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考向 65 读后续写
4 步曲助力续写得高分
【真题再现】
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
(2020·新高考Ⅰ卷)The Meredith family lived in a small community. As the economy was in decline, some people
in the town had lost their jobs. Many of their families were struggling to make ends meet. People were trying to help
each other meet the challenges.
Mrs. Meredith was a most kind and thoughtful woman. She spent a great deal of time visiting the poor. She knew
they had problems, and they needed all kinds of help. When she had time, she would bring food and medicine to them.
One morning she told her children about a family she had visited the day before. There was a man sick in bed, his
wife, who took care of him and could not go out to work, and their little boy. The little boy—his name was Bernard—
had interested her very much.
“I wish you could see him，” she said to her own children, John, Harry, and Clara. “He is such a help to his
mother. He wants very much to earn some money, but I don't see what he can do.”
After their mother left the room, the children sat thinking about Bernard. “I wish we could help him to earn money.”
said Clara. “His family is suffering so much.”
“So do I，” said Harry. “We really should do something to assist them.”
For some moments, John said nothing, but, suddenly, he sprang to his feet and cried, “I have a great idea! I have a
solution that we can all help accomplish (完成)．”
The other children also jumped up all attention. When John had an idea, it was sure to be a good one. “I tell you
what we can do，” said John. “You know that big box of corn Uncle John sent us? Well, we can make popcorn (爆米
花), and put it into paper bags, and Bernard can take it around to the houses and sell it.”
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When Mrs. Meredith heard of John's idea, she thought it was a good one, too.
With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business.
【四步法续写】
第1步 知原文4要素 明确1个主题
故事背景 在社会经济萧条的环境下，大家仍心存善良，互相帮助。
Mrs. Meredith, John, Harry 和Clara, Bernard, the sick man and his
人物
wife
①经济衰退期间人们互助共渡难关；②Mrs. Meredith乐于助人；
原文两情 情节线
③Mrs. Meredith和孩子们讲述Bernard一家的情况；④孩子们商量并找到帮助Bernard的办法
Meredith乐于助人体现的是(caring, willing, helpful)→三个孩子想帮
线
情感线 助Bernard一家，表现的是迫切渴望的情感(eager)→孩子们想出计
划时应该是激动的(excited)
一个主题 love, help and act of kindness
第2步 据2个关键 定续写方向
根据续写部分两个首句中的关键词，确定续写部分情节发展方向，情节要简洁并注意各情节之间的相互衔
接
第3步 两“情”相悦 添加合理细节
两“情”相悦 续写部分情节线和情感线的发展应与原文故事情节线和情感线一致，达到“两情相悦”。
情节线体现的是Meredith乐于助人， Bernard需要帮助→如何助人→双方得偿所愿；情感线的走向应该是激动
和感激(excited and grateful)。
添加4细节 ①动作细节：续写第一段添加孩子取出叔叔送的那袋子玉米，准备纸袋的动作细节，呼应原
文最后一段的细节；②情感细节：在刻画 Bernard一家的激动感激的情感时，可利用介词短语；③心理细节：
原文最后一句可描写Bernard的心理活动，升华主旨，也呼应原文主题；④环境细节：第二段可添加环境描写，
渲染经济状况不好的人们，愿意掏钱买爆米花帮助Bernard，同时呼应首段末句，再次反映原文与续写部分的同
一个主题： love, help and act of kindness。
第4步 沿用原文语言特点 优美连贯表达
原文利用简单句、并列句、非谓语动词和主从复合句，进行动作描写、对话描写及一定的环境描写，因此
续写部分可利用适当的并列句、非谓语动词和复合句进行动作和心理描写。可利用 after that, later, on returning,
although恰当过渡衔接。
【参考范文】【策略回顾】
读后续写 4 步曲
第1步 知原文4要素 明确1个主题
读后续写不是无视原文的独立创作，而是顺着原文作者的思路完成未完成的文本。动手续写之前，首先应
认真阅读原文，带着when, where, who, what, why, how理清原文的 故事背景 (setting )、人物和原文故事发展的情
节 (plot ) 线 和 情感 (feelings ) 发展线 ，把握其文本大意和叙事要表现的主题或意图，如2020新高考Ⅰ卷，通过讲述
三个孩子在有限的条件下，帮助了另外一个想要帮助父母维持生活的小男孩的故事，体现一个“爱、帮助和善
行”的主题。
1．首先获取故事背景信息，如2020新高考Ⅰ卷在首段第二句和末句就交代了背景： The economy was in
decline, people lost jobs, but they were trying to help each other.
