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高考英语续写冲刺21+高分思维:情节建构与语言迁移实战秘籍12——以杭二中高三2026年9月开学适应性考试续写为例
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教育部教育考试院在《2026年高考英语全国卷试题评析》中明确指出,高考英语命题立足立德树人根本任务,通过精心设计语篇和情境,涵养人文底蕴、塑造道德品格、倡导积极向上的道德品格与生活习惯,引导学生德智体美劳全面发展。试题注重“创设真实、多元、富有启发性的语言运用情境”,考查学生在具体交际情境中“恰当、灵活地运用英语分析问题、解决问题的能力”。
读后续写正是这一命题理念的集中体现。它要求学生在理解原文的基础上,顺着人物性格和情感逻辑自然地写下去,用与原文风格一致的语言完成故事的“最后一公里”。它考查的不仅是语言能力,更是理解力、想象力和真诚表达力的综合素养。
然而,在日常备考中,不少同学陷入了这样的困境:明明读懂了故事,却不知道接下来该写什么;好不容易想出情节,写出来的句子却干巴巴,不像原文。还有同学误以为“高分”等于“华丽”,于是盲目背诵生僻词汇、堆砌无意义的比喻、套用所谓的“万能句式”——结果适得其反,作文越写越空,越写越不像原文。这恰恰背离了续写的本意,也偏离了高考命题的导向。
今天想和大家分享一篇杭州第二中学高三2026年9月开学适应性考试的续写真题——一个关于AI技术与人间温情、疾病与友谊的故事。三个大学室友,在Paul患上ALS(渐冻症)后,用AI图像生成工具Midjourney创作艺术作品,制作日历,用笑声和创意对抗病魔。它让我们看到:技术或许是冰冷的,但使用技术的人可以赋予它温度;疾病或许能夺走身体的自由,却夺不走友谊的力量。
本文沿用“挖掘伏笔→倒推情节节点→语言迁移仿写→范文赏析”的完整思维体系,以该题为蓝本进行拆解。需要说明的是,这并非唯一的“标准答案”,更不是新的“万能模板”,而只是笔者多年教学实践的一点心得。恳请各位同行批评指正,也希望能为备考学子打开一扇思路之窗。
让我们一起,回归续写的本真——读懂原文,顺其自然,用朴实的语言讲述温暖的故事。
一、先看真题:读懂原文是续写的“地基”
下面完整呈现本次考试的续写原文。请你先花3分钟认真阅读,边读边圈画——我们马上要像侦探一样,从字里行间“挖”出所有伏笔。
杭州第二中学高三2026年9月适应性考试英语续写真题原文
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Two winters ago, my college roommate Paul was gradually losing the ability to do almost everything else. He could still walk, but only with a cane. He could eat solid foods, though with trouble, and could drink the medication powder he mixed into water—but he began coughing more and more as he labored to swallow anything.
Though his body was failing him, Paul was determined to keep our bond free of sorrow. Through messages, he sent us texts encouraging Evan and me to spare him no humor during the time we had left. So jokes, GIFs and memes became the rule. Then he began showing us the “art” he was making. He used his fingers, technically, but not in the way an artist holds a brush; Paul merely typed the words of what he wanted to see into Midjourney, an AI image generator. Seconds later, Midjourney produced four images onto his screen. To us, they looked like real paintings and that no painter would create this way made it all the more humorous.
Pretty quickly, Evan and I started making AI pictures with our own prompts too. We made thousands. Any random thought that crossed our minds, Midjourney absorbed and spat out. Later, beginning that January with an image called “Tension at the Golden Corral Buffet,” we started talking about putting together a 2024 calendar of our AI artwork. It was full of strange creatures and scenes. The calendar was a piece of physical media that the three of us could share throughout the year. We also planned to make a new calendar for 2025 and compile our favorite works into a memory book.
I could probably never argue in favor of what the technology of artificial intelligence might ultimately bring, or its future effect on artists, writers and culture. It does scare me a little. But one thing I am absolutely sure of: AI brought precious warmth and laughter to my friend Paul struggling with ALS (渐冻症).
所给段首句:
Paragraph 1: As Paul’s health slowly worsened, our AI creation became our closest bond.
Paragraph 2: We spread our printed-out calendars over the desk, with those magic-filled pictures.
