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高考英语解题思路
专题六 读后续写解题Ⅰ
目 录
一、总体分析....................................................................................2
1.考查特点....................................................................................2
2.考查能力....................................................................................2
3.评分标准....................................................................................3
4.评分解读....................................................................................5
5.基本流程....................................................................................6
6.常见问题....................................................................................6
7.得分技巧....................................................................................6
二、审读构思....................................................................................7
1.审读策略....................................................................................8
2.构思策路....................................................................................8
3.续写策略....................................................................................9
三、题材解读..................................................................................22
Writing 1 野外历险.....................................................................22
Writing 2 爱心互助.....................................................................30
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一、总体分析
1.考查特点
“读后续写”将原本独立的“阅读理解”与“写作”组合在
一起，一道题目，双倍难度。以前英语老师会说：“得阅读者
得天下”，因为阅读理解考查学生的能力最综合，得分也难。
而在英语作文中，学生只要背过一定量的单词，掌握基本语法
知识，再来几个经典长难句，就能拿高分。
可如今的“读后续写”已不再是背几十个单词就可以应付的。
在写作之前，学生先得读懂阅读材料，还得构思与原文衔接，
然后才能续写。这就加大了写作的难度，相当于整个英语试卷
中最难的题型了。
2.考查能力
读后续写主要考查学生以下四个方面的能力：
（1）关键信息提炼能力。学生需要了解所给短文的主要内
容，清楚其关键词和语言结构的使用情况，并通过续写短文表
现出来。
（2）语言综合运用能力。学生既要能够准确、恰当地使用
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所学词汇和语言结构，还要能够根据内容需要使用较多、较复
杂的词汇和语言结构。
（3）语篇结构把控能力。学生需要掌握上下文逻辑关系，
所续写的短文与所给短文及段落开头语要有连贯性，所续写的
短文内容语句要连贯、有序。
（4）创造性思维能力。学生所续写的短文要具有较丰富的
内容，应包含详细和生动的情景、态度和情感描述。
3.评分标准
先根据整体情况对文章进行定档，然后依据该档的相应要求
来确定或调节档次，最后打分。打分主要从续写内容、词汇语
法、篇章结构三方面考虑。
（1）创造情节的质量、续写的完整性及与原文情境的融洽
度；
（2）词汇语法的准确性、恰当性及多样性；
（3）上下文的衔接和全文的连贯性。
档次得分
评分标准
第七
档
22-25
创造了丰富、合理的内容，富有逻辑性，续写
完整，与原文情境融洽度高；
使用了多样且恰当的词汇和语法结构，表达流
畅，语言错误很少，且完全不影响理解；
自然有效地使用了段落间、句间衔接手段，全
文结构清晰，前后呼应，意义连贯。
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第六
档
18-21
创造了比较丰富、合理的内容，比较有逻辑
性，续写比较完整，与原文情境融洽度较高；
使用了比较多样且恰当的词汇和语法结构，表
达比较流畅，有个别错误，但不影响理解；
比较有效地使用了语句间衔接手段，全文结构
比较清晰，意义比较连贯。
第五
档
15-17
创造了基本合理的内容，有一定的逻辑性，续
写基本完整，与原文情境相关；使用了比较恰当的
词汇和语法结构，表达方式不够多样性，表达有些
许错误，但基本不影响理解；
使用了语句间衔接手段，全文结构比较清晰，
意义比较连贯。
第四
档
11-14
创造了基本完整的故事内容，但有的情节不够
