天一小高考 高三第三次考试
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Writing was my passion. I had always been the best writer in my class. But then ,
the balance of my little universe shifted(强调变化)--Ethan transferred to our school.(人物性格
描写) Ethan was quiet. He seemed lost in his own world, and the other students didn't
know how to approach him. He was often alone, and it was clear that he felt out
of place. (刻画人物性格)I didn’t pay much attention at first. But then came the day that
changed everything.
It was a writing class like any other, until our teacher
assigned us a creative
essay. I dove into my work, confident as always(adj 做补语). When it was time to
shar
ing
, I listened politely as my classmates rea
d their essays
, but my mind was
already racing ahead to the praise I knew( 插入语) would come my way( 补充我人物形
象).Then, Ethan'’s turn arrived. He stood up , his voice soft but steady(独立主格刻画人物), and
began to read. His words painted a picture of an old , forgotten library , where
time stood still and the pages of ancient books whispered stories of forgotten
worlds(很好的描写图书馆的句子).
When he finished, the room fell silent( 无灵主语句). Then, thunderous applause
spread across the class
. (观众反馈必备句)Our teacher's eyes shone with delight(描写老师的反馈). “
Ethan," she said, “ you have a rare gift. With your talent, you 're bound to win the
upcoming writing competition.
The words hung in the air like a challenge(无灵主语句，比喻). I had always been the star
of our literary world, but now, it seemed( 插入语), a new light had appeared( 比喻)-one
that threatened to outshine mine.That evening, I had a talk with my father. When
I finished, he sighed softly and said“' Jealousy is a thief that steals our joy(经典的表达在
后文续写中要有衔接作用). It’s easy to see Ethan as a rival, but perhaps he’s just a fellow
traveler on the same journey. Instead of pushing him away, why not reach out? You
might discover that his light doesn’t dim yours--it only makes the world
brighter.” At that moment ,I seemed to realize something.
注意:
(1)续写词数应为 150 左右;
(2)请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答
Paragraph 1: The next day, I approached Ethan during lunch.
Paragraph 2: From that day forward , Ethan and I met regularly to write and discuss
our work.
天一小高考 高三第三次考试
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Writing was my passion. I had always been the best writer in my class. But then ,
the balance of my little universe shifted--Ethan transferred(转学) to our school.Ethan
was quiet. He seemed lost in his own world, and the other students didn't know how
to approach him. He was often alone, and it was clear that he felt out of place. I
didn’t pay much attention at first. But then came the day that changed everything.
It was a writing class like any other, until our teacher assigned us a creative essay.
I dove into my work, confident as always. When it was time to sharing , I listened
politely as my classmates read their essays, but my mind was already racing ahead to
the praise I knew would come my way.Then, Ethan'’s turn arrived. He stood up , his
voice soft but steady, and began to read. His words painted a picture of an old ,
forgotten library , where time stood still and the pages of ancient books whispered
stories of forgotten worlds.
When he finished, the room fell silent. Then, thunderous applause spread across
the classOur teacher's eyes shone with delight. “ Ethan," she said, “ you have a rare
gift. With your talent, you 're bound to win the upcoming writing competition.
The words hung in the air like a challenge. I had always been the star of our
literary worldbut now, it seemed, a new light had appeared-one that threatened to
outshine mine.That evening, I had a talk with my father. When I finished, he sighed
softly and said“' Jealousy is a thief that steals our joy. It’s easy to see Ethan as a
rival(对手), but perhaps he’sjust a fellow traveler on the same journey. Instead of
pushing him away, why not reach out? You might discover that his light doesn’t
dim(使黯淡) yours--it only makes the world brighter.” At that moment , I seemed to
realize something.
注意:
(1)续写词数应为 150 左右;
(2)请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答
Paragraph 1: The next day, I approached Ethan during lunch.
Paragraph 2: From that day forward , Ethan and I met regularly to write and discuss
our work.
