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人教版高中英语选择性必修一应用文写作讲评
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这次的写作评改采用了一种新的尝试（三种AI平台批改），结果各有所长，对我而言，效果已经达到了。其中的一个批改平台很不错，链接在文末阅读原文-批改类。本文是批改后整理而成的分析，作为讲评的依据。
（一）主要问题类型列表（按严重程度降序）
1.主谓一致与动词形式错误（最高频，几乎每篇涉及）。典型：the chemical farming have benefit；it make crops slowly；organic farming focus on…；it don’t serves；can been avoiding；is play an important role。
2.名词、冠词与单复数错误。典型：The farming’s development；good thing and bad thing；Both have positive and negative（成分残缺）；some advantage and defect；a long times。
3.拼写错误高频集中。inportant、protact、becteria、diseage、yeild、chermicals、polltion、orgunic、Nowaday、beacuse。多数为可查证的基础词。
4.中式英语直译。典型：bring more crops；makes it have a good development；It can way to fight…；has bad question；grows so far（far/fast 混淆）。
5.句子结构残缺与破碎。典型：Though it will（戛然而止）；what have a suitable limits（从句无谓语）；For chemical agriculture, is a great way…（无主语）；Because, chemical farming serves…（句首 Because 逗号粘连）。
6.内容要点缺失或篇幅残缺。如 4 号作文“Though it will”之后整段缺失，有机农业优缺点未展开；12 号结尾出现无法辨识的乱码段。
7.衔接手段单一。全篇依赖 But / And / Also / First, Secondly，缺乏 however, moreover, in contrast, as far as … is concerned 等规范衔接。
参考范文
Chemical Farming or Organic Farming?
With modern agriculture developing rapidly, chemical farming and organic farming have become two major approaches, each with its own strengths and weaknesses.
Chemical farming relies on chemical fertilizers and pesticides to control pests and significantly boost crop yields, thus ensuring food security. However, long-term use can degrade soil health, pollute water sources and even threaten human health. By contrast, organic farming avoids chemical inputs, preserving soil fertility and producing healthier food; nevertheless, it delivers lower yields and demands more labor and money.
As far as I am concerned, neither model is perfect. What matters is a balanced approach: applying chemicals scientifically where necessary while promoting organic practices for long-term sustainability. Only in this way can we feed the world without harming the planet.
化学农业还是有机农业？
随着现代农业的快速发展，化学农业和有机农业已成为两种主要方式，各自有其优缺点。
化学农业依赖化肥和农药来控制害虫并显著提高作物产量，从而确保粮食安全。然而，长期使用会破坏土壤健康、污染水源，甚至威胁人类健康。相比之下，有机农业避免使用化学投入品，保持土壤肥力，生产更健康的食物；然而，其产量较低，需要更多的劳动力和资金投入。
在我看来，这两种模式都不完美。重要的是采取一种平衡的方法：在必要时科学地使用化学物质，同时推广有机耕作方式以实现长期可持续性。只有这样，我们才能在养活世界的同时不损害地球。
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