合理或逻辑性不强，与原文情境基本相关；
使用了简单的词汇和语法结构，有部分语言错
误和不恰当之处，个别部分影响理解；尚有语句衔
接的意识，全文结构基本清晰，意义基本连贯。
第三
档
6-10
内容和逻辑上有一些重大问题，续写不够完
整，与原文有一定程度脱节；所用的词汇有限，语
法结构单调，错误较多且比较低级，影响理解；
未能有效地使用语句间衔接手段，全文结构不
够清晰，意义欠连贯。
第二
档
1-5
内容和逻辑上有较多重大问题，或有部分内容
抄自原文，续写不完整，与原文情境基本脱节；
所用的词汇非常有限，语法结构单调，错误极
多，严重影响理解；
几乎没有使用语句间衔接手段，全文结构不清
晰，意义不连贯。
第一
档
0
未作答；所写内容太少或无法看清以致无法评
判；所写内容全部抄自原文或与题目要求完全不相
关。
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4.评分解读
依据评分标准，读后续写主要考查阅读理解能力，由读到写
的思维能力和语言表达运用能力三个方面。评卷时，评卷老师
先根据考生所续写短文的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次，然
后以该档次的要求来衡量，确定或调整档次，最后给分。
阅卷老师在阅卷时，主要考虑以下内容：
（1）与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度；
（2）内容的丰富性；
（3）应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性；
（4）上下文的连贯性。
5.基本流程
读
原文阅读+信息梳理，读情节+读语言十读线索
后续
潜心构思+情节预设+明确方向；
关注“两线”——情节线和情感线；关注“四点”
——四处衔接。
写
初稿勾勒+润色提升十正规誊写
6.常见问题
（1）原文解读不到位，没有读懂文章或抓住主旨，续写偏
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离主题；
（2）做题时间分配不合理，边构思续写情节边思考遣词造
句，写作时间紧张；
（3）没有熟练掌握英语中的常用短语和高级句式，难以用
英文正确表达；
（4）续写情节不合理，违背客观事实和生活常识，不符合
主流价值观。
7.得分技巧
1.内容上鼓励大胆想象，有创新意识（不离奇，重逻辑），
情节丰富，要合理展开，并注意前后文呼应，与原文融洽度高。
2.写作要传递正能量，要提炼有思想性、体现价值观和传递
正能量的元素（例如：珍爱生命，学会合作，学会感恩等）。
3.记叙文语言表达流畅，避免低级语法错误，注意连接词的
正确使用，上下文连贯；注意句子结构的多样性和语言的丰富
性。
4.检查，眷写。检查文章的连贯性、逻辑性、规范性。最后
眷写要做到字迹工整，清晰美观。
【注意】续写原则：
1.正能量原则。续写内容应坚持积极导向，宣扬正能量，对
学生的成长具有教育意义和引导作用。
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2.逻辑性原则。立足原文故事线设定的主题和开头语的提示，
主角配角要素齐全，行为合理，动线完整。
二、审读构思
找目的
生活事件
个人成长
解决问题
找矛盾
内在矛盾
个人心态
外在矛盾
与他人
与自然
找方法
沟通交流
他人劝解
自己领悟
找结局
呼应开头
解决问题
升华主题
1.审读策略
读后续写，顾名思义，先读后写，所以读懂原文很重要。
首先，读故事情节，明确故事发展方向。
读后续写始于阅读，根据评分标准，续写内容需要有完整性，
那么，内容要点要全是续写的基本要求。具体的续写要点包括：
情节是否连贯和完整，情绪和情感是否到位，主旨表达是否明
确等。这就要求考生首先精读原文，把握故事的主要情节，根
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据两段开头语，进行初步的情节预测。
其次，读人物个性和情感细节，把握人物特征。
除了了解情节主线以外，原文中的细节也是非常重要的。其
中，原文中人物的刻画能有效地帮助我们把握主要人物的情感
和性格特征。考生读懂核心人物在情节发展过程中各种心理或
情感的变化，以此推出人物的性格特征。只有准确地把握故事
发展脉络和人物的个性特征，才能确保后续故事发展方向的准
确性，以确保续写内容和原文有高度的融洽度。
2.构思策路
根据文章后面的要求，再次快速回读短文，抓住文章的思路。
结合段首的提示语，最终确定续写段落的思路，同时结合文章
关键词语提示，确定续写段落的内容。构思续写环节主要从以
下两个方面来构思：
紧扣段落开头语提示信息。读后续写重在内容，考生所构思
的内容是否合情合理，是否前后连贯直接关系到得分的高低。
所以在读懂全文情节和人物性格的基础上，还需要读懂两段落
的开头语。通常开头语把续写内容限定在一定的范围内，规定
了续写的情节发展走向。考生不可天马行空，肆意发挥。
合理拓展情节。拓展情节包括故事的主要情节设计，与段落
开头语和原文的衔接程度，段落中句子与句子的前后逻辑和衔
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接以及情绪或情感细节的融洽程度等。考生在构思情节时，这
些要素都要充分考虑到，不然很容易写“走题”。
3.续写策略
第一步：找目的，判断文章意图
第二步：找矛盾，理清事件核心
第三步：找方法，解决对应困难
第四步：找结局，升华文章主题
【典型分析】
例1（2023·新课标I&Ⅱ卷）
When I was in middle school，my social studies teacher asked
me to enter a writing contest.I said no without thinking.I did not love
writing.My family came from Brazil ，so English was only my
second language.Writing was so difficult and painful for me..
