金华十校 2025 年 11 月高三模拟考试
读后续写二次学案教师版
阅读下面材料 ,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段 ,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Jessica breathed in the familiar smell of dried grass and horses when entering the building for horses. She was
back for another summer at Green Meadow Farm ’s riding camp. Her advisor, Rose, walked beside her. Jessica
searched every corner, hoping to see Piper, her favourite horse she had bonded with last year. They had even won
second place in the annual obstacle course race(障碍赛跑), where Piper had skillfully moved through the poles. Jessica
loved everything about Piper, from her gentleness to the way Piper ’s soft nose tickled(使发痒) her hand whenever she
fed her apples.
“I can’t wait to ride Piper,”Jessica told Rose. Rose smiled.“I know you love Piper, but we need to
save her for some new riders.”Jessica’s heart sank, but she nodded in understanding.
“How about you try riding Harley?”Rose said. Jessica was a little frightened by the giant male horse
Rose pointed to. Even though Harley was beautiful with his shiny hair, he looked restless. Rose could sense
Jessica’s anxiety. “Don’t worry. He just needs an experienced rider to help train him. ”
Jessica cautiously approached him, but Harley moved away. As Jessica touched his back, he appeared
restless and let out a loud cry, making Jessica even more nervous. An annoyed Jessica led an unwilling
Harley outside. She climbed on top of him and headed to the obstacle course. However, when reaching the
fence, Harley planted his feet in the dirt, refusing to take another step.
The first few days together were full of challenges . Harley refused jumps, galloped( 飞奔) out of
control, and once, frightened by a bird, he even went up on his back legs and threw Jessica into the air.
Feeling painful and discouraged, she turned to Rose.“I really miss Piper and her gentleness.Harley is too
hard to control.” Patting her on the shoulder, Rose said thoughtfully,“ It’s okay to be scared, but do
remember Harley has his own fears.If you are nervous, you will make him nervous.If you are confident, he
will feel confident. If you show him trust, he will trust you.”
注意 :
1. 续写词数应为 150 左右;
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Para1:
Hearing
that,
Jessica
decided
it
was
time
for
a
fresh
start
with
Harley.
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Para 2: The final day of the camp arrived, bringing with it the obstacle course race.
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【原文翻译】
杰西卡（Jessica）走进马场大楼，呼吸着干草和马匹熟悉的气味。她又回到了绿茵草地农场（Green
Meadow Farm）的骑行夏令营，开始另一个夏天。她的顾问罗斯（Rose）走在她身边。杰西卡搜寻着每一个角
落，希望能看到她去年就建立了深厚感情的她最爱的马
派珀（
——
Piper）。她们甚至还在年度障碍赛跑中赢
得了第二名，当时派珀灵巧地穿过了杆子。杰西卡喜爱派珀的一切，从它的温柔，到每当她喂它苹果时，派珀
柔软的鼻子蹭得她手发痒的方式。
“我等不及要骑派珀了，”杰西卡告诉罗斯。罗斯笑了笑。“我知道你爱派珀，但我们需要把它留给一些
新骑手。”杰西卡的心一沉，但还是理解地点了点头。
“你试试骑哈利（Harley）怎么样？”罗斯说。罗斯所指的那匹高大的公马让杰西卡有点害怕。尽管哈利
很漂亮，毛发闪亮，但他看起来焦躁不安。罗斯能感觉到杰西卡的焦虑。“别担心。他只是需要一位有经验的
骑手来帮助训练他。”
