求助信写作指导
假定你是李华，近期，你准备给学校英文报举办的故事续写大赛投稿，你已写好初稿。请你给外教Mary 写一封
邮件，请她给你指导，内容包括：
1. 写邮件的目的；
2. 征求建议；
3. 表示感谢。
求助信（给外教的指导请求邮件）写作指导
一、审题定位
试题体裁
起草者
阅读者
语体
落款
情景
内容
写作意图
写作期待
求助信
（邮件形
式）
学生李华
外教
Mary
正式且礼
貌（体现
对师长的
尊重，语
言简洁清
晰）
Li Hua
李华完成
学校英文
报故事续
写大赛初
稿，需外
教指导
写邮件目
的、征求
建议的具
体方向、
表达感谢
请求外教
Mary 对
投稿初稿
提供指导
外教回复
邮件，给
出关于稿
件的修改
建议
1.明确文体：求助信（以电子邮件形式呈现，需包含主题、称呼、正文、落款）
2.确定时态：一般现在时（说明当前需求、介绍稿件状态）、一般将来时（表达对指导效果的期待）
3.划出关键词：故事续写大赛（Story Continuation Contest）、初稿（first draft）、征求建议（seek advice）、感
谢（express gratitude）、外教 Mary（foreign teacher Mary）
二、结构搭建
（1）邮件主题（Subject）
核心要求：简洁明了，直接体现邮件目的，包含关键信息 “求助指导”“故事续写大赛”
示例：Request for Guidance on My Story Continuation Contest Draft
（2）称呼（Salutation）
格式要求：面向外教，使用 “Dear Mary,”（外教通常允许学生直呼其名，语气礼貌即可，结尾用逗号）
（3）Para 1：开篇引入（说明写邮件目的）
内容构成：自我介绍（可选，若外教对自己不熟悉可补充班级）+ 说明背景（参与故事续写大赛、已完成
初稿）+ 明确目的（请求指导）
示例：I’m Li Hua from Class 2. I’ve finished the first draft for the school English newspaper’s Story Continuation
Contest and I’m writing to ask for your kind guidance.
（4）Para 2：主体内容（具体征求建议）
核心要求：避免笼统表述 “请帮我修改”，需列出 1-2 个具体修改方向（如情节发展、人物塑造、语言
表达等），让指导更有针对性
示例：I wonder if you could give me advice on how to improve the plot logic of my story. Also, I’m not sure if my
characterization is vivid enough—your suggestions on this would be really helpful.
（5）Para 3：结尾部分（表达感谢 + 礼貌收尾）
内容构成：强调外教指导的重要性 + 表达感谢 + 委婉期待回复（可选）
示例：Your guidance will mean a lot for my draft. Thank you so much for sparing your time to help me. I’m
looking forward to your reply.
（6）落款（Closing & Signature）
格式要求：先写礼貌结束语（首字母大写，结尾用逗号），再另起一行写署名
示例：Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
三、常见开头与结尾
（1）开头（说明目的）
正式礼貌版（适合对外教使用）：
①I’m writing to seek your guidance on my first draft for the Story Continuation Contest held by the school
English newspaper, as I’ve just finished it and hope to improve it.
②Having completed the first draft of my entry for the Story Continuation Contest, I’m eager to ask for your
professional advice to polish my work.
简洁明了版：
I’ve finished my draft for the Story Continuation Contest and I’m writing to request your kind help in guiding me to
revise it.
（2）结尾（表达感谢）
强调感谢：
①Thank you again for your precious time and guidance. Your help will surely make my draft better.
②I truly appreciate your willingness to help me with my draft. Your insights are of great importance to me.
感谢 + 期待回复：
Your advice will be very valuable for my revision. Thank you, and I’m looking forward to hearing from you soon.
四、高分技巧
1.语气得体：面向外教，使用礼貌且谦逊的语气，避免过于随意（如用 “Could you please...?”“I wonder if
you could...” 而非 “Can you help me...?”），同时不过度卑微，保持学生向师长求助的恰当态度。
2.细节具体化：将 “请指导我的初稿” 细化为 “请指导情节逻辑”“请建议如何让人物更生动” 等，
体现思考性，也让外教更容易提供针对性意见。
3.句式简洁：控制词数在 80 左右，避免复杂长句，多用简单句和并列句，保证外教快速理解需求（如用
“I’ve finished the draft and want your guidance.” 而非 “Having spent a week writing the draft for the Story
Continuation Contest, I now have a draft that I hope can be revised with your guidance.”）。
五、常见错误避雷
1.格式错误：
遗漏邮件主题（Subject），导致外教无法快速了解邮件用途；
称呼结尾用句号（如 “Dear Mary.”），正确应为逗号；
落款时 “Yours sincerely” 首字母小写（应为 “Yours sincerely,”）或未另起一行写署名。
2.信息缺失：
未说明 “稿件对应的活动”（如只说 “我的初稿”，未提 “故事续写大赛”），导致外教不明背景；
未明确 “征求建议的方向”，只笼统说 “请帮我修改”，缺乏针对性。
3.语气不当：
过于随意（如 “Hey Mary, can you check my draft?”），不符合对师长的礼貌要求；
过于生硬（如 “Please give me advice on my draft.”），缺乏求助的谦逊态度。
4.词汇错误：
混淆 “contest”（比赛）和 “competition”（侧重竞技的比赛），此处 “故事续写大赛” 用 “Contest”
更合适；
错误使用 “polish”（侧重 “润色语言”）和 “revise”（侧重 “整体修改，含情节、结构”），根据需
求选择准确词汇。
六、本文可用开头结尾句
1 、可替换的开头（说明写邮件目的）
①I hope you’re having a good week, Mary. I’m Li Hua, and I’ve just wrapped up the first draft of my entry for the
school English newspaper’s Story Continuation Contest. I’m reaching out to ask if you could offer me some
guidance on it.