So，why did he suddenly force me to do something at which I
was sure to fail?His reply:"Because I love your stories.If you're
willing to apply yourself ，I think you have a good shot at
this."Encouraged by his words，I agreed to give it a try.
......
A few weeks later ，when I almost forgot the contest ，there
came the news.
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I went to my teacher's office after the award presentation.
【思路构建】
“我”并非一个擅长写作的人，但是“我”的社会科学老师
鼓励“我”尝试写作。根据给出的两段续写首句可知，“我”
的确在写作上取得了一定的成果。
→在整篇故事中，“我”和“老师”是文中的关键人物，并
且“我”对写作的态度发生了转变，所以在续写中要延伸这两
个要点从而可以找到两个明确的续写目的：故事情节中既要包
含“我”与社会科学老师的互动，又要体现“我”突破自我并
获得成长的主题。事情的核心和解决方案是：要自信；可以升
华；自信的重要性。
【参考范文】
A few weeks later ，when I almost forgot the contest ，there
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came the news.When we were playing basketball on the
playground，my teacher came up to me as quickly as wind with a
big smile on his face.“ You've won the writing competition.You
made it，”he said loudly.Hearing what he said，so surprised do I
feel that I just stood there ，opening my mouth.With my heart
racing ，almost all my classmates congratulated me.I couldn’t
believe it.Without a word ，I shed tears.Just later in the award
ceremony，I got my medal.
I went to my teacher's office after the award presentation.When I
approached ，he hugged me.Then in a low voice ，he told me
that“ I am proud of you.So next time whatever you may
challenge，you must believe in yourself.”I felt passionate as well
as touched at that moment.Looking at his eyes ，I said firmly，"I
really appreciate your encouragement，sir."
Afterwards，it keeps my perspective that confidence definitely
plays a key role in our success.
例2
（2024·浙江模拟卷）
On a bright ，warm July afternoon ，Mac Hollan ，a primary
school teacher ，was cycling from his home to Alaska with his
friends.One of his friends had stopped to make a bicycle repair，but
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they had encouraged Mac to carry on ，and they would catch up
with him soon.As Mac pedaled（骑行）along alone，he thought
fondly of his wife and two young daughters at home.He hoped to
show them this beautiful place someday.
Then Mac heard quick and loud breathing behind him."Man ，
that's a big dog!"he thought.But when he looked to the side，he saw
instantly that it wasn't a dog at all，but a wolf，quickly catching up
with him.
（中间省略了两段）
At this moment，Paul and Becky were driving their car on their
way to Alaska.They didn't think much of it when they saw two
cyclists repairing their bike on the side of the road ，A bit later，
they spotted what they，too，assumed was a dog running alongside
a man on a bike，As they got closer，they realized that the dog was
a wolf.Mac heard a large vehicle behind him.He pulled in front of it
as the wolf was catching up fast，just a dozen yards away now.
The car abruptly stopped in front of him.
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A few minutes later，the other two cyclists arrived.
【思路构建】
马克在独自骑行的路上遇到了一只狼在追赶他。根据给出的
续写第一段的开头语可知，开车的人打算帮助马克；根据给出
的续写第二段的开头语可知，另外两名骑行者也赶到了。
→我们能总结出本文的续写目的：第一段写马克如何在车辆
主人的帮助下脱困，根据逻辑性原则，既要保持惊险的情节氛
围，又要符合常理；第二段写马克向朋友们讲述了此次惊心动
魄的经历并向车辆主人致谢。如果升华，那就是要赞扬陌生人
的帮助。
【参考范文】
The car abruptly stopped in front of him.At that moment，Mac
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was scared out of his wits.When he looked at the car ，tears were
brought to his eyes.“Come on，get in the car!”Paul shouted and
opened the door.Mac jumped off the bicycle and slid into the car
without hesitation.What a narrow escape!Though Mac was safe，his
legs still trembled ，and he felt intimidated.After what seemed a
long time，the exhausted wolf walked away，disappearing in the
woods，
A few minutes later，the other two cyclists arrived.Mac held his
two friends tightly in arms，"I spotted a big dog running on the road
when I was riding ，and then I figured out it was a wolf.Without
their help，I would be the dinner of the wolf!”"It is really like a
dream ，” Mac thought.Consequently ，they expressed their
gratitude to Paul and Becky and then left.On the way home，a night
breeze made him at ease and he couldn’t wait to share his experience
with his wife and children as well as the kindness from strangers.
