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Kathy's family vacation to the beach was usually the highlight of her summer,
This year, however,her parents announced a new rule: no phones for the entire week.
“But my friends will be expecting updates about the trip," Kathy complained
Kathy's mom gave her a serious look,Unwillingly, Kathy handed her phone over and
her mom locked it away.
The drive to the beach house took most of the day. As they turned off the
highway onto country back roads, the clouds darkened. Rain started to pour“Even
more beautiful in the rain,"her mother said.“What do you thinkKathy?” Kathy glared
at her mom,“Beautiful,” she muttered.
That night after dinner, Kathy wandered into the kitchen, where her fatherwas
washing dishes.She gave her father a loving look and said in hersweetest voice,
“Couldn't I have my phone back, just for one second? Just so lcan tell everyone what
an amazing time I'm having?”
“Can't," he said.“It's not here.Remember?” Kathy was very annoyedHaving
nothing better to do,she examined the dusty bookcase in the livingroom. The books
looked as dull as the weather. On the top shelf, however, shespotted a puzzle.She took
it,emptied the pieces on the table, and began to
sort them.
After what seemed like a few minutes, she looked up.It was past ten o'clock,She
had been working for almost two hours! She yawned. The puzzle was less than half
done, but she was exhausted. So,she went to bed.
When Kathy awoke the next morning, she jumped out of bed and threw open the
curtains. A blazing sun was rising over the blue ocean. The sky was cloudless. The
scene reminded Kathy of a photo that her friend Betty had recently sent her.
This view was even better.It would leave everyone speechless. Kathy dashed to
her bedside table and reached for her phone. But there was nothing there.She sighed.
Still, she:wandered in front of the window,admiring the sunrise.
注意:
1.续写词数应为 150 左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: After a quick breakfast, Kathy headed to the beach.
Paragraph 2: Appreciating the finished puzzle, she realized she hadn’t thought of her
cellphone for hours.
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Kathy's family vacation( 主要人物) to the beach was usually the highlight of her
summer. This year, however,her parents announced a new rule: no phones for the
entire week(重要的衔接点).
“But my friends will be expecting updates about the trip," Kathy complained.
Kathy's mom gave her a serious look.Unwillingly, Kathy handed her phone over
and her mom locked it away.
The drive to the beach house took most of the day. As they turned off the
highway onto country back roads, the clouds darkened( 环境描写). Rain started to
pour
. “Even more beautiful in the rain,"her mother said.“What do you think Kathy?”
Kathy glared at her mom(人物情绪刻画),“Beautiful,” she muttered.
That night after dinner, Kathy wandered into the kitchen, where her father
was washing dishes. She gave her father a loving look and said in her
sweetest
voice(你猜他要干啥), “Couldn't I have my phone back, just for one second? Just so I can tell
everyone what an amazing time I'm having?”
“Can't," he said.“It's not here. Remember?” Kathy was very annoyed( 情绪描写).
Having nothing better to do(现在分词短语做状语), she examined the dusty bookcase in the
living room( 暗示文章走向). The books looked as dull as the weather. On the top shelf,
however, she spotted a puzzle. She took it, emptied the pieces on the table, and
began to sort them(动作串).
After what seemed like a few minutes, she looked up. It was past ten o'clock.
She had been working for almost two hours!(暗示人物的惊讶) She yawned(熟悉吗？). The
puzzle was less than half done, but she was exhausted. So,she went to bed.
When Kathy awoke the next morning, she jumped out of bed and threw open
the curtains(语境描写，积累句). A blazing sun was rising over the blue ocean(环境描写). The
sky was cloudless. The scene reminded Kathy of a photo that her friend Betty
had recently sent her.
This view was even better. It would leave everyone speechless. Kathy dashed
to her bedside table and reached for her phone. But there was nothing there. She
sighed. Still, she wandered in front of the window, admiring
the sunrise
(现在分词做伴随
动作).
注意:
1.续写词数应为 150 左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: After a quick breakfast, Kathy headed to the beach.
Paragraph 2: Appreciating the finished puzzle, she realized she hadn’t thought of her
cellphone for hours.
