江苏省南通四模5 月高三练习卷
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Sophia was a teenager going through
changes in her behaviour and dressing style
(现在分词
做后置定语).One day after school, Sophia's mother prepared a plate of delicious vegetables and rice
and asked Sophia to have dinner, but she refused to eat it, insisting(现在分词短语做伴随动作) it wasn't
what she liked.Then she absent-mindedly knocked over a vase filled with
beautiful roses
(过去分词做
后置定语). Her mother ignored it, but moments later,Sophia asked loudly,"Mummy! Why did you
throw away some of my clothes and change the setting of my room?" Her mother was shocked as
Sophia had never
raised her voice so high
.
At night when
Sophia's father
came home
, her mother discussed the matter with him.He
listened carefully and asked Sophia's mother to remain calm, no matter what Sophia did
. "It's time
that we stepped back. Don't do anything for her - no cooking, no laundry( 洗衣物), no
searching for her missing things ....(名词并列)"he said.
The next day, Sophia overslept. Her mother didn't wake her up or prepare breakfast, just
putting
some money on the table
(现在分词做伴随动作).Sophia grabbed the money and rushed to school.
That afternoon, when Sophia returned home
, she found there wasn't any food prepared(过去分词做后
置定语). Feeling unnoticed(过去分词短语做原因状语), Sophia went into her room, locked the door,and began
to cry(动作串描写) as if releasing the emotions she had bottled up for a long time.
After about 20 minutes, the doorbell rang.Quickly, Sophia dried her eyes and stepped out
of her room.When she saw her mother return with a handful of shopping bags,she came in front
of her, asking(现在分词做伴随动作) the reason for no breakfast or dinner. Her mother said gently,"Now
that(组合连词，既然) you have grown up and have your own thoughts, I'll let you make some personal
choices."Then her mother headed to the kitchen, signaling Sophia to follow(现在分词做伴随动作).Feeling
confused(现在分词做原因状语),Sophia came into the kitchen with her mother.
注意:1.续写词数应为150 左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: Her mother opened the bags and asked Sophia to look and choose by herself.
Paragraph 2: The next morning, Sophia woke up with the determination to change.
江苏省南通四模5 月高三练习卷
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Sophia was a teenager going through changes in her behaviour and dressing style.One day
after school,Sophia's mother prepared a plate of delicious vegetables and rice and asked Sophia to
have dinner,but she refused to eat it,insisting it wasn't what she liked.Then she absent-mindedly
knocked over a vase filled with beautiful roses.Her mother ignored it,but moments later,Sophia
asked loudly,"Mummy! Why did you throw away some of my clothes and change the setting of
my room?"Her mother was shocked as Sophia had never raised her voice so high.
At night when Sophia's father came home,her mother discussed the matter with him.He
listened carefully and asked Sophia's mother to remain calm,no matter what Sophia did"It's time
that we stepped back Don't do anything for her-nocooking, no laundry(洗衣物),no searching for
her missing things ...."he said.
The next day,Sophia overslept Her mother didn't wake her up or prepare breakfast,just
putting some money on the table.Sophia grabbed the money and rushed to school.That afternoon,
when Sophia returned home.she found there wasn't any food prepared.Feeling unnoticed,Sophia
went into her room,locked the door,and began to cry as if releasing the emotions she had bottled
up for a long time.
After about 20 minutes,the doorbell rang.Quickly,Sophia dried her eyes and stepped out of
her room.When she saw her mother return with a handful of shopping bags,she came in front of
her,asking the reason for no breakfast or dinner.Her mother said gently,"Now that you have grown
up and have your own thoughts,I'll let you make some personal choices."Then her mother headed
to the kitchen,signaling Sophia to follow.Feeling confused,Sophia came into the kitchen with her
mother.
注意:1.续写词数应为150 左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: Her mother opened the bags and asked Sophia to look and choose by herself.
Paragraph 2: The next morning, Sophia woke up with the determination to change.
