【杭州学军中学等】25 届天域全国名校协作体高三5 月联考英语试题
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短
文。
Emma, a biology student with a deep love for animals and nature(交代人物背景信息), was
always fascinated by the mysterious ecosystems of forests(告诉你故事发生的地点). Her curiosity
and attention to detail made her an excellent observer. Jack, her childhood friend,
was an experienced hiker(交代人物2 背景信息). His practical skills and calm demeanor made
him the perfect companion for such adventures.
It was a sunny afternoon( 时间信息) when they decided to explore the thick forest
near their hometown. Armed
with a map
(过去分词做原因状语), a
compass
,and of course, a
first-aid kit, they hiked deep into the woods. The singing of birds and the rustling
of leaves filled the air, creating(现在分词做结果状语)a harmonious atmosphere. However, as
they walked further, the path became less clear
, and
the forest grew darker
, the
towering trees seemed to close in around them
, and
the sunlight barely filtered
through the thick shade(4 个同构句，刻画环境).
Suddenly, they heard a weak sound, almost like a cry. Emma stopped in her
tracks and turned to Jack. “Did you hear that?" she asked, her voice barely above a
whisper(独立主格刻画人物). Jack nodded, his eyes scanning the thick underbrush(独立主格，刻画人
物). “It sounds like an animal in trouble." he replied.
Following
the sound
(现在分词短语做伴随动作), they pushed through the bushes and found a
small deer trapped in a bush(过去分词短语做后置定语), its leg caught in vines(独立主格刻画状态). The
deer's eyes were wide with fear, and it struggled helplessly, its tender body
trembling with every movement(独立主格刻画人物). Emma knelt down slowly, her hands
outstretched(独立主格). “It's okay, little one," she whispered in a soft voice. “We're here
to help.”
Jack pulled out his pocket knife and carefully began to cut the vines, “Hold its
head gently," he instructed Emma. “'We don't want it to panic.” Emma nodded, her
hands steady( 独立主格刻画人物) as she held the deer's head, whispering( 现在分词短语做伴随动
作)comforting words. The deer's breathing was rapid, and its body trembled, but it
seemed to sense that they were there to help.
注意:1.续写词数应为150 左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: “Wait” Emma said, “its leg was injured.”
Paragraph 2: After a few tense minutes, Jack finally managed to free the deer’s leg.
【杭州学军中学等】25 届天域全国名校协作体高三5 月联考英语试题
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短
文。
Emma, a biology student with a deep love for animals and nature, was always
fascinated by the mysterious ecosystems of forests. Her curiosity and attention to
detail made her an excellent observer. Jack, her childhood friend, was an experienced
hiker. His practical skills and calm demeanor made him the perfect companion for
such adventures.
It was a sunny afternoon when they decided to explore the thick forest near their
hometown. Armed with a map, a compass,and of course, a first-aid kit, they hiked
deep into the woods, The singing of birds and the rustling of leaves filled the air,
creating a harmonious atmosphere. However, as they walked further, the path became
less clear, and the forest grew darker the towering trees seemed to close in around
them, and the sunlight barely filtered (透过) through the thick shade.
Suddenly, they heard a weak sound, almost like a cry, Emma stopped in her
tracks and turned to Jack, “Did you hear that?" she asked, her voice barely above a
whisper, Jack nodded, his eyes scanning the thick underbrush. “It sounds like an
animal! in trouble." he replied.
Following the sound, they pushed through the bushes and found a small deer
trapped in a bush, its leg caught in vines. The deer's eyes were wide with fear, and it
struggled helplessly, its tender body trembling with every movement.Emma knelt
down slowly, her hands outstretched. “It's okay, little one," she whispered in a soft
voice. “We're here to help.”
Jack pulled out his pocket knife and carefully began to cut the vines, “Hold its head
gently," he instructed Emma. “'We don't want it to panic.” Emma nodded, her hands
steady as she held the deer's head, whispering comforting words. The deer's breathing
was rapid, and its body trembled, but it seemed to sense that they were there to help
注意:1.续写词数应为150 左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: “Wait” Emma said, “its leg was injured.”