例3 （2025·福建模拟预测）
It was the day of the big cross-country run.Students from seven
different primary schools in and around the small town were
warming up and walking the route（路线）through thick evergreen
forest.
I looked around and finally spotted David，who was standing by
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himself off to the side by a fence.He was small for ten years old.His
usual big toothy smile was absent today.I walked over and asked
him why he wasn’t with the other children.He hesitated and then
said he had decided not to run.
......
We sat down next to each other，but David wouldn't look at me.
I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other
runners.
【思路构建】
由单词“hesitate（犹像）”可知，戴维是否参赛是本文的核
心矛盾点。他是一个因身体缺陷对越野赛感到自卑并且想逃避
的孩子，“我”上前与他产生互动并引发了他积极的转变。
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→矛盾是剧情发展的推动器，也是文章中心思想的体现，续
写的内容必须要围绕矛盾点展开。根据正能量原则，在续写的
内容中，必须体现出“我”针对戴维的问题给予鼓励，并且帮
助他重拾信心、走上赛场（找解决方法）。本文可以升华，每
个人都想成功，但是尝试更重要。
【参考范文】
We sat down next to each other ，but David wouldn't look at
me.He was really short ，with long hair covering his face.At the
same time ，I could feel that he was upset as well as
discouraged.Nevertheless ，I said gently ，“ If you desire to
challenge yourself ，there is nothing to do with others'
thoughts.Thus，failure is never scaring.What you are afraid is that
you daren't try it.” Hearing my words ，David turned to me
tremblingly with tears spilling out of his eyes and expressed he had
made a firm determination to give himself a try.
I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other
runners.As soon as he was ready ，the race started.So determined
was he that he spared no efforts to run forward.Meanwhile ，
classmates all appeared on the racing track，cheering for him.As a
consequence，to everyone's joy，he reached the final line although
he failed to get any medals.It was his brave heart and strong faith
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that could work wonders.At that moment ，I really believe
that“Just do it no matter what the consequences are.”
例4（2024·福建模拟月卷改编）
（开头省略了一段）
...He looked at me as though I weren't there.I felt he treated me as
though I would hold him back and probably make him fail to get an
A in the course.He wasn't mean or abusive;he just gave me the
impression that he could do whatever project we dreamed up better
if he did it alone.
（中间省略了两段）
...I actually wanted to drop the class at one point ，but stopped
short because I didn’t want to give him the satisfaction of my
chickening out.I decided to stick to it no matter what.
After long discussions we somehow agreed to do a study on the
psychological well-being of teenagers.I wasn't sure what it meant
exactly，but at least we had a topic.
We started to meet regularly to draw up our plans.
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One day I got word that he was admitted to hospital for a serious
disease.
【思路构建】
由文章开头“我”的心理活动和他给我的印象可知，刚接触
时，“我们”的关系并不和谐，两个人之间存在矛盾。但是为
了完成共同的项目，“我们”需要解决如何从关系不和谐转变
为好搭档的问题。目的就是告诉我们有矛盾的两个人可以成为
好朋友。
→两个人之间的矛盾就是文章的核心矛盾点。根据正能量原
则，在续写的内容中，必须体现随着“我们”的交流逐渐增多，
对彼此越来越了解和信任，“我们”之间的矛盾逐渐消失，消
除了隔阂。通过不断的交流与合作，“我们”成为好朋友。如
果升华，那就是：友谊的重要性。
【参考范文】
We started to meet regularly to draw up our plans.At the
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beginning，he still remained independent without much discussion
with me."He might think I am useless，"I thought.Whenever I tried
to communicate with him ，he always answered“ Shut up.I am
thinking about an idea."However，the longer we stayed together，
the more I knew his ability.I was aware of that he was much more
knowledgeable than I.As a result ，I decided to learn from him
diligently even though he refused to communicate.Gradually，he no
longer refused my suggestions and would like to talk with me.