2．关注两条主线：准确理解原文，根据“谁、发生了什么”，快速理清原文对主要人或物的描写并对相关
事件进行整理，提炼明线——故事情节线。接着通过情节线和原文对心理情感细节的描述进行合理推测，理清原文暗线——情感发展线。
3．通过对原文故事背景、情节线和情感线的分析提炼，可以得出原文的主题或叙事意图。记叙文类的叙事
意图或主题指故事主要内容传递给读者的信息，可以是情，也可以是理。续写部分要在叙述意图或主题上与原
文保持一致。
第2步 据2个关键 定续写方向
提炼出文本大意和叙述意图后，结合所给短文的情景模式，即 5W(Who? What? When? Where? Why？)和两
个续写段落首句中与5W相关的要点，以5W的角度想象续写部分的主要内容，预测故事的走向。
1．两个续写段落的首句已给出，因此预测续写第一段的续写方向相对第二段较为明确。而第二段的续写方
向较为开放，需结合原文的人物性格特征和故事发展脉络大胆预测。两个续写段落的首句既是提示，也是限制。
因此，在预测内容时，须紧跟原文内容，紧密衔接段落首句，这样才能保证续写部分与原文情节的契合。
2．续写方向的预测，必须密切结合原文的文本大意和叙述意图、情景模式以及原文的相关细节。
第3步 两“情”相悦 添加合理细节
一篇好的读后续写，其写作思路应遵循原文发展的情节线和情感发展线，即续写部分与原文达到“两情相
悦”时，才能与原文高度融洽。
1．首先应在情节的发展上与原文的情节发展是连贯而且是合理的，如 2020 新高考Ⅰ卷中提到 Mrs.
Meredith曾去过Bernard家，续写部分可用paid another visit to the family呼应原文这个细节。
2．其次情感线的相悦指续写部分的人物心理情感的变化按照原文人物的心理情感的变化合理变化且与原文
的主题一致。如2020新高考Ⅰ卷原文主题是“爱、帮助和善行”，续写部分应在进行情感描写时描写 Bernard
受到帮助后的感激之情，同时利用心理描写点明原文主题，升华全文的情感。
第4步 沿用原文语言特点 优美连贯表达
不同的文章有不同的语言特点，有正式与非正式之分，有朴素与华丽之分，有简洁明快与繁复含蓄之分。
但是同一篇文章的语言特点应该是一致的，续写时应判断并沿用原文语言特点，使续写部分与原文浑然一体。
1．体现记叙文特点的4个方面
①句式结构上：简单句、复合句以及强调句、倒装句等特殊句式的使用情况，如原文利用的简单句较多，
而复合句等较少或几乎没有，那么续写部分就应多利用简单句进行描写，而不应过多涉及复合句。
②语法结构上：主被动语态、非谓语动词、独立主格结构、with复合结构、虚拟语气等的使用情况。
③词汇选择上：常见初级词汇、高级词汇以及不同词性的使用情况。
④修辞手法上：比喻、拟人、夸张等修辞的使用情况。
2．沿用语言特点的4个原则
①续写时，应尽可能根据原文在句子结构、语法结构、词汇选择和修辞手法上的语言特点方面遣词造句。
②不能因个人喜好或为追求词句的高级和复杂等，刻意将不符合原文的词句生搬硬套到续写部分。
③记叙文中常出现人物之间的对话。如果用直接引语记录人物间的对话，应特别留意人物的特点和对话的
情境。任何人物的语言都应该和人物的特点一致， 符合其身份和性格特征。
④人物的语言也应和说话时的情境吻合，即什么情况下说什么话，如紧急情况下的话语应该是短促的，不
适合用复杂的带有从句的复合句。
【检测训练】
1
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。In 2019, I rescued a skittish donkey (容易受惊的驴). Bo came from a nearby cattle ranch and now lives peacefully
on my ranch in the Bitterroot Valley of Montana, along with another donkey, three horses, and two dogs. But the key to
Bo’s successful recovery from nervous rescue to happy ranch animal wasn’t anything I did. It was my grandson, Dylan.