Paragraph 2: After a few tense minutes, Jack finally managed to free the deer’s leg.
1. 读后续写类型分析
该读后续写属于“冒险救援型”故事，主题围绕“人与自然和谐共处”和
“友谊与协作”。
构思思路与布局
步骤
具体内容
承接原文
需延续“救援小鹿”的核心情节，保持动作和心理描写的连贯性。
框架提炼
第一段：处理小鹿的伤腿（细节描写）；第二段：成功解救并反思
（情感升华）。
关键衔接
利用原文的伏笔（如Emma 的观察力、Jack 的冷静）和冲突（小鹿
的伤腿、森林环境）。
巧妙设计
加入环境变化（如天色渐暗）增加紧迫感，或通过小鹿的反应体现
人与动物的信任。
续写注意事项
承接原文：
保持人物性格一致（Emma 细心、Jack 沉稳）。
延续“弱小的动物声音”“颤抖的小鹿”等细节。
整体注意：
避免新增无关冲突（如野兽袭击），紧扣“救援”主线。
结尾可升华主题（如“保护自然”或“团队合作”）。
2. 故事山模式与原文分析
故事山结构
阶段
原文内容
开端
Emma 和Jack 进入森林探险。
发展
听到动物呼救声，发现被困小鹿。
高潮
救援过程中发现小鹿腿伤（续写段落1）。
回落
成功解救小鹿（续写段落2）。
结局
小鹿回归自然，人物情感升华（需续写补充）。
伏笔与冲突
分析角度
内容
原文反应句
伏笔处
Emma 的观察力、Jack 的刀
具技能。
“Emma... an excellent observer.”
“Jack pulled out his pocket knife...”
冲突点
小鹿腿伤、森林环境变暗。
“its leg caught in vines... trembling.”
“the forest grew darker...”
隐含线索
小鹿的颤抖和眼神暗示恐惧
与信任的转变。
“its eyes were wide with fear... seemed
to sense they were there to help.”
解决方案
协作救援（Emma 安抚，Jack
切割藤蔓）。
“Hold its head gently... whispering
comforting words.”
3. 原文细节分析表
分析角度
内容
原文反应句
人物刻画
Emma：善良细心；Jack：冷
静可靠。
“Her curiosity... observer.” “His
practical skills... calm demeanor.”
分析角度
内容
原文反应句
情感层次
从好奇→紧张→同情→决
心。
“fascinated by... forests” → “voice
barely above a whisper” →
“whispered... help”
关键情节点
发现小鹿、腿伤、救援。
“heard a weak sound... deer
trapped... leg caught in vines.”
语言特色
多用感官描写（声音、动
作）。
“singing of birds... rustling leaves...
trembling.”
心理描写
通过动作和语言间接体现。
“Emma stopped... ‘Did you hear
that?’”
动作描写
细致连贯，推动情节。
“knelt down... outstretched... cut
the vines...”
环境描写
渲染氛围，暗示危险。
“forest grew darker... sunlight
barely filtered.”
隐含主题
人与自然和谐共处。
“We’re here to help.”
情感转折
小鹿从恐惧到信任。
“eyes wide with fear... seemed to
sense help.”
空间转换
森林深处→灌木丛。
“pushed through the bushes...”
