河南青桐鸣大联考4 月高三试卷
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完
整的短文。
In a small village located at the foot of some towering mountains lived a young
girl named Luna. She was known for her kindness and curiosity, but she had one
secret: she was afraid of heights. From a young age, Luna was attracted by the beauty
of the peaks that surrounded her. However, she was also aware of her fears she
struggled with anxiety and the idea of pushing her limits. Although she dreamed of
challenging herself, she had never set off for an adventure beyond the paths near her
home.
One day, an old traveler named Elias arrived at the village, He spoke of a hidden
cave high in the mountains, where a rare flower bloomed only once every decade.
The flower, he said, had the power to cure any illness. Luna's best friend, Sam, had
been sick for months, and the village doctor had no cure. Luna knew she had to find
the flower, but the thought of climbing the mountain made her heart race.
Elias offered to guide her, and a brave boy named Kai, who had always dreamed
of adventure, joined them. They set out in the morning with their path winding
steeply upward. As they climbed, Luna's fear grew, Her legs shook terribly, and she
was nearly out of breath. Kai noticed her struggle and offered his hand. “You're
stronger than you think,” he said, “Just focus on one step at a time.”
Elias, wise and patient, shared stories of his travels, distracting Luna from her
fear.“Courage isn't the absence of fear," he said, “It's moving forward with it.” His
words remained in her mind as they pressed on.
When they reached a narrow ledge(岩架), Luna froze. The drop below was
horrible with the cold wind blowing around her. She wanted to turn back, but the
thought of Sam's paleface gave her strength, She closed her eyes, took a deep breath,
and stepped onto the ledge.Kai walked beside her, steady and comforting, while Elias
led the way.
注意:
1.续写词数应为150 左右:
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: Finally, they reached the cave.
Paragraph 2: From then on, Luna no longer feared height.
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完
整的短文。
In a small village located
at the foot of some towering mountains
(过去分词做后置定语)
lived a young girl(倒装句，难倒你还不知道句子怎么扩写吗？) named
Luna
(过去分词做后置定语) . She was
known for her kindness and curiosity, but she had one secret: she was afraid
of
heights(人物性格刻画，重要的背景信息). From a young age, Luna was attracted by the beauty of
the peaks that surrounded her. However, she was also aware of her fears: she
struggled with anxiety and the idea of pushing her limits. Although she
dreamed
of challenging herself
, she had never set off for an adventure beyond the paths near
her home.(交代背景信息，刻画人物Luna)
One day, an old traveler named Elias(过去分词做后置定语) arrived at the village. He
spoke of a hidden cave high in the mountains(adj 短语做补语), where a rare flower
bloomed only once every decade. The flower, he said, had the power to cure any
illness. Luna's best friend, Sam, had been sick for months, and the village doctor
had no cure. Luna knew she had to find the flower, but the thought of climbing the
mountain made her heart race(刻画人物).
Elias offered to guide her, and a brave boy named Kai(过去分词做后置定语), who had
always dreamed of adventure, joined them. They set out in the morning with
their path winding steeply upward(with 复合结构). As they climbed, Luna's fear grew.(情绪描写)
Her legs shook terribly, and she was nearly out of breath(人物状态刻画). Kai noticed her
struggle and offered his hand. “You're stronger than you think,” he said, “Just focus
on one step at a time(重要的提示).”
Elias, wise and patient(adj 做补语，人物性格刻画), shared stories of his travels(信息提示，人物刻画),
distracting
Luna from her fear
(现在分词做伴随动作).“Courage isn't the absence of fear," he
said, “It's moving forward with it(重要的话总是在后文中可以衔接的).” His words
remained in her
mind as they pressed on.
When they reached a narrow ledge(岩架), Luna froze(人物状态描写). The drop below
was horrible with
the cold wind blowing around her
(with 复合结构). She wanted to turn
back, but the thought of Sam's paleface gave her strength(一想到....). She closed her
eyes, took a deep breath, and stepped onto the ledge(动作串并列). Kai walked beside
her, steady and comforting(人物性格刻画), while Elias led the way(人物性格刻画).
注意:
1.续写词数应为150 左右:
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: Finally, they reached the cave.
Paragraph 2: From then on, Luna no longer feared height.