杰西卡小心翼翼地靠近他，但哈利走开了。当杰西卡触摸他的背部时，他显得焦躁不安，并发出响亮的嘶
叫声，这让杰西卡更加紧张。一个心烦意乱的杰西卡牵着一万个不情愿的哈利来到外面。她爬上他的背，前往
障碍训练场。然而，当到达围栏时，哈利把脚牢牢扎在土里，拒绝再迈一步。
头几天的相处充满了挑战。哈利拒绝跳跃，失控地飞奔，有一次，他被一只鸟吓到，甚至直接扬起后腿，
把杰西卡抛向了空中。杰西卡感到既疼痛又气馁，她向罗斯倾诉：“我真的很想念派珀和它的温柔。哈利太难
控制了。”罗斯拍拍她的肩膀，若有所思地说：“害怕没关系，但要记住哈利也有它自己的恐惧。如果你紧张，
你就会让他也紧张。如果你有信心，他也会感到有信心。如果你向他表示信任，他也会信任你。”
【写作训练步骤】
第一步：通读全文，深度解读
读情节：
开端: Jessica 重返马场营地，满怀期待地想与她去年的伙伴
温顺的马
——
Piper 重逢。
发展: 顾问Rose 安排她骑一匹新的、高大且焦躁的公马Harley，Jessica 感到害怕和失望。
转折: Jessica 与Harley 的初期合作充满挑战和挫折，Harley 不服从指令甚至将她摔下，Jessica 感到痛苦和沮丧。
高潮: Rose 点明故事核心：马会感知人的情绪。信任与自信是相互的。
续写开端: Jessica 决定与Harley 重新开始。
续写结局: 营地最后一天的障碍赛到来，这是对Jessica 和Harley 关系的终极考验。
读人物:
Jessica (女孩/骑手): 从依赖旧有的安全区（Piper 的温顺），到面对新的挑战（Harley 的野性）。内心经历了期
待
失望
恐惧
挫败
领悟
（续写：决心
成长）的变化。
→
→
→
→
→
→
Harley (马): 并非“坏”，而是“不安”和“需要被理解”。它是一面镜子，反映着骑手的情绪。它需要的是
耐心和信任，而非强迫。
Rose (顾问): 智慧的引导者。她洞察人和马的心理，不直接给出答案，而是提供成长的哲学（情绪相互影响）。
读时态：
全文以一般过去时为主，续写需严格保持一致。
读冲突：
外在冲突: Jessica 的骑术经验与Harley 难以驾驭的性情之间的冲突；障碍赛本身带来的挑战。
内在冲突: Jessica 对Piper 的思念（过去的安全感）与面对Harley 的恐惧（未来的不确定性）之间的矛盾；她
能否克服恐惧，建立信任。
读情绪发展：
Jessica: 满怀期待
失望害怕
挫败沮丧
反思领悟
（续写：决心尝试
建立默契
赛前紧张
→
→
→
→
→
→
赛后喜悦
→
/成就感）
Harley: 不安抗拒
（续写：逐渐平静
开始回应
建立信任
全力合作）
→
→
→
→
读主题：
信任与沟通 (Trust and Communication)
克服恐惧与个人成长 (Overcoming Fear and Personal Growth)
同理心与耐心 (Empathy and Patience)
过程重于结果 (Process Over Result)
第二步：【十句五定法】
搭建你的写作框架
——
请根据两个段落的开头语，构思并完成以下句子，以搭建清晰的段落结构。
段落
句子功能
你的句子构思（教师参考）
第一
段
1. 接续Hint1
描写Jessica 如何将Rose 的话付诸行动（改变心态，用安抚代替强
迫）。
段落
句子功能
你的句子构思（教师参考）
2. 动作/心理推
进
描写Jessica 尝试与Harley 建立联系的具体行为（如轻声说话、耐心
喂食、轻柔梳理等）。
3. 有效过渡
描写训练中的一个小突破（如Harley 第一次主动靠近、对指令有了
积极回应）。
4. 有效衔接
描写Jessica 信心的增长和Harley 行为的改变，为比赛做铺垫。
5. 段落收束
总结训练阶段成果，点明Jessica 和Harley 的关系发生了转变。
第二
段
6. 接续Hint2
描写比赛现场的氛围和Jessica 赛前的心情（紧张但坚定）。
7. 情节发展
描写比赛过程中的一个关键时刻/困难（如Harley 在某个障碍前犹
豫）。
8. 主题升华
描写Jessica 如何运用新学到的心态应对困难（冷静、信任、鼓
励）。
9. 结局呈现
描写他们克服困难，完成比赛（无论名次，重点在过程）。
10. 富有余韵的
结尾
描写赛后Jessica 的感悟或她与Harley 的深情互动，点明主题。
第三步：【微写作训练】
打磨你的语言
——
训练一：环境描写 · 烘托心情
（选择最贴合故事氛围的词语，并尝试造句）
心情
可选词汇（中英对照）
你的造句（教师参考）
紧
张、
期待
人声鼎沸 (a buzzing crowd);
心跳如鼓 (heart pounding like
a drum); 手心出汗 (clammy
palms)
As the obstacle course race began, a buzzing crowd
gathered around the arena, making Jessica's heart pound
like a drum. (当障碍赛开始时，人群聚集在场地周围，
人声鼎沸，让Jessica 的心像打鼓一样砰砰直跳。)
激
烈、
投入
激烈的比拼 (an intense
competition); 奔跑的身影
(running figures); 热烈的欢呼
(enthusiastic cheers)
It was an intense competition, with the running figures of
horses and riders moving through the obstacles to the
sound of enthusiastic cheers. (这是一场激烈的比拼，马
匹和骑手奔跑的身影在热烈的欢呼声中穿梭于障碍之
间。)
缓
和、
温馨
如释重负的叹息 (a sigh of
relief); 灿烂的笑容 (a
beaming smile); 温暖的拥抱
(a warm hug)
After crossing the finish line, Jessica let out a sigh of relief
and gave Harley a warm hug, her face breaking into a
beaming smile. (越过终点线后，Jessica 如释重负地叹了
口气，给了Harley 一个温暖的拥抱，脸上绽放出灿烂
的笑容。)
训练二：人物刻画 · 于细微处见真情
（将左边抽象的描述与右边具体的表达连线，并选择一句仿写）
Jessica 很害怕。 A. Her hands trembled as she reached for the reins, and her voice was barely a whisper when she
spoke to the giant horse.