时间过渡
午后→天色渐暗（需续写补
充）。
无直接描述，但“forest grew
darker”暗示。
3. 推荐英文例句与高级替换词
动作描写（Action Descriptions）
1. The deer flinched as Emma touched its wound. （小鹿在Emma 碰到伤口时
退缩了一下。）
2. Jack carefully sliced through the tangled vines with his knife. （Jack 用刀小
心地割开缠绕的藤蔓。）
3. The animal’s chest rose and fell rapidly with fear. （小鹿的胸口因恐惧而急
促起伏。）
4. Emma’s fingers trembled slightly as she applied the bandage. （Emma 的手
指在包扎时微微颤抖。）
5. The deer struggled weakly, its hooves scraping against the ground. （小鹿虚
弱地挣扎着，蹄子在地上刮擦。）
6. Jack steadied the deer’s head with a firm but gentle grip. （Jack 用坚定而轻
柔的手稳住小鹿的头。）
7. The vines creaked as they were cut, releasing their hold. （藤蔓被割断时发出
咯吱声，松开了束缚。）
8. Emma whispered soothing words, her voice barely audible. （Emma 低声安
抚，声音几乎听不见。）
9. The deer’s ears twitched at the sound of rustling leaves. （小鹿的耳朵因树叶
沙沙声而抽动。）
10. With a final tug, the last vine snapped free. （最后用力一拉，最后一根藤蔓
断开了。）
心理描写（Psychological Descriptions）
1. A surge of determination filled Emma as she examined the injury. （Emma 检
查伤口时，一股决心涌上心头。）
2. Jack’s mind raced, calculating the safest way to free the deer. （Jack 的思绪
飞速运转，思考着最安全的解救方法。）
3. Fear flickered in the deer’s eyes, but trust slowly replaced it. （小鹿眼中闪过
一丝恐惧，但渐渐被信任取代。）
4. Emma’s heart pounded as she realized how deep the wound was. （Emma 发
现伤口很深时，心跳加速。）
5. A wave of relief washed over them as the deer stood up. （小鹿站起来时，他
们感到一阵轻松。）
6. Jack suppressed his own anxiety to stay calm for the animal. （Jack 压下自己
的焦虑，为了小鹿保持冷静。）
7. Emma’s hands steadied as she focused on the task. （Emma 专注于任务时，
双手变得稳定。）
8. The deer’s rapid breathing mirrored their own nervousness. （小鹿急促的呼
吸反映了他们的紧张。）
9. A silent understanding passed between them—they couldn’t give up. （他们
之间无声地达成共识——不能放弃。）
10. The forest seemed to hold its breath as they worked. （森林仿佛屏住呼吸，
看着他们施救。）
环境描写（Environmental Descriptions）
The fading sunlight cast long shadows across the forest floor. （渐暗的阳光在森
林地面上投下长长的影子。）
A cool breeze rustled the leaves, breaking the tense silence. （一阵凉风吹动树
叶，打破了紧张的寂静。）
The air grew heavier as dusk approached. （黄昏临近，空气变得更加沉闷。）
The distant hoot of an owl added to the eerie atmosphere. （远处猫头鹰的鸣叫
增添了诡异的气氛。）
The scent of damp earth and pine filled the air. （潮湿的泥土和松树的气味弥漫
在空气中。）
Shadows stretched like grasping fingers among the trees. （树影如伸出的手指般
蔓延。）
The forest seemed to close in around them, its silence oppressive. （森林仿佛向
他们逼近，寂静令人窒息。）
The last golden rays of sunlight filtered weakly through the canopy. （最后几缕
微弱的阳光透过树冠洒落。）
The underbrush crackled under their cautious footsteps. （灌木丛在他们谨慎的
脚步下发出沙沙声。）
A chorus of crickets began as nightfall crept closer. （夜幕降临，蟋蟀的合唱开
始了。）
4. 固定搭配、词法解析与语料积累
固定搭配（Collocations）
Push through the bushes（拨开灌木丛）
例句: They pushed through the bushes to reach the trapped deer.
Hold one’s breath（屏住呼吸）
例句: Emma held her breath as Jack cut the final vine.
Steady one’s hands（稳住双手）
例句: Despite her fear, Emma steadied her hands to bandage the wound.
Scan the surroundings（扫视四周）
例句: Jack’s eyes scanned the surroundings for any further danger.
Whisper comforting words（低声安慰）
例句: Emma whispered comforting words to calm the trembling deer.
单词解析：
Tremble (v.)（颤抖）
近义词: Shake, quiver
反义词: Steady, stabilize
例句:
The deer’s body trembled with fear.
Her voice trembled as she spoke.
Flinch (v.)（退缩）
近义词: Recoil, wince
反义词: Stand firm, endure
例句:
The deer flinched at the sudden movement.
He didn’t flinch despite the pain.
Underbrush (n.)（灌木丛）
近义词: Undergrowth, thicket
反义词: Clearing, open space
例句:
They struggled through the dense underbrush.
The underbrush rustled as the deer fled.