One day I got word that he was admitted to hospital for a serious
disease.Arriving at the hospital，I noticed for the first time a sense
of vulnerability on his face.However ，when he saw me ，he
couldn’t help shedding tears.“ Thank you for coming to visit
me.Please forgive my rudeness."I said nothing ，just holding his
cold hands.Later，he recovered and we finished our task perfectly，
More importantly，we have become good friends since then.
例5（2020·新课标I&Ⅱ卷）
（开头省略了一段）
Mrs.Meredith was a most kind and thoughtful woman.She spent
a great deal of time visiting the poor ，She knew they had
problems，and they needed all kinds of help.When she had tíme，
she would bring food and medicine to them.
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One morning she told her children about a family she had visited
the day before.There was a man sick in bed，his wife，who took
care of him and could not go out to work，and their little boy.The
little boy—his name was Bernard—had interested her very much.
"I wish you could see him ，"she said to her own children ，
John，Harry，and Clara."He is such a help to his mother.He wants
very much to earn some money，but I don't see what he can do.”
（中间省略了三段）
...“I tell you what we can do，"said John.“You know that big
box of corn Uncle John sent us?Well，we can make popcorn（爆米
花），and put it into paper bags，and Bernard can take it around to
the houses and sell it.”
When Mrs.Meredith heard of John's idea，she thought it was a
good one，too.
With everything ready，Bernard started out on his new business.
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【思路构建】
由文章结尾可知，约翰提出了为伯纳德制作爆米花让他售卖
以赚钱贴补家用的主意。
→根据续写第一段的开头语可知，梅雷迪思夫人也赞成这个
想法，可以续写梅雷迪斯夫人告诉伯纳德售卖爆米花的方法。
再根据续写第二段开头语可知伯纳德开始了他的新生意，所以
第二段可以续写伯纳德是如何售卖爆米花的，以及为了让爆米
花卖得更好，他想了哪些方法、做了什么努力。如果升华，就
是人间有真情，人间有真爱。
【参考范文】
When Mrs.Meredith heard of John's idea，she thought it was a
good one，too.So，they hurried to find the big box of corn Uncle
John sent to them and then went to the local supermarket together to
buy some special bags for popcorn.Finishing all the preparation ，
they began to make a lot of popcorn with different flavors
skillfully."It must help Bernard ，"they thought.After that ，they
went to Bernard's home happily ，telling the boy how to sell the
popcorn.Consequently，Bernard and his parents were very grateful.
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With everything ready ，Bernard started out on his new
business.He took the popcorn around to the houses to sell all his
popcorn.However ，at the beginning ，he was too shy to sell his
products.Little by little，he realized that it is not a shame to make
money to help his family.That evening ，he held all the money he
had earned，being proud of himself.Of course，he did not forget
the help of Meredith's family，and would also do what he could to
help those in need.
三、题材解读
Writing 1 野外历险
【话题解读】
读后续写中会遇到火灾、水灾、森林迷路、野生动物等内容
的故事，如果涉及对生命造成了一定的威胁的情节，我们就把
这种类型的文章归为“历险”类。近年高考真题中的读后续写，
如2023 年浙江1 月卷“蜂鸟脱困”、2020 年浙江7 月卷“遇到
北极熊”、2018 年浙江6 月卷“森林遇险”，多次涉及此类话
题。如何续写好“历险”类文章呢?在此类话题的续写中，情节
的跌宕起伏就是一种极好的提升文章整体水平的手法。这种转
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折即由“负”变“正”，或由“正”变“负”。最终体现正能
量的结局，就是由“负”变“正”。续写情节构建——第一步：
恶劣环境（环境的描写，人物绝望、恐惧、挣扎情绪的描写）;
第二步：转危为安（转机描写，描写听见了什么或看见了什么，
希望+努力情绪的描写，脱险感恩+高兴情绪的描写）;第三步：
升华主题（需要牢记，历险类的文章不要无缘无故拔高主题，
一般的主题词是“勇敢”“克服困难”，当然还有一个常用的
表达“这是一次难忘的经历”）。
【素材积累】
高频单词
冒险
adventure
荒野/野外
wilderness/outdoors
探索
exploration
野营
camping
导航
navigation
篝火
campfire
徒步旅行
hiking
紧急情况
emergency
团队协作
teamwork
野生动物
wildlife
日出/日落
sunrise/sunset
装备
equipment/gear
核心短语
踏上旅途
set out on a journey
生存技能
survival skills
与时间赛跑
race against time
无畏前行
march forward fearlessly
自然风光
natural scenery
收获勇气
gain courage
克服困难
overcome obstacles
化险为夷
turn danger into safety
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常用表达
1.我的荒野探险之旅既充满了兴奋也充满了危险。
My adventure journey into the wilderness was filled with both
excitement and danger.
