四川省达州市第二次诊断性测试 第二节(满分 25 分)
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
The bell rang. I grabbed my backpack and headed to the library for my
favorite after-school activity: Writing Club. Miss Lisa(人物一), our leader, said we'd
exchange stories with partners and give suggestions to improve them. The best
story would be shared next week. My partner was Penny(人物二), who always got
perfect scores on spelling and grammar tests(人物的刻画). We sat across from each
other at a table. Then I handed her my creative
but error-filled draft
(我的作品的描述).
Penny looked worried as she gave me her story. I read her story and it was perfect! I
had no suggestions. She didn't even look at me when she returned my story(人物性格刻
画).Why was she so nervous?(交代事件的背景信息，提出第一个冲突点)
When class ended, Penny looked relieved. She jumped up and grabbed her
backpack.Everything fell out(无灵主语句). She shoved (塞) her stuff back in and
hurried out of the library. I noticed a book under the table. It must have fallen out of
Penny's bag. I flipped through the book. It was just like Penny's story. It was
longer but the plot was exactly the same(递进描写). I couldn't believe it. Penny had copied
this idea! It wasn't fair, I got really annoyed.
Outside the school, I spotted Penny sitting on a bench and I walked over.
“You dropped this," I said, holding out
the book and
raising
my eyebrows at
her(现在分词做伴随动作). Penny's shoulders were slumped (耷拉着). She sniffed and wiped
her nose on her sleeve(哭的细节动作描写). She took the book and ran away. I froze there(人物状态
描写), not knowing(现在分词做伴随动作) what to do. I realized I shouldn't have made her feel
bad.
I kept thinking about Penny as I walked home
. I decided to ask my parents
for advice. At home,I found my parents were cooking in the kitchen. Dad
chopped vegetables into perfect shapes, while Mom
added adventurous flavors
.
Their dinners turned out delicious. That gave me an idea: Penny and I could
combine her technical skills with my creativity(对中心的把握), just like the kitchen
teamwork.
注意:
1.续写词数应为150 左右:
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: The next morning at school, I found Penny and told her my idea.
Paragraph 2: At Writing Club next week, Penny read our combined story aloud.
四川省达州市第二次诊断性测试 第二节(满分 25 分)
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的
短文。
The bell rang.I grabbed my backpack and headed to the library for my favorite
after-school activity: Writing Club. Miss Lisa, our leader, said we'd exchange stories
with partners and give suggestions to improve them. The best story would be shared
next week. My partner was Penny, who always got perfect scores on spelling and
grammar tests. We sat across from each other at a table. Then I handed her my
creative but error-filled draft. Penny looked worried as she gave me her story. I read
her story and it was perfect! I had no suggestions. She didn't even look at me when
she returned my story.Why was she so nervous?
When class ended, Penny looked relieved. She jumped up and grabbed her
backpack.Everything fell out. She shoved (l 塞) her stuff back in and hurried out of
the library. I noticed a book under the table. It must have fallen out of Penny's bag. I
flipped through the book. It was just like Penny's story. It was longer but the plot was
exactly the same. I couldn't believe it. Penny had copied this idea! It wasn't fair, I got
really annoyed.
Outside the school, I spotted Penny sitting on a bench and I walked over. “You
dropped this," I said, holding out the book and raising my eyebrows at her. Penny's
shoulders were slumped (耷拉着). She sniffed and wiped her nose on her sleeve. She
took the book and ran away. I froze there, not knowing what to do. I realized I
shouldn't have made her feel bad.
I kept thinking about Penny as I walked home, I decided to ask my parents for
advice. At home,I found my parents were cooking in the kitchen. Dad chopped
vegetables into perfect shapes, while Mom added adventurous flavors. Their dinners
turned out delicious. That gave me an idea: Penny and I could combine her technical
skills with my creativity, just like the kitchen teamwork.
注意:
1.续写词数应为150 左右:
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: The next morning at school, I found Penny and told her my idea.
Paragraph 2: At Writing Club next week, Penny read our combined story aloud.
