2025 年杭州二模
第二节(满分 25 分)
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
The crowd roared as I took off from the starting line in The Big Race. Through
the cheers, I heard Mom shouting, “Run, Sammy, run!" I knew without looking that
she was smiling from ear to ear and clapping her hands
for me.I kept my eyes straight ahead running as fast as I could, “Run, run, run," [
chanted to myself in my mind as I passed my friend Justin. I saw Justin's red face out
of the corner of my eye and wondered if my own face was that red too?
“Run, run, run." I was on fire, passing Sarah, leaving her in my dust.
The coach was waiting for me at the finish line, holding the medal for the fastest
runner in kindergarten. I would wear that blue and white ribbon around my neck when
we go out for ice cream to celebrate and then hang it in my room, Last night I took the
collection of caps off the hook on my wall leaving it ready for my shiny new medal. I
couldn't wait to see it every day when I woke up.
Dad was there in the crowd also and would pick me up and put me on his
shoulders to carry around. “My son!He would tell the other fathers. “My son won the
race!”
I was going to win! Faster than Sarah, I came up behind Mikey, giving my legs
that extra burst of energy to pass him by. The winner, Sammy! All that running in the
park was worth it!
Just as I heard the roar of the crowd welcoming me to the finish line, I saw a blur
out of the corner of my eye What? There was Justin with his tomato cheeks running as
fast as humanly possible, huffing and puffing like he was going to blow the house
down. And then he was in front of me. I was behind tomato face Justin. Crossing the
finish line, I heard the voice over the loudspeaker boom, “Congratulations to the
winner, Justin!”
Congratulations to Justin?
Congratulations to Justin.
注意:
(1) 续写词数应为150 左右:
(2) 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1:I stood there frozen as Justin was handed his medal.
Paragraph 2: Suddenly, strong hands lifted me onto Dad's shoulders.
2025 年杭州二模
第二节(满分 25 分)
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
The crowd
roared
(赛场描写经典句)as I
took off
from the starting line in The Big Race
.
Through the cheers, I heard Mom shouting, “Run, Sammy, run!" I knew without
looking that she was smiling from ear to ear and clapping her hands for me. I
kept my eyes straight ahead running(现在分词做伴随动作) as fast as
I could
, “Run, run,
run," I chanted to myself in my mind(刻画人物特点) as I passed my friend Justin. I saw
Justin's red face out of the corner of my eye(超过 Justin 的描写) and wondered if my own
face was that red too?
“Run, run, run." I was on fire, passing
Sarah
(现在分词做伴随动作), leaving
her in my
dust(现在分词做结果状语)(描写我超过了Sarah).
The coach was waiting for me at the finish line, holding
the medal for the
fastest runner in kindergarten(现在分词短语做伴随动作). I would wear that blue and white
ribbon around my neck when we go out for ice cream to celebrate and then hang it
in my room. Last night I took the collection of caps off the hook on my wall, leaving
it ready for my shiny new medal(现在分词短语做结果状语，显示出我的必胜的信心). I couldn't wait to see it
every day when I woke up.
Dad was there in the crowd also and would pick me up and put me on his
shoulders to carry around. “My son! He would tell the other fathers. “My son won
the race!”
I was going to win! Faster than Sarah, I came up behind Mikey, giving
my legs
that extra burst of energy to pass him by(现在分词短语做伴随动作). The winner, Sammy! All
that running in the park was worth it!
Just as I
heard the roar of the crowd
welcoming
me to the finish line
(现在分词短语做后
置定语), I saw a blur out of the corner of my eye.(预示着将被超过) What? There was Justin
with his tomato cheeks( 人物描写) running
as fast as humanly possible
( 现在分词做伴随动作),
huffing and puffing(现在分词短语做伴随动作) like he was going to blow the house down(夸张描写).
And then he was in front of me. I was behind tomato face Justin(代指). Crossing
the
finish line( 现在分词做伴随动作
), I heard the voice over the loudspeaker boom,
“Congratulations to the winner, Justin!”
Congratulations to Justin?
Congratulations to Justin.
注意:
1 续写词数应为150 左右:
2 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1:I stood there frozen as Justin was handed his medal.
Paragraph 2: Suddenly, strong hands lifted me onto Dad's shoulders.