2.带着地图和指南针，我踏上了未知的探险之旅。
Equipped with a map and compass，I set out on my adventure
into the unknown.
3.在徒步旅行中，我必须依靠我的生存技能来穿越危险的地
形。
During my hike ，I had to rely on my survival skills to go
through dangerous terrain.
4.尽管有时迷路，最终我还是设法在指南针的帮助下找到了
回安全地带的路。
Despite getting lost at times，I finally managed to find my way
back to safety with the help of my compass
5.自然环境的美丽令人叹为观止，但我始终警惕着前方可能
存在的危险。
The beauty of the natural environment was breathtaking，but I
was always alert to the potential dangers that lay ahead.
【典型分析】
（2025·天津模拟卷改编）阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进
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行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
It was summer，and my dad wanted to treat me to a vacation like
never before.He decided to take me on a trip to the Wild West.
We took a plane to Albuquerque，a big city in the state of New
Mexico.We reached Albuquerque in the late afternoon.Uncle Paul，
my dad's friend，picked us up from the airport and drove us up to
his farm in Pecos.
His wife Tina cooked us a delicious dinner and we got to know
his sons Ryan and Kyle.
My dad and I spent the night in the guest room of the farm house
listening to the frogs and water rolling down the river nearby.Very
early in the morning ，Uncle Paul woke us up to have
breakfast.“ The day starts at dawn on my farm ，”he said.After
breakfast，I went to help Aunt Tina feed the chickens，while my
dad went with Uncle Paul to take the sheep out to graze（吃草）.I
was impressed to see my dad and Uncle Paul riding horses.They
looked really cool.
In the afternoon ，I asked Uncle Paul if I could take a horse
ride，and he said yes，as long as my dad went with me.I wasn't
going to take a horse ride by myself anyway.So，my dad and I put
on our new cowboy hats，got on our horses，and headed slowly
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towards the mountains."Don't be late for supper ，"Uncle Paul
cried ，“ and keep to the track so that you don't get
lost!”“OK!"my dad cried back.After a while Uncle Paul and his
farm house were out of sight.It was so peaceful and quiet and the
colors of the brown rocks，the deep green pine trees，and the late
afternoon sun mixed to create a magic scene.It looked like a
beautiful woven（编织的）blanket spread out upon the ground just
for us.
注意：续写词数应为150 左右。
Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse.
We had no idea where we were and it was getting dark.
【透析原文】
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故事场景in the Wild West ，on the farm in Pecos ，on the way
towards the mountains
故事时间in summer，in the afternoon
故事人物my dad，I，Uncle Paul
故亭线索my dad wanted to treat me to a vacation→went to Uncle
Paul's farm→took a horse ride
情感线索relaxed→excited
文章大意It describes my exciting life on Uncle Paul’s farm.
【思路构建】
两段之首
定方向
We were attracted by the little rabbit and lost our way in
the mountains.
思考问题
找方法
What will you do if you get lost in the wild?
keep calm→observe the surroundings carefully→think
over your survival knowledge and skills→protect
yourself→find a way to solve the problem
梳理内容
定线索
第一段：对兔子的好奇和新鲜感→兔子消失在视野
中→沉浸在自然的美景中。
第二段：迷路后紧张害怕→被叔叔找到→回家后温
馨幸福。
完善思路
写要点
第一段：1.它如此可爱，以至我决定要摸一摸这个
小动物。2.但是这只引起我兴趣的聪明的兔子尽快
跑了。3.“我得抓住它。”我想。4.我和我爸爸毫不
犹豫地跟着它。5，我究全被大自然的魅力吸引住
了。6.我和我爸爸都息记了映间，最后对我们来说
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返回去好像很困难。
第二段：1.森林极其安静，以至我能听到自己的呼
吸声，这使我更加紧张和害怕。2.我看到手电筒光
在移动，并听到了来救我们的保罗叔叔的声音。3.