Jessica 很坚定。 B. She took a deep breath, squared her shoulders, and looked Harley directly in the eye, her voice
calm and steady this time.
Harley 很不安。 C. He flattened his ears against his head, his muscles tense, and let out a nervous snort.
连线答案: 1 - A; 2 - B; 3 - C
仿写示例 (选择第2 句): Setting her jaw with determination, Jessica approached Harley once more, her movements
slow and deliberate, projecting an air of quiet confidence.
训练三：情感表达 · 找到“高级替身”
（圈出你会在正式写作中使用的词语，并替换掉直白的表达）
想说 "scared" (害怕): 试试 a wave of anxiety (一阵焦虑), her stomach was in knots (心慌意乱), feeling jittery (感
到紧张不安)
想说 "determined" (坚定): 试试 a newfound resolve steeled her (新的决心让她坚定), with unwavering focus (带着
坚定的专注), a fire of determination lit within her (决心之火在她心中点燃)
想说 "proud and happy" (骄傲和开心): 试试 swelling with pride (充满自豪), a glow of accomplishment (成就感的
喜悦), elation bubbled up inside her (兴高采烈在她内心翻涌)
例句升级：
原句：Jessica was scared but determined. Harley was nervous.
升级句: A wave of anxiety washed over Jessica, but a newfound resolve steeled her. Harley, sensing the change, shifted
restlessly, his own nervous energy evident.
训练四：动作细节 · 让情感可视化
（请为以下情境，设计一个包含具体动作和身体反应的句子）
情境1：Jessica 在决定重新开始后，第一次平静地接近Harley。
直白版: Jessica calmly approached Harley.
细节版: This time, instead of rushing, Jessica moved slowly towards Harley, holding out a flat palm with an apple
slice, her voice a soft murmur as she whispered reassuring words. (这一次，Jessica 没有急于靠近，而是慢慢地走向
Harley，摊开手掌露出一片苹果，用轻柔的声音低语着安慰的话。)
情境2：在比赛中，Harley 在一个高障碍前突然犹豫不前。
直白版: Harley stopped at the high fence.
细节版: As they approached the highest fence, Harley's ears flicked back, and he planted his feet firmly, letting out a
uncertain snort and tossing his head. (当他们接近最高的栅栏时，Harley 的耳朵向后闪动，他牢牢地钉住脚步，
发出了一声不确定的响鼻，并甩了甩头。)
训练五：象征与隐喻 · 让主题更深刻
（将抽象概念与具体意象连接，完成句子）
障碍赛 (The obstacle course) → 对Jessica 而言，不再仅仅是比赛，而是 a metaphor for the challenges in building
trust and overcoming mutual fears (建立信任和克服共同恐惧的挑战的隐喻)。
Rose 的忠告 (Rose's advice) → 是打开僵局的钥匙，它让Jessica 明白 that true partnership is not about control,
but about connection and mutual understanding (真正的伙伴关系不在于控制，而在于连接和相互理解)。
这次与Harley 的经历 (The experience with Harley) → 让Jessica 从 a girl who sought comfort in the familiar (一个
在熟悉事物中寻求安慰的女孩) 变成了 a young woman brave enough to face the unfamiliar and build something
new (一个勇于面对陌生事物并建立新联系的年轻女性)。
【主题词汇与语料库】
核心主题词汇
信任与纽带
Trust (n./v.) 信任
Mutual trust 相互信任
Bond (n.) 纽带，联系
Build a bond 建立纽带
Connection (n.) 连接，关系
Partnership (n.) 伙伴关系
情绪与心态
Anxiety (n.) 焦虑
Apprehension (n.) 忧虑，恐惧
Confidence (n.) 自信
Reassurance (n.) 安慰，保证
Composure (n.) 镇定
Determination (n.) 决心
Patience (n.) 耐心
挑战与成长
Obstacle (n.) 障碍
Challenge (n.) 挑战
Setback (n.) 挫折
Breakthrough (n.) 突破
Progress (n.) 进步
Growth (n.) 成长
Transformation (n.) 转变
动作与互动
Approach (v.) 接近
Reassure (v.) 使安心
Cooperate (v.) 合作
Overcome (v.) 克服
Hesitate (v.) 犹豫
Respond (v.) 回应
主题表达句式
表达情绪相互影响：
1. Her calmness served as a reassurance to the restless horse. (她的镇定是对这匹焦躁马匹的一种安慰。)
2. Confidence is contagious; the horse sensed her resolve and began to calm down. (自信是会传染的；马儿感受到了
她的决心，开始平静下来。)
描述关系建立：
1. A bond of mutual understanding began to form between the girl and the horse. (女孩和马之间开始形成一种相互
理解的纽带。)
2. They learned to cooperate as a team, reading each other's subtle signals. (他们学会了作为一个团队来合作，解读