一、类型分析与续写构思设计
分析角度
内容
文本类型
家庭冲突成长类文本：典型家庭矛盾中的成长转变，表现青春期子女与父母之
间的情感张力与理解过程。
题材特点
亲子关系冲突与情感修复，主角行为反叛但内心渴望理解；父母“冷处理”策
略引发反思与成长。
续写思路
1. 第一段：围绕“母亲让Sophia 自己选择”展开，展现温和引导与亲子互动的
情感修复。
2. 第二段：Sophia 内心受到触动，反思行为，自我改变，主动表达关爱与理
解。
布局建议
情节结构采用故事山模式（起因—发展—高潮—转折—结局），续写应从转折
到结局自然过渡并升华主题。
实施策略
利用原文伏笔与关键词，推进情节，刻画Sophia 的情感递进，语言上使用多样
句式+高阶词汇+心理描写强化表达。
承接事项
不新增人物；人物行为逻辑符合原文背景；第一段从“母亲让她选”承接，第
二段从Sophia 主动反思并改变展开。
设计技巧
利用“选择”体现尊重，引出亲情回暖；通过细节（母女互动、眼神交流、心
理变化）推动情感转折；结尾体现情感升华+成长。
二、故事山结构与原文线索提取分析
故事山结构图解
阶段
内容描述
起因
Sophia 青春期叛逆，与母亲发生冲突（不吃饭、摔花瓶、大声质
问）
发展
父母决定“放手”让她自己承担后果，母亲停止照顾起居
高潮
Sophia 放学发现家中无人理会，感受到“被忽视”，关门哭泣
转折
母亲温和应对，提出让Sophia“自己选择”，传递尊重与引导
结局
Sophia 反思自身行为，产生情感转变，主动做出改变，亲子关系修
复
三、语言线索
分析角度
内容要点
原文反应句或短语
人物刻画
Sophia：叛逆、敏感、自尊心强，内
心压抑
母亲：温柔冷静、耐心、理智
“Sophia asked loudly…”；“Her mother
said gently…”
情感层次
从生气→受冷落→委屈→释放→理解
→愧疚→改变
“...began to cry as if releasing the
emotions…”
关键情节点
1. 父母放手
2. 没早餐与晚饭
3. 哭泣释放
4. 母亲回家并邀请选择
5. 内心改变
“no cooking, no laundry…”；“...locked
the door, and began to cry...”
分析角度
内容要点
原文反应句或短语
语言特色
多种句式（复合句、强调句型）、心
理与动作描写、情感色彩词汇
gently, confused, unnoticed, bottled up,
determination
关键词分析
determination, confused, unnoticed,
grown-up, personal choices
出现在最后一段与段首句
心理描写
Sophia 哭泣、混乱、疑惑到主动觉
醒，内心挣扎与成长刻画是续写核心
“...began to cry as if
releasing...”；“Feeling confused…”
动作描写
Sophia 撞花瓶、锁门哭泣、干眼走
出、拿钱冲出门、母亲购物归来等推
动情节
“knocked over a vase…”；“locked the
door…”；“rushed to school”
环境描写
房间、厨房、空荡的餐桌营造“冷处
理”情境，突显情感落差
“no breakfast... no dinner... no searching...”
隐含主题
尊重、成长、自我管理、亲子理解、
爱的另一种表达
“...let you make some personal choices”
情感转折
从冷战到温和对话、从不满到反思、
从误解到理解
“Her mother said gently…”→“Sophia
came into the kitchen...”
空间转换
客厅→房间→厨房，反映关系疏离到
靠近
“...into her room…”；“...into the
kitchen…”
时间过渡
第二天清晨设置转变契机，体现内心
成长与行为变化
“The next morning…”
四、续写建议与构思关键词提示
第一段段首句：Her mother opened the bags and asked Sophia to look and choose by
herself.
构思关键词：温和语气、购物品选择（衣服、文具、食材等）、鼓励独立、自我认同、互
动对话
描写重点：Sophia 从怀疑到理解，从局促到轻松，两人之间小互动增加亲密度
语言技巧：用非谓语、倒装、强调句、宾语从句等多样结构 + 情感色彩词汇
第二段段首句：The next morning, Sophia woke up with the determination to change.
构思关键词：早起、主动行动（做早餐、打扫）、表达歉意、主动拥抱、亲情修复、角色
反转
情感变化：内省→反思→行动→表达→共鸣
升华主题：成长不是独立，而是理解；爱的方式或许不同，但从未缺席。
3. 动作 / 心理 / 环境描写
动作描写（Action Descriptions）：
She folded her arms tightly across her chest.
她紧紧地抱着胳膊，显得防备十足。
He stormed out of the room, slamming the door behind him.
他怒气冲冲地走出房间，重重地关上门。
Sophia hesitated for a moment before stepping into the kitchen.
索菲娅犹豫了一下才走进厨房。
Her hands trembled slightly as she picked up the spoon.