1. 文章类型与续写构思框架
分析角度
内容说明
类型
成长类故事（通过比赛失利引发对竞争、友谊、家庭支持的思考）
核心冲突
预期胜利与现实失败的心理落差
主题方向
挫折教育/家庭温暖/运动精神
续写重点
1. 心理描写（失落→反思）
2. 动作衔接（颁奖→父亲举动）
3. 主题升华
2. 故事山模式与关键要素分析
阶段
原文内容
续写衔接点
开端
Sammy 自信起跑，回忆备赛细节
保持动作连贯性
发展
先后超越Sarah、Mikey，幻想胜利场景
利用"medal""shoulders"等
关键词复现
高潮
Justin 反超，Sammy 错失冠军
需延续"tomato cheeks"等
形象化描写
回落
广播宣布Justin 获胜（原文结尾）
聚焦Sammy 的肢体冻结
反应
结局
（需续写）父亲安慰→领悟比赛真谛
呼应开头"ice
cream""caps"等伏笔
3. 原文要素提取表
分析角度
内容
原文反应句
人物刻画
Sammy：好胜心强但
天真
"I couldn't wait to see it every day when I
woke up"
情感层次
兴奋→自信→震惊→
失落
"Congratulations to Justin?"（重复句式体
现心理变化）
关键情节点
Justin 最后反超
"There was Justin... running as fast as
humanly possible"
语言特色
短句营造紧张感，内
心独白推动节奏
"Run, run, run"（反复修辞）
分析角度
内容
原文反应句
心理描写
对胜利的强烈期待
"I was going to win!"
动作描写
动态比赛场景
"giving my legs that extra burst of energy
to pass him by"
环境描写
通过声音渲染氛围
"the roar of the crowd"
隐含主题
成长比胜利更重要
父亲赛前未出现（暗示家庭支持不取决
于成绩）
情感转折
从巅峰到谷底的心理
落差
"I was behind tomato face Justin"（幽默
化描写反衬失落）
伏笔线索
1. 墙上的挂钩
2. 父亲赛前缺席
"Last night I took the collection of caps off
the hook"
4. 续写设计要点
段落布局建议：
段落
内容框架
技巧应用
第一段
1. 视觉聚焦：Justin 挂奖牌的特写
2. 听觉隔离：人群声音模糊化处理
通感手法凸显心理冲
击
第二段
1. 父亲动作：托举+语言安慰
2. 主题揭示：展示墙挂钩的新用途（友
谊纪念）
首尾呼应+物品象征意
义
高级设计：
让Sammy 主动与Justin 握手（动作体现成长）
将"tomato cheeks"转化为友好绰号（情感转化）
用环境描写过渡："The setting sun painted the track gold..."（时间线索）
3. 动作、心理、环境描写推荐英文例句及翻译
动作描写（Action Descriptions）
His legs burned as he pushed forward, each stride heavier than the last.
（他的双腿发烫，每一步都比前一步更沉重。）
Justin’s arms pumped wildly, his breath coming in ragged gasps.
（贾斯汀的手臂疯狂摆动，呼吸急促而紊乱。）
She stumbled slightly but quickly regained her balance, refusing to slow down.
（她微微踉跄了一下，但迅速稳住身体，拒绝减速。）
The coach’s whistle pierced the air, signaling the final stretch.
（教练的哨声划破空气，预示着最后冲刺。）
He crossed the finish line, chest heaving, sweat dripping into his eyes.
（他冲过终点线，胸膛剧烈起伏，汗水滴进眼睛。）
A sudden burst of energy shot through him as he overtook the runner ahead.
（一股突如其来的能量让他超越了前面的选手。）
His sneakers pounded against the track, matching the rhythm of his racing
heart.
（他的运动鞋重重地踏在跑道上，与心跳的节奏一致。）
She clenched her fists, digging deep for one last sprint.
（她握紧拳头，拼尽全力做最后的冲刺。）
The crowd’s cheers faded into the background as he focused solely on the race.
（人群的欢呼声渐渐远去，他只专注于比赛。）
Justin’s legs wobbled as he slowed to a stop, hands on his knees.
（贾斯汀的双腿发软，他放慢脚步停下来，双手撑在膝盖上。）
心理描写（Psychological Descriptions）
A wave of disbelief crashed over him—how had Justin beaten him?