1. 文章分类与续写思路分析
文章类型：个人情感成长类（通过脱离手机、接触自然和家庭互动，主角从抗
拒到逐渐享受当下，最终实现心态转变）。
续写构思方向：
情感线：Kathy 从烦躁→无奈→专注（拼图）→欣赏自然→最终领悟无手机的
乐趣。
情节线：海滩活动（与家人互动、观察自然）→完成拼图（成就感）→反思手
机依赖。
主题：科技与生活的平衡，珍惜当下的人际关系和自然之美。
续写框架布局：
段落
内容设计
衔接原文的关键点
第一段
Kathy 在海滩发现新乐趣（如捡贝壳、
与父母互动），暂时忘记手机。
承接“admiring the sunrise”
的自然描写。
第二段
回家后完成拼图，意识到专注活动的满
足感，主动提出延长无手机时间。
呼应前文拼图细节和
“sighed”的无奈情绪。
续写注意事项：
承接原文：
保持Kathy 的情绪渐变（开头可保留轻微抱怨，结尾转向积极）。
使用原文伏笔（拼图、日出、父亲拒绝手机的对话）。
巧妙设计：
通过动作描写（如“捡贝壳”“拼图完成时微笑”）替代直接心理描写。
用环境对比（雨天→晴朗）暗示心情变化。
2. 故事山模式与原文分析
1. 故事山模式：
开端：家庭旅行，手机被没收（冲突引入）。
发展：Kathy 抗拒→尝试拼图（短暂投入）。
高潮：次日被美景震撼却无手机记录（情绪转折点）。
回落：海滩活动与拼图完成（新体验）。
结局：领悟无手机的意义（主题升华）。
伏笔与冲突点：
伏笔：拼图（暗示替代娱乐方式）、父亲说“It's not here”（暗示手机不可及）。
冲突：Kathy 对手机的依赖与父母规则的矛盾。
隐含线索：拼图的专注时间（“almost two hours”）暗示她可能享受离线活动。
解决方案：通过自然体验和家庭互动转移注意力，减少对手机的依赖。
3. 原文分析表格
分析角度
内容
原文反应句
人物刻画
Kathy 叛逆但可被引导，父母
态度坚定但温和。
“Kathy glared at her mom...
muttered” / “her mom gave her
a serious look”
情感层次
从抱怨→无奈→短暂专注→欣
赏自然。
“Beautiful,” she muttered.” /
“She sighed... admiring the
sunrise.”
关键情节点
手机被没收→拼图→日出美景
无手机记录。
“no phones for the entire week”
/ “She spotted a puzzle” /
“reached for her phone...
nothing there”
语言特色
口语化对话+细腻动作描写。
“Couldn’t I have my phone
back...?” / “emptied the pieces
on the table”
心理描写
通过动作和对话间接体现。
“Kathy was very annoyed” /
“She sighed”
动作描写
强调行为转变（如拼图、看日
出）。
“jumped out of bed... threw
open the curtains”
环境描写
天气变化烘托情绪（雨天→晴
朗）。
“Rain started to pour” / “A
blazing sun... cloudless”
隐含主题
脱离科技束缚，发现现实生活
的美好。
拼图专注时间与日出欣赏的
无手机状态。
情感转折
拼图投入→日出时短暂失落→
海滩活动重新投入。
“she was exhausted” →
“admiring the sunrise”
空间转换
车内→厨房→客厅→海滩。
“turned off the highway... beach
house” / “wandered to the
beach”
时间过渡
首日（雨天）→次日（晴
朗）。
“That night after dinner” →
“The next morning”
3. 动作、心理、环境描写的推荐英文例句及翻译
动作描写
1. She bent down to pick up a seashell, examining its intricate patterns.
（她弯下腰捡起一个贝壳，仔细端详它精致的纹路。）
2. Her fingers traced the edges of the puzzle pieces, searching for a perfect fit.
（她的手指沿着拼图块的边缘摸索，寻找完美契合的那一块。）
3. Kathy dashed across the sand, her laughter carried away by the wind.
（Kathy 在沙滩上奔跑，笑声随风飘散。）
4. She yawned and stretched, her muscles stiff from hours of puzzling.
（她打了个哈欠，伸了个懒腰，因长时间拼图而肌肉僵硬。）
5. He clumsily stacked the sandcastle, only for it to collapse moments later.
（他笨拙地堆砌沙堡，结果没过多久就塌了。）
6. She flung open the curtains, letting the golden sunlight flood the room.
（她猛地拉开窗帘，让金色的阳光洒进房间。）
7. Kathy’s footsteps crunched against the gravel path as she wandered toward the
beach.