彼此微妙的信号。)
描述克服困难：
1. Every small breakthrough was a testament to their growing partnership. (每一个小小的突破都证明了他们日益增
长的伙伴关系。)
2. She learned to face challenges not with force, but with patience and trust. (她学会了不是用力量，而是用耐心和
信任来面对挑战。)
训练：主题语料默写（中译英）
请将以下与主题相关的中文句子翻译成英文。
1. 他们之间逐渐建立起了一种深厚的、基于相互信任的纽带。
2. 她最初的焦虑让位于一种坚定的决心。
3. 尽管遭遇了多次挫折，但他们最终克服了障碍。
4. 在重要的时刻，她保持了镇定，并轻声地安慰那匹马。
5. 这次经历不仅仅是关于赢得比赛，更是关于个人的成长和转变。
参考答案
主题语料默写（中译英）参考答案
1. A deep bond, built on mutual trust, gradually formed between them.
2. Her initial anxiety gave way to a steely determination.
3. Despite numerous setbacks, they eventually overcame the obstacles.
4. At the critical moment, she kept her composure and whispered reassurance to the horse.
5. This experience was not just about winning the race, but about personal growth and transformation.
第四步：综合训练与范文引导
Paragraph 1
Hearing that, Jessica decided it was time for a fresh start with Harley. She recalled Rose's words about trust and
confidence. The next morning, instead of heading straight to the obstacle course, she spent time in Harley's stall. She
spoke to him in a soft, steady voice, offering him his favorite treats and gently brushing his shiny coat. (她用轻柔
而平稳的声音对他说话，给他最爱吃的零食，并轻轻地梳理他闪亮的皮毛。) At first, Harley was still wary, but
gradually, he began to relax under her calm touch. Jessica stopped forcing him and started listening to him. During their
next practice, when Harley hesitated at a pole, she didn't yank the reins. Instead, she patted his neck reassuringly
and whispered, "We can do this, together."
(相反，她安慰地拍了拍他的脖子，低声说：“我们一起可以做到
的。”) To her amazement, Harley's ears pricked up, and he carefully stepped over the pole. It wasn't perfect, but it
was progress. Day by day, the once frustrating challenges transformed into opportunities for building a fragile
but growing bond. (日复一日，曾经令人沮丧的挑战变成了建立脆弱但日益增长的纽带的机会。)
Paragraph 2
The final day of the camp arrived, bringing with it the obstacle course race. The air was filled with excitement and
tension. Jessica's palms were sweaty as she led Harley to the starting line. "Just you and me now, boy," she whispered,
feeling a mix of nerves and excitement. The whistle blew. They started well, navigating the first few obstacles
smoothly. Then came the high wall. As they approached it, Harley's pace faltered, memories of past failures
perhaps flashing in his mind.
(当他们接近它时，Harley 的步伐犹豫了，过去的失败也许在他脑海中闪过。)
Jessica felt a flicker of her old fear, but she pushed it down. Leaning forward, she whispered confidently into his
ear, "I trust you, Harley. You can do it!"
(她俯下身，自信地在他耳边低语：“我相信你，Harley。你能做到
的!”) Sensing her unwavering confidence, Harley gathered himself and leaped over the wall effortlessly. They crossed
the finish line not in first place, but with a flawless performance afterward. As the crowd cheered, Jessica slid off
Harley's back and threw her arms around his neck, burying her face in his mane, her heart swelling with a pride
that had nothing to do with winning.
(当人群欢呼时，Jessica 从Harley 背上滑下来，双臂抱住他的脖子，把脸
埋在他的鬃毛里，心中涌起一股与获胜无关的自豪感。) She had set out to train a horse, but in the end, they had
taught each other about courage and trust. In Harley's calm, trusting eyes, she saw the reflection of her own
growth.
(在Harley 平静、信任的眼睛里，她看到了自己成长的倒影。)