（一阵难以置信的感觉袭来——贾斯汀怎么会赢了他？）
His stomach twisted into knots as the reality of defeat sank in.
（失败的现实让他胃里一阵绞痛。）
For a moment, time seemed to freeze, the world narrowing to just the finish line.
（有那么一瞬间，时间仿佛凝固了，整个世界只剩下终点线。）
Pride and disappointment warred inside him, neither winning.
（骄傲和失望在他心里交战，谁也不占上风。）
He replayed the race in his mind, searching for where he’d gone wrong.
（他在脑海中回放比赛，试图找出自己的失误。）
A tiny voice whispered, “Maybe next time…” but it was drowned out by
frustration.
（一个小小的声音低语：“也许下次……”但被沮丧淹没了。）
The medal around Justin’s neck felt like a personal insult.
（贾斯汀脖子上的奖牌像是对他的侮辱。）
He forced a smile, though it felt more like a grimace.
（他勉强挤出一个微笑，尽管更像是苦笑。）
The weight of expectations pressed down on him, heavier than ever.
（期待的重量压在他身上，比以往任何时候都沉重。）
A flicker of determination sparked—he wouldn’t let this defeat define him.
（一丝决心闪现——他不会让这次失败定义自己。）
环境描写（Environmental Descriptions）
The afternoon sun cast long shadows across the track, making the runners look
like fleeting ghosts.
（午后的太阳在跑道上投下长长的影子，让选手们像转瞬即逝的幽灵。）
A cool breeze swept through the stadium, offering brief relief from the heat.
（一阵凉风吹过体育场，暂时缓解了炎热。）
The scent of freshly cut grass mixed with the sharp tang of sweat in the air.
（新割的草香和汗水的刺鼻气味在空气中混合。）
The distant hum of traffic contrasted with the sharp cheers of the crowd.
（远处车辆的嗡嗡声与人群的尖叫声形成对比。）
The track, still warm from the sun, radiated heat under their feet.
（跑道在阳光下仍然温暖，在他们脚下散发着热气。）
Shadows stretched longer as the sun dipped toward the horizon.
（随着太阳西沉，影子越拉越长。）
The metallic taste of adrenaline lingered in his mouth.
（肾上腺素的金属味在他嘴里挥之不去。）
The stadium lights flickered to life as dusk settled in.
（暮色降临，体育场的灯光闪烁亮起。）
A lone bird circled overhead, as if watching the race unfold.
（一只孤鸟在头顶盘旋，仿佛在观看比赛。）
The distant sound of an ice cream truck’s jingle teased his ears.
（远处冰淇淋车的音乐声挑逗着他的耳朵。）
4. 高级词汇替换（场景分类）
基础词
高级替换词
适用场景
happy
elated (狂喜的)
胜利时刻
sad
devastated (崩溃的)
失败后的情绪
run
sprint (冲刺)
比赛关键时刻
tired
exhausted (筋疲力尽的)
赛后状态
win
triumph (胜利)
比赛结果
5. 高中语法现象 & 地道搭配分析
（1）语法现象
现在分词作伴随状语 "I kept my eyes straight ahead, running as fast as I
could."（保持眼睛直视前方，同时尽全力奔跑。）
"The coach was waiting for me at the finish line, holding the medal for the fastest
runner."（教练在终点线等着，手里拿着给最快选手的奖牌。）
（2）地道搭配 & 可积累语料
短语/生词
词义
词性
近义词
反义词
例句
roar (v.)
咆哮，
欢呼
动词
cheer,
shout
whisper
The crowd roared as the
runner crossed the line.
huff and
puff
气喘吁
吁
短语
pant, gasp
breathe
calmly
Justin was huffing and
puffing by the end.
burst of
energy
能量爆
发
名词
短语
surge of
strength
fatigue
He gave a final burst of
energy to win.
from ear to
ear
咧嘴大
笑
短语
broadly
smiling
frowning
Mom was smiling from ear
to ear.
leave sb. in
the dust
远远甩
开
习语
outrun,
surpass
fall behind
She left her competitors in
the dust.