1. 文章类型与续写思路分析
文章类型：人际关系类（涉及诚信、合作与成长）。
续写构思与布局：
主题升华：从“发现抄袭”到“合作共赢”，体现宽容与团队精神。
框架提炼：
第一段：主动沟通，提出合作建议（承接“厨房灵感”）。
第二段：展示合作成果，化解矛盾（呼应“最佳故事分享”）。
实施要点：
延续人物性格（Penny 的紧张、主角的善意）。
利用伏笔（“厨房团队合作”类比）。
结局正向（情感转折：愤怒→理解→成功）。
注意事项：
承接原文事项
整体注意事项
Penny 的紧张神态（slumped shoulders）
避免直接批评，突出主角的主动和
解
抄袭冲突与书本伏笔
解决方式需合理（如合作而非揭
发）
父母厨房的类比
明确将合作与烹饪类比关联
巧妙设计：
象征手法：用“厨房合作”隐喻写作合作。
情感转折：Penny 从逃跑→接受帮助→自信朗读。
2. 故事山模式与原文分析
1. 故事山模式：
开端：参加写作俱乐部，发现Penny 异常。
发展：揭露抄袭，冲突爆发。
高潮：主角反思并计划合作。
结局：合作成功，化解矛盾。
衔接点与关键分析：
分析角度
内容
原文反应句
人物刻画
Penny：完美主义但缺乏自信
“Penny looked worried...
didn’t even look at me”
情感层次
主角从愤怒到共情
“I realized I shouldn’t have
made her feel bad.”
关键情节点
抄袭揭露→合作灵感
“It was just like Penny’s
story... I decided to ask my
parents for advice.”
语言特色
动作描写突出心理（如
“shoved”“sniff”）
“She shoved her stuff back
in... wiped her nose on her
sleeve.”
心理描写
主角的内心矛盾
“I got really annoyed... not
knowing what to do.”
隐含主题
团队合作优于个人竞争
“Their dinners turned out
delicious... kitchen
teamwork.”
伏笔/冲突
抄袭书本的发现
“I flipped through the
book... plot was exactly the
same.”
解决方案
结合技术（Penny）与创意（主
“combine her technical skills
with my creativity”
分析角度
内容
原文反应句
角）
衔接与升华：
动作呼应：Penny 从“slumped shoulders”到“shoulders straight”。
关键词复用：“perfect”从讽刺抄袭变为真诚赞美。
环境暗示：俱乐部场景闭环，强化成长主题。
3. 动作、心理、环境描写的推荐英文例句及翻译
1. 动作描写（Action）
She clutched the book tightly, her knuckles turning white.
（她紧紧抓着书，指节发白。）
He hesitated before reaching out to tap her shoulder.
（他犹豫了一下，才伸手轻拍她的肩膀。）（可用于主角犹豫是否要主动沟
通）
Her hands trembled as she flipped through the pages.
（她的手颤抖着翻动书页。）（适用于Penny 紧张时的动作）
She shoved her belongings into her backpack in a hurry.
（她匆忙地把东西塞进背包。）（原文已有类似表达，可替换）
He froze, his breath caught in his throat.
（他僵住了，呼吸一滞。）（适用于惊讶或紧张时刻）
She wiped her tears with the back of her hand.
（她用手背擦去眼泪。）（Penny 情绪崩溃时的动作）
He took a deep breath before speaking.
（他深吸一口气，才开口说话。）（用于鼓起勇气时）
Her footsteps echoed in the empty hallway.
（她的脚步声在空荡的走廊里回荡。）（可用于环境+动作结合）
She bit her lip, avoiding eye contact.
（她咬着嘴唇，避开目光接触。）（适用于紧张或内疚时）
He slumped onto the bench, shoulders hunched.
（他耷拉着肩膀，瘫坐在长椅上。）（原文已有类似表达，可替换）
1. 心理描写（Psychological）
A wave of guilt washed over her.
（一阵愧疚感涌上心头。）（适用于主角后悔对Penny 太严厉）
Doubt gnawed at her mind.
（疑虑啃噬着她的心。）（适用于主角犹豫是否揭发抄袭）
She felt a flicker of hope.
（她心中闪过一丝希望。）（适用于想到合作办法时）
His chest tightened with frustration.
（他胸口因沮丧而发紧。）（适用于发现抄袭时的愤怒）
Relief flooded through her.
（一阵释然席卷了她。）（适用于Penny 接受合作后的放松）
She wrestled with her conscience.
（她与自己的良心斗争。）（适用于主角是否该揭发Penny）
A mix of anger and pity churned inside him.
（愤怒和怜悯在他心中翻腾。）（适用于复杂情绪）
Her heart pounded in her ears.
（她的心跳声在耳边轰鸣。）（适用于紧张时刻）
He couldn’t shake off the uneasy feeling.
（他无法摆脱不安的感觉。）（适用于主角反思时）
A warm sense of accomplishment filled her.
（一种温暖的成就感充满她的心。）（适用于故事成功后的心理）
1. 环境描写（Setting）
The library was bathed in the soft glow of afternoon sunlight.
（图书馆沐浴在午后柔和的阳光中。）
The schoolyard buzzed with students chatting and laughing.
（校园里回荡着学生们的谈笑声。）
A chilly breeze rustled the fallen leaves.
（一阵冷风吹动落叶。）（可用于主角思考时的氛围）
The classroom fell silent except for the scratching of pens.