（Kathy 的脚步声在碎石小径上嘎吱作响，她朝海滩走去。）
8. She wiggled her toes in the wet sand, enjoying the cool sensation.
（她在潮湿的沙子里扭动脚趾，享受着凉爽的感觉。）
9. The waves lapped gently at her ankles, leaving behind tiny bubbles.
（海浪轻轻拍打着她的脚踝，留下细小的泡沫。）
10. She tucked a loose strand of hair behind her ear, squinting at the bright horizon.
（她把一缕散落的头发别到耳后，眯着眼望向明亮的地平线。）
心理描写
1. A pang of frustration shot through her when she realized her phone was still
gone.
（当她意识到手机仍然不在身边时，一阵挫败感涌上心头。）
2. She couldn’t shake off the nagging feeling that she was missing out.
（她无法摆脱那种挥之不去的“错过重要事情”的感觉。）
3. A sense of calm washed over her as she listened to the rhythmic waves.
（听着海浪有节奏的声音，一种平静感席卷了她。）
4. For the first time in days, she didn’t feel the urge to check her phone.
（几天来第一次，她没有想查看手机的冲动。）
5. Her annoyance melted away as she watched her parents laugh together.
（看着父母一起欢笑，她的恼怒渐渐消散。）
6. A flicker of pride sparked in her chest when she completed the puzzle.
（当她完成拼图时，一丝自豪感在胸中闪现。）
7. She hesitated for a moment, torn between defiance and acceptance.
（她犹豫了一下，在反抗和接受之间挣扎。）
8. The beauty of the sunrise left her momentarily speechless.
（日出的美丽让她一时语塞。）
9. A wave of contentment settled over her as she sat by the ocean.
（当她坐在海边时，一种满足感笼罩着她。）
10. She sighed, resigning herself to the fact that her phone wouldn’t magically
appear.
（她叹了口气，认命地接受手机不会凭空出现的事实。）
环境描写
The golden sun cast long shadows across the glistening sand.
（金色的太阳在闪闪发光的沙滩上投下长长的影子。）
A salty breeze tousled her hair as she walked along the shore.
（咸咸的海风拂乱她的头发，她沿着海岸走着。）
The sky was a canvas of pink and orange as dawn broke.
（黎明时分，天空如同一幅粉橙交织的画布。）
The rhythmic crash of waves provided a soothing background noise.
（海浪有节奏的拍打声成为舒缓的背景音。）
The air smelled of salt and seaweed, fresh and invigorating.
（空气中弥漫着海盐和海藻的气味，清新而令人振奋。）
Dark clouds loomed ominously, threatening another downpour.
（乌云密布，预示着又一场倾盆大雨。）
The sand, still warm from the afternoon sun, squished between her toes.
（被午后阳光晒暖的沙子从她的脚趾间挤出来。）
Seagulls circled overhead, their cries echoing across the beach.
（海鸥在头顶盘旋，它们的叫声在海滩上回荡。）
The ocean stretched endlessly, merging with the sky at the horizon.
（海洋无边无际地延伸，在地平线与天空融为一体。）
Twilight painted the beach in hues of purple and blue.