Gaze (v./n.)（凝视）
近义词: Stare, look
反义词: Glance, avert
例句:
The deer gazed at them with trusting eyes.
Her gaze lingered on the horizon.
Dusk (n.)（黄昏）
近义词: Twilight, sunset
反义词: Dawn, daybreak
例句:
The forest grew darker as dusk fell.
They hurried back before full dusk.
可积累的生词短语
Filter through (v.)（透过）
例句: Sunlight barely filtered through the thick canopy.
Stagger to one’s feet (v.)（踉跄着站起来）
例句: The deer staggered to its feet after being freed.
Snap free (v.)（突然松开）
例句: The vines finally snapped free under Jack’s knife.
Hold one’s ground (v.)（坚守立场）
例句: Despite the danger, Emma held her ground.
Fade into the shadows (v.)（消失在阴影中）
例句: The deer faded into the shadows of the forest.
5. Possible Versions(4)
Version 1
Paragraph 1: "Wait," Emma said, "its leg was injured." Realizing(现在分词做伴随动
作) the severity of the injury, she gently placed her hand near the wound, trying(现在分词做
伴随动作)to assess the damage without alarming the deer further. Her voice was still
soft, filled with concern. "We need to stop the bleeding first," she added, tearing
a
strip from her scarf(现在分词做伴随动作). Jack nodded and handed her the first-aid kit
from his backpack. The deer winced slightly but didn’t resist, as if trusting their
intention. Emma quickly cleaned the wound with medicine and wrapped the
makeshift bandage around its leg. Jack remained watchful, his eyes scanning the
forest for any potential danger(独立主格). Time seemed to slow as they worked
together(环境描写), their breaths syncing with the deer’s shallow gasps(独立主格). The
forest, once threatening, now(对比描写) felt like a sanctuary holding
its breath
(现在分词做伴
随动), for the two friends and the little creature.
Paragraph 2: After a few tense minutes, Jack finally managed to free the
deer’s leg. The moment
the last vine was cut
(the moment...), the deer staggered, then
stood unsteadily. Emma took a cautious step back, still murmuring softly(现在分词做伴随动
作). The deer blinked at them, its eyes calmer now(独立主格), and after a hesitant pause,
it limped slowly into the trees. Emma exhaled deeply, a wave of relief washing
over her(独立主格). Jack offered a quiet smile. “You were amazing,” he said. “You
calmed it.” They stood in silence for a moment, the forest resuming its gentle
whispers(独立主格). The incident left a mark on both of them—a sense of connection not
just with each other, but with the life around them(递进). With one last glance at the
path the deer had taken, they turned back, ready
to find their way home
(adj 短语做后置定
语).
Version 2
Paragraph 1: "Wait," Emma said, "its leg was injured." She reached for the
medical kit with trembling fingers, her worry evident(独立主格). “We can’t let it run off
like this. It could make things worse.” Jack crouched beside her, nodding
in
agreement(现在分词做伴随动作). As Emma
applied some antiseptic spray
, the deer flinched
but didn’t fight. She tore a clean piece of gauze and wrapped the leg tightly(救援动作),
whispering(现在分词做伴随动作) to soothe the animal’s fear. The gentle rustling of the forest
seemed to fall silent(环境描写) as if respecting the moment. Jack admired Emma’s calm
precision and empathy—it was clear her love for animals wasn’t just theoretical. A
small breeze passed through the clearing, stirring
leaves around them
(现在分词做伴随动作),
but the deer remained still, its eyes locked on Emma’s(独立主格).
Paragraph 2: After a few tense minutes, Jack finally managed to free the
deer’s leg. The
vines
fell away with a soft snap
, and the deer hesitated before
rising shakily to its feet. Emma and Jack stayed still, watching
it test its weight
on the injured leg(现在分词做伴随动作). Then, slowly, the deer turned and disappeared
into the shadows of the forest. Emma brushed a leaf from her sleeve and smiled. “I
think it’ll be okay,” she murmured. Jack gave her a pat on the back. “Thanks to
you.” The passion faded, replaced
by a peaceful quiet
(现在分词做后置定语). They packed
their things, their steps lighter than before(独立主格). The forest had tested them—and
rewarded their care with a moment neither would forget.