我们安然无总地回去了。4.坐在客房里，我发现由
心爱的人陪伴着真的很幸福。
【高分作文】
Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse.So cute
was it that I decided to touch the little animal.However，the smart
rabbit，which aroused my interest，ran as quickly as it could“I
have to catch it，”I thought.My father and I followed it without
hesitation.The thick forest，the tiny flowers that perfumed the air，
the groups of sheep in the far distance and the singing river ，all
made me totally immersed in the charm of nature.Both my dad and I
forgot the time and finally it seemed difficult for us to go back.
We had no idea where we were and it was getting dark.In the
darkness，there was only the faint light given off by a few stars in
the sky and the forest kept extremely quiet so that I could hear my
own breath ，which made me more nervous and scared.At that
moment，all of a sudden，I saw torchlight moving and heard the
voice of Uncle Paul who came to save us.Ultimately ，we were
back to the farm house，safe and sound.Sitting in the guest room，I
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found it really happy being accompanied by my beloved ones!
【综评】
整体：这篇范文主题突出且故事情节符合逻辑，与原文的思
路契合、融洽度高。
细节：对环境和景物的生动描写展现了一幅美丽的自然风光
画面，烘托了作者骑马出游时喜悦的心情。
词汇：使用了一些高级词汇，如arouse ，perfume ，
immerse，accompany 等。
句式：①定语从句which aroused my interest
②过去分词短语作定语given off by a few stars
③动词-ing 形式作宾语补足语saw torchlight moving
④动词-ing 形式短语作状语Sitting in the guest room
it
⑤
作形式宾语I found it really happy being accompanied by
my beloved ones!
Writing 2 爱心互助
【话题解读】
读后续写高分文章应该有正确的价值取向，应当弘扬社会正
气，与社会主义核心价值观的宏观目标保持一致。高考读后续
写考查学生的“爱心互助”意识，能够引导学生与他人友好相
处，同时在社会中学会做人做事。写此类文章需要熟悉“与人
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相处”相关的动作描写、心理描写和面部表情，解决问题时的
乐观心态，得到帮助时的感激之情，或给予救助而不求回报的
态度，以及最后文末升华的思想高度。在写作中，首先梳理文
章的人物、时间、地点、事件的原因，并对结果走向进行预测。
【素材积累】
高频词汇
关爱
care
慷慨
generosity
慈善
charity
捐赠
donate
友善
friendliness
同情
sympathy
志愿者
Volunteer
团结
unity
和谐
harmony
支持
support
核心短语
互帮互助
mutual assistance
慈善活动
charity events
共同进步
progress together
无私奉献
selfless dedication
心灵相通
heart-to-heart connection
共享资源
share resources
传递温暖
spread warmth
以爱之名
in the name of love
伸出援手
offer a helping hand
常用表达
1.合作与互助的精神使我们能够共同应对许多挑战。
The spirit of cooperation and mutual assistance has enabled us to
address many challenges together.
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2.在我们的社区中，我们珍视友谊、爱心和互助，这些是和
谐社会的基础。
In our community ，we value friendship ，love ，and mutual
help，which are the foundation of a harmonious society.
3.心中充满善意和同情，我们努力向需要帮助的人伸出援手。
With kindness and compassion in our hearts，we strive to lend a
helping hand to those in need.
4.志愿者在我们的社会中发挥着至关重要的作用，因为他们
展现了无私奉献和乐于助人的精神。
Volunteers play a crucial role in our society ，as they
demonstrate the spirit of selfless dedication and the willingness to
help others.
5.在需要的时候，我们团结一致，互相支持，展现了友谊的
真正意义。
In times of need，we come together and offer support to each
other，demonstrating the true meaning of friendship.
【典型分析】
（2024·新课标I&Ⅱ卷）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给
段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
I met Gunter on a cold ，wet and unforgettable evening in
September.I had planned to fly to Vienna and take a bus to Prague
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for a conference.Due to a big storm，my flight had been delayed by
an hour and a half.I touched down in Vienna just 30 minutes before
the departure of the last bus to Prague.The moment I got off the
plane，I ran like crazy through the airport building and jumped into
the first taxi on the rank without a second thought.
That was when I met Gunter.I told him where I was going，but
he said he hadn't heard of the bus station.I thought my pronunciation
was the problem，so I explained again more slowly ，but he still
looked confused.When I was about to give up ，Gunter fished out
his little phone and rang up a friend.After a heated discussion that
lasted for what seemed like a century，Gunter put his phone down
and started the car.