1. 文章分类与续写思路分析
文章类型： 个人成长型读后续写（主角克服恐惧、实现自我突破）。
续写构思方向：
主题：勇气、友情、自我成长。
核心冲突：Luna 的恐高与拯救朋友的使命感之间的矛盾。
结局设计：需体现Luna 的心理蜕变（从恐惧到勇敢）和团队合作的成功。
框架提炼：
段落
内容布局
关键衔接点
第一段
到达洞穴后的发现（如环
境描写、花朵的象征意
义）
承接原文“narrow ledge”的紧张感，
过渡到洞穴内的平静或新挑战
第二段
Luna 的蜕变（如主动行
动、帮助他人）
呼应前文“fear of heights”和Elias 的
哲理句
实施要点：
承接原文： 保持人物性格一致性（Luna 的善良、Kai 的勇敢、Elias 的智慧）。
延续动作描写（如“shaking legs”变为“steady steps”）。引用伏笔（如“cure
any illness”需对应Sam 的康复）。
巧妙设计：洞穴内设置象征性障碍（如黑暗需火把，呼应“cold wind”）。
让Luna 主动决策（如让Kai 先取花，体现领导力成长）。
2. 故事山模式与原文分析
故事山模式：
阶段
原文内容
续写对应点
开端
Luna 的恐高与朋友生病
引入冒险动机
发展
团队出发，Luna 克服初步恐惧
攀爬时的心理描写
高潮
跨越岩架的瞬间
洞穴内的终极考验
结局
未完成
取花成功并治愈Sam
衔接点与关键分析：
分析角度
内容
原文反应句
人物刻画
Luna 的脆弱与坚韧
“Her legs shook terribly... stepped onto
the ledge”
情感层次
恐惧→决心→勇气
“thought of Sam's pale face gave her
strength”
关键情节点
跨越岩架
“she closed her eyes... stepped onto the
ledge”
语言特色
比喻与哲理
“Courage isn't the absence of fear...”
心理描写
内心挣扎
“she wanted to turn back...”
动作描写
攀爬细节
“path winding steeply upward”
环境描写
险峻地势
“cold wind blowing around her”
隐含主题
克服恐惧=成长
全文对高度的反复提及
情感转折
从焦虑到坚定
“You're stronger than you think”
伏笔/冲突
花朵的治愈能力
“had the power to cure any illness”
隐含线索
Elias 的旅行故事
可能暗示洞穴内的其他秘密
解决方案设计：
洞穴内挑战：花朵被冰封，需团队合作融化（象征“温暖战胜寒冷”）。
结尾升华：Luna 回村后主动帮助其他恐高孩子（体现成长传递）。
3. 动作、心理、环境描写推荐例句及翻译
动作描写（Action Descriptions）
1.
She clenched her fists, forcing herself to take another step.
（她握紧拳头，强迫自己再迈出一步。）
2.
Kai reached out, steadying her as she wobbled on the narrow ledge.
（Kai 伸出手，在她摇晃不稳时扶住了她。）
3.
Her fingers trembled as she grasped the icy rock.
（她的手指在抓住冰冷的岩石时颤抖着。）
4.
Elias moved cautiously, testing each foothold before shifting his weight.
（Elias 小心翼翼地移动，在转移重心前试探每一个落脚点。）
5.
Luna’s breath came in short gasps as she inched forward.
（Luna 喘着粗气，一点点向前挪动。）
6.
The wind howled around them, threatening to knock them off balance.
（狂风在他们周围呼啸，似乎随时会把他们吹倒。）
7.
She braced herself against the cliff face, pressing her body close to the
rock.
（她紧贴崖壁，稳住身体。）
8.
Kai scrambled up the slope, his boots kicking loose pebbles.
（Kai 手脚并用地爬上斜坡，靴子踢飞了几块碎石。）
9.
With a final heave, she pulled herself onto the ledge.
（最后用力一撑，她爬上了岩架。）
10.
The rope tightened as Elias secured it around a sturdy boulder.
（Elias 把绳子牢牢绑在一块巨石上，绳子绷紧了。）
11.
心理描写（Psychological Descriptions）
1.
Fear clawed at her chest, but she swallowed it down.
（恐惧撕扯着她的心，但她强压了下去。）
2.
A surge of determination drowned out her doubts.
（一股决心淹没了她的疑虑。）
3.
Her mind raced, imagining all the ways this could go wrong.
（她的思绪飞速运转，想象着各种可能的失败。）
4.
The thought of Sam’s pale face steeled her nerves.