Version 3
Paragraph 1: "Wait," Emma said, "its leg was injured."Her eyes scanned
the wound closely, and her voice lowered with urgency. "We have to keep it still."
She carefully cupped her hands around the deer's leg, motioning(现在分词做伴随动作) Jack to
hold the body. Reaching
into the
first-aid
kit
(现在分词做伴随动作), she cleaned the wound
and wrapped it securely with a bandage. “Animals can sense fear,” she whispered,
stroking
its head gently
(现在分词做伴随动作). Jack watched her, impressed
by
(过去分词做后置定语)
how her hands moved with both skill and compassion. “You really were made for
this,” he muttered. Emma gave a faint smile but kept her focus. The deer blinked
slowly, visibly less afraid(adj 做补语), and the tremble in its body eased(独立主格). Even the
birds seemed to pause, as if witnessing something sacred.
Paragraph 2: After a few tense minutes, Jack finally managed to free the
deer’s leg. It stumbled forward and paused, glancing back at
them briefly
(现在分词做伴随
动作) before
vanishing
into the green
. Emma sat back on her heels, her heart full(独
立主格). “That was… unforgettable,” she said. Jack gave a nod, brushing
dirt from his
hands(现在分词做伴随动作). “Yeah. Nature really is something else.” They stood in silence,
then began retracing their steps. The forest no longer seemed as dark; sunlight
filtered through more warmly, or perhaps their hearts had changed(寓情于景). Emma
glanced at Jack and smiled. It had been a day of fear, care, and quiet triumph(名词并
列)—one that would live in their memories long after the forest was behind them.
表达亮点积累
表达类
型
地道搭配 & 短语
高阶替换
例句
情绪/动作描写
亮点
情绪描
写
a wave of relief,
visibly less afraid,
filled with concern,
her heart full
felt reassured,
emotionally
overwhelmed
She felt a wave of
relief as the deer
ran.
heart full, visibly
less afraid,
murmured softly
动作描
写
tore a strip, applied
antiseptic, wrapped
tightly, cupped hands
around
bound the wound,
knelt down,
brushed off dirt
She tore a strip
from her scarf and
bound the wound
gently.
reached for kit,
crouched beside,
stroked its head
描写短
语
paused briefly,
blinked slowly,
hesitated before
rising, trembled with
fear
staggered forward,
limped away,
faded into shadows
The deer hesitated
before rising
shakily to its feet.
trembled,
staggered,
hesitated, blinked
同义词
替换
calm (soothe, ease),
scared (nervous,
alarmed), forest
(woods, wilderness)
panic → struggle
→ resist → react
Jack remained
calm while Emma
tried to soothe the
animal.
soothe ≈ calm
down; vines ≈
entangling plants
地道搭配
Rummage through（翻找）
替换词: Search, sift through
例句: Jack rummaged through the first-aid kit for bandages.
Hold one’s breath（屏住呼吸）
替换词: Breathe shallowly, freeze
例句: The forest seemed to hold its breath as they worked.
Flicker of gratitude（一丝感激）
替换词: Glimmer, spark
例句: Gratitude flickered in the deer’s eyes.
Melt into the shadows（消失在阴影中）
替换词: Fade away, vanish
例句: The deer melted into the shadows of the trees.
Dappled gold（斑驳的金色）
替换词: Speckled light, sunlit patches
例句: Sunlight painted the ground in dappled gold.
情绪描写升级词
基础词
升级词
例句
Afraid
Tremulous
Its tremulous breaths slowed as Emma spoke.
Happy
Euphoric
A euphoric smile spread across Jack’s face.
Sad
Wistful
Emma felt a wistful pang as the deer left.
Nervous
Apprehensive
An apprehensive silence fell over them.
动作描写升级词
基础词
升级词
例句
Cut
Sever
Jack severed the last vine with a quick motion.
Look
Gaze
The deer gazed at them with trusting eyes.
Run
Bolt
The deer bolted into the underbrush.
基础词
升级词
例句
Hold
Clutch
Emma clutched the bandage tightly.