（暮色将海滩染成紫色和蓝色。）
4. 高级替换词 & 语料总结
高级替换词（场景分类）
基础词
高级替换词
适用场景
Happy
Elated / Jubilant
极度开心（如完成拼图时）
Sad
Melancholic / Forlorn
忧郁、孤独（如想念手机时）
Angry
Frustrated / Exasperated
因规则而恼怒
Tired
Exhausted / Weary
长时间活动后的疲惫
基础词
高级替换词
适用场景
Beautiful
Breathtaking / Picturesque
形容自然美景
固定搭配 & 词法解析
A pang of [emotion] shot through her（一阵[情绪]涌上心头）
例：A pang of guilt shot through her when she lied.（撒谎时，一阵愧疚感袭
来。）
Couldn’t shake off the feeling that...无法摆脱……的感觉
例：She couldn’t shake off the feeling that she was being watched.（她无法摆脱
被监视的感觉。）
A sense of [emotion] washed over her（一种[情绪]席卷了她）
例：A sense of relief washed over her when she found her lost keys.（找到丢失
的钥匙时，一种解脱感席卷了她。）
Left her speechless（让她无言以对）
例：The stunning view left her speechless.（壮丽的景色让她无言以对。）
Resigned herself to...（认命接受……）
例：She resigned herself to the fact that she had failed.（她认命接受自己失败的
事实。）
可积累的生词短语
单词/短语
词
性
词义
近义词
反义词
例句
Glisten
v.
闪闪
发光
Shine, Sparkle
Dull
The morning dew
glistened on the grass.
（晨露在草地上闪闪发
光。）
Ominous
adj.
不祥
的
Threatening,
Sinister
Auspiciou
s
The dark clouds looked
ominous.（乌云看起来
不祥。）
Tousle
v.
弄乱
（头
发）
Ruffle,
Dishevel
Smooth
The wind tousled her
hair.（风吹乱了她的头
发。）
Forlorn
adj.
孤独
凄凉
的
Desolate,
Miserable
Cheerful
He gave her a forlorn
look.（他凄凉地看了她
一眼。）
Jubilant
adj.
欢欣
鼓舞
的
Elated,
Ecstatic
Depressed
The team was jubilant
after their victory.（队
伍胜利后欢欣鼓舞。）
5. Possible Versions(3)
Version 1
Version 1
Paragraph 1: After a quick breakfast, Kathy headed to the beach. The golden
sand felt warm beneath her feet, and the salty breeze teased her hair (无灵主语句，环境描写)
as she walked along the shoreline. At first, she instinctively reached for her pocket,
only to remember(意外的动作)—no phone. She sighed but then noticed the sparkle of
seashells and the graceful arc of seagulls(海边景物描写) gliding across the sky(现在分词做后置定语).
The rhythmic sound of waves gradually soothed her restless mind(环境心理描写). Kathy
wandered for a while, picking up
a shell to keep as a small treasure
(现在分词做伴随动作).
As the sun rose higher, she felt a curious desire—not to post
about the beach,
but
to revisit
the puzzle
from last night
(递进描写句). It had captured her attention in a
way she hadn’t expected. Feeling unusually motivated (现在分词做伴随动作), she returned
to the living room, sat back at the table, and began fitting (动作串描写) pieces together,
her hands moving with focus and ease (独立主格刻画人物动作).
Paragraph 2: Appreciating the finished puzzle, she realized she hadn’t thought
of her cellphone for hours. The once scattered pieces now formed a stunning
image of a lighthouse at sunset(递进句式，无灵主语句), echoing
the scene
(现在分词做伴随动作) she had
just left outside. She smiled, not for an audience, but for herself(递进句式). Her
parents exchanged a glance(人物描写，你懂得？), clearly noticing
the shift in her mood
(现在分
词做伴随动作). “Not missing your phone?” her dad asked with a raised eyebrow. Kathy
shrugged, surprised(adj 做主语补语) at her own answer. “I guess... not really.” That
evening, as the family played a board game together, laughter replaced scrolling(无灵
主语句，scrolling 指的是翻手机), and presence replaced posts. Kathy had discovered something
quieter but far more satisfying—a rhythm of life without distractions.
Version 2
Paragraph 1: After a quick breakfast, Kathy headed to the beach. The early
morning breeze carried a salty scent, and the golden sunlight reflected off the
waves like liquid fire(语境描写). Kathy walked along the edge of the water, letting
it
tickle her toes(现在分词做伴随动作). For once, she noticed the little things: the flutter of
seagull wings, the distant bark of a dog, the cool foam(名词并列举例) swirling
around
her ankles(现在分词做后置定语). Though the urge
to snap a photo tugged at her
, she let it pass.