二、高分思维第一步:深度挖掘原文伏笔(3分钟)
像侦探一样梳理文本信息,区分核心人物、关键物品、场景、情绪、隐藏线索,所有伏笔都需要在续写中一一呼应,这是情节合理、紧扣原文的基础。
1. 核心名词梳理
名词 | 信息解读与续写要求 |
Paul | 主人公室友,患ALS,身体逐渐衰退,但坚持用幽默和艺术维系友谊,是情感核心 |
Evan | 另一位室友,与“我”一起参与AI创作,是友谊的见证者和参与者 |
Midjourney | AI图像生成工具,核心物件,是三人情感连接的载体 |
prompts | 提示词,创作的核心动作,续写中可体现Paul如何克服困难输入 |
2024 / 2025 calendar | 日历,核心物品,第一段需完成2025年日历制作,第二段需展现日历成品 |
memory book | 记忆册,原文提及的计划,续写中可呼应 |
ALS | 渐冻症,疾病背景,续写中需体现Paul身体的持续恶化 |
laughter / warmth | 情感核心词,全文情感主线:用笑声对抗疾病 |
思维训练:续写中必须回应的伏笔——Paul身体如何继续恶化?三人如何克服困难继续创作?2025年日历如何完成?日历成品带来怎样的情感冲击?AI在其中的角色如何体现?
2. 核心动词与情感梳理
动作/情绪短语 | 内涵解读 |
losing the ability / labored to swallow | 身体持续衰退,为续写中“worsened”提供依据 |
determined to keep our bond free of sorrow | Paul的坚强,拒绝让疾病夺走友谊的快乐 |
jokes, GIFs and memes became the rule | 幽默是三人对抗疾病的方式 |
typed the words... into Midjourney | 创作方式简单却充满意义 |
precious warmth and laughter | 全文情感总结,续写需延续这一基调 |
思维训练:原文结尾“我”确信“AI brought precious warmth and laughter”,说明情感基调是温暖、感恩、幽默。续写第一段要写出Paul身体恶化但创作继续,三人如何克服困难完成2025年日历。第二段要写日历印刷成品后的情感场景,以及主题升华。
3. 隐含信息梳理
① “He used his fingers, technically”:Paul的手指还能动,但越来越困难,续写中可体现他打字越来越吃力。
② “We made thousands”:三人创作量巨大,续写中可体现筛选作品的乐趣。
③ “a piece of physical media that the three of us could share”:日历是实体物品,具有象征意义——可触摸的友谊。
④ “planned to make a new calendar for 2025”:续写第一段必须完成这一计划。
⑤ “compile our favorite works into a memory book”:可在续写中提及或作为未来展望。
⑥ “It does scare me a little”:对AI的复杂态度,续写中可保持这种“矛盾但感恩”的基调。
小结:读懂原文不是“看懂故事”,而是看出所有必须回应的钩子。列出清单后,情节自然浮现。
三、高分思维第二步:从段首句倒推“两段必写内容”(5分钟)
第一段首句分析
As Paul’s health slowly worsened, our AI creation became our closest bond.
问自己三个问题:
① Paul的健康如何恶化?→ 手指越来越僵硬,打字越来越困难,可能改用语音输入或其他方式。
② 三人如何继续创作?→ “我”和Evan帮Paul输入prompts,或者Paul口述想法,三人一起筛选图片。
③ 2025年日历如何完成?→ 三人共同挑选最爱的作品,精心排版,最终完成日历制作。
第一段情节链条(5个节点):
① Paul的手越来越僵硬,打字变得困难,但他不愿放弃创作。
② “我”和Evan主动帮他输入prompts,Paul口述想法,三人继续合作。
③ 三人一起翻看过去一年的作品,挑选最有趣的图片放入2025年日历。
④ 他们为日历设计封面,可能加入三人的照片或签名。
⑤ 日历终于完成,三人期待印刷成品。
第二段首句分析
We spread our printed-out calendars over the desk, with those magic-filled pictures.
问自己三个问题:
① 日历印刷出来后是什么样子?→ 精美的实体日历,每一页都是三人共同的记忆。
② Paul的反应是什么?→ 尽管身体虚弱,他依然露出笑容,可能用微弱的声音开玩笑。
③ 最终感悟是什么?→ 技术是冰冷的,但友谊是温暖的;AI是工具,但创造它的是人心。
第二段情节链条(4个节点):
① 日历印刷成品寄到,三人围坐在桌旁翻看。
② Paul看到日历上的作品,露出久违的笑容,用微弱的声音调侃。
③ 三人回忆创作这些图片时的趣事,笑声充满房间。
④ 主题升华:AI或许令人担忧,但它给了Paul最珍贵的礼物——与朋友共度的快乐时光。
四、高分思维第三步:语言迁移——怎样写得“像原文”?
