2025-2026 学年第一学期天域全国名校协作体联考
读后续写二次开发学案学生版
67. 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Mason’s Souper Idea
Mason Martin was unenthusiastic on the subject of soup. He could take it or leave it. His mother, on the other
hand, loved soup. She made two different kinds every day of the week. Some days, it was chicken soup and tomato
soup steaming in big pots. Other days, it was beef stew and mushroom soup. The only thing Mason’s mom loved as
much as soup was ducks. The Martin house overflowed with duck decorations. Duck curtains hung from every window.
Duck doormats, duck dishware, and duck throw pillows filled the house.
When Mason was eight years old, his mother combined her two favorite things and opened a small restaurant
called Soup and Quackers. When it was cold outside, Mason didn’t mind some chicken soup or tomato soup, even if his
mother served it with a duck-shaped spoon into a duck-shaped bowl. But when she offered cold soup in the summer, he
politely refused.
Other than Mason’s dad, who loved everything Mason’s mom made, it seemed that the entire town felt the way
Mason did. In winter, customers young and old filled Soup and Quackers. The soup warmed their insides and prepared
them for the freezing outdoors. But when the steamy days of summer crept in, business dropped off sharply.
Mason knew that one more bad summer would mean the end of the business. One boiling summer Sunday, Mason
sat with his friends at the ice-cream shop. They were trying to escape the fry-an-egg-on-the-sidewalk heat. Mason
absently moved his spoon in circles, watching his orange ice cream melt in the bottom of his bowl. How could he help
save his mother’s restaurant? He kept stirring as he thought — until suddenly, he opened his eyes wide. “Oh, man, I’ve
got it! I’ve got it! Ice-cream soup!” Cold, sweet, and perfect for beating the summer heat — just what Mom’s restaurant
needs!
注意：
1.续写词数应为150 左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Mason rushed home, his mind racing with the possibilities of his new idea.
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On the day of the launch, the Martins were nervous but hopeful.
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【原文翻译】
梅森的“汤”主意
梅森·马丁对汤这个话题提不起什么热情。他对此无所谓。而他的母亲却恰恰相反，非常热
爱汤。她一周七天每天都会做两种不同的汤。有些日子，是大锅里热气腾腾的鸡汤和番茄汤。还
有些日子，是牛肉炖汤和蘑菇汤。梅森妈妈唯一和爱汤一样喜欢的，就是鸭子。马丁家里到处都
是鸭子装饰。每个窗户都挂着鸭子窗帘。鸭子门垫、鸭子餐具和鸭子抱枕塞满了屋子。
在梅森八岁那年，他的母亲将她最爱的两样东西结合，开了一家名为“汤与嘎嘎”的小餐馆。
当外面天气寒冷时，梅森并不介意喝点鸡汤或番茄汤，即使他母亲是用鸭子形状的勺子盛到鸭子
形状的碗里给他。但当她在夏天提供冷汤时，他会礼貌地拒绝。
除了梅森的爸爸——他喜爱梅森妈妈做的一切食物——似乎全镇的人都和梅森感觉一样。冬
天里，无论老少，顾客们都会挤满“汤与嘎嘎”。热汤温暖了他们的身心，让他们为户外的严寒
做好准备。但当夏日闷热的日子悄然来临，生意就急剧下滑。
梅森知道，如果再经历一个糟糕的夏天，就意味着餐馆要关门大吉了。一个炎热的夏日星期
天，梅森和他的朋友们坐在冰淇淋店里。他们正试图躲避那足以在人行道上煎蛋的酷热。梅森心
不在焉地一圈一圈搅动着勺子，看着他的橙色冰淇淋在碗底融化。他怎样才能帮助拯救母亲的餐
馆呢？他一边思考一边不停地搅拌——直到突然，他睁大了眼睛。“哦，天哪，我想到了！我想
到了！冰淇淋汤！”冰凉、甜美，正是驱散夏日炎热的完美之选——也正是妈妈的餐馆所需要的！
第二节：写作训练步骤
第一步：通读全文，深度解读
读情节：
开端: Mason 对汤________，而母亲________，并开了名为________的餐厅。
发展: 餐厅________生意兴隆，但________生意惨淡。
转折: Mason 在________看到________，灵光一闪想出________的主意。
高潮: Mason 想到了可能________的好点子。
读人物:
Mason 是一个________、________、________的男孩。
母亲 是一个________、________的人。
“冰淇淋汤” 是________的象征。
读时态：
全文以________时为主，续写需严格保持一致。
读冲突：
外在冲突: ________。
内在冲突: ________。
读情绪发展：
请梳理Mason 的情感变化线索：
________ → 担忧 → ________ → 灵光乍现的兴奋 → （续写发展）→ （续写结局）
读主题：
你认为这个故事的核心主题是什么？（至少写出一个）
第二步：【十句五定法】—— 搭建你的写作框架
请根据两个段落的开头语，构思并完成以下句子，以搭建清晰的段落结构。
段落
句子功能
你的句子构思
第
一
段
1. 接续Hint1
描写Mason 跑回家时的状态和脑海中的创意画面。
2. 动作推进
描述他如何向父母阐述他的想法。
3. 有效过渡
描述父母的初始反应。
4. 有效衔接
描写全家开始为新产品做准备。
5. 段落收束
以全家投入准备的忙碌和期待结束本段。
段落
句子功能
你的句子构思
第
二
段
6. 接续Hint2
描写开业当天餐厅的氛围或家人的神态。
7. 情节发展
描述顾客对新产品的反应。
8. 主题升华
通过一个细节揭示更深层的意义。
9. 结局呈现
交代开业当天的结果或情感收获。
10. 富有余韵的结尾
用一个象征或展望未来的句子结束故事。
第三步：微写作训练—— 打磨你的语言
训练一：环境描写 · 烘托心情
（选择最贴合故事氛围的词语，并尝试造句）
心情
可选词汇
你的造句
兴奋、
急切
步伐轻快 (brisk pace); 心怦怦跳 (heart
pounding)
Mason _________
跑
回
家
，
_________，充满了无限可能。
紧张、
期待
忙碌的厨房 (a bustling kitchen); 反复检查
(double-checking)
开业当天，_________，Martins 一家人
_________。
成功、
喜悦
满意的低语 (satisfied murmurs); 灿烂的笑
容 (beaming smiles)
看到顾客们 _________，Mason 的脸上
露出了 _________。
训练二：人物刻画 · 于细微处见真情
（将左边抽象的描述与右边具体的表达连线）
他很兴奋。 A. His words tumbled out in an excited jumble, his hands gesturing wildly to sketch the
idea in the air.