Kathy smiled to herself, then turned away, her mind unexpectedly drawn to the
unfinished puzzle(独立主格刻画人物心理) she had started. Somehow, she wanted to see it
completed. She returned to the beach house, sat down at the table, and began
working again(动作串), more engaged and mindful(adj 短语做主语补语) than she could remember
being in a long time.
Paragraph 2: Appreciating the finished puzzle, she realized she hadn’t thought
of her cellphone for hours. The image—a meadow filled
(过去分词短语做后置定语)with
blooming wildflowers under a bright sky—seemed to mirror her shifting inner
world. For the first time(你懂吗？), she wasn’t distracted, but grounded(not but 结构). Her
mom handed her a glass of lemonade and said, “You seem different today.” Kathy
nodded slowly. “I think I just needed to slow down.” That evening, instead of
asking for her
phone
, she picked up another puzzle. Her dad joined her,
joking(现在分词做伴随动作) that she was now “addicted to cardboard.” They all laughed. It
wasn’t about the puzzle itself—it was about(递进句式) what it represented: time well
spent(独立主格), with people who mattered.
Version 3
Paragraph 1: After a quick breakfast, Kathy headed to the beach. Her feet sank
slightly into the soft sand(人物描写) as she walked, the sea breeze lifting her hair and
clearing her thoughts(独立主格刻画环境，并列). There was something freeing about not having
to frame every moment through a phone screen(现在分词短语做后置定语). She paused by a
patch of wet sand and absentmindedly began drawing patterns with a stick. The
act reminded her of how she used to sketch as a child, without purpose or pressure.
Watching
the waves slowly wash away her doodles
(现在分词做伴随动作), she felt a quiet
calm settle in. The moment was simple, but oddly satisfying(人物心理描写). As she stood
there, the image of
the unfinished puzzle
surfaced in her mind again
(无灵主语句)—
almost like it was calling her back. A faint smile appeared on her face(无灵主语句). She
turned and headed toward the beach house, a surprising sense of anticipation
rising within her(独立主格刻画人物心理)，determined(adj 短语做主语补语) to finish what she had
started.
Paragraph 2: Appreciating the finished puzzle, she realized she hadn’t thought
of her cellphone for hours. Each tiny piece had required patience(无灵主语句), just like
each moment of her day. The final image—a peaceful lake reflecting the orange
glow of autumn trees(独立主格做后置定语)—felt strangely personal(主动表被动). She sat quietly,
taking
it all in
(现在分词做伴随动作). Her parents were reading nearby, the quiet hum of the
ceiling fan the only sound(独立主格刻画环境). “Want to do another one?” her mom asked.
Kathy smiled and nodded. Later that evening, she began a new puzzle, her fingers
moving steadily, her heart lighter(独立主格并列刻画人物). The quiet, unshared moments had
become her favorite part of the vacation. She realized that disconnection from her
phone had helped her reconnect—with herself, her long-gone happy moments.
功能类别
升级表达
同义替换 / 近
义词
例句
情绪描写
a quiet sense of
accomplishment
satisfaction,
fulfillment
A quiet sense of accomplishment
filled her.
心理描写
the joy of simply
being present
mindfulness,
inner peace
The joy of simply being present
replaced her need to post.
功能类别
升级表达
同义替换 / 近
义词
例句
动作描写
wandered aimlessly,
brushed over, slipped
into her pocket
strolled,
caressed, tucked
away
She slipped the shell into her
pocket as a quiet souvenir.
高级句式
倒装、非谓语、宾
语从句、定语从句
等
—
Never before had she felt so calm. /
As the waves crashed, she stood
still, taking it all in.
高频短语
come to realize, for
the first time, instead
of, a sense of
be aware of,
replace with
For the first time, she didn’t miss
her phone.
词汇升级推荐：
基础词汇
升级词汇
联想词 / 高考常见搭配
beautiful
breathtaking, stunning
a breathtaking sunrise, a stunning view
walk
stroll, wander, pace
wander along the beach, pace slowly
think
reflect, realize, become aware realize the value of presence
feel
sense, experience
experience peace, sense calm