（想到Sam 苍白的脸，她坚定了意志。）
5.
She fought the urge to turn back, reminding herself why she started.
（她强忍着回头的冲动，提醒自己为何出发。）
6.
Doubt gnawed at her, but she refused to let it win.
（怀疑啃噬着她，但她拒绝让它得逞。）
7.
Her heartbeat pounded in her ears, drowning out all other sounds.
（她的心跳声在耳边轰鸣，盖过了一切声音。）
8.
A strange calm settled over her as she focused on the next step.
（当她专注于下一步时，一种奇怪的平静笼罩了她。）
9.
She felt a flicker of hope, fragile but persistent.
（她感受到一丝希望，微弱却顽强。）
10.
The weight of her fear lifted slightly as she took the first step.
（当她迈出第一步时，恐惧的重量似乎减轻了一点。）
11.
环境描写（Environmental Descriptions）
The cave yawned before them, dark and foreboding.
（洞穴在他们面前张开大口，黑暗而险恶。）
A cold gust of wind whipped through the narrow passage.
（一阵冷风呼啸着穿过狭窄的通道。）
The jagged rocks loomed overhead, casting eerie shadows.
（嶙峋的岩石高悬头顶，投下诡异的阴影。）
The mountain air was thin, making each breath a struggle.
（山上的空气稀薄，每一次呼吸都很艰难。）
The distant cry of an eagle echoed through the valley.
（远处一只鹰的鸣叫在山谷中回荡。）
The path twisted upward, disappearing into the mist.
（小路蜿蜒向上，消失在雾气中。）
The cave walls glistened with moisture, reflecting their torchlight.
（洞穴的墙壁因潮湿而闪闪发光，反射着他们的火把光芒。）
The ground beneath them crumbled slightly with each step.
（脚下的地面随着每一步微微塌陷。）
The scent of pine and damp earth filled the air.
（松树和潮湿泥土的气味弥漫在空气中。）
The silence was deafening, broken only by their ragged breathing.
（寂静震耳欲聋，只有他们急促的呼吸声打破沉寂。）
4. 高级替换词 & 固定搭配
高级词汇替换（按场景分类）
普通词
高级替换词
适用场景
afraid
terrified / petrified
强烈恐惧
brave
courageous / valiant
英勇行为
climb
ascend / scale
登山描写
walk carefully
tread cautiously / inch forward
谨慎移动
help
assist / steady
团队合作
固定搭配 & 词法解析
Push one’s limits（挑战极限）
Luna dreamed of pushing her limits, despite her fear.
Steel one’s nerves（鼓起勇气）
She steeled her nerves and stepped onto the ledge.
Loom overhead（高悬于头顶）
The cliffs loomed overhead, intimidating yet majestic.
Drown out doubts（淹没疑虑）
Her determination drowned out all doubts.
Grit one’s teeth（咬紧牙关坚持）
He gritted his teeth and kept climbing.
可积累语料（生词短语）
单词/短语
词
性
词义
近义词
反义词
例句
foreboding
adj.
不祥
的
ominous
reassuring
The dark clouds had a
foreboding appearance.
wobble
v.
摇晃
sway
stabilize
Her legs wobbled as she
stood on the edge.
heave
v.
用力
拉
haul
release
With a final heave, she
pulled herself up.
gnaw at
v.
啃噬
torment
soothe
Guilt gnawed at him after the
mistake.
petrified
adj.
吓呆
的
terrified
fearless
She was petrified at the sight
of the drop.