很多同学情节对了,但语言要么干巴巴,要么“太高级”,反而扣分。语言迁移不是抄袭,而是模仿原文的“味道”——原文用什么词,你就用什么层级的词;原文用什么句式,你就用什么句式。不必去背那些与原文风格格格不入的“高级表达”。
1. 先看原文的“语言指纹”
逐句分析原文风格:
原文句子 | 特点 |
gradually losing the ability to do almost everything else | 渐进式描写,强调恶化过程 |
determined to keep our bond free of sorrow | 情感短语,体现坚强 |
jokes, GIFs and memes became the rule | 简洁有力,体现幽默是核心 |
Midjourney absorbed and spat out | 拟人化动词,生动有趣 |
strange creatures and scenes | 简单名词短语,体现创意 |
a piece of physical media that the three of us could share | 具体描述,强调实体意义 |
precious warmth and laughter | 情感总结,朴素而动人 |
结论:原文是渐进式描写、情感直白表达、拟人化动词、简洁有力句式的风格。续写必须保持。
2. 参考范文如何做到“如出一辙”?
关键迁移原则:
① 复用原文核心意象:如“prompts”, “calendar”, “Midjourney”, “laughter”。
② 模仿句式结构:原文“determined to keep our bond free of sorrow” → 续写“he refused to let the disease steal our joy”。
③ 复用具体动作:原文“typed the words into Midjourney” → 续写“typed with one finger”“spoke the words aloud”。
④ 复用情感词:原文“precious warmth and laughter” → 续写“warmth”, “laughter”, “joy”。
⑤ 保持“矛盾但感恩”的基调:原文“It does scare me a little” → 续写可保留对AI的复杂态度。
3. 低分写法 vs 高分迁移写法对比
学生常见低分表达 | 问题分析 | 高分迁移写法(贴合原文风格) |
Paul was very sick. | 表达干瘪,无细节 | His fingers grew stiffer, making even the simplest typing an exhausting task. |
We helped him make pictures. | 缺少画面感 | He spoke the words aloud, and I typed them into Midjourney, waiting for the images to appear. |
We were very happy. | 表达空洞 | Laughter filled the room, and for a moment, the disease was forgotten. |
思维核心:不是“翻译中文想法”,而是用原文中出现过的句式、词汇、节奏去表达。
五、参考范文赏析:用实战证明策略的有效性
下面呈现的是本次考试的参考范文。你可以先读一遍,再对照后面的分析,看看它是如何与原文“如出一辙”的。
参考范文
Paragraph 1:As Paul’s health slowly worsened, our AI creation became our closest bond. Stricken by ALS, his muscles grew increasingly stiff, making even the simplest typing an exhausting task. Nevertheless, he never abandoned this warm pastime that bonded us. Every afternoon, propped up on his bed, he would hold his breath and type prompts bit by bit, patiently awaiting the images generated by AI. Evan and I kept him company all the time, bouncing off weird and creative ideas and sharing hilarious comments on every unique artwork. These precious moments effectively dispelled the gloom brought by his disease. Jointly we screened fine pieces and refined details, eventually finishing our one-of-a-kind 2025 calendar as scheduled.
Paragraph 2:We spread our printed-out calendars over the desk, with those magic-filled pictures. The instant Paul caught sight of them, his pale face lit up with a gentle and heartfelt smile. Weak as he was, he still teased about our strange yet adorable creations, filling the room with laughter. We flipped through the pages slowly, recalling every blissful moment we had spent together. Cold and mechanical as AI technology is, it served as a warm link connecting our hearts and brightening Paul’s tough days. Beyond doubt, this calendar is not merely a collection of AI artworks, but an eternal treasure witnessing our priceless and unshakable friendship.
