和that引导的宾语从句，由关系代词（从句中作
宾语时，可以省略）引导的定语从句）