When he was just shy of four years old, Dylan came with his parents to spend the Fourth of July with me on their
way to Canada for a vacation. Bo kept his distance from the grown-ups, but he displayed an unusual fascination with
Dylan. So we decided to introduce them. “Move slowly, keep your arms down, be quiet, and stoop down sometimes,” I
told my grandson. Dylan cautiously approached Bo, step by step, holding a soft rubber comb. Bo held his ground, but he
seemed interested with this little visitor. Dylan rubbed Bo’s shoulders and neck softly with the comb, removing remains
of his thick winter coat.
It’s hard for an almost four-year-old to stay still for long, and motivation overcame self-control. Dylan made one
quick move, and Bo jumped off with light steps. But Bo and Dylan were not ready to give up. Dylan approached again.
To witness a preschooler learn to control himself in such a short time was amazing.
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1. 续写词数应为150左右；
2. 请按照如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
As we watched, true love developed between this once distrustful donkey and a gentle boy.
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They met again one week later as the family passed through on their return trip.
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2
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Arshad had been out window shopping with his parents. That was all they did these days because they didn’t have
enough money to afford all the shiny clothes, shoes and other fancy items the windows displayed. Even from a distance,
they looked so promising and inviting that one couldn’t help but go over and look at them.
Ever since Arshad’s father lost his business and had to close down his garment shop, Arshad’s family barely had themoney to make ends meet. They even had to move to a rented house, which was smaller and was situated in the shabbier
part of the city. Unlike his previous house, where he had a big luxurious room all to himself, here Arshad had to share his
room and bed with his naughty younger brother who always had the room in a horrible mess.
What was worse, the playground in this neighbourhood was nothing like the one in his previous neighbourhood; the
swings were all broken, the monkey bars were all rusted and grimy, and the see-saw(跷跷板) only had one seat. There
weren’t even any bookshops nearby where he could spend his free time, flipping through his favourite comic books and
novels.
That day, Arshad and his brother were terribly bored when their father decided to take them all out for window
shopping. When his father saw the sad look on Arshad’s face, he sat down next to him and said in a solemn tone,
“Remember, there are children out there who don’t even have the things you do, like, warm clothes, a roof over their
heads, good education and all the delicious meals that your mother prepares for you, three times a day. You should
always be grateful for what you have.”
After the trip to the mall, Arshad’s father decided to take his two boys to a government school in their
neighbourhood. The children in the school barely had chairs in their classrooms. Instead, they sat on rugged carpets
draped over a hard, stone floor. Three or four children shared torn, second-hand books amongst themselves. The
playground didn’t even have any swings and there was not even a cafeteria!
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Arshad remembered how he always complained about the swings in his playground.
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Thinking of the happy children in that school, Arshad decided to do something.
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3
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。
Wrinkles of confusion rippled across Holly’s forehead as she opened the gift from her best friend, Susan.
“I...I thought you could use it for something.” Susan’s stammered explanation did nothing to help us understand
why a twelve-by-eighteen-inch dark blue carpet remnant(残余物) was being presented as a birthday gift.
Holly, my daughter, tried bravely not to allow her disappointment to show. She laid the carpet on the kitchen
counter, and the two girls headed outside to play.The next morning, I carried a kitchen bag outside. My heart ached as I saw Susan’s carpet lying in the trash can.
Hesitating only a moment, I reached in and picked it up. After giving it a light brushing, I brought it into the house and
placed it in the hall closet. Occupied with the business of daily living, the carpet was soon forgotten.