1. 文章类型与续写思路分析
类型：该文章属于 “成长与竞争”类 的读后续写，核心冲突是 嫉妒与友谊的
平衡，主题围绕 个人成长、合作共赢。
续写构思方向：
情节发展：主角从嫉妒 Ethan 到主动接触，最终建立友谊，共同进步。
情感变化：从敌意（竞争）→ 犹豫（父亲的话）→ 尝试接纳→ 合作共赢。
关键衔接点：
原文伏笔：父亲的话（“his light doesn’t dim yours”）。
隐含线索：Ethan 的孤独（“seemed lost in his own world”）和主角的优越感
（“always been the star”）。
冲突点：主角的自信被 Ethan 的才华动摇。
续写框架：
段落
内容布局
衔接原文的关键点
第一段
主角主动接触 Ethan，试探
他的态度（可能紧张或尴
尬）。
承接“why not reach out”，描述
动作（如递笔记、邀请讨论）。
第二段
两人建立合作关系，互相
学习，主角心态转变（如
共同参加比赛）。
呼应“fellow traveler”，体现共同
成长（如写作风格互补）。
注意事项：
承接原文：
保留 Ethan 的“quiet but steady”性格。
延续“writing competition”的伏笔。
巧妙设计：
加入细节（如 Ethan 的笔记本写满灵感，主角发现他的努力）。
用环境描写烘托（如放学后的教室、图书馆等）。
2. 故事山模式与原文分析表
分析角度
内容
原文反应句
人物刻画
主角：自信→嫉妒→反
思；Ethan：安静但有才
华，孤独。
“He seemed lost in his own world”;
“I had always been the star”.
情感层次
从竞争敌意到接纳合作。
“Jealousy is a thief that steals our
joy”.
关键情节点
老师赞扬 Ethan，主角心
态失衡；父亲点醒。
“you’re bound to win the upcoming
writing competition”.
语言特色
比喻生动（“words hung
in the air like a
challenge”）。
“pages of ancient books whispered
stories”.
心理描写
主角的自信与焦虑。
“my mind was already racing ahead
to the praise”.
动作描写
Ethan 朗读时的沉稳。
“He stood up, his voice soft but
steady”.
环境描写
Ethan 的作文描绘“old
library”，暗示他的想象
力。
“where time stood still and the
pages... whispered stories”.
隐含主题
合作比竞争更重要，才华
可以互相照亮。
“his light doesn’t dim yours—it
only makes the world brighter”.
情感转折
父亲的话让主角反思。
“At that moment, I seemed to
realize something”.
伏笔/冲突点
Ethan 可能赢得比赛；主
角是否真心接纳他。
“threatened to outshine mine”;
“upcoming writing competition”.
隐含线索
Ethan 的孤独（需在续写
中解决）。
“the other students didn’t know
how to approach him”.
3. 读后续写推荐例句 & 高级替换词
（1）动作描写（10 个例句 + 翻译）
He clutched his notebook tightly, his knuckles turning white.
（他紧紧抓着笔记本，指节发白。）
She hesitated for a moment before reaching out to tap his shoulder.
（她犹豫了一下，然后伸手轻拍他的肩膀。）
His fingers trembled slightly as he flipped through the pages.
（他翻页时手指微微颤抖。）
She leaned forward, her eyes fixed on his face.
（她向前倾身，目光紧盯着他的脸。）
He shuffled his feet awkwardly, unsure of what to say.
（他局促地挪了挪脚，不知道该说什么。）
She scribbled a few words in the margin, lost in thought.
（她在页边潦草地写了几笔，陷入沉思。）
He let out a slow breath, trying to calm his racing heart.
（他缓缓呼出一口气，试图平复狂跳的心。）
She tucked a loose strand of hair behind her ear nervously.
（她紧张地把一缕散落的头发别到耳后。）
He hesitated before extending his hand for a handshake.
（他犹豫了一下，才伸出手握手。）
She bit her lip, debating whether to speak up.
（她咬着嘴唇，犹豫是否该开口。）
（2）心理描写（10 个例句 + 翻译）
A wave of jealousy washed over her, making her chest tighten.
（一阵嫉妒涌上心头，让她胸口发紧。）
His words echoed in her mind, stirring a strange mix of guilt and curiosity.
（他的话在她脑海中回荡，激起一种奇怪的愧疚和好奇。）
She couldn’t shake the feeling that she had been unfair to him.
（她无法摆脱自己对他不公平的感觉。）
A flicker of doubt crossed his mind—was he really the best?
（一丝怀疑闪过他的脑海——他真的是最好的吗？）
Her confidence wavered for the first time in years.
（多年来，她的信心第一次动摇。）
He wrestled with his pride, unsure if he should apologize.
（他与自尊心斗争，不确定是否该道歉。）
A tiny spark of hope ignited in her chest.
（她心中燃起一丝希望。）
His stomach twisted with unease as he waited for her response.
（他胃里一阵翻腾，不安地等待她的回应。）
She felt a pang of regret for her earlier coldness.
（她对自己先前的冷淡感到一阵懊悔。）
A strange sense of relief settled over him after their talk.
（谈话后，一种奇怪的释然笼罩着他。）
（3）环境描写（10 个例句 + 翻译）
The classroom buzzed with excited chatter after the announcement.