总结
动作描写：多用动态动词（clench, scramble, brace）增强画面感。
心理描写：通过比喻（fear clawed at her）和感官细节（heartbeat pounded）
深化情绪。
环境描写：结合五感（sound, smell, touch）营造沉浸感。
高级替换：避免重复，提升语言丰富度（如用“ascend”代替“climb”）。
固定搭配：增强语言地道性（如“steel one’s nerves”）。
5. Possible Versions(3)
Special Version
Paragraph 1:
Finally, they reached the cave. The temperature dropped sharply(环境描写) as
they
entered
, their breath visible in the sudden chill(独立主格，刻画环境). Before them, the
flower bloomed defiantly from a crack in the stone, its bioluminescence painting
the walls with swirling
blue
patterns
. Luna's fingers, which had clawed at the
ledge hours earlier, now hovered piously. "Sam would call this magic," she said
softly. Kai grinned "He'll call you magic for getting it." Elias remained silent but
nodded approvingly—his faith in her had never wavered(三个人物的刻画描写). When Luna
finally
cradled the flower in her palms
, its light pulsed in sync with her heartbeat(刻
画花的特点), as if acknowledging her triumph(状从压缩). Their return trek became a
procession of wonder: Luna pointed out geological formations she'd been too
panicked to notice before, while Kai and Elias
exchanged amused glances at
her
newfound enthusiasm.(次要人物描写的很好处理方式)
Paragraph 2:
From then on, Luna no longer feared heights. She established a tradition:
every spring, she'd guide a group to the cave, retelling
their adventure with Sam
(现
在分词做伴随动作) interjecting
colorful embellishments
(现在分词做伴随动作). "And then Luna
screamed like a—" "I did not!" she'd protest as everyone laughed. Elias, when
present, would add philosophical depth: "What we call bravery(主从)is simply love
in action—love for others, or for our own potential." Kai, now
heading
mountain rescue teams(现在分词做伴随动作), always made sure to "accidentally" leave extra
ropes at the ledge—"For new Lunas," he'd tease. The peaks that
once
seemed
hostile now felt like wise elders(对比描写), their snowy crowns nodding approval(独立主格)
as Luna helped others rewrite their stories, one conquer
ing
fear at a time
(同位语，解释说明).
Version 1
Paragraph 1:
Finally, they reached the cave. The air inside was damp and cool, and the
faint blue glow of the rare flower illuminated the dark walls(环境刻画，想到了什么，哪个Lair 你还记
得吗？). Luna’s hands trembled(人物状态描写) slightly as she
knelt beside it
, her fingers
brushing the delicate petals(独立主格刻画人物).Elias placed a reassuring hand on her
shoulder. “Patience”, he murmured. Elias’s words echoed in her
mind: “Courage isn’t the absence of fear.”(与原文衔接) With a deep breath, she carefully
plucked the flower, its light flickering like a tiny beacon of hope(独立主格刻画花的功效). Kai,
watching
her with admiration
(现在分词短语做后置定语), whispered, “You faced your fear—
now we can save Sam.” The descent was easier; Luna’s steps were steadier, her
grip firmer(独立主格，刻画人物状态). The mountain, once
a source of terror
(对比描写), now felt like
a conquered challenge.
Paragraph 2:
From then on, Luna no longer feared heights. She began guiding villagers
along the same path, teaching
them to focus on
“one step at a time”
(现在分词做伴随动作)—
just as Kai had taught her. When nervous travelers hesitated, she would smile and
say, “The view from the top is worth every shaky moment.” Even Sam, now fully
recovered(adj 做补语), joined her on short hikes, laughing(现在分词做伴随动作) as Luna pointed out
the ledge she had once frozen upon. The mountains, once looming and
intimidating(对比描写，adj 做补语), became a place of triumph. Luna realized that fear, when
faced(状从压缩), could transform into strength—and that the greatest adventures
often began with a single, trembling step(衔接原文).
加分点 & 语料积累
Echoed in her mind（间接引语+心理描写）→ Elias’s words echoed in her
mind.
With a deep breath, she...（伴随状语）→ With a deep breath, she plucked the
flower.
Once a source of terror, now...（对比结构）→ The mountain, once a source of
terror, now felt conquered.
亮点词汇替换
普通词
高级替换
例句
afraid
trembled
Her hands trembled slightly.
happy
admiration
Kai watched her with admiration.
take
pluck
She carefully plucked the flower.
go down
descent
The descent was easier.
scared
froze upon
The ledge she had once frozen upon.
情绪 & 动作描写
“You faced your fear—now we can save Sam.”（对话推进情节）
The mountain, once a source of terror, now felt conquered.（心理成长）
Her steps were steadier, her grip firmer.（动作细节）
Version 2
Paragraph 1:
Finally, they reached the cave. The rare flower, nestled
in a crevice
(过去分词做后置定语),
pulsed with a gentle light(魔发奇缘，你看过吗？), as if breathing(状从省略形式). Luna hesitated—
what if she damaged it? But Elias’s steady voice reassured her(人物互动): “Trust your
hands; they’ve carried you this far.” Gently, she cupped the blossom, its warmth
seeping into her palms(独立主格). Kai, ever the optimist(补语，补充人物特点), grinned. “Sam’s
going to love this!” As they retraced their steps, Luna noticed how the cliffs no
longer seemed to haunt her but stood as silent witnesses to her courage. The
wind, once biting(对比描写), now felt like a cool caress.