Prior to Holly’s birthday, Susan had been a regular visitor in our home. On several occasions, she rode the bus home
with Holly and was one of the few friends ever permitted to stay over on a school night. But now I realized it had been
nearly three weeks since we’d even heard mention of Susan’s name. I missed her warm smile and eager-to-please ways.
One day, Holly had arrived home from school. “Susan invited me to come over to her house after school tomorrow,”
she announced as she took her books down on the kitchen table. Although her voice carried a so-what attitude, I sensed
she was pleased by the invitation.
Arrangements were made, and the girls rode home together on the school bus the following day. As I negotiated the
winding country road that led to her house, Susan chatted nervously about her foster mom and the seventeen cats she had
taken in and cared for. Soon we arrived at Susan’s house.
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1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
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A woman wearing a shapeless sweater stood in the doorway to greet us as we approached the small shabby
farmhouse.
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Hearing my words about everything of Susan, Holly sat silently in the car, with her head stretching forward(前伸)
as if willing the car to move faster.
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4
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Sigrid finished milking the cow and stepped out of the barn into the cold air. It was almost summer, but icebergs
still filled the narrow sea. She set the bucket down, only to find that the milk reached merely halfway to the top. If we
don't get more food soon, she thought anxiously, we will have to eat the cow. And then what will we do?
Grandfather used to tell her that when their Norse ancestors first came to Greenland, the fields were rich with grass.
But in recent years, the climate has been getting colder and the summers shorter. When her grandfather was a little boy,
there were as many as fifteen cows in the family's barn. Now there is just one. And the family has barely enough hay to
feed it.
A gust of wind sending a chill down her spine, Sigrid stuffed her hands into the pockets to warm them. Her fingers
felt her most prized possession, a piece of red cloth she'd had since she was a small girl. She took the cloth out of her
pocket and let it unfold. It was barely longer than her arm. But its brilliant colour was bright against the stark(荒凉的)
landscape. The cloth had once been part of a dress—in happier, more prosperous times. Nobody dresses like that
anymore.
With ice-filled seas, ships no longer arrive with foods and goods to trade. All of a sudden, movement on the water
caught Sigrid's eye. A light boat moved silently between the icebergs. An Inuk boy, about Sigrid's age, was looking her
way, staring at the red cloth fluttering(飘动) in the breeze. A hunting weapon was tied to the front of his boat. And
dragging behind it was a large fish. Sigrid knew there had been fights between the Inuit and the Norse. But the boy had a
kind face and did not reach for his weapon.
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1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
She couldn't help but wonder what to do.
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阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。
A water bearer had two large pots, each hung on each end of a pole which he carried across his neck. One of the
pots had a crack in it, and while the other pot was perfect and always delivered a full portion of water at the end of the
long walk from the stream to the master's house, the cracked pot arrived only half full.
For a full two years, this went on daily, with the bearer delivering only one and a half pots full of water in his
master's house. Of course, the perfect pot was proud of its accomplishments, perfect to the end for which it was made.
But the poor cracked pot was ashamed of its own imperfection and miserable that it was able to accomplish only half of
what it had been made to do.
After two years of what it perceived to be a bitter failure, it spoke to the water bearer one day by the stream. "I am
ashamed of myself, and I want to apologize to you". The bearer asked, "Why? What are you ashamed of? " The pot
replied, "For these past two years I am able to deliver only half of my load because this crack in my side causes water to
leak out all the way back to your master's house. Because of my flaws, you don't get full value for your efforts".
The water bearer felt sorry for the old cracked pot, and in his compassion, he said, "As we return to the master's
house, I want you to notice the beautiful flowers along the path." As they went up the hill, the old cracked pot took notice
of the sun warming the beautiful wild flowers on the side of the path, and this cheered it somewhat. But at the end of the
trail, it still felt bad because it had leaked out half its load, and so again it apologized to the bearer for its failure.
注意:
1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
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“Did you notice that there were flowers only on your side of your path, but not on the other pot's side? ” The bearer
said to the pot.
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We're all cracked pots and each of us has our own unique flaws.
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