总词数(含段首句):约220词
与原文的“如出一辙”对照分析
原文特征 | 范文对应 | 迁移类型 |
losing the ability / labored to swallow | muscles grew increasingly stiff / exhausting task | 渐进式恶化描写 |
determined to keep our bond free of sorrow | never abandoned this warm pastime that bonded us | 坚强意志的呼应 |
typed the words into Midjourney | type prompts bit by bit | 创作动作复现 |
jokes, GIFs and memes became the rule | bouncing off weird ideas / sharing hilarious comments | 幽默氛围迁移 |
precious warmth and laughter | dispelled the gloom / filling the room with laughter | 情感词迁移 |
a piece of physical media | printed-out calendars / this calendar | 实体物品复现 |
it does scare me a little | Cold and mechanical as AI technology is | 对AI的复杂态度呼应 |
our favorite works into a memory book | an eternal treasure witnessing our priceless friendship | 记忆主题升华 |
验证结果:参考范文做到了伏笔全回收、语言像原文、情感真且深。它没有使用任何超纲词汇,没有堆砌华丽比喻,只是用朴实而温暖的语言,完成了一个让人信服的友谊故事。这正是续写“回归本真”的生动范例。
六、完整实战演练:从零到一写出一类文
现在,我们模拟考场,用上面三步法写一篇与参考范文情节不同、但同样符合高分标准的续写。你也可以跟着一起思考,看看同一套方法如何生出不同的精彩。
第一步:列出伏笔清单(脑中过一遍)
Paul的身体恶化、三人合作创作、2025年日历、印刷成品、Paul的笑容、AI的温暖。
第二步:确定两段情节节点
第一段:Paul的手越来越僵硬→改为口述想法,我和Evan帮他输入→三人一起挑选2025年日历作品→日历完成,等待印刷。
第二段:日历寄到→三人在桌边翻看→Paul微笑调侃→回忆创作趣事→主题升华:友谊胜过疾病。
第三步:逐句迁移写作(边写边想原文)
第一段:首句已给As Paul’s health slowly worsened, our AI creation became our closest bond.接着写:
① His fingers, once able to type full sentences, now moved slowly and painfully. (呼应原文“technically used his fingers”,体现恶化)
② “Tell me what to make,” I said. He spoke the words aloud, and I typed them into Midjourney. (呼应“typed the words”,体现合作)
③ Evan and I saved every image we loved — the strange creatures, the funny scenes, the ones that made Paul laugh the hardest. (呼应“strange creatures and scenes”,回扣伏笔)
④ We designed the 2025 calendar together, page by page, choosing the best of our thousands of pictures. (呼应“planned to make a new calendar for 2025”)
⑤ When it was finally ready to print, Paul smiled — a real smile, not the polite one he used for doctors. (情感递进,呼应“precious warmth”)
第二段:首句已给We spread our printed-out calendars over the desk, with those magic-filled pictures.接着写:
① Paul reached out and touched the cover gently, his eyes bright. (动作细节,体现情感)
② “Look at this one,” he said, pointing to a picture of a giant cat riding a bicycle. “Still my favorite.” (直接引语,体现Paul的幽默)
③ We laughed together, flipping through the pages, remembering every silly prompt and every late-night creation. (呼应“jokes”“laughter”,回扣伏笔)
④ For a moment, the disease faded into the background. All that remained was friendship. (情感升华,呼应“bond”)
⑤ AI may be cold and mechanical, but the hands that used it — our hands — were warm. (主题升华,呼应“it does scare me a little”)
第二篇范文完整版
Paragraph 1:As Paul’s health slowly worsened, our AI creation became our closest bond. His fingers, once able to type full sentences, now moved slowly and painfully. “Tell me what to make,” I said. He spoke the words aloud, and I typed them into Midjourney. Evan and I saved every image we loved — the strange creatures, the funny scenes, the ones that made Paul laugh the hardest. We designed the 2025 calendar together, page by page, choosing the best of our thousands of pictures. When it was finally ready to print, Paul smiled — a real smile, not the polite one he used for doctors.
Paragraph 2:We spread our printed-out calendars over the desk, with those magic-filled pictures. Paul reached out and touched the cover gently, his eyes bright. “Look at this one,” he said, pointing to a picture of a giant cat riding a bicycle. “Still my favorite.” We laughed together, flipping through the pages, remembering every silly prompt and every late-night creation. For a moment, the disease faded into the background. All that remained was friendship. AI may be cold and mechanical, but the hands that used it — our hands — were warm.