Paragraph 2:
From then on, Luna no longer feared heights. She returned to the cave often,
not for the flower, but to sit on the ledge and watch the sunrise(刻画人物的变化).
Villagers called her “the girl who tamed the mountain,” though she’d laugh and
say, “It tamed me first.” Even Sam, now healthy(对比描写), would tease, “Remember
when you couldn’t look down?” Luna’s fear had dissolved like mist under
sunlight, leaving
behind a quiet confidence
(现在分词做结果状语). She’d learned that
bravery wasn’t about never stumbling—it was about rising each time you did.(递进
句式)
加分点 & 语料积累
1.语法加分点
As if breathing（比喻+拟人）→ The flower pulsed as if breathing.
Trust your hands; they’ve carried you this far.（哲理句+代词指代）
Dissolved like mist under sunlight（明喻）→ Her fear dissolved like mist.
亮点词汇替换
普通词
高级替换
例句
hold
cupped
She cupped the blossom.
cold
biting
The wind, once biting, now felt gentle.
go back
retraced
They retraced their steps.
scary
leer at
The cliffs no longer seemed to leer.
brave
quiet confidence
She gained quiet confidence.
情绪 & 动作描写
“Sam’s going to love this!”（乐观性格延续）
The wind, once biting, now felt like a caress.（环境对比）
“It tamed me first.”（幽默+成长体现）
Version 3
Paragraph 1:
Finally, they reached the cave. The flower’s glow cast dancing shadows on
the walls, and Luna’s earlier dread turned to awe(情绪变化描写). “We made it,” she
murmured. Kai, ever practical(adj 主语补语), nudged her. “Quick, before it fades!(增加戏剧性)”
Elias remained at the entrance, his
wise
eyes
centering
on
Luna
(独立主格刻画人物).
As she
harvested
it,
Elias’s words—
“moving forward with fear”
—flashed
through her mind(衔接原文). The journey back was lighter; Luna even paused to
peer over the ledge(人物变化的描写), marveling at(现在分词短语做伴随动作) how small the drop now
seemed. The mountains, once
a nightmare
for
Luna
(对比描写), had shrunk to mere
hills in her eyes.
Paragraph 2:
From then on, Luna no longer feared heights. She took up mapping the
trails, marking
safe paths with ribbons
(现在分词做伴随动作)—“For others like me,” she’d
explain. Sam, now her hiking partner(人物变化描写，补充), joked that she’d “traded fear for
a compass.” Luna smiled. The peaks were no longer barriers but invitations,(递进描写)
whispering
of horizons yet unseen
(现在分词做后置定语). She’d learned that fear, when
conquered(状从省略), became just another path—one leading to
places
(现在分词做后置定语)
she’d never dreamed possible.
加分点 & 语料积累
1. 语法加分点
Turned to awe（情绪转变描写）→ Her dread turned to awe.
“For others like me”（人物动机深化）
Whispering of horizons（拟人+象征）→ The peaks whispered of horizons.
亮点词汇替换
普通词
高级替换
例句
take
harvested
She harvested the flower.
look
peer over
She peered over the ledge.
big
monstrous
The mountains, once monstrous.
small
shrunk
Had shrunk to mere hills.
road
horizons
Whispering of horizons unseen.
情绪 & 动作描写
“It’s… alive.”（惊叹+短句强调）
“Traded fear for a compass.”（幽默+成长象征）
The peaks whispered invitations.（环境拟人化）
Finally,they reached the cave.Inside,the flower glowed softly, with its petals
shining like starlight. Luna's fear melted away as she carefully picked it up, “You did
it,” Kai said, smiling broadly,“You conquered the mountain-and your fear.” On the
way down, Luna felt a newfound confidence.The mountains no longer seemed like
enemies but allies. Their peaks acted as a reminder of what she had overcome. When
they returned to the village,the flower cured Sam,and Luna became a hero.
From then on, Luna no longer feared heights.She often climbed the mountains,not
just to explore, but to remind herself that courage is born in the face of fear, And
every time she reached the top,she felt unstoppable. Luna realized that life's most
significant challenges often lie just beyond the boundaries of comfort, It was a lesson
she would carry for the rest of her life-facing fear head-on,little by little, could lead to
unimaginable rewards.