她拿起勺子时手微微颤抖。
She wiped her tears quickly and put on a forced smile.
她迅速擦干眼泪，勉强露出一个微笑。
He reached out to touch her shoulder but withdrew at the last second.
他伸手想碰她的肩膀，但最后一刻又缩了回来。
She stared blankly at the floor, lost in her thoughts.
她茫然地盯着地板，陷入沉思。
Sophia tossed her schoolbag onto the sofa and walked away without a word.
索菲娅把书包扔到沙发上，一言不发地走开。
Her footsteps slowed down as she approached the kitchen.
她走近厨房时脚步慢了下来。
She gently closed the door behind her, her expression unreadable.
她轻轻关上身后的门，脸上没有表情。
心理描写（Mental/Emotional Descriptions）：
A mixture of guilt and confusion filled her heart.
内疚和困惑交织在她心头。
She felt a lump in her throat but forced herself to stay calm.
她喉咙哽咽，但强迫自己保持冷静。
Sophia longed for a sign of warmth from her mother.
索菲娅渴望母亲能表现出一丝温暖。
She suddenly realized how much she had taken her parents for granted.
她突然意识到自己有多么理所当然地对待父母。
Her heart softened at her mother's gentle tone.
听到母亲温柔的语气，她的心一下子软了下来。
Doubt flickered in her eyes, but a tiny hope began to rise.
她眼中闪过疑虑，但也开始燃起一丝希望。
She was overwhelmed by a wave of emotions she couldn’t name.
一股说不清的情绪涌上心头。
Tears welled up in her eyes before she could stop them.
她还没来得及控制，眼泪就涌了出来。
She began to reflect on her recent behavior.
她开始反思自己最近的行为。
In that moment, she felt truly seen and understood.
那一刻，她觉得自己被真正看见并理解了。
环境描写（Setting Descriptions）：
The kitchen was filled with the scent of fresh vegetables.
厨房里弥漫着新鲜蔬菜的香味。
The evening sun cast golden rays through the window.
夕阳透过窗户洒下金色的光线。
Silence hung heavily in the air, pressing on her chest.
沉默笼罩在空气中，压得她喘不过气。
The hallway felt colder than usual, echoing her loneliness.
走廊比平时更冷，回荡着她的孤独。
The quiet hum of the refrigerator was the only sound in the room.
房间里唯一的声音是冰箱轻微的嗡嗡声。
Shadows stretched across the walls as dusk settled in.
暮色降临，影子在墙上拉长。
The mess in her room reflected her inner chaos.
她房间里的凌乱正反映出她内心的混乱。
Outside the window, the wind rustled the leaves softly.
窗外，风轻轻地吹动着树叶。
A warm light glowed from the kitchen, inviting her in.
厨房透出温暖的灯光，像在召唤她走进去。
The house, once lively, now seemed strangely quiet.
这个曾经热闹的家现在显得异常安静。
高频词汇替换
场景
常见词
高级替换词
情绪表达happy
delighted / content / thrilled
情绪表达sad
sorrowful / downcast / heartbroken
行为表现say
respond / declare / mutter / whisper
行为表现walk
pace / march / tiptoe / stride
情感波动angry
furious / irritated / resentful / outraged
4. 搭配现象 / 固定表达 / 语料整理
固定搭配与词法解析：
burst into tears（突然哭起来）动词短语，"burst into + 名词"结构常表示情绪爆发，如
laughter, anger
例句：She burst into tears when she saw the empty table.
remain calm（保持冷静）"remain" 作系动词后接形容词
例句：Despite the chaos, he remained calm and composed.
make a personal choice（做出个人选择）常用于表达成长、独立等主题
例句：Now that you’re older, you should learn to make your own choices.
feel unnoticed / neglected（感到被忽视）表心理情感状态
例句：Sophia felt completely unnoticed when her parents stopped preparing meals.
语料&生词短语积累：
短语
词性
中文释义
同义词
反义词
例句
bottle up
emotions
v. 短
语
压抑情绪
suppress / hold in express / let out She had bottled up her
emotions for weeks.
let out a sigh
v. 短
语
叹了一口气
sigh / exhale
hold breath
He let out a sigh of relief.
awkward
silence
n.
尴尬的沉默
uncomfortable
pause
fluent exchange The room was filled with
awkward silence.
step back
v. 短
语
后退、退一
步看问题
retreat / withdraw confront / push
forward
It’s time to step back and
reflect.
a flicker of
hope
n.