（教室里一片寂静，只有笔尖摩擦纸张的声音。）
Shadows stretched across the empty hallway.
（阴影在空荡的走廊里延伸。）
The scent of old books lingered in the air.
（空气中弥漫着旧书的味道。）
The fluorescent lights hummed overhead.
（头顶的荧光灯嗡嗡作响。）
Raindrops tapped against the windowpane.
（雨滴轻轻敲打着窗户。）
The school bell’s sharp ring cut through the chatter.
（刺耳的上课铃声打断了喧闹声。）
Golden sunlight filtered through the trees.
（金色的阳光透过树叶洒落。）
4. 高级词汇替换 & 场景分类
普通词汇
高级替换词
适用场景
happy
elated（欣喜若狂的）
成功后的喜悦
sad
devastated（崩溃的）
极度沮丧
angry
furious（暴怒的）
发现抄袭时的情绪
nervous
apprehensive（忧虑的）
Penny 的紧张
tired
exhausted（精疲力尽的）
长时间写作后的状态
5. 固定搭配 & 词法解析
1. 常见搭配
Exchange stories with partners（交换故事）
Got perfect scores（得满分）
Handed her my draft（递给她我的草稿）
Flipped through the book（快速翻阅书本）
Made her feel bad（让她难受）
可积累的语料
单词/短语
词义
词性
近义词
反义词
例句
slump
耷拉、
瘫坐
v.
sag, droop
straight
en
She slumped in her
chair, exhausted.
sniff
抽鼻子
v.
snivel
laugh
He sniffed and wiped
his nose.
shove
猛推、
塞
v.
push, cram
pull
She shoved the papers
into her bag.
单词/短语
词义
词性
近义词
反义词
例句
adventurou
s
大胆的
adj.
daring
cautiou
s
He loved adventurous
flavors.
flick
through
快速翻
阅
v.
skim
study
She flicked through the
pages.
1. 总结
动作描写：多用具体动词（clutch, tremble, slump）增强画面感。
心理描写：用比喻（wave of guilt, flicker of hope）使情绪更生动。
环境描写：结合感官（sound, light, smell）增强代入感。
高级替换词：在关键情绪处使用更精准的表达（如elated 代替happy）。
固定搭配：积累原文中的地道表达（exchange stories, flip through）。
5. Possible Versions(3)
Version 1：
Paragraph 1: The next morning at school, I found Penny and told her my idea.
She looked surprised at first(情绪描写), as if unsure(状从省略) whether I was serious. I
explained how my parents had inspired me and how our strengths could
complement each other. "You have an amazing eye for detail, and I love
inventing storylines," I said. Hesitating(现在分词做adj 强调当时的状态), Penny bit her lip(人物状态描写).
Then, in a small voice, she admitted, "I only copied the story because I was afraid
mine wasn’t good enough." I nodded understandingly. "Then let’s write
something together—something real and ours." That afternoon, we met in the library(衔
接原文). I brought my messy draft, and she brought her red pen and suggestions.
Slowly, we shaped a new story—each idea bouncing off the other, each sentence
polished with care(独立主格，刻画思考的过程). As we finished, Penny smiled for the first time
and said, "This is better than anything I could have done alone."
Paragraph 2: At Writing Club next week, Penny read our combined story
aloud. Her voice shook slightly at first(人物状态描写), but as the story
unfolded
, she
grew more confident(人物状态描写). Miss Lisa leaned forward(衔接原文), clearly
impressed(adj 做补语). Our club members listened intently, some even nodding
along(独立主格，刻画环境). When Penny reached the final sentence, the room burst into
applause(任何比赛的赛场环境描写). I caught her eye and smiled, and she smiled back(人物动作交互描
写)—this time without nervousness(可以理解为独立主格). Later, Miss Lisa praised our
teamwork and asked if we’d share how we came up with the story. Penny stood
up and said, “It took both of us—my grammar and her imagination(与原文的衔接).” It
wasn’t just about winning anymore. We had learned to trust each other and
discovered that the best stories weren’t perfect—they were honest.
搭配、近义词替换：
admit = confess, own up to
messy draft = rough version, unpolished story
strengths complement = talents balance each other
unfold = develop, progress
情绪描写亮点：
bit her lip (紧张、犹豫)
voice shook slightly (紧张)
smiled for the first time (释怀、信任)
动作描写亮点：
leaned forward
nodded along
caught her eye
积累语料与替换选项：
come up with = think of, devise, invent
burst into applause = break into clapping, cheer loudly
polish a sentence = refine, revise, improve
trust each other = rely on, have faith in
例句：
She bit her lip, uncertain whether to speak or stay silent.