（宣布消息后，教室里充满了兴奋的交谈声。）
Sunlight streamed through the windows, casting golden patterns on the floor.
（阳光透过窗户洒进来，在地板上投下金色的光影。）
The library was silent except for the occasional rustle of turning pages.
（图书馆一片寂静，只有偶尔翻页的沙沙声。）
A cool breeze drifted in, carrying the scent of freshly cut grass.
（一阵凉风吹来，带着新割的青草气息。）
Shadows stretched long across the empty hallway as evening approached.
（傍晚时分，空荡的走廊里影子被拉得很长。）
The old wooden desk creaked slightly under the weight of books.
（旧木桌在书本的重压下微微吱呀作响。）
Rain tapped gently against the window, creating a soothing rhythm.
（雨轻轻敲打着窗户，形成一种舒缓的节奏。）
The air in the room grew tense as the competition deadline neared.
（随着比赛截止日临近，房间里的气氛变得紧张。）
The faint hum of the fluorescent lights filled the otherwise silent classroom.
（荧光灯的微弱嗡鸣声在寂静的教室里回荡。）
Outside, the autumn leaves rustled in the wind, painting the ground in red and
gold.
（外面，秋叶在风中沙沙作响，把地面染成红金色。）
4. 高级词汇替换（按场景分类）
场景
基础词
高级替换词
写作/才华
good
exceptional, gifted, masterful, eloquent, profound
情绪/心理
happy
elated, overjoyed, exhilarated, content, gratified
竞争/冲突
fight
rivalry, clash, tension, confrontation, struggle
犹豫/思考
think
ponder, contemplate, deliberate, muse, reflect
环境/氛围
quiet
serene, hushed, tranquil, muted, still
5. 高中语法现象 & 语料积累
（1）语法现象分析
过去完成时（强调过去的经历）"I had always been the best writer in my class."
比喻修辞（明喻）"The words hung in the air like a challenge."
独立主格 He stood up, his voice soft but steady."
定语从句"a library where time stood still"
（2）地道搭配 & 可积累语料
短语/句
型
词义
词性
近义词
反义词
例句
out of
place
格格不
入
形容
词短
语
awkward
comfortable
"He felt out of place
in the new school."
dive into
投入
（某
事）
动词
短语
immerse
withdraw
"She dove into her
studies."
bound to
注定会
形容
词短
语
certain
unlikely
"You're bound to
succeed."
hang in
the air
悬而未
决
动词
短语
linger
disappear
"Tension hung in the
air after the
argument."
outshine
比…更
出色
动词
surpass
underperform
"Her talent outshone
everyone else’s."
续写重点：围绕 嫉妒→反思→合作 展开，保持 Ethan 的“quiet but gifted”人设。
描写技巧：多用 动作细节（如 clutching, scribbling） + 心理变化（doubt,
relief） + 环境烘托（library, sunlight）。
高级词汇：替换 good→exceptional, happy→elated, fight→rivalry 等。
语法亮点：运用 分词结构、比喻、虚拟语气 使表达更地道。
6. Possible Answers(3)
Version 1
Paragraph 1:
The next day, I approached Ethan during lunch. Seeing him sitting
alone
, I
hesitated, clutching my lunch box tightly(现在分词做伴随动作). My heart pounded(心理描写)
as I
recalled my father’s words
: "His light doesn’t dim yours(衔接原文)." Taking
a deep
breath(现在分词做伴随动作), I walked over and sat beside him. "Your essay was incredible,"
I said, trying
to sound casual
(现在分词做伴随动作). Ethan glanced up, his dark eyes filled
with quiet surprise(独立主格，延续刻画人物新歌). "Thanks," he murmured, his fingers tracing
the worn edges of his notebook(独立主格刻画人物特点)—the same one he had read from in
class. I noticed so many lines that were neatly marked, a
source
of
his
writing
materials
(补充说明). "I was thinking," I continued, "maybe we could share our
notes, improve our skills and work together on the competition?"
Paragraph 2:
From that day forward, Ethan and I met regularly to write and discuss our
work. We settled into a corner of the library, where sunlight filtered through
stained-glass windows, casting
colorful patterns on our papers
(现在分词做伴随动作).
Ethan’s wild, poetic style balanced my structured narratives, and soon, our
collaboration became effortless(描写二人的写作). One afternoon, as I read his latest draft, I
realized something profound—his words didn’t threaten me; they
inspired
me
(递进句
式). "You make me see stories differently," I admitted. Ethan smiled faintly, a rare
expression for him(名词短语做补语S). At last we, both, were chosen as the candidates
for the competition. When the competition results were announced, we stood side
by side, our names listed together under "Winners." The applause that followed
wasn’t just for him or me—it was for us(递进句式).