她很怀疑。 B. She raised a skeptical eyebrow, arms crossed as she studied the unconventional
concoction.
他们很自豪。 C. They exchanged a look of quiet triumph, their shoulders squaring with newfound
pride.
我选择仿写第____句： _________________________________________________________
训练三：情感表达 · 找到“高级替身”
（请用更高级的词汇替换括号中的词）
想说 "excited" (兴奋): 试试 ________________ (兴奋不已), ________________ (一阵兴奋)
想说 "nervous" (紧张): 试试 ________________ (焦虑的结在他胃里收紧), ________________ (紧
张不安)
想说 "happy" ( 开心): 试试 ________________ ( 一阵宽慰和喜悦涌上他心头),
________________ (洋溢着自豪)
例句升级： 原句：Mason was very excited about his idea.
升级句: Mason was _________, his mind _________ with the possibilities.
训练四：动作细节 · 让情感可视化
（请为以下情境，设计一个包含具体动作和身体反应的句子）
情境1：Mason 急切地向父母解释他的主意。
细节版: He _________ into the house, _________ as he described the "ice-cream soup".
情境2：Martins 一家在开业前做最后准备。
细节版: Mr. Martin _________, while Mrs. Martin _________ the duck-shaped bowls for the tenth
time.
训练五：象征与隐喻 · 让主题更深刻
（完成句子，使其更具文学色彩）
Mason 的“冰淇淋汤”主意 (Mason's "ice-cream soup" idea) → 如同________________，为家庭
的困境带来了光明。
那家小小的“汤与嘎嘎”餐厅 (The little "Soup and Quackers" restaurant) → 不仅是生意，更是
________________。
融化的冰淇淋 (The melting ice cream) → 偶然间成为了________________，改变了故事的走向。
第四步：微动作训练—— 让情感在行动中展现
训练一：动作-情绪绑定
（请根据中文提示，补全英文句子）
场景：灵光乍现
中文：Mason_________，他_________，_________。
场景：急切说服
中文：他_________，_________以说明他的观点。
场景：紧张期待
中文：Martin 夫人_________，，心中。
训练二：细节放大镜
（请将简单的动作，通过添加细节进行升级）
原句： Mason ran home.
细节升级： Mason ________________, ________________.
原句： She tasted the soup.
细节升级： She ________________, her ________________ at the unique flavor.
你的练习：
原句： The customers came in.
细节升级： Customers, ________, ________.
训练三：综合情景创作
（请运用以上所有技巧，为以下情景创作一个包含微动作描写的句子）
情景：Mason 向母亲展示他试验成功的首批“冰淇淋汤”，母亲第一次品尝。
要求： 必须包含一个手部动作和一个面部或身体姿态的细节。
你的创作：
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第四步：综合训练与范文引导
训练：补全段落
Paragraph 1
Mason rushed home, his mind racing with the possibilities of his new idea. He_________________(冲
进前门),______________________________________(他的话连珠炮似的出口，甚至来不及喘口
气). "Mom! Dad! Ice-cream soup!" he_________ ( 喊道). His parents looked up from their
work, ____________________________________ ( 他们的表情混杂着困惑与好奇).
Mason _____________________________________(用手比划着描绘出一幅生动的画面) of a cold,
sweet, summer treat that could save Soup and Quackers. After a moment of stunned silence, his mother's
face ______________________________________ ( 慢慢展露出一个试探性的微笑). "It's...
unconventional, Mason," she said, "but let's give it a try." The next few days were a [whirlwind of
experimentation] (
一
阵
实
验
的
旋
风
) in the kitchen, with Mason as
_______________________________________________ (他自己创意的首席厨师).
Paragraph 2
On the day of the launch, the Martins were nervous but hopeful. They
had _______________________________________ (用欢快的夏日装饰改造了餐厅) and a bold new
menu board featuring "Mason's Super Ice-Cream Soups!" (醒目的新菜单板，主打“梅森的超级冰淇
淋汤！” ). As the clock struck eleven, the first customer, a young girl, peered in.
Mason, ________________________________________________(骄傲地站在柜台后), offered her a
small sample. She took a sip, and her eyes________________________(欣喜地亮了起来). "Mom, it's
amazing!" she cried. That was all it took. Soon, the restaurant ________________________
(充满了愉
快的交谈声). People were not just trying the ice-cream soup; they were loving it. Mr.
Martin ____________________________________( 拍了拍Mason 的肩膀), his eyes moist. Mrs.
Martin pulled her son into a ___________________ (紧紧的、充满感激的拥抱). "You did it, Mason,"
she whispered. Looking at the happy crowd, Mason realized that the best ideas aren't just about saving a
business; they're about ______________________________________(为世界增添多一点甜).