一丝希望
a glimmer of
hope
despair
A flicker of hope lit up her
eyes.
5. Possible Versions（4）
Version 1
Paragraph 1: Her mother opened the bags and asked Sophia to look and choose by
herself.
Surprised
by her mother's calm reaction
(过去分词做原因状语), Sophia hesitated at first but then
approached the table. Inside the bags were fresh vegetables, some meat, and even a bottle of
cooking oil(全部倒装句). Her mother smiled slightly and handed her a recipe book, saying(现在分词做伴随动
作), “Take your time.” After flipping through a few pages, Sophia decided to make scrambled
eggs with tomatoes—something that looked simple enough. However, as she tried to follow the
instructions, she added too much salt, overcooked the eggs, and burned the pan(动作串描写).
Disappointed(adj 做主语补语), she stared at the ruined dish, expecting
her mother to criticize her
(现在分
词短语做伴随动作). Instead, her mother just chuckled and said, “You’ll do better next time.” Sophia felt
a warm wave of gratitude rising inside her. It wasn’t about the food—it was about the effort.
Paragraph 2: The next morning, Sophia woke up with the determination to change.
She got out of bed early and went straight to the kitchen, where her mother was preparing
breakfast. “Can I help?” she asked softly. Her mother nodded and passed her a knife. As they
worked together, Sophia began to appreciate how much effort went into every meal. Later that
day, she voluntarily cleaned her room and even helped her mother carry groceries home. That
evening, when they sat down for dinner, Sophia proudly presented a simple salad she had
made by herself. Her mother smiled and gave her a thumbs-up. From that day on, Sophia not
only became more responsible at home but also started to understand the quiet strength
behind her parents’ gentle eyes(递进句式). Growing up(现在分词做伴随动作), she realized(插入语), meant
taking small steps forward—with humility and heart.
Version 2
Paragraph 1: Her mother opened the bags and asked Sophia to look and choose by
herself.
Caught off guard(过去分词做原因状语), Sophia blinked in confusion. This wasn’t the response she had
expected—no lectures, no accusations, just quiet encouragement(名词并列). She muttered a
reluctant “Okay,” and rummaged through the bags. As her fingers
brushed against the cold
surface
of raw vegetables,
a strange discomfort filled her chest(人物心理描写). She had always
taken these things for granted. Choosing a few simple items(现在分词做伴随动作), she attempted to
prepare fried rice. The result was clumpy and tasteless, the kitchen a battlefield of spilled soy
sauce and overcooked eggs(独立主格刻画环境). Her mother, however, simply watched with a calm smile.
“Not bad for a first try,” she said, handing
Sophia a damp cloth
(现在分词短语做伴随动作). In that
moment, Sophia felt a crack in her pride—a small realization beginning to bloom(独立主格).
Paragraph 2: The next morning, Sophia woke up with the determination to change.
She cleaned her desk, folded her clothes neatly, and walked into the kitchen(动作串) with quiet
resolve. “Mom,” she said, “I want to learn how to cook properly.” Her mother paused, then
nodded. They spent the morning making a simple soup together, and for the first time in weeks,
laughter returned to the house(无灵主语句环境描写). After school, Sophia skipped her usual nap and
washed the dishes without being asked. She even began organizing a weekly plan for chores. That
evening, as they sipped warm tea by the window, Sophia gently held her mother’s hand and
whispered, “Thank you... for being patient.” Her mother squeezed her hand back. No words
were needed. The silence spoke of love, and the warmth between them had never been more
real.
Version 3
Paragraph 1: Her mother opened the bags and asked Sophia to look and choose by
herself.
Sophia glanced at her mother warily, expecting
a lecture or at least a disappointed sigh
(现在分词做
伴随动作). But none came. Instead, her mother turned away and began wiping the counter in silence.
Confused
by this unexpected indifference
(过去分词短语做原因状语), Sophia picked up a tomato and
studied it absentmindedly. Was this some kind of reverse psychology? Still, something in her
mother’s calm made her feel oddly uncomfortable. Grabbing
a few ingredients
(现在分词做伴随动作),
she clumsily tried to prepare noodles, which ended up half-cooked. Her mother neither praised
nor mocked her efforts. That night, Sophia lay in bed, turning over
the day’s events
(现在分词做伴随
动作). For the first time, she felt not anger, but shame—and a desire to be better.
Paragraph 2: The next morning, Sophia woke up with the determination to change.