语法加分点
分词结构（伴随状语）"Seeing him sitting alone under the old oak tree, I
hesitated..."
替换词: Observing → Noticing, Spotting
替换词: Motivate → Encourage, Spark
情绪描写Anxiety: "My heart pounded..." → 替换词: Thumped, Hammered
Relief: "A rare expression for him." → 替换词: Flicker of emotion, Uncharacteristic
warmth
动作描写Clutching: "Clutching my lunchbox tightly." → 替换词: Gripping,
Clasping；Tracing: "His fingers traced the worn edges." → 替换词: Brushed,
Skimmed
升级语料
基础词
高级替换词
例句
Good
Exceptional
"His talent was exceptional."
Happy
Elated
"She was elated by their victory."
Think
Ponder
"He pondered her words carefully."
Version 2
Paragraph 1:
The next day, I approached Ethan during lunch. My palms were slightly
sweaty(紧张心情的描写) as I
clutched my lunch tray
, but I forced myself to sound casual.
"Hey Ethan," I began, "your essay was incredible—it felt like I was right there in
that old library." His head jerked up in surprise(吃惊的描写), and for a moment, I
worried I'd startled him. But then, something unexpected happened: the corners
of his mouth lifted into a tentative smile(面部表情描写). "Thanks," he murmured, his
voice barely audible over the cafeteria noise(独立主格刻画人物). Seizing
the moment
(现在分词做
伴随动作), I leaned forward. "I was thinking... maybe we could pair up a writing
group? We might learn from each other." His pencil froze mid-sketch in his
notebook(惊讶的动作描写), and when he finally
met my eyes
, the usual guarded look had
softened into cautious interest(描写人物的表情变化). "That... actually sounds good," he said
after a pause.
Paragraph 2:
From that day forward, Ethan and I met regularly to write and discuss our
work. What began as awkward exchanges in the library(主从) evolved into lively
debates about character descriptions and metaphors. His wild, poetic
imagination challenged my structured approach, while my knack for
narrative
helped ground his
creative
ideas
. By the time the writing competition arrived(承接原文),
we'd honed our styles into something that neither could've achieved alone.
When they announced the winners, our names were called together. Clutching
our
certificates side by side(现在分词做伴随动作), I finally understood my father's words: Ethan's
brilliance hadn't overshadowed mine; it had amplified it,(递进描写) like moonlight
reflecting
on water to brighten the entire shore
(现在分词短语做伴随动作).
Version 3
Paragraph 1:
The next day, I approached Ethan during lunch. He sat alone, methodically
rearranging grapes on his plate(现在分词做伴随动作) into what looked like constellations.
Taking
a steadying breath
(现在分词做伴随动作), I slid into the seat across from him. "Your
essay?" I said. "It gave me chills." His hands stilled, and when he finally looked up,
his dark eyes held wary curiosity(独立主格，刻画人物的状态)—like a stray cat deciding
whether to bolt or accept food(现在分词短语做后置定语). "Oh. Thanks," he mumbled,
shoulders tense(独立主格，描写人物的紧张状态). I twirled my fork, searching
for words
(现在分词做伴随动
作). "Listen... I think we could help each other improve. A writing partnership, maybe?"
The silence stretched(刻画时间静止) so long I nearly apologized. Then, ever so slightly,
his posture relaxed. "Okay," he said, and the single word carried the weight of a
thousand unwritten stories(夸张的描写？).
Paragraph 2:
From that day forward, Ethan and I met regularly to write and discuss our
work. Our sessions in the sunlit art room became sacred(刻画人物的合作): I'd pace while
dictating fantastical dialogues(状从的压缩), and he’d anchor his ideas with refined
language. We pushed, we broke, we grew(排比句式). Gradually,we, joyfully, found
our skills steadily
improved
(过去分词做后置定语). When competition day arrived, we
traded drafts like armor before battle. The judges praised our works—his vivid
imagery paired with my narrative precision(独立主格刻画作品). As we stood onstage
clutching
matching trophies
(现在分词做伴随动作), the applause wasn't just for our writing.
It was for the quiet magic(递进句式) that happens when two solitary flames merge into
something brighter(描写合作，融合的好句). My father's wisdom echoed in my mind: true light
isn't divided when shared; it's multiplied(同意转换，升华中心，衔接原文).
词汇优化：
原文词
改写词
效果
Amazing
Incredible
更强烈的情感
Learn
Hone
体现技能打磨
原文词
改写词
效果
Happy
Elated
更精准的情绪