②Dear Mary, as a student who’s always valued your English teaching, I’m writing to share that I’ve finished my
first draft for the Story Continuation Contest. I’d really appreciate your help in improving it.
③I’m Li Hua from your Tuesday English class. Now that I’ve completed the first draft for the school’s Story
Continuation Contest, I’m eager to seek your professional advice to make my work better.
④Hope this email doesn’t disturb you, Mary. I’ve just finished writing the first draft for the Story Continuation
Contest held by the school English newspaper, and I wonder if you could give me some guidance on revising it.
⑤Mary, I’m Li Hua. I recently finished my first draft for the Story Continuation Contest of the school English
newspaper, and I’m writing to request your kind help in polishing this draft.
2 、可替换的征求建议表达（不同方面）
（1）情节与结构方面
①I’m a bit confused about whether the transition between the original story and my continuation is smooth. Could
you please give me advice on how to make this connection more natural?
②I’m not sure if the climax of my 续写 (continuation) is exciting enough to catch readers’ attention. Do you have
any suggestions to strengthen the plot’s tension here?
③I worry that some parts of my story’s plot are too slow-paced. Could you tell me which parts need to be adjusted
to make the overall structure more compact?
（2）人物塑造方面
①I’m afraid the main character’s actions in my continuation don’t match their personality in the original story.
Could you help me adjust the character’s behavior to keep it consistent?
②I want to make the supporting character in my story more memorable, but I don’t know how to highlight their
traits. Do you have any tips on enriching supporting characters?
③I’m not sure if the emotions of the characters in my draft are expressed clearly. Could you give me suggestions
on how to make their feelings more vivid and relatable?
（3）语言与表达方面
①I think some of my sentences are too simple and lack variety. Could you advise me on how to use more diverse
sentence structures to improve the writing style?
②I’m worried that I’ve used some inappropriate words or phrases in the draft. Could you point out these mistakes
and suggest more accurate expressions?
③I want to make my descriptions more vivid, especially in the scene - setting parts. Do you have any tips on using
better adjectives or details to enhance the imagery?
3 、可替换的结尾（表达感谢
+
礼貌收尾）
①Your guidance will be a great help for me to revise my draft. Thank you so much for taking the time to help me,
and I’m looking forward to your valuable suggestions.
②I truly appreciate your willingness to offer me advice. With your help, I believe I can make my entry for the
Story Continuation Contest much better. Thank you again, Mary.
③Thank you for sparing your precious time to guide me. Your insights are really important to me, and I’ll
carefully follow your suggestions when revising my draft.
④I can’t thank you enough for your help. Your professional advice will definitely help me improve my draft, and
I’m eager to hear your thoughts soon.
⑤Your help means a lot to my participation in the Story Continuation Contest. Thank you for your kindness, and
I’m looking forward to your reply with great anticipation.
七、范文赏析：
范文一
Dear Mary,
I’m Li Hua from your Class 12 English class. I’ve just finished the first draft for the school English
newspaper’s Story Continuation Contest and am writing to ask for your kind guidance.
I’m not sure if the connection between the original story and my continuation is smooth—could you give me
advice on making this transition better? Also, I worry my sentences are too simple. Do you have tips for adding
more sentence variety?
Your guidance will mean a lot to me. Thank you for sparing your time, and I’m looking forward to your
suggestions.
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
范文二
Dear Mary,
I’m Li Hua from your Class 12 Advanced English course, who has long benefited from your insightful
guidance on narrative writing. Having just finalized the first draft for the school English newspaper’s Story
Continuation Contest, I’m writing to seek your professional advice to refine my work further.
I’m particularly uncertain about two key aspects: firstly, whether the transition between the original story’s
unresolved conflict and my continuation maintains seamless narrative coherence—I sense a slight disconnect in the
protagonist’s decision - making process and wonder if you could shed light on strengthening this logical flow.
Secondly, I’m striving to infuse more linguistic nuance into my descriptive passages; while I’ve tried to use sensory
details, I’m unsure if they effectively enhance the emotional resonance of the scenes. Your feedback on these would
be invaluable.
Your expertise has always deepened my understanding of narrative craftsmanship. Thank you sincerely for
sparing your time, and I’m eagerly looking forward to your profound insights.
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