Finally，with just two minutes to spare we rolled into the bus
station.Thankfully，there was a long queue（队列）still waiting to
board the bus.Gunter parked the taxi behind the bus ，turned
around，and looked at me with a big smile on his face.“We made
it，”he said.
Just then I realised that I had zero cash in my wallet.I flashed him
an apologetic smile as I pulled out my Portuguese bankcard.He tried
it several times ，but the card machine just did not play along.A
feeling of helplessness washed over me as I saw the bus queue
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thinning out.
At this moment，Gunter pointed towards the waiting hall of the
bus station.There，at the entrance，was a cash machine.I jumped
out of the car，made a mad run for the machine，and popped my
card in，only to read the message:“Out of order.Sorry.”
注意：续写词数应为150 左右。
I ran back to Gunter and told him the bad news.
Four days later，when I was back in Vienna，I called Gunter as
promised.
【透析原文】
故事场景
in a taxi，at the bus station
故事时间
on a cold，wet and unforgettable evening in September
故事人物
I，Gunter—a taxi driver
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故事线索
I was in a hurry to take the bus.→I jumped into the
first taxi on the rank without hesitation.→The taxi
driver，Gunter，took me to the bus station in time.→I
had a problem when paying the taxi fare.
情感线索
anxious→pleased→helpless
文章大意
The taxi driver，Gunter，took me to the bus station in
time，but I had trouble in paying the taxi fare.
【思路构建】
两段之首
定方向
Gunter took my word for it and allowed me to go first
and pay him back later.After I had returned the money，
we became good friends.
思考问题
找方法
What did the author do when he had trouble in paying
the taxi fare?
He asked Gunter to write down his phone number and
keep his watch.→He promised to pay him back.→He
kept his promise and returned the money.→Gunter and he
became good friends.
梳理内容
定线索
第一段：我告诉冈特这里的取款机出故障了。→我
问了冈特的电话号码。→我们交换了电话号码，我答
应把车费还给他。
第二段：我把车费还给了他。→几年后我与冈特一
起吃了一顿愉快的晚餐，我们像老朋友那样愉快地聊
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天。→如果每个人都能向遇到困难的人伸出援助之
手，世界会变得越来越温暖。
完善思路
写要点
第一段：1.我问了冈特的电话号码并让他拿着我的
手表。2，我把我的名片和手表递给他，冈特接受了
我的名片，但拒绝了我的手表。3.我们交换了电话号
码，我承诺会把车费还给他。
第二段：1.冈特几乎忘了那件事，但我仍然把车费
还给了他，然后我们聊了几分钟，让我感到他非常善
良。2，几年后当我出差回到维也纳时，我与冈特一
起吃了一顿愉快的晚餐，我们像老朋友那样愉快地聊
天。3.正是他的善皮和我的诚信使我们成为妤朋友。
如果每个人都能向遇到困难的人仲出援助之手，世界
会变得越来越温暖。
【高分作文】
I ran back to Gunter and told him the bad news."Sorry，the cash
machine here is out of order.May I have your phone number?I will
call you in a few days and return the money.You can keep my
watch!” I said ，handing him my watch as well as my business
card.Gunter accepted my business card but rejected my watch.I was
overwhelmed with relief and gratitude.We exchanged numbers and I
promised to pay him back.
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Four days later，when I was back in Vienna，I called Gunter as
promised.“Oh，I nearly forgot that，"he said surprisingly.Still，I
returned the money to him ，and then we chatted for a few
minutes，which made me feel his great kindness.Years later when I
was back in Vienna on business，I had a nice dinner with Gunter
and we chatted happily like old friends.It was his kindness and my
integrity that made us become good friends.If everyone can lend a
helping hand to one in trouble，the world will become warmer and
warmer.
【综评】
整体：这篇范文主题突出且故事情节符合逻辑，与原文的思
路契合、融洽度高。
细节：对“我”请求帮助时的语言和动作描写细致，体现出
“我”期望得到帮助时焦急的心情。
词汇：使用了一些高级词汇，如be overwhelmed with ，
relief，gratitude，integrity。
句式：①动词-ing 形式短语作状语handing him my watch as
well as my business card
which
②
引导定语从句which made me feel his great kindness
③强调句It was his kindness and my integrity that made us
become good friends.
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