6. Possible Versions (3)
Version 1
Paragraph 1:
I stood there frozen as Justin was handed his medal. The polished golden
metal gleamed mockingly(寓情于景) under the stadium lights, its blue ribbon fluttering
like a triumphant flag(独立主格，刻画奖杯的形态). My throat
tightened
(情绪描写) as the
announcer's words—"Congratulations to Justin!"—echoed relentlessly in my
skull(环境描写). My mom's comforting hand on my shoulder felt distant,(刻画失落的心情) her
proud cheers now reduced to hesitant murmurs(独立主格，刻画人物状态),but
still
smiling
at
me(现在分词做伴随动作). My gaze dropped to the track where my sneakers, still dusted
with the evidence of my effort(过去分词短语做后置定语), seemed cemented to the ground
.
The empty hook on my bedroom wall loomed large in my mind(对原文的衔接), its
bareness a stark contrast to the vivid victory(独立主格，做刻画对比) I'd imagined just
minutes ago.
Paragraph 2:
Suddenly, strong hands lifted me onto Dad's shoulders. The familiar elevation
brought momentary disorientation(心理描写) before
settling into
comforting familiarity
.
"Look at them, champ," Dad rumbled, his voice vibrating through me(独立主格，刻画父亲).
The crowd's applause, which had sounded noisy moments before, now rang
clear—and to my astonishment, many were still cheering for me.(事件的转折点) Justin
met my eyes, his medal clutched in one hand(独立主格刻画动作) while the other
extended
toward me
in a gesture
that erased the last of my resentment. As Dad carried me
toward the ice cream stand Mom had promised, I realized the hook on my wall
wouldn't remain empty forever(与原文衔接)—it just needed a better story to hang on it.
Version 2
Paragraph 1:
I stood there frozen as Justin was handed his medal. The golden medal
swung from its ribbon on his neck(环境描写), each sway punctuating my defeat(独立主
格刻画心理). Mom's earlier encouragement—"Run, Sammy, run!"—now echoed
hollowly in my memory(衔接原文). My fingers absently traced the sweat-soaked
fabric of my shirt(动作描写，刻画人物) where the medal should have rested. Justin's
triumphant grin blurred as my vision swam(描写流泪), the crowd's cheers distorting
into a meaningless roar(独立主格刻画环境). The mental image of my carefully
cleared
wall hook(衔接原文), waiting
for
a prize
(现在分词做伴随动作，无灵主语) that would never come,
sent a fresh wave of heat to my face that had nothing to do with physical efforts.
Tears, gradually, blurred my vision.
Paragraph 2:
Suddenly, strong hands lifted me onto Dad's shoulders. The world tilted
abruptly(寓情于景) before settling into the familiar
arms
I'd known since
toddlerhood. "See how far you've come?" Dad murmured, his hands steadying
my shaking legs(独立主格刻画父亲). From here, I saw Justin approaching. "Next race is
ours together," he panted, extending a sweaty hand(现在分词做伴随动作). As Dad carried me
toward where Mom waited with two ice cream cones instead of one, I understood
—some victories aren't measured in ribbons, but in the people(递进描写) who lift
you up when you've fallen.
Version 3
Paragraph 1:
I stood there frozen as Justin was handed his medal. The crowd's eruption of
applause sounded
chaotic
(寓情于景), as if I were hearing it(虚拟语气) through thick glass.
Justin's tomato-red cheeks(衔接原文), which I'd mocked internally during the race(衔接原文),
now glowed with a healthy pride that made my stomach clench. My own face
burned with a different heat(人物刻画)—one part shame, two parts bitter
disappointment(同位语，解释说明). The mental image of my bedroom wall, its carefully
prepared hook standing empty(独立主格，衔接原文), felt like a physical weight pressing
against my ribs(现在分词短语做后置定语). Even the memory of our training sessions in the
park, once filled with laughter, now tasted sour in my mouth(衔接原文的训练).
Paragraph 2:
Suddenly, strong hands lifted me onto Dad's shoulders. The abrupt elevation
startl
ed
me out of my
self
(心理描写). "Perspective, son," Dad said quietly, turning
me
to see Justin approaching(现在分词短语做伴随动作). To my shock, he was removing his medal.
"We should share this," he said simply, looping
the ribbon over both our heads
(现在
分词做伴随动作). The metal rested cool against my
chest
, its weight surprisingly
comforting(独立主格，刻画感受). As Dad carried us toward the promised ice cream(与原文衔接),
Justin's arm hanging around my shoulders,(独立主格，刻画人物形象) I realized—the hook
on my wall wouldn't hold just my medal, but our story.