总词数(含段首句):约190词
第二篇范文与参考范文的差异化分析
维度 | 参考范文 | 第二篇范文 | 差异说明 |
恶化描写 | muscles grew increasingly stiff | His fingers... moved slowly and painfully | 第二篇更具体写手指动作 |
合作方式 | he would hold his breath and type prompts bit by bit | “Tell me what to make,” I said. He spoke the words aloud, and I typed them | 第二篇用对话体现合作,更生动 |
日历制作 | screened fine pieces and refined details | designed the 2025 calendar together, page by page | 第二篇强调“page by page”的共同参与 |
Paul的反应 | his pale face lit up with a gentle and heartfelt smile | Paul smiled — a real smile, not the polite one he used for doctors | 第二篇用对比突出真实笑容 |
第二段开头 | The instant Paul caught sight of them | Paul reached out and touched the cover gently | 第二篇增加触觉细节 |
对话设计 | teased about our strange yet adorable creations | “Look at this one... Still my favorite.” | 第二篇用直接引语,更口语化 |
主题升华 | Cold and mechanical as AI technology is, it served as a warm link | AI may be cold and mechanical, but the hands that used it — our hands — were warm | 第二篇强调“人的手”,更温暖 |
结尾收束 | an eternal treasure witnessing our priceless and unshakable friendship | For a moment, the disease faded into the background. All that remained was friendship. | 第二篇更简洁,情感 更直接 |
验证结果:两篇范文情节不同、细节不同,但都做到了伏笔全回收、语言像原文、情感真且深。这正是“勿忘初心,回归本真”的续写理念——不是死记硬背某一篇范文,而是掌握方法,写出属于自己的高分之作。
七、考场冲刺21+的五个实操习惯
1.圈画伏笔:拿到续写原文,3分钟内圈出人物、场景、物品、情绪四类线索,确保续写不脱离原文。
2.规划节点:动笔前在草稿纸上列出每段3-4个情节节点,保证逻辑连贯,避免情节断层。
3.语言仿写:每写一句话,对照原文句式,优先使用原文出现过的短语、简单句式,拒绝刻意堆砌难词。
4.篇幅把控:两段合计控制在180-260词(含段首句),不冗长、不缺内容。
5.收尾检查:最后2分钟核对:伏笔是否全部呼应、词汇是否超纲、时态语态是否统一、主题是否积极正向。
结尾语:愿每一份友谊,都能被温柔地记录
写到这里,笔者想起这篇续写题中的三个室友——Paul、Evan和“我”。当疾病一点点夺走Paul的身体自由,他们没有沉溺于悲伤,而是用AI图像生成工具,创造出一个个奇怪而有趣的画面,用笑声对抗病魔,用创意维系友谊。那本日历,不只记录着AI作品,更记录着三个人在困境中依然选择快乐的勇气。
教育部教育考试院在2026年高考英语全国卷试题评析中指出,试题注重“涵养人文底蕴,塑造道德品格”,通过“源自生活、富有深意的叙事,引导学生涵养道德情操、塑造高尚人格”。这篇续写题恰恰体现了这一命题导向——它讲述的不是一个简单的“抗病故事”,而是一个关于“友谊、创造与选择快乐”的深刻叙事。
读后续写,也应当如此。它不应是华丽辞藻的堆砌,不应是万能模板的套用,而应是对原文情感基调的准确捕捉、对人物性格的自然延续、对主题内涵的真诚表达。
教育部教育考试院同时强调,试题“强化素养导向,通过精心创设真实、多元且富有启发性的语言交际与认知场景,激发并深度考查学生的批判性思维和创新意识”。这意味着,真正的高分续写,不是靠背诵“高级替换词”取得的,而是靠读懂了原文的“言外之意”,顺着人物性格和情感逻辑自然地写下去,用与原文风格一致的语言完成故事的“最后一公里”。
从“书店搬迁”中300位居民传递的9,100本书,到“傲慢男孩”在Lina帮助下完成的书摊逆袭,再到“三个室友”用AI日历对抗渐冻症——这些故事告诉我们:真正动人的,从来不是华丽的语言,而是朴素的情感和真实的温暖。
今天,2026年9月29日,距离2027年1月浙江高考首考还有整整99天。“九九归一”,是终点,也是起点——是日复一日努力的沉淀,也是回到初心、回归本真的时刻。愿每一位高三学子,在这最后的99天里,不急不躁,稳扎稳打;不炫技,不浮夸,用最朴实的语言,写出最真诚的故事。
愿你们像Paul一样,在困境中依然选择笑声;像那300位居民一样,在他人需要时伸出双手;像每一个在续写中认真读懂原文、顺着情感逻辑写下去的学生一样,用真实的笔触,记录下属于自己的成长。
愿你合上笔盖的那一刻,有着战士收刀入鞘般的骄傲。首考加油,高考必胜!
愿续写备考,回归本真,行稳致远。
感谢您的阅读。
Frank65252026年9月29日定稿