They polished the draft sentence by sentence until it shone.
The crowd burst into applause when he finished.
They had learned to trust each other through cooperation.
Version 2：
Paragraph 1: The next morning at school, I found Penny and told her my idea.
She avoided my gaze at first, clearly still embarrassed. But when I gently said, “I
think we can make something great together,” she finally looked up. "You don’t
hate me?" she asked. I shook my head. "Everyone makes mistakes. What matters(主
从) is what we do next(表从)." Penny seemed relieved and nodded slowly. That
lunchtime, we met in the library. With a notebook between us, we brainstormed
plots, shared laughs, and debated word choices(动作串并列). I admired how she caught
my grammar slips instantly, while she said she loved the way I made characters
come alive. Though we had our differences, we respected each other’s
contribution for our shared target. By the end of the week, we had written a
magical story about two unlikely friends—much like us(补充说明).
Paragraph 2: At Writing Club next week, Penny read our combined story
aloud. As she spoke, I watched her grow steadier, like she was stepping into the
words we had shaped and polished together. The story had humor, emotion,
and a twist(名词并列) at the end that made Miss Lisa chuckle(衔接原文的任务). Afterward, the
room stayed silent for a moment(环境描写)—then applause erupted. Penny’s cheeks
turned pink(人物状态描写), but she didn’t hide. Instead, she looked at me and mouthed,
“Thank you.” We didn’t win first place, but Miss Lisa praised our originality and
heart(情节的冲突设计，加深戏剧感). And for the first time, I realized writing wasn’t just about
the story—it was about(递进句式) the journey, the collaboration, and believing in
someone else(名词并列补充).
搭配与近义词：
avoid one's gaze = not look at someone, look away
brainstorm plots = generate story ideas, think creatively
catch grammar slips = correct mistakes, point out errors
magical story = charming tale, imaginative fiction
情绪描写亮点：
looked up (勇敢面对)
cheeks turned pink (羞涩又自豪)
mouthed “Thank you” (感激)
动作描写亮点：
shook my head
shared laughs
debated word choices
积累语料：
unlikely friends = unexpected companions
step into words = become one with the story
what matters is... = the important thing is
respect each other’s input = value opinions
例句：
She avoided my gaze, ashamed of what had happened.
They brainstormed plots until the sun went down.
Though we had different styles, we respected each other’s input.
Her cheeks turned pink, but this time she smiled with pride.
Version 3：
Paragraph 1: The next morning at school, I found Penny and told her my idea.
She blinked in disbelief(人物状态描写), clearly not expecting
kindness
(现在分词做伴随动作) after
what had happened. “You’re not mad?” she asked. I replied, “I was upset, but I also
saw how scared you looked.” Slowly, her defensive posture softened(人物状态刻画). I
added, “We could write something that shows both our voices.” Her expression
shifted from guilt to hope(人物状态描写，变化的开始). That afternoon, we sat quietly in the
library, both determined(adj 做补语) Penny read my draft with care, suggesting
better
transitions(现在分词做伴随动作), while I
encouraged her to let her imagination go wild
. It
wasn’t easy—we rewrote the ending three times(进一步设置冲突曲折)—but by the end, we had a
story neither of us could have written alone. It had her precision and my
emotion.(衔接原文)
Paragraph 2: At Writing Club next week, Penny read our combined story
aloud. Her voice was clear, and every word carried weight(人物刻画). Our club
members were silent, drawn
into the story's emotion and structure
(过去分词做状态描写或补
语). When she finished, Miss Lisa looked at us with raised eyebrows and nodded(人物状态
描写). "Beautifully done," she said. Penny beamed, pride glowing in her eyes(独立主格刻画人
物的开心状态). I felt it too—not just for the story, but for(对比描写，递进) how far we had come.
As we packed up, Penny whispered, “Thank you for giving me a second chance.” I
smiled. "We both did," I said. In that moment, I knew this partnership had turned
something wrong into something wonderful.
搭配与近义词：
blinked in disbelief = look surprised, stare in shock
defensive posture softened = let guard down, relaxed
carried weight = meant something, had impact
beam with pride = glow with joy, radiate happiness
情绪描写亮点：
guilt to hope (心理转变)
pride glowing in her eyes (自豪)
smiled with relief and understanding
动作描写亮点：
whispered softly
rewrote the ending three times
read with care
积累语料：
give someone a second chance = forgive, allow a fresh start
let imagination go wild = be creative, think freely
carry weight = matter, be meaningful
beautifully done = excellently completed, skillfully crafted
例句：
She blinked in disbelief when I offered to help.
His voice carried weight, filled with sincerity.
I gave her a second chance, and she didn’t waste it.
The story was beautifully done, polished with heart and skill.