She tidied the living room before her mother could, made herself a simple breakfast, and
left a note(动作串并列) saying(现在分词做伴随动作), “I’ll help with dinner tonight.” At school, her mood was
lighter(无灵主语句), and during break, she even texted her mom a recipe she wanted to try. That
evening, they made dumplings together, and though Sophia’s shapes were odd, they both
laughed. Her mother’s quiet support had worked where words had failed. By bedtime, Sophia
hugged her tightly and said, “Thanks for giving me space when I didn’t deserve it.” Her mother
whispered, “That’s what growing up looks like.” Sophia smiled. The kitchen had become more
than a place to eat—it was now where love, change, and forgiveness were served daily.
★ 地道搭配 & 升级词汇：
take sth for granted → 忽视、理所当然
a crack in her pride → 傲慢被打碎，内心转变
with quiet resolve / soft determination → 带着不动声色的坚定
hand sb a cloth / recipe book / encouragement → 自然动作带情感
speak volumes (in silence) → 沉默中传达情感
overcooked / clumpy / bland → 具体化烹饪失败细节
no words were needed / the silence spoke → 表达亲情递进
watch in calm / respond with patience → 情绪与角色描写融合
★ 情绪动作亮词：
blinked in confusion / a warm wave of gratitude / teary eyes
clumsily prepared / squeezed her hand / muttered reluctantly
shuffled to the kitchen / whispered sincerely / chuckled softly
★ 同义替换 & 语料积累：
encouragement → support / guidance / reassurance
try → attempt / have a go / make an effort
fail → mess up / struggle with / get wrong
change → improve / grow / transform
understand → realize / become aware / come to see
★ 写作语料例句
She didn't shout, but her silence said more than words ever could.
In her quiet way, she had guided Sophia toward responsibility.
The failed dish wasn't a disaster—it was a lesson served hot.
Small actions often carry the loudest meanings.
Growing up, she learned, wasn't about getting it right the first time—it was about trying
again.
Version 4
Paragraph 1: Her mother opened the bags and asked Sophia to look and choose by
herself. Inside were fresh vegetables, pasta, and ingredients(倒装句) for her favorite dish—items
Sophia had once claimed to dislike. “You decide what to cook tonight,” her mother said,
handing her a recipe book(现在分词做伴随动作). Sophia’s fingers trembled as she
flipped the pages
,
realizing
her mother remembered her childhood preferences
(现在分词做伴随动作). Suddenly,the piles
of unwashed clothes and messy room flashed through her mind(环境描写). Swallowing
her
pride(现在分词做伴随动作), she picked a simple pasta recipe. As she clumsily chopped tomatoes, her
mother stood nearby, offering
quiet guidance without taking over
(现在分词做后置定语). When the
meal was finally ready, Sophia stared at her slightly overcooked pasta, feeling a strange mix of
accomplishment and regret.(现在分词做伴随动作)
Paragraph 2:
The next morning, Sophia woke up with the determination to change.
Before sunrise, she tiptoed to the kitchen, preparing
sandwiches for her parents
(现在分词做伴随动作).
As sunlight
spilled into
the room
, her mother entered, pausing
at the sight of the set table
(现在分
词做伴随动作). Sophia whispered, “I’ll do my laundry too.” A silent understanding passed between
them(无灵主语句)—the storm had faded, leaving
only growth in its wake
(现在分词做结果状语). That
afternoon, she folded her clothes neatly, placing
them back in the drawers
(现在分词做伴随动作) her
mother had rearranged. When her father returned, he found Sophia wiping the dusty vase stand
—the same one that had held the roses she’d knocked over. Without a word, he smiled,
knowing(现在分词做伴随动作) his daughter had finally learned the weight of responsibility.
地道搭配
Flip the pages （翻动书页）
Swallow one’s pride （放下自尊）
Offer quiet guidance （默默指导）
A silent understanding （无言的默契）
The storm had faded （风暴已平息）
情绪描写
Fingers trembled （手指颤抖）
A strange mix of accomplishment and regret （成就感和懊悔交织）
Whispered （低声说）
动作描写
Tiptoed to the kitchen （蹑手蹑脚走进厨房）
Chopped tomatoes clumsily （笨拙地切番茄）
Wiping the dusty vase stand （擦拭积灰的花瓶架）
升级替换词
基础词
高级替换词
Cook
Prepare, Whip up
Help
Assist, Pitch in
Change
Transform, Adjust
Look
Glance, Gaze
Feel
Sense, Perceive
